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Rate my stopmotion shorts, no bully pls http://youtu.be/0HX9kgklSdw

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Rate my stopmotion shorts, no bully pls

http://youtu.be/0HX9kgklSdw
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>>2400885
http://youtu.be/JQfB697hA8A

http://youtu.be/aELTCtKxfsw
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Lazy piece of garbage. But you know it's shit, you called it that.
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>>2400912
:( be constructive senpai
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>>2401316
more frames
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>>2400885
I really like them

make more
make more
make more
yes more
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>>2401316
Fine...

It would be wiser to use actual voice acting, as robot stuff comes off as emotionless, irritating and lacking effort. it also probably makes it rather difficult for you to animate to, since it's not a vary natural speech pattern.

Speaking is not synced with mouth movements. Which again comes off as lazy or rushed production. You may have intended this as some sort of gag... but if so, that gag is long past it's prime, and arguably ineffective in stop motion (never use a gag that or gimmick that is too easily misunderstood as a mistake or lack of skill).

Not enough moment of subjects. Most of your movement is panning the camera and zooming in and out.

Neither animation adds to the dialogue. You're not giving us any more information by having two skeletons sitting in front of a briefcase or looking at each other than what is conveyed in the dialogue. Visually it should tell a story or convey an emotion, otherwise why am I watching it?

(are you pulling this dialogue from somewhere?)

and yes, more frames.
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>>2406256
No I wrote the dialogue myself, it was originally meant to be a comic. But thanks senpai will take all of that into consideration
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>>2406256
The briefcase is meant to be a tv, With the skeletons talking about what they're watching
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