Just wrote my first ever fashion related article
http://www.45ive.com/single-post/2017/01/23/Our-favourites-from-the-Fashion-Week-Runway
Can i get some opinions/critique/spelling and grammar corrections etc?
>>12174033
>wants career
>asks internet for spelling and grammar proof read.
>already published
oh dear
>>12174033
You picked some of the worst runways
Dior and Balmain, fucking why?
>>12174062
drop trip
>>12174033
>osweegos
>>12174062
>paraphrases
>.<
>>12174033
The text feels very choppy, it doesn't have good flow. You could've written about better subjects too, like balmain seriously, and this dior show was disgusting