/efg/: Erotic Fiction General

>>7281995
story based on this image when

>>7281995
Posting an extended sexual sequence culminating double TG transformation (MtF, FtM)

http://pastebin.com/V9P80gRm

First attempt at this, criticism would be appreciated. Planning on making this an extended TG fic but this is the first big TG sequence.

>>7282129
Not badly written at all, but your formatting needs some work.

It's a good idea to either break when a new character starts speaking (using the TAB key), or to use the ENTER key to make a new line. Either works fine, just depends on if you want your story to be read like a traditional book, or like a web page.
What that's going to do is just space the text out and make it easier to read, rather than leaving it in large chunks like that.

You can also break it up into paragraphs at your discretion, wherever it feels natural, like on a scene change.

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>>7279326


I think Snekguy has the right idea with having a "Best Of Category" for each genre or whatever with multiple winners.

Consider the following: We have all these people posting on here asking how to write good smut. Instead of just trying to explain to them what works, why not just show them the "Best Of Category" for whatever they want to write? Don't get me wrong. I have no problem exchanging notes, but I'd rather spend time writing my own stuff.

Therefore, the point of having "Best Of Categories" with multiple winners wouldn't be to troll or create competition. They would instead serve as examples to inspire new writers.

TL;DR: Normal people don't care about arguing and shitposting, as they do about reading and fapping.

>>7282147
The preceding posts suggest otherwise.

Question : does female arousal differ much from the male's one ?
I'd like to try my hand at writing space yuri between a human and a xeno, and was always on a "write what you know" basis by writing from a male POV and never wrote from a female one. They aren't much different when it comes to sex and arousal, right ?
Apologies for the naive question.

i guess i'll try posting something, too, to try and get this on track. keep in mind, this is maybe the second time i've ever posted anywhere on 4chan (i mostly just lurk, looking around for pics and stuff; the only other time i can think of was years ago on /sci/, i think) and i don't know alot of the posting techniques here (i don't yet understand greentext, for example) and i also don't know about all this drama going on here about these other writers so i'm not even gonna touch that. but i HAVE been writing for quite some time (hope to publish someday, but probably not this stuff) and have alot that i can post and am still writing. so i'll just try posting something through pastebin (which i've also never done before, so bear with me if i screw up somehow)

this is part of a long-standing technical-fanfic of a hentai called either "Anyone You Can Do, I Can Do Better!", "Boobalicious", or "Milk Junkies" depending on translation. at least some of you have probably already heard of it--i've tried to make it my own, basically, expanding on both the original plot and adding a bunch of sequel chapters. since this is /d/, i'll post one of the chapters that actually qualifies as /d/ (but it looks like the formatting was lost in the copy to pastebin) though that means the non-/d/ background for this is left out

anyway, here it is. sorry for the infodump. at 12pt Times New Roman, it comes out to 45 pages. it includes unbirth/vaginal vore + pregnancy, incest, some lactation, age regression, and lots and lots of sex.

http://pastebin.com/R3u7Ctxz

like i said before, this is the first time i've tried posting anything to pastebin so i have almost no idea what i'm doing here and i'll gladly repost if i need to. alternatively, i could link it from where i've posted elsewhere (i put everything i write for this thing on Eka's first and what i upload there DOES have the proper formatting)

>>7282214
Formatting could use work, but since this is your first time using pastebin that's not surprising. Overall,there's not much to say about the story beyond what would apply to the hentai itself. Sex is fairly well-written too, even if I did skip over the parts with kinks i didn't care for.

Also, a quick tip- it's better to use comparisons than actual measurements. Helps visualize it better, which helps since this was converted from a visual medium to a written one.

For the record, you greentext by adding a "less than" sign before whatever you want to write.

>like this

>>7282214
So it transformation huh?

>>7282214
Just ignore them and they'll go away, the community on /d/ is usually overwhelmingly friendly and helpful.

Wow that is substantial!
The formatting could use some work, refer to my post here: >>7282136
The problems I'm seeing are similar, but no less easy to solve. When I first started out, formatting was my biggest problem too, once you get a handle on it everything will be a lot cleaner and easier to read.

I'm not personally into the subject matter, but I have no complaints about the quality of the writing, besides one for two grammatical errors or spelling mistakes, but I'm the least qualified person here to criticize someone else for their editing.

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>>7282147
No, no, no, for Pete's sake, no.

No matter how you try to sugarcoat it, we know in the end it's just going to be a disaster of an ego-feeding smorgasbord. We have plenty of (or at least one, from my critical point of view) people on here who are perfectly capable of providing objective and helpful critique.

These threads simmer with enough drama without someone throwing a fresh cherry bomb into the cooking pot. Make like a vertical bar on a piece of sheet music and put this to rest.

>>7282268
thanks for the input on measurements vs. comparisons--i'll have to remember that for the future (i DO update this stuff semi-regularly, mainly for typos but i'm not against adding all new stuff as well). the formatting usually isn't a problem for me 1) since like i said i post it on a site that more easily supports that and 2) i write it in Word to begin with so, in the places i usually post stuff, that formatting carries over automatically (the biggest loss posting here is that the italicization didn't carry over and i use that alot). one thing i want to avoid with ANY of my writing projects is to try and keep it from becoming repetitive, and (to use what i've posted here in example) i don't mean the relatively repetitive structure of just "talking, sex scene, talking, sex scene", more to not use the exact same wording every time. even looked up lots of synonyms for frequently-used terms in what i'm writing so that i can mix it up at times

>>7282294
i guess. i don't count it as much as transformation--the way i see it, it'd qualify as that if it were "more significant" changes such as into an entirely different gender or species from what the character usually is, rather than age regression/progression or size-changing

>also attempting to quote posts here for the first time (i'm much more accustomed to message boards than imageboards)

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2000 word update, new content at "I watched the tractor pass me and continue down the field"

Snek 4:
http://pastebin.com/ZDNwTwtn
>no new tags

Thinking of something like this for the Brokers, and I'm still working on the Krell design, so if you guys have suggestions or requests I'll try to fit them in.

>>7281995
>Moo snu
Kek

>>7282397

Feels like a costume rather than an actual alien

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>>7282412
More squiddy then? Something like this?

>>7282418
Not this >>7282412 guy but I agree.

Maybe make their face and body less like a human by removing some of their more defining features.

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Good evening, everyone. Real life is still being one hell of a bitch, but have a quickie:

The Call
http://pastebin.com/ciNAStH7
Tentacle Monster x Female Human; consentacles, rough sex, spanking, large insertion, excessive cum.

Not a lot to say here, the pitch is the classical 'mage inadvertently summons tentacle monster, sexy hijinks ensue'; but I wrote this one from the PoV of the tentacle monster rather than the girl for a change.

Enjoy!

>>7282418

Now that's an alien. The important part is that they look exotic enough that you can't reproduce the look with a costume, and that if a human wanted to be in a relationship with one, it would take some serious consideration due to how inhuman the alien looks.

>>7282303
>Just ignore them and they'll go away, the community on /d/ is usually overwhelmingly friendly and helpful.

I'm not sure I'd have been able to make that conclusion, seeing as how there seems to be quite a bit of fighting going on here.

>>7282459

Goddammit, Google has failed me! I'm aware that gif is from a Newgrounds short, but I can't remember the name of it!

Help a guy out?

>>7282459
God Damn, I never knew I wanted that, but it's exactly what I wanted

>>7282459
hey, thx belgianon.

never read much about consentactles, but that was fun reading it from the monster's pov. build up and delivery were nice, but there might be some grammar issues.

Would anyone here be interested in writing a consensual public use request?

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I know this is a weird fetish but would a kind soul make a futa on male senran kagura fic?

>>7282397
>another viper shows up to anon's farm
>the new viper and Vi bond by talking about how stupid/shitty mutons are
>[racist hissing intensifies]

>>7282639
I second this request.

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>>7282129
I'll just reaffirm what Snek said about formatting first, as it's pretty cluttered at the moment, and can be quite confusing in spots where every quote isn't followed by 'he said' 'she said'.

There's also a few minor typos and other grammatical oddities, but nothing that can't be quickly corrected.
>taking the nervous Stephanie (a)back
>her wrapping her arm around Fred’s back
>She twister her head
>She lit a match from Benny’s (What is Benny's?)
>consider a friend were (was) a bonus
>The fire pot contained somehow contained
>“I think we’re close”,
>tight pair of points
>to a the focal point
>height be the second

Moving on from that, I'm not really into this sort of thing, so I can't judge how erotic or well done it is, but there's couple I can say about the writing and the story itself.

Firstly, your usage of language is a little stilted. Actions and reactions are described in full, going beyond flowery in your usage of words that feel like you just sat in front of a thesaurus and started substituting things in with little regard for evocation. It almost feels like you're writing it satirically in parts. Here's a couple examples:

>He expelled from his lungs the air he felt he had been holding in forever as he felt the slickness of her tongue
>Stephanie helped his cause as she compressed herself next to him, reaching down and flinging off the prohibitive undergarment.

The way you describe an action, and the language you use to do it, is at least as important as the action itself, especially when writing smut - using almost technical terms just detracts from that. Writing "He fucked her right in the pussy" is no good, but doing the opposite is just as awkward, and if there was one thing I could point out that you should work on, it'd be to find a balance that works for you and also works for the reader.

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>>7282129
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>Continued
Towards the end, you also start referring to both characters in the feminine, which is mildly confusing. Even if just for readability's sake, make sure you either uniformly switch pronouns and make it clear where and when that happens, or find another way to clearly differentiate which character is performing which action.

I was going to say something about the lack of exposition and about how the characters seem to be in a rush to get through their actions, but I don't actually know where this sits in the planned timeline of the greater story, so it might work when it's in its proper place. By itself though, it raises a lot of question about who these people are and why they're doing anything.

Overall, I'd say it's a pretty decent start to work off of. It could definitely use some polish in a few places, but you're only going to get better with practice, and no one is going to be perfect off the bat.

>>7282601
Post it first and somebody'll pick it up if it interests them

>>7282931
Ok, here it is
>alien space babe (star trek style) is stopping off at a space station to refuel her ship
>decides that since there's plenty of people around and she's got a few hours to kill, she'll indulge her public use fetish
>how is up to the writer, maybe a bar with a couple of the classic "ass through a hole in the wall" setups, or just bending over a bench in the public showers and writing "go ahead" on her ass in space sharpie
>she gets plowed by a bunch of alien and human dicks, of all sorts
>after a few hours and a couple gallons of semen in both her lower holes (or all three), she goes back to her ship, leaking and happy
If the writer is into it, giving the woman some slightly unusual genitals, even just something very simple like an internal clit or vestigial prostate would be really nice

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>>7282971
>vestigial prostate
On /efg/, prostates are never vestigial.

>>7282972
I'd be cool with making it futa if you want to take a crack at it

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have the new character models in zelda caused anything to be written?

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>>7282989
I'm too busy to take up something right now, I'm afraid.

Speaking of which, I have a new chapter for everyone. It starts at "Monday."

The Grande Futapest Hotel
http://pastebin.com/SjeEbP1Y
>tags: futanari, futa-on-female, futa-on-futa, huge dicks, balls, ballsucking, blowjobs, anal, vaginal, deepthroat, cumswapping, kissing, porn, real world, I wish the real world would just stop hasslin' me

I don't think there are any new tags for this entry, unless 'edging' is a tag. Calling this 'orgasm denial' would be a little much, but... we'll get there, I'm sure. I hope you all like it. Let me know what you think either way.

>>7283078
>I'm too busy to take up something right now, I'm afraid.
Ok, no problem
Anybody else like this idea?

Anybody got a favorite story on fictionmania?
I'm looking for /tg/ stuff and I don't want to sift through all the crossdressing bullshit

>>7282418
They can be squidy and mechanical. Like armored tentacles, and before anyone says that the armor wouldn't allow the full use of the tentacles these are space squid people who are being written for a smut universe and they can travel in space, maybe like some kinda super-spandex or high tech chain mail.
>the wait for nonfemdom aliens from snek continues

>>7281995
I've always had beef (heheh) with cow monster girls or animal girls in general with huge tits, like shouldn't those tits be almost nonexistent until they're pregnant? At least that concept seems hotter to me than just ever present megatits.

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>>7282418
Snek are you ever going to make an Amazon flick?

>>7283190
Depends on their origins. If they were magically/artificially made then you can go with horny wizards/scientists. Human females have such big tits compared to other mammals due to selective breeding and being seen has desirable traits. And since minotaurs are half-human, if we're going classic origins then them having human traits isn't far fetched. Also, the source of the pic has it canon that those cowpeople use their own milk for food/drink and given their size will result in some big tits. Woman can produce milk without being pregnant.

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>>7283185
Well they're gonna use pressurized exosuits to get around on land, like Andromedans or Big Daddies. They'll be fairly fragile and squishy when they leave the suits, which may make femdom impractical.

I was thinking of making them really arrogant, and they're a mercantile species who love wealth, so there might be sexual situations where they're paying you to perform for their amusement, eg:
>I'll give you 10,000 credits to suck that Borealan's dick while I flick my squid bean and laugh at you
Everything would be a lot more cerebral, though I guess it still qualifies as coercion/femdom.

>>7283198
A flick? If my subs increase by 100,000% perhaps.
As for fics, maybe!

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>>7283206
I meant fic. doh.

>>7283206
>which may make femdom impractical.
Nothing says THEY can't be the ones getting gentile femdommed.

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>>7283228
So you're saying...girls can love girls?

>>7283206
Octopi are actually rather strong and they're working on a similar basis to your brokers I'm assuming in body structure.

>>7283206


Did you decide on how much ass the Krell are getting?

This is important.

>>7283206
>I was thinking of making them really arrogant
You're saying that their an unlikable species by default?

Would anyone be interested in a Rule 63 Harry Potter story in which "Harriet" gets raped by Uncle Vernon?

>>7283404
>Rape
already absolute trash

>>7282183

Men get aroused by the sight of women, women get aroused by the sight of men's arousal from seeing them.

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>>7283404

>>7283404
>Harry Potter
if someone doesn't have something /d/ about them, get out. rule 63 in fanfiction doesn't count.

http://www.lycaeum.org/mv/BX/piers_anthony_stories.html
Tags: cowgirls, lactation, noncon? Small penis humiliation. Oh, and I didn't write it.

>>7283622
no defending fanfiction or rule 63, but don't put down vanilla. Remember, it's erotic fiction general, not Alternative hentai fiction general

>>7283631
this was really disturbing, and not about monster girls at all :(

>>7283631
>Tags: cowgirls, lactation, noncon? Small penis humiliation.
Sounds perfect.

>>7282214
Vore

Well in the trash it goes.

>>7283434
>>7283767
People, please. Be tolerant. If something is not your thing, just ignore it. That's why we ask for tags in the first place.

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>>7283404

>>7283633
>no defending fanfiction
Isn't half of our content 40k and XCOM though?

>>7282539
Can't help you there sadly enough, I got the .gif from /tg/.

>>7282598
>there might be some grammar issues.

Please, don't hesitate to point them out, so I know what to keep an eye out for.

>>7283838
It would be purged too if mods did their job.

>>7283847
What rules are being broken?

>>7282459
Belgianon! Thought you were dead, it's great to see you posting again.
Can't say too much about the technical side, but the idea of writing from the Outsider perspective was a nice one and mind reading to satisfy fetishes is incredible.

>>7283843
i'll get to pointing them out as soon as i get back from work.

>>7283633
>no defending fanfiction

Oh man, you seriously made my day! I haven't laughed that hard in a decent while.

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Yeti : http://pastebin.com/vpLJc0Hy

Tags: m/f, monster girl, yeti girl, cunnilingus, 69 pawjob, large penis, gentle femdom

Just a quick thank-you piece, so it probably suffers the same 'going through the motions' problem my Apophis story had. Rest assured, my next piece will have actual characters in it. Returning characters, even.

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>>7282639
wait i remamber this image!
IT WAS MY CREATION!

But sorry for random orgasm.
I like Nagas/Snake Girls for some reason and also like transformation.
How can it be that i feel so alone with this fetish?

So I wonder, how would a Lady of Change get an adventurer into her sexual trap?

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>>7284321
Dropping cryptic clues and hints about a particular 'key' needed to 'unlock the door'?

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3000 word update, everybody hates Chryssalids edition. New content at "I headed downstairs to retrieve my assault rifle from the cupboard"

Snek 4:
http://pastebin.com/ZDNwTwtn
>no new tags

>>7283267
So much ass that mathematical terms fail us and we have to turn to ebonics.

>>7283381
Yes.

>>7284371
....You enjoy making species I want to like assholes don't you?

>>7284395
It's because all the traditional "dominant personalities" in porn are actually just complete sociopaths, and he's a man to stick to the formula, so all of his aliens come across as psychotic assholes who most people would as soon shoot as talk to

are there any long stories featuring a sexual relationship between a futanari and a male? I've read and enjoyed plenty of stories where it's either a quick fuck session, a hand/blowjob, or some hardcore domination by the futa, but are there any greens in this directory that explore what a relationship between a futa and a male would be like?

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>>7284321
>So I wonder, how would a Lady of Change get an adventurer into her sexual trap?
>>7284332
>Dropping cryptic clues and hints about a particular 'key' needed to 'unlock the door'?
Probably, if not how certain shapes can go into certain holes...

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>>7284395
>>7284411
I guess I'm just attracted to assholes.
Feel free to quote that statement out of context.

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I've got a question for everyone here, to hopefully have a thoughtful discussion here.

How do you all write? As in,how do you get comfortable to write? Do you do it on a laptop, a desktop? Do you have a good chair at your desk or a folding chair? Do you have your favorite drink or snack while writing? Any particular time of day you like to write?

For me, I used to write very late at night on my laptop, but when that died, I had to learn to write on my desktop. I write mostly at night, but on days I'll be busy, I can write bright and early in the morning. As for drinks, I just do water. Lots and lots of ice water.

I don't know if it keeps me cool while writing about sexy stuff, but... hydration is healthy.

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>>7284617
I have a favorite keyboard, and I'll either sit at my desk and type like that, or pull up my armchair and use a USB extension cable so I can type with the keyboard on my lap.
I got an old laptop recently so I can use it if I have to go anywhere, but I've not had cause to use it much yet.

I usually start writing as soon as I get up, so it's all done before I start anything else. Depending on how much I feel like writing and how fast I do it, it can take anywhere from two to eight hours.

I drink a couple of cans of coke a day, and that usually gives me a kick so I can do more faster. I find it helps to incentivize myself too, by making food and treats and such available only after the target has been reached.

>>7284601

God damn snek, you're gonna love writing my commission then lol. It's literally summed up as "two gigantic assholes who hate each other suddenly only have each other to survive"

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>>7284625
You don't have a wireless keyboard? Is it a Model M, by chance?

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>>7284627
Antagonistic relationships are always the most fun to write.

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>>7284637
Nah, I bought a Zalman with knockoff Khail switches a while back but it understandably crapped out on me after subjecting it to like 400k words.

Now I'm using some Logitech rubber dome that I don't know the model number of, and for some reason I type way faster on it than on the mech board.

The laptop I got is an IBM Thinkpad X32 though, and its keyboard is a cousin of the Model M so I'm looking forward to using that.

Do you have the good fortune to own a Model M? What do you like to type on? You can hardly buy them anymore because the prices have become so inflated thanks to /g/'s memeing.

Anyone know a good story for a guy unknowingly having sex with his sister, but she is fully aware?

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>>7284617
Well first I've got this old battered flannel jacket that I always put on before I write, can't seem to work without it.
I've only got a laptop, so I set my laptop up on my desk, stack of books(I actually like to read when I'm writing, just grab a book, flip it open to a random page, read a couple from there. It often gets my inspiration flowing, weather it's a urn pf phrase I like or a bit of dialog), and beside it a large mug, either one filled with cold beer or another with hot chocolate, depending on the season. Sometimes substituting a jug of sweet tea instead
On the other side, a quart bottle of Jim Beam White Label and a glass (or mason jar, when I haven't done the dishes in a while)
Usually I start drinking before I start writing, because it usually takes a few before the "this is dumb, you shouldn't write it" nag in the back of my head shuts up, but not always.
This way I usually end up pounding out usually over a thousand, sometimes 3-4k at a go words, which I usually edit down by 10-20% later

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>>7284646
I've just got a Logitech keyboard that has served me well for over a decade now. It's nothing special, but it has full-sized keys and it's nice enough.

That .gif is the most erotic thing I've ever seen in this thread.

>>7284439
that'd be dope. also interested.

>>7284439
I've only know of two, one of them is based entirely around incest between a young man and his little sister and the other is an anthro mlp character fucking a human.

>>7283843

To Belgianon

line 14
... but I cannot seem to make her aware [that] her call has been heard.

32. And yet… [h]er emotions flare,

39. Other tentacles crawl along [t]he bedposts[,] but they remain passive as I bare her[.]

41. she presses into her core and withdraw[s]

43. I will ensure she get[s] enough. I want to make her get[s] enough.

45. Her hand[,] which had been tugging at her hair[,] moves instead to a pert breast,

47. She must realize what I am [remove comma] and accept me.

53. I know what I’m doing is good[,] but I will have to do more than restrain her to satisfy her.

57. all my tentacles start to[delete second 'o'] ooze black, ... It is not truly the liquid she’s imagining[,] but a mere extension of my body, [replace 'but with 'though'] it is close enough.

61. Yet, it still isn’t enough. ... A soft moan rises from her throat[,] but it has a different tone,

65. She bites down on her lip to stifle her scream as her body stiffens, he[r] muscles taut vainly in my grip, her eyes roll back in their orbits. ... Yes, it hurts, but yes, it is something she want[s]. [The pulling of her own hair] indicated [it]; pain.

67. slowly caressing her jaw[,] then her lips until she relaxes and opens her mouth.

69. Yet[,] her back arc[delete 'e']s to offer her breasts to my appendages in a silent plea for more.

73. I finally dare [to] aim one blow at the pink engorged lips from which clear fluid has been trickling, the proof [of] how much she enjoys this

81. My tentacle[,] which had teased between her thighs[,] presses forward

83. At last I stop and remain[remove 'ing'] inert inside her as I fill her to her very core,

>>7284640

Currently have a major turning point in their relationship(by that I mean when they're finally forced to acknowledge that they're stuck with each other no matter what and they should maybe tone down the constant assholery to each other) being when they get so pissed off at each other that the polar actually takes a swipe at the human, and the ensuing fight is an embarrassing anticlimatic mess that ends in them accidentally knocking each other out at the same time.

I'd go on but fuck me I have shit to do and my "fuck I'm about to write a flood of words" senses are tingling

>>7284983
Oh by the way I emailed you Grim's next draft of the Osha/Runt pic if you want me to give him any feedback.

>>7285012

Motherfucker, I was checking my email hourly, how did you sneak that in there? I'll respond to it there

>>7282539
Alright friendo here's the deal, the guy's name is RedMinus, I can't remember the name of the short but you can find it on YouTube from what I last recall. Hope you find it and good hunting!

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>>7284653
I'm dying

>>7284810
got a link to either of them? i'd be interested in both.

>>7285024
It's probably not as silly as it sounds. I wouldn't be at all surprised to find out that there's fanfiction about it.

>>7280211
http://pastebin.com/Wu8F9FHp
>Tags: m/f, bite-play, pretty bog standard.
Elf M x Human F

Finished reading this. Thought it was very lovely. Wouldn't mind a sequel.

>>7285033
https://fimfetch.net/story/186146/upon-her-throne
Pony one^
http://pastebin.com/DUR245G8
First few chapters of the sister one, I can't be bothered finding all of them but just look around and you'll find them.

does anybody remember that one fapfic of Link getting fucked by multiple Shadow Links

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>>7285058
thanks anon

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>>7283206
>other alien race still boils down to femdom-esk race

>>7284395
With the exception of the krell, which currently have very little written about them all of sneks aliens are either douche bags or so fluffy they convince you that you belong to them. And it looks like the brokers are getting added to the douche category.

>>7283078
>I'm too busy to take up something right now
what are you working on?

>>7283866
I'm still alive and kicking, sadly enough the combo of "Day Job" and "Evening Classes" negative qualities on my IRL character sheet leaves me with very little free time to write.

>>7284815
Thanks a lot, this is really helpful.

>>7285207

>or so fluffy they convince you that you belong to them

I'm not seeing the issue here

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>>7285224
Continuing The Grande Futapest Hotel for my commissioner. Rather that post every day like Snek, I'm going to post big updates for every macro-chapter that is finished, each signified by the day of the week it takes place on.

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>>7285035
>It's probably not as silly as it sounds. I wouldn't be at all surprised to find out that there's fanfiction about it.
Dude, do you not know how the modern interpretation of Mordred came to be?

>>7285207
>or so fluffy they convince you that you belong to them
The polars are most assuredly still sociopaths, they're just the "con old ladies out of their life savings" and "groom 11 year olds" type than the classic stab a man for looking at them funny type that the others are

>>7285368
Oh don't worry man I agree with you, but you might want to keep it quiet. There's a certain pokemon on this board that likes polars a bit too much and defends them at all times.

>>7281995
man reverse image search comes up with nothing, can I get a sauce for the OP pic?

>>7285440
>There's a certain pokemon on this board that likes polars a bit too much and defends them at all times.
Well they ARE his OC waifu catbear race that he's spent a few hundred bucks on, what do you expect?

>>7285526

Actually I had nothing to do with their creation, they story they first appeared in (Fineprint 1)wasnt even a commission, it was a story Snek did for free without any input from me. Fineprint 2 was my commission, and I just asked him for Ursi shenanigans.

I also only paid $100 for it, not "a few hundred". Double also, Polars have not been shown to do anything sociopathic in anything Snek has written, nor implied. It was just made up by people on this thread and rolled with.

Anything else you'd like to be wrong about?

Different anon here with no dog(/cat) in this fight.
I will say that I like polars a lot better than the other borleans. The weirdly maternal way that a lot of them come across is a bit boner-killing, though. But that's just a matter of taste, I suppose. Too many flavors of femdom, not enough writers to go around

>>7285457
12 beast by okayado

>>7281995
Plz gib moo snu

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2000 word update, reached 60,000 words, about another 10k to go. New content at "Vi seemed to approve, and she relayed the information to the Mutons"

Snek 4:
http://pastebin.com/ZDNwTwtn
>no new tags

>>7285640
The problem is snek advertises as a femdom writer, but he really only likes one specific niche of femdom and that confuses people.
Also zero narrative adaptability, like fuck would it kill you to learn that editing is something allowed to exist snek?

>>7286570

people write what they want to write.

why are you upset about it?

>>7286570
He is a femdom writer that writes femdom. If a new reader comes in expecting femdom, he is going to see femdom. Variety does not determine if its femdom or not

>>7286570
That's valid, 'femdom' is a very broad term that includes a lot of stuff, and I can see how people might expect whips and chains and be disappointed. Similarly a lot of my stuff is a bit too hard to be tagged as /gfd/, but there's no real solution unless I want to start calling it 'moderate to severe femdom' or something.

Editing is a separate skill set to writing and I am not by any means a good editor, and my process is generally just reading it over once and seeing what I can catch.

>>7284439
It seems like we've been getting a lot of male/futa requests lately.

>>7284617
I used to write on my desktop but I switched to writing entirely on my laptop because my desk chair is a piece of garbage and I'm too poor/cheap to buy a better one. I sit in my recliner and generally write for two hours (21:00-23:00) a night before I go to bed. Sometimes I also write when I wake up in the morning as well, especially if I wake up early. On nights when I have a hard time staying asleep I'll write until I get tired and try to go back to sleep. Water is my primary drink of choice, though I also enjoy decaf coffee or herbal tea (given the time of day I usually write). I don't eat while I'm writing because I have a rule about not eating after a certain time.

I'm really stuck in the twilight zone with snek's stuff, because I love shit with amazonian women, I like milscifi, and I especially like catgirls, but I can't do noncon and don't even really like femdom that much, or what I do like doesn't really deserve to be called femdom

>>7286685
no one cares, fag.

This ain't your blog

>>7286624
"Moderate to severe femdom" sounds like a medical condition.

Also, when merchant squid alium grills a thing?

>>7286685


I recommend reading any of his stuff with Polar Borealans in it. They don't do noncon.

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>>7286705
It's a vascular disease :3

I'm very 50/50 on how to introduce them, I've got two stories lined up that both offer pros and cons.

Either a so far unnamed story in which a Broker is visiting Pinwheel, with a focus on sex and all the bullshit she pays people to do for her own amusement.

Or, Defense of Hades, which is gonna take place in a human colony on a desert planet where the bugs are invading en masse. It would be a huge combined arms operation with space and ground combat, and it would primarily follow a spec ops team sent to extract a Broker who is stranded, and they would be introduced that way.

While the second one would be way cooler, it offers far fewer opportunities for smut.

>>7286750


I think we need to get a better feel for the Brokers and what theyre like before we can make that choice, but that might just be me

>>7286750
My Grandpa (God rest his soul) once told me- "Boy when you're out there and you eventually get someone's blood on your hands you need to know what the happiest moment of your life was, otherwise you may very well die without any peace of mind. If that means that you need to take that moment of happiness from some poor bastard then you damn well should do it! Look boy, what I'm trying to say is that you can't die a virgin. Just promise me that."

My Grandpa might have had dementia but his words stuck with me.

The moral of this story? Do the sickass space battles and fuck babes whenever you have the chance!

>>7286723
Tfw no amazon car wife. Life is pain. Is it bad that I keep thinking up story ideas with them? I'm not sure why they've attached to my psyche so.

Where are all the posts going? What the fuck is the mod doing?

>>7287347
Cleaning up the drama and off-topic it looks like.
Y'all niggers better start getting along unless you want a repeat of /tg/.

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>>7287350
Call me pessimistic, but if those are the stakes we're boned.

>>7287350
All I saw was a couple of people with different worldbuilding ideas, no shitposting

>>7287360
Not sure why the Mod is deleting worldbuilding shit.

https://gyazo.com/a284307c93b457a015df095bc11958ea

>>7287339
Hell no, I literally can't stop doing it

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>>7287397
I'm probably gonna bump up your commission by the way Shiny, I should be done with Snek 4 next week, then I'm gonna finish Highway to Krell, then I'll get started on your story.
I'll finish Grave Goods after that.
Didn't originally plan on doing the Krell fic so early but I postponed it so much that I got frustrated and just decided to crank it out.

>>7287437


Welp, firing up the idea engines to maximum overdrive.

>>7287397
I don't know either.
Anyways, like I was saying before, I figure that a polar trying to manipulate the human legal system in their way would end up making things much worse for themselves, not better.
It would make a hilarious story, though
>human lawyer (maybe JAG?) is assigned to defend a polar on whatever charges
>his client just keeps getting into more and more trouble trying to play her way out of charges and invariably playing her way into more charges
>"%catgirl, you can't just try and seduce a judge to get out of this, that's not how it works here!"
>lawyer keeps getting more and more exasperated, especially when she tries to seduce *him* (he's 100% Hard Gay)
>she goes to trial and tries to flirt with the jury from the stand
>unsurprisingly, she's found guilty on all charges
>"we can't really put you in jail, you won't fit"
>"so we're deporting you"
>"to borleas"
>lawyer is glad it's over and goes home to his krell husband, swearing he'll never get even a pet cat after this

>>7287446
This makes me happy. That and the polar would still be confused/not willing to think about why it's getting deported.

>>7287446

Actually, she would get sent to her home country, not there. The polars of Borealis all got evacuated to Russia after they set up their country there, there is no more officially recognized territory for them at their home planet. Getting sent back to Russia will just have them sent to a bunch of confused polars wondering why she was being punished for doing nothing wrong.

Also, correct me if I'm wrong, but polars don't try to seduce their way out of everything, they're just skilled manipulators in general and seduction is only one of their weapons they use. I don't recall snek saying anything differently

>>7287475
>Also, correct me if I'm wrong, but polars don't try to seduce their way out of everything, they're just skilled manipulators in general and seduction is only one of their weapons they use. I don't recall snek saying anything differently
Sure, but seduction is about the only card in that deck would be transferable to cultures other than theirs, except possibly bribery. Every other trick would be too specialized to work on anyone but them
"Manipulation" isn't just a wand you wave and people so what you want, it's a collection of several very specialized skills and techniques, almost all of which are extremely context-sensitive

>>7287486
Could you explain how they would be able to learn how to seduce humans but not be able to manipulate with them with words otherwise? They are entirely sapient and have laws and motivations just like humans do. I recall Snek even mentioning nonsex stuff they manipulated for too.

Also, for the scenario you gave us, why would the polar be trying to seduce the lawyer who's already on her side? In fact, how is she getting herself in more trouble, the lawyer is the one who does all the talking in a court case, and they'd filter out anything wrong the polar says.

Then you also consider the fact that the polar is actually telling the truth and literally did nothing wrong, the human is just lying to get her sent to prison(because reasons?)

>>7287498
>Could you explain how they would be able to learn how to seduce humans but not be able to manipulate with them with words otherwise? They are entirely sapient and have laws and motivations just like humans do
Not him, but that's a good point, but against them. You have to know a culture or especially legal system REALLY WELL to manipulate it with any degree of success. How would they possibly learn human culture and law well enough to do that when they haven't ever met humans for the vast majority of their lives and lived in the middle of howling nowhere sibera since then?

>>7287507

Also a good point, but it did make me realize that she couldn't do any manipulation in the first place, the lawyer is the one doing all of it. I suppose all she has going for her is actually being innocent and telling the truth, but we all know that only really gets you so far in court without evidence.

>>7287515
Uh, >>7287446 here, I think there's been a miscommunication here. I wasn't building on that deadpost, I was coming up with an unrelated scenerio because I thought the idea of a polar trying to deal with the human legal system had comedic potential

>>7287530

Oh whoops, my bad. I would definitely read the shit out of a story about a court case between a human and a polar (or an equatorial for that matter)though, regardless of who's being accused of what. Might be worth folding that into a future snek commission

>>7287612
>or an equatorial for that matter
That would probably be less interesting. It would be very short and end with a firing squad

Does anyone ever encounter the problem of their story getting a bit too serious?

For some context, I once had this happen when I was trying to write something about a woman getting Stockholm Syndrome, and ended up freaking myself out.

>>7287634

That means you are doing it right and telling a powerful and moving story.

>>7287625
The punishment for rape isn't death, but it would still be pretty sweet to see one brought to proper justice even if the case ended quickly.

>>7287625
>That would probably be less interesting. It would be very short and end with a firing squad
It could still be interesting as a lead-in. Say you have this military lawyer who had a "career" of playing defence for the various equatorials who would occasionally flip out and end up being executed for it
After getting out, he's approached by a high-ranking polar who wants him to defend a lower-ranking one accused of [crime] in court, since he has the most experience defending borleans of any kind in the human legal system
Plus you'd get the wonderful ambiguity of him never really knowing if his client is trying to play him or not in any given interaction.
Like are they actually innocent or do they just want him to think that so he fights harder for them in court? Who knows?

>>7287645

Now that's a fun premise. Make the plaintiff another polar and suddenly no one knows what to believe or who's side to take.

>>7287640
>The punishment for rape isn't death
In the UCMJ it's on the table, and it's about 99.99% certain any equatorial on trial will be under military law

>>7287649
Better yet, make the complainant an equatorial.
I'm gonna steal from >>7273962 because that's a great idea
Picture this, a equatorial raised on earth by humans not to be a shithead is bringing charges against a polar in human court. Who the fuck would they even know to believe?
And for the classic Ace Attorney twist, the prosecutor in this case was once a military lawyer, a prosecutor there too, and who sent twenty equatorials to the wall, but now his whole case revolves around one

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>>7287612
>>7287696
Please don't make me spend hours researching the legal system. Agriculture and traditional longhouse building techniques nearly did me in.

>>7287655

Just did some research on that, apparently only one person was ever sentenced to death for rape while under the UCMJ, and that was because they also attempted to kill their victim(an 11 year old girl).

An equatorial would probably fit the bill for a death sentence though, as I imagine there would be claw marks and wounds on their victims along with actual death threats being made.

I learn something new every day!

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>>7287702
D'you ever think there might be a point where you've done enough worldbuilding for a fetish story?

Pic unrelated.

>>7287705
How can you masturbate to people fucking giant alien snakes from a videogame if the operation of a combine harvester featured in the story is inauthentic?

Personally I would lose my boner immediately.

>>7287707
You have a talent for replying to people without actually answering their questions, has anyone ever told you that?

>>7287718
Maybe I do have what it takes to understand the legal system.

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>>7287721
Hah. Perhaps you've missed your calling. You'd be a fearsome defence lawyer.

How would you actually make all this faff relevant to the story, though, even if you did manage to wedge it in somehow?

>>7287702
Look at the bright side, at least you'll be well versed in suing a giant catgirl for raping and maiming you.

>>7287728
you can't rape the willing

>>7287731

You can definitely maim them though

>>7287728
>implying I wouldn't give them a medal

>>7287725
While the concept of writing what would essentially be an episode of Law & Order has some appeal, I think the complexities of the legal system would mean that I could never do it justice without some really significant study. Like, way more intense research than I would reasonably have the time to put in. I bet all those law shows have lawyers and legal consultants working to advise the writers around the clock.
I have actually been watching some legal videos on Youtube lately, where a guy breaks down all the shit people are being sued for, like the recent Jim Sterling v Digital Homicide lawsuit, and god damn the quagmire of bureaucracy and legal jargon is just unassailable.

I could maybe do some kind of military tribunal with simplified rules, but even then I don't think it's something to take on lightly.

>>7287741
Nah just watch reruns of SVU and play ace attorney, it'll be great

>>7287741
Hrm, fair enough.

What about agriculture and stuff though? Why do you need that, unless you're factoring in evolution and stuff, which you could write a whole book about.

>>7287612
>>7287645
>>7287649
>>7287696
>Law And Order: Space Victims Unit
Fucking fund it

>>7287746
Well if I'm trying to build a believable world, I can't just bullshit my way through it, I have to actually have some understanding of how it all works. Be that what goes into running a farm, or how someone might build a dwelling from scratch, or even what kind of central heating system might exist in a polar outpost.
If you try to just wing it, someone who knows better will call you out eventually and deconstruct it all.
I guess I just need that underlying authenticity, or I feel like what I'm writing is pointless.

>>7287397
>>7287360
Maybe it's the same mod who was randomly deleting mass swaths of in the giantess thread a while back.

>>7287634
You mean serious in a way I didn't realize, but I have several stories where I initially set out to make a dumb quick porno and then it becomes a whole fully fleshed out story that just happens to have porn.

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2000 word update, starting the capstone sex scene now, new content at "The summer sun beat down on the golden fields of wheat"

Snek 4:
http://pastebin.com/ZDNwTwtn
>no new tags

>>7287741
It always boils down to something in-between 'This is the law, you broke it in this way' to 'You pissed off this/these powerful person/people'. Just gotta understand the concept and expand from there.

>>7287753
I'd suggest looking into poly-culture, as well. The fuel for the machines, the fertilizer, and more wont last forever.

>>7287764
>but I have several stories where I initially set out to make a dumb quick porno and then it becomes a whole fully fleshed out story that just happens to have porn.
Same here.
I'm currently wrestling with a mess of a story that started life as a gap-filler/alternate version of Worlds Apart, and ended up being more than anything a slice of life around the weirdos and poor bastards comprising the human expat community on borleas, while restraining my urge to add too much action-novel crap. I got to 10k before realizing I hadn't actually included any pornography ot even build-up, and now I'm gonna spend the weekend drinking and trying to maul it back into shape

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I heard there was a version of CoC modded to be without furries, is it true?

>>7286685
There's a decent amount of consensual stuff that he does, and you can just skip over any non-con and lose nothing.

>>7287871
Wouldn't that just be a blank .swf file?

>>7287882
Not really, you'd only have to replace all mentions of muzzles, beaks or snouts for suitably human facial bits.

>>7287886
I was just making a joke.

On an unrelated note, broodlord, you around? How the comission

trying to find a story, can't remember the name

guy's wife goes to work, while his succubus daughter blows him under the table (against his will?), she threatens to tell the wife if he refuses.
the end up fucking.

any help?

>>7287696
Sounds like I'm gonna need more lotion. I can already see that midway through the trial the equatorial looks almost 100% guilty then bam, the standard legal show twist where it's a mistake and then the rush to bring the polar to justice before the jury votes.

>>7287703
>only one person
Sounds like an easy to beat high score

>>7287747
If I had money I'd give it to the cause.

>>7288518
Took me a bit, but I'm 90% sure this is what you're looking for:

Nightflower
http://pastebin.com/KnNYwMxD

It wasn't one of us, but one of the guys from /mgt/. I don't think he's ever posted here. You're lucky my collection is so expansive.

>>7288531
based.
was it actually in one of the smut lists afterall?

cheers again man.

>>7287696
>Picture this, a equatorial raised on earth by humans not to be a shithead is bringing charges against a polar in human court. Who the fuck would they even know to believe?
>And for the classic Ace Attorney twist, the prosecutor in this case was once a military lawyer, a prosecutor there too, and who sent twenty equatorials to the wall, but now his whole case revolves around one
fucking hell, I want to see this, it's perfect
>former JAG officer is recalled from her quiet job as a corporate contract lawyer because she has the most experience in prosecuting MadCats
>but her star witness/victim in the case is theoretically an equatorial, of whom she'd done in rather a few
>but the thing is, he's an equatorial by birth but he's actually a complete southern gentleman who's taken this polar in for exactly the same reason she got all those MadCats shot
>the charge is attempted rape
>she really tries, but she can't help falling for the guy
>halfway through the trial it looks like the defendant is gonna play the court and turn it around and claim the complainant is the actual criminal
>a brilliant last-minute play proves that the polar is playing the court, but not quite as well as they thought
>after the trial, they catch up and he finally kisses her back
>"no ma'am, I'm waiting for marriage"
>"ask me again when this is all over"
>and they go home for some so-gentle-it's-not-even-femdom-femdom

>>7288537
No, it wasn't. I just have a particularly expansive collection. I found my copy, googled the title with some extra key words, and found the original. I should really probably include the author in my personal copies. It would make this a whole lot easier.

>>7288553
>virgin but confident guy
>equally virgin gal taking the lead without being """dominant""""
Call the paramedics, because I'm five times as erect as normal for more than an hour
Fund this, if there's a kickstarter, I'll put a fifth's worth up on it

>>7288553
So it's just a regular courtroom drama? What makes there being aliens anymore interesting than not having them? Stories about aliens are fun because things happen that can't (easily) happen with humans not because of them just being there.

>>7282459
Lovely to say the least. I had a little trouble with the "tell" because I couldn't quite get into the head of the creature (I did this, I did that, I did). The scene was great and I love what was going on. Thank you.

>>7284617
I have two writing modes, typical and frantic. :)

Typically, it's a stolen 5-20 minutes of writing while dealing with the children or family, or trying to get a few words written in the lunch room at work. Most of the time, I don't really like to write porn during those times (I feel uncomfortable getting into the scene with Power Ranges on the TV or coworkers three meters away) but that is 90% of my writing time. In these times, I'm on the laptop with the tiny keyboard (well, it's a 17" laptop by the keyboard is too small).

The frantic... oh, those are the good days. The couple hours or even days when the family is out of the house and I get to enjoy the basement office with the full-sized keyboard. Those are the times I can usually get up to full speed (100+ wpm) and I belt out a couple thousand words an hour as I ignore things like bathroom, eating, or even the pain in my wrists. Because my time is limited, I don't edit, I can't really go back, I don't even keep my eyes open most of the time. I just shit out words as fast as I can because while I don't like writing porn around people, I can *edit* it without a problem (all the sexy is drained out of the story by then).

About once a year, I get three days of writing time alone. I usually belt about 50k words in that time but I have wrist pain and burn out for a week.

As for eating... the normal is just trying toe eat well and have lots of tea. The frantic... grease or starvation, whatever gets food into my system when I slow down.

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Was this mail sent by anyone in the thread? My commissions email has only ever been posted the once.

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>>7289581
I got one of those too to my Snekguy email.
No idea who it came from, same email address by the looks of it. .

>>7289581
>>7289685
Could be a bot crawler grabbed them from the thread?

>>7289701
The name in the email seems to gave Arab/North African roots so it's likely some kind of scam bot.

>>7289704
"I'm a Borealen prince and I need access to your credit card to help restore my rightful throne. When I get back in power I will send a harem of Borealens to your house has thanks. "

hey snek, you know what you haven't written about, and you should write about as soon as possible?

Two female vipers wrestling over mating rights resulting on a threesome where the loser has to be at the bottom of the totem pole.

>>7288644
Hahahahaha that's a good joke.
Aliens can't ever be used in plots that could happen with only humans, spicy meme.

>>7289768
RIP every plot with aliens, ever

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Hey everyone, Just here to post a quick update of ~3000 words. A bit shorter than what I normally add in an update, but I wanted to round out Chapter 3 and finally resolve the coma!

http://pastebin.com/M1By6hW8 (embed)
https://fourleaffics.miraheze.org/wiki/Love_Coils

As always, the new stuff is at Update* and feedback is most certainly appreciated!

(**Forgot to put on the name, fuck I need to get some sleep**)

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Werewolves are /tg/ right?

>>7290625
Glad to see you're still alive.

>>7290629
Is that farseer getting railed by exodite futas?

How good do you have to be at writing smut to make money self publishing on amazon?

How do I go about getting an editor that'll help make that happen?

>>7288879
Fair point. I tried to make the monster's otherness shine through with bizarre word combinaisons like 'blindingly loud', but it quickly became a mess of words so I gave up on it. If you have any pointers or good examples on how to write 'alien' mindsets; I'm all ears.

>>7284617
To answer your question, most of my writing is done either on the PC at work when there's an idle moment (in a damn uncomfortable chair, I should add) or in a train on a small tablet with attached keyboard while commuting. When I'm at home, I get too easily distracted by either things that need doinging like laundry or things I want to do like playing (insert computer game here). The only times I can really write at home is when I get a manic moment and absolutely need to write an idea out, no matter what time is it or whatever else needs be done.

Snacks are a no-go since a couple of years ago I was presented with the non-choice of eating less or getting a full new wardrobe; eating less it is. A good cup of coffee, on the other hand, is always welcome.

You also might have heard "Write while drunk; edit while sober." I'd amend it to "Write while buzzed." I don't encourage people to get drunk, but a good beer or glass of wine to stop the mind from second-guessing everything and just get to it has worked wonders for me.

>>7290419
Aw yeah, more fluffy lovey-doveyness. Gotta get the insuline shot ready!

By the way, you left "update" in there twice.

Just wondering if Null is still around?

Would anyone be interested on writing a story of a full blown lesbian undergoing a process of defiminization (whether be magic or science means) and coming to terms with his newfound interest in men?

A slow burn where we get to see the way the defiminization process slowly changes her perspective about sex, men and women would be ideal.

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2000 word update, new content at "She uncoiled her chubby tail from my torso"

Snek 4:
http://pastebin.com/ZDNwTwtn
New tags:
>hair pulling, boobjob

Unofficial theme song: https://youtu.be/diumeAfYULo

>>7290419
Nice, I knew you wouldn't write anything too tragic. I'll give this a read when I have time, last few days have been hectic.

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>>7291362
I know it's not a long update, but any thoughts you have after reading would be helpful

>>7291362
yo snek- been wondering. what's the average lifespan of a borealan?

>>7291443
Not him, but I'd be severely surprised if it's over 50-60, considering their complete and utter lack of actual medical science and society that severly suggests an utter lack of care for the sick or injured

>>7291494
I don't think sick or injured Borealens has really ever been brought up in any of the stories and they bounce back from injuries pretty quickly. Polars might have a longer lifespan due to being much more caring of the entire packs well being and even the well being of other sapient lifeforms like humans.

>>7291502
>and they bounce back from injuries pretty quickly.
Those have generally been simple physical injuries, no internal bleeding or anything
Doesn't mean that space malaria isn't going to kill them stone dead because they don't know shit about treating anything and wouldn't care to even if they dif

>>7291362

Yo snek

>>7289708

>>7291502
>Polars might have a longer lifespan
I'd guess they'd make it to their 70s, less dying early from injuries and dysentery et al, so they'd generally die of cancer or quite likely coronary disease from their all-meat high-fat diet

>>7290886
Alien mindsets? Well, the first is probably focus on third person single. I found that when you head-hope or show the internal state of other characters, it makes it harder to sink into a point of view.

From there, start with their senses. Do they have higher sense of smell, reduced site, or see things differently. Those are good things for showing an alien mindset (the ability to see heat means that they can tell strong emotions, when they are turned on; the ability to see electricity would tell you a lot also; likewise, not being able to see color would have other problems such as Doug's "I see a gray one" from the movie Up). This makes it more alien since we are mostly human readers.

I would also recommend you look up "purple prose". Your phrasing is firmly into it which makes it hard to create a distinct voice for aliens.

>>7291532
They evolved to be mainly carnivore though so their bodies are used to that. Also, cold places are really devoid of bacteria that causes diseases due to not being able to survive those temperatures.

>>7291494
>>7291502
They're pretty hard to put down, it would have to be a pretty severe accident to injure them in a way they wouldn't just heal. Something like dropping a steel girder on them in a construction site or something. There's not really a lot that can injure them, all the big animals stick to the jungles, they don't really use cars the way we do, fights normally end before they escalate. Besides a freak accident there's not much to hurt them in their day to day lives.

I have no idea bout diseases and immune systems, I think that's a lot more realism than the setting requires, as we've been over the cross-contamination stuff before.

>>7291443
Probably close to or a little less than a human. 60-80 is probably a good range.

>>7291525
That's not something I'm gonna have time for any time soon, though I did get a similar pitch where a Polar and an Equatorial fight over a guy. Not sure if I want to write that or make it a path in the VN.

>>7291538
>Not sure if I want to write that or make it a path in the VN.
I vote for adding it to the VN, for the inevitable haremfags

>>7291538
Infection seems like the actual danger considering how often they get injured

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So... who does Chuck Tingle's Photoshopping, anyway?

And has anyone ever actually READ one of them?

>>7291548
>So... who does Chuck Tingle's Photoshopping, anyway?
Chuck Tingle, probably

>>7291548
I'm pretty sure he does it himself. He's gotten this campy style that people that just took on a life of its own. Now, people read it for the quirkiness.

>>7291548
I assume it's either him or his son, who is also his editor/caretaker. (Tingle is an autistic schizophrenic, his son did an AMA on Reddit a while back that might be worth a read if you're interested in him or his work.)

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Finally making progress on my story Loving Homes for Broken Toys. Main story mostly revolves around Elf M x Naga F.

>"If you're looking to drag in a bounty for the warcrimes trials you're headed the wrong way."
>The snake woman laughed.
>"No he's not for that. This one is for me, he's gonna get taken home."
>"A blind elf?"
>"He's good with his hands... and a few other things."

I'm wondering what other sorts of pairings people would like for related stories. The "broken toys" being mostly wounded humans, elves and a few other fantasy races left behind after a war. To help find people with the time/money to care for them some of them would voluntarily be sold into indentured servitude or slavery.

Would would be some interesting races for adoptee and adopter aside from the usual monstergirls?

>>7291537
>They evolved to be mainly carnivore though so their bodies are used to that
Autopsies on predatory animals have shown evidence of arterial plaque buildup, it's just that none of them ever live the 50-70 years that it would take to be an issue, while polars would

>>7291538
>They're pretty hard to put down, it would have to be a pretty severe accident to injure them in a way they wouldn't just heal. Something like dropping a steel girder on them in a construction site or something.

This annoys me to no end.

>>7291602
Tell me more about the setting first, please.

>>7291614
Harsh environment means tough and survivable, high gravity means dense bones and muscle, selectively bred over generations for strength and fitness, it's been established that small arms fire isn't guaranteed to stop them so minor injuries aren't likely to either.

It would take a huge amount of blunt force to break their bones, and their rapid healing makes any cuts or abrasions that don't hit organs trivial.

On a high gravity planet falling would probably be a significant danger, but they don't build high and they have stabilizing tails for balance.

The only scenario I can imagine that would put a Borealan down outside of combat or violence is if someone dropped a piano on his head.

>>7291621
It's a bit of a strange one really.
Elves are basically corsairs and raiders from another world looting what they can from a fantasy setting. Couldn't use all their best tech for fear of triggering the gods to intervene.
Locals start to go industrial revolution to an extent to beat them back and elves decide to gtfo. Some of the elves get hit by friendly fire or are left to die so that those higher up can escape with more loot.

Stories are set in the aftermath trying to deal with the survivors and prisoners.

>>7291626
Actually, a harsh, high-gravity environment is most likely to produce really tiny, r-selective animals with an emphasis on non-confrontational survival strategies. Surviving past breeding age only harms the species, so toughness is largely unproductive. They would most likely start breeding as quickly as possible, produce enormous litters, and die early.

>>7291626
>>7291626
Simple infected cuts would probably be one of the leading causes of death, simply on just how goddamn often they get cut up and how they're generally rolling around in the dirt when it happens
Plus the circumstances of their settlement are just absolutely ripe for massive disease outbreaks, and especially sexually transmitted diseases would tear through their population like a goddamn prairie fire on the regular

>>7291640
What are you basing that on?
Bone density and muscle mass correlate directly with gravity and the strain placed on the muscles, that's why astronauts have to do so much exercise in zero gravity, so their muscles don't atrophy and they don't get bone density problems.
Higher gravity invariably equals denser bones and more muscle mass, which correlates with toughness relative to humans.

You are right that in reality they would be shorter than they are, but that's an aesthetic choice on my part, along with making them humanoid and all the other stuff that's necessary for the porn.

>a harsh environment is likely to produce r-selective animals that are non-confrontational

Equatorials are r-selected, they birth a litter of up to a dozen kittens and basically let them run riot, the Polars are K-selected and birth one child who they raise diligently.
They're also cooperative and highly social, what about the pack structure isn't inherently cooperative?
They would certainly have had a very high mortality rate and lived short lives in the past, but they have an industrial civilization now so that doesn't apply to them any more than the mortality rate of hunter gatherers would apply to modern humans.

That said r/K selection has almost nothing to do with the environment, you will find both strategies anywhere you look. Arctic wolves are K-selected, Arctic hares are r-selected, both live in the same environment. Even among predators that fill a similar ecological niche there's a lot of variation, for example between Cheetahs and Lions (average 9, average 3).

>>7291674
I've been over the reasons in a prior thread why I'm not going to take viruses and bacteria into account, at that point there would no interaction between any of the species due to fears of cross-contamination and then there would be no story. There has to be some suspension of disbelief. I also don't want to write about sexually transmitted diseases and nobody wants to read about them.

>>7291694
>I've been over the reasons in a prior thread why I'm not going to take viruses and bacteria into account, at that point there would no interaction between any of the species due to fears of cross-contamination and then there would be no story. There has to be some suspension of disbelief. I also don't want to write about sexually transmitted diseases and nobody wants to read about them.
I'm not saying that they should play a major role in a story or anything, I'm not saying you should go back and rewrite all your stories to have the human worried about contracting borlean malarial syphilis when they're getting molested, I'm just saying that it probably deserves just a bit of consideration in worldbuilding and background material is all
Plus honestly I think the old sci-fi standby of
>aliens have their own viruses and diseases but they don't cross the species barrier
Is a lot less hard on suspension of disbelief than
>this thing should realistically be a big thing in their culture and society but isn't because elf magic

>>7291728
That's more based on truth than you think. Diseases have a hard time jumping the species barrier and shit like common bacteria or alien dust/pollen would be where a lot of deaths would come from. Our/their immune system would have no idea how to handle it due to never encountering it before.

>>7291728
>>7291744
See that's something that always confused me.

Let's take a virus, smallpox for example, and introduce it to an alien species who just landed on Earth. These aliens have evolved completely isolated to all Earthly life, have no common DNA, maybe a totally different amino acid makeup, maybe they're even silicone-based lifeforms.

Are they immune to smallpox, because it can't even recognize them as potential hosts, or are they super at risk because their immune systems have never encountered that virus before?

>>7291752
The issue is, we can only guess because we have don't have any hard evidence on what would happen. Another thing is how different their biology is. For instance, opossum are immune to rabies due to having a slightly lower body temperature than most other mammals that can get rabies.

>>7291752
>Are they immune to smallpox, because it can't even recognize them as potential hosts, or are they super at risk because their immune systems have never encountered that virus before?
Quite literally God only knows, so sci-fi authors are free to choose which of the two ways it goes in their work, mostly the latter unless it's the focus of the thing

Plus the anthro student in me actually really wonders how a society like the Elysian Equatorials would regard and react to STDs

>>7291763
>>7291782
The only setting I can think of off the top of my head that really tackled that was Mass Effect with the Quarians, and that was less about cross-contamination and more about their space AIDS.
Now that I think about it the subject is conspicuously absent in every sci-fi novel I've read, I assume just because it's a huge can of worms.

I can't claim to know enough about diseases and bacteria to give a statement on how Borealans would react.

>>7291626
The bone and muscle strength don't bother me,
the regeneration and the idiotic idea that they can shrug off bullets is what aggravates me.

>>7291818
He did say small arms fire

>>7291637
So the elves are assholes in this universe as well huh?

Well, what are some of the native sapient species?

)]>>7291818
They're really big, and very dense, small caliber sidearms and such aren't going to put them down unless they get a lucky shot. The same is essentially true for humans, a bullet can pass through a body cavity and miss vital organs or arteries, or embed itself in tissue, failing to put the assailant down, which is why police are trained to mag-dump.
A Borealan has more in common with a tiger or a lion than a human in terms of weight and size, and I'm sure you wouldn't trust a 9mm handgun to stop a tiger or a bear in its tracks.
They're not immune to bullets, but small arms aren't going to have the stopping power to kill them outright in most scenarios, and if you're not killing a Borealan outright then you aren't killing it period.

[Insert /k/ caliber memes here.]

>>7291826
>>7291841
A .50 caliber sniper rifle is considered small arms fire. An M249 SAW is considered small arms fire. An RPG is considered small arms fire.

>>7291844
A .50 BMG isn't a "small caliber sidearm" though, is it? That caliber will kill a fucking engine block, never mind a living thing.
If you shot a Borealan with that caliber they'd be vaporized.

The weapons in the setting are railguns and plasma weapons though, which absolutely can and do kill them, I'm talking about handguns and sidearms which are mostly conventional.

>>7291859
You said "small arms fire" so I listed small arms weapons, don't get sassy with me when you were the one that was unclear.

>>7291870
Sneak will just say whatever makes birealeans seem more badass, you should know that by now

>>7291870
But I did clarify "small caliber sidearms" in the post you were responding to.

Maybe I'm using vague terminology but I've never heard the words ".50 BMG" and "small" used in the same sentence before.

>>7291871
The Krell are actually way tougher than Borealans and can kick their asses, and they really do shrug off bullets in the sense the other Anon was referring to.

>>7291875
When will that be demonstrated

>>7291841
Sir, I've been shot, and shot back at both people and dangerous animals in my time

The reason you don't shoot at moose and bears et al with weak rounds is not that they won't die from the wounds, because they certainly will, and I've had to mercy finish durr and meece hit and killed slow by assholes with .22s and .223s too many times, it's that they won't be *stopped* immediately by such and put down fast.
It's not about lethality, it's about stopping power. A dumb motherfucker with a hi-point columbine carbine can kill a deer easy enough, it's just that it'll take a few unpleasant hours for the shot durr to finally collapse.
Muscle isn't magic, no matter the fetish strength, and frankly 7-8/10 torso hits are gonna mean organ damage and an protracted and extremely unpleasant death for the borlean who's shot, since they never invented trauma surgery or even goddamn transfusions

>>7291875
Small-arms is anything that's small enough to be carried by hand, so by that definition one of them could shrug off a point-blank shot with an anti-tank gun.
>>7291892 is right, they have muscle, not a built in bulletproof vest.

>>7291694

>and nobody wants to read about them.

My sweet summer child.

>>7291889
I've got maybe three days left on Snek 4, then I'll dedicate all my energy into getting the Krell fic done.
Hoping to get some Krell art when the Osha/Runt pic is done too.

>>7291892
If a grizzly bear is charging you, and you shoot it with a handgun, it's not likely to drop dead on the spot unless you get a lucky shot and hit a vital organ. Same goes for a Borealan. Account for the rapid healing factor and alien biology hand-waving and it's not likely to die either, it's gonna pop that bullet out like fucking Wolverine and keep going. Because this is all completely fictional and they can do that if I want them to.

>>7291899
For the third time, I clarified "small caliber sidearms".
An anti-tank gun is not small caliber, nor is it a firearm.

>/d/ - Gun Semantics and Infectiology

>>7291909
*sidearm

>>7291909
Somebody needs to learn the MST3K mantra, you're trying way too hard to justify things that don't matter much

>>7291909
>Account for the rapid healing factor and alien biology hand-waving and it's not likely to die either, it's gonna pop that bullet out like fucking Wolverine and keep going.
Again, unless that extends to lungs un-puncturing themselves in the exceptionally short time it takes a sucking chest wound to go to lethal hemeothorax, kidneys and pancreases that regenerate to full capacity in hours, livers and stomachs that don't matter and hearts that can magically pump with holes in them, even a .32 to the chest is gonna be lethal
I could very easily accept a borlean who's effectively already dead doing extreme triple FBI '86-tier damage on their way out, it's just the magic immunity to logical consequences of gunshot wounds that grates on me

>>7291928
see earlier about the badass thing, odds are Krell are going to be capable of surviving a nuke going off on top of them

>>7291892
I don't know why, but immunity to consequences in general and being shot or stabbed in particular are an important part of snek's racial femdom fetish so any amount of logic can eat shit, buddy, no matter how much sense it makes

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>>7291935
No, but Betelgeusians are insects and roaches can survive nuclear fallout, so that raises some interesting questions.

>Account for the rapid healing factor and alien biology hand-waving and it's not likely to die either, it's gonna pop that bullet out like fucking Wolverine and keep going. Because this is all completely fictional and they can do that if I want them to.
>Well if I'm trying to build a believable world, I can't just bullshit my way through it

>>7291928
>>7291937
That sort of thing is even worse in movies where people shrug off all kinds of shit that should cripple them or have on the ground and not moving afterwards. This is why doctors or such don't watch action movies or anything that involves their field too much. Though in some cases it's the opposite. For instance, I'm a cinema production major and movies with a lot of practical effects and camera work become more interesting to me.
>>7291940
They can survive the radiation, but the heat and blast wave from the initial bomb explosion would still wreak them and everything else. Fire/heat is especially dangerous to things with carapaces.

>>7291928

From what I've gathered from snek's stories, Dom cats have a healing factor slightly behind Wolverine's.

So yes, shrugging small-game stuff comes with the package.

>>7291944

>Well if I'm trying to build a believable world, I can't just bullshit my way (entirely) through it.

FTFY.

>>7291950
He had an unbreakable skeleton and was also a mutant, the rapecats have no excuse

>>7291944
>I can't just bullshit my way through it

It's completely fictional though.
For all anyone besides me knows they don't even have organs and lead gives them super strength.

Unlike agriculture or the legal system which are real things that I need to research if I want to write about them, this is a fictional alien race that I created, so I'm not going to be applying rules to them that subvert their purpose in the stories.

That's hardly the worst offense anyway, I pulled the FTL method completely out of my ass, but nobody has complained that faster than light travel violates the laws of physics.

Again, there has to be some suspension of disbelief or at the end of the day there is no story.

>>7284646
Hi, I'm Stuart Chiefet and today we'll be talking about portable computers on this edition of the Computer Chronicles...

>>7291963

I got this snek.

Alright everyone, here's how you solve your angry equatorial problem:

Incendiary rounds.

Alright, everyone go home.

At a certain point when fighting a rape cat you have to realize that one of two things will happen

>1. You get raped and because of Jewi*cough* I mean borealen magic you will like it and eventually form a bond with your rapist, or failing that a fluffier version of it

>2. You kick the shit out of it because of Robocop level upgrades (they never stood a chance) but you still feel bad about it cause "hur dur dur I'm now the bad guy cause I blame the individual for a culture and biological mindset they can't control or deny"

Important note, snekguy always mentions krell winning in fights when anyone brings up the strength of the cats. The krell are green, and the only thing that beats the cats are green things like the krell and occasionally the murder bugs. You know who else gets beaten by green things? Superman. Snekguy has created an OC kryptons with cat ears and a dominant personality. It's time to wake up /d/

>>7291963
>It's completely fictional though.
It's not, though. Yeah, it's fiction, but they're just people with cat features. You clearly depict them as such, so pointing at that and saying "That's not a person with cat features, but in actuality a black-hole in disguise" doesn't work.
They can eat the same food, breath the same air, speak the same language, procreate the same way. They can live on each other's worlds relatively comfortably. They share almost all their characteristics with humans, save for minor cosmetic differences. That means they're mostly likely going to have, fundamentally, similar biology. Saying that a creature, which is little different from a human outlier, can shrug off crippling, if not lethal, wounds, whilst also saying you want the setting to be believable is strange. It makes as much sense as saying your farmers spread salt and acid over their wheat, because it's actually GMO wheat.

Meat isn't bulletproof. Infection and blood loss exists. Vital organs with holes in them can't repair themselves fast enough to save their owner. You absolutely don't need to feature that in your stories. You never even need to mention the more distasteful aspect of that if you don't want to. But there is a very wide gap between not showing unerotic realities because you're writing erotica, and showing something that inexplicably defies common sense for reasons that don't actually add to the plot. Your OC catpeople don't need to be indestructible to be impressive, and maintaining that they have to be like that or it'll 'subvert their purpose in the stories' is confusing to me.

>>7292026
Fucking THIS!^^^

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>>7292026
Their purpose in the plot, besides being rape monsters, is to serve as supersoldiers for the UNN. The reason I want them to be uncommonly strong and resilient is so that they can fill that role. If they're not uncommonly strong and resilient, and they're just as susceptible to injury as a human soldier, then they're just slightly taller fodder who can't do anything a human couldn't do while being a smaller target and requiring less food.
It's also the reason they're tolerated at all among the human ranks, because the UNN needs them badly and will put up with their shenanigans because of their ability to turn battles around.

So if I take away their healing factor and make them just as susceptible to injury as a human, then that completely undermines their whole purpose and they have no reason to be there anymore.

Same reason I don't want powered armor and cyborg soldiers and things like that, because the whole premise is built around the UNN needing the rape cats (and other aliens) to fill those niches which is of course the vehicle for the porn.

>>7292044

Not that I want to argue with you snek, but isnt their purpose defeated with so many plasma weapons being thrown around?

>>7292046
Remember Betelgeusians try to close and fight in hand to hand combat with daggers and pistols, that's where they're most effective. In the first Pinwheel story the Borealans earn the respect of the marines and justify the continuation of the integration program by demonstrating their ability to counter that tactic when the station is boarded.

>>7292050

So basically theyre indoor shock troops and great for defense, but never ever let them fight outside?

>>7292051
They make good jungle soldiers and their sent tracking helps for scouting. Funny enough, the polars will never get to do much in cold environments/planets because the bugs are going to avoid the hell out of those places.

>>7292051
They're mostly used as shock troops and in boarding operation yeah, and to break enemy formations like what happened in Purple Heart on Kruger.

Think of them as Kroot, while the marines are Tau.

>>7292055


Polars don't care for combat like Equatorials do anyway, theyre more the logistical/support types.

>>7292057

Funny, I imagine UNN drill sergeants shove this fact into their face to remind them that they arent invincible and out in the field, they're no less vulnerable than a human. A huge part of basic training is ripping apart mentalities and rebuilding them into better things, and equatorials would receive massive amounts of attention for their antics.

I haven't participated in these kinds of threads before. Would anyone be interested in some erotic fan-fics which involve lots of footfetish, rimming, sweat, smells, etc.? I've written one that I'd like to share.

Should I post only from pastebin, or is it acceptable if I have it uploaded somewhere else?

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I've been working on a thing over at the CYOC story board.

https://www.cyoc.net/interactives/chapter_115620.html

For those unfamiliar with it and too fucking lazy to scroll back one chapter), CYOC (choose your own curse) is a writing prompt based around a town curse. A bitchy/irredeemable cheerleader and her friends in high school humiliated a nerd by pantsing him. So, to get revenge he enacts the town "Transform or Dare" curse over the phone one morning before school. How she is affected is up to the minds of the writers. For the duration of the curse, reality shifts to compensate for the changes of the curse (ie: if she has multiple breasts, everyone thinks she has always had multiple breasts).

My branch of the curse has the nerd cursing the cheerleader with mental sluttiness tied into her physical transformation/expansion. Every day for a week she will go through a cycle of transformation from not-slut to begging for dick pile of tits and ass. To progress faster through the cycle, she has to have 5 sexual partners to "reset" her to normal for the day, each pushing her further along until her reset. However, because this is normal to the world, the cheerleader isn't the only one afflicted by it, as all women experience this cycle as a normal part of their day.

There are a few redundancies and typos, I was trying to get as much of the story out before I blew my load. I always hate it when I see a story that ends after the first prompt of a paragraph, when you can tell the author was finished and never returned. I can't edit it because I was submitting anonymously. I wanted to do my best to paint the picture of the story that I could.

[TL;DR:] Expansion, Bimbofication, Magic Curse, Global Transformation, and of course the usual.

>>7291694
You're confusing what happens when a species enters a new environment with a species that is native to one. We lost muscle and bone mass in space because we were never meant to live in low gravity, and our bodies don't entirely know how to maintain themselves without those stresses. Species from high-gravity environments will have higher bone density and muscle mass, but they're also going to be short, and preferentially not bipedal, as muscle mass is a very weak compensation for higher gravity.

Environment absolutely plays into r/K selection. It just doesn't mean that a species is necessarily determined by the environment. That being said, sufficiently hazardous environments due invariably lead to r-selection. Extremely arid deserts have essentially no k-selected species. There is also absolutely no natural regime in which any mating pair produces one offspring. Only humans do that, and it's a horrible idea.

>>7292057
But aren't the Kroot expendable auxiliaries whose role is to be meatshields in melee combat? I thought you were trying to make them sound badass.

>>7292139
Post from pastebin, and if you do someone will read it.

>>7292044
Resilient doesn't have to mean invincible. Just make it so they heal faster from injuries, not ignore them completely like they were living tanks.

They still feel pain, they still lose blood, they're still flesh and blood like anything else and they should be treated accordingly so they don't come off as so perfect that one wonders why human soldiers are being used at all.

>>7292050
That just makes the bugs look like idiots for using the same ineffective strategy when it's causing them to lose battles, so unless they really are idiots they should be starting to wise up by now.

Having pc issues. Haven't forgotten about The Purrfect girl catgirl story. I haven't been working on it either, as I have to deal with being evicted and getting several items out of the pawnshop. Just letting whoever I was writing it for know that I haven't forgotten about it. and do plan to finish it still.

>>7292057
The cultural component would still make them desperately terrible soldiers, to the point where I honestly can't think of any reason to actually use them beyond "there aren't enough krell available and we're out of claymore mines", because those two things do their job better and without invariably turning on their commanders at the first opportunity

>>7291828
>So the elves are assholes in this universe as well huh?
Not all of them, just the ones playing pirate.

>Well, what are some of the native sapient species?
Humans, goblins, dragon kin like kobolds, Stone men, doppelgangers, various other monstrous races like snake and cat people.
I still need to decide on more, but no Gnolls or orcs.

>>7283633
>>>7283622
>no defending fanfiction or rule 63, but don't put down vanilla. Remember, it's erotic fiction general, not Alternative hentai fiction general
Erotic fiction general on the alt hentai board

>>7292213
You're just ignoring everything I'm saying now, so I'm going to stop responding.

>>7292369
If you've read the books you should know that the Borealans aren't exactly getting a fair shake, they're pretty much being exploited in exchange for regional status and junk ships.

Honestly the whole perception you guys have of them being "badass" is completely assumed, and isn't based on the events of the stories, that or you're being extremely selective in what you choose to criticize.

>>7292379
They have changed their strategy, see Purple Heart where a Borealan squad gets wiped by one previously unencountered Bug warrior.

Never once said they were invincible or immune to injury, again the events of the stories contradict that statement, which makes me think you haven't read them. The Krell fuck up Borealans in Pinwheel, several of them are injured and killed in Splashdown, a whole squad gets minced in Purple Heart. I don't see how being resistant to knife wounds and pistol fire makes them "walking tanks" when there are many examples of them being killed and injured.

>>7292495
>Not all of them, just the ones playing pirate.
Please elaborate.

Is there magic in this world? I don't want to assume but it seems like an environment that would lend itself to mysticism.

>>7292508
I think that most people are just bothered by the regeneration.

Most don't seem to care about their strength or their stature but mainly that they don't need medical attention for bullet wounds, so maybe getting rid of the supernatural level of regeneration would satisfy people? Just a suggestion, I still love your stories.

>>7292525
I think it's more the
>humans can't do anything to hurt or resist them ever
Thing that's activating people's almonds

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>>7292531
That's a completely valid complaint, and though I tried to address that in Purple Heart I probably didn't do as good of a job as people wanted from that scenario.
That's a case of me letting fetish material subvert the plot, which depending on your stance may or may not be acceptable when writing smut.

>>7292462
Sorry to hear. Take your time.

>>7292517
>Please elaborate.
The guys deciding to pillage an entire world hired on as many assholes who knew how to fight as possible. Anyone from Nazi level genocidal fucks looking for excuses to kill non-elves to mercenaries that maybe started to have second thoughts after arriving.

Those back home where they came from? Not necessarily the same level of assholes.

>Is there magic in this world?
There's some basic magic, mostly offensive stuff. Enough to take out a tank or put a hole in a city wall would be as strong as it gets. Most of it requires a focus.
Healing is rarer. It can patch people up or repair internal injuries, but won't rebuild missing limbs or organs.

Anything more powerful isn't directly controlled. Summoning the wrath of the gods is difficult, time consuming and doesn't really have pinpoint accuracy.

>>7291536
>focus on third person single

Bleh. Just when I wanted to write more first-person PoV. I'll keep it in mind for next time. Thanks for the info.

>>7292549
Honestly I think 95% of these complaints would disappear after just two things happen in a story, maybe the krell one would be an excellent opportunity
The first is a regular human no-selling a borlean rape attempt, just something as simple as them noticing a second early and putting a couple.45s to the lungs, for once
The second would literally just be an equatorial displaying something resembling empathy, just showing that they've adjusted to human culture and morality for real and aren't just faking it.

>>7292549
Since your goal is to make the setting stand on its own merits even without the smut, it's not going to be as acceptable as it would be if your stance was "fuck it, this is an excuse for porn". It's even more glaring that they're always depicted as having an advantage against humans specifically, with the one exception being due to the same cybernetic augmentation you said you were reluctant to depict. They may be beaten by other aliens, but it's the humans- the characters the readers are intended to identify with- that consistently get put down and made to look like weak, spineless, emasculated wretches who can't do anything that might oppose Borealeans, either due to their sheer physical strength or their knack for emotional manipulation disgused as "caring". (Seriously, the Polars can be perfectly interpreted as being masters of emotional manipulation who merely fake their kindness in order to get their way.)

Plus, even with superfast regeneration, getting shot HURTS. It only takes a moment of being doubled over in pain for the guy who shot you to run for it- or finish the job.

>>7292580
Worlds Apart was so close to the second one, but failed right when it needed to pull it off most. His explanation of "instincts to dominate always win, no exceptions" to justify it wasn't convincing then, and still isn't convincing now.

>>7292608
>Worlds Apart
I had almost managed to forget "snek NTRs /efg/'s heart with bimbofication: the story"

>>7292608
I'm not going to change my stance on nature vs nurture. You can take the Borealan out of the jungle but you can't take the jungle out of the Borealan.

As for human characters appearing weak, they are! They're completely powerless when faced with an eight foot, 600lb monster made of muscle and death whose only desire is to rape them until they start to like it.
That's what gets my rocks off, and it's the reason the setting exists, in order to facilitate that (and other) fantasies.

Would anyone be interested in writing a consensual orc-on-elf gangbang request?

>>7292771
And you haven't realized that some people don't want to keep hearing that humans are puny weaklings who are completely at the mercy of the rapecats and can do literally nothing to stop them other than enjoy being raped?

The only way to stop all those complaints is to give those weak human characters a chance to actually win on their own terms for a change, and not look like they're the ones being dominated and controlled despite all the claims to the contrary you keep making. Either you suck it up and make them just a little less invincible to human attack, or you can just stop bothering to respond to criticism so nobody tries to bring it up again.

>>7292795
If you don't like that aspect of the setting then don't read the stories that feature those elements, I've done like twelve Borealan stories so far, it can't come as a surprise.
While that is the main focus of my stories I am working hard to provide alternatives for people with different tastes where I have the time, consensual stuff like in Worlds Apart and Crashland, different flavors of femdom with the Polars and the Warband/Ghost stories, maledom, traps, etc.
I've also got three more species that cater to different fetishes lined up, Krell are gonna be tf/traps/futa, Brokers are gonna be tentacles and probably some exhibitionism, Betelgeusians I'm thinking maybe slavery, but that one is still on the drawing board.

I enjoy writing rape cats, and they're the most well received of all my work by far, so I'm not going to be drastically changing their personalities any time soon. I am however hard at work on alternatives which I hope will be more in line with what you enjoy.

>>7292823
Yo snek, when's grave goods going off hiatus?
Also for the upcoming krell story are you going with a male or female protagonist?

>>7292835
I've actually started work on the Krell story already, you can read it here: http://pastebin.com/hE1muHCb
(no tags yet)
It has a female protag, but there are male characters too, it's going to follow a research team so there should be opportunities for every pairing under the sun.

Currently my schedule is looking like Snek 4, Krell, Shiny's next commission, GG.
The reason I keep postponing GG is that it's a favor for a friend who I'll be staying with for a couple of months, probably in April, so it should be good fun to continue writing it with their input (and also I can involve them in the process rather than ignoring them for several hours a day and being a shitty guest).

>>7292849
How much snek remains?

>>7292861
Only about 5000 words now.

>>7292823
Look, I'm not asking for a radical overhaul, just something to show that humans can in fact put up a fight against them if they're clever or well-equipped or fight dirty, and that they don't need another rapecat's help to do any of those things. (That applies to polars too, emotional manipulation and coercion is still rape.)

Is it so hard to make them seem less insufferably perfect compared to humans in that one respect?

>>7292849
>Currently my schedule is looking like Snek 4, Krell, Shiny's next commission, GG.
What about that batch of short fics you were talking about a while ago? After GG?

>>7292916
Yeah I'll try to fit those in as well, female pilot visits the polar outpost and bangs Zagza, Raz visits Stanley's farm, I got some others written down too.
Not gonna lie working on the VN is kind of running me ragged right now.

>>7292956
>Not gonna lie working on the VN is kind of running me ragged right now.
Didn't even know you were doing a VN, neat.
How far along are you?

>>7292956
Just put everything, other than the vn, on hold.

>>7292849
>It has a female protag

GOD FUCKING DAMMIT MAN!

I was looking forward to the Krell stories too.

>>7292960
Early days at the moment, but I've got two artists and a musician onboard, and I've completed a playable prototype (without art ofc) which you can play here: https://snekguy.itch.io/pinwheel-test

>>7292967
Well I still want to do 2000 word updates a day, otherwise there would be like a year without any new stories.

>>7292983
There are male scientists in the team too, I'm gonna be switching perspectives a lot.

>>7292956
Speaking of the short bits, I've got another idea that goes with one that you've already put on the list
>schafer decides he could use a damn drink and asks the supply guys to toss a couple cases of whisky in the next shipment
>he and runt are hanging out and drinking it when scarface shows up, thirsty for schafer
>she decides she's going to take some of their booze and drink it herself
>turns out she's actually an extremely affectionate drunk and her telling schafer that she's sorry humans don't have tails and hugging runt and telling him about how she wants to teach him to fish ends up turning into a sloppy, cuddly threesome, with lots of two-on-one oral and schafer getting sandwiched between the two of them

>>7292996
Whisky would probably kill them. Did you forget how Borealens don't have anywhere near the alcohol tolerance humans do?

>>7293000
>Did you forget how Borealens don't have anywhere near the alcohol tolerance humans do?
Since when?

>>7293007
Ah, so you haven't read Fineprint. In short, Borelaens have alcohol, but it's so weak it's pretty much strawberry milk. Humans are actually rather unique on Earth when it comes to how high a tolerance we have compared to other animals.

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>>7292869
You don't need Snek to show it, it's pretty logical how humans would take down giant rape cats. Same way you take out or disable any large opponent. Martial arts was already shown as effective, and quite a few throws and grabs depend more on their opponent's momentum and stupidity than the user's.

Alternately, you shoot them in the knees and elbows. Sure, small arms fire won't take them out, but I'm sure shattering a kneecap or elbow joint would incapacitate them long enough for you to find somewhere safe. The downside is that it requires accuracy - but highly aroused rapecats are stupid, you just let them crawl on top and then grab your pistol from under the mattress. With their knees right there, it's not like you'd need to be a master marksman. Too scared to gun? Get a suitable, sharp knife. Go for tendons, joints, major arteries.

And who knows what sorts of irritants and chemical weapons we'll have by then. Giant-rape-cat pepper spray, giant rape cat poison, giant rape cat whistles that only sound on frequencies they can hear.

God, it's like you've never been out hunting monsters.

>>7293014
No, I haven't yet. Replace whisky with beer, then.

>>7293016
Another way is having a giant rape cat with you to defend you and then rape both you and the other giant rape cat.