Weekend /co/ creation thread

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Last time:

-New pics
-Trying to come up with more GG scripts
-Redesigning the Trine characters (Theta and JD are done I think, Wells is next and pic related)
-I'm not sure if there was progress on the Rage Racer script
-Talking about Rocket Boy
-Update on the Lovely Ladybug Summer special
-The season when July DeForthe is relevant is approaching

Also of note, the next issue of Premier Comics is out:
http://premiercomics.com/archives/1414

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I found out about these alternate Golden Girl haircuts from /aco/, and I'm in love.

Three is my favorite, but One had the potential of a gag where Audrey can't hold her hair in place using her headband, paralleling her bust bouncing.

Heck, it could make a good simple comic.

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>>92736719
>Panel one: Audrey in civvies, at the Sterling Estate
Hey Silver Queen, can I ask you something personal?

>Panel two: Sarah in civilian persona as well
Sure, my ward. Anything you need?

>Panel three: AP, clearly getting flustered
I'm sure you're no stranger to this, with your action-packed life, but do you have anything to help stop the...the...

>Panel four: SS headshot in frame surprised
...bouncing?

>Panel five: Sarah is relaxed, touched even, by Audrey's request. She ruffles through her top drawer
Oh darling, I understand exactly what you mean. I have JUST the thing for you...

>Panel six: Reveal panel of Audrey now wearing a headband, matching Silver Queen's Tiara.
>Audrey is not amused. Sarah doesn't care/notice. Lucìa Delgado is in the background, facepalming.
There you go! Ready for crime-fighting!
AP (flatly): Gee, thanks


It's my first time writing in comic format. Could probably be reformatted for less panels.

>>92736994
I like it. It also gives us a setup for introducing Lucìa in the next strip, which would be the one we were trying to figure out last thread.

I think we need to get some drawings of Rocket Boy now

Any other neat outfits Audrey needs to be drawn in?
I'm not her regular artist.

>>92738107
I'd imagine she has a training outfit.

Does she do any sports or anything in school?

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>>92738107
luchadore
space marine armor
uhura's tos uniform
catholic schoolgirl
cat lingerie
virgin killer sweater or keyhole sweater

I always wanted to see her doing the tawawa challenge with a rotary phone.

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>>92738107
Something like this. Audrey Undercover as a Secretary for a shady looking business man

So the only things that get actual comic work seems to have to involve giant tits I see...

>>92739151
There's always someone saying that in these threads.

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>>92738107
how about a combo of Golden Girl's outfit with abit of Sci-fi.
give it a Batman Beyond style

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>>92738107
A '50s cheerleader outfit?

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>>92738107
>>92739203
in case a batman beyond suit ref was needed

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>>92739256
I call for inspiration from Rocketeer.

>>92736994
I like it! We could probably combine the first two panels. And like >>92737079 said, it leads in well to the Lucia strip idea.

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>>92738107
requesting Audrey wearing this

Good/great suggestions, all. I'll do what I can!
Other artists are more than free to draw too, of course.

>>92739570
Looking at previous comic formatting, it would work by adding an additional panel for the Titlecard.
Otherwise panel 5 could be split into two separate panels, one for her relieved reaction then another for her digging through her clothes drawer, with the dialogue split between each. Though the last panel might warrant being bigger for the punchline and the three characters rather than 2 in focus.

>>92740676
The title card could work with her looking through her clothes.

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>>92738107
Requesting Audrey wearing this

>>92741403
I think the titlecard image should be something relating to the hair/boobs "bouncing" miscommunication.

>>92739570
So how are we introducing Lucia?

>>92742154
Like she's running and both her boobs and hair are bouncing?

>>92742903
Something like that, yeah. Maybe the volume of her hair could be exaggerated for effect as well.

>>92742903
>>92743481
Or maybe just have her looking disgruntled while holding her chest and also blowing the hair out of her face.

>>92742660
The strip idea from last week still works. Maybe instead of just facepalming in the last panel of >>92736994, Lucia makes some sort of comment that sets up her adjusting Audrey's costume.

>>92744446
Also good. I was thinking something a bit more symbolic (I guess?) like the titlecard gag from the second half of the Iris two-parter, but something more straightforward might be a better fit.

So aside from GG, since that's obviously being worked on up above, what's everyone working on?

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>>92738107
Cavewoman

>>92745162
I'm working on Rocket Boy

>>92745162
Waiting for a chance to talk more about Trine.

>>92735960
The junk tech version might look better if some of his hair was visible.

>>92745162
Ever since Stretcherous' story arc was written, not much else to work on with her. I'm just here for the ride till something comes up.

>>92747227
It will literally become Star-Lord's mask if we were to do that.

>>92748144
I don't really see it.

Is he wearing something like a re-breather at all times when in costume?
Assuming Wells made his costume using stuff he could find, that might've been his starting point with the design.

>>92748250

The re-breather is there but we can just remove that plot point if it's too cumbersome for the character design.

Hey guys. I've just got back from work. I was wondering if anyone wanted to see the new RR snippet. I've been in a funk so it isn't much. Only about a page.

>>92749985
Sure.
I missed it last thread since there was a lot going on last Saturday.

>>92750328
Here ya go. Line 589 should be all new to you.

https://pastebin.com/fYeQrPRC

And here is what I asked yesterday on the off chance anyone cares.

>I was discussing what was still needed in my initial idea to finish this issue with a friend with a big fight to reveal Vex city's new hometown hero. My friend suggested maybe splitting the origin to two issues, one ending around where RR is born the at the end I initially wanted, to make room for both more acts of heroism as well as to get the satisfaction of a script being finished sooner rather than later. Thoughts?

>>92750784
I don't think they should've tried sewing his heart, if they had done that then RR really wouldn't be able to move after waking up and I remember that he wasn't out for that long.

Say they did an ultrasound or an x-ray or whatever and found that the damage was beyond their ability to operate on, not that they already tried to operate.

And having the issue end right about there with RR exploding out of the wall would be fine.

The next issue can begin showing the destroyed room, the wall, the path of devastation, and while he's out just running at full rage speeds, he sees a super villain or whatever and steam rolls him.
He sees some bank robbers and headbutts them through a car window.
He sees some guy excessively littering and shoves all the trash down his pants.

>>92751369
Good to note. Also as an answer to the previous qualm 'bout the nurse taking the money, I thought it'd be funny to have him zoom past where she is and something like her seeing her pocket folded outward or something.

>>92752763
The nurse's pocket would be a good gag as she's looking out of the hole in the wall.

Well I can't be up any later than this if I want to be able to function in the morning.

So sink or swim time for the thread.

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Got three more for y'all.

Guess I was too late for the party.

I hope 47k returns here, seeing how he delivered yesterday in the Pacifica thread.

>>92758672
I'd really like to see his take on Briana.

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Some updated look on summerbug.

>>92756646
I still like junk tech or technomancer the best.

Did anything happen with the Rage Racer rouges that were being discussed?

>>92756646
I Like Andromeda, Technomancer and JunkTech but each of these designs could easily be another villain love your work keep it up.

>>92760846
How many renditions do you think you've gone through with her swimsuit now?

>>92761277
I think it got sidelined in favor of getting his origin sorted.

Though in the second part, now that his rage speed has awakened, we could use a super villain for him to thwart.

>>92761633
What would be some good villains to start him off with? maybe blackout?

>>92761994
Someone who would hold a grudge over how easily they got stomped.

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>>92760874
>>92761318

Junk Tech it is!
Let's put the others in the back burner for some Else worlds stuff.

Now any changes we would like on the Arch-Mask?

Each of them has a distinct silhouette so what should we add/subtract?

>>92762034
I like the jaw but maybe unclutter the brow

>>92762034
A bit more space to the side of the eyes so he's not sacrificing his peripheral vision.

>>92746124
Quick recap of everything?

>>92762034
You know, I think the mask will be enhanced once we see it paired with the rest of the outfit.

>>92762034
any early ideas about what colors for the outfit

>>92765227
I feel like the coat would be either a tan color or a deep green, but green might be too much since now JD is also using green.
Red might work just as well though, but Theta is also using red.

Black and silver might work.

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>>92765319

How much black?

>>92765558
More of an off-set black I think. Not the shiny leather type, but the rough looking material type.

>>92762610
Farm boy is out one night helping his father bring in the cows. As he is trying to get a stubborn cow to move a 1950s stereotypical looking ufo abducted the cow and the farm boy. The boy escapes with the cow and hijacks a ufo from the aliens. The AI on his stolen ufo adapts the human language from him over time (don't remember her acronym for her name). He then goes on sweet galactic adventures as Rocket Boy and UFBovine. This character and his adventures take place in the same universe as Golden Girl thus giving it a classic 1950s sci fi feel and design.

>>92767178
Does the cow do anything?

>>92767920
UFBovine hasn't really been developed beyond just being a novelty character

Here was a picture of what the aliens should look like who abduct Rocket Boy and UFBovine. They are called Spacerz

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>>92769203

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Sorry for the late reply.

How about now?

>>92769470
Cyborg headshot captain America?

>>92769927

Tell me what to change!

>>92770009
I was just teasing. It looks better than anything I could do. I'd say change the design on top of his head. It looks like a capital letter A. Again, I'm artistically retarded so you don't need to listen to me

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>>92770219

>don't listen to me

I'm gonna and you're not stopping me!

>>92770437
Not him, but that does look better to me.

>>92770625

Is is better to compartmentalize his helmet or just make it just one whole thing?

>>92770696
Is there any specific reason for why it should be one or the other?

Feels like it'd be something that'd only be needed if it played a role in the story.

>>92770758

It's just a tiny detail since his robots are modular. (Or not? Not everything is written in stone just yet.)

>>92770803
Unless he's going to do some Darth Vader stuff, I don't think that detail is all that important.

If he can take off the spiky part while leaving the eyes and mouth on or if he has to take off the whole thing, it seems like something that's only really important if it serves a role in the narrative for a certain type of set up or scene.

>>92771082

Alright, any more changes before heading into his overall costume?

>>92771205
Just try not to make him look like Doctor Doom when designing his coat/cape thing.

>>92770437
The A looks lame.

>>92772086

Got it. Removing.

>>92772342
He could probably do with a symbol on his cape or chest though.

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>>92773188

I just realized we don't even really need the symbol.

Do we?

Anyways here's his "Strong Nerd" physique.

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>>92773306
shouldn't it be closer to this?

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>>92773386

If you were here before, he had beefcake art showcased here.

>>92773655
I was just talking about you calling it "strong nerd".

>>92773306
I guess?

But I like it when villains have a personal mark they put on everything that's theirs.

>>92774160
people will just think it is the anarchy symbol, which is played out

>>92774307
I'm not saying it's the A symbol, but that he has a symbol.

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>>92774307

The older one is inspired by NASA (the color scheme anyways), and the look of his robots.

I don't know if it's going to be subject to change though.


>>92774365
>>92774160

I wholeheartedly agree on the symbol part.

>>92774441
That symbol for Archenemy works actually.
As long as it's all one solid color with the lines on top of it, it's not easily mistaken for the anarchy symbol.

Does anyone remember what the acronym was for Rocket Boys AI?

Back from work ready for the ol' spitball.

>>92761277
So far there is a plan in the future to have one of the more epic battle be between RR and Outrage. As for Blackout we have at best a synopsis of the whole story. Costumes have been suggested and a couple thumbnails have been done by me, but other than that and a test image of BO light absorption there's not much.
>>92761994
>>92762019
Maybe. I feel blackout would start with being sneaky/ wanting RR to come to him. Both of these wouldn't seem to be due to bad blood. Then again I'm finally back home and not thinking straight. Maybe another rouge?

Also, I could see >>92769470 being his initial mask to fit the golden age theme while >>92770437 is when shit starts hitting the fan.

>>92774508
All the suggestions are in the previous thread.

>Diagnostic Autopilot Navigator - DiAN
>Curious Holographic Retentive Intelligence System - CHRIS
>Advanced Systems Holographic Learning Interface - ASHLI
>Learning Intelligence/Diagnostic Actuator - LIn/DA
>Mental Interaction, Record Appraisal, and Negotiations Assistance - M.I.R.A.N.D.A
>Personal Artificial Universe Lexicon-P.A.U.L

DiAN seemed to be the popular one.

>>92774499

Can you give me an example, I'm kinda having a hard time imagining it.

>>92774854
What do you mean an example? I'm just describing what the symbol in that image looks like and how I think it works as is.

>>92775298

So no changes at all on the NASA triangle?

>>92774619
I was thinking of DiAN. Thank you very much

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Lets Make a character guys!

>>92774619
>DiAN
But DAN is already a name, why the i?

>>92775526
make it a woman with big tits and a THICC Body

>>92775540
PAUL aside, a lot of the AI discussion centered around it having a female personality.

>>92775374
Doesn't look like a NASA triangle to me.

>>92775912
This

>>92777230

It's the colour scheme that I'm referring to.

Generate a name for inspiration
http://www.seventhsanctum.com/generate.php?Genname=superheronameorg

Create a prototype
http://www.fabricadeherois.com/

>>92777527
Could be gold colored instead of blue.

>>92778164

To contrast the black/silver?

>>92779097
I wasn't even thinking about that, but it'd work.

>>92779424

Ok, hold on.

>>92780750
I can't be awake any longer than this if I want to hope to function tomorrow morning.

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>>92780993

Alright, you should get some sleep then.

NOT YET!

Just another question if this thread survives the night.

What if Wells' glasses transform into his helmet?
Or is that too far fetched?

>>92783574
It's a neat idea, but you'd have to do some crazy magic nanotech compression to do something like that. Unless it's 100% comicbook physics, the helmet wouldn't likely be too tough as a result.

>>92783574
The Glasses would have to be pretty thick

>>92781476
Would metal boots be too much?

>>92774510
Maybe a gun for hire who after being defeated will have a vendetta against Rage Racer. I Suggest Crossbow, has an evil green arrow feel along with the whole don't cross me pun. Look wise got the dark archer thing going.

>>92736994
If you don't mind, I scriptified it a bit more, with some tweaks based on the suggestions.

>TITLE PANEL GAG: Golden Girl in mid-run, awkwardly holding her chest in place with one arm and blowing the hair out of her eyes.

>PANEL 1: Stately Sterling Manor. Audrey approaches Sarah, with just a touch of apprehension.
>AUDREY: Hey, Silver Queen, can I ask you something...personal?
>SARAH: Sure, my ward. Anything you need?

>PANEL 2: Audrey's body language becomes more flustered and awkward. She's clearly uncomfortable asking this.
>AUDREY: I'm sure you're no stranger to this, with your action-packed life, but do you have anything to help stop the...the...

>PANEL 3: Headshot of Sarah's surprised reaction.
>AUDREY (O.S.): ...bouncing?

>PANEL 4: Sarah's reaction changes to a more relieved expression, even touched a bit by Audrey's request.
>SARAH: Oh darling, I understand exactly what you mean!

>PANEL 5: Sarah ruffles through her top drawer.
>SARAH: I have JUST the thing for you...

>PANEL 6: Reveal panel of Audrey now wearing a headband, matching Silver Queen's tiara. Audrey is not amused. Sarah doesn't notice. Lucìa Delgado is in the background, facepalming.
>SARAH: There you go! Ready for crime-fighting!
>AUDREY (flatly): Gee, thanks.

Definitely still room for a line from Lucia, but I couldn't think of anything punchliney enough.

>>92787435
Lucia could be included in the background earlier so we actually get a look at her face before it becomes covered by her palm.

>>92787511
Yeah, maybe she and Sarah are doing something when Audrey approaches. Then we could use the third panel to contrast her reaction with Sarah's.

>>92787539
Like laundry?

It'd make sense for Lucia to handle all of the necessary aspects of life that the code forces SQ to be blind to.

>>92787652
>Like laundry?
If we still use this to lead in to the costume-alteration strip idea from last week, that does seem rather appropriate.

>>92787682
What did we decide on the strip from last thread?

I was in on that, but I don't know what's been better received on it.

>>92787843
The last version of the idea in the thread was:

>first couple of panels GG narrates and introduces who Lucia is and what she does around the house
>pannels where we see her mending GG's outfit (perhaps wires or something similar are visible).
>she hands it back to GG and says something along the lines of 'it must be hard for you out fighting crime all the time, I thought you could do with a little support'
>SQ misses the subtext and makes some bombastic little speech about how Lucia's support is crucial in the neverending battle against evil, or something to that effect

>>92787943
Would it be better if GG is narrating or if Lucia narrates her proper introduction herself?

How much of her history with SQ can we realistically reveal in one strip where that isn't even the focus?

We'd need to at least establish that she's known Sarah since before she sound the bracers and became Silver Queen.

>>92788233
>Would it be better if GG is narrating or if Lucia narrates her proper introduction herself?
Good question. The idea of Lucia narrating was also floated in the previous thread.

>How much of her history with SQ can we realistically reveal in one strip where that isn't even the focus?
>We'd need to at least establish that she's known Sarah since before she sound the bracers and became Silver Queen.
I think we can get the gist out of the way through her introduction. Something like:

>"Lucia Delgado is Silver Queen's head of staff and oldest friend. She's known Sarah Sterling before she was even Silver Queen!"

>>92788424
Alright, that line works to get all of the backstory out so the strip isn't bogged down by it.

I can see how GG narrating it would work.

>>92781476
Huge emblem like that looks silly. Would probably work better if it were on his ear caps instead.

Maybe also on the gloves and belt buckle.

The shoes seem out of place with the rest of the costume as well, Some type of boot would probably work better.

>>92788564
I kind of like it being big. He's supposed to be kind of campy.

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What are his powers /co/

>>92791431
Those look like pain brushes, so... hmm.

The obvious choice would be something that requires him to paint a picture, then bring it to life.

But how about anything that he dips the brushes into he gains control over?
Dip them into a lake, he has control over so much of the water.
Dip them into wet concrete, now he has a mass of still wet concrete to work with.

>>92791431
He hits people with his oversized novelty paintbrushes.

>>92791431
Now I want to replay Okami.

>>92784462
>>92784970

Alright, scrapping that idea.

>>92785992

Nope.
Working on it now.

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ladybug summer special rough draft
page 40

>How many renditions do you think you've gone through with her swimsuit now?

I think its at least 3rd version now.

>>92794531
Yeah, they're totally talking about boys.

So how do we proceed with Rocket Boy?

>>92791522
>>92792181
Now we need a names

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>>92794096

Here y'all go.

>>92797408
The boots are a good improvement.

He might need something to stand in front of to make himself look more intimidating.

>>92797300
PAIN BRUSH.

>>92798176

> something to stand in front of

I don't follow?

>>92798313
I mean like peacocking; something that makes him look bigger.

Like a custom robot that guards him that doubles as a flying platform.

>>92798674

Well, there are different variations of his Arch-bots as seen here >>92774441

>custom robot that guards him that doubles as a flying platform.

So like a second-in-command?

>>92799355
More like something he can use to show off, but as much of a second in command as a robot can be.

I don't know how smart his robots are, are like like Eggman's robots and have personalities and opinions of their own?

>>92799738

Most of them should just function as drones (function-wise it wouldn't make sense) but maybe adding some personality on some is also reasonable since he's a real lonely person.

>>92786004
Maybe a little tidbit is that he is big on tech. he has the best shot by buying the newest thing to improve his aim. It's one of the only ways to keep up with RR in his higher levels of anger.

>>92800043
At least one of them having some self-awareness would be interesting.

The scenarios my mind is concocting now is that near the end, JD and Wells will have a falling out. Wells will do it because he knows he's going to explode and wants to keep JD from getting caught in the blast.
Theta finds Wells at this point and the two fight, the fight takes them into the city, panic erupts, people evacuate, one of Wells' robots is the only one who he told the plan to and finds JD to tell him what Wells was planning (pushing JD away to save him and what the current situation is) which allows him to get to the fight in time enough to do the energy siphoning punch thing that sends him back in time.

Hell, the robot could even go back with JD and be like his sidekick in preventing a time paradox. It'd still be able to receive Wells' orders once he and past JD start up their performances which gives future JD the heads up he needs.

Using a robot like this means it would need greater inclusion in the story, a gradual progression of it becoming more and more self-aware would be interesting until the culmination of its experiences allows it to begin finding ways around Wells' orders to seek out JD.

>>92797408
A still looks off. At least move it to the left and down slightly so the bottom left corner sits almost in the corner of the shoulder cape thing you have going on there.

>>92787652
>>92787539
>>92787511
Further tweaking done:

>TITLE PANEL GAG: Golden Girl in mid-run, awkwardly holding her chest in place with one arm and blowing the hair out of her eyes.

>PANEL 1: Stately Sterling Manor. Sarah and Lucìa are folding laundry in Sarah's bedroom. Audrey approaches with just a touch of apprehension.
>AUDREY: Hey, Silver Queen, can I ask you something...personal?
>SARAH: Sure, my ward. Anything you need?

>PANEL 2: Audrey's body language becomes more flustered and awkward. She's clearly uncomfortable asking this.
>AUDREY: I'm sure you're no stranger to this, with your action-packed life, but do you have anything to help stop the...the...

>PANEL 3: Sarah reacts with surprise. Lucìa has an understanding expression, but keeps an eye on Sarah, curious as to how she'll respond.
>AUDREY (O.S.): ...bouncing?

>PANEL 4: Sarah's reaction changes to a more relieved expression, even touched a bit by Audrey's request. She turns toward her chest of drawers.
>SARAH: Oh darling, I understand exactly what you mean!

>PANEL 5: Sarah ruffles through her top drawer.
>SARAH: I have JUST the thing for you...

>PANEL 6: Reveal panel of Audrey now wearing a headband, matching Silver Queen's tiara. Audrey is not amused. Sarah doesn't notice. Lucìa is in the background, facepalming.
>SARAH: There you go! Ready for crime-fighting!
>AUDREY (flatly): Gee, thanks.

Still can't think of a good line for Lucia in the last panel.

>>92798176
What about Brushogun

>>92805715
Teen Titans: Trouble in Tokyo already used that one.

>>92801195
This allows for him to be defeated then can show his obsession with being the best shot and getting revenge on Rage Racer. He is probably defeated easily the first time making him perfect for the script we are working on now.

>>92804896
Do you think she'd call her Silver Queen when out of costume?

>>92806626
cool cool. I'll be working on the outline while i finish up the first issue.

>>92806768
I have to admit, I wondered the same thing. It does seem a little too formal for their mentor/sidekick relationship.

>>92806914
Would she call her Ms. Sterling or Sarah?

What did Dick call Bruce when they weren't out crusading?

>>92807587
Back in the 50s? I don't really know.

>>92807587
Ms. Sterling probably works.

Mom would make more sense when she's Golden Guardian.

>>92808510
Would Sarah be trying to get Audrey to call her Sarah or is she fine with being called Ms. Sterling?

>>92805864
How about Paint man: rise of niggas

Bump for the night.

Bump IN the night

>>92811867
>>92813817
I'm actually just waiting for feedback on >>92803052

It feels like it'd work for the setting, like it'd be a good issue 2 or something, with 3 showcasing the impact on the city's economy their mock fights are having ending on the introduction of Theta.

>>92803052
>>92814776
I like the idea that it is a recorder/messenger bot with files from the beginning of their friendship to that point. But after time it starts developing more of AI as it learns from JD

>>92806626
can his symbol be a skull and cross arrows?

>>92806626
He has a good name for story titles eg crossroads, double cross, a life full of quarrels (alternate name for bolts), on the straight and arrow etc.

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>>92803052

That would actually be useful since Wells' is technically the brain between the two.
Losing him from the duo, it would be harder to write JD for some explanations.


>>92804419

Okay, enlarged and moved it more on the left.
Is this what you wanted?

>>92809433
>Would Sarah be trying to get Audrey to call her Sarah
I think if she was, Audrey would do it. She's polite, but not the type to be overly formal.

>>92807587
>>92808510
>>92809433
>>92818872
Let's just refer to the source material. What did Dick call Bruce back in the 50s?

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>>92817012
No, I meant actual left. Something like this.

The first strip of Rocket Boy should be set in small town Kansas. A young boy is out late helping his father get the cows put away in the barn. As the young boy struggles to get the stubborn cow to move, he and the cow are covered in a blinding beam of light. The boy and the cow disappear as a large UFO flies away into the night sky. Is this a good 3-4 panel comic beginning for RB? The boy should be dressed like a 1950s kid with rolled jean legs and a tucked in flannel t shirt. His hair should be a styled comb over.

>>92821259
Seems simple enough. Why only 4 panels, though?

>>92822770
I was envisioning this as a Sunday newspaper strip. Isn't that how Golden Girl is made?

>>92814945
>>92817012
The robot I think would have the primary order of "be helpful to Wells" which lets it bypass any orders like "don't tell JD" or "stay put" since the most helpful thing it can possibly do in that situation is find JD.

It's better than JD having to check his old e-mails to keep up with where he's at in the timeline.

page 10

>>92823757
Ah. Forgot he was a kinda offshoot of Golden Girl. The plan was that he lands back on earth when Golden Guardian is a thing right?

>>92827907
I was thinking that this takes place at the same time.

>>92828082
Yeah and he finally returns to earth around the time Girl becomes guardian, right?

>>92827907
>>92828082
>>92828186
I thought he was going to be some other kid character who GG meets from time to time.

Didn't the idea start with him being the ward of some alien member of the super group SQ is a part of before it went off on it's own path?

>>92828433
He isn't a ward to any alien and yeah he teams up with GG from time to time

>>92829267
I know he's not a ward to anyone, I'm just saying that was one of the ideas at the start of him and that's why he's thought to be taking place at the same time as Golden Girl and not her older incarnation.

>>92829532
Ah ok

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so one of the names i saw that popped up from that name generator thing was Jade Frost and i had this idea for an asian girl with cold powers. she live among a small tribe up in a very snowy mountain. they occasionally give shelter and food to hikers who would try to get up to the top (though they do insist not to press on because of how treacherous it is on the way to the top and no one besides her ancestors has ever reached the summit). one day some hikers who had left the village (somehow?) caused an avalanche drowning the whole village bellow, she emerged from under the snow only to find out everyone she knew is dead. in shock, she went on to reach the top of the mountain and once there cried and pleaded the mountain to give her strength so she can have her revenge on the people who are so egocentric that they had to conquer everything, even mountains that do not belong to them. saying that, if they wanted to reach to top so badly, she'll just bring the cold down on them.

by touching she can 'infuse' anything with cold. she doesn't have any ice blasts and she has to touch something to freeze it. making the ground slippery or have ice spikes shoot up. freeze something or someone making it very brittle and easily smashed. she can also make ice javelins giving her reach. she seems to also have enhanced strength and is very well versed in hand to hand combat.
also her hands are all black as if frost bitten.

any suggestions on how to improve this?

>>92830773
Make the mountain itself evil or give it an ego that would work with the gods of old. Petty, spiteful, and arrogant.

Anyone who tries to conquer the mountain is killed by it.

Make it the ancestors of not just the one girl, but the whole village who are the only ones who ever managed to reach the top and the mountain eventually found a way to take revenge on them through some travelers who got past them.
They also get cursed, she gets cursed, everyone is cursed. The village was already cursed, but since they lived in the cold no one ever noticed.

>>92830773
>>92831507
siberian :^)

>>92830773
Have a mountain song:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GJvTpiIdK78

What is the name Wells gives to his line of robots?

>>92833818

Arch-bots.

As eveyrbody have probably noticed already, they're shaped like the letter A.

>>92834117
Yes, that's what he calls them in the filed, but do they have numbers or model identifications?

Would JD jokingly give names to all of them?

>>92834512

What do you have in mind?

For a first strip what else would we need for Rocket Boy? Any improvement ideas?

>>92835463
Like Arch-bot-21-B or whatever and JD names it Sid.

>>92835801
>Sid

Kek, gave me a chuckle.
Cute too.

Is Wells going to be against him naming them due to his detachment against those kind of things?
I mean he continually dismantles and augments them.

>>92794531

This looks awesome, love it

>>92835868
He's probably not against it. The robots' bodies are constantly having their parts switched out, but I doubt whatever holds their programming/memories is also being switched out.

If the robots all had a base core form that could easily have things attached to them, without need for the core form to be modified that much, that'd be the best approach I think. In the base form they probably look very skinny with spider like limbs or something.

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>>92836267

Sounds neat but for now I can't figure out what his palette should be like.

>>92836352
I feel like his head piece shouldn't be one solid color.
Maybe have the mouth and ear pieces be silver?

The boot bottoms/toe guards could also be a more metal-y color.

He could always own more than one coat if the black doesn't work.

If/when this goes into the comic stage, will it all be colored or not?

>>92836477

>Colored or not

Why wouldn't it be?
It's a story about comic book superheroes inspired by comic book superheroes in a superhero comic book.

>>92836625
Gotta ask to know.

Back to the colors, the A could be a different color if it needs to stand out.
But it'd be best if whatever color it is on Archenemy, it's the same color on all his Arch bots.

>>92791431
Call him Paintman

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>>92804896
Kind of a minor thing, but does anyone have any thoughts on how tall Lucia should be?

>>92839298
Either an inch or two taller or shorter than Sarah should be fine.

one bump for the night.

We might be done for this week.

I should update the Trine pastebin.

It's all certainly coming together.

https://pastebin.com/4hz0mTLN

At least from a narrative standpoint.

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Okay, made it a bit of brassy gold.

Although the white makes it more uniform, making it a different color does make it stand out more.

>>92846331
So are the arch bots going to be a brassy gold color too?

That does make me think of 1960s tin man robots, which is the sort of camp I think we're going for here.

Also, what do you make of the pastebin?

>>92846397
>Also, what do you make of the pastebin?

I'm actually scared of how much progress is being made.

>>92846454
Well with the update I just did to it, I've separated it into more manageable chunks.
The makings of "chapters" I guess.

Though the decision of what progress is kept still goes to you.

>>92846573

Once we've finished finalizing their costumes I may make solo art first to just so we can get a feel of each one.

>>92818872
She could just be constantly forgetting to do so. So every couple of pages Audrey calls her Ms. Sterling and then she gets prompted something like 'please Audrey, how many times must I tell you to call me Sarah, I'm your partner in crime fighting, not your schoolteacher'.
Of that kind of thing doesn't work brilliantly in a six panel gag strip, but it might make an alright subject for one of them.