Any tips for writing a male attempting to write non-butch female

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>>10005707
Write a story about my cute waifu killing everyone

This seems so self-evident but just ask yourself in what way is she too masculine and if so could there possibly be a way that justifies it in the story. Otherwise you can just start from scratch.

>>10005731
the protag is a member of law enforcement who thinks she killed her mother as a child.

I had my fiance proofread the chapter and she said the character seemed a little too masculine but couldn't really put into words why. I picked over the chapter and see it too, but I can't tell why. Maybe it's just the bug she put in my ear?

I mean, she's on the job in the first chapter. I'd expect her dialogue to be a bit "masculine/formal" at work.

>>10005707
Stop trying so fucking hard. Nine times out of ten your readers will fill in her femininity on their own, but the more you try to control it the closer you'll get either to Sergeant Cunt or Miss Lady Bimbo Woman. Don't force it, in other words.

Usually gender only really influences the circumstances a character was raised in, the expectations given to them. How a character grows up in response to said expectations is up to you to decide.

>>10005829
She's law enforcement, presumably a beat cop, you can realistically expect more masculine traits from a woman like that compared to others. It's not a bad thing in itself. If you fear its too much then give her a way to express her more feminine side.

>>10005834
>>stop trying so fucking hard
Fucking brilliant.

When I think about it, the rest of the story will most likely negate this issue.