Short piece for critique

looks good

This is FIRE, OP. Send it immediatley.

Holy... I want more...

Hello, this is Jim from the New York Times. Do you have a minute?

is the joke here that i literally cant read it cause its so fukcing small

>>10020062
the joke is that it's being posted on an online forum for neets instead of being published jesus christ I wonder if this is among the best that has ever been posted on this board

Isn't this a quote from Ulysses? If not, I think this could easily be the best piece of literature of our time.

>>10019313
I like that it manages to be so large yet so small at the same time. Very nice touch.

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>>10019313
Anon, click on the image you posted.

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219KB, 1908x1073px

>>10019313
>I cannot tell if OP is trying to make a meme out of himself or legit fucked up???

Our board may have become too focused on meme generation. . .