Haiku and Short Poetry

I thought to pick the flower of forgetting
for myself, but I found it
already growing in his heart

>>7524370
Damn. Nice

white billowing sails
lean the ear of their tall mast
to the waters words

I knew it'd be hard,
To never see you again,
And I am correct.

last of the cider
watching a comfy movie
alone on new year's

>>7524328
the light of yonder
as youths curtains are drawn close
it evades me thus

She said to me, "Choose:
Either it's me or your Febreze."
I sprayed her damn face.

>>7524370
Nice

>>7526177
surprisingly not bad anon. I'd maybe replace the word comfy with something else just to reduce the meme factor

>>7526281
You made the right choice anon

English haikus suck.
People should never try them.
They never sound good.

Why must this be so?
English is not Japanese,
Quite obviously.

They're nothing alike.
Haikus only make sense in
Non-English context.

What in Japanese
Sounds perfectly natural,
In English, is shit.

Every time you write
A haiku in English, you
Do to Japanese
What Kaiju do to Japan:
You destroy it. Stop.

>>7524370
I think this is in the Tanka form.

I thought to pick
the flower of forgetting
for myself,
but found it already
growing in his heart.

>>7527371
If the essence of haiku (as I believe it is, at least in english) is making the reader see more clearly the world (no twisty thoughts), then haiku can work in english.

I don't know what changes in translation from Japanese to English. It may very well be that haikus do something entirely different in Japanese. But that's not a reason to discount all english haikus.

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Borges wrote some Tanka by the way, OP may want to check it out.

The owner of the cherry blossoms
turns to compost
for the trees.

Ki no moto no
koyashi tomo nare
hana no nushi

>>7524328
秋の月
嬉しくなくて
笑み死んだ。