Is this good?

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Here's page 2. (It's in spanish you don't need to read it anyways)

>>2901003
Your anatomy needs work. That bottom left panel is really cluttering things and instead you should just have the envelope in the fourth panel.

But really her jaw is dislocated and her fingers are all squished. Nice hair/enviros

>>2901011
Thanks for critique anon!

I don't think you need to redraw it. looks good enough to tell a story. highly recommend using some digital screen tones; your line work is clean enough to move it that level. Your anatomy could be better but i wouldn't worry about it too much; just keep making full pages like you are.

Also choosing the right typeface is important; Anime Ace is always super cool.

http://www.blambot.com/font_animeace2.shtml

>>2901028
>Anime Ace
Oh! Thanks for the info, I may end up doing this a forced yuri so, now that It wont be a too serious project for me I may re draw it.

I was thinking about a manga of several episodes, but I want to make it short now...For sure I'll keep drawing more pages.

And yeah, I highly wanted to use screen tones for it, thanks anon..

>>2901003
Is she scratching her back

>>2901003
>>2901007

You've been reading Youjo Senki.

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>>2901007
Fggt, my grandma draws better than you.
Here is an example

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>>2901003
I made a couple adjustments for you OP.

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>>2901840

>>2901842
p-please dont ruin my d-drawings

>>2901931
S-sorry anon. I as just trying to have a laff

I love it.

I am the right anon, not >>2901931