Everlot the webcomic

This definitely has potential.

>>2717467
My main problem is the pacing.
Everything is too rushed
The first two pages are pretty well paced. You get time to actually appreciate what's happening.
Past that feels very rushed and it's hard to figure out what's going on at a glance.

>Page 3
First two panels are fine, third panel it's hard to realize that she went outside just off that image.
I would have done something like a closeup of her hand reaching for the doorknob or something, or actually having her midway through the door leading outside.
A panel with her outside before it starts raining (I'd do this as a kind of top view, so we see a larger view of the outside, maybe even having the pool partially in shot), then doing the panel-in-panel of her noticing it starting to rain. And finally the panel with her attention being grabbed.
I think this would be better over two pages or at least most of it in one page and then the rest for the first half or so of the next page.

I'm not gonna go in-depth with the other pages, but going forward just put more thought into making things clear to the reader without telling the reader

The girl speaks/thinks too much to herself.
You could essentially get rid of every speech bubble from page 3 to 5 and it would be a lot better.
You don't have to TELL the reader what's happening. It's a comic. You should SHOW the reader.
As it is right now though it may be a bit hard to figure out but if you can get the reader to understand what's happening without writing a single word of the character's thoughts then your comic will be way more interesting to read.
I like the first page and the last 3 panels of the page 2 for this reason.
You don't really need the speech bubbles in the third page to tell what's going on or what the character is thinking.
You can tell that she's curious about the fairy based on her expressions and actions, and you can see that the fairy is going somewhere and that it's starting to rain.


Gonna stop here because character limit and cbf