Improving my NSFW stuff (shit).

>>3063352
Read the sticky.

>>3063363
going to have to second this, draw more real people and studies until you get a better grasp on your fundies before you do porn or whatever it is you want to do otherwise you'll run into lots of problems in the future. there's simply too much wrong at this time to give you any useful critique besides "start over"

>>3063352

Just post in /beg/ ffs
Or the NSFW thread

you actually got worse lmao

>>3063352
right a qt

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>>3063363
We need to go back

>>3063363
>>3063366
>>3063385
Can nobody do a real criticism on this board? I came into this thread because I wanted to understand what is actually wrong and people are acting like the right is worst in every way.

The only thing I can see that's worse is velma's pose, face and hair look off.

>>3063433

This board can do real criticism if you actually post in the right thread. Don't just make a thread for your own shit, it just takes up unnecessary space

>>3063444
I'm not the OP, I was merely curious as to why people think the one of the right looks awful when it's a big improvement over the left, I want to understand.

>>3063448

The magic of /ic/ critique is that you get lots of attention when you make your own thread, but it's almost universally unconstructive shitposting. If you post in a general thread without any REALLY obvious flaws, you'll get ignored. If you don't get ignored, you'll usually get a vague 'critique' like "needs loomis" or "work on your anatomy"

>>3063352
this is the opposite of improvement my dude.

>>3063444
this board can have up to 130 threads open at a time. Telling people to go to the right thread isn't "to take up less space" its to make it easier for them to receive proper feedback.

Idiots like you who think a thread is some kind of non-renewable precious resource literally contribute nothing to the board.

>>3063352
the face of the girl on the left ruins the whole piece and is why no one sees the other aspects that improved.

go here
>>3057987

>>3063352
looks like the girls need mewing

I think it is an improvement. However work more on your faces pls

>>3063352
not so much a critique as a humble opinion.
this is in regards to 2017 side.
velma and daphne arent looking at eachother. V is looking at D's chin or neck and D is looking at V's forehead.
I feel like Velma's face is too tiny and by extension her skull. Maybe its just the hair?
Should V's boobs be a bit more up and outwards since she is kinda puffing up her chest in challenge? not sure.
D's boobs, i think her left boob should be more frontward since she seems to be facing frontwards. her right boob shouldnt be so prominent. for example V's: how theyre kinda tied for 1st place haha. the way i see it D has a big right boob but tiny left boob.
i love how you drew their bodies though! I like the bumps and lines for hips butts stomachs arms etc.
forearm muscles look slender yet masculine but i understand and appreciate that theyre clenching fists hard.
for the NSFW aspect velmas boobs are an unappealing shape to me but to each their own!
i like the hanging but held up effect you were going for.

>>3063352
Your line quality has improved, and the body language is more forceful. But without knowing how you produced this image, it's hard to say whether there was any substantial improvement in skill. Because of varying degrees of confidence in the image, I get the impression you relied on referencing of some sort. I'm not inclined to believe that the results come from your studies of Hogarth.

Your sense of design has not advanced. The faces and expressions are very poorly done. I recognize them as Daphne and Velma, but that's only from ancillary design elements rather than any likeness to them. Certain details of the body are too harsh, particularly on Velma, and the bodies in general are incongruous with the faces.

The contrast between the two girls is nice.

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>>3063352
Did a quick liquify for you anon.

left girl off balance, tit perspective doesn't make sense, eye directions don't line up (left girl looks at the other's throat?

>>3063393
eh, the torsos are better, but yeah... wtf is up with their faces?

>>3064227
all he did was define what he already knew. left reminds me of aka6. in the right i wouldn't have even known it was the scooby doo characters.

>>3063352
Those heads and trunks look like absolute dogshit. You actually got worse.

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I made some corrections before adding color

>>3064592
the short girls hair is worryingly curved.

>>3063465
Actually, it IS to take up less space. If everybody made their own thread for their own shit, you would have 40+ threads dedicated to single people. You're the fucking idiot.

>>3064592
>>3063352
It's just not good dude. It's not bad. They both look stiff, the anatomy just isn't there. The tits on both ladies look wrong on all accounts. (Shape, placement)

You're probably confused because your drawing *looks* good. But on the technical side, it isn't.

>>3064643
well then, try to show him the way, tell him what books or tutorial might be useful, tell him how to overcome those issues, just saying "its bad in x cuz y" doesnt help a lot if you dont say how to fix it

>>3064669
All the fucking advice he needs is in the fucking sticky and if he's too retarded to fingers out how to seek out resources on the internet he's a lost cause, which honestly seems more likely the longer this thread has gone on
>hurrdurr post ur work fgt

>>3064628
>the short girls hair is worryingly curved.
>the short girls hair
>the short girl
wow, somebody who doesn't know velma

>>3064669
>just saying "its bad in x cuz y" doesnt help a lot if you dont say how to fix it
Sure it does, and that literally narrows things down substantially. Address Y then it's no longer bad in X. Consult references or read anything you can find on X and Y.

In this case, anon said the tits had the wrong shape and placement. OP can know find references, paying attention to shape and placement, and how his drawing differs. He doesn't need 5 breast drawing tutorials by random patreon artists. He was told specifically what was wrong and why. An artist should have the basic problem solving skills needed to fix it from that point.

>>3064688
not him but it doesn't look like velma to me
I actually thought this was overwatch fan art with that fat chink

>>3063352
perspective anon
i bet my left testicle you didnt plot any perspective lines

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>>3064688
why are you quoting me like that? she doesn't łook like her

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I finished it!
Here the SFW version:

>>3065746
that brush is really quite annoying

>>3064669
What the hell is wrong with people all of a sudden that they have completely lost the ability to help themselves? Every single day I'm astounded because some idiot comes up to me requiring information spoon fed to them when it's all easily found by a quick Google search. It's even more amazing to see this shit on an internet message board where everybody should already know about the wonders of Googling. If you put the same amount of effort into finding resources as you do for finding fap fuel of your obscure fetishes you'd be accomplishing wonders. I'm sick of these helpless adult babbies that are somehow still alive without a grain of common sense

>>3065746
Daphne looks more like that Gamergate chick

>>3065746
not to add to the dog pile but your anatomy is really unappealing

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>>3065746
> japanese weeb name
> drawing western girls

pick one you fucking scumbag

>>3065991
>post pic
>5 people asking for sauce
>literally right click and reverse image search
>first result is sauce
>every time
People are just brain-dead here.

>>3066229
It's not just here man. I work at a college now, and I've never before felt the rage I do now. Literally retarded babies everywhere. They're wasting their time and my tax dollars. I wish they would all end themselves

>>3066382
If it makes you feel any better I have never had to ask for sauce ONCE in all my years of shitposting.

>>3065746
pls work on your calves. that looks so weird dude

>>3066223
Wow, real life is going to be so hard to you.

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am gonna do a flip

>>3063352
That is quite the improvement! I would say work on velma's face as in the lips and the way the jaw is formed looks off. Daphne also looks a lot better in the face, however her breasts, especially her right one, is incorrect. I think it gives off an impression one breast points out further than the other. Also smaller breasts don't fold over themselves. Try for a perkier shape for her. But please keep practicing! I think you're making great progress.

>>3066713
People actually critique on this forum instead of calling everything bad? Hats off to you.

>>3066713
are you fucking retarded? this "critique" must be a troll.

>>3066713
twice the effort of a redline and a quarter its usefulness.

what the fuck are the heads

what the fuck are the legs

jesus dude, do you think arses really hang off women like that?

also the torsoes look really oddly proportioned to the legs

>>3066713
>disclaimer: I am not actually good at drawing
no shit

>>3065759
what brush?

>>3063366
>draw more real people
Should I use photographs or ask anyone to stay still during forty mins?

>>3063352
Porn, it's called porn.

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>>3066713
huh

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>>3065746
the nsfw version...

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>>3063352
some sketches...bacause I love Ranma!

>>3068956
I hate velma's face so fucking much. This is fucking retarded.

>>3070052
Anon quick question do you start drawing on paper or a tablet

>>3070046
looks good nice job