/efg/ - Erotic Fiction General

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>>7322172
Requesting a story about Lillie pissing herself and being forced into diapers.

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Someone in the last thread wanted futa smut. Someone else said there was 'one guy' who did it in the thread.

I guess that's me.

The Player Witch Augment
http://pastebin.com/bPDQRrM1

Player Witch Augment 2: Paranormal Virility
http://pastebin.com/Fnfk6knG

Player Witch Augment 3: Sometimes They Come On Your Back
http://pastebin.com/tE2wtWGg

The Player Witch Augment 4: Hocus, Poke Us
http://pastebin.com/tCPmkVgh

The Player Witch Augment 5: Miss Peregrine's Homo for Peculiar Adults
http://pastebin.com/034cvbMP

Player Witch Augment 6: Witch Doctor, Strange
http://pastebin.com/KnCeBnLC

>General tags for PWA: cock growth, huge penis, small penis humiliation, other humiliation, masturbation, exhibitionism, witchcraft, futa, autofellatio, come eating, male-on-female, female-on-female, female-on-futa, handjob, oral sex, premature ejaculation, handjob, large insertions, anal, cock envy, hyper cock

D's Girlfriends 4Ever Fanfiction: Part 1
http://pastebin.com/qLFH6E2x
>tags: fan-fiction, woman-to-futa transformation, foot jobs, oral, anal, basically every kind futa sex, public nudity, exhibitionism, cock growth, cock measuring, group sex, futa-on-futa, futa-on-futa-on-futa, more futa sex than you can believe

D's Girlfriends 4Ever Fanfiction: Part 2
http://pastebin.com/JG5yzfXc
>tags: fan fiction, all futa, huge cocks, cock growth, cock shrinking, dildos, repeated orgasms, public nudity, exhibitionism, come eating, condom play, more futa sex than you can believe

And finally, my commission, still in progress.

The Grande Futapest Hotel
http://pastebin.com/SjeEbP1Y
>tags: futanari, futa-on-female, futa-on-futa, huge dicks, balls, ballsucking, blowjobs, anal, vaginal, deepthroat, cumswapping, kissing, porn, real world, I wish the real world would just stop hasslin' me

I hope this will keep you going for a while. I'm going to try to eke out PWA7 while still working on my commission. The current title for PWA7 is The Lie On, The Witch and the Lack of Wardrobe.

I would love to read a story about a female bodybuilder futa who gets on stage, her muscles and cock are gigantic, and she cums with every flex, the orgasms are only making her bigger and stronger, her cock and her muscles keep growing endlessly, not like height growth from head to toe but sheer mass, until her muscles and cock grow beyond infinity, especially her pecs. Just an idea I had, because I know it's a lot easier to write that kind of size than draw it.

>>7322265
So the story is a futa drowns and crushes the world under her expanding bulk. sounds boring as fuck.

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>>7322265
Someone asked for a muscle growth story that I took a crack at. It wasn't futa or hyper, and it just sort of ground to a halt. Maybe I'll finish it someday. It was going to involve a climax where the newly-muscley girl presents herself at a bodybuilding competition, flexes and rips her swimsuit off by mistake... because apparently I can't get away from public nudity and humiliation as themes.

>>7322197
Yes, yes it is. Or at least the only one willing to do it consistently. We seem to have a trend with crippling overspecialization in regards to our writefags- they tend to be great with one or two fetishes, but have neither the inclination nor the ability to write anything which doesn't tie into said fetish(es).

I wonder why.

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>>7322453
>Yes, yes it is. Or at least the only one willing to do it consistently. We seem to have a trend with crippling overspecialization in regards to our writefags- they tend to be great with one or two fetishes, but have neither the inclination nor the ability to write anything which doesn't tie into said fetish(es).
>I wonder why.

I don't know how many other writers in this thread started at /d/ rather than coming from another thread, but... /d/ is the board which will give you porn of a fetish you didn't know you had until you see it, and those paraphilias eventually become simultaneously broader and more niche. Some fetishes definitely would be too small to exist before the Internet.

There are some walls that won't be broken down in most people, of course. This isn't a value judgment on anyone's fetishes; I'm just saying that some people will never, ever be into some things. In theory, most gay women won't ever be into men... though not necessarily all of them.

For me, I am super DUPER into lesbians, and not really into straight porn at all. Giving them cocks gives me a way to translate my understanding of that particular body part to lesbians, and they experience my own appreciation for the beautiful female form.

Come to think of it... I don't really masturbate to much non-futa porn anymore. The longer I refrain, the more likely I am to go to it. I'm sure I could still do it to some non-dickgirl stuff, like that scene in Flashpoint with Jenna Jameson and the other chick in the bathroom...

Someone said, "If I don't have a boner when I draw, I start over, because if I don't have one, I've failed." I forget who said that. I don't necessarily think you HAVE to be aroused to write sexy stuff, but... it does seem to help.

Maybe this is why Dan Brown writes all his scenes to be cliffhangers, to keep himself interested in the action of the story. But with erotica, every scene must end with some sort of satisfaction, even a satisfaction in the denial.

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>>7322474
By the way, if you see the OP has a futa image on it... that probably means that I made it. I figured why not try to grab the attention of the other /d/enizens and possibly get more readers or even writers?

If the thread hates this, let me know and I'll mix it up.

>>7322480
Please mix it up.

>>7322265
Personally, I'd like to read this. Hell, I'd like to see a picture of it, but that kind of infinite size is very difficult, if not impossible, to draw. Kind of got into an argument with someone over this on an unrelated board.

Hoping someone would be willing to take a crack at it. If for no other reason than the variety. It is something different.

>>7322480
>>7322480
Don't care either way, but since we don't actually have much futa (beyond your own work) it's more likely to attract people who are looking for futa, who are then disappointed by the lack of same.

>>7322493
IMO, it sounds equally impossible to write without just switching synonyms for "really big" or describing the same thing in a dozen different ways within the same story. That sort of thing just has a tendency to come off as being repetitive and un-erotic.

It's definitely different, but all too often being different also means it's more trouble than it's worth. Sad but true.

>>7322197
Damn it D. Write female perspective futa on female.

>>7322177
While right up my alley, I also hate Lillie with a passion.

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>>7322474
>>7322453
At least with me, it was a very specific urge that compelled me to write, I wanted to see something specific and it didn't exist, so I felt a burning desire to make it myself. Writing it all down was cathartic. I can trace all of my writing back to one stubborn boner.

Anything that deviates too far from my own tastes just isn't interesting to me (which honestly shouldn't be surprising), thus I have no motivation to write it. Motivation of course is a big issue for a lot of people here, and I only really stay on top of my own by setting goals and keeping it fun. If it becomes a chore because I'm not enjoying the content then I'd lose motivation and my output would tank. I'm in a constant war with my own laziness.

And here's the completed Osha/Runt picture: https://www.patreon.com/posts/osha-and-runt-8537988

Working on more lizardfucking.

>>7322711
This all sounds about right. When it comes to motivation I need to either be getting it from within 'I want to see this, and no one has done it', from shallow attention 'oh Fubot, we just love your writing, you sure you don't want to write THIS for me?', or money.

I would probably go out of my way to write anything is pay was involved, I've done it in the past. But without that I need to be either socially or physically masturbated.

>>7322536
>IMO, it sounds equally impossible to write without just switching synonyms for "really big" or describing the same thing in a dozen different ways within the same story. That sort of thing just has a tendency to come off as being repetitive and un-erotic.

It doesn't have to be a 20-page odyssey. And ot would be something different.

>>7322718
Oh, sorry I'll fix that. This is why you don't post updates when you've been awake for 30 hours.

>>7322724
Yeah, I'm sure we're all capable of writing things we don't like, but it would end up wooden and dispassionate. I've turned down quite a few commissions that I knew I'd do a half-assed job at because the subject matter didn't interest me.
I feel like as well as not enjoying the work, it wouldn't be up to standard, which in a lot of ways is worse.

>>7322536
>>7322727
You could use similes maybe? Compare the character to objects around them for a better sense of scale? There are lots of little touches you can add to demonstrate size, like having them brush their head on the ceiling, having oversized body parts bump into objects, stuff like that.

>>7322738
I think that falls apart when you reach the larger scales, though- you'll run out of things to compare it too. Or run up right against the suspension of disbelief. Or both at once.

>>7322711
>that runt
[loud sweating]
Boy I am glad schafer and runt's gay adventures is on the short story month list

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>>7322819
>Scaffer gets Runt a step ladder
>he's now unstoppable
>slightly

>>7322711
That's amazing, I started writing for the same reason. You know what they say, if you want something done right you gotta do it yourself.

Sadly, my thing still isn't quite ready to be posted just yet- work is being an even bigger bitch than usual. Take my advice, Snek- if you want to keep your productivity as it is, stay away from any kind of employment like the plague. It WILL eat up most of your time, and when you finally get free from it you'll feel too drained to think, let alone write.

I'll be posting what I have of it when I get to the 1k word mark though; hopefully it'll be worth the effort.

>>7322847
If he gets say, 6x the patreon dollars, and manages expenses right, he probably wouldn't need to be employed.

>>7322711


>I can trace all of my writing back to one stubborn boner.


Tell me your secrets snek. How can I train my boner to write like yours can? I still have to use my hands to write

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>>7322536
>since we don't actually have much futa (beyond your own work) it's more likely to attract people who are looking for futa, who are then disappointed by the lack of same.

You make an excellent point.

I'm still going to post futa pictures that I love every now and then if I get to make the OP, but I'll mix it up. I've already tried not to repeat one.

>>7322545
Do you mean first-person from the woman's perspective?

Can't promise anything, but I'll think about it. What else would you like to see?

>>7322914
Do you have any interest in multiple futa on a single female? And while I know you aren't into futa on male, does your opinion on traps differ?

>>7322358
Hey, D, are you still interested in doing more muscle girl stuff?

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>>7322358
>>7322961
Because I had something in mind for this pic by Inker.

Mainly, a defeated amazon is auctioned off at a slave trade, only to be taken by a buyer, who is something of a bookworm, and proceeds to make lewds to his new slave.

>>7322770
comparing it to skyscrapers, galaxies, universes, multiverses, omniverses, etc. it's impossible to draw that kindof zise but ninepuzzle comes close but that;s furry shit.

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Was wondering if anyone had that X-com story about the guy that has to host a viper in his house. I remember it being a 2 parter.

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2000 word update, newt content at "The scant few metal trays and scalpels"

Highway to Krell:
http://pastebin.com/hE1muHCb
New tags:
>creampie, docking (I think that's the term), leg-locking, messy, chocking, maledom, trap/futa/herm/dontreallyknow

>>7322867
I'm hoping if I can bring the visual novel up to an acceptable standard of quality I might have a real income.
Then I can use the return to make another one, and so on and so forth.

>>7322904
I guess just be into something that doesn't really exist and let frustration and dissatisfaction guide your hand.

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>>7323074
Now it's 4 parts and about a 100k words in total, enjoy:

Snek/Uninvited:
6,766 words.
http://pastebin.com/DVTusz4B

Sek/Uninvited 2
9,686 words.
http://pastebin.com/z2wJLg7V

Combined Ebook of Snek/Uninvited 1 and 2: https://www.patreon.com/file?h=6647983&i=548925

Snek/Uninvited 3:
21,706 words.
http://pastebin.com/GnT0gJaS
Ebook: https://www.patreon.com/file?h=6768624&i=572857

Snek/Uninvited 4:
70,197 words.
http://pastebin.com/ZDNwTwtn
Ebook: https://www.patreon.com/file?h=8466351&i=912472

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>>7322927
>Do you have any interest in multiple futa on a single female? And while I know you aren't into futa on male, does your opinion on traps differ?

The more the merrier, as far as futa are concerned. Not sure how I feel on writing traps... As it is, unless it's a short idea I can write in a single day or two, I can't delay my commissioned work for long.

Would this be from a first-person perspective or not? I haven't written first-person perspective in a long time.

>>7322961
>>7322971
Ehh... that idea is really not for me. Slavery... eeeehhhh... implied non-consent... sorry, can't get into it.

Obviously, I like powerful women, as shown with Odile, but it all has to be voluntary, so I'll have to pass.

>>7323087
>Ehh... that idea is really not for me. Slavery... eeeehhhh... implied non-consent... sorry, can't get into it.
>Obviously, I like powerful women, as shown with Odile, but it all has to be voluntary, so I'll have to pass.
ok, then let me change the premise

how about a scholar from a far away land travels through the wilds and he acquires a local amazon to show him around as a guide, who eventually seduces him to bed. Or maybe the other way around. Whatever the case, it ends up like in the sketch.

>>7323087
Their condoms all look like stockings for people with atrophied feet.

>>7323087
Well, here it is. Don't know if it fits your time factor because I don't know how long it'd actually come out to and how fast you write
>party of futa orc adventurers (like 4-6?) come across an elf village in their travels
>they notice a naked elf in a pillory in the town square
>they're getting set to rescue her when she cheerfully explains that she's here to provide sexual relief for travellers passing through because she's a follower of the god of travel and promiscuity, and is into that sort of thing
>the pillory is because she just likes it
>she invites them to fuck her silly, and they do
>later, she comes to their room at the local inn for round two (maybe other patrons join the orcs or one of the tavern maids decides she wants in also)
I was just asking about traps because I just figured a trap would work just as well as a girl in this scenerio

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>>7323081
Thank you kindly

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>>7323097
>>7323133

Neither of those ideas are exciting me right now. Futa yay, but orc... not doing it for me.

Sorry.

>>7323144
ok, then what sorts of things would you find appealing to write about?

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>>7323152
Well, that's the question, isn't it? It's funny how almost all my work is at someone else's suggestion. Someone gives me a premise, it makes me hard, and I go for it.

For PWA, it was just someone asking for "cock growth smut" and I ran with it because I loved the notion of futa cock growth. If they wanted something without futa... BOY, must they be unhappy.

So yeah, it's hard to express what I'm into until I see it. It's just easier to point to what I've written over the last year and say, "something like that."

>>7323160
well, I'm not a futa person. I'm actually more vanilla than anything else.

>>7323144
The futa orcs I had in mind were Incase's style rather than generic hentai ones if that changes anything

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>>7323165
For reference, since I love anything Incase.

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>>7323165
Not really. I'd be amused by writing about seriously ugly orcs like LOTR orcs, especially in the context of their hideous women and even stranger futa, but... that would be a gag, not a serious attempt at erotica.

Actually, there's a weird contradiction in my fetishes. I like muscle women (sort of), and I like strong and powerful women, and I clearly love futa so much, but... the thought of a very muscly futa makes my skin crawl. Maybe it's because it would end up being kind of... manly?

Is that bad? Am I bad?

>>7323180
eh, don't know. human sexuality is ultimately a clusterfuck.

in any case, what about the scholar/amazon thing didn't appeal to you?

>>7323180
Clarification requested: Are you presently seeking ideas on which you would write if they struck your fancy?
I.E., is there a chance of smut if we pitch ideas at you?

>>7323180
You can't even imagine a hot girl without a dick because you can't make the mental and emotional bridge to vaginas alone my dude. It's a little too late to be asking that. But this is /d/, so who cares. Live your soft-bodied dickgirl life.

>>7323180
Makes sense to me, sexuality is a spectrum, same reason I love traps but can't get into futa, because it just crosses that imaginary line and becomes too masculine.

>>7323195
Yo snek, I've got a one-line suggestion to add to any hypothetical future schafer/runt scene
>schafer skritching runt between the ears during oral

>>7323213
That should be easy to include.

>>7322904
By the way Shiny I might need your input for the gay scenes when I eventually get around to that story.

>>7323160
Different anon, how about a small story about a woman running a personal grooming / stylist service for futas, specifically those who find themselves feeling shunned, or just lack confidence due to their nature outside the norm. She runs a week-long discount deal for Valentine's day or puts out coupons in magazines or whatever, something to bring in a larger clientele than she'd normally have.

As part of her routine involves testing how different outfits look on her customers from all angles and in all stages of being, so to speak, things get quite intimate during her week, and with so many more clients than she's used to, she starts getting a bit lax with her professional boundaries. Maybe she even starts falling for one / a few of them.

At the end of the period, she accidentally books several of them to come in at the same time and, not wanting to waste their time, just decides to see them all at once.

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>>7323081
>Get your shit and get back into the skyranger, we've got another race traitor

>>7322711
Osa big. I wish you'd do a Borealan pic with a human.

>>7323075
When do we get female Krell on male human?

>>7323217
Snek!
>>7323292
>When do we get female Krell on male human?
When?!

>>7323302
He said he was going to include that at some point.

>>7323292
Maybe I'll see if I can get something like that done for Shiny's next commission, that would be appropriate.

>>7323302
I'm gonna edit down the recent trap scene to make that female for the hetero version, and I'm gonna have some fully developed females later on when they visit the homeworld. Next sex scene will have females most likely.

>>7323305
What's the next commission? Is it the Polar and the human who dislike each other?

>>7323309
Yeah.

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>>7323312
Excellent.

>>7323316
I really need to hang around Gerudo town more to figure out how they date.

Like, I understand having a female only city, but we don't even bump into young gerudo men outside the city. Do they dump all the male babies out in the sand? Feed them to sand seals?

>>7323343
A single Gerudo male is born every 1000 years and most of the time it's Ganon. The woman make due by crossbreeding with Hylian men.

>>7323305
any chance of some passing segments with Lena and Sleethe before everyone ships off to Krell, or is it only going to cycle back to them then?

>>7323351
That was the case in OoT, but is that consistent with Botw too? No gerudo woman I've talked to in the game has mentioned only having girls.

>>7323353
Almost every single one of them talks about going out and getting/kidnapping a Hylian man to marry/make their boyfriend. The Gerudo being made of 99% female has been consistent through all the games with them in them.

>>7323358
Yes, but neither of those facts requires magical 'only giving birth to girls' to be true. We can assume that because of Ganon in OoT, but that is just assuming.

Give some prompts for a short smut story with a twist.

>>7323375
The goddess of kindness decides to sexually reward her high priest.
Her high priest is a hard M.

>>7323375

Woman asks a genie to "become sexier". She slowly does, but keeps going past what she wanted. Now she is in a race against time to undo her wish before becoming the modern version of Helen of Troy.

>>7323375

Magical onahole advertised as "Virginity Remover"

Onahole actually portal into user's butt.

>>7323375
Man and women have loving consensual sex

>>7323425

Where's the twist Anon?

>>7323375

Stalker trap has huge crush on local heartthrob. Local heartthrob actually reverse trap.

>>7323375
A man comes home to have his wife accuse him of cheating. He denies it, but she shrinks and vores him anyways.
A couple hours later (after much ignored pleading) he can hear someone at the door. It's another man, and the faithful partner's last moments are in a cheater's stomach, covered in another man's cum.

>>7323451

>Vorefags

Yo, I noticed you guys didnt seem to have a link to this.

Nothing new, but your links seem to be to the older versions.

>http://pastebin.com/u/CorneliusO
>CorneliusO's Pastebin

Got an idea for a commission I'd perhaps like to place soon

The basic premise of the story is this:

Thousands of years into the future, a young adventurer is exploring the universe alone for hundreds of years in his space craft, he eventually gets very lonely and depressed so he installs an AI for his ship to keep him company and help him with ship functions. All is well for some time but eventually he begins to become more and more depressed, and the AI finds a way to cheer him up perhaps through the use of an android or maybe something else.

Anyone perhaps interested in this?

>>7322914
Either first from the female's or mostly focused third person on her(as in more focused on her thoughts than her partners). Don't really like stories from a futa's perspective.
I'm not really that good at coming up with ideas for stories and prefer going into stories with only knowing some tags, sorry.
Like dominant futa(at least leading the relationship), cock worship, huge dicks(should still fit inside, though, at least if you don't worry too much about organs etc.), fucking into exhausted unconciousness is pretty nice too.

>>7323180
>Is that bad? Am I bad?

Yes. Yes.

But don't worry, we're all bad here.

>>7323518
Just don't transform the mc, anyone else is fine, though.

>>7322172
Here's an update to a short piece of smut I wrote over a year ago, Succubus (http://pastebin.com/YCGzsVX1)

The update is this, Minotaur (http://pastebin.com/Juew1PAn)

Both stories involve monstergirls, Futa on female, large insertions, rape and cumflation, with the latter involving horsecock and I guess some level of mindbreak.

Last time I was here I received some awesome feedback that helped so I hope to demonstrate I'd learned from it. Anyway hope you guys enjoy it.

>>7323491
How could he be young if he's been exploring the universd for hundreds of years?

>>7323558
Read the minotaur one. Beginning's kinda weird. Doesn't know who or where she is. Finds some goblins who just murdered three people and the first thing she does is attack them? Would have expected her to run away. Maybe stumble across a couple more situations like that one and then eventually meeting the minotaur and getting completely overwhelmed.
Don't really like how in control of herself the minotaur is after the first orgasm, even though she's supposed to be lust crazed the only complete sentence she says is completely coherent and compassionate. Would have liked her more bestial.
Not sure futa is the right way to describe the minotaur. To me futa works best for humans whereas on monsters I think you should just go with beast/minotaur/creature etc.
Pretty fun otherwise. Couple typos(Nona changes to Nano) and grammar issues but nothing major.

>>7323672
>Would have expected her to run away
Huh. Now that you mention it, that does seem strange. No idea why "run away" wasn't one of the things I considered. Not sure why I didn't consider it, it's not like it was important to establish some form of combat prowess. Not like she uses it against the later minotaur anyway. Sorry, I'm kinda writing this with my dick.
>Don't really like how in control of herself the minotaur is after the first orgasm
I kind of wanted to portray it as a barely restrained lust, sedated in part by the willingness of her partner. I guess I failed in that respect.
>Not sure futa is the right way to describe the minotaur. To me futa works best for humans whereas on monsters I think you should just go with beast/minotaur/creature etc.
Eh, You're right. I wouldn't have called her "Bull" or "herm" so many times either if I had a name for her. I just didn't want it to get to repetitive.
>Typos and grammar
My bad, I must have missed a few.

>>7323375
Someone storms the stage at Mr. Olympia unannounced and flexes up and shows off, growing muscles so big they're larger than the rest of the competitors' combined, and an impossibly gigantic and ever-growing cock, blowing endless loads everywhere while staying hard.

Twist: It's not a guy, it's a hyper-musclebound female herm. No breasts though, just insane pecs.

Kind of a Mr. Shhh throwback, but with giga futa cock as well, and far larger sizes.

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>>7323190
>in any case, what about the scholar/amazon thing didn't appeal to you?

It might be too 'vanilla' for me. I tend to think of all beautiful women towering over me, no matter how tall they are, so unless we're talking actual Amazon snu-snu stuff, it's sort of the same stuff.

>>7323191
>I.E., is there a chance of smut if we pitch ideas at you?

There's always a chance, but the idea has to strike me the right way. That's the dragon we writers all chase is that intense inspiration, where the words pour out like a river. I had that for my commission, but I've slowed down a bit.

Not sure about other writers, but I like writing because I like the actual act of writing.

>>7323192
>You can't even imagine a hot girl without a dick because you can't make the mental and emotional bridge to vaginas alone my dude

No, I can do that. The real trouble, somehow, is writing straight scenes, where the dude has a dong and the lady doesn't. I've inched into that in PWA, but most of the time, straight smut is just so boring to me.

>>7323220
Now that's a lot more in line with what I like, but... it's pretty close in spirit to GFH, so I'm more likely to keep working on that right now.

Is anyone into writing about traps, Monstergirls, gay, and forced orgasm?

>>7323375
A monstergirl and monsterboy who are both part of the Society For Not Molesting Humans end up falling for each other and fucking

>>7323811
Just make requests, man. All you do by asking questions like that is double the number of posts.

>>7323558
I was actually wondering what happened to you. Are you still planning on continuing Succubus?

>>7323941
Minotaur is the continuation. Same girl, she's just wake now. Decided to tall it it's own thing like chapters or arcs.

>>7323952
>Decided to call it it's own thing*

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>>7322602
How about Konata?

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Posted this in the last thread at the very end.

>A princess is to be made an example of in front of her people.
Tags
>Humiliation, tentacle rape, stomach deformation, come inflation,
Pic related (character in question)

>>7323956
>Decided to call it its own thing.*

>>7324096
What

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>>7324096
Where do you think we are?

>>7324008
You forgot to post the link.

>>7324149
I forgot to mention it was a request (link to post >>7320915)

.

So what exactly would attract a female daemon of Khorne or Nurgle to a human man?

>>7324239
>>7324239
For khorne, I suppose they might like a fellow who is so thoroughly into war that he's never had time or interest for sex, and they want to seduce them into eternal combat sex with a demon waifu/battle buddy
For nurgle, I guess the interest would be giving someone who would want to wait for marriage turboAIDS, for the sake of corruption alone

>>7324239
Well, considering their patrons nabbed themselves a companion of their own, I would say that in the case of a demon of Khorne it'd have to be one hell of an exceptional warrior, and in the case of a demon of Nurgle someone that is somehow incorruptible.

>>7324239
For khorne, I think there interest would be in offering a war machine guy, especially a young one, a demon warrior women to be with him for an eternity of battle and an equal amount of warrior love

>>7324253
>>7324260
>>7324263
So basically "You murder so good now fuck my pussy"?

>>7324285
Not quite so much that as
>Hey, you like war? I know this chick who fucking loves war
>I bet you two's get a lot of shit done together

>>7324239
Papa Nurgle is all about spreading love and treating his followers has a big happy family, so his deamons being buddy buddy with the cultists wouldn't be too much of a stretch for porn.

>>7323217


Wait what? What gay scene?

>>7324349
Gay scenes in the eventual Runt short story, as last time I suggested one of my own I seemed to miss the point of what people wanted from them.

>>7324349
I and probably our single local yaoi fangirl have put rather a bit of extremely gay outpost stuff plus some bisexual stuff on snek's list for his planned short story month
Since you're who's Shown Him The Dark Side in this regard, he's asking you about it

>>7324352
>>7324355


Ah, that makes sense. I've got you covered, like I said before your inexperience and uncomfortableness with it is actually an advantage to writing this stuff

>>7324127

>not "a baka sandwitch"

missed potential

>>7323375
Cute boy is fucked by a Monstergirl. He's gay, but still cums inside of her because of demonic energy.

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2500 word update, new content at "Clayton sprinted through the throngs of people"

Highway to Krell:
http://pastebin.com/hE1muHCb
>no new tags

>>7324399
Oh buddy, shit's gonna be so gay you'll think it's still thursday
Glad you're around for this

>>7324594
Say what now? That is a weird hoop to jump through for some non-con.

"I mean he would totally want it but... uhm... he is gay, like flaming gay!"

>>7324594
>demonic energy
You're pulling things from your ass when you don't need to.

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>>7324631
Or just making some fun where there would otherwise just be boring sex.

Maybe he has a corruption fetish.

>>7324190
>>7324008
From your post in the previous thread wondering if this would be a fanfic, who is this princess? Or is it even important beyond the described appearance?

>>7323961
...

Lillie it is then.

I mean, at some point.

Also, I hope you aren't into hyper-diapers, because I'm not.

Yo, guy from last thread who wanted werewolves - hit me up ASAP. I need werewolves as a palate cleanser. My next commission after you is another goddamn inflation story I need the money too badly to deny.

>>7324958
This is the funniest thing I've seen all night.

>>7324288
All I can imagine is some male barbarian/viking being so full of vitriolic rage that Khorne blesses him with both his brand and a wife in order to murder-fuck the world.

>>7325099
Counterpoint: at that point he may have long since lost his sex drive.

>>7324958
You glorious request,filling motherfucker
Keep on going tonight
Just like I said, man

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There's a story I'm trying to find, but having issues. It's about some kind of magic cloud that passes through the Earth, and people across the world get transformed overnight if I recall. The main character gets transformed into a nymph, or a really sexual character (MtF) and their father doesn't accept them. An acquiantance of theirs turns into an orc and all sorts of people become magical creatures.

Not sure the title or even the year it's released, so you can imagine my frustration. Anyone know what I'm talking about?

>>7322172
Yay for quantum mechanics on the blackboard in the background of the futa pic!

>>7325475

Sounds like something based on Shadowrun.

>>7323375

Average dude gets agressively hit on by extreemly hot girl at a random party. Girl actually same dude from the future TGd and time traveled by future tech to prevent himself from becoming the eternal virgin he was.

>>7324849
In short there is a dance/pose program called MikuMikuDance(MMD) Think of it as similar to SFM that was designed for the Vocoloids.

People that use this program decided to invent their own characters or bring characters from some existing series and play around with it. This character is one of those original ones, Rhea (or JP: レア様)

First time poster in this thread, just curious if my story about a Naga would be okay to post? I'm not sure on the rules regarding what is normally seen as furry content. Its a vore story about a naga eating a human female.

>>7325793
Vore isn't too popular but nagas/lamias are popular and I'm sure somebody would appreciate it.

>>7325795
Yeah I thought vore wouldn't be very popular but I'd appreciate any feedback regardless.

This is my first attempt at writing really-
http://pastebin.com/Ui9P03Hg

>>7325799
Any tags besides naga/vote?

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>>7325677
Have you ever read "All You Zombies?"

>>7325919
Nah not really, I guess hard-vore would be more apt. Its pretty short and to the point, I don't think there's much more to say about it.

>>7325920

Nope. Is it simmilar to what I just said?

>>7325677
Wouldn't that just set up a two-state time loop, though?

Because he became she and went back and fucked he, he wouldn't be permavirgin.
But because he wasn't a permavirgin, he wouldn't become she and go back.
So he'd be a permavirgin who'd then become she and go back and etc etc etc repeat into infinity.

>>7326016
Well depending on what time travel rules you are using, yeah. Either they have to not get laid, forget they got laid, or it is marvel comics style time travel and it forks when you make changes.

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>>7326016
What if, after sex, she steals his dick "back" and that's what leads him to become a woman in the first place, knowing that his dick would eventually come back to him later?

>>7326227
Then you've got a no-start loop. He only goes back in time because of what happened because of him going back in time, so there's no valid entry state.

>>7326244
>Then you've got a no-start loop.

Every loop has no 'start.' That's why it's a loop, the most beautiful shape.

(tosses onion rings onto the boner of a hot futa like a game of horseshoes)

(the onion rings were almost as hot as the futa, and she was sadly burned slightly by them)

(still delicious)

(couldn't find a picture this time, believe it or not)

>>7322536
I just want to say that I'm always disappointed in the lack of futa stories whenever I notice this thread and it's always because there's a futa picture in the OP.
Although there are a lot of really lovely sexy tales in here, it still feels like a bit of a bait and switch.

>>7326276
D. has produced an awful lot of futa stories, i'm sure he'd post links to them if you asked him.

>>7326271
Hey D, taking >>7326277's suggestion do you have a repository/website/blog of your works so they're easier to find?

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Any writefags interested in penning a human x digimon story?

>>7326276
Well, I posted that Angel Moon thing I sorta-made a while ago, and absolutely nobody noticed it.

Could throw it up again, if you like?

>>7325400
I'm retarded - what was the request again? Was it just a follow-up to Of Wolves and Elf?

>>7326375

digiartistsdomain is still alive

>>7326429
Now that I'm no longer falling-down drunk, I went in the archive and found it
Here:
So it starts with two adventurers (I was thinking human, but elves or half-elves also work if you'd prefer). There's a thicc female fighter (because thick thighs save lives, 100% with you there) and her trap male sorcerer companion.
They're travelling through the woods, grousing about the shortage of dick in their lives (she likes his fine, but he's only got one and doesn't like pitching that much, and her fingers just aren't quite enough for him)
They run into a group of 5-7 woods-y guys (and maybe a woman?) who admit that they're werewolves, and they decide to camp together for the night
In the evening, the werwolves transform into their true wolf-man forms, and at her request start plowing the fighter silly. The trap sorcerer feels left out for like a minute until one of the guys who isn't plowing the girl points out that they're just as happy to mate with a guy and he happily joins her in being thoroughly fucked
At the end they all cuddle up in a pile by the fire, satisfied and happy

>>7326276
I've written a couple, mostly hyper futa stories.

XXS/XXL: A Size Story
Tags: Futa/Futa, Size Difference, Muscle, Hyper, Excessive Cum, GTS
http://pastebin.com/ayM2XhEG

The Admiral's First Night Battle is a Combined Fleet Exercise
Tags: Futa, Futa-on-male, Futa-on-Female, Threesome, Incest
http://pastebin.com/ziimimyc

A Troublesome Inheritance
Tags: Futa, Futa-on-male, Hyper, Multi, Excessive Cum, Non-con, Bondage, Forced Ejaculation
http://pastebin.com/6kwwcQ3g

I'm working on more, but my output has been shit lately due to IRL stuff. As much as I'd like to, I can't put writing smut above my work.

requesting a fic about an anthropomorphic trap fridge
because reasons

>>7326561
That's very specific; even by /d/'s standards.

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2000 word update, new content at "my priority must be the safety of the crew.”

Highway to Krell:
http://pastebin.com/hE1muHCb
>no new tags

>>7326561
That's like botfly removal specific, there broham.

>>7326561
How is it a trap? Unless you mean in the bear-trap sorta way...

>>7325170
>Lost his sex drive
Doesn't that kind of kill the point of erotic fiction? Or is it some kind of Brock Samson complex you're talking about where he can't get off unless she's brutalizing him like Molotov Cocktease.

>>7326766
No, more like the kind of effect the Butchers' Nails had on the World Eaters, for example- being unable to feel any kind of pleasure unless it's from killing people. Not the best mindset for sex or anything not involving ramming an axe into somebody's head, if you ask me.

>>7326495
You got it!

>>7326795
Great!

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>>7326361
No blog for me, but I do have this.

The Total Package: A Compendium of D's Erotica and Smut

http://pastebin.com/zp36qvB8

>>7326768
That's quitter talk and you know it!

Wouldn't be the hardest thing to justify in-story, even for a total nonce.

All the WE librarians had their heads blow up when the nails were implanted, for instance, and the rest showed vast levels of difference once they were post-surgery.

Even then, there's room for hate-fucking.

>>7326848
As long as there's emphasis on the "hate" part, of course.

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>>7326852
Yeah yeah, whatever.

Mister Fun Police.


Thoroughly unrelated question, this is for anyone; how is a good way of padding out a cowgirl story? There's one I'm doing at present, and I'm having it take a while before the girls are capably of actually lactating but are still bound and so on.

How can I make that seem interesting?

Pic related, somewhat.

>>7326867
>Thoroughly unrelated question, this is for anyone; how is a good way of padding out a cowgirl story? There's one I'm doing at present, and I'm having it take a while before the girls are capably of actually lactating but are still bound and so on.

Well... what's a cow's life before they go into the cycle of permanent estrus we subject them to... for milk?

If I was writing a story where women were kidnapped to make milk (which I never would, of course), I'd have it that the abducted women's faces would eventually be printed on the cartons of their own milk.

But of course, that's just me.

>>7326879
>Well... what's a cow's life before they go into the cycle of permanent estrus we subject them to... for milk?
Well, I can't really set some of it *before* they all get hauled in, as that'll just narrative faffing around.

At present I've got them at day two of their incarceration, still locked into these stocks/pillories and receiving shots every day that are obviously what are supposed to make them lactate.

I'm planning to draw it out a few days more before the milking really starts, and so I was wondering what to fill the time with. Got a few ideas already, but I was wanting to cast the net out on here before I put anything down.

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>>7326884
You know what, I'm going to be nice here since I doubt anyone else posting has worked on a farm with cows.

You let them out of the barn and walk them around to keep them healthy, you check them for injuries or any sign of illness, you make sure they're eating well. Cows need an amount of enrichment as well, so there's brushing and talking and generally keeping them happy. Upset or sick cows are hard to care for cows.

Of course this won't matter if you just want to treat the women like dirt or whatever, it's your kink.

>>7326890
That's a generally unexpressed part of this fetish. Everyone thinks it's like, "Oh, I just treat this woman like an animal."

You mean you treat her like any farm animal, with respect and decency, as if it has value to you, because it does? You give it affection and care and make it as comfortable as possible?

Call it a 'soft bad-end' if you want, if the women wind up at the farm and are like, "OK, we're property now, but it isn't ALL bad. At least I feel appreciated, not like that old husband of mine."

As opposed to, "We live to have our teats milked until they are purple and withered, and then we are whipped with the Encouragement Whip. If we reach our quota, we are whipped with the Congratulatory Whip, which is twice as long and slices the skin like a scalpel."

I saw some image that actually dealt with the cowgirls being killed for their meat at a certain age. Yeah... not for me.

>>7326890
Sounds here like this is going to be more like the factory farm variety of farm animals,

>>7326890
Well, that makes a certain amount of sense, but cows don't tend to be as smart as the average human being.

Nor do you often get a cow that actively wants to escape, especially not one with the facilities and faculties of a human. And I think the story has kinda passed the point of "generally keeping them happy".

I know this sounds like nitpicking, but my point is that introducing something like this into the story would cause more problems than it'd solve.

Thanks anyway.

>>7326901
Can you work in cow tipping somewhere?

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>>7326898
Correct on all counts.

>>7326900
You can't 'factory farm' a cow like a battery hen. They're just too big. Sure those on bigger farms get less care, but they're STILL looked after meticulously to keep them healthy and clean. Because no one wants bloody, pus-filled milk. And if you do, well, that's your kink.

>>7326901
Oh no, it's so hard for what's presumably grown men to keep women on ropes while walking them around a field or even keeping them on all fours! Do you think humans don't get taken captive all the time, and kept that way for as long as their captor wants? Do you know nothing of sex trafficking?

It's not nitpicking, you're being dumb and not doing research on how to keep people captive in a situation that is, apparently, against their will.

>>7326907
>Do you think humans don't get taken captive all the time, and kept that way for as long as their captor wants? Do you know nothing of sex trafficking?
I didn't think it was as easy as keeping people tied up all the time. I thought it was more complicated than that and I didn't want to include that stuff in the story so as to avoid it going off-topic (plus I've done that before and it didn't end up being very interesting).

And, as much as I may prefer story over porn, it's still the latter. And reality has to give over to that at some point.

it's too early in the morning for this

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>>7326920
Then don't ask about proper cow care and just write whatever makes you hard.

>>7326927
When did I ask for that? I wanted stuff to fill the story will, that would be interesting, not for help writing a manual on The Proper Handling and Care of The Bovine Species.

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>>7326934
I figured 'filling time' would be, you know, filling time with how to care for cows you're about to milk. But if it could be literally anything, why not add a subplot about one wanting to be a pianist and a kindly cow-slave-owner-person buys them a little kasio to play with while only her legs are bound?

>>7326927


I'm actually pretty interested in hearing more about caring for cows. Do go on.

>>7326954
I really covered the gist of it, just make sure they have access to good grazing, fresh water, and space as much as you can. Diet of course needs to be grass or high-quality dried grass as much as you can, supplemented with grains as needed. While cows don't really care about shitty standing water like puddles and will drink from them, it's really better to water them out of something you can keep clean. Oh, and of course, maintain fences.

Beyond that it's checking their health, like making sure the teeth are ok, hooves look nice, stool isn't unusual, they have an appetite and so on.

I guess something most people don't know is cows love brushing! They have big rotating brushes (and stationary ones) cows can rub on and they just go nuts for it. It's super cute. Some cows of course don't like it as much but some will come right up to you for a scratch.

>>7323375

girl-on-girl action between a contortionist and a short-stack

Any links to slow growth giantess stories?

http://pastebin.com/T6VwMUgL

Just wrote a short GTS thing up for a friend about a teacher's aid getting teased and abused by a student when he finds her small and helpless. Shrinking, male on female(male dominant, female submissive), noncon, clothing bondage, with a focus on big dicks and big balls. I'll probably write up a second part to it next weekend or so.

Long time lurker here. I recently stumbled upon the the Xeno thread on /aco/ which has an awesome list of Xeno smut. However one trend I noticed is that the majority of these works are femdom and have Xeno women as being very horny all the time.

I wanna see one where the female Xeno is reluctant (preferably a xenomorph) and the human male is more dominant and eager. Anyone know such works or willing to fulfill such a request?

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http://www.dmm.co.jp/dc/doujin/-/detail/=/cid=d_108617/bosesod-002

>>7327420
>/aco/ has xeno femdom
Nice.

>>7326852
>Hatefucking based on the concept of "Hate"
AM please.

>>7326489
Most of the site is down. I'd rather not wait weeks/months for it to be fixed.

>>7327420
xenomorphs from alien in particular?

The 9 foot tall or more giant black creatures with penetrative double mouths and acid blood.

You want that to be dominated during sex?

>>7327420
>>7327569

what about symbiotes that create xenomorph like qualities in women?

there's fics/pics from hentaifoundry that might interest you.

http://www.hentai-foundry.com/stories/user/daruak/15473/Space-Station-Desire

and if you sift thru the archives, these have the pics relating to the story: http://www.hentai-foundry.com/pictures/user/daruak

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>>7327569
Cause the concept of dominating something weaker than you is overdone and becoming too common. Dominating something stronger and can kill you? That I wanna see
Well ok...to make things more believable I was sorta thinking of a fanmade xenomorph with soft lips and breasts instead of all those scary killing parts

>>7327582
You just want to fuck something that came out of a HR Giger wet dream

>>7327582
I was mostly making sure. Because I'm not exactly an aliens expert, but there isn't even a lot there to dominate. It is just difficult to imagine the response of a xenomorph to anything not being 'I like it with my acid dripping mouth'. So what exactly is the sexual approach to that situation?

Oh well, everyone has their fetish. Good luck in getting more of that.

>>7327585
Who wouldn't?
>>7327586
Some guys back in the /aco/ thread had some ideas, like she was captured and mistreated/abused, then some other human come in to encounter that timid alien...but yeah it is hard to come up with excuses

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>>7327569
I don't know about you but a blowie from a Xenomorph's pharyngeal jaw sounds both like something that'd be worth writing home about and an easy way for one to subdue a human male into submission. Working like a piston of muscle and cartilage to edge you into blissful abandon, her eyes holding you with mild interest, as if some part of her still remembers the need for a male specimen when it comes to the more unsavory qualities of life like child rearing or birthing.

I mean, fuck me. The control she'd be able to exert over that single part of her anatomy would probably be far greater than any human woman's vaginal canal. Something that's been shown to punch through Colonial Marines helmets and human skulls like a finger through a wet tissue instead being used to milk you for all its worth.

A sort of reverse sounding, if you will, going by what it's really supposed to represent due to Giger's degeneracy.

>>7323375
Guy buys a magic necklace from a magic store
Necklace will shape him into his lovers ideal fantasy
After his date he takes her home and puts on the necklace
As hes getting ready in the bathroom, he notices everything is getting taller
Within minutes he becomes a female goblin
Its revealed that his date was a male goblin who was cat fishing with a magical disguise
Before she can do anything, goblin immediately drops disguise and starts making out with her
Falling for the sensation, the new female goblin takes him to bed and they spend the night fucking

anyone want to take up this prompt?

Muscle Girl is into submission but is ashamed of it because culturally women are supposed to be strong and dominant. Meets a male adventurer who is a jack of all trades type and pretty good with ropes and the like, eventually recruiting him to fulfill her fantasies.

Do you save stories you like on your hard drive?

>>7326542

I was wondering what happened to you. Yeah real life tends to suck.

Hope your doing well

>>7328040
I usually save the links to some that I find.

Like when I uncovered that archive of smutfics the other day that went back to like 1998.

>>7328097
>archive of smutfics the other day that went back to like 1998.

You have my attention, where can I find it? Something that big needs to be added to the list.

>>7328111
I gave it to you, dummy.

However, you can find it here.

http://greyarchive.info/

Use greyone username as a username when prompted and tink369 for a password.

Sturgeon's Law applies.

>>7328121
Ah, thanks. Sadly, it doesn't seem like a good idea for me to copypaste everything in without asking the guy who runs it. Oh well.

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Looking for something with throatfucking as the primary focus (futanari for maximum win) with lots of cumming inside the throat. Asphyxiation is a bonus.Forced/nonconsentual a bonus.

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>>7328131
Good luck getting a response from him. I've not even heard of some of the email clients these authors are set up to use.

I've been continuing my search for some of the lost works of one InvictusVoxFini lately. He did a lot of writing as well as art, a rare enough combination at the best of times.

Most of his stuff was left on deviantart, and was lost when his account was shut down by the admins. That was like 15 years ago.

The main thing hindering my search, as I see it, is the lack of places I can use to view archived material. I use the wayback machine natch, but does anyone know of any others that I could use?

>>7328121
That archive makes me think of the asstr archive. Which is where I found some of the authors that inspired me to try smut.

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>>7328145
Yeah, I found some stuff from there a while ago, although that was only be squeezing myself into the directories and going from there, it's not very easy to navigate.

And you wouldn't be the first of us who got started from there, trust me.

I posted a link to this story I wrote earlier in the gfd/rr thread. It's a light hearted femdom story. Technically it's kind of scif-fi but that's not really the focus and I just used a sci-fi setting as a springboard into the fun stuff. It's my first attempt at writing...anything really. Feedback would be appreciated

http://pastebin.com/SQwUPYNu

>>7326867
Miss Holstein, great milk producer

>>7328247
I'll try to take a look at it later, but please, for the love of all that is smutty, break up that wall of text.

>>7326580
Only got a thousand words done today, was a bit busy. new content at "The hauler left superlight".

>>7328262
Yeah I kicked myself when I realised it didn't input the paragraphs the way I wrote it. I've sorted it the best I can. Here's the new link http://pastebin.com/J0GzNNR5

>>7327585
>>7327569
insects give us examples of alien xenomorph style reproduction with parasites wasps. Insects are also victims from others sci-fi sounding horrors things. Not counting spiders and mantis reproductive cannibalism. There's also the bed bugs traumatic penetration by perforation on any body parts. No real genitals on females thought and offsprings birth by eating out of theirs mother body, funny.

>>7322172
http://pastebin.com/QgUps8fG

giantess, witch, small man, feet, navel

>>7328340
Looking for criticism. You don't have to be an art critic. I want to know how you feel.

>>7328340
>>7328341

Two observations from me.

1. And I thought my writing could be cold and analytical sometimes...
2. Why does almost every sentence start with a pronoun?

Your sentence structure feels abrupt and sharp. It feels like a noise keeping me awake at night or something, keeping me out of the story. I would really try to loosen that up for your next attempt.

I believe saving what you read in its entirety is your duty as a smut reader. One man's trash is another's treasure. Even though an author may feel like their old works are bad or have a change of heart and write radically different fetishes, their work is worth preserving.

This is more of a general writing question, though I promise it's going to be used for /efg/ writing
How do you write drunkenness? I'm not at all a heavy drinker, and I really don't know how to really get the feeling across on paper. Could anybody lend a hand?

>>7329019
I don't drink at all (personal choice).

But maybe just have them be a bit clumsier and less thoughtful. So jumping straight into doing stupid shit. If more drunk then slurring words and really unbalanced.

>>7329019
Unlike the guy above, I am a drunk, and I will for the first thing tell you that there's more then one kind of drunk you can be, and if you tell me what you intend on writing I can explain in more detail
But the most important general feeling is the sensation of somehow being blurred, softened, smoothed out.

>>7329019
Long sentences. Use commas where you probably should use periods. You can use this technique if you want to say shit without the reader comprehending. Tone is the most important thing. Make sure you use words that "sound" drunk. An easy way to start working on that is use words that sound like drunk.

- Chunk
- Clunk
- Funk
- Junk

Then you can go deeper. When I think of drunkenness, I think of words like languid. Their pronunciation is firm, but rolling and round.

>>7329053
He's drunk, and notice how long that first sentence is.

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Also, get drunk yourself.

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>>7329185
[spoiler]I try my best to stay away from alcohol [spoiler]because I don't want to be like the rest of my family[/spoiler][/spoiler]

>>7329019
Accents. People's accents invariably get thicker when they're drunk

>>7329214
How about writing it from the perspective of an onlooker? They're disgusted.

>>7329019
A big part of it is how sober people interact with the drunk character. Stuff like getting annoyed at having to repeat themselves, or just generally treating them like children or that something is wrong with them.

OP here, thanks for the advise.
What I had in mind was writing a drunk character from a third person omniscient perspective, how *they* feel. I've got a good enough handle on writing what a drunk person looks like to others, less so how the drunk one is feeling
I don't drink much simply because my stomach can't handle it, so I can't take a trip there myself

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2000 word update, new content at "We're comin' up on the insertion point"

Highway to Krell:
https://pastebin.com/hE1muHCb
>no new tags

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>>7329019
I don't drink at all. Evidently, that's uncommon among writers, as Isaac Asimov once said.

I don't even like writing about drinking, as that brings in questions of consent that I'd rather not deal with at all.

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>>7328278
>>7328247
I'm not this dude >>7328262 but I imagine some of my sentiments will be similar.

Firstly, overall format is important to create a clear and readable story. Big meandering paragraphs don't read particularly well, so break them up into smaller, easier to digest chunks. Use lulls in action, or changes in tone or pace to determine where it would be suitable to break.
Quotations also require a line break when a new character has something to say. Always start quotes with a capital letter, and end with some form of punctuation - depending on how the following sentence interacts with the speech - before the closing quote.

Moreover, punctuation is just as important as the words you use to build the ebb and flow of your story. Long, unbroken chains that switch direction and tone without any indicative punctuation creates difficult, monotonous sentences that make building a particular scene far harder than it has to be. It's primary school stuff, but important to try and relearn, and you only need a simple idea of when and where to use it - commas for slight pauses in flow, dashes or brackets to create asides, etc etc. Looking at how other people's stories use it or some online writing guides would be a good idea to get familiar with the proper usage in a narrative.

Onto the story itself, the first description that comes to mind is 'sparse'.
Neither character is described in literally any detail. The only character feature that's given is that the man has stubble. If you'd like to keep descriptions minimal so the reader has an easier ability to input their own view, that's okay for a small piece like this, but it's still a good idea to give some detail. Even maybe just what the alien's hand feels like on the main character's face, or the comparative sizes, anything. Give the reader a starting point to build their own world if you don't feel the need to build it yourself.

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>>7329511
The characters' personalities are similarly lacking. The main character is a spineless wretch with no will of his own that wilts in two seconds and jumps from forced emotion to forced emotion in response to his counterpart, while the alien switches between generically imposing and caring without much thought put into why she elicits that reaction. It's an incredibly tired trope that I'm tired of seeing, but it seems to be 80% of the genre because it's so brainless to write. Not that you're 'wrong' for writing it, but I'd just like to see more gfd stories where it isn't blatant that the characters have 'THIS IS A GFD STORY' stamped across them.

Actions are a little more in-depth, and you've at least put some thought into showing sensational and emotional reactions to them, but there are still problems. It's somewhat formulaic, generally just 'Action - Reaction' repeated, a play-by-play of what's happening instead of trying to be evocative. Finding a way to make actions feel 'sexy' without getting too purple can be quite difficult, but being too clinical with your descriptions is an easy way to make a story boring.

Basically, it's your first attempt at writing something like this, and it shows. While I dislike the tendency for people to start writing exactly this kind of story, and never stop or even improve, it's completely natural for people beginning to write, and being good at everything off the bat is pretty much impossible. There are places where the good ideas shine through the inexperience, but practice and reflection will help that potential along, so keep writing (if you enjoy it), but take a moment while you write to think about HOW you're writing.

>>7329515
>but I'd just like to see more gfd stories where it isn't blatant that the characters have 'THIS IS A GFD STORY' stamped across them.
Fucking preach it brother
Just once in my fucking life I would like to read a story with femdom/gfd sex but without the fucking Stock Femdom Chacters/ Stock Femdom Relationship

>>7329565
Could you give some examples for the unenlightened to learn a thing or two from?

>>7329515
Newfag question, what exactly is GFD?

>>7329601
Gentile femdom, a tag that's usually completely nonindicative of the actual content of the fic.

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>>7329601
"Gentle Femdom", it's supposed to refer to a scenario involving an assertive female that is less necessarily aggressive or fetishistic (eg: whips, boots, leather, etc), or where 'femdom' carries negative connotations, but it's used pretty broadly.

>>7329485
Catching up again, I'm kind of sad neither of the present Krell were taken along on the trip to act as pseudo-interpreter or at least a face for the human group. Would have been nice to see Lena develop her just-started relationship but emotional connection is an antifetish of yours I guess so I shouldn't bring it up.

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>>7329645
Hmm, that's a valid criticism, and I see how that introduces kind of a disconnect between the two acts.

I should be able to put Sleethe into the party as a native guide with minimal edits, so I'll change that to include him.

>>7329485
What is this snake guy from, anyway? I see him in a lot of art.

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>>7329687
I dunno, I love the set though.
This story is making me painfully aware of how little reptile-on-female art I have on file.

>>7329485
>towering, lethargic, irresistible herm giants who can barely be communicated with
>with a almost sub-sonic call that practically make humans soil their pants by growl
Yes. God I want to be Webber. [spoiler]Kinda surprised she didn't sample the fluids. For science, I mean. Of course. [/spoiler]


>somehow no-thought to bring up that maybe, contact would be faster with someone familiar with the Krell home world/language- ie one of the two who had a little run-in with the humans
Huh.
I have to admit that I'm a tad miffed Webber just up and hung Sleethe out to dry like that. I mean, not even leaving a note for the krell(s) to know what they're doing? Is the barrier language really that damning? Is there not some sort of dictionary they can use to try and convey the gist of why having that many new living beings were bad for the station to the krell? How did she learn krell in the first place?

Unrelated, do you write other female POV stories?

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>>7329645
>>7329704
Ok, I've made the edits, Lena's Krell BF is now in the landing party and will play a larger role in the story.

Yeah I have two other female PoV stories:

Hostage:
>When a deal on a used starship goes badly, a merchant must leave his spoiled daughter in the custody of the Patriarch of Borealis as collateral. With no knowledge of their unique culture, how will she fare in the company of the aggressive aliens?
12,882 words.
http://pastebin.com/4sPqykcU
Ebook: https://www.patreon.com/file?h=7806179&i=783236
tags:
>maledom, dubcon, reluctant, oral, kissing, vaginal, large insertion, huge weird Bad Dragon dick, creampie, rough, biting, scratching, choking, hair pulling, size difference, muscle, sweat, multiple orgasms, angry sex, trash talking, happy ending

Spectral Bride:
>Vera finds more than she bargains for when she ventures into a haunted mansion in search of footage for her ghost hunting blog.
8,455 words.
http://pastebin.com/za50YNR6
Ebook: https://www.patreon.com/file?h=7752451&i=773410
tags:
>lesbian, BDSM, femdom, oral, kissing, biting, riding crop, candle wax, strap-on dildo, corruption, choking, breathplay, hair pulling, long tongue, yoga pants, french maid outfit

>>7329645
>but emotional connection is an antifetish of yours I guess so I shouldn't bring it up.
To be fair he knows how to write exactly three emotions, which are lust, possessiveness and rage.

>>7329725
That's not very nice.

>>7329704
>Is the barrier language really that damning? Is there not some sort of dictionary they can use to try and convey the gist of why having that many new living beings were bad for the station to the krell? How did she learn krell in the first place?
I honestly remain baffled at why snek decided to make the "" romantic "" race the one with the nearly impenetrable language barrier

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>>7329751
Because it went down a storm with the Vipers in my X-COM series. I want to bring some of those concepts I developed for Uninvited into my OC setting.

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>>7329751
>his language requires him to be immersed in a gas most commonly known for its corrosive properties to breathe and communicate
>he thinks he gets to talk smack about other languages

>>7329757
Just because it worked in one series doesn't mean you're obliged to add it to all of them.

sweet baby jesus

does anyone know of any human x alien hive-mind fics? it's really niche but goddamn is it great

kind of like rick x unity or zach x bika

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>>7329694
>This story is making me painfully aware of how little reptile-on-female art I have on file.
got you covered, mang
sauce is: [Erect Sawaru] Raikou Shinki Aigis Magia - PANDRA saga 3rd ignition - Part 1 - Biribiri Seitokaicho (COMIC Unreal 2016-10 Vol. 63)

>>7329877


He didn't, he only added it to one of them.

>>7329515
>>7329511
Cheers guys. Tbh I wrote it when I was half asleep and feeling particularly lonely. When I read it again the next day I realized that I had made many of the mistakes you mentioned and was kind of embarrassed that I had chucked it out there without stopping to improve. I'm considering writing it again but properly this time.

>>7329565
Checkout the Daniel Faust book series by Craig Schaefer it's exactly what you want.

>>7329772
Nitrogen is corrosive?

>>7330179
Pretty sure he's talking about the water in the air.

>>7330179
>>7330232
Oxygen is corrosive.

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>>7330256
>barely 1/5th of the atmosphere
>immersed
You (or he) were (or was) scientifically facetious for the purpose of a joke and for this you (or he) will be put to death.

>>7330267
>he breathes nitrogen

>>7330294
just like everyone else

>>7330294
You are hereby sentenced to die via hyperoxia.

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Here's a question about traps for a subject in a fantasy-based story I'm writing. How feminine does a trap have to look until it becomes a point of annoyance that it isn't just a female or futa? Because my personal preference often bends on the side of fantasy that a trap can have over exaggerated feminine qualities such as a naturally girlish face and voice, wide hips, long hair, and a small amount of breast fat. Is there a point where you personally tune out that they're supposed to be male and see them as a futa instead?

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>>7330370
I can't speak for all, but just the juxtaposition of feminine description with male pronouns is enough to get me randy.

>>7329601

When she rapes you but not your bumhole

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>>7330370
If you want to get technical, for me as long as he doesn't have two holes down there it remains a trap. A futa is pretty explicitly both sets, and one hole and breasts is a third thing altogether usually called newhalf.

Although I second >>7330375, e>>7330370
If you want to get technical, for me as long as he doesn't have two holes down there he remains a trap. A futa is pretty explicitly both sets, and one hole and breasts is a third thing altogether usually called newhalf.

Although I second >>7330375, exaggerated feminine secondary sexual characteristics and male pronouns is just. Rawr.

>>7330375
>>7330412
Alright, I'm in the clear for the traps then. And just to clarify, the two holes you refer to are the vagina and anus?

anybody willing to do some futa/futa ntr story?
Two sets of futa couples cheat on each other with each other's wife.Eventually they all find out and they end up having a foursome.
Fairy Tale Happy Endings are appreciated XD

>>7330414
Yes. Some say woman has four mouths but a trap only has two.

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>>7330370
Well... this is where it gets complicated. DB Spencer makes art with "futa" but they don't have pussies. They are technically 'shemales,' a term she wouldn't use outside of porn, and that I pretty much never see used here.

I think DB wouldn't use 'futa' as a tag, but she wants people to find her pictures of women with penises. Furthermore, I don't know if her 'futa' are supposed to have once been male.

"Trap" is more specific, in the sense that I think most people would agree that being a 'trap' means they are or were at least born a male, and have adjusted themselves to appear more feminine.

I don't know how many hard fast rules there are in this terminology. But we can agree that, in general:

Trap - Male dressed as a female, maybe boobs, definitely a penis, definitely no vagina.
Futanari - A female with a penis, almost always a vagina, balls are optional
'Shemale' - A person with a penis and boobs, and female characteristics, but no vagina.

(DB Spencer's art is unbelievably awesome, by the way.)

>>7330435
Is there a collection of his work in a single download somewhere?

>>7330438
DB Spencer is a lady.

I don't know if someone's made an archive, but it's all at db-spencer dot tumblr dot com.

>>7330441
Shame. I adore testicled dickgirls as much as I adore dickgirl on male.

>>7330435
Traps don't have boobs, they're just guys that look and dress girly.
If they had boobs, they would be shemales.

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>>7330616
>>7330616
I always thought the central point of a 'trap' was the fact that they could be mistaken for a woman. Boobs would improve that, right?

Eh, whatever. I don't write about traps anyway.

>>7330666
The point is that they're just guys that look like girls, thus trap. If they weren't guys anymore there's no trap, they'd just be transsexuals.

>>7330686
Wait, I meant shemales, not trans.
Fucking complicated, this shit.

>>7327597
Have fun sticking your dick into a creature whose body fluids are acidic.

>>7330666
Here’s how I see it:
Crossdresser:
Fine with the gender of their body but enjoy wearing the clothes of the other (assuming genders are binary for simplicity's sake)

Trap/Reverse Trap:
Body of the gender they’re born as but look (maybe only with makeup) just like the other(usually means for guys they look like petite girls,
flat chest, cute face etc.), may act and sound like it, but think they’re the gender of the body they’re born as.

Transsexual:
The body they’re born as is the opposite of the one they think they are. Turns into post op transsexual once operated to appear as the gender they think they are.

Shemale:
Originally male body but thinks they’d be hot with boobs (optional + girly face, + butt + whatever)
I don’t know if there’s a reverse Shemale.

Futa/Hermaphrodite:
Have genitals of both genders, usually depicted as girls with a dick, sometimes without balls (though debatable whether that’s still a futa/herm), and usually have big tits.

>>7330729
>I don’t know if there’s a reverse Shemale.
Not outside of Thailand, I shouldn't think.

>>7330666
Fuck no. A trap with breasts on is like oppai-loli or shortstack, a hallmark of shit taste.

>>7330729
Shemale obviously is meant to be post-op.
Then there's all the other shit. Cuntboys, gender fluid and whatnot
>>7330750
Ladyboys, if you mean those, are just traps or shemales.
I guess reverse shemale would be a woman operated on to have a dick(maybe removed tits and manlier face) but not actually thinking of themselves as men? Is there a word for those?

Is Null still about? Everything ok?

>>7324239
Well with Khorne you've got anger and hate which would be some spin on hatesex or revenge sex, and violence which could just play out in the demon (daemonette, technically I guess) being into rough sex, be that giving, receiving or both. There's also the positive Khornate aspect of honor. You can blend that around as you like, so maybe the demon is attracted to a particularly honourable man, jumps his bones and rides him like it's a rodeo, and gets off even harder from the hatred the man feels towards a demon. Even inside that one conceit you could skew the interactions either more grimdark or more vanilla/gfd-ish.
Nurgle is rather easier, since the whole Papa Nurgle thing is fairly pronounced so a paternal (maternal) element of caring and compassion is easy to work with. Being drawn to someone dying and then saving them from their mortality is a motivation enough. As a twist, the impending death doesn't strictly need to be from disease as mortality in general is Nurgle's thing.

Neither of them should really have any truck with sex by themselves, but since the Chaos gods are supposed to be somewhat hazily defined entities born of emotions resonating in the warp there's actually countless different gods who are basically blends of differing amounts of the other gods as defined by the viewpoint of the cult that worships them. If there were enough people who worshipped something with roughly the same blend, it should be able to split off its own demons reflective of itself. Someone with a metaphysics boner could probably have a ton of fun playing around with the implication that for some reason there's a dash of Slaanesh in this demon even though the superficial appearance and ideals belong to Khorne or Nurgle, but it's a valid excuse even if you don't dwell on it. In both cases it's a convenient handwave for why the demons are sexy girls. Nurglette scaling from rotten pusbag to hot chick painted green with bruised eyes to taste.

Someone recommend me a story with a male protagonist serving(and enjoying it) a woman or futa without it being hardcore bdsm.

>>7330889
https://www.literotica.com/s/a-fortunate-encounter

>>7329665
>>7329714
Holy shit you actually added him in? I hadn't expected anything to actually change when I voiced complaint for already-written stuff on the level of crew composition but I'm really happy to see you doing mid-work editing like this.

Especially since Lena seemed interested in staying in contact and getting to know him better after their first encounter; even if it was only really motivated by alien dong, their budding relationship was a good jump-off point to explore the 'Krell romance' without having to just re-do everything with a new cast of Krell once on the planet. Acting as an interpreter and communicating a lot also gives Sleethe a lot of room to explain (over time and with difficulty) why he was interested in Lena beyond just 'very horny because bioclock', which is a start but could (and IMO should) be reinforced and directed by some special interest.
Hell maybe he just finds her broken Krell 'accent' to be very cute and it grows from that.

>>7329751
From my impressions here Snek seems to intend for an underlying theme in all his inter-species romances to be MASSIVE cultural and biological differences and the conflict they cause (and how that is overcome or not).

A language barrier (and a non-absolute one) actually seems like good fuel for snek to explore a variety of non-verbal expressions of romance if he feels like rising to that challenge.

And I assume it would be noticeable to the humans because I take their description as the 'romantic' race as meaning that they are the race with romantic feelings that can most closely align with humans. Correct me if I'm wrong on this.

>>7330967
I've read this before, but it doesn't really have the serving part.
It's pretty good, though.

>>7330981
Oh, you mean an actual servant sort of thing? Man, you're shit outta luck.
Wanna do me a service? Put together a list of futa/trap/even yuri works you like on a pastebin.

>>7331043
All the futa on male I like is basically just me going through literotica/hentai foundry/futanari palace and looking at everything that seems somewhat interesting and occasionally finding something nice.Then I do the same thing a month later hoping I've forgotten most of the good ones I've read and reread them. But there's so little actually good stuff it's depressing as fuck.
Some of the more recent ones I've enjoyed are "The classmate" on lit, "something better" and "the right girl" on hf.
If you want a full list that's gonna take forever, cause I tend to not save any stories or names anywhere, probably should start doing that, though.

About the serving thing, I don't really know any story that has a lot of that. As in, kinght serving queen, servant/slave serving mistress. There's a ton with hardcore s&m but that's not my thing. And I want both characters to enjoy it(maybe not immediately but soon enough).

>>7328278
Sorry it took me so long. I noticed that someone else already responded, but did not read his post so as to avoid influencing my own opinions.

First of all, this could use some serious proofreading. In addition to a few probable typos, it appears as if you do not have a particularly solid grasp of punctuation. Having someone to read and edit for you would help, but you should really work on your own knowledge.

As I was taking notes, my comments became more and more broad. I eventually arrived at the following: there is nothing here. I know nothing of the main character, nor of the woman or her species. I do not have a guess as to even what century this takes place in. I've never been one for demanding details of time and place, but I can't even form a picture this. There is nothing to relate to. You force emotions by cliche: convenient fainting, instant crying, and the world's fastest transitions. He's scared, suddenly sad, then aroused. There are no believable events that trigger these transitions.

There is no pacing. The story is short, but in time elapsed and words. Despite this, a great deal occurs. If you look at the in-story time line, disregarding time spent unconscious, no more than ten minutes passed. This is one of the great difficulties of writing: illustrating the passage of time. When you detail every part of an event, you set a story clock that moves at the pace you write. Since the reader is only capable of seeing what you describe, anything left out simply doesn't exist. As such, the entire story lasts the duration of a quick conversation, and however long it takes a basically unknown alien to orgasm. In this time, he recovers from being unconscious, starts to cry, gets better, gets inexplicably horny, and decides to devote his entirely life to a woman he met minutes ago. Because she's kinda dominant and had sex with him, which I guess he likes.

(Continued)

>>7331117
This might be what you're looking for, even if it's... eh? https://www.literotica.com/s/tribute-to-the-crystal-queen

>>7328278
(Continued)
Similarly, the reader has to follow all of these transitions in only 2545 words. This makes everything feel rushed to the reader, just in formatting. Both the in-narrative story and the actual paper-and-ink story (you know what I mean) can suffer from poor pacing. In this case, there is not enough time in universe, nor enough words to justify the changes.

There is no smut. I recognize that people can find the strangest things attractive, and smut doesn't even need to have sex in it. Vore, for instance, rarely has any actual sex, yet is clearly smutty. That being said, leaving out the sex is basically the best way to write unpopular smut. Everything else is just a lead in. When the rubber meets the road, unless you have a damn good reason or a very specific fetish, there really needs to be an explicit sex scene. You have about two sentences. There is a lot of buildup that goes absolutely nowhere, at least for the reader.

Finally, there is no story here. Nothing happens, except a guy gets /gfd/ed. There are no characters to develop, no plot, to obvious motives, no setting, and no exploration. It exists simply to fuel a vague fetish. I'm also not advocating for long, plot-heavy smut. That doesn't let you off the hook from having anything there. The basis of all writing, particularly smut, is building a rapport with the reader. They need to be interested in some facet of the story. There's really nothing to grab onto here. If you aren't into /gfd/, there is no appeal whatsoever. Even if you are, it probably leaves all of your itches unscratched. Fetishes are bizarrely specific and benefit from detail. Some people like dominant amazonians (or endless different giant cats). Some people like bondage. Others like lolidom. What is this? Without any kind of detail, who is this meant to appeal to? You skirt the fetish at such a high level that there is nothing to like or dislike.

(Continued)

>>7328278
(Continued)

It's the rhetorical equivalent of making an argument so inane that no reasonable person can oppose it. With any kind of fetish, including domination/submission themes, there are essential tenants that fans and practitioners find especially appealing. It's your job, as the author, to include these as you see fit. You can obviously pick and choose your content, but in this particular case, you chose the null set. What little you may include is lost in the noise of the whirlwind that is this story. Without sufficient detail and care, there is no way to find it. You don't feel the individual bumps in the road if you're driving 185mph.

That was a bit harsh, but it's the most comprehensive I can be. There are a couple things you did well. It's good to not overly detail and bog down dialogue. Many new authors try to write down every word that is said, verbatim. By alluding to the contents of a conversation as you did, you don't suffer from the same awkwardness. You also generally avoid the other common mistake of overly detailing events and falling into noun verb noun format. Considering your pacing, the tone is actually rather smooth. There's little needless repetition, and it's not grating to read. This is actually pretty significant, as it's one of the greater hurdles of learning how to write.

(Actually finished)

You guys have any star wars smut? Or would that be on another board?

>>7330761
Whoa whoa. Say that to my face, fucker, and not online, and see what happens!

lol

>>7331293
I have two... three stories?
But it is all pretty soft. There is probably more. Also there are cool pictures going around of a twi'lek male prostitute.

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2000 word update, about half of that is edits today though. New content at “Let's push on,”

Highway to Krell:
https://pastebin.com/hE1muHCb
>no new tags

>>7330973
I'm very averse to going back and making large changes when I've finished a project, but if you point out something that makes total sense while I'm writing it, I'll do my best to fix it.

>>7329923
Nice.

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I wanna request Link (or an anon) buttfucking Midna so hard she begins farting with each pound of her round shortstack ass. Perhaps the person could get addicted to hearing the sound/humiliation it causes her and speed up her tooting process via butt squeezing/spanking and other methods to fuck them out of her?

>>7331506
Get outta here Joyce.

>>7331524
Joyce is my grandma's name though.
Not sure who else shares that name.

>>7331575
He is talking about James Joyce, who was a bit of a pervert, it turns out.

>>7331364
Throwing this out, but hair would probably be something a completely hairless species would find interesting. Like how humans have thing for petting/touching fur.

>>7331506
Eww.

>>7331293
Cooked has a couple Star Wars fics, they should be on the list.

>>7331215
I'm looking for male mc, sorry. Also I'm fine with females not just futas if that didn't come across.

>>7330889
On the off-chance you haven't read it yet, try this one:

https://www.literotica.com/s/the-vixen-1

>>7331896
Course I have. Taiyaki is like the first stop on the road of gfd. Thanks for trying, though.

>>7331265
That's fair criticism. I'm surprised my punctuation and grammar was so off given that in my academic reports and essays my punctuation is usually the first thing that I'm praised for. Part of the reason for this was because I wrote it with the mindset of "This is just for a quick fap I'll just spew it out and send it out" Rather than "Let's make this a decent and enjoyable read." The other part of it was that I kind of thought nobody would notice. Boy was I wrong. That being said I'll take the criticism from you and the others on board for next time.

>>7331265
>You don't feel the individual bumps in the road if you're driving 185mph.

Yes you fucking do.

>>7332160
Actually you wouldn't. At that speed the natural lift created by your car's aerodynamic construction would lift it off the ground and you would tumble crash into the great beyond.

How much time do you spend writing?

>>7322971
Seconding this request.

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2000 word update, shotgun wedding edition, new content at "There was a larger structure at the peak of the mass of huts and bridges"

Highway to Krell:
https://pastebin.com/hE1muHCb
>no new tags

>>7332516
>>7332516
I don't spend any particular amount of time writing. I write every single day, and I write as much as I can in that session. Maybe someday I'll give myself a word quota, but not yet.

>>7332154
The bar to be considered "good" at English grammar is appallingly low, as most people, even educated people, are awful and do not even notice mistakes. I am a self-confessed grammar nazi, so don't take that part too hard. It's probably not as bad as I said. I'm just particularly good at picking out errors.

random check in to see what happened to the writefag that went by something like AngryCrawfish? They were writing a story about a lady with a growing pussy/large labia or something like that

>>7333535
We never had such a writefag.

>>7332969


Yo Snek, I'm currently writing up the 5 "phases" of how the hate/hate relationship between the lovebirds of my commission will play out. I plan on using it like a general guideline for the commission, where different scenes and plot points can be placed in certain phases as you see fit.

From the perspective of the writer, do you think that'll work? If so, do you WANT to work with something like that? Or should I change it?

>>7333684


Nevermind I already wrote it all anyway. Jesus fuck, I can't even write a fucking simple outline without flying off the rails and dumping out 2k words. I might have a problem.

>>7333782
Creativity is not a problem.

>>7334073
Only when this one falls off the board.

>>7334083
I just wanted to make the picture.