/co/co/'s Bizarre Adventure

Now, where was I in this time sink?
>>90153499
>Shocker: “I’m not a fan of fighting teenagers for petty revenge and no profit.”
>Chameleon puts his hands in front of him for the ‘calm down’ body language, “Listen, dis es diff-er-ent.” his old accent beginning to slip out “I have a client who is after certain… things, things that the people in this race are assuredly going to encounter. I could use a man with your talents in helping to secure them. My client can also help you with your bounty hunter problem.”
>Shocker lowers his gauntlets and thinks this over for a minute before shaking his head “No, no, this is how it always starts. Always a simple job, then it turns into some kind of crazy revenge scheme somehow, someway. I don’t know who it’ll be against, but that’s what always happens.”
>The Chameleon looks a little pissed
>Shocker continues “If I happen to find what you’re looking for, you can have it, just don’t screw this up for me. I want that prize money.”
>Shocker walks away, The Chameleon looks a little indignified as he puts his face back on

>Cut up to the sun in the sky, it changes position to indicate it is now late afternoon
>We cut to Clarence, Jeff, and Sumo, who are running around a graveyard
>Jeff and Sumo are on their knees looking into an empty, dug up grave
>Jeff: “Who do you think would do something like this?”
>Sumo: “I dunno, grave robbers? They knocked over the whole cemetery.”
>Clarence is just running around the graveyard, not paying attention to anything, Haddock is looking at the sky and around, mumbling something to himself
>Jeff: “Following that guy was a stupid idea.”
>Sumo: “What? Do you want to miss the big fight?”
>Jeff: “And that’s the other thing, I don’t think some random sailor can beat that Beast.”
>Sumo: “Hey, that guy is rude enough to eat a mummified organ, he’s gonna be alright.”
cont.

>>90194934
>Jeff: “What does that have to do with fighting a literal monster? He may as well catch a disease for eating that!”
>Clarence is still running around until he spots a figure on the ground at the edge of the cemetery “Lil’ Buddy! Hey guys, look, he is safe and sound!” as he runs towards Lil’ Buddy,
>Jeff: “Uh… Clarence, you didn’t leave your doll here.”
>Clarence tries to lift the doll, but it’s rooted to the ground “A little help here? Seems to be tangled in some roots.”
>Sumo: “Some roots… hold on.”
>Clarence manages to rip it off the ground, without noticing that the roots recoiled to within the doll’s back, and hugs it
>“I found you.” A disembodied voice rings in their ears
>Clarence: “Uh, did you say something?”
>Both shake their heads nervously. The doll begins to squirm in Clarence’s arms
>Clarence: “What’s happening? Can it be?”
>Jeff: “Drop that doll!”
>Clarence: “Guys, my doll… has come to life!” He squeezes the doll harder “Yay, just like Pinocchio!”
>Jeff: “Not this nonsense again.”
>Clarence: “Must be a side effect of that sorcerer’s magic, Lil’ buddy caught a bit of it and became a real boy.”
>Jeff: “Oh, so he’s a wizard now. Wasn't he supposed to be an alien?”
>Clarence: “No Jeff; aliens can’t do magic, it’s basic knowledge.”
>Sumo: “Yeah, and you’re supposed to be the smart one… hehehe.”
>A barbed tendril emerges from the doll’s mouth while Clarence is not looking, startling both Sumo and Jeff
>Jeff: “Clarence!”
>Sumo: “Woah!”
>Clarence: “Lil’ buddy…”
>The doll begins to shake violently and frees it’s from Clarence’s embrace, sending him tumbling away
>Now on the ground, the doll continues to spasm before stopping abruptly
>The doll rises to its feet and slowly advances towards the group
>Sumo: “Stay away, you freak!” He grabs a nearby stick and swings it at the doll
>Jeff: “Clarence, are you alright?”
cont.

>>90194956
>Clarence: “Yeah, I think so. Listen Lil’ buddy, you might me a real boy now but that doesn’t mean…”
>Jeff: “Dammit Clarence, that thing isn’t…”
>Sumo: “Quiet you two!”
>The doll’s mouth opens and the sound of a hundred twigs snapping echo from within it
>Clarence, Jeff, and Sumo run to Haddock while the doll chases them
>Haddock snaps back to reality and sees the possessed doll “What madness is this?” as he pulls out a metal pole and with one mighty swing catches the doll on the neck, sending it flying until it collides with a headstone and falls into an open grave
>Jeff and Sumo rush over and quickly push the heavy stone into the grave
>We get a shot of Lil’ Buddy clicking and looking up before being crushed under the weight of it
>Clarence gasps “Jeff, Sumo, how could you do that to Lil’ Buddy?” as they restrain him from jumping into the grave
>A strong gust of wind blows across the graveyard, Haddock turns to look in the direction is came from and catches a glimpse of two large glowing eyes in the window of an old, dilapidated wooden house that overlooks the cemetery
>Haddock blinks and the eyes are gone, he steadies his eyes and rubs his beard, “Children, it would seem I have located this beast you speak of.”
>He marches right up to the old house and, as if on cue, the door opens wide for him on its own accord
>He ventures forth into the house, the door, the frame, the wood around it all collapses and breaks in such a way that resembles a mouth full of sharp teeth ensnaring its prey
>Haddock looks back, then forward “Ha! Like Jonah against the whale, I'm unharmed! I… where I am?”
>The Beast: “Looks like manners are unknown to the men of this era.”
>Haddock: “What's that? Is someone here?”
>The Beast: “But guests are guests after all. Take care of him, my children!”
>A mass of vines assault Haddock from every side, quickly cocooning him in a wooden prison
cont.

It's going to take a long time to post all this.
>>90194980
>When the ‘mouth’ reopens, there is no sign of Haddock, the boys gape in horror, speechless
>The house then "breaths", the gust of wind passes over the three boys, the grass, the trees, the flowers, they all sway in it
>All manner of plant life in the cemetery begins pulling at the ground, twisting and tying together in knotted bodies
>The three boys are huddled together in fear as the monster begin to take form
>The house creaks and cracks, it too has begun to pull on the ground, legs forming from broken and twisted timber, its windows flicker to life with light and its sights narrow in on them
>The Monster House roars as the boys flee for their lives

>The roar echos across town as we cut to Josh who is scratching at his leg
>Joshua: “Hold on a second; this is a wooden leg, it shouldn't itch.”
>Joshua lifts his pant leg and discovers that his peg leg is now a beating mass crawling through his leg, the roots twisting and growing into his flesh
>Joshua: “No no no no! Help!”
>Cut to an elderly couple inside a nearby building
>Old man: “Did you say something, honey?”
>Old lady: “No, sweetie.”
>Joshua screams again, the old lady looks through the window
>Old lady: “It’s that weird kid again... what was his name, Joffrey?”
>Old man: “Jerome.” (more screams) “Should we call the police again?”
>Old lady: “No, he’ll get bored soon… there.”
>Cut back to Joshua, who is now wrapped inside a cocoon of plant matter and hanging upside-down; only his eyes are visible as he’s now danging like an angler fish lure for massive fish-like wooden abomination
>Joshua’s heart is beating wildly, images flash in his mind of all the people who have cost him part of his body of made him suffer, primarily Sumo and Shocker
>The monster is linked with him, and the images flash in its eyes before it screams and leaps from the outskirts of the woods Joshua was wandering around in
cont.

>>90195024
>Cut to Hex and Pym, Pym has just compressed Rover into a Varrick capsule and put it in his pocket “When this race is done and over, I’m going to take my time figuring out how this works. But still, putting a car in my pocket never gets old.”
>Pym pats his pocket on his clashing red vest on his, frankly, garish get up
>Hex is frowning and asks “Don you own any normal cloths? It’s getting to be embarrassing being seen with you at this point.”
>Pym: “What are you talking about, crazy eye? Janet love this.”
>Hex: “Who's this Janet you’re talkin’ ‘bout?”
>Pym winces a little “Eh...why don't you go stalk your pal Shocker or something?”
>BOOM! A huge object has just crash landed next to them, both Pym and Hex quickly spin around and see a huge wooden angler fish with stubby arms and legs rise up from the dust, every time it moves there’s a horrible cracking sound as the wood breaks and mends to facilitate it
>Its massive maw opens and repeats “Shock… er… SHOCKER!”
>Close up of Pym and Hex’s face as it leaps into the air, aiming to crush them

>Elsewhere in town, the plant monster have begun their approach
>Cars are being flipped and people are being dragged out of their homes and picked off of the streets by vines and roots
>Panic is beginning to spread
>The screams reach the Strickland building and a siren goes off
>Some of the racers speed out of town, while others pull out weapons and are joined by some of the townsfolk
>As one of the townsfolk is able o be dragged underground, a lance of fire impales the scarecrow-like monster, burning it to ash where it stands
>Navis is seen holding a nozzle-gun hybrid with a lite flame at the end
>She rushes to the man’s aide, he’s still on the ground, clutching his arm and leg in pain
>Navis sees that plants have burrowed into his flesh and are starting to take root
>She hesitates in shock for a moment, just then the ground rumbles and the road cracks
cont.

I have all of Aberdale done. Just a lot to post.
>>90195056
>Coffins emerge wrapped in vines and held up by roots; they begin to open as the corpses within are revealed to be infested with the parasitic plants
>Navis doesn’t have time to react and burn them safely, she’s prepared to burn herself as well
>In a streak of red, Navis’ Red Comet skids between her and the monsters, shooting flames from its backside, making a protective wall of fire
>The hatch opens, the cockpit is empty, a dull, dry, bored sounding British voice comes from within it “Get in.”
>Navis grabs the man and jumps into the car to put some distance between her and the advancing undead

>Cut to elsewhere, Sam and Max have their guns out and are blowing zombie heads off
>Max: “Aren't small towns the best?”
>Sam: “It never ceases to amaze me how trouble always rears its ugly head in sequestered little niches like these.”
>Sam and max spot Jack leaping a fence into someone’s backyard and them leaping out holding a man made beehive
>Max: “Wasn’t that your book nerd boyfriend making off with someone’s bees?”
>Sam: “This is no time to be going after a daring honey caper with postmortem reanimated azaleas nipping at our heels, little gal pal.”
>Max blows apart another zombie’s legs “Sure thing Sam, we’ll take him down later.”
>Sam: “I wonder just how far that clemency order extends...”

>Hex and Pym are still fighting the big angler wood fish
>Bullets don’t have much effect on it, and the monster keeps blocking their escape
>A swam of bees come flying in from nowhere and dive bomb into the monster’s mouth
>At first it seems to have done nothing, but then the monster begins to slow down
>We see the bees from behind the monster’s eyes, they are all buzzing inside of it, gumming up its insides with wax and sealing up its eyes
>Jack: “Well don’t just stand there, move!”
>Pym and Hex put some distance between themselves and the monster
cont.

>>90195095
>Cut to down town, the plant monster horde has been joined by coffin zombies and are chasing Clarence’s group down the street
>The roots rise in front of them, blocking off their escape; they’re cornered
>Jeff: “It’s over. It’s all over! We will be food for some kind of monster, and the whole town is going to meet the same fate!”
>Clarence: “And I’ll never see my Lil’ Buddy again!”
>“Dang it, Creendence” An imposing armored figure appears from on top of the root wall, it has the Strickland logo in its forehead
>Clarence: “Grandpa!”
>Jeff: “T-that’s your grandfather? Mr. Wendell?”
>Sumo: “Cool! Your grandpa is a robot now!”
>Seymour: “This place ain't safe for you kids to play around” He puts himself between the kids and the creatures “Run to a safe place. Let the adults take care of these punks”
>The plant monsters look puzzled at the newcomer, but it get in a battle stance before making angry sounds with what can be assumed is their mouths
>Seymour: “Get behind me, kids!” (internally) I hope I remember how to operate this darn thing
>Jeff: “I think we should listen to your grandfather, Clarence.”
>Sumo: “I think we should watch how your grandfather kicks his butt, Clarence.”
>Clarence gives Sumo a thumbs up, Jeff stares angrily at both
>Seymour stands in front of the plant creatures, shaking inside his armor “C’mon Seymour, you can do this.”
>The monsters charge at Seymour, who also assumes a battle stance, pointing at the monster with one of his arms
>Sumo: “Finish him!”
>Seymour: “Contact!” A streak of flames shoots out of one of the armor’s hands, incinerating the first creature “Oh yeah, that’s the power of propane right in your ugly face, you spooky salad!”
>Sumo and Clarence start cheering for Seymour
>Seymour: “Didn’t ya hear me? This place ain’t safe!”
>Jeff: “I couldn't agree more with you, Mr. Wendell, but they never listen to me.”
cont.

>>90195129
>Seymour: “I got this under cont…” Before he could finish, a coffin zombie (a little old lady in the casket no less) pounces on him “Bwaaaah!”
>The monster throws Seymour to the ground and starts pounding his armor, immobilizing his arms with its vines
>Seymour: “Oh you filthy… These guys learn fast. Think, Seymour, there was another feature in this armor… Let’s see, how it was activated? Oh right.”
>The armor sprays a gas in the monster’s face. Clarence and Sumo giggle like idiots
>Jeff: “What’s so funny about…”
>A click is heard and an explosion envelopes both Seymour and the monster. The kids are knocked back by the blast
>Sumo sits up and raises his arms “Awesome!”
>Jeff sits up more slowly holding his head “No, not awesome. Clarence, your grandpa…”
>Clarence: “Is fine.” He points at Seymour who gets up, his armor slightly singed
>Seymour: “I told ya… that I have this… under control.”
>Clarence: “That monster you just torched was grandma.”
>Seymour: “What?” he looks at the remains of the coffin and recognizes it “Oh, she really was. At least she finally stopped pretending to be human.”
>The ground rumbles again as a massive root bursts forth
>It pulls Lil’ Buddy from the ground, now swollen by the plants inside of it. Roots in its feet extends towards the boys
>Seymour readies his propane technology again, but Clarence rushes forward getting in the way “Listen Lil’ Buddy, I know you are still inside that monstrous mass, I know you can hear me so please stop! Look what you are doing; you are hurting the people that love you, including me! I fear that you are no longer a buddy, you… you have become a baddy! Yes, I said it.”
>Seymour: “That boy ain’t right, I tell you ‘hwat.”
>Sumo is about to burst into laughter, Jeff is just staring at Clarence with sour expression
>The horde of plant monsters remains silent for a moment, then start screeching at the group
cont.

>>90195167
>Seymour: "Alright boy, now that you’re done with your nonsense, stand aside." Seymour adjusts his stance and aims at the Lil' Buddy "This bad boy has enough juice to send these bastards to kingdom come, but only has one shot."
>Clarence is alarmed “Grandpa, no please, I know I can still reach him!” Clarence grabs the nozzle from his grandpa
>Seymour is struggling to keep control “Dang it Creedance!”
>Jeff and Sumo are also trying to pull Clarence back
>The monstrous Lil’ Buddy is right on top of them, the roots are forming a huge cocoon all around them as its mouth breaks and reshapes so it can swallow them all in darkness
>We see the mass from the outside, a huge mound of roots and wood over where they once stood
>Then fire erupts from the gaps, the monsters wail in pain and recoil, but they are already burning
>Its captives are freed, and we see Clarence sitting on the ground with his eyes wide, he’s holding the nozzle, he accidentally pulled the trigger
>Lil’ Buddy is consumed by fire and burns away, shrieking and flailing until all that remains is charred wood
>Clarence holds its charred remains and begins bawling his eyes out “Oh no! What have I done?! My poor Lil’ Buddy! He never even managed to enjoy his new life before turning evil.”
>Jeff is fuming “Clarence, that thing almost-” but is cut short when Sumo puts a hand on his shoulder and shakes his head

>The Monster House is still on the move, though slowly
>We cut to within and Haddock is still cocooned
>The tendrils are piercing his flesh and taking root
>Some begin to wither and die though, and as they do, Haddock’s eyes open, he begins to glow faintly for a moment as the tendrils loosen their grip on him
>Haddock manages to produce a lighter from his pocket and lights it to see in the darkness, he holds it up to his face for better illumination
cont.

>>90195196
>As he’s doing this, he burps, the gas from his mouth comes into contact with the flame of the lighter and the flame expands greatly and violently, burning a hole in the cocoon
>Haddock sees his opening and rips his way out, once freed he reaches into another pocket and produces a flask which he drinks heavily from

>Cut back to Hex and Pym, who are still locked in combat with the angler wood fish
>They’re keeping it from advancing into town, but just by being a nuisance to it
>Seymour and the boys arrive “Dang it, there’s just no end to these monster and my suit is out of propane.”
>A swarm of bees flies overhead causing Seymour to duck “What in the hell is-?” He notices Jack posing and pointing, the bees going where he directs them, covering the lesser monsters and converting them into immobile wax figures “Well I’ll be...”
>Josh’s eyes catch a glance of Sumo and go bloodshot, the monster’s glowing yellow eyes change to red as an image of Sumo stabbing Josh in the face with a fork flashes across them
>It leaps up into the air as a wall of roots surround its attackers, it aims to crush them all
>Five flaming lances pierce the monster from below causing the monster to veer off course as it falls, Navis has arrived in her Red Comet
>The monster writhes in agony, part of Joshua’s head is unraveled and he begins screaming “Do as I command! I am your master! Kill them all!”
>The plant monster seems to remember that Joshua is still connected to it and swings him over its gaping maw in an attempt to harvest enough life energy from him to save itself
>As the monster devours him, he yells "I am the victim here! I don't deserve this!"
>Sumo waves “Goodbye, Joshua!”
>Josh: “It’s JOSH-” he’s cut off just as the monster closes its mouth with him inside
>It’s still burning, but now it’s reinvigorated as it begins to do a flaming Sonic spin dash-like attack to roll them all over
cont.

>>90195219
>Hex steps forward as it charges and aims his gun carefully
>As the monster is just about to run him down, he fires, blowing out one of the monsters eyes
>The rapid change in air pressure from inside the flaming monster causes a jet of flames to pour from its compromised eye, making it smash through the wall of roots trapping its targets
>The monster is quickly consumed by the flames, but has left a trail of fire that is now spreading

>Cut to Haddock, who is walking through the violently shaking and tumbling Monster House
>Haddock: “I’ve weathered far worse storms than the likes of this, you monster!”
>Again, a glow flickers about him as a clap of thunder is heard outside and the winds pick up
>The Beast’s gaze is upon Haddock now “Hmm, it seems there may be more to you than meets the eye.” The way the Beast sees things is shown, he looks down at his urns, each are glowing to him, pouring energy into the roots coiled around them, then to Haddock, who is emitting a similar glow to The Beast “I see, so you are the one who holds my missing nourishment.”
>The Beast now readies one of his arms, the tip sharpened like a spear, and lunges it at Haddock, aiming to impale him through his guts
>Haddock sees it coming and exclaims “Bloody pirates!”
>In a flash of fire, a fat man appears and takes the hit for Haddock, the man is Josh, and he is on fire
>The Beast yells, frantically trying to remove the lump of fire now on his limb, in his desperation, Haddock sees the true form of The Beast, a mess of roots and gnarled trees compressed into a human-like form, rooted to one spot with several small cocoons of wood that have roots spreading into the house
>Haddock makes a sour face of disgust and charges in, grabbing a burning table leg and setting those cocoons ablaze
>The Beast yells “NO!” as his connection to them is severed as well as their connection to the house
cont.

>>90195240
>Outside, we see the house still in the streets, corrupting wood into monsters and grabbing people, it has begun raining from the storm that appeared
>The house abruptly collapses with a puff of smoke coming out of its mouth before falling
>From the ruins, Haddock rises, he rubs his eyes in the rain and looks around
>He spots The Beast, diminished, still reaching for the urns, and crushes the monsters head under his boot
>Haddock lights his pipe and burns what he sees of the monster
>As he does so, we zoom in on his eye again and sees two men fighting in space, one is wearing a cape, the other is larger and has slightly longer limbs
>We zoom back out and Haddock shakes his head again “I’m missing the sea more and more each day. Nothing natural about what goes on in these landlocked parts.”
>He exits the wreckage
>TO BE CONTINUED rolls by

>It’s a new day in Aberdale
>The town is largely still standing, there are Strickland vehicles everywhere and people who were infected by the plants are being treated
>The Monster House’s remains are sectioned off by police tape
>A figure has been recovered from it: it’s Josh, he’s alive, and in a straight jacket as medical equipment is hooked up to him
>He’s being loaded into a Strickland van
>Seymour: “Well that punk did say that he was the zombies’ master and was orderin’ it to kill us all. We’ll see what else he’s got to say for himself once we get the splinters out of his mouth.”
>Clarence is dressed in all black and holding a funeral for his Lil' Buddy as the remains are scooped up
>Jack is also there, looking at the Monster House’s remains and writing stuff down in his notebook
>Seymour spots him “Hey you, the guy with the towel for cape, you have a Style!”
>Jack: “Oh, thank you sir, you... also have style… your armor was really stylish.”
>Seymour: “No, you knucklehead, I’m talking about an ancient fighting technique that is dormant in you.”
cont.

>>90195277
>Jack, internally, “Please don’t be another weirdo like Sam and Max.”
>Seymour: “I saw you back there; the bees surrounded you like you were their honeycomb when you remained still in a pose.”
>Jack: “Well, I’m a beekeeper, so bees usually…”
>Seymour: “Only through controlled posing can you harness the true potential of your Style!” he hands Jack a book “Here's a reissue of the old Strickland manual of Posing and Style. If you survive the race, I highly recommend you to join Strickland in order to hone your skills to their max potential.”
>Jack: “OK, thank you… wait, survive? I mean, the race looks tough, but I don't think that it’ll escalate to those extremes.”
>Seymour: “Oh, you have no idea what lurks under the surface.”
>Jack walks away, looking at the book, Seymour goes back to one of the Strickalnd trucks and Navis is waiting for him
>Navis: “I'm not gonna babysit your new find.”
>Seymour: “I didn't ask you to, thugh he's a potential asset for the Foundation. You best hurry, the president will be announcing the next checkpoint soon.”

>The area around the Monster House clears up, the people have all left to see Mr. Nobody
>A bunch of black cars arrive at the scene, from them a gang of at least thirteen mobsters wearing trench-coats emerge and swarm the area, ignoring the tape. Their Boss stands in front of them and surveys the ruins
>Boss: “What a spectacle those fellas mounted ‘round here, huh?” He picks up a plank of charred wood “This place is all crispy.” it crumbles to ash in his hands and he dusts it away
>“Lucky that we didn't have to deal with those freakish plants” says a henchman.
>Boss: “Half the job already done, I love dat. Alright, gentlemen, let's finish this job and find what we’re sent to find!”
>He strolls around as his men search through the burnt wood when something catches his eye “Jackpot.”
cont.

>>90195301
>He removes one of the urns, unscathed from the flames, from a pile of wreckage, then lets out a hearty chuckle
>Boss: “Suckers were right on top of these babies and no one ever noticed them, can ya’ believe it, boys?”
>Thug: “I can’t believe some meddling kids found da urns before the prez sent us in. Not even them Strickland boys knew about these, right boss?”
>The boss pistol whips the thug “Shut yer face, what if someone is still snoopin' around and you just spilled the beans about who hired us? Now grab those shovels and dig like the rest.”
>He searches again in the same place, then come to a halt immediately and let out another chuckle “Stop the search, boys, they’re all here! Another successful mission.”
>Another men raise his voice “Oy, boss, are ya sure those are all the jars we are lookin for?”
>Boss: “Do I look like a medic to you? How would I know? And most importantly, why should we care? We found ‘em and now they are goin' first class to their destination.”
>As the mobsters load the urns into the trunk of one of their cars, the boss takes a cigar from his coat and lights it “Let’s hope all da other pieces are as easy to grab as these. I don’t like to get mah hands dirty, you know?” The light from the cigar reveals that the boss’ eyes are actually a pair of dice

And that's Aberdale, all stitched together. Now I wait to see if anyone wants to change anything or tell me to fuck off, or join in with the stupid, or maybe the thread will just die with me alone in it.
I'll post the notes for what immediately happens next if anyone else with the project is still around and actually wants to help out.

And the notes that are up next for expanding.

>the Blue Meanie use his Stand to make the whole situation and any deaths that happened “come as no surprise” so that no one thinks that was bizarre in any way that the town came under attack by plant zombies
>that way public opinion won't turn against Mr. Nobody during the race.

>In Mr. Nobody’s bus/blimp
>"Hmm, I could've sworn I saw Johnny Bravo down there. Did he die?"
>"He's been dead."
>"Oh, yes, that's right. I almost forgot, that was the universe where we made a wrong turn at Albuquerque."
>We see Mr. Nobody dropping the Super Rod in a bowl full of water and it acts like a compass
>”Just follow my rod, my rod never fails me!”

In the Middle of Nowhere

>The next checkpoint is announced to be CN city, which is roughly 2,400 miles from Aberdale and clear across the continent with a time limit of 72 hours

The 2,000 character limit it killing me, but if I just post to the doc then no one will actually review it.

Ah crap, didn't noticed the thread

>>90195392
>the Blue Meanie use his Stand to make the whole situation and any deaths that happened “come as no surprise”
I recall that in the previous thread it was suggested that he activates his Stand atop a hill, affecting the whole town

>>90195909
I was thinking he does it from the broadcasting booth or from on top of the blimp.
I still don't know if someone needs to see him for it to activate or what.

And last thread died over a day ago, and since I made that thread, I didn't want to make this thread. But then I had all of the current arc done and what I'm I supposed to do with it? Post it to the doc? No one reviews updates posted directly to the doc.

>>90196147
There are no details about how his Stand works. Making it dependant of his sight could be a good limiter to his power

>And last thread died over a day ago
Threads are active during the day and likely to die in the night since there are no euro anons around

>>90196360
And the thread before that one died and no one made the last one until I had to make it more than 2 days later.

The point being I'm concerned since no one else seems to be willing to make a new thread when the old one dies and then I'm left holding 20,000 words with no real way to get them looked at.

Maybe it works two ways, if people can see the Blue Meanie it takes effect on them, or if he can see people, then it can also take effect on them.
The first time he used it was over a television broadcast.

>>90196910
Well, there is no way to tell is someone else will make a new thread, so I don't want to make one and end with two or more threads in the catalog and trigger the hotpockets

>>90197416
If you wait for a whole day and no one else has done it by then, it's safe to assume no one else is going to do it.

I always check before clicking post just to be sure regardless.

>>90194934
Ok, after that conversation, should the Chameleon keep track of Shocker during the rest of the race?

Also, what was that thing about Samurai Jack fighting in the previous thread?

>>90198619
I suppose he can.

And Samurai Jack was in part 1, which took place in Nowhere Kansas.
The arc we are about to proceed into takes some of the racers through the City of Nowhere and the ruins of the old Bagge Farm.

Jack is still there. Something like 40 or 50 years have passed since part 1.
Jack teams up with old Samurai Jack there and they begin to travel together as Old Jack attempts to retrieve that piece of the corpse that was stolen from the Bagge farm to prevent the corpse from being assembled.

>>90198813
There was also the idea that Jack fights against Tulio onboard his airship and that he is the one that deals the killing blow.

>>90199019
Yeah, that's something that can happen, but that's pretty far away right now, probably months away at this rate.

>>90195392
What should be Nobody's excuse for making CN City the next checkpoint, considering that the other two corpse parts are in Nowhere and Springfield?

>>90198080
There is also the plus4chan thing, but I suspect no one checks that

>>90200194
The rod points northeast, so he picks a spot on the coast figuring any corpse parts in that direction will get picked up by any "heroicy hero types" since the parts draw those sorts in.

>>90201445
I think I'm the only one who checks that thread. No one else ever posts in it.

>>90201787
And adding on more thoughts, Mr. Nobody sees the direction the rod points in and looks at a map, he sees a great deal many locations where pieces may or may not be found and sends his agents to the most likely and unlikely of them.

That's why the Blue Meanie is in Smallville, he's looking for a corpse part, or rather looking to see if any can be found there. Goofy sticks with the race pack and keeps an eye on the ones most likely to fit the "hero" archetype so he can recover any pieces they come across.

Aunt May is sent on a secret mission (we don't know it's her) to look into what Loki is up to and she finds another corpse part, calling in the Front Men to come collect it once she's cleared out the major obstacles.

>>90201909
Then at one point there could be a scene where Nobody dispatches his agents across the route, Aunt May could either appear in her disguise or receive the orders through her Stand.

>>90202302
I don't know if a scene is necessary or not, we'll see once we start expanding the notes into story.

Something occurred to me, Mr. Nobody is in no way responsible for what happened in Aberdale. Clarence found the urns before anyone arrived, so if the race had not come to Aberdale, odds are the town would've been slowly wiped out as The Beast searched for the stolen urn rather than attacking all in one go like that.

How does Mr. Nobody address the situation that happened? Does he downplay it, play it up, or claim he is having special aide sent to Aberdale to help with the recovery?

Also, what Wander was doing during all of this was help put out the fires. Maybe he waves goodbye to some firemen as he's leaving.

>>90202821
>How does Mr. Nobody address the situation that happened?
Since the Blue Meanie's Stand took care of anyone questioning what happened there, Mr. Nobody could says he's sending resources to help the town after the disaster.

>>90203013
OK, so how do we present the Blue Meanie doing this?

I don't want to reveal explicitly what his stand does until Smallville at the earliest since that's the first arc where he's actually focal.

What do we cut to right after seeing Snake-Eyes' dice eyes?

>>90203090
I don't know how to illustrate his Stand's ability; in Doom Patrol, Agent !’s ability was always active. Maybe the town denizens are resuming their daily lives, ignoring all the damage left by the Beast's attack and some of the racers find the situation uncanny.

>>90203323
Then we pan up to the blimp and the Chief Blue Meanie is on top of the thing just laughing to himself, then we pan to inside the blimp with Mr. Nobody plotting the next course before landing the blimp, doing his speech, and sending the racers off.

>>90203734
>Nobody: Well, it was a strange and eventful night the last one, is it?
>Most of the racers look confused, not understanding what he's talking about
>Nobody: No? Oh... so sad, looks like it was a boring and mundane stay in a boring and mundane town after all

>>90204244
Hmm, no, not really Mr. Nobody's style.

Maye he does something like "I hope you all enjoyed your stay" and we cut to character like Sam and Max who very much did enjoy their stay.

Maybe we should have it so it's not so much "they forget it happened" but they "keep a stuff upper lip" about it.
The townsfolk know it happened, but the effect of "it came as no surprise" is less "it didn't happen" and more "that happened, time to immediately move forward", like a lack to PTSD.

>>90204355
They don't "forget it", if I'm reading the description right, the things affected by Nue! become inconspicuous and don't raise any alarm.

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Predicting 30+ bumps over 5 days before the bump limit is hit.

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>>90205327
I'm just having a hard time figuring out how this is presented.

The way it keeps getting talked about, it doesn't seem to exactly work like Agent "!"'s power where people did not notice him until he passed by.
I get that it's sort of like a perception filter or a "somebody else's problem" field, but the application is what's tripping up my thought process with it.

Does the effect persist, or is it temporary and by the time it wears off people have already moved on naturally?

>>90205429
>Unlike the original comics, its user has far more control over this ability, being able to extend it to specific people or objects
Must have a certain range, and when the effect subsides the object or person affected may surprise others around, unless people become accustomed to its presence.

>>90205582
So the effect wears off, and people gasp after they leave, but they don't chalk the shock up to anything that Mr. Nobody did?

Am I understanding this right? The point being, his ability deflects blame away from Mr. Nobody by delaying outrage until Mr. Nobody has already reminded the situation in a way where the enraged cannot go after him without looking bad?

>>90205687
Seems that it doesn't generate any outrage until the effect is gone.

>>90205929
So it's like a "SON OF A BITCH" moment when you just remember something, but you already have like 10 other things going on to fix the shit you just remembered so it's not that big of a deal?

>>90206173
Most likely, unless the Stand is in effect long enough for the situation to become normalized.

>>90206232
I suppose I'll just have to tackle it as stuff gets written.

I am planning on him doing Robbie Rotten-like things in Smallville (which should be colorful like Morioh Town) to dishearten the people there or just make them unhappy, but if anyone has a better familiarity with him, that'd be good.
He lacks an army here, so there's that.

Before all that though, we have the whole Nowhere plot to do.

>>90206519
>There's a huge distance between checkpoints 2 and 3. Racers would spread out and take different routes to avoid conflicts while the ones seeking first would be taking the most direct route possible and clashing all along the way.
So how much time they should spent between Aberdale and Nowhere?

>>90206817
I'd say... that'd take at least 12 hours to get there, maybe less depending on how fast they're going. Typically it'd take 15 hours though.
They also pass through another time zone, so that gives us some extra daylight.

So the fight with Shocker would be taking place during the evening hours, and old Jack would confront them in Nowhere at night.

We'd need to turn back the clock some to cover Smallville since those events would be happening simultaneously. Or it could be happening the next day. We do have about 3 days of time to work with, so that's good.

Should Nobody use the Super Rod to create other Stand users besides Chameleon?

>>90207247
I think a good chunk of his Dada Party got their stands via the rod.

Should we show it in action again? Probably. Not sure on who though.

>>90207102
I was under the impression that Smallville took place after they fought in the charred farm and Shocker was handed to the authorities

>>90207617
The events that transpire in Smallville share no characters with the events that transpire in Nowhere.

Wander and Sylvia being listed as being in Nowhere was back when it was assumed Jack was still traveling with them up to that point, but since he's not, they're no longer in Nowhere.

There should probably be a scene in Aberdale where Jack considers dropping out of the race before Sam and Max drag him back into it.

But anyway, I can't stay up late and keep the thread for dying, I have to do shit in the morning, so hopefully someone else can keep the thread from dying until at least 7 hours from now.

Voice guy, reposting some of my old stuff. Haven't been in the threads since part 4, roughly, but glad to see the project still chugging along.

Literally Me - http://vocaroo.com/i/s17jqhTzftRN
Freaky Fred - http://vocaroo.com/i/s1D7Rx1LOGII
Scrooge vs. Father - http://vocaroo.com/i/s0Z0zNVaiYbT
Metalocalypse in Superjail - http://vocaroo.com/i/s0A9PTj8aJBb

>>90207920
Nice, now it only needs to update the pastebin before making the next thread

>glad to see the project still chugging along
At a snail's pace, but still running

>>90207286
If i'm not wrong, it wasn't shown when Nobody used it on Chameleon. The guy sent to spy on Hex and Pym in the cruiser could have a Stand granted by the rod

>>90207717
>There should probably be a scene in Aberdale where Jack considers dropping out of the race before Sam and Max drag him back into it
He could ponder on what Seymour said before the start of the next leg, then Sam and Max pull him back into the race. During the trip to Nowhere, Jack starts considering to drop the race and decides to part ways with the duo, then he regrets his decision when Sam and Max leave and starts looking for a new partner.

>>90207102
Alright, so what should be covered in that part before focusing on Hex' pursuit of Shocker? I assume there will be a skip at one point instead of showcasing what are the racers doing at every turn

What the fuck?

This is super autistic.

This cannot be what you are doing.

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Unrelated to the current part, but Chis-Chan's Stand in part 8 could be named Revive Zordon (a song his imaginary band made) before changing it to Weird Science

>>90208141
Haven't even talked about what happens on the cruise ship yet.

>>90209113
I was planning on Sam and Max using that honey caper as an excuse to "keep an eye" on him and drag him along with them just because Sam is somewhat fond of him.

Though Jack is getting exhausted with Max's antics and takes an opportunity in Nowhere to part ways with them when they get a call about Loki.

>>90210989
The skip will probably be righter after the racers are off. TOM will do some narration, a map will be shown showing how the racers have spread out, then we focus in on one location on the map and get into the final Shocker fight.

>>90213571
Since the guy in the cruiser doesn't have any other details and appears only there, he could also be the hitman that DAVE forces to drink from the fake grail.

>>90213817
Could be. Any idea who we're using for this role?

>>90213571
>Sam is somewhat fond of him.
Max gotta poke fun of that

Ok, so the fight is gonna be like this:
>Show both vehicles in the desert exchanging fire
>Shocker drives towards the ruins of the Bagge Farm
>His car is destroyed by an unseen Jack
>Jack remain in the shadows and order them to leave
>Shocker decides to make his stand in the farm and kill both Hex and Pym
>Pym tries to use the Pacing to assist Hex in his duel, it backfires
>Pym figures out how Shocker's ability works, allowing Hex to beat him

what else?

>>90214974
Pretty good starting point. Not sure what the fight consists of though.

Spongebob and Goofy's fight on the old Bagge land is already written, though it might need a few tweaks here and there to mesh with what interactions they've had already.

>>90207286
Does Mojo Jojo has his Stand before the fight in the island? He could get it when the dada agent approaches him in Fantastic Island and recruits him

>>90215748
That's a good idea.
He lacks any real focus before then aside from just avoiding Hex in CN City.

>>90215821
If Hex meets him before he obtains a Stand, he could comment how there's something different with Mojo and Pym will be able to see the suit of armor since he already has a Stand.

>>90215957
Yeah. There's a window for that to happen since during the same arc when they fight him Hex gets one of the eyes.

>>90215105
>Not sure what the fight consists of though
Shocker using the blasts of his gauntlets along with his Stand to assault Hex from multiple angles, I don't know if Hex can predict his movements with the Pacing if Shocker teleports with his Stand.

>>90216927
Well that's what's been throwing Hex off so far.

Now that they know he can do that, they can plan for it, though it still won't do them much good.

When should Pym fucked up with a disruption? Before or after Old Jack slices Shocker's car?
If before, it sets up a better payoff later when Pym comes in with the save having figured out Shocker needs to be able to talk to activate his stand.

>>90217005
>If before, it sets up a better payoff
Then before, what happens when he fails his attempt?

>>90217054
Shocker could almost kill them both or look like he's about to make a clean escape.

How he fails is just as important though. I still don't have a good grasp of this pacing ability since I've had to make it up as we go, so Pym should probably not know what the fuck he's doing.

What's the set up? Just two cars clashing in a wasteland? What do you expect to happen in that sort of scenario? What narrative repetitions apply to that situation?

>>90218276
I think he was supposed to mess up his own rhythm, but I don't remember what was going to be the exact effect of that, maybe he becomes frozen in place, unable to move and be moved until the effect pass.

>>90218563
Getting stuck in a freeze frame could work.

My problem is I just don't know enough about Pym's personality to really get a feel for how he'd pull the narrative his way.
With Hex, he has that whole cowboy/bounty hunter thing.
Frank has his gritty 'suck the color out of the world' thing.

But what would Pym use?

>>90216898
Does he get the eye before or after fighting Mojo?

>>90218884
I think he can't set up the rhythm of his surroundings since he is still learning how to use the Pacing. The disruption is supposed to be a sudden stop of the target's rhythm.

>>90195353
Let's say the Nowhere arc begins here.

>Cut to the gathering crowd around where the racers are waiting for Mr. Nobody to show up at
>Jack walks through the crowd looking at the book, he notices there’s a distinct lack of stress in the atmosphere “Hold on, something’s off here...”
>“So you noticed that too?” asks Pym, who now comes into view “The people here aren't talking about what happened last night. They’re all fixated on other things, mostly the clean up. I don’t know if it’s small town mentality or a strong community bond, but you’d think there’d be a few people strung out from that whole ordeal.”

>We pan up to the sky where we see Mr. Nobody’s blimp
>On top of the blimp is the same blue big nosed guy who was with Mr. Nobody right after Dick blew up the bridge
>He’s just standing on top of the blimp, smiling, as he glows faintly
>We pan down into the bus attached to the blimp and see Mr. Nobody looking through a telescope at the crowd "Hmm, I could've sworn I saw Johnny Bravo down there. Did he die?"
>Mirror Master: "He's been dead."
>Mr. Nobody takes his eye off of the telescope "Oh, yes, that's right. I almost forgot, that was the universe where we made a wrong turn at Albuquerque."
>He walks over to a table and takes out a cylinder from a drawer, Mr. Nobody drops the contents into a bowl of water and watches it like a compass as the odd piece of meat spins and points in a direction
>“Just follow my rod, my rod never fails me!” muses Mr. Nobody as he draws a line on a map due northeast from Aberdale

>Back down in the crowd Jack is still looking at the Strickland Style book Seymour gave him, his words “If you survive the race.” repeat in his thoughts
>He folds his arms and taps his foot “Maybe I’ve gotten enough material already, is this race really worth it?”
cont.

>>90220726
>As he’s pondering a voice calls to him “Vince, there you are! What are you doing? Get in.” It’s Sam in the DeSoto “The president is about to announce the next checkpoint.”
>Max pops out of the window “Yeah Jack, Sam doesn’t want to leave without his boy toy.”
>Sam: “Quiet, you shark-toothed buffoon.”

Now how much innuendo is appropriate here? Because the only thing coming to me is Max making a joke about Sam wanting gnaw on a 'bone' and then Sam smacking him... her (very easy to forget that rather plot driving detail of Loki r63ing them) and saying something to get Jack in the car before Mr. Nobody lands.

>>90219390
Fights him before, that way Hex is stand-less and Pym as to fill him in.

Hex could get the eye and then use it to somehow lead to Mojo's demise at the hands of the natives.

>>90220566
So Pym tries to create a disruption before developing his own rhythm and it freezes him up, somehow. The pacing thing needs better definition otherwise it's going to get super broken.

>>90220861
>So Pym tries to create a disruption before developing his own rhythm and it freezes him up, somehow
Could be something along the lines of trying to do a disruption without knowing how to properly do it, therefore, the disruption's effect hits him instead of Shocker.

Here is something for when Hex collects the bounty on Shocker:

>Cut to the interior of a police station in Nowhere. There are two cops chitchatting when Hex burst through the door
>Officer: Looks like a damn bounty hunter, I’ll take care of this
>Hex: I’m looking for the one in charge of this place!
>Officer: That would be me, mister
>Hex: Good. Pym, bring him in!
>Pym enters the building carrying the tied up Shocker, he drops him in the ground
>Officer: What the hell is going on, pal?
>Hex kneels and takes off Shocker’s mask, showing his face for the first time “Herman Schultz, aka The Shocker. I’m here to collect the bounty on his head”
>Officer: Well, my boys back there confirmed your story; this cretin was wanted all across the union
>Hex: I already know that, there is also a big bounty on his person, and is bigger if we take into account the fact that I brought him alive
>Officer: Yeah, yeah, the money will be transferred to your account, mister. Forgive the inconveniences, we aren't a bank.
>Hex: No problem…Ah, one last thing: keep him gagged at all times and don't let him grab anything he could throw
>The duo leave the police station
>Herman Schultz “The Shocker”. Currently under police custody, can't continue on the race. Status: RETIRED
>Pym: Alright! Mission accomplished, Partn…
>Hex: I’m not sharing the reward with you, Pym

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Im so fucking lost in all of this,

It could make for a really good animated Japanese cartoon

>>90221061
The big question is what actually happens. Because I don't currently have any ideas for that.

>>90222142
Do a little bit of a time skip before the officer says the story is confirmed and I think it's good to go.

>>90222229
Yeah, whenever I step back and look at this I feel lost too with how much stuff we have going on in it.

>>90222357
>Officer: The Shocker... Boys, go check the database. Hold on here, cowboy, we ought to be sure you are telling the truth
>Hex: By all means, take all the time you need
>The officer leaves, a single cop standing guard in the room. Hex lights a cigarette and starts smoking inside the station
>Cop: Hey, you can’t smoke here!
>Hex stares at him and a puff of smoke comes out of the hole in his face
>Cop: u-uh…never mind
>A couple of minutes passes and the officer returns
There

>>90222762
I guess Sam and Max parting ways with Jack can happen after the Shocker fight, but before Pym and Hex enter the police station.
I have some ideas for how they part ways, but I don't want to get too far ahead of myself.

>>90222357
>The big question is what actually happens
Well, this is what the doc says about disruptions:
>A particular technique of Pacing is the "disruption" of the rhythm, a sudden halt of the natural flow that throw things off balance, leading to unlikely events to happen as the narrative tries to correct itself

>>90224178
Yeah, but what is Pym trying to do using the disruption and what actually happens when he does it?

>>90224230
He could attempt to stop the Shocker mobile or damage its engine. The effect on Pym could be a lesser version of what the Perfect Stretch was going to be:
>It is said that if one achieves a perfect Stretch, they can put someone in a state where they are doomed to forever move while at the same time remaining motionless. Robbed of all natural movement, they are stuck in a living Hell known as a ｢TWEEN｣ from which they cannot escape.

>>90224498
But what's his thought process?

He sees Hex pull off bullshit and thinks he might be able to cause one of the Shocker Mobile's tires to blow out, but instead blows out one of his own tires?

>>90225004
I think the backfire should only hit him, and since he's the driver and is now stuck in place, they are at risk of crashing.

>>90225217
I could really use more than just the vague discussion about the result.

Someone pitch some ideas of what Pym tries to do and what the situation is when he tries to do it.
The more details the better.

>>90220778
Sam could tell him that he is only interested in the opportunity of starring in one of Vince's books, then Max says something like "yeah, sure", makes kissing noises and Sam smacks him in the head before calling Vince again

>>90227105
So no dick jokes in this particular scene?

>>90227607
Nah, probably on their way to Nowhere, that's when Vince has enough of their shit and jumps ship.

>>90227663
Hmm, my idea for when Vince finds his opportunity to bail goes something like

Sam and Max get a phone call, fight over who gets to answer, almost crash, Sam answers
>"Hello? Yes. Uh-huh? Uh-huh? Oh. Yeah. Yeah. Yeah? Yeah?! Yeah! Oh! Yes! Goodbye."
>"Was it the commissioner?"
>"Yeah."
>"New case?"
>"No, he thought he was calling a sex line and I didn't have the heart to tell him he had the wrong number."
and then they get an e-mail or something with info about Loki and Vince says that he'll only hold them back when they get serious and takes that chance to stay in Nowhere.

>>90205429
It seems to me that the actual nature of the effect is not that they don't notice he's there, but that they expect him to be there, so anything unusual he does is actually witnessed, but nobody cares because they were expecting it to happen.

>>90228117
So, if the Blue Meanie uses his ability on himself, is basically a stealth effect? He could just walk in front of someone and whack him and said person won't bat an eye

>>90228306
It'd just come as no surprise. They'd still see the hit coming and fall down, but they'd make no effort to dodge or take any action they would've taken as if no one was punching at them.

>>90229233
Then that's how he could stir shit in Smallville, attacking its inhabitants without any reprisal, though it raises the question about how Wander and The Beatles are able to resist the effect of the Blue Meanie's Stand

Wheb shouls Jack reveal his identity? When he's attacked by the undead dogs in the middle of the desert or when he confronts Hex and Pym in city?

>>90230029
The power of music, anon.
The power of music is not effected but "coming as no surprise".

It's like carpet bombing an area when you don't know where the target is, only in this case the bomb is music, and no one is harmed by it aside from the Blue Meanie.

>>90230577
So we have WACHA happen a lot, we show the beard, but not the face, and then the face when he confronts them in Nowhere.

>>90230721
I think he's wearing the full armor and mask in the farm

>>90230788
Maybe he takes the mask off when looking at the opened bone and all we see of his face is the beard.

>>90215105
So what edits need the fight between Spongebob and Goofy?

>>90232030
Reading it again, I'm not sure if any edits are needed.

There's a few things to touch up here and there and expand on.
Like we can't just say "the corpse leg merges with Goofy" we have to say a big bone emerges from the ground and a thing comes out of it, impaling Goofy's leg causing it to suddenly swell with muscle.
All that description is necessary since the corpse hasn't been explained yet.

I'll do those tweaks when I get to that part though.

>>90232649
The doc also says that the giant bone was excavated by Jack when he sensed that the corpse part disappeared. So the corpse's leg just breaks free from the bone and stabs Goofy's leg like if it were an arrow?

>>90232937
That works. Then when Jack digs up the bone and opens it the proper way, he sees the hole in the top of it where it broke free. Then the skeletons dig themselves out since someone disturbed the God Bone.

>>90233778
Does he fight the skeletons or he leaves as soon as possible?

>>90233849
He might say to them that he did not steal the contents of the bone, they advance on him anyway, WACHA, to be continued or the slice is what cuts to the next scene.

>>90234274
I had the idea that the skeletons keep reassembling themselves, forcing Jack to retreat and Navis, who was watching from afar, to call reinforcements to contain them.

>>90235776
We can work that scene in, I just think it'd be best left to later than immediately after.

The skeletons wouldn't stray too far from the God Bone itself.

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If the skeletons were the dogs that licked the God Bone, Jack could have the constant fear that the theft of the Corpse part may raise Courage's body wherever it was buried.

>>90237904
Courage was the only dog who ever licked the God Bone with the self control to stop licking it.

He wouldn't rise from the grave for that.
Jack can still fear that he would though.

>>90238728
So is that an additional motivation for recovering the corpse part? The memory of Courage could appear in Jack's mind when one of the Corpse parts enter into play, motivating him to keep going.

It should be left ambiguous if the God Bone actually has any influence on Courage

>>90239520
I'm not sure if it's additional motivation since Jack already knows about the corpse (though not all the details) and that something horrible will happen if it's ever assembled.

The God Bone seems to have been chosen as a hiding place for the corpse part since anyone who disturbs it would be attacked by skeletons, so it might be two separate independent supernatural phenomenon at play.

OK thread, time for you to not fucking die as soon as I go to bed.

>>90240258
>and that something horrible will happen if it's ever assembled
Is that like how each of Nobody's minions see the erasure of heroism in a different way? Because other character are also aware that "something bad" will happen if the corpse is completed, but they don't know what exactly.

>>90236947
Does it has a specific range? Will the skeletons just fall apart if they leave it?

>>90241711
Jack is somewhat aware that there is something sealed within the corpse.

Probably the only one throughout the part who is even slightly aware.

>>90242874
They'll stop being animated if the bone is left undisturbed for long enough.

>>90237904
You know, they broke pretty easily.

Maybe there's just a lot of them and leaving a dead dog animator out in the middle of a wasteland seems like a bad idea to everyone.

So Strickland gets Josh, the God Bone, and...
What other crap are they going to acquire during this part?

>>90243597
Chameleon, but he dies on the way to Strickland. They could recover something from Springfield that confirms that the remnants of the WB were partially involved with the incidents

>>90243998
Big Skeleton?

Wouldn't want to banish him to hell.

>>90245166
Could work, does he get trashed by the Human mole or when Loki kicks the bucket?

>>90245212
He probably loses any will to fight once Loki is banished since he's no longer bound to follow his orders.

So he just stands there, harmless.

Is the Human Mole a bad person?

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>>90245243
>Is the Human Mole a bad person?
No, just an angry freak

>>90245392
Would Big Skeleton point out that he technically doesn't have a face?

>>90245471
Nor eyes, but I don't think the albino manlet cares.

>>90245875
Is he actually protecting the corpse part, or is he just attacking whoever wrecked his trailer?

>>90245967
The original idea was that the circus' true purpose (or at least of a group of the performers) was guarding the corpse part, Herman's trailer could be there acting as a safety measure.

>>90246081
OK, so the current ringleader wasn't the original, he bought the place out or is holding someone hostage to keep everyone in line until Loki shows up.

>>90246320
Yeah, Stromboli and the Coachman from Pinocchio became the ringleaders, there was also the idea that the Coachman was connected to the WB

Were there other Stand users in the circus?

>>90246513
Yeah, the Coachman was one of the WB's handlers for gangs or something. That's how he and Loki know each other.

>>90246999
Jojo from Jojo's circus I think also has a stand in this.

I think Sam and Max get the tip off about the circus from a help ad or a message for help sent by Jojo to wherever that then gets sent to them.
The chief calls them up >>90227973 thinks he got the wrong number, and just sends the info to them a different way.

>>90247367
>the Coachman was one of the WB's handlers for gangs or something
He was first suggested as a debt collector in the market arc of part 5, don't know if he is keeping that rank.

>>90248080
Either way, he was with the WB and Loki knows him and he's working for or with Loki because of it.

Loki's plan is probably to get a base of power and try to re-create something like the WB, only more catered to his particular brand of dickery.

>>90247367
>Jojo from Jojo's circus I think also has a stand in this
That Stand was first suggested for part 5, I'm nor sure if we are using it

>>90249021
So Loki plans to restore part of the WB's hold on the mortal world while the Coachman is helping him because he hopes of getting rewarded by his master. Is Stromboli aware of the supernatural crap going on?

>>90249844
Well if she lacks a stand then she still has a lion to fight for her, and that's just as cool.

As for Stromboli, he could be aware. He's just as evil as the Coachman is.

What kind of silly shit should Mr. Nobody do next while announcing the next destination?

Since that's exactly where I'm at in the writing process.

>>90251455
Since the town was attacked by plants, he could be making a salad in front of the audience

The fight against Shocker takes place in the ruins of the farm or near them?

>>90252887
Starts off near it, might go into it.
Not sure if there's enough left of the farm to make the fight worth having in it.

The basement could work as a pitfall or something.

>>90253233
The charred frame of the house may be still around, or Jack could have a built a shelter years ago. Does he just stand aside watching the other three fight?

>>90253481
I think he interferes near the end when Pym and Hex have pretty much secured Shocker and are going to leave anyway.

Because Jack was busy telling them to leave, Spongebob and Goofy were able to have their fight undisturbed.

>>90253690
Will they try to face Jack when he first appears or he intimidated them enough to have their duel away from him?

>>90254717
Spongebob and Goofy never meet Jack, Jack never sees either of them since he was elsewhere at the time. That's why Jack goes after Hex and Pym, they were the only people he saw out in Bagge Farm Nowhere that day.

>>90255659
No, I was talking about Pym, Hex and Shocker

>>90255689
Maybe he swipes the Shocker's car, yells "Leave this land!" and the Shocker, not wanting any part of a man wearing a demon mask who can cut cars, runs away to the nearest cover he can find: the Bagge Farm.

Enter Pym and Hex, Jack watches from a distance and leaves after he sees they have no intention of sticking around now that they have Shocker.

It could be Pym and Hex never even see Jack until they're in the city and he confronts them.

I suppose I should start writing less the thread up and die.

>>90230992
He could permanently lose the mask when fighting Tulio

>>90243147
Seems that Frollo and the guardian in Brazil are also aware that there is something hidden in the corpse

>>90259410
Tulio is way way WAY off in the distance, like 4 months away at this rate (seriously, if it's just me doing the bulk of the writing, it's going to take that long, this is a fuck long part).
We're not even a third of the way into this part and he's at the beginning of the third phase of the race.

Jack's gotta lose the mask sooner than that.

>>90220778
>Sam: “Quiet, you shark-toothed buffoon, I just like the idea of having my character printed in books.”
>Max: “Yeah, sure.” and starts making kissing noises
>Sam smacks Max on the back of the head before calling Vince again “What do you say, Vince? Want to keep going?”

>Mr. Nobody’s blimp has landed, Mr. Nobody walks out holding a bowl of vegetables
>The blades the propellers in various places on the blimp as still spinning as he addresses the crowd “People of Aberdale, today you are all winners!” as he throws the vegetables into the blades, dicing them into small pieces “Such dedication to your home and community, such selflessness from (some) of my dear Commandos!”
>Pan of the crowd, we see Wander sitting with a bunch of firefighters
>Back to Mr. Nobody, he dramatically places a hand over his heart, or at least the heart shaped hole in his chest “Such a traumatic ordeal befell your last night, you all must still be in shock from it.”
>The crowd is silent, then there’s a voice “Actually, we’re fine. Thanks for asking.” with murmurs of agreement
>Mr. Nobody straightens up and throws the bowl away “Oh.” he claps his hands together “Well in that case, on with the race.”
>There’s a cheer from the crowed, the big blue man is laughing in the background
>Mr. Nobody pulls up the screen on the blimp again “This next leg will put your endurance to the test.” he starts pointing and moving across a map, “The next checkpoint” he keeps going across the map “will be a little over 2,400 miles away” he’s reached the East Coast now “so you’ll get 72 hours to reach...” he circles a point on the map “CN City!”
>The racers immediately mobilize and start darting out of town
>Mr. Nobody is still on stage as Dr. Henry Killinger hands him some papers “I suppose some extra good karma wouldn’t hurt.” he signs the papers, we see they are emergency aide papers for Aberdale

>>90260640
>We see a map of North America, TOM is standing in front of it
>“Welcome back to the Wacky Races, I’m your host, TOM. If you haven’t been keeping up, the race has entered it’s third leg, and it is a dozy. This one takes the racers all the way from the Arizona Desert to the northeastern coast line.”
>The map changes showing a close up of the central part of the American Midwest “Ten hours have passed since the racers left Aberdale,” a line appears going from Aberdale “and they’ve spread out all over the place.”
>The line splits off into dozens, hundreds of other lines wiggling in all east bound directions “It seems some racers are playing It safe and avoiding the competition until they’re closer to the finish line, while others are clashing head on all struggling to take the most direct route.”
>“It seems some alliances have started to form out of necessity so stopping for sleep won’t be an issue, while others are determined to fight it out.”
>The map is now over Kansas and zooms in

I'm still hard pressed for what EXACTLY Pym tries to do using pacing. The ability just isn't well defined enough in its application for me to figure out how Pym even attempts to use it. MELODY had timing, STYLES had posing, stands a bullshit magic punch ghosts, but pacing is too poorly defined in what triggers the ability to start warping what the universe believes to be true.

Ideas and discussion are sorely needed before I can proceed from here.

>>90256108
>???: Listen, you all! Leave this land at once and never return! This is the first warning!
>Shocker crawls out of the wreckage of his car and walks toward his attacker with a small limp
>Pym: Look, your bounty is still breathing
>Hex: Good, but we have another problem right now
>Shocker: “You have a lot of guts, buddy” He aims at the stranger “don't you know who you are dealing with…”
>The armored figure remains motionless; the eyes of his demonic mask seem to pierce Shocker
>Shocker: “I…I am T-the…” He backs away slowly and lowers his gauntlets, shaking in fear
>???: I won’t repeat myself, abandon this accursed land. This goes for all of you
>Pym: What is doing a samurai in the middle of the desert?
>Hex: Keep quiet, this guy is serious
>???: What I do here is none of your business. You three were the ones that invaded this land. There won’t be a third warning!
>Hex: Ok… listen partner, we aren’t looking for trouble. We are after that clown you almost chop down with your oversized knife; we didn’t know this place was off-limits…
>The samurai doesn’t respond
>Hex: Just let us capture him and we leave your ranch and never return, just as you want…
>Pym: Hex! He’s running away!
>Shocker escaped from the scene, running towards the remains of a house while doing his teleporting trick
>Hex: “Sonuva…Pym, the car” He looks at the samurai, he is still motionless
>Pym: Get in the car already!
>Hex: “Yeah” He looks again at the samurai before running to the car
>The duo drives toward the scorched farm. The samurai finally moves, following the car with his gaze

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>>90261234
Well maybe if we figure out how other people use pacing that will help out.

Like does Jonah Hex use pacing in some way? There were early mentions of him being able to "Read the Story" before he gets Nameless World.

Basically if Pacing has something to do with the nature of "Comics as A medium" maybe we can mess around with a core aesthetic of comics then (kind of like how melody uses cartoon logic to trick the cosmos, and Style uses posing to resist harm.)

Like say those big WHAM PUNCH KAPOW sound effects. Maybe Pacing is based on "Energetic and Dynamic Movements" that Trick the universe to imparting greater impact or understanding. A punch doesn't do much. but a WHAK sends someone flying.

It could extend to Pym's stand later, as perhaps its "shrinking and growing" powers use Comics Foreshortening to make things bigger and smaller.

Just shooting the shit.

>>90261760
More succinctly...

Melody Is Weaponized Comedy
Style is Weaponized Cartooning
Pacing may be weaponized Comic Techniques.

Precognition based on "storytelling awareness"

Sound Effects improving attacks and actions.

Foreshortening making things bigger or smaller.

Motion Lines allowing one to see where things came from.

Breaking through panels. Leaping FROM panel to panel. ETC.

>>90261718
Yeah, that'd work, but the part before still needs to be done.

What's going on here though
>Hex: “Sonuva…Pym, the car” He looks at the samurai, he is still motionless
>Pym: Get in the car already!
>Hex: “Yeah” He looks again at the samurai before running to the car

It feels like something got switched around here with who is telling who to get the lead out.

>>90261760
Right now I only have two examples to work with, both of which I had to pull out of my ass on the fly.
Hex - who uses pacing to turn things into western showdowns
Frank - who uses pacing to turn things into gritty action movies

So, for example, if Frank were on the moon, the lunar rover he crashes or shoots will still turn into a Hollywood fireball despite there being no gas or oxygen present.
He changes the genre from space and science fiction to Hollywood gritty war story.

That's pretty much the only shit I've been able to put together and the best way I can think to explain what we have established already.

I'm still having trouble differentiating a narrative shift from a disruption, or they could be one and the same if the genres are just that drastically different.

>>90262006
Style isn't weaponizing cartooning, that's just whatever the fuck we need it to be. Like Hamon.
It's pretty much just highly specialized, weaker, and controlled melody.

Melody materializes objects temporarily.

Pacing maintains impossible objects so long as no one thinks to question them.

Melody allows the user to alter themselves in impossible ways and shake off fatal injuries as long as the timing is right.

Pacing allows the user to alter how people around them behave and act out scenarios they control.

One is an improv performer.

One is a stage crashing conductor.

Hijacking the performance from within and hijacking it from afar.

Tricking people into thinking the lines are in the scripts and changing the script beforehand.

Any of this sound right? I'm not sure if I'm onto something or getting further off track.

>>90261760
>There were early mentions of him being able to "Read the Story"
Yeah, that was elaborated into part of what Pacing can do and extended not just to Hex, but anyone who can use the Pacing.

>>90262269
>It feels like something got switched around here with who is telling who to get the lead out
Hex turned around and stared at Old Jack to see if he was going to attack them, and Pym snapped him out of his trance

>>90262006
>>90262616
This is what we currently have in the doc about Pacing, still need some elaboration in its applications, it doesn't include the part about the panels:
>Pacing requires one to understand that there is a natural flow that govern the motion of things, known as "Narrative"
>Inside this Narrative, people, animals and objects possess a particular rhythm they follow that dictates the likely outcome of their actions
>When someone uses the Pacing, the user extends (mentally?) his own rhythm into his surroundings
>Everything that is caught in the user's rhythm will behave according to it instead of their natural rhythm, the Pacing user basically becomes the conductor of the scene
>By "reading the Narrative" a user of Pacing is able to predict future events as long as they follow the current rhythm that governs them
>A particular technique of Pacing is the "disruption" of the rhythm, a sudden halt of the natural flow that throw things off balance, leading to unlikely events to happen as the narrative tries to correct itself

>>90263603
The panel thing isn't part of pacing, that's something Hex figures out using pacing in tandem with his stand and then Pym figures it out too.

Hex using pacing and his stand to send bullets into other panels and Pym using pacing and his stand to alter the size of panels and also break the boarders.

So once we zoom in on Kansas on the map, let's just be right into the action.

Shocker Mobile and Rover are clashing in the wastelands of Nowhere.

>>90261234
One thing that I recall about disruptions is that they could need an object to physically strike the target to disrupt it (in Hex' case, he uses bullets). The way Pacing is described seems to indicate that there is this force, the rhythm that the user taps into and clashes against an opponent's own rhythm.

>>90263603
Basically, the way I'm reading this is that the user grants a certain "Flavor" to their actions in the Narrative that allows them to do crazy stunts a certain way, but in doing so allow it to extend to others and other objects.

Hex's showdowns, Franks 90's EXPLOSIVENESS.

Could Adam West Batman Shennanigans count as a certain application of Pacing for example?

>>90266656
Yes, I think Batmanning with the POW WHAM BIFF could work as a form of pacing.

Not sure if Batman logic would though.

>>90266544
OK, so a disruption needs to be infused with an object. The knife gun is a disruption. The bullets ricocheting in just the right way is a disruption. The car turning into a fireball despite having no gas in it is a disruption.

You set your narrative and then put into place disruptions in it.

So, what flavor is Pym's narrative? What silver age shit was Antman known for? Or was he more bronze age?

>>90266826
Batman Logic could just be "Reading The Narrative" as expressed in his own certain way.

>Adam West Batman figures out Mr. Nobody's whole evil plan just from having read a newspaper article on the new museum opening.

Is Bruce in this thing somewhere? Like as a side character who knew "the Hero" or what?

>>90266886
We have super old Lex Luthor for that role.

I don't know where we could even fit in old Bruce. He might break the plot with a power like that.

I mean, Adam West could be in Springfield, but I have no idea what role he'd play.

>>90266826
>The knife gun is a disruption
Hadn't considered that, Punisher's arsenal being anomalies held together only through Frank's rhythm sounds good.

>what flavor is Pym's narrative?
In CN City, he points out the flaws of Watt's robot and they seem to cripple it's function during the fight, maybe he's able to tamper with the suspension of disbelief.

>>90266886
>Is Bruce in this thing somewhere?
Not that I'm aware of

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>>90267673
>In CN City, he points out the flaws of Watt's robot and they seem to cripple it's function during the fight, maybe he's able to tamper with the suspension of disbelief
Perhaps his Pacing power is "Explaining Things Away"

Doing the whole startrek "Describe Something Complicated and then explain it curtly with a simple metaphor." which allows him to "Disable" opponents by elucidating on why something they're doing wouldn't make sense. While then going into depth about how "No Really, If I calculate this jump right I will totally bounce off the helicopter propeller." Or maybe... something more in line with Pym's usual stuff...

Like summoning shrunken Chainsaws.

>>90267673
>>90267797
So, we have Rover and the Shocker Mobile clashing in a wasteland, for some reason neither car has been toppled over yet.

How does Pym explain... something in such a way that fucks him over?

Once he gets fucked over by his own disruption, Shocker tries to shoot them, or bomb them, something from a distance since Hex's pacing isn't influencing him at the moment.
Then WACHA. Shocker Mobile is cut in half
And we go into >>90261718

>>90268012
>How does Pym explain... something in such a way that fucks him over?

Probably by taking his own nonexistant suspension of disbelief and applying it to himself.

>We've been going at top speed for at least 10 minutes on overdrive, there is no way the engine can take this much longer.

Then as if on queue the engine overheats. and explodes.

Rough Idea, Its been a while since i've been in these threads, so I need to re-read and catch up with what we have so far.

>>90268238
Maybe he means to apply it to Shocker's car, but instead it gets applied to his car.

And it gets fixed just as quickly since Pym built the dang thing and knows it shouldn't be doing what it's doing.

This kind of reminds me of LOS MAGOS DEL TIEMPOOOOOOOOO with dilating time and shit getting out of control once all the time dilations go into effect all at once.
I always wanted to play a game of that.

Well, I'm super fucking tired.

I'll start stitching together Nowhere and fluffing it out tomorrow if I get the time.

And I sincerely hope that I will not need to make a thread again any time soon.
Because if this thread dies, I'm not making a new one until after I end up with all of Nowhere already finished, and I don't like doing arcs like that on my own with no one to call me out on shit.

>>90268012
Another thing I was thinking is that Pym may try to read the narrative of Shocker's car and then manipulate it, but he doesn't take into account the fact that Shocker can switch places with the help of his Stand, so he miscalculate his attempt.

>>90268461
>dilating time and shit getting out of control once all the time dilations go into effect all at once
Something like that could be what Pym does to generate the final disruption against Stardust.

>>90267797
>Like summoning shrunken Chainsaws
He's been trying to reverse engineer the capsule he received as a prize in San Fransokyo all this time, which in hindsight becomes a waste of time once his Stand can alter the size of things.

>>90261718
And for after they defeat Shocker:

>Hex: Now, what was that thing you said back in the big city? Something about laying a finger on you…
>Hex kneels over the defeated Shocker and presses one of his temples with his finger
>Shocker: Ugh…you smug asshole…
>Hex: Hey look, I can lay a finger on you after all! you know what else I can lay on you?
>Hex stands up and delivers a kick to his face, knocking him out cold
>Pym: Therapeutic, is it?
>Hex: You could say that…
>They start laughing until they hear the clanging of steel behind them, Pym turns around and freaks out
>Pym: Oh crap. Hex, the guy with the katana…
>The samurai appeared right behind them with his sword unsheathed, but planted in the ground
>Pym: Listen buddy, we are done here. See? (He points at Shocker) We have no more business in your ranch...
>Samurai: Leave this place immediately! You have been warned
>Hex: We want no trouble, partner, let us leave…
>Pym: Yeah, yeah, we have…wait, you said there won’t be a third warning
>Hex: (internally) huh, he’s right. The samurai already gave us an ultimatum
>Samurai: Leave now; this is the second and last warning
>Pym: Ok buddy, now I'm sure that you can't count because…
>Hex: Pym, load that bastard in the car
>Pym: What?
>Hex: Learn to read between lines, kid
>They pass besides him carefully. Hex turns around to see the samurai one last time; He’s is in the same position, not even turned around to see them leave

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What was going to be the Frontmen's Stand? Will they use it in Springfield?

>>90271382
It's not a waste of time.

I've been thinking his stand does what it does because at the time of Pym getting one, he really, REALLY wanted to figure out how the capsules worked, but since the capsules were technology derived from a stand ability, he was having no luck, so his stand gave him size altering powers.

>>90277446
Is that too much screen time for Jack? I feel after slicing the Shocker Mobile and saying his ultimatum, he wouldn't say anything else and just his presence would hurry them along.

>>90279476
>Is that too much screen time for Jack?
Perhaps, instead of that, they could spot Jack walking toward them and they hurry into the car.

>>90279512
I kind of want to have Jack be able to make a point by not saying anything and people know by looking at him to just back away.

But that also might be a bit much.

Still don't have a good feel for how S5 Jack acts.

>>90279579
He could start acting like original Jack after he returns to the civilization and spends some time with Vince. In combat, however, he goes full s5.

>>90280215
I had an idea for CN City where Old Jack tells Jack about how he's been there before and met Johnny Bravo once at a lundro-mat.

>>90280469
Is Jack still in contact with Strickland or he disappeared from their radar when he became a hermit?

>>90281187
I think they stopped contacting him when Chane took over and he never bothered to get in touch with them again after their act got cleaned up.

>>90279476
I though his Stand only affected insects at the beginning, when he starts altering the size of other things?

>>90282974
When he gets better at making his own rhythm.

Once he's able to see the STAR leylines, he can start messing with them using his stand.
Then he's doing the close up perspective thing to change the size of stuff other than insects.

>>90269307
Well, if the thread dies and stays too long dead, I'll try to do a new one then.

>>90282713
He has been away for 50 years (assuming that he started guarding the farm since the end of part 1), how is he going to react to all the shit going on? Is he going to meet again with Strickland?

>>90283212
Aren't the close-ups supposed to be the last skill he uses against Stardust?

>>90284515
All the shit going on is the same as usual for him.

Remember, creepy stuff always happens in Nowhere, and he's been there for a long time.

And as for Stardust, he traps him in a close up.
It's different from the perspective trick.

How should unfold the fight against Shocker?

>>90287229
How do you want it to unfold?
Dramatic showdown, ducking behind corners?
Bouncing bullets to make something collapse on top of him?
Shocker steps on an old hoe and it slams him in the face?

I haven't started writing yet, and probably still won't have time until later tonight.

>>90287288
>ducking behind corners? Bouncing bullets to make something collapse on top of him?
That depends on how big are the remains of the farm and if there is anything standing to serve as an obstacle.

There's also the fact that Shocker is finally cornered, so he's will attempt to kill Hex if possible.

>>90287459
I'd imagine there's probably nothing left of the farm house.

The barn, maybe something.

>>90287683
Then the fight is gonna be in an open field. Shocker could use the debris of the place to swap places during the duel, allowing him to attack from multiple angles

>>90288200
Maybe Shocker trips over a huge old tree stump with a sprout growing up the middle.

So how does Pym help in the fight? Is he the one that figures out that Shocker's Stand is voice activated?

>>90290648
Yes, that's how they know to gag him later.

>>90290685
And I know just how he should figure it out.

So Shocker is running away, he says something, anything, and he drops something right after.
Pym looks at what he dropped, but keeps chasing him with Hex (Rover is still stalled or whatever), as they're chasing him, Shocker charges his electro gauntlets again and repeats himself then disappears, replaced with the thing he dropped, Pym gets a look of realization and turns around just in time to get zapped, blocking Hex from also getting zapped.
Shocker gets shot at for his troubles and takes cover somewhere.

While Shocker and Hex are playing hide and seek, Pym recovers and yells to Hex that Shocker can switch places with things he's touched, but it's voice activated.

So Hex then goads him into doing it by shooting at him, then Shocker has him at pointblank saying "You missed" right before a barn door falls on top of him showing Hex was aiming to bounce the bullets into the super rusted hinges.

>>90291486
Pym could also notice that there is a skip in Shocker's rhythm each time he teleports, so he manages to predict when he is about to teleport.

>>90261234
>Two cars are speeding through the wasteland leaving long dust trails
>We pan around to someone in full battle armor watching them through some binoculars
>What he sees are the Shocker Mobile and Rover
>The focus is now on them, the two cars are clashing, each trying to ram the other into flipping over
>The passenger’s side of Rover slams into the driver’s side of the Shocker Mobile
>Cut to inside Rover, Hex yells at Pym “Keep it steady, I’m trying to line up my shots!”
>Pym just grits his teeth and jerks the wheel as the Shocker Mobile tries to slam them again
>This time, Rover moves in the same direction, the two cars don’t connect and Hex begins getting his shots off
>The Shocker Mobile quickly decelerates to dodge, he’s trying to make a break for it
>Pym turns the wheel to follow him
>Pym: “We've been going at top speed for at least 10 minutes on overdrive, there is no way his engine can take this much longer.”
>Then as if on queue the engine in Pym’s car locks up and they begin to lose speed
>Pym: “What the hell just happened? None of the warnings went off.”
>Hex growls “Good job, you just disrupted your own car.”
>Pym thumps the dash in frustration “Dammit, I can’t get it back into top gear.”
>Cut to Shocker in his Shocker Mobile, he looks in one of the mirrors and sees Rover getting further away
>Shocker is still looking back “About damn time.”
>Cut to a little ways in front of the Shocker Mobile and that armored figure who was watching them is directly in his way
>Shocker is paying no attention, still looking back

>WACHA

>The Shocker Mobile has been cleaved in half straight down the middle, Shocker’s eyes are wide as he turns in slow motion to see his car splitting apart around the armored man
>Pym stops his Rover a good distance away after seeing this, they both get out and begin approaching the wreck
>Pym: “Well I’ll be, samurai beats pantyhose ninja.”
cont.

>>90292485
>>90261718
Making some tweaks to this, nothing big, but worth posting to see if there's any blowback.

>The armored man speaks “Listen to me! Leave this land at once and never return! This is the first warning!”
>Shocker crawls out of the wreckage of his car and walks toward his attacker with a small limp
>Pym: “Look, your bounty is still breathing.”
>Hex: “Good, but we have another problem right now.”
>Shocker: “You’ve got a lot of guts, buddy.” He aims a gauntlet at the stranger “Don't you know who you’re dealing with?”
>The armored figure remains motionless; the eyes of his demonic mask seem to pierce straight through Shocker
>Shocker: “I… I am T-the…” He backs away slowly and lowers his gauntlets, shaking in fear
>The armored figure speaks again “Do not test my patience, abandon this accursed land. This goes for all of you.”
>Pym: “What is a samurai doing in the middle of the desert anyway?”
>Hex: “Keep quiet, this guy is serious.”
>The armored samurai speaks again “What I do here is none of your concern. You three have trespassed upon this land. invaded this land. There will not be a third warning!”
>Hex: “OK… listen partner, we aren’t looking for trouble. We’re just after that clown you almost chopped in half with your oversized knife; we didn’t know this place was off-limits…”
>The samurai doesn’t respond
>Hex: “Just let us capture him and we leave your ranch and never return, just like you want…”
>Pym: “Hex! He’s running away!”
>Shocker is fleeing the scene, running towards the only structure in the barren landscape: the remains of a house and an old barn
>Hex: “Sonuva… Pym, the car.” He looks at the samurai, he is still motionless
>Pym: “Yeah, get in!”
>Hex: “Yeah...” He looks again at the samurai before running to the car
>The duo drives toward the scorched farm. The samurai finally moves, following the car with his gaze

Working on the next part now.

>>90292531
>While coming up on the barn, Hex speaks “Stop the car here.”
>Pym stops the car immediately “What? What kind crap are you seeing coming this time?”
>Hex gets out “Nothing, I just don’t want that guy stealing our ride and gettin’ away in it. He’s got nowhere to go, we’ll take him down on foot.”

>Shocker is still running to the barn
>Hex and Pym are jogging after him, Hex reloads his spare revolver, Pym is a number of steps behind him
>Pym is watching the Shocker intently
>Once Shocker’s between the burned up house and the barn, Pym notices he dropped something and also said something, but he couldn’t quite hear it
>Shocker ducks into the burned up house and disappears somewhere behind cover
>Hex slowly approaches the house, cautiously going inside
>Pym looks at the thing Shocker dropped “It’s just a battery.” and picks it up
>Pym can just hear the Shocker yell something from the ruins “Got you!”
>Suddenly Pym experiences an odd feeling, as if something in his peripheral vision changed, or the air pressure shifted, something just felt wrong for a split second, a split second just before the battery in his hand vanished and Shocker appeared
>Pym: “Hex!”
>Shocker is surprised as well, exclaiming “Oh hell!” right before zapping Pym with his gauntlets
>Pym spasms and falls to the ground as Shocker leaps back, “Crap, I was hoping I could just run.”
>And run Shocker does as bullets whiz past him, Shocker looks like he almost does a jig before making a mad dash to the barn
>Hex stops and looks over Pym, who is still breathing
>Hex turn towards the barn and is about to walk away when Pym grabs his leg and says “Switches places… things he touches… voice acti… vated...” before passing out
>Hex: “Huh, so that’s it.”

>Cut to inside the barn, Shocker is behind an old tractor engine that is more rust now than anything

>>90293854
OK, now what's Shocker's next move?

Does he curse the fact that Pym picked up a piece of garbage and that he could've made a clean escape?
This is where he finally resolves to kill Hex. What's his strategy?

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>>90293854
>Shocker is surprised as well, exclaiming “Oh hell!” right before zapping Pym with his gauntlets
Just a heads up: Shocker gauntlets can't zap people, they shoot concentrated blasts of air.

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:-DDDDDDD

>>90294278
Well I've been doing this wrong the entire time then and feel foolish.
I'm glad I never stopped to focus on the damn things before now, but I have been calling them electro gauntlets.

So he knocks the wind out of Pym.

So what's his next move? Somehow something big and heavy is going to end up landing on him.

>>90294480
He could do the trick he has been doing with the air cannon in his car, but with the blast of his gauntlets

>>90294663
I think that'd just get him shot.

Unless he tries to shoot something out of the barn, like he's aiming at Hex with killing intent, Hex dodges, SHocker thinks he's won and plans to switch places with the thing and steal Rover, but the thing his shot was shot out of the air by Hex and landed where he wanted it to be, right where the door was falling from one of the shots Shocker thought Hex missed.

I dunno. I just like doing the ruse cruise. I feel we need to bring that back a little in this part, which is what I've been trying to do with Hex.

Congratulations. The autism has become so impenetrably dense I don't have it in me to bully you guys anymore.

>>90294826
He could also use the gauntlets' blast to leap into the air and the vibrations of them to weaken the structure of the barn. In fact, that last part resembles the ability of Mojo's Stand and Hex could believe that he somehow got his hands on Shocker's tech before Pym notices that Mojo has a Stand.

>>90295656
I want the barn to still be standing at the end so when they leave and Jack's still there, we can get a pan up and out and see "Bagge Farm" in faded letters on it.

The duel between Goofy and Spongebob is happening at the same time that Hex vs Shocker, right? When should Jack rush to check the giant bone?

>>90292531
That last exchange between Hex and Pym still feels off for some reason

>>90297353
I also brought that up.
Any ideas for how to tweak it? I mostly left that alone when I was making my tweaks to it.

Maybe just take out the last line from Hex.
>Hex takes one more look at the samurai while getting into the car

As for the Goofy fight, yeah, that's happening at around the same time or right after. I have some stuff typed up for the transition to it, but that's for after Hex VS Shocker is done.

>>90297449
Make it so they retreat together, and Hex is about to get into the car before turning to look at Jack

>>90297665
So it'd be
>Pym: “Yeah, get in!”
>Hex keeps his good eye on the samurai as they both run back to the car

>>90298323
Then Pym calls him after he starts the engine and Hex finally gets in the car

>>90298420
So...
>Hex: “Sonuva… Pym, the car.” He looks at the samurai, he is still motionless, Hex keeps his good eye on the samurai as they both run back to the car
>Hex pauses at the car to look back at the samurai until Pym starts the car
>The duo drives toward the scorched farm. The samurai finally moves, following the car with his gaze
???

>>90299840
Yeah, that's fine

What is Navis' response after watching the dog skeletons raising in the desert?

>>90299965
Not sure. Haven't decided if she should go down and investigate the scene of Spongebob's murder yet.

I say "go down" but I don't think she has any elevation.

I'm thinking Goofy would take the tank of pillar propane off of Spongebob's person.

>>90300036
Yes, he's taking the tank of propane from Spongebob's remains

Since the skeletons keep regenerating and they are bound to the bone, they could start digging up the bone and try to push it around, which drives Navis to call Strickland for help.

>>90300306
Hmm, I still need to do some re-ordering with this arc.

My idea for the last scene of this arc is someone asking Jack or old Jack asking if Jack would get disqualified if old Jack tagged along with him.
Then Jack cites Ringo and how his mates are traveling with him despite not being entered.
Gives us a good segue to Smallville.

But anyway, where I'm still at is the final fight between Shocker and Hex in the Bagge barn.

>>90300614
What else he could do against Hex, besides just blasting him and try to bring down the barn on his head?

>>90301082
That's the problem I'm having, I'm just not familiar with what the Shocker does.

I can BS something, but it might not be satisfying.

>>90301216
Aside from what was already mentioned, his suit can generate a vibrational field around himself that deflects physical attacks and prevents him from being grappled (and shakes off spider-man's web).

>>90301743
So a big thing landing on him would still hit him because it has greater surface area that what he's able to deflect.

The barn door might still work.

>>90277880
You know, I still have no idea what Snake-Eye's stand should be or what it should do.
Maybe it lets him merge objects with people, it can be useful or useless depending on the object and the imagination of the person who gets merged with it.

>>90283563
Hopefully it'll survive another night.

>>90301955
I remember that Snake eyes' Stand was suggested to be something like that, and that it gained power each time one of the band's member was taken down.

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>>90301216
The barn has a second floor, he could leap to it with the help of his gauntlets and attack from above

>>90305682
So are we going with Shocker trying to kill Hex, or Shocker using that as a fake out to attempt another escape?

>>90305780
Kill Hex. He's cornered, he's pissed, and if he just run away, they will keep chasing him.

>>90305825
Not if he steals their car they won't.

Still, I want to do something with the idea that Shocker fires something using his gauntlets, but when he switches places with it, it's right where Hex wants it to be since he shot the object out of the air.

>>90303598
Too bad for Snake-Eyes then since he's the one who gets La Cucaracha'd while his gang flees the scene.

>>90306818
If the fight in the villa takes place around the same time Hex is capturing the rest of the gang, whoever is fighting Snake eyes could witness how his Stand becomes stronger for no apparent reason.

>>90307053
But no one is fighting Snake-Eyes until Hex arrives to collect the last of the bounties.

That's what starts the fight there.

>>90307946
Seems that other characters also arrived to the villa for some reason, including Dick and the Wizard.

>>90308370
The Wizard probably sensed something.

Dick probably got a call telling him to check it out from someone. The Front Men being eliminated and the corpse part not being recovered means the Dada Party needs some eyes there to see who ends up with the corpse part.

>>90309071
Is Dick an actual agent of the Dada Party or he was just hired by Nobody to spice up the race?

>>90309907
Hired by Nobody, but in the know.

I'm thinking as he leaves the cabana/villa, that hand stand manifests near him and he says to it that the wizard has the other leg.
He doesn't even look at the hand stand.

>>90310751
>He doesn't even look at the hand stand
Well, he can't see stands

>>90310819
Aunt May's stand takes on a physical appearance when it is taking on the properties of objects.

It's like a ghost hand that can become an anything-it-touches hand.

Or at least that's how I've chosen to interpret how it works.

Think of it like [The Fool], where you can clearly see how the sand is moving and taking on shapes.

>>90311766
Ok, so Dick leaves the villa, the hand Stand appears crawling in one of the walls behind him and takes the property of the wall, Dick relays the information of what he just saw to the Stand without questioning what is, assuming that is some kind of gadget from the Dada party.

>>90312745
He assumes nothing, we want to project an air of mystery on that scene.

Dick just did a piano solo good enough to movie even Daffy, even if it was an imperfect one, and walks away from the crazy when another duck shows up and does some soul sucking magic act.

It could be better.
>>90293854
>Shocker mutters under his breath “Dammit, guess I’ll just have to kill them.”
>Gunshots ring out, the bullets hit the barn wall where Shocker was, a rusted wheel spins and the ground in his place
>Hex squints and keeps his guns at the ready
>Shocker is now up in the rafters where the hey bails would be, he picks up another rusted piece of farm equipment, this time it’s a large pair of scissors
>He loads one of the rusted blades into his gauntlets and takes careful aim at Hex, it helps that Hex isn’t moving at all
>Shocker whispers to himself “You don’t know me.”
>He fires one of the blades aiming right at Hex’s head
>Hex ducks and rolls, then shoots in the direction of where the blade landed: it’s impaled in the dirt at the barn door entrance
>Shocker fires the second half of the blades
>Hex reacts almost instantly and shoots it out of the air, spinning it so it wedges itself into one of the rafters
>Hex is now shooting at Shocker again who repeats himself “You don’t know me.”
>Shocker disappears, replaced by a rusted scissor blade, and reappears behind Hex at the barn door with his gauntlets ready to strike a killing blow
>CRACK
>Shocker didn’t have time to process what happened, he’s suddenly pinned on the ground under a large wooden beam
>Hex turns around “Heh, saw that coming.”
>Shocker wheezes “You… how…?”
>Hex: “When I fired at the door, I wasn’t expecting you to be there, I wanted to weaken that beam enough so it’d fall when I wanted it to.”

Could tweaks to this bit, nothing big.
>>90315524
>Hex walks over to him “Now, what was that thing you said back in the big city? Something about laying a finger on you?”
>Hex kneels over the defeated Shocker and presses one of his temples with his finger
>Shocker: “Ugh… you smug asshole…”
>Hex: “Hey look, I can lay a finger on you after all! You know what else I can lay on you?”
>Hex stands up and delivers a kick to his face, knocking him out cold
>Pym is back on his feet, leaning on the side of the barn door entrance “Therapeutic, is it?”
>Hex: “You could say that.”
>Pym laughs a little until the clanging of steel is heard behind them
>Pym turns around and freaks out “Oh crap, it’s the guy with the katana…”
>The samurai has reappeared right behind them with his sword unsheathed, but planted in the ground
>Pym: “Uh, look, we’re done here. See?” He points at Shocker “We’ll get off your ranch now.”
>Hex: “We don’t want trouble, partner, we’re leaving.” he turns to Pym “Pym, help me load that bastard in the car.”
>They pass by the samurai carefully. Hex looks back to take another glance at the samurai; he’s still in the same position, not even turned around to see them leave
>As Hex and Pym drive off, we see some faded words on the barn reading “Bagge Farm”

>We zoom out over the wasteland, then pan over a little bit to some other dust trails before zooming back in

Working on expanding a little bit of the Spongebob/Goofy fight.

>>90315578
>Spongebob is on his rock, speeding through the wasteland
>He’s just wiggling on top of it like no one’s business, humming a Krusty Krab theme to himself
>“Come...” Spongebob stops humming and his face gets serious, he puts a hand to where an ear would be and squints his eyes as he cocks his head
>“Find me, please.”
>Spongebob: “There it is again, a faint voice in the distance.”
>“Help me...”
>Spongebob look back behind him, there’s some other racers following him in the distance, he turns in the direction of the voice again and swings his rock in that direction, ignoring his competition to find the source of this voice

>Not too far behind, Goofy notices the deviation in Spongebob’s trail and follows it in his jalopy, some of the other racers keep going straight past

>The calls get louder and louder “This way, this way!” there’s no trace of anyone, just miles and miles of flat wasteland, but Spongebob continues onward
>Finally the calls stop, Spongebob stops and dismounts his rock, he walks forward a few feet until he spots a seemingly normal dirt patch just feels important.
>Goofy’s jalopy is just 20 feet behind. He turns off his car and quietly attempts to sneak out, however one of his gloves gets caught in the door and he falls flat on his face
>”Didn’t think I heard ya, did ya partner?” Spongebob says aloud, back still turned to Goofy, while focusing on the dirt patch “As a matter of fact, I heard ya coming since I turned mah’ old rock around.”
>Goofy then notices that some of Spongebob is missing, suddenly, 4 Spongebob clones grab him from behind.
>“I left a few pieces of me behind not too long ago, just waitin’ for you to catch up. Now I’m assuming you’re a law abidin’ citizen and you’re not here to do anything illegal…” Spongebob finally turns around “… or are you some kind of a 「PINHEAD」!” he points at Goofy, with his stand 「OCEAN MAN」 floating close behind him.
cont.

>>90315847
But before I continue tweaking a few things with this fight and embellishing here and there, should I also insert here a description of Ocean Man? This is the first time it has appeared and is visible to anyone, despite having seen its power before.

TOM isn't here for narration, so that makes this more tricky.

I'll modify that last line.
>>90315847
>“I left a few pieces of me behind not too long ago, just waitin’ for you to catch up. Now I’m assuming you’re a law abidin’ citizen and you’re not here to do anything illegal…” Spongebob finally turns around “… or are you some kind of a 「PINHEAD」!” he points at Goofy, a ghostly apparition materializes behind him
>It looks like a giant snail with a pineapple replacing its shell
>A narration box appears reading “Spongebob ‘Dirty Dan’ Squarepants – Stand User. Stand Name: 「OCEAN MAN」’
>Goofy can see the apparition and throws a concerned look back “I reckon you don’t even know why you’re out here.” Goofy says aloud, struggling to get Spongebobs off of him
>“Someone’s callin’ fer help, did you hear it too?” Spongebob taks a quick glance at Goofy before looking back at the patch of dirt
>Goofy is still struggling “Ya made yourself a bad mistake comin’ out here! What yer lookin’ for is too dangerous for you ta handle!”

I've now hit a problem. There is NO DESCRIPTION for what Goofy's [Under Pressure] looks like.

Was it just similar to Max's stand in part 5?

>>90316199
It could be either a punchghost with extendable arms, a group of of extendable arms (sorta like the Stand of Clarissa's Dad), or is bound to Goofy's own limbs, allowing him stretch them.

>>90316388
>Abilities: Under Pressure can physically alter the distance between two point by pulling or pushing them together or apart, the objects or space, in question, will automatically adjust to the new distances, even if it should be physically impossible for such things (like pulling two sides of a river together doesn't cause the river to overflow and spill out, it just shrinks it's 'distance')

It works by turning the world into a popup book. or that's how I imagine it.

I'm going to continue posting this part with the tweaks I've made to it, you guys figure something out.
>>90316199
>Another apparition manifests behind Goofy, it looks like
BLANKETY, BLANETY, BLANK THERE’S NO DESCRIPTION FOR IT
>A narration box appears reading ‘Goofy – Stand User. Stand name: 「UNDER PRESSURE」’
>Goofy uses his 「UNDER PRESSURE」 to close the distance between him and a nearby cactus, as in space folds in on itself to bring Goofy to the cactus.
>Two of the Spongebobs get pinned on the spikes which causes them to pp like water balloons into harmless puddles on the ground
>Goofy quickly shakes off and whacks the other two Spongebobs. “Gwarsh, looks like they’re not so tough when they aren’t in a pack --a-yuck.”
>Suddenly three more Spongebobs are thrown at Goofy. He easily dodges one, pushing it face first into the cactus, but the other two surround him.
>The space around the cactus contorts again, stabbing a Spongebob behind Goofy.
>“How in tarnation are you doin’ that to that there cactus! Looks like I gotta take care a’ this personally…” Spongebob adjusts his hat, pulling out chunks of his head, and throws two more Spongebobs, then charges towards Goofy.
>Goofy prepares to defend when Spongebob throws out a rope that goes over Goofy’s head towards another Spongebob behind him. The Spongebobs keep passing the rope around until Goofy is tied up, tight enough to where Goofy’s face is puffy and changing colors
>Spongebob absorbs two of his replicas, some of the chunks missing from him begin to fill in
>Goofy manages to wheeze “Gwarsh, that’s a nice trick ya do there, but I know ya can’t keep it up.”
>Spongebob: “I’m an expert at this power here sonny, ya ain’t got a prayer- I always out numbah you!”
>Once again, Goofy warps space to send himself flying at his jalopy, he uses a sharp edge of the broken down mess of a car to cut his way free
>More Spongebobs draw near
>Goofy hops in his jalopy
cont.

>>90316857
>Sponebob is standing prideful “Tryin’ ta run pinhead? Well I gots ya corned at least from this side!”
>“… and this side!”
>Spongebobs surround the car and eventually jump their way in
>Goofy presses a big ride button – the EJECT button, and rockets upwards and forwards letting out his trademark yell as he plows through the ground like a gopher
>The Spongebobs surround Goofy after his failed escape attempt
>Spongebob: “Ya can’t beat me! And ya know why, cause ya ain’t got nothing to fight for! I’mma fightin’ fer justice and ta end every stinkin’ pinhead who tries to cause a ruckus like you! This whole world’s mah town, and law breakers like you’ll all end up behind bars!”
>Goofy looks up to Spongebob with a face he hasn’t made in quite some time. Fire glows in his eyes, his mouth un-moving, he shoots a glare at Spongebob. “Did ja even realize where I landed?” He finally responds
>Goofy used his stand to warp space and move his landing to one certain spot. Goofy is now standing on top of that peculiar patch of dirt
>Something burrows its way up from underground and forces itself into Goofy’s leg, spitting it in half in the process before resealing
>The Spongebob clones all pounce, Goofy easily kicks them away with his now very muscular leg
>With a leap, Goofy closes the gap “Don’t cha get it? The reason ya lost is because I do have sumthin’ ta fight for!”
>Goofy brings his leg down on Spongebob’s head, flattening him, then kicking him.
>Spongebob is sent flying 10 yards away and lands in pieces
>They’re all too far away to reconnect with him, including his hat. He can’t even open his eyes as the sun’s rays blind him. Goofy in the distance smashes his rock with his disproportionate leg and jumps back in his jalopy, he’s holding a canister of pillar propane he took from the rock.
>He turns his car around without even looking at Spongebob and drives off
cont.

>>90316599
Yeah, but what it's missing is an appearance

>>90316888
>Minutes later, Spongebob dried out and burns away into dust in the desert

>Spongebob “Dirty Dan” Squarepants. Stand 「OCEAN MAN」 Status: 「DECEASED」

>Official transcript: Dirty Dan lost his way in the desert, and did not make it to the next checkpoint.

>Even further in the distance, in the direction of the setting sun, we see Navis looking through some binoculars at the person fleeing the scene

Gotta write the Navis scene.

>>90316940
Wait, what comes first? Jack checking the bone or Navis watching the outcome of Goofy's fight?

>>90318006
Navis sees the outcome of the fight. She's still watching after Goofy leaves, she's about to leave, Courage's Computer stops her, she asks if it's feeling some nostalgia for the area, he says "No, you twit, someone else is coming"
Old Jack shows up, sees the crap scattered about, digs up the bone, opens it, it's empty, the dog skeletons emerge.

That's the event order I'm working with before the TO BE CONTINUED rolls by.

Then it cuts to Sam and Max and Jack, them getting a phone call, Jack parting ways with them.

Then we cut to inside the police station with Hex and Pym turning over Shocker. By now the sun is well past set.

>>90318139
Is this outline good?
>Jack digs up the God Bone and opens it, discovering that the corpse part is missing
>He mutters about who could have stolen it, then he hears a rustle behind him
>A skeletal dog emerges from the ground carrying a bone as a weapon
>Jack says that he wants no trouble, the dog attacks anyway and Jack easily slices it apart
>Another dog appears and grabs his leg. As he tries to repel that dog, a third dog appears behind him and clubs him in the shin making him fall to his knees
>More skeletons pop up from the ground and surround him; he notices that the one he cut down started glowing and pieced itself together
>Jack tries to fight them all but is realizes that is useless since they keep regenerating, so Jack decides to run away
>The skeletons follow him but came to a sudden halt when they stray too far from the God Bone. The pack leader stares and growls at Jack, some of the dogs start fighting against each other
>Jack come to the conclusion that Hex and Pym are the culprits and he drives to the city of Nowhere

>>90316940
>Official transcript: Dirty Dan lost his way in the desert, and did not make it to the next checkpoint.

>We zoom out to another overhead shot of the wasteland and see Goofy’s dust trail getting further away
>We pan over in the direction of the setting sun, we see a car parked behind a large rock, it’s Navis’ Red Comet
>We cut down to it and Navis who is laying on her stomach looking through some binoculars at the person fleeing the scene
>She puts down her binoculars “Something’s not right about that.” She gets up “OK, time to investigate.”
>A voice comes from her Red Comet “Not so fast.”
>Navis grins cheekily “Aww, are you getting nostalgic over this place?”
>"No, you twit, someone else is coming."
>Navis drops back down and re-positions, sure enough, an armored man wearing a demon mask has arrived at the scene
>We cut to the samurai, he turns his head from side to side, panning over the smashed rock, the upturned dirt from Goofy’s landing, the tire tracks leading to and from
>He begins digging at the patch of dirt Goofy and Spongebob fought over
>A large bone is quickly unearthed, the man gazes at it, panning over it until he notices a hole at one end, as if something broke out of the bone
>The man is taken aback, he removes his mask and we see his eyes, the rest of his face is obscured by a dark beard
>A narration box appears reading ‘Jack – The Samurai”
>He kneels down and opens the bone, revealing it to be like a time capsule
>He looks within, but there is nothing there, his eyes widen in shock
>He hears a rustling and quickly puts on his mask again
>Skeletons of dogs have risen up out of the ground and are surrounding him
>The dog skeletons are holding bones as clubs, they’re just standing there, watching him, tapping their bone clubs in their bony paws
>Jack puts a hand on his sword hilt
>The skeletons rush him and Jack draws
>WACHA
>To be continued rolls by

>>90320005
Huh, you posted just a few seconds before me.

I was going with a less is more approach with this scene.

I can probably incorporate that into Jack having a flashback later when he confronts Pym and Hex if we want to get into the details of that fight.

I just feel like not every single last fight is worth going into step by step detail.
That's just be part 5 for me all over again.

>>90320007
>We see an overhead shot of the wastelands of Nowhere again, the darkness is illuminated by the headlights of Sam and Max’s DeSoto
>We cut to inside the DeSoto and Jack (Vince) is sitting in the back seat while Max is rambling on “So I popped his eyes out and made him watch as I-”
>Max is interrupted by their car phone starting to ring
>Sam and Max, in unison exclaim “I got it, I got it, I got it!” as they fight over who gets to pick up the phone
>We cut to outside and see the DeSoto swerving wildly before coming to an abrupt stop
>Cut to back inside and Jack is clutching his seat for dear life while Sam has the phone receiver now up to his(her) ear
>Sam: "Hello? Yes. Uh-huh? Uh-huh? Oh. Yeah. Yeah. Yeah? Yeah?! Yeah! Oh! Yes! Goodbye."
>Max: "Was it the commissioner?"
>Sam: "Yeah."
>Max: "New case?"
>Sam: "No, he thought he was calling a sex line and I didn't have the heart to tell him he had the wrong number."
>Something on their dash vibrates
>Sam looks at it “Oh, we also got an e-mail from him. Hmm...” Sam reads it over on some archaic screen “Hot diggity damn with a side order of green fried tomatoes, the commissioner sent us new intel on that scoundrel Loki.”
>Max is gripping the back of Sam’s chair now as he(she) leans over “What’s it say Sam? Where’s the creep hiding now?”
>Sam: “There’s a case asking for help about a man matching his description running a circus in Springfield!”
>Max: “What are we waiting for then?! Let’s go!”
>Jack chimes in “OK, sound good, I’ll catch up with you guys later.” and exits the DeSoto
>Sam: “Wait, what?”
>Jack talks to them through the window “You wanna catch that bastard? Then you don’t need me slowing you down. He’d probably try to take me as a hostage and you guys don’t need to be babysitting me.”
>Sam can’t really argue this and Max is grinning
cont.

Not entirely happy with Sam and Max's final exchange with Jack here. Also re-posting the police station bit someone else posted earlier just so everything is in order.
>>90320820
>Jack: “I’ll see you guys at the checkpoint if we’re all still alive. I can see the City of Nowhere just up ahead so I’ll be fine, now get going.”
>Sam: “Well alright, if you think you can manage.”
>Max: “They grow up so fast. Come on Sam, Jackie is a big boy now and we have heads to crack.”
>They wave goodbye and Jack is left in quiet darkness as he gives a sigh of relief and begins walking to the lights of Nowhere

>Cut to the interior of a police station in Nowhere. There are two cops chitchatting when Hex burst through the door
>Officer: “Looks like a damn bounty hunter, I’ll take care of this.”
>Hex: “I’m looking for the one in charge of this place!”
>Officer: “That would be me, mister.”
>Hex: “Good. Pym, bring him in!”
>Pym enters the building carrying the tied up Shocker, he drops him in the ground
>Officer: “What the hell is going on, pal?”
>Hex kneels and takes off Shocker’s mask, showing his face for the first time “Herman Schultz, aka The Shocker. I’m here to collect the bounty on his head.”
>Officer: “The Shocker... Boys, go check the database. Hold on here, cowboy, we ought to be sure you are telling the truth.”
>Hex: “By all means, take all the time you need.”
>The officer leaves, a single cop standing guard in the room. Hex lights a cigarette and starts smoking inside the station
>Cop: “Hey, you can’t smoke here!”
>Hex stares at him and a puff of smoke comes out of the hole in his face
>Cop: “U-uh… never mind.”
>A couple of minutes passes and the officer returns
>Officer: “Well, my boys back there confirmed your story; this cretin was wanted all across the union.”
cont.

>>90320890
>Hex: “I already know that, there’s also a big bounty on his person, and is even bigger takin’ into account the fact that I brought him alive.”
>Officer: “Yeah, yeah, the money will be transferred to your account, mister. Forgive the inconveniences, we aren't a bank.”
>Hex: “No problem… Ah, one last thing: keep him gagged at all times and don't let him grab anything he could throw.”
>The duo leave the police station

>Official transcript: Herman Schultz “The Shocker”. Currently under police custody, can't continue on the race. Status: RETIRED

>Pym: “Alright! Mission accomplished, Partn-”
>Hex: “I’m not sharing the reward with you, Pym.”

I need to go track down a cold open from Batman the Brave and Bold of Hex telling Batman to get some decent clothes since he's embarrassed to be seen with him before I continue here.

>>90320932
>Pym: “I wasn’t gonna ask for a share.”
>Hex then pulls out some money anyway “But at least take this and get yourself some proper clothes. I can’t stay partnered up with someone in a rodeo clown’s get up.”
>Before Pym can retort, and man appear before them, a bearded man wielding a sword, it’s the samurai, and he’s missing a lot of his armor now
>S Jack: "Stop right there! It's time to give back what you have stolen."
>Hex: "Easy with that sword there, partner. We're on the level.” Hex spots Jack/Vince across the street who has made it into town, he’s looking at bus schedules, and calls over to him “Ain't that right, Jack?"
>S Jack: "That's what I'm here to find out."
>Vince: "Sorry wait, were you talking to me?"
>S Jack and Hex: "Yes."
>Vince: “Wait, slow down. Let's back up a little. Nice to meet ya, pajamas. The name's Vince. Call me Jack."
S Jack: "Very well. Then what should I call you, Vince?"
>Vince: "Jack."
>S Jack: "Yes?"
>Vince: "Yes what?"
>S Jack: "Yes what do I call you?"
>Vince: "Jack!"
>S Jack: "What!?"
>Hex, getting annoyed in the background, gets his gun out, but actually points it at Yellowjacket. "WOULD YOU TWO JUST... shut yer hole before I give you a new one. Forget the names! The point is we didn't steal nothin'."
>S Jack: "Oh. I see."

Now I need something to be said that can allow me to transition into old Jack telling them about the history of Nowhere (part 1) and also about the corpse.
Odds are Vince will ask something to let me do that.

>>90321594
>Vince:So...looking at your disguise, you must be in the race too
>Jack: Race?
>Vince: Yeah, Samurai must be your moniker or something like that
>Pym: No, we found this guy in the charred farm
>Vince: What? what farm? what is doing a samurai in the middle of the desert?
>Pym: I asked the same question already...
>Vince: What were you doing in a charred farm?
>Jack: Stealing a relic that isn't meant for mortal hands
>Hex: For the last time, we didn't steal anything!
>Pym: Ha ha, did you hear that, Hex? "not meant for mortal hands", this guy is wack
>Jack: Are you accusing me of lying?
>Vince: Go on...
>All three turn to Vince, who is taking notes
>Jack: Excuse me?
>Vince: That "relic" you were guarding, what was that?

>>90322306
Ah, this is awkward.

>>90321594
>Pym suddenly smacks his head “Wait a minute, you’re that samurai! I didn’t recognize you without the armor. What’s all this about? We got off your ranch.”
>S Jack: “First, please show me your legs. I must be certain that it has not taken hold of you.”
>Vince: “It?” he rises one leg and looks at it then the other, nothing unusual
>Hex does the same
>Pym: “This is dumb.”
>Hex: “Just do it.”
>Pym also looks over his legs “There, ya happy now?”
>S Jack sheaths his sword and bows “I apologist for my forwardness, but I must be certain.”
>Pym just rubs the back of his head while Hex holsters his guns
>Vince: “I feel I’ve missed something here. What’s ‘it’?”
>S Jack: “Many years ago, a battle was fought upon these lands, one which could have resulted in the destruction of this world. The catalyst for this struggle was a magic mask.”
>As Jack says this, we see an image of The Mask from part 1
>Hex: “Alright. Seems like the kind of place somethin’ like that would happen in.”
>Pym: “What, you’re buying this?”
>Hex: “Not the strangest thing I’ve ever been involved with. I’ve lead an interesting life.”
>Vince: “Sorry, but, what does a mask have to do with our legs?”
S Jack: “After the battle was won and the mask was burned, I remained here upon this land.” We see a flashback of Jack in part 1 burning the mask, his speech bubbles become narration boxes
>“Something under it called to me, something very dangerous and powerful.” We see Jack in the desert of Nowhere looking around until he comes upon the patch of dirt
>Jack in part 1’s eyes are wide as an image of the planet is beamed into his mind “A mighty hero once died protecting this planet, he took within himself a great and terrible power.”
>We see someone in a cape above the Earth plummeting back down
cont.

>>90322390
>“To protect the people of this world, he shattered his own body” the caped figure splits into pieces which scatter across the world “so that the power he trapped within himself would never fall into evil hands.”
>We cut back to the present and Jack is still talking, “A piece of his body came to rest under this land and I have taken it upon myself to protect it.”
>Vince is taking notes, Hex is smoking, and Pym looks unimpressed

That's where I was at before I noticed the post above my previous one.

>>90322432
Before I go forward from here, I have an idea.

So this here >>90320005 I feel we could fit in after >>90320890
>Cop: “U-uh… never mind.”

We cut away to Navis who is making a call to Strickland and telling them about the skeletons and the Samurai.

>>90322608
>>90320005
>Cop: “U-uh… never mind.”

>We cut to Navis on the phone with Seymour “You wanted weird, well get a load of this story.”
>A video plays of Jack surrounded by dog skeletons, he draws his sword and cuts one down
>Another leaps and tries to bite his leg, he slash it away
>A third dog digs out of the ground behind him and clubs him in the back of the knee, making him falter
>More skeletons pop up from the ground and surround him; he notices the ones he cut down have started piecing themselves back together
>Jack leaps away, but as he lands, more skeletal paws come up from the ground and hold him in place as more dogs club him with bones
>Some of Jack’s armor is torn away and Jack slashes his way out of the dog pile
>His mask is knocked off and destroyed
>Jack continues to slash them, but the skeletons just mend themselves
>As Jack runs, the pack chases him but come to a sudden halt when they stray too far from the God Bone. The pack leader stares and growls at Jack, some of the dogs start fighting among themselves
>Jack looks back at the massive bone that the dogs are now circling and then looks to the city in the distance, lighting up in the darkness, his eyes narrow as he begins running that way
>Back to the present “And you say this happened in Nowhere?” Asks Seymour over the phone
>Navis: “Yeah, Nowhere Kansas.”
>Seymour: “We’ll send a team out there ASAP, see if you can find that swordsman, keep your distance for now.”
>Seymour hangs up the phone and pulls out a picture from his desk drawer, it’s a picture of Hank Hill with Samurai Jack, Courage, Beetlejuice, and Lydia with ‘Our Founder’ written under it
>Seymour rubs his eyes “I gotta call Bobby, things are starting up again.”

>Cut back to inside the police station, a couple of minutes passes and the officer returns

OK, now this is important, do we want Navis to lean about the corpse now? It'd be very easy to have her overhear Jack.

>>90323036
I thought she (and by extension, Strickland) was going to discover the existence of the Corpse after the Atlantic section.

>>90323132
We can push the time table up if we want to, it's not like Strickland has any way of finding the things.

I'm looking for opinions on if it's worth doing.

If not here, then Navis could end up talking to old Jack later on somewhere and Strickland becomes aware there. That might make Rio much more interesting since it'll be the first time they'll have the drop on the Dada Party.

>>90322390
>Pym sinkers, then begins laughing “Pfft, hahaha, you’re screwing with us, right? So what, do these... corpse parts give people magic powers or something?”
>S Jack: “Yes, that is correct.”
>Pym: “Oh that is rich, huh, Hex?”
>Hex has finished his cigarette “Seen this before, or something like it.” Hex blows out the last of the smoke “Eleven times as a matter of fact.”
>Pym is mad now “Bullshit!”
>Hex smiles “You’re right, it’s only been seven times. Point is, there are things out there that, quite frankly, can give people down right unnatural super human abilities. Like stands.”
>Pym: “Ugh, let’s get out of this crazy town, before it starts rubbing off on me too.”

>Exit Pym and Hex leaving Vince alone with Jack

>Vince: “So… you’re not in the race then?”
>Jack: “Race?”
>Vince: “Yeah, the president’s big race for the Wishing Star. Whoever stole that corpse part is probably in the race, everyone who’s passed through here today is anyway, myself included.”
>S Jack: “Tell me about this race...”

Need some answers and feedback with the Navis thing since it would go here if it's happening.

If not, then it's going to cut to wherever Jack has been living and some other conversation between the two (the whole "And you are certain that my accompanying you will not cause your disqualification?" inquiry and citing Ringo before Jack unveils his motorcycle and they're off.

Then we'll be getting into Smallville.

>>90323262
Maybe Navis and Strickland first learn about the Corpse in the first stage (and Strickland conduct their own research backstage), but is only during the Atlantic stage that they have visual confirmation of their existence.

>>90323618
Alright, so

>>90323553
>Vince begins with some body language like he’s explaining the race, but we don’t do a recap of the rules

>We see Navis not far away with a listening device “A corpse?”

>We cut to some shed or something where Vince and Jack are now
>S Jack: “And you are certain that my accompanying you will not cause your disqualification?”
>Vince: Shouldn’t be a problem, other racers are doing it, like that traveling band. As long as I’m still in the race and you’re with me, no one will bat an eye about you being there.”
>S jack: “Very well.” he pulls off a cloth
>Vince’s eyes light up, it’s an armored motorcycle
>S Jack: “We shall ride in this.”

And that's Nowhere. I hope someone goes over it and cites any problems.
Suggestions for alterations are also welcome.

How should the Smallville arc start? With the Beatles approaching the town and feeling the good vibes, or with the Blue Meanie casually strolling through town wreaking havoc and narrating how the things he does "come as no surprise"

>>90324448
How about... it starts off with a picturesque shot of the town, imagine rainbow skies or weird colors, something vibrant like Morioh town.

Then we see the Blue Meanie, creeping around, hiding behind poles that are too skinny to conceal his large body.
He starts doing petty things like tripping people, putting glue on benches, shit like that.

He needs to narrate why he's there.

It should also be a bright beautiful day. Also morning.

That's when The Beatles come into town, or should Wander arrive first?

Well, that's what comes to mind for the start anyway.

>>90325023
>That's when The Beatles come into town, or should Wander arrive first?
Perhaps the Beatles arrive first attracted by the town's ambience, and Wander follows the Beatles to Smallville

>>90325511
It's embarrassing, but I just don't have intimate familiarity with the Beatles, so this section I'm rather at a loss.

I mean, I can see Wander breathing in the air and Sylvia not getting it as Wander attempts to explain the feeling he's getting in from the town, and then the Beatles chime in from somewhere agreeing with him, they didn't even see them there.

But how do we get into the conflict with the Blue Meanie?

>>90325958
>But how do we get into the conflict with the Blue Meanie?
The Blue Meanie hates music (since it harms him) and believes that Nobody's plan will get rid of the positive energy in the world, the one that's usually behind the creation of music. The Beatles may feel compelled by all the good vibes in the town to start a concert, so they become the priority targets of the Blue Meanie.

>>90326298
Maybe the Beatles notice the townsfolk are feeling blue and put on a show.

While the show is going, Wander notices the Blue Meanie, somehow, and begins the process of befriending him.
How's he gonna do that?

>>90326360
Wander spots him while he tries to sabotage the Beatles' performance and attempts to befriend him, foiling the Blue Meanie's schemes at every turn. Wander's constant nuisance and the Beatles' concert becomes too much for the Blue Meanie and he runs away in his flying hand.

>>90327434
It should leave him shaken since he gets the "If I can learn to not hate this one thing, what he point of hating all this other stuff?" thought put in his head.
And it terrifies him.

I think the Blue Meanie was sent to Smallville to see if there was a corpse part hidden there, but he found nothing.

The Beatles stay in Smallville since they like the positive energy of the place and drop out of the race since it wasn't really their scene.

>>90327602
Add that to the fact that the town starts playing music too after the Beatles use their stand to generate instruments for them

>The Beatles stay in Smallville since they like the positive energy of the place and drop out of the race since it wasn't really their scene
They also decide to protect the city from others like the Blue Meanie

>>90328531
How aware of the Blue Meanie are they?

We don't have much plotted for this arc right now, so it'd be good to discuss this.

Also, who are the residents of Smallville here? It's been at least 100 years since Clark died.

Nowhere was easier to get written than most since there was already a lot pre-written for it. That was good.
I'm still hoping at least someone will go through it and call me out on anything too weak in it since I certainly feel there's more than a couple rough patches.

Smallville however is lacking and could benefit from more discussion. There's just not much to pull from there.
I'm hoping more discussion about what we're doing there happens and the thread is still up when I wake up.

>>90328572
>How aware of the Blue Meanie are they?
Perhaps they already clashed before, back when the Dada party wasn't in power. That's why they are aware of what he can do when they spot him.