/co/co's Bizarre Adventure: Hank Pym Edition

Heyo, my /co/co/nuts. Do the thing that you do, while keep bumping and doing my little special thing.

It does look weird the "nowhere" in the list of destinations

Anyway, last thread ended before the destruction of the Golden Gate
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From there onwards we need to develop what happens with the racers after the bridge is destroyed

>>89285316

"Spectres" is still refered wrong in the playlist. It should be related with Blue Oyster Cult's album, not the band Spectres.

>>89285628
Oh, sorry, didn't move it yet. Right now it is after Dethklok, The final one of part 6 . I will move it tomorrow.

That a no on Sentry then?

>>89286149
We don't know where he could fit; he may be connected to the Hero, but that's still far away.

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>>89285628
Speaking of Bitters, should she retain her ability from part 5 or being stuck in the pit warped her powers somehow? Is she merged with the corpse part?

OK, doc 7 is finally restored to a pre-vandalized state, updated with everything from last thread that looks like we're using, and backed up so I have an up-to-date offline copy to work with when I start writing some more.

>>89287378
ditto with the Stand doc

>>89287378
>>89287886
Good! I think I will also start the /co/rge /co/star. It was too long without the update.

So I'm still just kicking around some spare thoughts, haven't been able to sit down and write the next part.

When Mr. Nobody is eating noodles, should he sign the document authorizing the new bridge with one of the chopsticks, or use a stamp?
I think Killinger would produce the document from his Magic Murder Bag and Mr. Nobody would call him a Spoon Full of Sugar for doing that for him.

>>89288660
Killinger hands him both the document and his personal stamp. One of the chopsticks is actually a pen and he spin it in his fingers before signing the papers without seeing, using the other chopstick to finish his noodles.

There is also a scene where he comments on Dick's oil slick trick while using a pair of opera glasses, that goes before or after he signs the document?

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>>89286240
It means hope

>>89288797
After he finishes his noodles, that's when Shocker makes it behind Dick who triggers the oil slick.

Pretty much everything leading up to the first checkpoint is very well covered, I just need to finally get some time to sort it all out and get it into the proper wording.

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>>89288830
So he could either take the place of Superman in the AU or, if we are using the idea from the previous thread, be one of the individuals that were aggregated into The Hero's concept. Perhaps instead of being just Superman's ghost, the holders of the Corpse parts are contacted by different Superman expies.

Wasn't that part with Jiggy combing his hair of fire supposed to take place in a later section?

>>89290809
I re-read through the stuff and thought it'd work better where it was originally suggested to happen at.

Do you think that'd work better at Springfield? Because I was the one who suggested moving that to Springfield, then I changed my mind while going through all the new stuff.

>>89290852
I dunno, I wrote that because another anon wanted to reference the images with the Ghost Rider with a pompadour. Wherever it fits better.

Also, are we gonna incorporate the story of King Kong Sr. when introducing the kaiju bar?

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>>89290969
The Ghost Rider pompadour suggestion was also me.
I think it fits fine where it's at now.
Though Jiggy's hair isn't quite a pompadour.

Who is better to do some narration for The Big One bar? TOM or Mr. Nobody?
I feel TOM would go over a brief history of the place before the racers get there for the benefit of the viewers.
It's nice to have an in-universe narrator with a completely justified reason for narrating.

>>89291198
TOM, he is the announcer of the race after all and his Stand has an ability that is pretty much the power of exposition. His narration would be more professional than what Nobody could give.

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>>89291353
True.

Though Mr. Nobody is prone to doing narration, though in a much more lucid way.

>>89290969
Let's see, what can we use here.

>And in our newest breaking news story for tonight, it seems "the King" has died. Authorities have found King William Kong, dead at the age of 79. Not from airplanes, or tanks, or even the drugs he was well-known for; field reporter Lara Logan is here live at the scene, with details on what have happened. Let's take a look.

>"I'm here live at San Fransisco, in the downtown Chinatown area. As you can see behind me, the US military has been called on the scene, as well as local authorities, to investigate. Around 1AM last night, the body of King Kong, the former big monster movie star, was discovered in his chair at the back of The Big One, the world- famous bar that caters exclusively to monsters of all kinds. So far, no one is sure what has happened, but it has been confirmed that King Kong was last seen at this bar with former co-star and friend, Godzilla. Police and military officials have declined to state whether or not there is any correlation.

This is the one mention of the bar we're using in the kaiju actors thread (I have a copy of the archive of the thread, so that just makes things easier for everyone if I copy paste this into the thread rather than having to re-type it from the cap).

What history do we need for TOM to go over about the bar?
Kong Sr. dying there is what Loki uses to incite a bar fight later.

>>89291669
I thought he died from an overdose. TOM may give a small summary of Kong Sr. life and his role as a star but won't delve on the darker aspects of his life, he is not a paparazzo.

>>89291778
That's the original post, the autopsy report didn't come in until later.

I'll post what I have right now and see if I get any feedback.

>The scene pans up to the sky again and focuses in on an observation blimp
>TOM pics up the mic and zooms in on the land below “And we’re back, Toonami faithful; the leaders of the pack are just now entering the outskirts of the beautiful San Fransokyo area, renown for elusive views, it’s iconic Golden Gate bridge, and it’s abundance of floating wind turbines.” A map of the area is displayed showing the location of the checkpoint and where the leaders are currently at. “The checkpoint is located inside The Big One, the world famous bar that caters exclusively to monsters of all kinds. A legendary meeting place of giants, both physical and metaphorical, in the acting world. But first the racers will need to cross the river, it looks like things might get hairy folks since the only road with a straight shot will force them all onto the Golden gate Bridge.”
>TOM pauses and does a double take before zooming in with one of the cameras so we see a lone figure next to a car on the bridge, “What’s this?” We see the Mean Machine parked on the bridge “Unbelievable! Dick Dastardly has somehow shot way out in front of the other racers, he’s already half way across the bridge!” Full panel shot of Dick Dastardly lounging in a beach chair next to his Mean Machine “And it looks like he’s stopped to take a nap in the middle of the road!”
>Dick Dastardly has his feet up and a perfectly peaceful look on his face, he opens one eye and looks across the bridge before grinning “Ha ha! Finally!” and with a clap of his hands, he’s already up and tossed the beach lounger into the trunk and hopped into his Mean Machine where he gets ready to take off, but not before putting his finger on a red button just as the lead racers are just beginning to cross the bridge

cont.

>>89292891
>Scene changes to further back in the pack, Rover has made good time catching up with the leaders, but they’re still about three minutes behind
>Pym: “So… this Pacing, right now we’re arriving to the bridge, what I'm supposed to see there?”
>Hex: “Stop.”
>Pym: “What?”
>Hex: "STOP!" He stomps on the brake, Pym almost hit his head on the windshield
>Pym: “What the fuck, cowboy!? you're trying to kill me or…”
>Pym is interrupted by a series of explosions on the bridge
>Hex: “Nah, someone else wanted to do that.”
>Pym: “How did you knew that?”
>Hex just cracks his knuckles "Saw it comin’."

>The bridge explodes, cables snap and crash into the road, the road itself begins tilting and crumbling, parts of it flip completely, racers go flying off into the water
>Spongebob and his rock hit the drink and sink like… well, a rock
>The “Where are my Pants?” Guy from the LEGO Movie was piloting a giant pants mecha and falls into the water, he is then retired from the race because his pants were dry clean only
>The Beetles in their Yellow Submarine are just fine
>Aunt May is doing some Chitty Chitty Bang Bang shit with her car turning into a boat
>Other racers were not so prepared and are forced to abandon their vehicles and cling to buoys while waiting for rescue
>Others were not even that lucky and got caught in the explosions

>The scene changes back to the observation blimp with TOM reacting in shock “Inconceivable folks! Dick Dastardly has blown up the bridge! He had the lead and still felt compelled to hang back and take out his competition! President Mr. Nobody, what are your thoughts on this heinous action?”
>Mr. Nobody is busy eating a bowl of noodles as TOM turns the camera to him, Mr. Nobody waves and his aide opens his bag to produce a document
cont.

>>89292935
>One of the chopsticks he was using is actually a pen and he twirls it in his fingers before signing the papers without even looking, using the other chopstick to finish his noodles before speaking “The Golden Gate bridge has been an iconic landmark of this area for decades” he wipes where his mouth would be with a napkin “I have just singed the documents authorizing a new bridge to be constructed, one that has been postponed, delayed, and shunned by local officials for decades now. The yearly cost of up keep for the Golden Gate Bridge could’ve paid for this new bridge several times over since it was first proposed. This new structure will be able to accommodate the city’s larger than life population.” Mr. Nobody stamps the document “My fellow Americans, my beloved residents of San Fransokyo, do not look at this as a tragedy, look at it as an opportunity for progress!”
>One of the people standing next to Mr. Nobody as he says this is a large blue man with a large nose and wide yellow grin who seems to be almost glowing as he picks up the president's plate from the table
>Tom is stunned by this “Well, there you have it folks, and I’m just getting this now, the bridge was in fact closed to the public before the racers even arrived so no one (aside from the people who signed the waivers) were harmed.”

That's where I'm at. I'm still trying to get back into the swing of this, so I don't feel like I have Mr. Nobody down all that well here.

>>89293035
Pretty good, there is a small typo: it should be signed, not singed.

The Blue Meanie hasn't been properly introduced, is it?

>>89293564
Yeah, that's the Blue Meanie, just no narration box for him yet.
That's for Smallville.

At this early point in the story most of the Dada party has yet to be properly introduced.

>>89291981
When Loki arrives to the bar, he could use his demonic powers to either project his voice into one of the kaiju or force the muscles in its face to gesticulate as Loki trashtalks Kong sr.

>>89296152
He could do that while standing near or on the giant chair (now roped off in Kong's honor or out of respect, bars always have stuff like that) Kong died in.

>>89296708
>He jumps on top of a Kaiju and forces him to sit in Kong Sr. chair while he's making it talk shit about Kong
>The nearbiest kaijus loses their shit for this and Loki jumps away before they start pummeling the kaiju he was riding

>>89297495
So does he throw his voice into the kaiju's mouth or use some unseen force to push the giant monster around?

OK, hopefully the thread won't die prematurely on us.

I'll try to continue on with the writing over the weekend.

>>89298403
both, he first uses a sort of ventriloquism on one of the monsters, then he forces a monster to move like a puppet

When will Hex and Pym become aware of what is a Stand? I think there was going to be an introduction in San Fransokyo in a previous draft, but I don't remember if they will be part of said exposition.

>>89303576
I think Hex knows what a stand is, but he can't see them so he can't be sure when one of those powers is in effect.

The introduction of stands in the part is in San Fransokyo with Sam and Max fighting Backslide, but Hex and Pym don't explicitly encounter an explanation until CN City, though Hex suspects Shocker has one before that when they capture him in Nowhere.

>>89304773
There is also the encounter with Billy Watt, who tries to pass his robot as a Stand, they would figure sooner or later that isn't, especially if Hex already knows what is a Stand.

>>89305455
Yes, that is what I was referring to with CN City.

>>89289157
How would one decide on which expys qualify?
One per company? Per era? Per nondescript theme?

>>89306784
Could be the ones based directly on Superman or be any character that was closer to the ideal of heroism. I recall that in an old thread it was suggested that the sentient robots could held the Iron Giant as their version of the Hero, if he actually was among the characters that embodied the "Hero" or is just part of their beliefs is unknown.

>>89307999
We did begin drawing a distinction between Superman and "the spirit of the Hero" as separate entities with Superman just being the most recent remembered manifestation of "the Hero".

Have there been other "heroes" since Superman died 100+ years ago? Is the reason why Mr. Nobody isn't targeting them because they are not publicly recognized as they symbol of heroism?
Would the "spirit of the hero" summon them to help combat Mr. Nobody's plans?

>>89309469
I think Superman was the last and the one that embodied it best, that's why it remained bound to his Corpse, which became a medium to channel the Spirit. Nobody needs to create a new "hero" before using Paint it Black.

>>89309674
Maybe a further reason is the spirit is bound keeping Stardust contained.

>>89311166
So, it was the Spirit of the Hero the one that trapped Stardust the first time?

>>89312878
I think Superman used the spirit of the hero to trap Stardust, he used it like a weapon and kept both it and Stardust from escaping him since they were all products of it.

>>89313486
Have we established Stardust's background?

>>89315755
Nope. I was under the impression that "Stardust Is".

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>>89315892
I always assumed he was something alien to the setting's Earth (granted, Superman is also an alien here if I'm not wrong). There is also the possibility of him being related to the Wishing Star in some way, like Killinger.

>>89316282
I'm not sure how related either of them are to the Wishing Star.

We really need to work on that.

>>89316791
I think Killinger was suggested as a sort of herald of the Wishing Star, but it was also suggested that he is/was a member of the Warner Bros with a deep knowledge of both the Wishing Star and the Hero's Corpse. There is also the little detail that both can make "miraculous things"

>>89317429
I don't think we were keeping the demon angle with him.

>>89319180
Should we keep Killinger's nature hidden (at least until the end/epilogue)?

>>89319286
Yeah, I think the plan was to always keep what he is ambiguous.

A minor detail but what kind of stand is Goofy's Under Pressure? a punchghost, object or another type?

>>89321709
It pulls things, like pulling one edge of a canyon to meet the other side for a second, just long enough to cross.

Aside from that, I have no idea how it works or what it looks like since I don't usually read up on the stand description until I need it in the story writing.

Wasn't able to get any time to work on this today.

>>89321968
It was mostly to know if he uses it to fight in his behalf or he must fight for himself.

>>89322062
I don't think he uses it for fighting, the fight with him VS Spongebob I don't recall him using it.

>>89328395
Yeah, last bump from me before bed.

I'll probably get less than 4 hours of sleep tonight.

Is Phamtom Scare comic be finished this century?

>>89330101
Hopefully, there hasn't been an update in a long time

>>89329639
Yeah, less than 5.

I'll give this a morning bump.

Here's a exchange between Hex and Pym after the fight with Watt, not sure how much they will know about Stands at this point, so edit it as necessary:

>Pym: Ha, take that! We beaten his Stand without having one
>Hex: That wasn't a Stand …
>Pym: What do you mean it wasn't a Stand? He yelled to the four winds that this giant soupcan was his Stand
>Hex: Since when a robot is called a Stand? And those so-called Stand users in the race, did you see any big robot with them?
>Pym: You have a point. So, all this talk about Stands is made up crap?
>Hex: I don’t think so. I heard about them before and I have encountered some weird stuff back in the day that people referred to Stands
>Pym: Then, how do these Stands look like?
>Hex: So far I never seen one of these “Stands”, but I have the feeling that we already fought against them in this race (The silhouettes of Backslide and Shocker appear alongside Hex)
>Pym: Alright... I'm not following, you have never seen a Stand before but you are sure they exist, is that what you are trying to tell me?
>Hex: Again, just a feeling. Keep your eyes peeled for anything weird, boy, and watch your back; this race is starting to give me bad vibes
>Pym: Funny, someone else already told me to watch my back today. (Internally) That guy in the bar… The 「people that talk to themselves」, was he mocking me? No…he didn’t seem the kind of people that would do that, he was talking earnest when telling me to be careful
>Hex: Let’s get going, Pym. That freak must be still around
>Pym: But there was odd about that guy, I can’t put my finger on it but there was something strange that set him apart from the rest of the bar, like… a presence
>Hex: Hey, did you hear me? We either go after Chameleon or get the heck outta here

cont.

>>89333289
>Pym: That’s it! A presence, a freak aura next to him! And I felt that presence before at the burnt farm and when no-nose made his entrance, Is this what Hex was talking about? Was Chameleon the real Stand user?
>Hex: Hey Ant-Man! Are you deaf?
>Pym: Sorry, I wasn’t paying attention… wait, how did you call me? Ant-Man? Heh, not bad

And after that, it could switch to Chameleon encountering Tom in the bar.

>>89333289
>>89333302
I like it. Though I'm not sure if they ever fight Backslide.

>>89334433
I think they are among the racers caught in Loki's parade

Page 10 bump.

Have we decided on how Pym unlocks the two remaining forms of his Stand and the order of the two middle stages?

>>89337403
-Jawbreaker
-Spirit of the hero contacting him a while after he gets the ribs
-???
-I assume the grief he feels over Hex's death and his final fight with DAVE causes him to develop a new ability that works with pacing. He should have already lost the ribs when it happens.

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>>89338059
The second form (or third, depending of how the story unfolds) needs to be defined; their appearances too, but that's just a cosmetic detail.

I supposed the Ultron-looking Stand appears in the last part of the race when it reaches space, It could be achieved like how is currently listed in the doc (mastering Hex' teachings about the Pacing) or Pym develops it after being contacted one last time by the Hero's spirit.

>He should have already lost the ribs when it happens
Yeah, the order of events in that part hasn't been elaborated yet, but the Corpse parts are extensively hunted down by the henchmen of the Dada party before boarding the Absolution.

>>89338829
So the final battle between Pym and DAVE, are we having that happen before or after boarding the Absolution?

>>89338884
I was under the impression that is before boarding the ship, dunno if is in Cape Suzette or somewhere on the way to the checkpoint.

>>89338978
I'm pretty sure Hex gets killed while they're in Cape Suzette since he wasn't planning to get on the Absolution.

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>>89338829
So basically
>Act 1
Metalic ant with MCU Ant-Man helment
>Act 2
Less ant-like features to show moving on from insect focus. Possibly resembling the original Ultron design
>Act 3
Full on classic Ultron
>Act 4
Either a more elaborate Ultron, Eternity, or a mix of the two

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>>89340091
Act 2 could be a small humanoid with either the original Ultron or one of ant man's helmets as its head/torso (like that robot from Dragon Ball GT), and Act 3 will be the first to be fully humanoid. I think the full Ultron should be reserved for Act 4.

>>89293035
>Dick is speeding away from the still exploding bridge behind him, explosions going off just as he goes by to further destabilize the structure as he laughs and twirls his mustache
>From the smoke and dust, a missile emerges and is fast approaching Dick’s Mean Machine
>Dick sees it in the mirror and makes a double take (Object in mirror are closer than they appear) and attempts some evasive actions
>The missile pulls alongside Dicks car instead of colliding with his rear
>Dick seems to relax a little, but the missile then disappears, taking its place is Shocker in his Shocker Mobile
>Dick doesn’t know what just happened or where Shocker just came from, but there’s another explosion back in the rubble
>Shocker is pissed and fires a hand cannon out the side of his car window, Dick lays low in his Mean Machine to dodge the bullets and pushes another button
>Nozzles emerge from the front of Dick’s Mean Machine and shoot oil in front of the Shocker Mobile forcing him to break off his assault

>The scene switches back to the observation blimp where Mr. Nobody is using a pair of Opera binoculars to watch the action “What a refreshing twist on the classic oil slick tactic, now, where are the others?” as he redirects his gaze back to the bridge
>TOM continues his commentary “It looks like the racers are finding ways to continues, The Wizard looks to have abandoned his parade float in favor of one of the motorcycles pulling it and is riding high on the cables to get across, but he’s not the only one using this tactic, Cybersix has taken to the other side.”
>”Back on the main road of the bridge, Aunt May looks to have something in mind, she’s picking up speed, but can she clear that gap?”
>Aunt may hits a portion of the destroyed road positioned as a ramp and activates her boosters to gain enough momentum to reach the other side
cont.

>>89341436
>”Incredible! She’s done it! Now it looks like some of the other racers on the bridge are willing to take the same gamble!”
>Another notable event is Sylvia with Wander and Jack on her back riding one of the cars across the gap and them jumping to swing from a cable when it looks like they won’t make it
>Mr. Nobody turns his gaze to the other side of the bridge where those who didn’t get caught in the blast are

>Hex and Pym are also stopped at the edge of the river why Pym is busily doing something to his Rover
>Goofy has just caught up with the leaders “Garsh, looks like that wrong turn kept me out of some trouble.”
>He’s not slowing down as he heads straight for the river, Pym looks at him and asks “Is he crazy?”
>Suddenly, the two edges of the river connect as if there were no river and just as soon as it disappeared, the river is back with no evidence that it was ever gone aside from Goofy now being on the other side
>Pym blinks slowly and shakes his head “What… just happened?”
>Hex gazes across at Goofy who is now way out in front “Hmm, missed opportunity, that’s what. Interesting tricks some of these racers have.”
>Pym grits his teeth, “He’s not the only one with tricks. I’ve finished the checks.”
>TOM continues with his narration “Holy crap! Somehow Goofy has shot way into the lead, how did he cross the river with such speed?” TOM looks at the river “And he’s not the only one who opted for the water route, it looks like Mr. Pym and Mr. Hex have teamed up in Pym’s Rover which has converted into a hydrofoil!”

And that's where I'm currently at. Just felt the thread could use a content bump.

>>89339120
So, both lose their corpse parts, D.A.V.E. kills Hex and then Pym slices D.A.V.E. in half before boarding the Absolution, in that order? I feel someone else should be alongside D.A.V.E. to haul the corpse parts to the ship.

>>89342952
Well Scud is partnered with DAVE, but he doesn't die until later in the fight against Stardust.

>>89343079
Alright, then Scud and DAVE could ambush Hex and Pym, and DAVE orders Scud to return to the Absolution with the corpse parts once Hex dies and Pym becomes an easy target for him.

Wasn't Crazy Jane also hunting down the parts?

>>89343476
She starts in Rio.
A lot of characters end up hunting the parts.

I don't think Scud would even want to kill Pym and Hex at that point in the story since he's fought alongside them more than he's fought with them by then.
The only reason he's even an enemy is because Mr. Nobody is holding Scud's target hostage.

>>89345628
>I don't think Scud would even want to kill Pym and Hex at that point in the story
There is also Crazy Jane, V, and the Wizard among the remaining operatives of the Dada party, while the party itself only lost two members at that point: the Blue Meanie and Aunt May

>>89346874
At that point?

There's still too much that's undecided before that point so late in the story to know just how many Dadaists are left at that point.

>>89346962
Well, those are the only characters so far that are being retired before Stardust wrecks their shit in space, and I'm sure he kills at least one of them (besides Nobody)

>>89341463
>As the racers close in on the bar, either by land or sea, they all hear a loud whistle in the distance
>It’s 5 o’clock, people are getting off work now
>Pym doesn’t think anything of it until he notices Hex bracing himself
>Suddenly the water begins to churn violently, loud rumblings are heard, the vibrations are like miniature earthquakes, but they have a rhythm to them: footsteps
>Suddenly Pym and Hex find their view has changed, for from the depths a figure has emerged from directly below them; they are now on top of a kaiju’s head
>At head of the pack, Shocker and Dick have ended up right in the middle of the monster traffic heading to the bar for some after work drinks
>Dick swerves trying to avoid the massive legs, he fires a grappling hook from his Mean Machine to latch onto one of the monsters and pulls himself up higher
>The doors to the bar are massive it is situated partially underground so it doesn’t loom too much over the city, there is also a massive pool to one side that serves as the water entrance
>As Shocker enters the bar, he sees the finish line, it’s on top of the bar counter… which is approximately five stories tall, he realizes too late that Dick knew this in advance as he races towards one of the larger monsters heading to the counter
>The bar itself is slowly filling in with all manner of monsters, some human-ish sized, many several stories tall
>Power Puff Girls monsters ("You darn fish balloon!"), Sym-Bionic Titan, and the Firebreather monsters making easy background stuff here
>TOM picks up announcing again “Folks, the leaders have entered the bar, the last obsticale between them and the finish line is scaling the bar counter for the giant kaiju patrons. Our leaders have scaled tails, now they have to go up backs, around the shoulders, down the arms, and then it's a straight shot to the finish line. But will these hard working city monsters be so forgiving to our racers?”
cont.

>>89348910
>As if on cue, the monster Dick was on sneezes fire, the force and shock of the sneeze is enough to send Dick flying and swinging, crashing into the leg of a giant bar chair and knocking him out of a leader position
>”Oh, and there goes Dick Dastardly!” TOM yells over the microphone “He might still be able to recover, but what’s this?! Some racers have already made it up onto the bar counter!”
>”The bar counter is massive, the length of an airplane runway, the finish line looks like it’s made of toothpicks and string in comparison, but there’s someone up there fast approaching it!”
>Close up of Goofy in his rundown car speeding towards it
>Goofy looks rather pleased with himself, he’s waving and even takes both hands off the steering wheel to as part of a preemptive victory celebration
>He doesn’t notice until it’s too late: he smashes right into a big rock sitting on the finish line
>Spongebob is sitting on top of it doing a victory screech surrounding by reporters
>Spongebob “Dirty Dan” Squarepants has claimed first place of the first leg of the race
>Other racers speed by in their vehicles scrambling to avoid the rock and get the best positions they can

And we're finally done with the first leg of the race. Now we're in the first stop location.

>>89348936
Let's see the order of events then:
>Pym and Hex arrive in 20th place
>They are surrounded by the welcoming committee, the prize from Varrick industries is handed to the first places
>Hex gets in a brief scuffle with Shocker, who reminds him that he is untouchable during their stay
>Hex checks the leaderboard and Pym tells him that he plans to start modding the car
>After the end of the ceremony the racers are given accommodations by Stan Lee, then they are free to roam the city
>Somewhere else Shocker is a dick with the other racers
>After some time Dan Backslide arrives to the checkpoint

What should Pym and Hex do inmediatly after crossing the finish line?

>>89350411
Would Hex get a drink?

>>89350543
>He complains that the drinks served in the city are too soft for him

>>89350692
He's able to get a drink in the bar because they mistake him for a monster due to his face.

OK, last bump from me before bed.

>>89350900
He storms out of the hotel complaining about the quality of the booze in the bar, wanders a bit and then decides to try his luck in the Big One bar. Depending on when this takes place, he could spot Backslide before or after striking the deal with Loki.

what's the upgrade of Dan's stand?

>>89355039
It still hasn't been determined.

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Did we include the Iron Giant somewhere in this part? I think it would be nice to have him do a role similar to Frollo's since he is canonically known to have admired Superman. He should known something or have any sort of relation with the hero's Spirit. Maybe he would fit best as a corpse guardian actually.

Maybe we can make him appear in the Moon leg or in some aquatic portion of the Europe leg? There's also that Mecha fight in the US leg. These are the only plausible places I can think he could be in now.

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>>89355194
It should be something that allows him to fend off the multiple opponents in the parade, either through its destructive power or defensive capability

>>89356162
See above >>89307999, he was suggested to be connected to the Hero's mythos and be part of the robots belief system

>>89356306
I remember something now.

Backslide's upgraded ability was to deflect hostility from himself onto others as long as he is more injured than the other people.

>>89356538
So he will be using the members of the parade as meat shields and try to get the racers kill each other?

>>89356571
No, he will be pissing off everyone he meets and then they'll fight each other since Backslide is already injured.

Loki gets the ball rolling for him at the start though.

>>89356585
How are they gonna break out of his Stand's effect? Someone will get more injured than Dan or is Ghost Rider crashing the parade the thing that puts a stop to his ability?

>>89358442
It might be less an upgrade of Backslide's stand, and more of Loki's demon magic changing what it can do.

So when Ghost Rider crashes the violence parade, Loki books it and takes the power with him, leaving Backslide in the middle of the mess.

How is the pace feeling for part 7 so far with what's actually written out?

>>89359581
Fine, so far there is no filler that drags out the plot

Page 10 bump.

/v/ has plagiarized us
>>>/v/365114594

Should the racers hear the rumor of the monster Stan Lee in the hotel or when wandering through the city?

>>89363124
Probably when wandering through the city, or while still n the bar.

You know it's a big deal when even the kaiju talk about it.

>>89359790
I'm trying to keep it compact, but I know this is going to be a very long part even with that.

>>89364229
Hex could hear the rumors when he's in the kaiju bar, while other racers could hear it while strolling through the city (probably from one of the Stan Lees)

>>89365707
yeah, but there isn't an unnecessary length in each section so far

>>89366843
I'll read through the notes again tomorrow and see if I can start feeling inspired again.

I'm really hoping for more anons to jump in with stuff like how >>89333289 did. Makes things easier as time goes on when it's time to put those sections together.

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>>89363116
>https://docs.google.com/document/d/11ykelD7uDpg6ZIfIBR-U5YsGvnpGbrIeRtcYBeTTbqA/pub
Sweet autism, guys. I love it.

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>>89371482
>A race that has a prize of 1000000 coins has been organized; but it is a conspiracy made by Senator Armstrong that leads into the search of chaos esmeralds

Well shit, thread is one page 10 again and I'm about to go to bed.

New season of Samurai Jack begins March, 11th, at 11:30.

That's 03 11 11 30.

Maybe by then we'll actually be to that part in the story where old Jack is introduced.

>>89374691
When Old Jack is first introduced he should be wearing his full armor, revealing his identity for the first time either when checking the God Bone or when confronting Hex and Pym in the town.

>>89371482
>>89372831
I'm the autor. Have you some sugestions for characters or plot?

>>89376805
what would be Luigi's role?

>>89378853
Be the partner of Mario in steel gear run, I gess.

>>89376805
I'm the author for the most part right now in our part 7 fanfic here.

So did you just decide to go with part 7 since that's where we're at or because it's an easier plot to adapt from?

>>89379510
Cause is more easy to adapt. It's complicated for one person made a fanfic so big with so many characters available; that's why I asking for help. I don't made a jojolion cause is so weird I don't know even what characters put.

Does the exchange between Loki and Dan take place before or after Hex arrives to the bar?

>>89381042
Long after.

Loki meets Dan only after Dan has arrived at the bar, and that's like 3 or 4 hours after the time limit is up. Dan is already well and truly shitfaced drunk in a glass of alcohol the size for a kaiju by the time Loki approaches him.

So is Dan mistaken for a monster in the bar due to his apperance?

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>>89382431
>Oh, you are a sad little goblin, this one's on the house

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>>89382524
Well now I'm imagining him smearing into a giant glass of scotch on the rocks.

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>>89382996
>Mario attempts to steal a car too small for him
Does he has the ability to smear himself here or he gains it as part of the dealing with Loki?

>>89383980
We haven't used his smearing before this point, or at least I'm not sure if we have.

I've been tempted many times to use the word smear to describe him moving from place to place, but since that ability is linked with the Scopemen, I'm not sure if it's applicable to Dan.

Unless Dan is a Scopeman, but that'd be rather hard to make relevant to the plot since he's not going to be in it much longer.

>>89384236
or in part 8 when one of the characters discusses about the Scopemen and how they can infiltrate society, the silhouette of Dan could appear alongside other characters

>>89384780
There was an idea like that for Bluto, but it feels kind of like a retcon to me.

What should happen with Music Meister after Loki escapes his body? does he kick the bucket?

>>89385325
Not counting Dinosaur Dan since he admits being one, is there any other character from the previous parts that fit the description of a scopemen?

>>89386970
Any characters from sufficiently old cartoons I think.

As for Music Meister, whatever situation ends up being funnier.

Hmm, so when the Varrick Capsules are introduced, who should be the one to give the run down on what they are? Should it be TOM or Varrick himself, or someone from Varrick Industries?

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>>89387068
As far as I know, he isn't a criminal here, so he could be hauled to one of Strickland's facilities once they examine the eyewitnesses reports and determine that a splinter of the WB was the culprit.

>>89388411
TOM could introduce Varrick and he in turn gives an exposition of the capsules.

>>89388457
Right now the event order is kind of shaky.

I'm going to have some time pass first.
Then TOM does an announcement and the table on the doc is shown on some big TV in the bar.
Pym makes some remarks.
Hex takes note of some names.
The Varrick Capsule is unveiled and awarded to the top 20 I guess.
Stan Lee is introduced.
Kaiju gossip rumors with Jack.
Jiggy asks some guy (Shocker) if he's heard about him and is called a loser.
Sam and Max meet Jack when they catch his name when he parts with Wander and Sylvia.
Hex stays in the bar as Pym goes to work on his car.
Stan Lees everywhere in the city.

Time lapse to later that night with Backslide arriving at the bar.

>Time passes
>TOM gets on the mic again “And that’s it folks, the first leg of the Wacky Races is over, here are our top contenders!”
>The results of the race are displayed on one of the giant flat screen TVs mounted on the bar’s walls
table from the doc goes here
>Hex and Pym are looking at the results
>Pym is disappointed “Dang, I could’ve done better.”
>Hex shrugs and takes a better look at the display
>There’s a close up on the names Mojo Jojo and Mean Angel, who Hex makes a note of

>TOM’s voice is back “Now it’s time for the mystery sponsor prize! After each leg of the race is cleared, one of our sponsors will award qualifying racers with an extra prize! It could be anything folks! Weapons, vehicles, luxury cruise tickets, we won’t know until it’s announced! So without any further delay, let me hand the mic over to Mr. Varrick himself of Varrick Industries!”
>A man with a darker complexion, a pencil mustache, and a FABULOUS blue coat comes on screen “Thanks TOM, love what you do!” He does a snap and a point “Ladies, gentlemen, and whatever that is over there!” He points to something off camera that we don’t see “Today I’ve got something truly special for you!” He reaches into his pocket and produces a totally unremarkable looking device, it has suction cups and clamps “Behold, the Varrick Capsule! If you’re like most people then you’ve asked yourself at one point in your life ‘Where did I park my car?’ ‘Damn, this piano is heavy!’ or ‘I seem to have misplaced my refrigerator.’ Well not anymore! Do the thing!”
>The camera pans over to a lady in a Vegas showgirl getup who latches the Varrick Capsule onto a car and pushes the button, the car disappears in a puff of smoke and in its place is a marble with a button on it
>Varrick shouts “Again!” and the process is repeated to a yacht, an airplane, and a refrigerator
cont

>>89389346
>Varrick picks up the marbles and is spinning them around his fingers effortlessly “Any object, any size, reduced to the size and weight of your average marble, and when you want it back, just push a button and” Varrick pushes the button on one of the marbles and tosses it away from him, with a poof, a refrigerator appears, which Varrick opens and gets something out of it, while he’s busy pulling things out of the fridge to show how no damage at all was done, his assistant continues for him
>“We at Varrick Industries have been developing this technology for years, but it wasn’t until President Mr. Nobody cut thorough the legal red tape that we became permitted to sell this product to you. We hope that the top 20 racers will enjoy and make use of their free sample of this product for the remainder of the race.”

Not really feeling the Varrick dialogue I have for this. Any suggestions?

The beatdown that Tom gives to Chameleon wasn't going to be shown, right?

>>89389846
I don't think so, just an off screen thing.

>>89389346
should we fill those empty spaces in the leaderboard?

>>89391251
I suppose we should. Any ideas?

How's the point allocation for it? I wanted to make it really skewed towards only those who get really close to first.

>>89391969
I think there is some minor racers in the current character list that don't have any role, they could fill those positions. And there is also the characters in the Stand doc in case we need them.

>>89392159
I'll leave it up to other anons to pick who can fill in those other places then. I suppose Jiggy, Crazy Jane, Robot Man, and some others who are prominent later could go on there.

There are thousands of racers, so we can always pull more out of our asses when we need them, but it's still better to include anyone we're going to use sooner rather than right before we need them.

>>89393081
Some of those additional racers may not even appear outside of the classification tables, like Sloop John B or Georgie Porgie in SBR.

>>89394609
We still need to fill in the slots I guess.

And this is a page 10 bump.

Last bump from me before bed.

Alright, let's expand on Tom's scene in CN City. I have no idea how is Chameleon's accent rendered, so feel free to edit that part:

>The Chameleon sneaks into a dim-lit bar, running away from his failed assassination attempt
>Chameleon: Dammit! Ze mission was easy, too easy…how they managed to beat us? *cough* that wimp and his robot… I shouldn't have bothered to hire him
>As he slips through the corridors, one of the patrons spots him and starts following him from a distance
>Chameleon is trying to find a safe spot to pull a new disguise, but the bar is playing some smooth jazz which is getting on his nerves
>Chameleon: All I need is jus a clever disguise, but this music es driving me nuts... swing music, jazz... PHOOEY to zat!
>“Déjà vu, I heard those same words a long time ago…with that same disgusting accent”
> The voice startles him and he turns his head to see the source of it: a cat in a zoot suit standing at the other end of the corridor
>“I don’t like your style, chump, and the way you sneak around tells me you are bad news”
>Chameleon regains his composure “Just a pathetic street thug, he doesn’t know the trouble he got into”
>Chameleon’s Stand manifests and lunges forward, the cat remains motionless staring at Chameleon
>Chameleon: As I expected, he can’t see my 「Eleanor Rigby」. He’s defenseless against its attack!
>Just as the Stand is about to strike him, the cat calmly raises his view towards it “That’s one mean-looking Stand you got there, fella, but ain't the worst I’ve faced”
>Chameleon is shocked “H-he…he can see it!?”
>A ghostly arm holding a trumpet materializes out of thin air and blocks the attack of Chameleon’s Stand, the arm is connected to Tom the cat, who is now glowing with power
>Tom: Seems that every time I try to retire, one of you freaks crawl out of the woodwork. Never mind, let's do this 「ONE MORE TIME」!

cont.

>>89399018
>At his user’s command, the Stand fully manifests; a wolf dressed in a zoot suit now looms over him
>Chameleon: This isn't happening! Why a Stand user appeared just now? 「ELEANOR…!
>Before he could recall his Stand, 「One More Time」 blast 「Eleanor Rigby」’s face point-blank and Chameleon is knocked back in turn
>Tom: Look on the bright side, I’m gonna add some details to that ugly face of yours
>Chameleon: Nyet, nyet, NYEET!! I can’t fail a mission, I can’t…
>Tom grabs Chameleon by the neck and lifts him as 「One More Time」 readies its trumpet
>Tom: However, I don't wanna make a mess in the bar. Let’s take this outside, shall we?
>To be Continued

and that's it for now

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Morning Bump

>>89399040
So next we see him, the Chameleon is beaten and unconscious on the floor with Tom making a phone call to Strickland to come collect this guy since he doesn't have time to get involved seeing how he needs to go pick up his kids from school.

The only other time we should see Tom after that is in the crowd with his kids watching the Iron Vulture depart.

>>89402488
While he is in the crowd, Tom could get a call from Strickland after they find Chameleon's corpse

>>89403602
That's too much pull.
That'd be like if Sean Connery were in Indiana Jones 4, he wasn't because then there would've been too much expectation for him to tag along on the adventure.

Chameleon is killed off-screen or right after Tom leaves the scene?

>>89405119
He's killed after he's loaded into a cop bus or a Strickland bus, Aunt May's stand appears and forces itself down his throat.

Although he has clemency, no one recognizes him as a racer since his face is different from the face he was racing as.

>>89405534
I think it should be a Strickland bus. Does Tom leaves the place immediately or only after the Strickland guys arrive to take Chameleon? If it's the former, Aunt May's Stand could kill Chameleon before the bus arrives.

>>89407620
It should be after he's loaded onto the bus/armored van, just to show that nowhere is safe.

>>89408137
Ok, so the scene would go like this:

>Tom appears with Chameleon bound and gagged
>He dumps him in an alley and makes the call to Strickland
>An Armored Van designed to contain Stand users (the tech was shown in part 6) arrives
>Tom has a brief exchange with the Strickland workers and leaves to pick up his children
>At one point during the journey, Chameleon awakes inside the Van and starts planning his escape
>However, Aunt May's Stand managed to get inside the vehicle
>Aunt May berates him for failing the mission and the consecuences of falling in Strickland's custody
>The Stand strangles Chameleon, then turn into poisonous dough and forces itself into his mouth
>The driver notices this and stops immediately, alerting Strickland that the prisoner was just killed

Anything else? What's Tom's current standing with Strickland?

>>89409189
Tom fell out of touch with them for a while after Hank died and the whole organization went to shit, but Bobby reached out to all the old contacts to reestablish old bonds and strengthen the organization's position.

Though that's material I can't see any way to cover in this part... unless it comes from Navis.

>>89379851
Well why not start at your adaptation of Phantom Blood and ask people to contribute their ideas into the fic.

>>89389356
>After Varrick’s presentation is done, the top 20 racers go to pick up their prizes and another man takes the screen, one wearing sunglasses and has a different mustache “Greetings true believers! My name is Stan Lee and I welcome you all to San Fransokyo! You have just completed the first leg of your epic adventure, what better way to relax, unwind, and prepare for your coming trials than with a complementary room at any of my hotels across the city? Whether you’ve come for the race, the sights, the food, the celebrities, the or the most exciting thing of all – me! I know each of you are destined to have an amazing time here, no matter how brief your stay!”
>As Stan Lee’s message ends, the top 20 have finished collecting their Varrick Capsules, Pym is staring at his with a puzzled expression
>Hex glares over at Shocker who glares right back, feeling his neck
>The speakers kick on again “And that concludes today’s events. All qualifying participants who wish to continue in the race please meet back here before 9am tomorrow morning. As a reminder, clemency is in effect for all participants in the race. Thank you, and have a wonderful stay.”
>Shocker gets a smug look about him “You hear that? Try to lay a finger on me, cowboy, and the one behind the bars will be YOU!” as he marches off
>Pym is still staring at the capsule “I’m gonna go… modify my Rover.” and walks off absentmindedly to move his car somewhere else
>Hex looks around “I need a drink.”

>Pan over to some other customers in the bar, some big monsters are having a chat
>”Have you heard? That thing struck again.”
>”Yeah, I heard the body was drained dry, nothing but a husk left.”
>”I hear it’s some sort of soul sucker. After the WB crashed, I thought those guys got out of the business.”
>”Whatever it is, it can’t keep getting away with this.”
>Down at their feet are Wander, Sylvia, and Jack, who is taking notes on the conversation
cont.

>>89410106
>”Interested in rumors, huh? Well have you heard about the other major rumor swirling around town?”
>Jack turns the page in his notebook "Which other rumor?"
>"That the One and Only Jiggy has entered the race and is now in the city!"
>Jiggy strikes a pose, light seems to radiate from him, a narration box appears reading “Jiggy – Bollywood Super Star”
>The still is ruined by Shocker who pushes the group aside as he makes his was to the exit "Never heard of that loser!"
>Jiggy hangs his head low in defeat while Wander puts a hand on his back, a nearby trashcan the size of a dumpster (it’s scaled for the size of the regulars in the bar) catches fire

Should Sam and Max be familiar with Jiggy's movies? I'm debating if Jiggy should also hit it off with Sam and Max like how Jack does.

>>89410124
>No one in the city (perhaps in all the US) knows about Jiggy's career
>Except Sam, who has all his (insert random number) movies, including the limited series of adults films "the sultry man of the Punjab...in 3D"
>Both Max and Jiggy (and whoever was near) stays silent after hearing the last part

>>89410997
I think Max would be the one to know, not Sam, but I'm not as familiar with Sam and Max as I'd like to be writing this.

OK, so Sam and Max approach them after hearing Jiggy.
Jiggy is at first happy someone knows him, then horrified that Max is familiar with ALL of his filmography.
Jiggy makes an excuse, Sylvia makes an excuse and grabs Wander, and Jack is left there with Sam and Max.
Then I guess they can talk about how they did in the race and Jack tells them his real name, this time Sam recognizes him as one of his favorite crime novelist writers and they hit it off.

Then we need to showcase all the Stan Lees in the city.

>>89409623
during that brief exchange? I wonder if it will be a friendly encounter or Tom will just leave as soon as possible, not wanting to get involved in that kind of shit again

>>89412972
Tom has a family now; unless the world is ending, it's not his problem.

I just had another dumb idea.

So Tom calls in Strickland about this guy who might be talking to himself, they pick him up and something kills him before they can take Chameleon to wherever, this sends the alarms ringing.
The incident on Fantastic Island happens, somehow word of what happened to Snake-Eyes reaches them and that puts them in super high alert, like ancient enemy came back from the deal alert, The Wizard now has attention from Strickland on him, but they can't link him to Daffy, so Navis is stuck with the additional mission of watching him.

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>>89413115
>unless the world is ending
Damn foreshadowing

>>89413386
I like that, but it poses a problem since Navis is in the leading group in France and the Wizard stays behind exploring Daffy's manor

>>89414337
Navis is in it to win it, so her disobeying orders is expected.

>>89411708
Should the characters be aware of the fact that Stan Lee is seemingly everywhere or is just something mundane for them?

>>89417290
They notice it, and point it out, but I think we're having it so they think it's the same old guy who is just everywhere until they see a group of them.

There's some discussion about this somewhere.

>>89417747
I think the group of Stan Lees appears at the end of the chapter, before that there is no more than one Stan Lee in each scene.

>>89417953
OK, so before then we're all lead to believe he can just teleport or something.

>>89419267
aye, and that he is the monster behind the attacks

Have we defined all the checkpoint prizes? I feel that the one for CN City was already decided but is missing from the doc.

>>89422591
ACME Portable Holes.

Something they managed to make by studying Plucky's stand.

Not sure how to use it in the story yet.

Checkpoint 1 - Varrick Capsule from Varrick Industries
2 - Pillar Propane from Strickland
3 - Portable Holes from ACME (with a secret bonus prize from the Dada party to the first place winner: a bag of stand jawbreakers)
4 - (Spain, cruise ship) ??? from John D. Rockerduck
5 - (Paris, France) ??? from ???
6 - (Robot refugee town, Old Country) ??? from ???
7 - (Cape Suzette) ??? from ???
8 - The Wishing Star

Mr. Nobody probably had to shorten the race a bit after the whole Tulio thing, so there are only 8 checkpoints in total.

Last bump from me before bed.

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Good luck, you guys. Bumping this for the sake of the Run.

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>>89422767
>The robot town wasn't meant to have its own sponsor since it's too poor, one of the previous sponsor was supposed to handle the prizes there
>At the last minute, Ratchet, a relatively unknown robot businessman, offered to become the official sponsor of the town
>The prize he is giving is a bunch of spare parts, including some humanoid-looking pieces that he calls "upgrades"
>He is actually in cahoots with Gatlocke; after he removes the jawbreakers powering the captive robots, Ratchet turns them into spare parts and cyborg augmentations

>>89426453
Oh, how sinister. I like it.

So Gatlocke has actually succeeded in harvesting some jawbreakers already.

I wonder why he hasn't eaten one himself yet then.

>>89427547
Well, there is the possibility of dying after eating one of them. Besides, Gatlocke must be content with all the money he makes by selling them in the black market.

>>89427838
Gatlocke, content? He's the type who always wants more.

Then he gets wind of some other stand granting thing hidden away in the pit.

>>89428264
That's the other thing, with the Corpse part entering into play he doesn't need to risk his life with a jawbreaker.

>>89428550
I suppose he could be examining a jawbreaker when we first see him, musing on if it's worth it to eat it or not.

>>89429217
Does he have any living subordinate or a prisoner to test it? He may later wonder if people actually buy that crap to get powers or is just to poison other people, but then he reminds that as long as he gets paid he doesn't care what they do with them.

>>89429700
Gatlocke in the show he came from in his introduction episode was trying to steal a batch of unstable nanites, not to sell, but to use on himself so he'd get EVO powers.

I think he'd hang onto one of the jawbreakers for himself waiting for a suitably dramatic time to eat it. He's flashy and showy.

He's kind of unhinged.

Yeah, Gatlocke would first need to be forced into retreat by a bluff.

Ok that takes care of one of the prizes, three more left, any ideas?

>>89431519
I think Shere Khan from TaleSpin is the sponsor in Cape Suzette. No idea what prize he gives.

Hmm, Big Guy Nobody should have a coloring book of some sort >>89408570

Another page 10 bump.

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>>89433299
>For you
Oh shit

Funnily enough, I have been picturing the Big Guy Nobody as a version of Mr. Somebody, who is plain white.

>>89435991
Probably because he's so jacked.

So, Ratchet is the one that tips off Gatlocke about the racers staying in the town and arranges stuff to facilitate the raid?

>>89437298
Yeah.

I suspect there will be backstabbing going on. Who does it to whom first is up in the air.

>>89437472
If shit goes south, Gatlocke may spill the beans and reveal his connection with Ratchet, or his involvement could be discovered through other means. What happens with him after being exposed is to be decided.

Should there be other people/robots allied with Ratchet?

>>89437929
Ratchet probably feels he's never going to get out of the shitter without stepping on some heads. I don't think any of the other robots in town should know about his homicidal intentions.
Scud should be an old rival of his, maybe they were friends at one point, but then some bad... "oil" went down between them and Scud left to make his own way in the world while Ratchet was still stuck in town. It could be Ratchet had the idea to kill their fellow robots and sell their jawbreaker cores for profit, but Scud drew the line there and Ratchet got him kicked out somehow.

In the end, I think Gatlocke should kill Ratchet before either escaping with one last jawbreaker, or being killed himself by someone.

>>89438431
I was thinking that Ratchet's plan could be an attempt to recreate the WB's grip over the Old Country, with the robot town as the centerpoint of his own empire. He may even exert a degree of control over the town's goverment, allowing him to get rid of anyone that poses a threat to his plans.

>>89439639
That'll be a fun section to write. There's also the Atomic Super Man faction who are the founders of the settlement.
The robot town is still the part of this part I'm most looking forward to writing.

But it's still very far off, and I haven't felt motivated at all today to write anything.

>>89439709
There is also the robot church that could play a role in that section, especially if the Iron Giant is involved somehow.

>>89440392
It is going to play a role, as probably the main sense of community they have.

The Church of Deadlock.

When should we showcase the ability of Chameleon's Stand? That's something I overlooked in the bar scene.

morning bump

So, the prize at the end of a stage only happens in the first one?

>>89443096
I think it should get showcased during the fight that takes place before that, or even sooner.

He has to make people think they're looking at a reflection of themselves before his stand can steal their faces.

In a way, the method to activate it is very similar to [La Cucaracha], so that extra parallel should piss Tom off even more if it comes up.

>>89448858
Someone could spot the disguised Chameleon and then find the faceless victim (or the other way around), setting off the alarms.

This is the worst thread in 4chan right now.

>>89442403
Do they know that he was a demon of the WB in disguise?

>>89450427
No, all they saw was a robot with a "stand".

>>89450447
>Got raided day and night by bandits
>There's a clandestine workshop where they are dismembered
>Unknowingly worship a demon
Damn, what a shitty living. I don't wanna know what would happen if they discover Deadlock's true identity

>>89451467
Well, things get considerably better for them after the racers arrive and trash Ratchet.

All part of Mr. Nobody's karma plan.

What's gonna be DAVE's connection to the robot town? Did the robots from Belle Reve dragged HARDAC all the way there?

>>89452210
They put him together from the wreckage for whatever reason.

>>89452282
From what I recall, the idea was that HARDAC became self-aware after all those scans Von Drake performed on the prison's inmates, with Ludwig's personality as the main one. The robots that followed Deadlock could have noticed that and carried HARDAC with them, turning it into a robot after they established in a permanent settlement.

>>89452562
No, no, HARDAC becoming self-aware was part of the ruse to make Von Drake go crazy.

The robots might've noticed the mangled remains and thought it was one of them, so they repaired it and it became the robot it is now.

>>89452784
That's what it says in the doc, it has the intelligence and personality of all the inmates it scanned (and that it awakened inside HARDAC's remains), may have not become self-aware at that point though.

Whatever it was, he probably dispatched his builders and added their memories to his databank

>>89452864
So he was never in the town to begin with.

He just "woke up" in the wreckage of the jail after his remains were rebuilt into a body and went from there.

OK, where the hell are we actually at.
First checkpoint, what kind of shit should be going on in the city before the plot with Loki kicks in?

What kind of shit do Sam, Max, and Jack go do? Should they just walk off together than then a time lapse takes place to Dan arriving at the bar?

>>89454182
They stroll through the city a bit, discussing how Jack is a writer that has yet to sell out, then they find a Stan Lee, then another Stan Lee, and so on. I don't know what else should happen there before Backslide arrive to the checkpoint, maybe Pym is tinkering a bit with the capsule and his car..

>>89453060
Is it relevant who rebuilt him as a robot?

>>89454336
The main problem I think I'm having is coming up with dialogue for Sam and Max.

They are very distinct characters that you can't just bland over.

>>89455305
Not unless he's looking for who built him, otherwise it could be anyone.

Going though my notes and organizing stuff, after >>89410124 we have
>>89410997
>>89411708
>>89454336
condensed to one post, that's
>No one in the city (perhaps in all the US) knows about Jiggy's career
>Except Max, who has all his (insert random number) movies, including the limited series of adults films "the sultry man of the Punjab...in 3D"
>Both Sam and Jiggy (and whoever was near) stays silent after hearing the last part
>Jiggy is at first happy someone knows him, then horrified that Max is familiar with ALL of his filmography.
>Jiggy makes an excuse, Sylvia makes an excuse and grabs Wander, and Jack is left there with Sam and Max.
>Then I guess they can talk about how they did in the race and Jack tells them his real name, this time Sam recognizes him as one of his favorite crime novelist writers and they hit it off.
>Sam recognizes him as Vince Harley, the crime novelist and admits to being a fan
>Sam and Max are more than willing to tell Yellowjacket all about some of their past cases, especially if it means they might end up inspiring a new book by an author Max describes as “Yet to sell out”
>They stroll through the city a bit, discussing how Jack is a writer that has yet to sell out, then they find a Stan Lee, then another Stan Lee, and so on
>While they stroll through the city, the racers meet Stan Lee in several locations performing various jobs, there is always one Stan Lee among the crowd

I'm really stumped here since it involves Sam and Max's rather colorful dialogue, which is a step beyond me with my level of familiarity with them.
Anyone want to suggest some lines?

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I was checking the doc and there is a small error in the part with the bullet train: Thomas Diesel's Stand is the muscular blue punchghost from the comic, the train Stand was someone else's.

>>89455464
Seems that his true motivation is finding out who he really is, not knowing that he was originally the HARDAC

>>89459337
I still don't know how those people are going to come into play for that section.

Hmm... was the thing about slamming Big Guy Nobody into a mountain included on the doc?

>>89459881
Could be a group of racers teaming up as the crew of the enemy train, with Thomas Diesel as the train's guard.

>was the thing about slamming Big Guy Nobody into a mountain included on the doc?
Nope, we haven't decided if that goes in the middle of the arc or as a flashback on their way to Rio

>>89460410
Well, we could always say they are racers who have teamed up to take out the leaders (in points) to better their odds.

>>89460691
Maybe they were in a position similar to Hex when he lost his horse and they allied with the owner of the train to stay in the race, pooling their Stands abilities to operate the train. Which means that along with fending off the assassins, Hex and Pym must defend the bullet train from a Wheel of Fortune-like Stand.

>>89461543
And they're targeting Pym because he has a high number of points.

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>>89462184
>Diesel's Stand has the side effect of making him forget his own identity, which leads him to copy the mannerism of others
>At one point of the fight, his Stand rips a chunk of the bullet train and fashion it into an ant helmet for its user

>>89463639
I know nothing about this character other than he's from some kind of ripoff comic.

>>89464894
There is nothing to know about him, he's not even a decent Jotaro ripoff. Here is a storytime from the archive: https://desuarchive.org/co/thread/84680947

Yeah, last bump from me before bed as well.

Really need someone who is good at Sam and Max dialogue to help out here.

What is currently missing is who are the other members of the crew and who is the driver of the enemy train

>>89469453
It's that guy from Thomas the Tank Engine.

Though that whole sequence is still too far away to properly plan out.

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I got an idea: what if the robot town was built with the remains of the Iron Giant? As the robots gathered around the ruins of the Looniversity, they were unknowingly carrying his pieces among the building materials, and the Iron Giant's consciousness is lingering in the city (in a role similar to Danny in part 4).

>>89472303
So where did they get the parts from? Why were the parts there?

Did the Iron Giant once try to retrieve a part of the corpse and got blown up by the WB?

>>89473217
Could be like in the movie and he was destroyed when stopping a threat to the earth, the pieces were found by some groups and they carried them around like relics (making a parallel with the Hero's corpse)

>>89473680
Or he might've been the original guardian of the arm the WB got.

>>89473787
So the Iron Giant was destroyed to obtain the Hero's arm and the WB took his pieces to study them in the Looniversity? His self-repair ability was probably damaged or removed by the WB's scientists, which prevents him to reform himself.

>>89475034
Depending on how involved we want the Iron Giant to be, he could end up as the protector of the town by the end of the arc if he ends up repaired.

>>89475265
Or he briefly awakens through the pieces embedded in the town, giving support to the defenders during the raid; after that, its inhabitants swear to find the remaining parts, being convinced that the Iron Giant is the Hero of legend.

>>89457939
How many times should they encounter a Stan Lee?

>>89476789
Are there any arc numbers associated with Stan Lee?

>>89476832
Don't think so.

>>89477130
Then we should go with probably less than 10, just enough to get the point across that this guy seems to be everywhere.

They go to the park, Stan Lee is selling balloons.
They go into a dark alleyway, Stan Lee is cop who gives them directions.
They get in a cab, Stan Lee is the driver.
They go into a cafe, Stan Lee is sitting at the counter.

>>89477402
There is also the Stan Lee whose cup of coffee is knocked out by Backslide, and there could be one caught in the chaos of the parade

>>89478947
Pretty much every crowd shot needs to have one Stan Lee in it.

>>89422767
Since the holes have limited uses, the racersholes that won them should be wary of not wasting them all at once. Pym and Hex could use theirs while being chased by the assassins in Europe.
After Tulio's arc, there are probably few of those portable holes remaining (or none).

>>89481966
They could pull some Roadrunner tactics using them.

If anyone still has holes by the time they're in space, they will be game breakingly lethal.

>>89485450
Perhaps is Yellowjacket the one that manages to keep one last hole when they reach the space stage, he is pretty much outclassed there.

>>89486031
And that hole gets placed on The Wizard's Orbal bubble at a critical moment in high fight against Super Serenity.

Should Loki get involved in the fight before Ghost Rider arrives?

>>89487815
He's pulling the strings and pulls out right after the angel wakes up.

You don't ever want to be around when an angel wakes up.

I'm still struggling with this next part because I cannot come up with good Sam and Max dialogue.

>>89410124
>There’s a tap on Jiggy’s back, he turns to see a short rabbit with shark teeth
>”Excuse me, but did I hear that right? Are you really THE Jiggy, the Bollywood star?”
>Jiggy straightens up, regains his composure, and combs his hair back “Sure am, kid.”
>”I knew it.” Max produces a pen and a piece of paper from somewhere that’s none of our damn business
>Jiggy takes them and begins signing “Man oh man, I was starting to worry that no one around here had ever heard of me.”
>Wander, Sylvia, Jack, and now joining them Sam, all exchange looks and shrug since they have no idea who Jiggy is
>Max takes the autograph “I have all 487 movies you’ve starred in,” Jiggy beams with pride “including your limited series of adults films ‘The Sultry Man of the Punjab’… in 3D!"
>Sam, Wander, Sylvia, Jack, Sam and Jiggy stay silent after hearing the last part, Jack coughs awkwardly
>Jiggy is now looking mortified “Whoa, hey, look at the time! Got places to be, elbows to rub, you know how busy it is being a star! Bye.” and makes a hasty exit
>Sylvia nudges Wander “Hey buddy, let’s go check out one of those free hotel rooms that man with the sunglasses was talking about.” and before Wander can say anything she’s already picked him up and is walking quickly away from Max
>Jack is still standing there awkwardly until Sam says “Hey, you’re that guy who placed 8th, right? We only managed 15th and 16th.”
>Jack puts his hands down from writing in his notes “Oh, yeah, though honestly I wasn’t expecting to even finish the first leg of the race. My car got sabotaged at the starting line, so I don’t think I’ll be able to continue. Besides, I only entered looking to get some new material for my next novel.” Jack points to his notebook
>Max chimes in “Look Sam, an endangered species, I thought you guys went extinct ages ago.”

No, this isn't coming naturally to me at all. I'll need help with Sam and Max.

>>89488941
>Sam: With such a ridiculous name, I'm surprised anyone would see that movie
>Max: But I was watching it last night
>Sam: Judging by those noises, I thought you were watching a documentary from Animal Planet
>Max: Well, there were animals involved...

after Jiggy runs away:
>Sam: That swarthy fellow runs in a funny way
>Max: As expected from a man impaled by a hippo
>Sam: I hope that happened in a movie about Vlad Tepes
>Max: Nope, the same movie
>Sam: Thanks for the mental image, buddy

>>89490293
Oh wow. I didn't even think about that.

I guess Jiggy really is very similar to Johnny.

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>>89491112
Yeah, but one married and banged a cat woman while the other was buttfucked by a hippo for money
>The Big Guys law firm and porn studio had a subsidiary in India

>>89493336
Hrmmmm.... for some reason I didn't even think of that, I thought of the hippo from Rocko's Modern Life.

Is Jiggy the same age as Johnny in this?

>>89495853
Probably younger, how old was Johnny in part 3?

>>89495969
I don't know.

20 years older than he was in part 2, at least.

So Johnny was probably late 40 to mid 50s in part 2.

Yeah, Jiggy would need to be younger, otherwise he'd be in his mid 60s.

Well, last bump before bed.

When will Sam & Max reveal their Stands?

>>89499860
When fighting Loki for the first time I think.

Maybe that's what pisses him off to curse them into women.

>>89500805
>A curved wooden stick emerges from Max's hand, Beach Boy-style
>Max: Pretty cool trick, eh? Oh right, you can't see 「UP-SET ATTACK」, sucker!
>Sam: Uh Max, something tells me that this fruity guy is among the small percentage of the world's populace that can see Stands
>Max: Oh crap, a minority! Let's make it look like it was in self-defense

>>89501071
Any ideas on what kind of jabs Max makes about Jack being a novelist before Sam recognizes him as one he actually likes?

>>89497282
In part 3, Johnny was already sporting a beard and his hair started to gray out, so Jiggy could be in his forties too during this part.

>>89502551
I'm pretty sure the fake-out motivation for Jiggy being in the race is trying to revitalize his career.

>>89503265
>After retiring from the race, Jiggy joins the circus
>His act involves a hippo

>>89503965
He becomes quite famous for his act.
And the only person on the continent who could know about the connection with hippos is Max.

Thinking about it, V is going to be all over the scene with how much alliteration Sam drops.

>>89506576
and Stan Lee, V probably loses his shit when he gives his monologue before devouring Dan's soul

>>89507173
So excessive alliteration forces him to come to the person saying it?

>>89507568
All those alliterations could prevent him to pick a single one, so he just jumps all over place. He may end up briefly in the crime scene while out of control.

>>89507720
So he's forcefully pinged all over the place and can't stop or settle?

Sam's alliterations draw V to the fight, but Stan Lees alliterations are what force him to retreat.

>>89508384
>Stan is an unrelenting vortex of verbiage; If V had not retired from the scene, he would have been consumed by it.

>>89509111
How should we describe what IS vampire/soul consumer Stan Lee?

There won't be any resolution to his existence in the story.

>>89510628
Perhaps he is some primeval demon that operates independent of the other demon factions. Do we need to explain what he is? It could be left unanswered, like Killinger.

>>89511349
I think it'll just be left unexplained.

But I meant how do we describe his presence? Is it like a black hole that just pulls you into him?

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>>89511609
What he does to Backslide may happen off-screen, but V catches a glimpse of the process and the sight scares him shitless.

Or is like pic related.

>>89511877
So V just narrowly escapes the soul sucking power of vampire Stan Lee.

But stepping back, I'm still stuck with the Sam and Max dialogue that immediately comes next with them learning Jack's real name and Sam recognizing him as one of his favorite crime novelists.

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>>89513460
>Stare into the abyss and the abyss stares back at you, true believer!
Stan Lee is an entity closer to our original idea for Loss

>>89514264
What do you think he means by true believer in this context?

>>89515828
That he discovered the true nature of this Stan Lee and he is taking that knowledge to his grave?

Bumping.

When they run into the first Stan Lee in a dark alleyway, he's a cop.
They were in the alley way in the first place looking for the local criminal element or because Max wanted to see if he could get two homeless dudes to fight over a big pretzel.

And a final bump before bed.

How does Jack react to meeting a fan?

>>89519056
He will be happy to hear that there is still people that read his books, then briefly worried that Max knows an embarrassing fact about him like he did with Jiggy.

>>89520528
Are there any embarrassing facts about him?

>>89522781
I don't think so, at least not as embarrassing as being pounded in the butt by a hippo.

Sam could be carrying one of Yellojacket's books and he recognize him from the the picture in the back cover

>>89522849
Maybe he remembers an earlier version of his pseudonym costume.

>>89522866
>Do all writers need to dress up like there are Liberace's impersonators?
>Quiet you, you already had your time with the pornstar, now is my time for fanaticism

>>89523133
OK, that gives me an idea for how to proceed. I'll work on that later.

In the mean time, while I was trying to find Yellowjacket comics online again, turns out someone made this since the last time I went looking.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rm5Mfs5dnLc

>>89523725
>He ask Vince why he doesn't use the name yellowjacket anymore
>Cue Pym humming while working with his car

>>89524343
Then after that cut away they can already be outside of the bar with Sam talking about their various cases and the Stan Lees marching through the background.

Which is a title that sounds like it's something Vince would have written earlier in his career: "Crime School" or "Lead Coffin".

>>89524724
>Vince looks at Stan Lee standing in a corner
>"I swear I saw that guy before"
>His gaze move across the street and spots Stan Lee in a hotdog stand
>"wait a second..."
>He quickly looks at the opposite corner, the previous Stan Lee is gone

>>89526180
the second one

>>89488941
>Sam scratches his abnormally small chin “Say, you look familiar. Have you ever been involved with any illegal pie smuggling rings or underground role playing tournaments?”
>Jack shakes his head “Nah, just crime fiction. Though my old editor back at Dark Detective did once tell me to go get involved in that sort of stuff.”
>Sam has an epiphany “Dark Detective? Hold on, what did you say your name was?” Sam is now reaching into his breast pocket for something
>“I didn’t. Name’s Vince Harley.” Jack reaches out his hand for the introduction handshake
>Sam shakes his hand and pulls out a book from his pocket titled ‘The Lead Coffin’ and starts gushing “I knew I recognized you!” as he opens the dust jacket to a picture of the author: Vince in his Yellowjacket outfit
>Max looks at this and asks “Do all writers need to dress up like there are Liberace's impersonators?”
>Sam: “Quiet you, you already had your time with the pornstar, now is my time for fanaticism.” and turns back to Vince “So Mr. Harley, why didn’t you enter the race under your regular pseudonym Yellowjacket?”
>Jack closes his eyes and inhales slowly

>Cut to Pym humming while working with his car

>Cut back to Jack, Sam, and Max, who have now exited the bar and are walking around the city, Jack has his notepad out again

OK, so what kind of nonsecular story about a past case should Sam be regaling him with?

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>>89527579
That time they hunted down a missing yeti across the endless number of tourist traps in the US?

>>89528524
I'm asking since I don't know if it should be a call back to one of their actual cases or something just made up for this.

And also because I'm really bad at writing Sam and Max lines.

Since the racers think Dan is the soul eating monster, does the deal with Loki alters Dan in some other way besides changing his Stand?

>>89529410
Maybe he also gains some horns?

Depends on the nature of the deal and how Loki is giving him power.

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>>89529457
>Dan gains the ability to smear after sealing the deal
>He is unaware that he now looks like he's made of rubber

>>89531179
So he's smearing around insulting people and every time they try to punch him he drops a frame out of existence and they punch someone else?

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>>89532902
I don't think he should have the same abilities of a Scopeman, but he could have the ability to stretch himself.

>>89533230
The ability to stretch himself around attacks?

>>89534312
Yeah, something like the perfect frame of Kuzco in the climax of part 2, but with less power.

>>89534751
So just smooth movement?

I don't think a demon should be able to grant someone that much power unless it was a really fucked up deal.
Like so fucked up that Dan's soul being consumed by Stan Lee is a lesser fate than what he would've faced otherwise.

Any particular way the racers should feel about a soul eating monster?

Do any of them have connections or history with things like that?

>>89538278
Pym will probably dismiss the notion as bullshit, while Hex will believe that such thing exist. Which racers are gonna end up fighting Dan?

>>89538527
Sam and Max will, not sure who else yet.

I think Jack hangs back and watches. He can hold his own in a fight, but a huge brawl isn't something he can break up on his own unless he has a lot of bees, which he has yet to obtain.

Well a bump before bed.

Hoping more people will give input to help this along since I'm getting all kinds of writers block when it comes to Sam and Max.

>>89536863
So, he's gonna be some sort of walking putty that absorbs blows and scurries through the battle?

Page 10 bump

What else should happen in the Iron Vulture while flying to Fantastic Island?

>>89542545
No idea, still not sold on whatever power Loki gives him.

>>89545560
What do you think should happen?

>>89546045
Right now there is only the incident with the enlarged bug, perhaps Hex continues teaching Pym about Pacing while they are onboard the ship.

>>89546798
That'd be a good place to fit in another lesson, like Pym needing to use pacing to fix his fuck up the first time he uses his stand power and how it makes him realize he can't just rely on one source of power.

>>89547388
How many lessons should Pym learn and when they should take place? We already have the first one at the start of the race that involves sensing the Narrative, and another one onboard the Iron Vulture, I guess one of the lessons involve learning to make a disruption.

>>89548168
One of the lessons needs to be sometime around Nowhere.

>>89549315
There is also the encounter with Watt's robot, where Pym puts into practice what he learned so far, and Punisher in Cn City. Is Frank gonna be a Melody user or a Pacing user?

>>89550384
I think Frank is going to be a pacing user who also incorporates some melody.

And Hex is the one who fights Frank, he defeats him remembering an observation Pym made about the weapons Frank uses, though Pym isn't actually in that fight.

>>89550960
Should be during that fight that the ability of disruption is first introduced or should be before?

>>89551864
I think Hex will mention disruptions to Pym for the first time on their way to Aberdale when explaining to Pym how the weapons managed to function until Pym pointed out that they shouldn't be able to do that.

So, how involved should Hex and Pym be with the events unfolding and San Fransokyo?

>>89553441
Well, Hex heard the kaiju talking about the monster, he could feel compelled to hunt it down if that means receiving a bounty.

>>89553783
Or his pacing ability kicks in and he knows that he'll become involved with this and would rather face it on his own terms than have it come to him.

I still don't think they'll be that involved in this fight.

But it'll at least give them an opportunity to observe stand powers from the perspective of someone who can's see them.
Though I don't think they'll meet Ghost Rider.

>>89538853
So, the exposition about Stands goes before, during or after the fight?

>>89556142
It'll happen right around here >>89501071 is what I'm thinking.

>>89556130
Jiggy is probably dragged by an unseen force to the top of one of those turbines, when he spots Loki he wonders what the fuck is going on there, then he and the turbine burst into flames, becoming Ghost Rider.

>>89557522
I was thinking he was up there just because. No explanation needed, just looking over the city before he spots Loki and his head bursts into flames.

>>89528524
I'm getting sorely tempted to just take a line straight from Poker Night at the Inventory 2.

>Sam: No, really! Max's super-ego had a collosal hissy fit and turned Max into some sort of rampaging elder god and our friend Sybil was thirteen months pregnant, and Stinky and Sal were making out and... Wow, it really does sound crazy when I say it out loud.
>Max: I still believe you Sam.

Because I've been stuck at this part for over a day now with no one jumping in.

>>89560104
>Yellowjacket is writing it down as fast a possible "...thirteen months pregnant...well, this will need some editing before handing the manuscript"

>>89527579
>Sam: “No, really! Max's super-ego had a colossal hissy fit and turned Max into some sort of rampaging elder god and our friend Sybil was thirteen months pregnant, and Stinky and Sal were making out and... Wow, it really does sound crazy when I say it out loud.”
>Max: “I still believe you Sam.”
>Yellowjacket is writing it down as fast a possible "...thirteen months pregnant… well, this will need some editing before handing the manuscript."
>Max is babbling “And when you do eventually sell out or those pinheads at Hollywood finally run dry another well, we’ll be able to file a legal suit against them and rake in the royalties!”
>Vince looks at Stan Lee standing at a crosswalk "Isn’t that…" his gaze moves across the street and spots Stan Lee manning a hotdog stand "Wait a second…" He quickly looks back to the crosswalk, the previous Stan Lee is gone
>They go to the park, Stan Lee is selling balloons.
>They go into a dark alleyway lead by Max “Time to find out what the criminal element of this town looks like.” while menacingly rubbing his hands together
>A voice calls to them from behind “Greetings, citizens.” It’s Stan Lee dressed as a cop “You’re all entered in that big race, aren't ya? This isn’t the best place to be hanging around, there’s some crazy guy on the loose.”
>Sam, Max, and Jack walk out of the alleyway while cop Stan Lees hails a cab for them
>The cab rolls up and cop Stan Lee holds the door for them, after he shuts it Max exclaims “Thwarted! I was hoping to get a couple of homeless guys to fight to the death over this pretzel.”
>The cab driver turns and asks them “Where to, boys?” It’s Stan Lee again
>The cab stops at a cafe where they all exit and watch the cab drive off before going inside where they see Stan Lee sitting at the counter drinking a mug of coffee
>Sam comments “That must be a popular look in this city.”

Well, it's what I got.

>>89562054
>Some number of hours have passed, the sun has set and the city is illuminated by all the bright lights
>Back at the Big One bar, Dan Backslide has finally made his way to the checkpoint, He's chard, roughed up, and has a black eye with a steering wheel still stuck around his neck
>“Is this the check point for the Wacky Race?” he asks wearily
>The giant bartender is cleaning a massive glass “Sorry pal, the time limit expired hours ago.”
>Dan has a dull look of shock before falling face forward on the counter where he begins to flail his arms and legs yelling “It’s not fair! Confound those racers! Oh, how I hate them! I hate them! I hate them!”
>“Oh, you are a sad little goblin, this one's on the house.” The bartender puts down a massive glass of some sort of alcoholic beverage which is clearly sized for a kaiju
>Dan lets rip "CONFOUND THESE RACERS, THEY DRIVE ME TO DRINK!" and promptly takes a swim in the glass to drown away his problems.

Alright, now once Dan is right properly shitfaced, that's when Loki enters the plot.
How are we doing that? Does he just take a seat next to him? Is he the guy Dan has been unloading his words onto for the past however many hours before making a suggestion?

>>89562375
He starts the bar brawl before or after engaging in the conversation with Dan?

>>89562721
After Dan signs the contract, that's when Loki starts the bar brawl.

>>89562823
So he first hears a disembodied voice, then Loki appears from behind some object and takes a seat next to Dan, convincing him to make a deal with him.

>>89563343
Or he just takes a seat next to him and stays silent until Dan is sufficiently inebriated.

Still not sure what Loki should say or how it should be worded.

Page 10 bump.

Possibly the last bump from me before bed as well.

Anyone have any good familiarity with Loki as a character?