Rate my poetry.

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my body is ready

>>2847612
Okay.

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>>2847605
do it again but with entirely different words and about something less cringey and learn how rhyme schemes work and dont rhyme do with do ya dip.

>learn poetry structure, your rhymes are awkwardly written and those lines are horribly distributed, limit yourself to 4 lines per section
>keep writing in the same time (present perfect and past perfect would go well IF they are even on a poem)
>improve your handwriting, no one's gonna read a masterpiece and get impregnated with the creator's feelings if they think the poem was written by a 12 y/o, remember handwriting is the first impression
>try to correlate things in a figurative way, that way you'll at least be considered an edge lord meme mastery lvl 99 instead of a cringeworthy material creator

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>>2847605

>>2847605
LOOMISSS

>wrong board
>blurry pic
>not resized
>wrong orientation
>corny subject
I gotta say, you either accidentally create a great bait or you're a very dedicated shitposter.