can i get a crit guys!

Where is her neck? And what the fuck is wrong with her stomach anon?

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>>2765660

neck perspective is fucked up, stomach is too long. right tit is an inflated balloon, compared to the left tit which is ok. head is too small. right thigh's shape is odd compared to the left thigh, which is also ok. on that not, try flipping your pics now and then to make sure your proportions are correct.

composition-wise starting right under her tits downward, either side is just one long curve with no breakage to indicate underlying form. you can get something more pleasing when you draw in the shapes of her bones, as well as pay attention as to how her fat interacts with her swimsuit (no matter how little there may be) attached is pic for clarification, sorry for potato quality

The body lacks structure, like she has no bones.

Is this a critique thread now? Should I post my noob art?

>>2765722

do it

>>2765725

the form is actually coming across really strong, it's dynamic. but the face needs a lot of work, as does the braid. your line weight isn't consistent or cohesive and it misleads the eye. also, lighting is wtf and colors are washed out and dull.

>>2765725
pillowshading will fool normies, but not /ic/

>>2765660
hey i know you

unless someone posted this as bait

which desu is totally possible considering what kind if person the artist is. crawl outta your moms basement yet?

>>2765733
"> your line weight isn't consistent or cohesive and it misleads the eye."
This has been my demon forever, dunno where to make lines thin'n crispy or thick'n juicy

>>2765739

my advice is to draw with an unweighted line, then go back and examine your subject for places where there's weight. add to your drawing accordingly. it will look rough at first, but it will help you practice and then you can graduate to using a weighted line controlled by hand pressure.

be sure to pay a lot of attention to places where flesh meets flesh, and where clothing cuts into and reshapes flesh.

>>2765741
>flesh meets flesh, and where clothing cuts into and reshapes flesh.
?
elaborate?

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>>2765743

like with this tit, see where the bottom is connecting with the top of the ribcage the line gets a little heavier.

>>2765744

the drawing is sloppy, but the concept it there

>>2765733
>>2765735
>>2765741
>>2765744

I see. Ty anon.

>>2765756

I do hope it makes sense and that you can apply it to your stuff, keep your head up cos you are already really close. most ppl don't even have the basics of form down and yours is already quite strong. good luck anon

>>2765744
>>2765681
Please read sticky before giving gosh dang advice!

>>2765765

>gosh dang

there's nothing in the sticky that says "don't give advice" so idk wtf you're on about

>>2765681
you're a worse case scenario artists

unconscious incompetence

>>2765787

ok please elaborate by posting a correction, preferably your own art

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>>2765789
really shitty lines, scratchy and really absurd line weight
you're stuck in 2D shape thinking
construction is absent
form is absent
it's a bad copy with the only adition of fat where the bikini puts pressure

the mayor problem with OP pic is that face stylization seems like pasted over that body, it's too small for animu and too ovaloid instead of round, would be like 1:9, values are brighter, tan doesn't make sense so it seems a different face, neck values are flat which does not help to make it read properly

I did this with a mouse so its not much, enought to indicate proportion/value/render problems

>>2765879

I'm honestly embarrassed for you

There's barely any noticeable difference between op's pic and your pic

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>>2765879

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>>2765660

Expression reads strange/silly on the thumbnail and after enlarging I also am a bit confused about it.

I would definietly work on that expression/head. I wouldn't listen to other anons saying stuff about perspective or anatomy - this is decent enough and good, other things IMO are important here.

Maybe colors could be more saturated? See what would happen if you would push contrasts more in critical parts, contrast always draws attention.

And maybe you could put some more care on the yarn enveloping the form of a figure. In some parts it looks flat/unnatural, like with the right hand grabbing it or those 2 loops on the left hand, I think they would be more affected by the force of a pull or by gravity. Again, they also lookf flat, not 3 dimensional, maybe experiment a bit with values.

Btw remember to take critique with some distance and grain of salt. I think this is very nice piece, but yeah, there's a room for improvement. I know that you will probably render it more.

Keep going and stay awesome!

>>2765936
>I can't see
>there's not
kek

I bet my ass that if fucking Vilppu himself did a redline on a drawing here you'd still tell him to neck himself

>>2765660
Randy Kill yourself, it is shit

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Was this your reference anon? Because you fucking nailed it.

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Thanks for all your shit crits. Can you crit this one now?

>>2766292
vilppu

>>2766292
If you where going for the uncanny, you nailed it.

>>2766303
i was going for your mom and i nailed her. then i properly captured her form.

>>2766304
Anon you wouldn't know what to do with pussy if it was in front of you. You obviously don't even know what a woman looks like with that shit anatomy.

>>2765660
>>2766292
I actually like your work! Admittably though I'm no expert, but I do see a couple of problems with both of them. The first one has a couple anatomical issues including the neck and, at least to me, the rib cage is slimmer than it should be. I also find the coloration of the arms a little too dark as their is no reason (at least in the viewers eye) for them to be so dark. Aside from that I like the lighting and values you've done for the most part.
On the second one I like even more than the first with the stylized face. However I feel that the midsection doesn't have any sort of form and looks like a macaroni noodle, that being I can't quite pick up where hips and a rib cage should be. I also think the midsection might be a lil too long as the hands should meet the hips while standing upright and the position suggests to me that if she were upright, her hands would not reach her hips. But I really do like your work! Please keep working hard and doing your best!

>>2765952
This man right here

>>2766292

K...Kr0n? Is that you?

>>2766350
Did he just crit himself?

>>2766435
yes

>>2766292
OP go do some figure drawings and anatomy studies from photos. Forget about rendering and study anatomy

>>2766435
>>2766442
>any sort of positive criticism is only op talking to himself
>anything posted by anyone else HAS to be "yur not gunna make it lol"
Come on guys, I know you're better that this

>>2766464
Not gonna make it.

>>2765660
I think it looks ok, but the space between the legs looks too unnatural, the neck is almost nonexistent and the shadow is too simple comparing to the rest of the body, also the arms are too short.
Now go fix your work instead of losing time here.

>>2766467
Ok, I admit that got a sizable laugh out of me

That's a nice body but you need to fix her arms, face and neck

>>2766139
>>>/beg/

>>2766292
You did that on purpose, OP. Ass hole.

>>2766292
bro looks like you copied kr0nprinz's face style but couldn't work out the bodies since he doesn't draw bodies often so you just used your beginner knowledge to do the bodies. They're shit. Your faces look pretty good though, so I'm sure you could make millions.

>>2765784
It means you suck

>>2766292
This is horrendous. Her ass look uneven almost tit like. Why does she have tits on her ass anon?

>>2766292
her spine is broken and she looks like shes made of jelly. You have no knowledge of anatomy AT ALL and zero sense of perspective or even composition. At least most of the shitheads on this board know how to do thumbnails and at least attempt to look at references, you just make it up as you go don't you? Stop that shit or youll never amount to anything.
You have so many issues as an artist it's hard to know where to start. You should check out the beginner thread and stop rendering pieces of shit. If the fundamentals are wrong, everything is wrong no matter how many fancy brushes you throw on it.

At the very least learn your anatomy at it's most basic and figure out bone placement, proportions, muscles as forms, and how to do more than just pillow shading a blob.

Come back when you've put real practice and time into something for once in your life.

>>2765660
Fuck off with your traced portraits
RandyKr0n

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>>2766982
Because OP is into all things imitation, from his art style to his obvious preference for tits over asses.

You're a disgrace, OP.

>>2766990
This.
It doesn't matter how much you polish a turd. It's still gonna be a turd. This anatomy has some serious issues.

>>2766946
he quickly scribbled it for the express purpose of giving the advice tho senpai

>>2767018
Even if it is a quick scribble it does not help his case. There are beginner mistakes that echo throughout every single piece of his work that he has posted (or will ever post) here, and that is going to hold true whether it is shit "on purpose" or not.

Did you know that you can see more about how an artist thinks, their process, and their understanding of fundamentals just by looking at their "quick scribbles"? That was a huge mistake if he came here for a pat on the back.

Good artists have trouble drawing like children because their process and their understanding of the world changes their style permanently. Once you gain an understanding of how something works it is very hard to just turn it off.

He doesn't seem to understand much of anything. And until he makes an effort to understand, these mistakes will haunt him for the rest of his life, looking at polished turds and always wondering why they never look quite right.

VILPPU
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Imma steal these pics and post it on my dA.

>>2767293
Why would you want people laughing at you there anon?

>>2767302
NEVER GONNA MAKE IT

POST UR WORK

>>2767026

So what are these beginner mistakes you're seeing? Legit curious pls explain

>>2767582
seriously? the part where her neck is missing. her stomach being over defined and misshaped. left hand looking like shit and the gravity defying tits.

>>2765660
>>2766292
hard to critize these korean "art" style it always have broken spines and a lof of artistic privileges
with the merit of

MUH COMIC ART IT NEVER MEAN TO BE REALISTIC

nice render tho

>>2765681
>>2765744
You're like the Sycra of /ic/. The crits and advice are all solid but for some reason it all falls apart in those drawings.

>>2767627

Ok are you taking about the OP or the person who posted the pencil drawing?

>>2767641

Post redline pls I don't see it

>>2767684
the OP. this is shit.

>>2767026
Ffs stop being autistic and get down from your high horse before you break your neck you insufferable stuck up bitch.

>>2766139
spot on

>>2765681
Holy shit you're awful. Are you an SJW? Muh fat girls

you individually do a lot of things decently but all together its fucking garbage. use fucking references but not from another artist you cuck.
stop with that shitty coloring too, figure shit out on your own or from real life.

>>2769040

>slim figure with a thigh gap
>"muh fat girls"

ok

>>2765660
shit
anatomy issues
Fuck off Randy gay adams

This feels like it was painted by a black person. You know black people over exaggerate features and can never really nail Caucasian faces. Are you black OP?

>>2765681
>>/beg/

>>2770057
Why did you entirely remove the already tiny crotch she did have?

>>2770069

im not sure if you're following what i did there, the crotch is def wider and higher, but to be fair i just threw down the basic idea. the details will be up to the OP

>>2770069
The torso was too long. The problem was not the crotch

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>>2765660
HOWS THIS!?

>>2765660
Kyle, you attentionwhore

>>2765660
Elsevilla?

>>2770120
much better, the shadows in the arms don't fit with the head though

>>2770120
Her right (our left) arm is still too short.

>>2770057
nice

>>2770120
This, is shit.

why does it look like anzujaamu

>>2766292
sorry to break it out to you like this, but you are a turd polisher.
your lack of perspective and anatomy knowledge is astounding.
you are good at polishing those turds tho.

>>2773529
eat a dick faggot.

>>2774112
I'd be mad too if I was a shittier firez