/Co/Co/'s Bizarre Adventure: Dinosaur Dan Edition

Before anyone asks (like they do in everything thread without fail), this is a HUGE fanfic.
Now that that's out of the way, here's where we are right now with it:

>The second pillarman level has a large maze.
>The entrance of which is surrounded by a large moat, there’s a drawbridge leading into the entrance.

>Group 1: Trevor, his robots, Dora, Suzie, Me-Mow, and the two Gross Sisters - lanky and strongfat

>Group 2: Gameboy, Wall-E, Di Lung, Mirage, and the short Gross sister

>Group 1 enters the maze first, Trevor knows Gameboy knows the patterns of the maze and anyone else still alive will catch up soon enough

>Group 2 arrives a few minutes later and presses into the maze

>The entire maze has this glowing liquid flowing around the base of the walls, illuminating the floor

>While Group 2 presses in, the short Gross sister is staring daggers at the back of Mirage's head
>She has a flashback of when she and her sisters first arrived in the jail thinking they were hot shit with their stands and trying to hustle all the other inmates
>Then they picked a fight with Wong and his gang stomped them, after that they became a joke in the prison and fell way down the pecking order
>She holds up a stand glove coated hand with Mirage's head between her fingers from her perspective

>We cut back to Group 1
>Bruttenholm rambles that someone in the previous team stole his notes about the perfect frame potion
>”The poor idiot misinterpreted the notes and believed the moat contained the perfect frame potion.”
>Dora asks him what happened.
>"Well first he complained of a mild heartburn and tightness on his chest, before crystallizing entirely from the mouth outwards… then he fell over and exploded."

>Cut back to Group 2 and the short Gross sister is now looking very dried out, she's drinking the glowing liquid present everywhere and then dies via crystallizing water.

>>85372736
>(It’s the goop that turns whatever touches it into explosive unstable crystal from Atlantis: The Lost Empire)
>Gameboy gives no fucks
>Wall-E is mortified and decides since he has no obligation, or bomb collar, to stick around Gameboy, who pretended not to see what Mirage did, he hurries ahead of them tracking the locators in the collars
>He falls into a pool of the stuff, but it has no effect on him since he is a robot and he emerges in a secret room between the walls, like a maintenance shaft
>He pulls out the backpack and is checking to make sure the map is alright when a stand jawbreaker falls out of it the vast inner contents of the bag as well
>A cockroach comes out of the walls and begins eating it, however it is they eat
>Maybe the jawbreaker was already breaking down from the liquid?
>It looks like it keels over and Wall-E panics a little before it pops back up right, Wall-E begins playing with it and they bond somehow
>The cockroach shows him the way out of this maintenance room and he's back on the trail of Group 1

>Back with Group 1, Trevor stops the team and pulls out his stand, he walks forward and uses it to reach into the walls until he stops, he then tells the group to look up and they see a vat that looks like it's about to pour on him
>He's grabbed the gears in the wall to stop the mechanism from tipping the vat
>he notes that whatever is in there replenishes on its own and that it can either dissolve, mutate, or transmutate living things into other things at seemingly random. They've been unable to get a sample of it back up to the labs since the only thing it does not react to other than air is the vat it is contained in.

>Wall-E catches up with the group when they make camp. Camp implies light. While looking over the map, Suzie is off somewhere else keeping Me-Mow busy since they're still finger trapped together. She's been unable to turn the trap into flesh.

>>85372769
>Dora starts looking over the map in the brighter light provided and notes some secret doors to rooms that look like shortcuts. While doing this they look up and see stars. Wait? Stars? Underground? This is an "oh shit" for Trevor since someone somewhere in the maze has triggered a rather nasty trap and they have to quickly douse that light. While running from the "stars" chasing them, they notice they're fireflies, and given that things are catching on fire, it is a very bad idea to touch them.
>While they are chased in the maze by the fireflies, Trevor casually comments "Oh, I know exactly what Bobby is gonna say about this"
>Dora runs ahead of the group and starts leaving red footprints before opening a secret door and forcing everyone to go in there.
>Trevor is impressed Dora had the luck to find this, but also notes that if she uses her stand on him again she's going to regret it. Trevor begins examining the wall carvings there and we get some of the history of the current layer of the prison from it.

Need to fill in what history that is. Probably built to hold prisoners from the reunification war Kuzco lead so he’d be the only Emperor.

>Cut back to Group 2 who are dodging the fireflies, then climbing the walls casing the flooring trap to activate. Gameboy, being Gameboy, shot ahead the rest of the group, then turned back and started firing flares aimed at the inmates to attract the fireflies to them.
>He turns around and stares at the group of inmates with an evil grin
>Gameboy: "It's time for one of my favorite games, [Super Shooter]!"
>Multiple limbs appear from inside him, each one armed with a flare gun, while a 8-bit soundtrack starts playing
>From Gameboy's PoV it looks just like a fps, with a crosshair and a scoreboard

>Group 1 descends to an even older level of the prison.

And that's the end of the maze cliff notes that still need to be turned into story.

>>85372607

All right folks, it's time to start being honest here:

For this project to keep moving, we're going to need more of the onlookers contributing rather than just waiting in the wings being "idea guys." We've already burned out the anon who had to write Vento by himself and dialoguefag is currently MIA. If we don't want to fall apart like the other /co/ projects we need everyone to pitch in. Even if you're not good at writing a bit of greentext can at least serve as a framework for someone else or bump the thread at the very least.

>>85372607
goddammit! I can't catch some sleep without the thread plummeting to page 10. At this point we may as well end up making a thread per day.
Anyway, this was the last thing on the escape attempt arc >>85358883

>>85372937
>We've already burned out the anon who had to write Vento by himself

I wanted to take more of a backseat for this part, but it doesn't mean I'm not around. Most of the maze and also the Jaguar fight was me.

As well as a number of other ideas that ended up working in this part that I won't go into detail about.

>>85372977
Doesn't help that /co/ is moving stupid fast all the time now.

Unless I stay up until 3am, odds are the thread won't be up when I wake up, and even then there's no guarantee.

So, what do we want to work on right now? The maze? The frogmen level? Trevor explaining whatever details we're going to reveal about scopemen this part? More on Dan wrecking the prison? Something beyond that?

Or a wildcard, something before all that since the flashbacks Dora is supposed to have on the way to the prison still haven't been done.

Alright, let's pick up all the suggestions from the past threads and pray that they are reviewed this time.
>>85315939
>>85217920
>>85194401
>http://desuarchive.org/co/thread/84885182/#85072847
>http://desuarchive.org/co/thread/84885182/#85070809
>http://desuarchive.org/co/thread/85111995/#85136508
>http://desuarchive.org/co/thread/85111995/#85130257
>http://desuarchive.org/co/thread/84574760/#84626979

>>85373553
I stayed until 4-5 a.m. during the last thread(can't tell anymore), thread still was archived an hour later

>>85374759
It doesn't seem to matter what time of day it is anymore, threads on /co/ die within 2 hours of last bump.

OK, so Dan's stand can only store 6 charges. He shoots the Caveman full of holes and gets his 6 charges, then moves far enough away from him that the holes become permanent before using them to blast his way up.

He uses three shots to get up to the bottom of the lowest human jail, then a fourth shot to take out a crappy electric nightmare.
So when he reaches the prison with people in it, he only has two shots left before he needs to recharge.

>>85374916
>he only has two shots left before he needs to recharge.
Unload, he can punch holes again by unloading the charges he stored previously

>threads on /co/ die within 2 hours of last bump
shit, we really need some britfags, or whatever country is in plain day at 3 a.m. server time

>>85372607
>>85372607
source on that gif?

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>>85375162
It's from a Tex Avery cartoon called "The First Bad Man".

what was Joy's revised Stand?

>>85375145
It would also help if we had more people posting during the daylight hours severe time since it seems the only time people post is to bump it from the lower pages.

That being said...

Anyway, so he can unload charges, huh? Interesting.

>>85376628
It hasn't been revised yet, or if it was no one recorded it in the docs.

Usually if you have to ask then it hasn't been done yet. Or at least that's what I've found.

Not sure how much of a role Joy has outside of establishing there's a respwan function inside PI.

>>85376653
I may have misread the post, what I mean is that punching holes takes up one free space from the loader, and firing the concussive blast free up one space

>>85376700
I recall that it was shortened to one or two abilities instead of one for each emotion

>>85377147
I thought you meant like he opens up the gun chamber and disregards two of his charges.

So what are you trying to do with Joy that you need her ability to do so with?

>>85377592
add it to the doc

>>85377629
https://desuarchive.org/co/thread/84119456/#84129551

That it?

So, where was gonna be the chapter break, during Dan's fight with the Caveman or after he reaches the surface?

>>85377709
That must be the one. Crap, it's a lengthy description.

>>85378747
I'm just going to put the arc break after Dan's out of the chamber and after saying his piece to the caveman since from then on it's no longer about going beneath the jail.

Dan was the arc objective and he's sorted by then.

Then the new objective of getting back to the surface and dealing with whatever Dan's done kicks in. So the start of the Mirage fight is the start of the "escape plan" section which could probably use a better name.

>>85376700
Should be something like [Three Dog Night]. Or something, I don't actually know how the Jojo stand system works other than that it has something to do with music.

>>85378886
In JoJo proper a stands name has no baring what-so-ever on a stand's appearance or ability.

But we keep giving them names that imply what they might do because it keeps happening. Right now it looks like the name of Joy's stand is [Sweet Emotion]. And it has multiple abilities for some reason, probably to make up for the fact it has no offensive capabilities at all.

>>85378820
So, in order:
>Dan has a off-screen duel with the sheriff in the shaft, he punches holes in his ice block and left him to die
>He blasts his way through the pillarmen prisons, empowered by the STAR vortex, until he reaches the entry of the excavation
>He disposes of the mechanismos guarding the elevator
>Meanwhile, the group rides Gameboy through the holes left by Dan with Mirage inside a cage.
>Dan reaches the surface
what he finds first? is Wong waiting for him at the door of the elevator?

>could probably use a better name
Riot? Lockdown? (unless we use that one for the later arc) caveman's run?

>>85379157
While Dan kills the caveman and blasts through the levels, Dora's group is fighting Mirage.

By the time they've beaten Mirage, Dan is already at least up to the bottom of the human jails.

By the time Dora's group is back up to the prison, Dan has already rampaged a bit and there's fires and shit.

I don't think Wong would be waiting for him at the elevator, that's not a section of the prison inmates are allowed to loiter around. First time they meet is in the cafeteria as Dan's stuffing his face.

How about "Bad Man on the Loose" for a section name?

>>85379157
It might just be best to have Dan first arriving in the active jail be another off screen thing.

>>85375462
Should Dan try hitting on the Frizz?

>>85383566
The doc currently says that he may get distracted staring at a redhead, so...

>>85383609
Well, that was something I suggested a few threads ago when I recalled him finding a redhead in the short he's from.

I didn't think of the Frizz back when I suggested that.

How would we even arrange that?

>>85383774
Maybe Frizz joins the attempt to quell the riot, and they meet while Dan is wrecking shit.

>>85384031
What does she do, drive a bus into the chaos and start running people down?

Also, looking at the doc, Bad Cop from The Lego Movie was slated for this part as a guard. Should we take this opportunity to introduce him?

>>85384417
>drive a bus into the chaos and start running people down
I wasn't thinking in using her Stand-bus, but dammit, that sounds like something from Superjail.

>>85384487
Well OK then.

Maybe the call goes out for any stand users in the prison staff to get down there and start helping quell this problem.

>>85374759
Yeah, sorry about shitting the bed on the reviews. Let's lookit what we got while I'm here...
>Dredd
Sounds about right. We have to have him say Incendiary at some point.
>Spike
Barks weren't really explained that well but I'm guessing it's a sonic boom thing? I think this could work well, and I like the idea of the standard ORAORA only making it stronger.
>Dan
Sounds like it'll work.
>Swiper
Basic but I guess it'll work. Not too crazy about it, though. I'm not entirely sure how the 4 dimension idea would work but it could be cool if used right.
>Strong Bad
I get what it's referencing but my hateboner for luck based stands ensures I don't like this one. Seems a little too deus ex machina. If other people like it I'll let it drop but I'm not a fan.
>Swiper (Kitsune2)
Could work. I have a feeling something like it has been done before, but I'm hip if everyone else is.
>Sylvester
Could work as a guard, if we needed another one.

Apologies again for shitting the bed with the reviews, I'll try to be more diligent and catch things as soon as I can just in case the thread dies early again.

>>85386163
this was a particularly slow day, right after the previous thread almost hit 400 replies

>>85386311
The previous thread was just as slow as this one.

I'll be surprised if this one is even still up come morning at the rate threads are dropping and the rate it's being posted in.

>>85386958
Well, at least that thread was long lived.
Now back to part 6, some questions:
How many jawbreaker vaults are getting raided (not off-screen)?
Who is gonna be the ex-WB demon that is with Dethklok?

>>85387034
Dethklok were contracted?

>>85387034
Well we have two confirmed on panel vault raids. One where they pick up Dethklok and one where Penny intercepts them.

Do we need more on panel ones than that, or would they be better off left just being mentioned by Interpol while trying to track the "terrorists"?

As for the demon, last thread Nemesis the warlock was suggested. I don't know anything about him though.

>>85387129
I'm not sure if they were part of the WB celebrities, but at least the demon that was stationed in one of the vaults ended up working with Dethklok after Red Guy's defeat

>>85387151
It's a demon/alien from a 2000 A.D. comic (the same company of Judge Dredd)

>>85387129
No, I don't think they were. They might've been a group the WB had their eyes on, but they never got a chance to get their hooks into them. Their demon never managed to seal the deal before the WB imploded and whoever was on that case became their manager instead because it was a nice gig and with the amount of destruction Dethklok causes, he could stay on Earth instead of having to go back to hell.

I think the WB had a lot of active agents who got cut loose when it fell apart and they started doing their own things. Swiper was a WB infiltrator who was sent undercover to spy on Interpol who then sent him undercover into the cartels.

We could have a few more wayward demons who had to find new work in later parts if we want to explore that a bit more. I doubt Dr. Henry Killinger would work for the WB. I get the feeling Mr. Nobody got in touch with him because the WB had a larger plot brewing, but then Plucky happened and all plots were cut loose and left to their own devices.

>>85387230
So maybe Dredd is the one who goes to collect on that vault and, seeing the death and chaos Dethklok brings, decided to take them to jail in the process.

I think only two members of the band are supposed to have stands.

>>85372937
I'm assuming this is out current writer >>85362839 and school is now resuming.

>>85387254
>Reporter: "Mr. Nobody, is it true that your campaign received financial aid from members of the Warner Bros previous administration?"
>Mr. Nobody: This interview is over. Good day, pretty people!
>Mr. Nobody grabs a bike and rides away

>>85387305
>I think only two members of the band are supposed to have stands.
Yep, Toki and Murderface, they were made for the original draft.

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>>85388712
Mr. Nobody is going to be a challenge. He's almost narcissistic, but he has a way of making everyone love him.

I'm not sure if Toki is still joining Dora's group in part 6 or not. I figure Dethklok being in PI will force some changes since their brand of... death? Death follows them around I mean. Their brand of death will force people in PI out of their hide-y holes and shake up the pecking order. They'll probably be responsible for unleashing Daffy's other kids from wherever they're tucked away at within PI.

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Found this unused Stand in the archive, I wanted to rework it a bit and leave it up for grabs
https://desuarchive.org/co/thread/81617479/#81667105

>「ANOTHER'S ARMS」 (Coldplay song)
>Appearance: It takes the appearance of a large, white-skinned humanoid (similar to Anti-Venom) with circuit-like patterns across its body. It has a second pair of arms coming from its shoulder blades and a mass of tentacles sprouting from its back. Its real appearance is an amorphous cluster of tentacles.
>Abilities: When 「ANOTHER'S ARMS」 hits something with one of the tentacles in its back the struck target will split into five copies of the original (if he hits an opponent's arm it will turn into five arms), hitting the original object with a tentacle again allows the User to take complete control of the 4 copies (the original one remains unaffected), this includes telekinetic control of inanimate objects.
>Additionally, 「ANOTHER'S ARMS」 is able to manipulate its body to a small degree, allowing it to shift its form to avoid attacks.
>Stats:
>Power: B
>Speed: D
>Durability: B
>Range: C
>Precision: D
>Potential: E

>>85388881
If I remember correctly, Toki was supposed to be the "healer" of the group in the original draft. I'm still not sure what will be our party once it's fully assembled (outside of Dora, Suzie and Wall-E).
Also, off by one >>85388888

So while Bobby and RoboDale are fighting Wong, Dan is off doing whatever until he almost gets hit by a bus that just sliding around in the chaos smashing people around.

He sees the driver and does his drool bit, then gets hit by the bus a lot and is smashed through walls.

Dora has joined in the fight against Wong and he's finally had enough of this, whatever other stand users are in his gang should show up then (there's some suggestions on the doc) to keep his assailants busy as he goes after Dan. While Dan is distracted by anything and everything, Wong is finally able to grab and and asks him one more time for the information he wants to know, Dan still refuses to tell him anything and tries to run again, but Wong used his mode to inject Dan with whatever that stuff is that causes his joints to seize up.

So now Wong and Dan square off like in an old western.

Not sure how Wong should beat him.

>>85390208
I wanted to buff Wall-E's cockroach's stand a bit to give it some mild healing powers so it could keep Trevor alive long enough to get him to the infirmary. It's not that much of a healing power, but it's enough to keep whoever is under its effect from dying too quickly.

Toki as the healer was also before we had the respawn thing in play for PI, so we may need to rethink that.

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>>85390325
>he almost gets hit by a bus that just sliding around in the chaos smashing people around.
ALL ABOARD!

>Not sure how Wong should beat him.
What happens with the matter sucked by Dan's Stand? Maybe he punches holes in Wong and part of his chi-infused blood scurries into Dan's hand from the revolver's loader, worsening his condition, then Wong absorbs his Cels like Kuzco did with the other pillarmen.

>>85390407
Take into account that Warden can choose to not respawn someone trapped inside PI, so you can't be sure if the next time you die it's game over

>>85390833
So Wong has to slowly poison Dan until he can finally absorb him.
It'd help if there was a clearer distinction between Wong's mode and his stand.

And you do have a point with the Warden being able to choose who respawns, I think no one in Dora's group will die in PI unless they've already been killed a few times before in it (Pericles and Inch High).

Dora's group is looking like:
-Suzie
-Wall-E (plus the cockroach)
-Pericles
-Sticks

Inch High is there, but he's not doing much of anything after they save him aside from transmitting the picture of the map he took to Penny.

We should probably find a way to work Sticks back into the plot. I liked her a lot in the psych ward arc and think she still has potential.

>>85391035
Dan is showing off his Stand and QUALITY powers, boosted by the Vortex, he believes that he has bested the frail-looking Pillarmen, but it turns out Wong was slowly poisoning him, leaving him exposed for the killing blow.

>It'd help if there was a clearer distinction between Wong's mode and his stand.
His Stand is the mouth on each hand (I think) that allows him to brand people with the pain-inducing mark. His Mode is basically bound to his blood, so he still needs a way to inject it into his target (after the powerup he may be able to fire his blood like a spitting cobra).

Giffany was also listed as part of the group in the early draft, but she may become a side ally in the real world prison (since I have no idea how she or the server room could end inside PI)

>>85391508
So Wong's stand, [Death Grips] I think it's called, are the mouths on his hands. They let him mark people and inflict pain on them whenever he whats whenever they are in range. The pain caused by his stand causes him to get a power boost.

His mode lets him "infect" others with his blood, blocking up their pressure points and possibly mutating them? It's not a very strong mode since he wasn't a super pillarman elite, but it is a mode, so he is a cut above the average pillarman stock.

Since we're not going to go into much detail with Scopemen this part, are the only QUALITY powers Dan will show off dropping frames and freezing frames? Is the concept of frames foreign to pillarmen or just different enough from CELs that they can't figure it out?

Giffany... I might be able to work her into PI as a security AI designed to keep Daffy's other kids separated from the other inmates. It's something the Warden made, but isn't part of PI since he doesn't want to think about maintaining it all the time.

>>85391787
The description of Wong's Mode:
>Xuéwèi Mode: Daolon Wong's blood is infused with a substance known as "chi", this allows his body to be in a constant state of maintenance. When the chi-infused blood is inserted into a foreign body, it will attempt to hinder and harm the host body through clogging critical points inside the body, known as "pressure points".
Is basically a heal over time effect and a crippling poison rolled into one

>are the only QUALITY powers Dan will show off dropping frames and freezing frames?
Maybe smearing himself, unless that is too similar to the [Stretch] in part 7.


>Is the concept of frames foreign to pillarmen or just different enough from CELs that they can't figure it out?
Frames are mentioned in the description of CELs in part 2:
> Cels are an innate component in the bodies of the Ancient Aztec superbeings known as The Pillarmen. They allow these beings to harness the power of [FRAMES] to perform supernatural feats through increasing the fluidity and speed of their bodily functions. Pillarmen who have a high quantity of Cels can achieve states known as [MODES] wherein they gain new abilities and powers
and then in the Styles description we have:
>more skilled Style users can even use [FRAMES] to a certain extent to create supernatural effects like their sworn enemies
Knuckles' moveset being the example

>>85392151
Pretty sure we've dropped those spin equivalents from part 7 since our part 7 is in the same universe as our first 6 parts, so what we have already established in them is still in play and works in part 7.

Smearing would be a good power for Scopemen to have though. Not sure if Dan would demonstrate it unless it was a last ditch effort to evade Wong even after he had been crippled by Wong's mode.

OK, so Scopemen learned how to use their [frames] in different ways than their pillarmen ancestors. It makes having a mode unnecessary to preform supernatural feats.
They probably got that from the fruit.

What questions does Wong try to ask Dan anyway?

>>85392431
>What questions does Wong try to ask Dan anyway?
About the fruit (the key to rotoscoping), but I'm not sure how to word it without giving spoilers of part 8

>>85392531
Maybe we should just name drop Scopemen. It's not like they're going to be a big reveal in part 8 aside from maybe the realization that Scopemen are related to the mythical Pillarmen.

The fruit we can have is so Wong asks where "it" grows.

>>85392720
>Wong comments on how the powers displayed by Dan are unnatural, that they aren't the powers of the Pillarmen. He demands to know how he gained these powers.
>Dan realizes what he's talking about and gets furious, even criminal scum like him will never reveal the location of the fruit

There should be something in the caveman shaft or in Dan's chamber that Trevor reads describing the nature of Dan. How he's something like a pillarman and at the same time something different than a pillarman.

His relation to pillarmen should be made clear if we're not going to just outright call him a Scopeman.

>>85393250
carvings of the pre-scopemen running away from the pre-pillarmen and then gathering around the not-Rokaka tree were suggested in one of the previous threads

>>85393330
If they know about the tree Wong wouldn't be asking how Dan got those powers, but where the tree/fruit is. If they do know about the tree then none of the pillarmen were ever able to find it and none of the Scopemen ever revealed where it was, choosing instead to disappear into the ever growing human population.

It's a minor detail that has rather reaching repercussions, so it's worth a little extra thought on how to get it into the story.

>>85393240
>>85393551
So the scene is in the cafeteria, the place is trashed, almost all of the tables are smashed, the door to the kitchen has been blasted to pieces, and Dan is stuffing his face, it's the first food he's had in some 100,000 years or more.

Wong walks over and has a seat across from him, Dan barely acknowledges him since he's still focused on the food. Wong begins his lines
>"Ah, my brother in darkness, it is good to finally meet you. I am Daolon Wong, the one who arranged for your liberation."
>Dan continues to somewhat ignore him, Wong continues
>"I am a seeker of knowledge, the lives many of our fellows have since come to and end. The Emperor is long gone, and even Lady Yzma has since perished."
>At this Dan winces a little, as if remembering a time where he was kicked in the balls
>"She was my mentor, for a time, before she forgot I existed and I chose to travel the world alone, searching for my own [perfection]. It was not until after her demise that I learned she completed it. That it was possible. But the method is now been lost. Even before then I scoured the globe searching for those of your kind, hoping to gleam some secret from your like."
>Dan is now paying semi-attention and eating more slowly
>"But you are the first I have been able to find. Now, my brother in darkness, I know that 'it' exists. I must know where to find it. It may still hold some clue to recapturing [perfection]."
>Dan has stopped eating now, he's put down his food, he's calmly wiping his face with a tablecloth and indicates for Wong to lean in closer and close until their faces are almost touching
>It looks like Dan is about to whisper something in Wong's ear
>Wong has a look of deep anticipation
>Dan then spits a bunch of chewed up food all over Wong's face, flips the table, kicks it to so it rams into Wong and sends him across the kitchen and onto cafeteria floor while leaping out of his seat, jumping to the opposite side of the floor and then yelling
cont

>>85394087
>"I may be the worst of the worst, the baddest bad man history might've ever seen, but I'll still never tell you or anyone else where it grows!"
>Wong is still on the floor, he wipes the mush off his face and says "You will come to regret this." as he begins to glow with stand power
>Dan then takes off, it's been a looooooong time since he'd been chased and he plans on enjoying this

Well, thoughts?

>>85393551
It must be just a carving of a tree in an unknown language (or no language at all), when the expedition is down there, Trevor just assumes that is a depiction of nature worship or something along that line.
We haven't decided yet where is the Scopemen homeland. Must be a hard to reach lost land if the main scopeman population remained undisturbed (and if we are using it, that weird map from Mystery Inc.).

>choosing instead to disappear into the ever growing human population.
Well, rock humans can settle inside modern human society, though it doesn't end well http://jojo.wikia.com/wiki/Rock_Humans#Behavior.
There was an idea for part 8 where some scopemen infiltrated modern society (like Birdman/Harvey Birdman) and revealed themselves once the conflict between modern and old cartoons gets ugly, and some old cartoons from the previous parts were scopemen that tried to adapt to the modern world, their deaths made the remaining scopemen further isolationist.

Weird, I caught a ban from a year ago

>>85394208
It works.

>>85394087
Damn, Dan got triggered hard.

>as if remembering a time where he was kicked in the balls
kek

>>85394243
I figured since stonemen could blend in with humans, our Scopemen in ancient times used the human population to vanish from the world of pillarmen. They didn't so much integrate, but used them as a cover.

Very few ancient humans were really trusted by them, mainly the ones with stands like the caveman (he's the sheriff) who helped capture Dan were made aware of any of their secrets.

The Scopemen made Dan's chamber and the pillarmen never disturbed it because Dan fucked them over too, that and the caveman kept them from trespassing.

So we'll just have a carving of a tree with the implication being that some pillarmen broke off from the main group to go native or something.

>>85394322
Dan is so old that he is from a time where Yzma still looked pretty OK. Back when she still looked young in the moonlight anyway.

>>85394208
>Wong makes a lunge for Dan, his [Death Grips] clearly showing on his hands
>Dan just stands there, analyzing him, looking at Wong like he's some kind of abstract art of unknowable meaning
>Just as Wong is about to make contact, there's a bust of static and he passes right through Dan
>Wong stumbles and turns
>"That is an unnatural ability for our kind. Is this the power 'it' granted you and the others who chose to walk among the humans?!"
>"It's called QUALITY over quantity, I may not have as many CELs as you, but I can freely control my FRAMEs, and I just [drop] the ones I don't want! Now chase me like ya mean it!"

>>85394792
>looking at Wong like he's some kind of abstract art of unknowable meaning
heh, I'm loving this

>>85394417
While those carvings doesn't give away much, I have an idea for part 8: Trevor's notes about the expedition could somehow end up in Ethan's hands. The protagonist from Dresden Codak was suggested as the leader of an Ahnenerbe/A.I.M. -like branch of the Church, so they have some expertise on the archeology field

>>85394844
If the disc Pericles is after leads to the Scopemen homeland, then he must have someone he's working for who wants it, so he could be trying to get it for someone who works for Ethan.

The carving of the tree should be on the door before entering the chamber Dan was sealed in. It makes them pause for a bit before entering as they try to discern its meaning.

Well it's 2:30am here and I no long want to be awake.

If the thread decides to actually not fucking die (making these threads feels really awkward), then I'll continue stumbling my way through this greentext during the daylight hours.

Or at least figure out what I can adapt into story instead of notes while we wait for that other, more capable anon to show up again.

Seriously, it's going to suck if the thread dies in the night again. It only takes one hour, ONE HOUR and 47 minutes right now for a thread to sink to the bottom of page 10 from time of last bump. It should be taking like 3 hours at this time of day on /co/ for that to happen.

Shit's ridiculous. We'll need hourly bumps just to survive.

>>85394992
It will be funny having all this foreshadowing and then Nobody's plot and the race appears, leaving the scopemen and the Church in the backseat.

>>85395282
Don't worry, I can keep an eye on the thread tonight unless my sleep deprivation finally gets me

>>85395495
Yep, like clockwork: 1 hour and 50 minutes and it's on page 9

>this STILL hasn't gone anywhere and it's still just written concepts

>the comic gives up halfway through and isn't even inked

>>85397682

>5 entire completed arcs and DEEPEST LORE everywhere
>Hasn't gone anywhere

>>85397946
>5 entire completed arcs
Holy crap, time flies. Is roughly 1 month per part

>>85394792
"It's called QUALITY over quantity"
Heh.

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>>85387230
He's an evil alien Khaos Sorcerer warrior out to topple an evil fundementalist human Empire. He may be an embodiment of Khaos as a fundamental multiversal force and was at one time also a robot warrior-monk-wizard from a doomed timeline of the future/past who transcended reality. Said robot wizard remained an independant character in its own right the entire time. Both have sweet rides.

Nemesis and the ABC Warriors goes to some really weird places over the years.

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>>85399391
He also knows how to play missile firing pipe organs so well it drives religious fanatics into a frenzy, so that's handy.

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>>85372937
Alright, I think we need to institute something similar to Part 4 and assign different scenes/fights to different people. What aspects of Part 6 need to most work? I've got a week or so before school starts myself so I'll try to do as much as I can.

>>85399846
The bus ride to the jail still need to be finished.

Pretty much everything after they enter PI needs work.

It's still at the point where there's so much to do that I can't even make a last of things that need doing because we have unknown unknowns. Things that we're going to have that we don't even know that we're going to have still.

>>85399391
>>85399451
Musical talent is indeed a plus when working for Dethklok.

So how was he defeated in the comics he came from?

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>>85402502
He's actually the hero of the comic!

The whole story actually reached a conclusion a while back, after something like 25 years of comics.
Genuine spoiler in case anyone's interested in reading After a final confrontation, Nemesis ended up fused to his ship and his archenemy, dooming them all to travel endlessly across points all space and time as a phantom for all time.

This is his main villain, Torquemada of Termite. He died in the first story, which did very little to stop him

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>>85399391
Basically, It was a bad guy fighting an even badder guy (which is which is open to discussion). He will enjoy all the death brought by Dethklok concert.

>missile firing pipe organs
I see where Games Workshop stole the idea for the Exorcist tank

>>85402762
Alright, so maybe after Dethklok is airlifted away from the concert he arranged, he watch them fade into the distance, straightens up his tie, and begins playing an organ for the masses who are still standing.

Who airlifts the vault and the stage on top of it though?

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>>85402857
40k is basically Nemesis the Warlock fanfiction. A fundamentalist, xenophobic human Empire which developed in the ruins of a golden age with Terminators, Inquisitors, Vestal Vampire battle sisters, the Mechanicus and their Titans and a quasi-immortal leader who feeds on the vital essences of his followers to survive, the webway, FTL travel relying on an irreplaceable device built into a human Emperor's tomb on Terra, the list goes on and on. The real difference is that in the Imperium 40k focusses on the antagonists of Nemesis. They even got Pat Mills do some 40k comics, and The Redeemer is basically Torquemada wearing a flamethrower hat.

>>85403144
If Gameboy can't pull that stunt (or he isn't going to the raids) then just a big-ass flying transport.

>>85403276
Shit, that's one nasty Titan.
>its feets are warships

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>>85403144
He also plays a mean... whatever this thing is.

Shit, now I want Dethklok meet Nemesis the Warlock (or other 2000AD characters) as its own thing.

>>85403276
Where were you when we were doing part 5? I would've had the WB tower BE something like that if I had known about it.

>>85403413
I guess Gameboy could do it, I still want him to send a live video feed of the death and destruction caused by the concert back to the prison so Dredd can give him orders to capture the band as well as the vault.

>>85403502
That looks like an organ... keyboard... harp.

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>>85403642
I don't usually browse these threads, I just happened to notice Nemesis was being talked about. Dredd Thredd's are rare enough, anything else from 2000AD is almost unheard of.

>>85403811
Well this is a huge fanfic, so pretty much anything anyone throws at it is on the table.

We only really have Nemesis slated as being Dethklok's manager, but we could expand on that after they get stolen from him. The finale of the part is just a parade of violence in a vortex of STAR energy making it just that much more violent. It's not like we can't have Nemesis show up again around there looking to get back what was stolen from him.

>>85403933
So, Dredd vs Nemesis?

>>85372607
Haven't been here for a while
Is Giffany scrapped from the project?
Also, how's the game coming along? It should play like Heritage with some Melty Blood elements mixed in.

>>85404088
Welcome back aboard
>Is Giffany scrapped from the project?
We are still trying to add stuff from the previous draft into the current.

>how's the game coming along?
I think there was an update a while ago, mostly stability and bug fixing

>>85404057
It's not off the table. It depends on where and how Nemesis makes his entrance into the prison.

We could tie his arrival into Dredd finally having enough of the Warden's shit.

>>85404088
Right now my thoughts on working her back into the part are >>85391787
>I might be able to work her into PI as a security AI designed to keep Daffy's other kids separated from the other inmates. It's something the Warden made, but isn't part of PI since he doesn't want to think about maintaining it all the time.

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>>85372818
And after that, the clift notes of the frogpeople catacombs:

>Group 1 descends to an even older level of the prison.
>As they keep advancing, the inmates notice the vast amounts of carvings and statues of frogs around them.
>Dora: “It seems these guys liked frogs, y mucho.”
>Trevor: “Ha, that's what we supposed at the beginning, but no, these guys WERE frogs.”
>Dora: “Frog people? No me jodas.”
>Trevor: “Please, come over here, I think we have some spare time for a little history class.”
Pillarmen were at an early place before they met the frogs. They were less about using their newfound strength for outright war and had higher ideals.
The Frog people fucked their shit up. And because of their war against them, they ended up becoming the warlike Mode-using bastards they became by Part 2. Trevor also notes that all Strickland employees were required to learn styles to combat pillarman up until a few years ago when it fell out of policy
>Trevor leads the group to a big mural he found in a previous expedition.
>A composite image of the pre-pillarmen civilizations seemingly at peace with each other
>The frog people coming from somewhere (it's not necessary to go into detail about their origin) and rampaging through the far away settlements
>The separate armies trying to fend off the invaders in the main cities to no avail
>The civs banding together and pushing back the frog people: carvings of the atlantean vehicles blasting the frogmen from the sky while red and blue mooks who would come to work for Kuzco later clash with them on the ground
>A final image where the combined army is laying waste to the frogmen temples and citadels, toppling them over their heads
>He suddenly stops and stares at a sarcophagus leaning in the wall, He is damn sure it wasn't there the last time.
>Trevor: “And if you value your life, don't get close to these things, in fact, stay far away from them.”

1/2

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>>85406176
>As the group resumes his path, we get a close up of the smug face in the sarcophagus' lid. The lid falls off; revealing a mummified humanoid, a thick cloud of spores starts to emanate from his mouth and eye sockets.

>Group 2 has arrived on the frog level
>Mirage and Di Lung are pissed by the end of the maze.
>Gameboy: “Doesn't matter, I level up.”
>Now they have found the mummy
>The commotion attracts Group 1
>Di Lung finger traps the mummy’s arms behind its back (Suzie and Me-Mow notice they are no longer stuck together), the big Gross sister pummels it only to get a scratch or breathed upon
>Trevor sees Gameboy and thinks "I wish Hellboy was still alive. He had a better way to handle obnoxious types like this robot."
>In the same panel, there is a thought bubble of Trevor imagining Hellboy smashing Game Boy's screen with his Red Right Hand.
>Trevor is pleased to see the rest have made it, until the big Gross sister turns and attacks them
>She’s held down by the propane nightmares Trevor has with him
>Trevor explains that they infect whoever goes down by scratching or biting and convert them into another guard, he also notes that he hadn’t seen one for the past several ventures down to this level
>more frogpeople (alive, implied to be previous intruders) appear to face them
>Trevor sends the robots in to fight before he moves on, Dora, Suzie, Mirage, Di-Lung, and Wall-E hurrying after him
>the lanky Gross sister stays behind trying to save her sister
>gets shanked by Me-Mow for wanting to fight against them with her now frog sister instead of fight her sister, then hurries along to catch up with the others
>Gameboy sees an opportunity and detonates the bomb collars to do some damage to the frog people

2/2

>>85406176
The non-greentext stuff, which is indented in the doc, should be what Trevor is telling them while looking at the mural.

Let's see, where was I. I have some rearranging suggestions. Let's have Dora's group make it back up to the prison after the chase has started.

>>85394792
>Dora's group is still rocketing up through the levels, Trevor is in bad shape and it looks like he could expire at any moment
>We get a close up of Dora being concerned about this until she turns and notices Wall-E is glowing with stand power
>The robot doesn't seem to notice as a string of Christmas come out of his compactor and wrap around Trevor, who begins to at least look a little better
>Dora is at an odd angle, but she's able to see inside Wall-E's hatch a little bit
>"¿La cucaracha?"
>The cockroach Wall-E met earlier is the source of this stand
>Dora has little time to think about this as they arrive back in the prison proper, the ground floor is in chaos, there are people running around with holes shot in them and weird moving tattoos like what Me-Mow had back when she smashed her face with a lunch tray
>Some people even have strange growths protruding from them
>They get a bird's eye view of this as Gameboy rockets over the floor to the infirmary, which is located higher up
>Gameboy just dumps them all outside of it before smashing Mirage into a cell somewhere (she was smiling upon seeing the chaos until she impacted with the wall) and rockets back down to the ground floor to begin dealing with this mess
>Trevor is now getting treatment and is stabilizing, he's somewhat conscious as Dora, Suzie, and Wall-E decide to head down into the riot

>Dan is mocking Wong's inability to catch him by waving his ass at him
>Dan dashes through a crowd, six of the people now have huge holes in the abdomens, but they're not bleeding
>Many of them collapse from pain, but it's not caused by the holes, they now have moving tattoos on them which seems to be glowing and sending power to Wong, who is now faster than he was before
cont.

>>85407273
>Dan is keen to what's happening, he's smirking as he unloads his shots at Wong, blowing holes in the walls and floor
>He's expended all of his charges and five of the people with holes from before are restored, but a sixth is dead at a phone having bled out, the hole still there

>Outside the prison, we see Dredd, who is hanging up a phone and making his way back to the building

>Dan then takes aim and misses every shot
>Wong: "The ages seem to have taken a toll upon you after all! You will not evade me for much longer!"
>But something is wrong, Wong is now much slower than he was before
>Dan is looking smug, spinning his revolver as he's running backwards looking at Wong
>Wong then realizes what happened, he turns and sees that Dan shot at some of the people he had marked, small holes* located where he touched them with his [Death Grips] which have removed it's marks from them
*The holes made in people with Dan's stand are smaller the farther away the person is, it gives him less of a charge to destroy non-living things than a large hole created by a point blank range shot
>Wong is furious and Dan laughs

>We cut to Bobby in the psych ward who has come out of the offices to look down and see what's making the whole jail shake
>An announcement comes on over the intercoms
>"All special advanced guards, report to the ground floor, there is a class one disturbance, repeat, a class one disturbance."
>Bobby: "An all out stand battle? Was the guy from down below really that powerful?"
>Bobby turns to see Sticks and a few of the other ward intakes peering out into the ruckus
>Bobby: "Now everyone just stay put, I'm going to go find out what in the hell is going on."
>RoboDale: "That's my line Bobby, sorry to say but this is outside your depth."
>Bobby looks like he's about to say something when RoboDale continues
>"You're still a crack shot ain't ya? Cover me."

cont.

>>85407651
>Back down on the ground floor, Wong and Dan are having a stand off, Dan wants Wong to keep chasing him, Wong is waiting for Dan to make a move
>While they're standing around like idiots, a smell drifts across the battlefield
>Wong recognizes the smell "Pillar propane?"
>RoboDale: "The smell is only there for safety reasons. You should know what's coming next."
>There's a massive explosion, Wong is thrown back and Dan jumps into the air, lading on one of the floors above smiling like a jackass over a metal man who actually has some bite to him
>Before Dan can make his next move, he ducks back in a hurry as a bullet goes whizzing through his hat
>He looks up and sees Bobby, clear across the jail on the higher level, holding a riffle
>Bobby: "Dang, gettin' old sure was a lot more fun when I could just tell jokes about it." as he pulls out a pair of glasses and readies another shot
>Dan has fought enough guys in his life to know when someone has too much of an advantage on him and ducks into one of the prison sections just as he catches another shot with his finger tips that would've gotten him right between the eyes

>Back down on the ground floor, Wong is singed and surprised
>"To think this place was using pillar propane all along, perhaps you humans are not as inept as I remember."
RoboDale: "I learned from the best."
Wong: "I, Daolon Wong, shall make you regret plundering the secrets of my fellow pillarman."

>Bobby overheard all of this through the radio RoboDale has, he was also watching it from his vantage point, things are now making sense to him

cont.

>>85408013
>Bobby has a flashback of an elderly Hank, it's a few years after the events of part 2
>Hank has just authorized an order that all field workers of the Strickland Foundation need to learn the use of 「Styles]
>Bobby: "But dad, why learn 「Styles] now that the pillarmen are defeated?"
>Hank: "Because Bobby, there's still more paranormal crap lurking out there in the world. Now I won't be around forever, so someone's got to protect our friends and family. Son, you got to be prepared for the day one of these monsters may appear again."

>Back in the present, the almost Cotton looking Bobby says "Thanks, dad." as he makes his way down to the battleground

>RoboDale is having some trouble hitting Wong, he's been able to land a few blows, but only thanks to propane rocket kicks and use of sand in the air
>Wong keeps trying to break away from RoboDale to continue after Dan, but the propane, now without the safety smell, keeps blowing him up
>Wong is finally going to get serious when a man runs out between them, it's Bobby
>RoboDale: "Dangit Bobby, I asked you to cover me, not-"
>Bobby: "Trust me Mr. Gribble, I know how to deal with people like this." as he begins posing.
>Wong charges towards the newcomer while he is still posing.
>At the last minute, Wong realizes that something isn't right with this man's posing, as if he saw this routine before.
>Bobby's posing comes to a halt, he is surging with energy and it seems that he is ready to unleash a punch.
>Wong's heightened senses allow him to retreat at the last moment, he looks at his opponent's hand, a meter away from him, and notices that he wasn't readying a punch, he was holding some weird human toy, a whoopee cushion
>The prop glows with power before releasing a shockwave that strikes Wong.
>“So you wanted to take advantage of this poor old man? Well it looks like the 「Jokes on you]!”
>Wong: "[STYLE USER]!" as the blast pushes him back, he grits his teeth as the Cels in his body are burned away.

>>85408160
Any good so far? Keep going? Stop? Looking for feedback before I continue.

Next thing I think I'll do is have Dan end up in the bus depot.

>>85408198
great as usual, I'll check the rest of the cliffnotes in the meantime

>>85408291
I haven't been doing much detailed writing in this part (I was the part 5 anon), but I figured I should get the Dan and Wong stuff sorted since they ended up in this part as some of the things I suggested for it.

>>85408160
>We cut to Dan, who is walking around these big fat yellow caterpillar looking things (buses), he tries biting one, but it's just more metal
>"Is everything made of metal now?" he wonders allowed
>Then he turns and sees the back of a lady's head, a lady with bright red hair
>Dan goes through the dropped jaw tongue on the floor routine before running over to her wit his arms out

>We cut back to Wong, who is shaken, but otherwise not looking any worse for wear
>In fact he's glowing, glowing with stand power as more energy is flowing into him from everyone still marked on the battlefield
>His [Death Grips] is also super charging his mode, his mode is able to repair damage done to him
>He explains none of this to his opponents

>Dora arrives on scene, she had been watching the conflict from a distance to judge which side to be on, with Bobby now in the mix, and Wong's falling out with Dan, she's made up her mind
>Wong sees Dora "You?! You did this, somehow you turned him against me!"
>Dora: "Shut it, bruja." (Wong was often mistaken for an old lady in the show he was from, or at least I think he was)
>Wong: "I will end your miserable existence along side the rest of these fools."
>Dora is looking down a little, her eyes are darked out, then she smiles "I figured you'd say something like that."
>Wong lunges at her, but then makes a sharp turn and smashes into a wall, then the wall explodes in his face
>Dora had ample prep time to set up trails of red footprints all over the place, one of which Wong stepped on
>Dora has Wong walking in wide circles now, she crosses trails with him every so often and Wong seems to step on a landmine just as often
>Bobby and RoboDale have caught on by this point and are also taking pot shots at Wong
cont.

>>85408831
>Wong is getting madder and madder, but he's just not wearing down, Dora begins leading him farther away from the inmates and guards being carted off to the infirmary and Wong is starting to lose energy as they get outside his range
>Just when it looks like he's finally starting to show damage, a bus smashes through one of the upper story walls with Dan plastered on the windshield, it lands not far from them and does a spin, clipping Wong with enough impact to send him flying, freeing him from the red footprint trail
>Frizzle can be seen driving the bus, the windshield wipers smacking Dan across the face and also wiping away drool
>Wong again makes for Dan, but Dora, RoboDale, and Bobby stand in his way

OK, this is the part where I cannot progress beyond until someone else steps in.

At this point some of the other remaining members of Wong's gang should step in to engage his enemies.
Eris (from Billy and Mandy) is listed on the doc as a possibility, but who else?

While whoever is left of Wong's gang is keeping them busy, he goes to have his final battle with Dan.

Also, Bad Cop from the Lego Movie, is he still in this part as a guard? Is this a good place in the story to introduce him?

>>85409007
I dunno if he should be in. He'd be actual Lego-sized.

What about Plankton? Are we still keeping him?

>>85409007
>is he still in this part as a guard?
I have the feeling we are kinda short of named guards, We have Dredd, Droopy, Rocko, Gameboy, Frizz if you count her as a guard. Also, I'm not sure if we are using Gaz inside or outside Pure Imagination

>>85409154
If scale were something we were consistent with to series instead of relative to character, then Patrick would've been the size of Rolf's foot.

I don't think we're keeping Plankton. Whoeve wants him in this will need to actually push for him to be in it.

>>85409157
Rocko is a janitor.

If Gaz is still in this part then she'd be inside PI. I'm not sure that she will still be in this part since we already used her dad.

Unless her being in danger is what causes Membrane to snap out of whatever delusions he has about the prison and the Warden.

More input would be appreciated.

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>>85411640
Alright, after Dan's rampage we need to start planning the start of the Pure Imagination arc and the Interpol subplot, for that one we have the following:

There needs to be some traitors in Interpol or Strickland (Chane Wassanasong), this leads to information leaking and Penny, as per tradition, getting captured and brought back to the jail with a huge number of jawbreakers since the Warden wants all the STAR energy her can get.

>Once The Warden gets his hands on the map, he begins dispatching groups of jailbots and guards to each of the Jawbreakers vaults
>On the following days, a number of supposed terrorist attacks take place across the world
>Interpol tries to decipher a pattern in the attacks, it turns out each location was formerly under the influence of the WB (Perhaps a cameo of Plucky, who has been searching through the company's archives)
>In one of the vault raids, whoever is leading Warden's forces fights a demon from the WB that remained stationed in the vault who now works for Dethklok, who are performing a concert on top of it
>Gameboy or Frizzle sees the death and destruction they're causing and captures them for incarceration while also moving the cache back to the jail.
>They airlift the ENTIRE cache, concert and all, back to Superjail.
>The Dethklok boys are probably so busy rocking out that they don't even notice they’re being moved.

>Penny gets the image Inch High sent and fights Warden's minions for the control of the next Vault

Gadget wanted Rex and Morocco to pass something along to Penny.
That’s how they know there's corruption in Strickland since before the Red Guy went down Wassanasong made a deal to take over, but there was no one left to collect on the payment, so he got away with it scot-free.
The testimony of a dead man isn't worth anything in the courts of the living though.

1/2 (the demon, I presume, it's gonna be Nemesis)

>>85411873
Penny and Rex arrive at the next vault first and meet an operative there, Swiper (Dora the Explorer), who has been working undercover in the region for a while.

It turns into a "we know that you know" when the Frizz's backup comes out of hiding and then after a bit a "We know that you know that we know you know" with Penny's backup coming out of hiding.

Swiper was sent to infiltrate Interpol by the WB, Interpol then sent him to infiltrate cartels. When everything fell apart he was in a very lucrative situation playing all sides.

It’s part of what Gadget told Rex and Morocco. As soon as Rex is present when any of the people Gadget named are caught doing something underhanded, he can bust out some seriously armor piercing questions if my recollection of how his stand works is accurate.

Frizz could retreat leaving her forces there, but Penny could get on the bus before she's able to escape. Penny didn't know that there are two stands in play with the bus though: the one that moves things out of the way and the one that forces people to follow rules when on the bus leading to her capture, or fake capture since she could break free at any time using her power to disassemble things.

Her plan all along could've been to get caught so she could infiltrate the jail.

With the next installment of jawbreakers in the Warden’s grasp he sends the new inmates captured with them directly to PI since there’s no official record of them being arrested

2/2

Then the scene from the Vocaroo comes

>>85411873
I'm still not done with the Dan stuff yet since I'm at a point where I do need input on which characters we're using for the next few scenes.

Yeah, the demon is going to be Nemesis.

If Gameboy is going to be raiding that vault then maybe we should have the beginnings of a fight between him and Nemesis as he's stealing the band.

>>85412239
Well, Eris was suggested as being part of Wong's gang and after checking her Stand, she could work for this part given Mirage's penchant to spread chaos. It also could lead to another flashback of Dora remembering her mother while being tempted by 「HEART'S FILTHY LESSON」.
Problem is, I don't know if the Stand was reviewed.

>>85412522
It's worth posting it in the thread and having it re-reviewed then.

>「THE HEART'S FILTHY LESSON」(David Bowie)
>Appearance: 「THE HEART'S FILTHY LESSON」 takes the form of a small Golden Apple
>Ability: Upon activation 「THE HEART'S FILTHY LESSON」distracts the victim with a treasured golden apple, or something else they covet. While it primarily takes the form of an apple made out of pure gold, its appearance may be distorted to match what the victim truly desires. Money, fame, wealth, etc.
>If the victim is able to resist 「THE HEART'S FILTHY LESSON」's temptation, they are free from its [curse]. However if the user falls prey to their innermost desires its true ability activates. 「THE HEART'S FILTHY LESSON」will cause whoever coveted it to bring extreme chaos with them wherever they go. An example of this may be, their house may catch fire, or a tree falling down in the middle of the road. The more the victim holds onto「THE HEART'S FILTHY LESSON」, the greater the consequences will be.
>Stats:
>Destructive Power: A
>Speed: D
>Range: A
>Durability: B
>Precision: A
>Developmental Potential: C -> A (depending on how long someone is caught under its trap)

>>85410283
Yeah, some characters keep their canon height while others are given a boost in size.
I remembered that Skarr (Evil con Carne) and Snatcher (Boxtrolls) are listed as guards in the old version of the story. Skarr could appear in this part and use the ability of his Stand to reinforce the security forces while quelling the riot.

>>85413740
If we're not using Bad Cop then we can use those two.

That's what Wong's gang has been doing while Wong has been fighting, they've been fighting the other stand user guards.

Dredd being on patrol outside the jail was a very happy coincidence for them.

>>85413989
And to add to the list we have Kuffy the Clown, Queen Vexus and Lord Dominator in the old stuff. We actually have a good amount of Stand users in the prison staff; it's just a matter of deciding what we keep from the previous draft.

>>85415099
I don't know who Kuffy is, but I'm not really feeling Queen Vexus or Lord Dominator for prison guard roles.

I don't think they're still going to be used in this part, or if they are, they're going to be inside PI and probably just minor encounters at that.

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>>85415164
google (and the doc) says is from Thomas the Tank engine, he is also known as bubbles. And the other two are listed as overseers of an specific part of the prison rather than guards

Any news on the /co/rge /co/star story?

>>85415525
Last thing I remember is that it's gonna have two stories like the original Jorge Joestar: one closer to the main storyline (about Eustace, if I'm not wrong) and another one where you have 36 kuzcos in space

>>85415287
I have no familiarity with this character nor why he'd be a guard.

As for the other two, I just can't see them, big bads of their respective shows, working as prison staff. They'd be inmates if anything.

There's a least a little logic to why certain characters are used as guards: they were either authoritarian in the shows they came from, working for some regime that had some order to it, or they were part of a system that governed people's lives. Both examples, the characters we're using aren't from positions of authority, but severing in the system, cogs in the machine.

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>>85416638

Skarr makes sense since he was Hector's second-in-command and responsible for all the military and combat side of Hector's organization. Droopy as well since in some shorts he appeared he was established as a law enforcement agent.

About Gaz, in the Career Day episode she was being mentored by a security guard that works in her dad's TV show. Maybe she actually got a thing for bossing and hurting people?

>>85417298
I don't even know where to place Gaz in this.

With the way we have PI now, guards in it are redundant. The edges of PI are guarded by monsters created from the world of PI, inmates can't die unless the Warden allows them to, the PI world warps physics in a way that makes distances not work right near the center of it where the "exit" is marked. The only place a guard would make sense is on top of the watch tower if, by some miracle, someone managed to get up there.

So where does that leave Gaz as a guard? In the real prison. But what purpose does she serve in it?

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Hi guys, I'm the guy that was currently working out a game for of this project and I am currently thinking of switching to MUGEN.

So, did anyone here ever use MUGEN? I think the Godot game is heading towards a glitchy and cheap gameplay, so I'm seriously considering starting things over on a game engine made especially for fighting games, MUGEN.

Is MUGEN hard to code? Is it a good ideia for this project even though we wouldn't be able to do most things?

If you guys can't help with that, I'll just revert to making vector stage backgrounds and some simple spritesheets as resources that may be used for the project in the future.

>>85417486

>With the way we have PI now, guards in it are redundant. The edges of PI are guarded by monsters created from the world of PI

That actually concerns me a bit since it means that most of the Stand users that were designed to be members of the staff are now redundant unless some action happens with them in the real world before the story's pace moves to PI. Also it concerns me that the number of antagonists will be greatly small compared with the previous parts, unless there will be plenty of antagonistic prisoners with Stands in PI besides Joy and Vicky.

>>85417604
I wish I could answer any of those questions since I do want to see the project progress in all aspects of our aspirations.

But I can only hope someone else will be able to provide some answers.

>>85417699
What if we expand the Interpol section with more vault raids showcasing the other stand users working for the Warden?

Right now I'm trying to get more into this mini-riot caused by Dan and Wong, but there's only so many characters I can throw into it before it starts feeling directionless.

>>85417486
If Pure Imagination collects a portion of the STAR energy of the inmates each time they die, the guards in PI could also play the role of hunters to hasten the harvest of STAR energy. Gaz’s role as a guard is explained as her playing a rpg, with the inmates as killable npc.

>>85417604
When MUGEN was first suggested some anons pointed that it was harder to work with than Godot, but beyond that I have no idea.

>>85417915
Hmmm... well it could work.

Let's say Gaz is in PI, where is she in PI?

Let me try to piece together what we have for PI so far:
>Start heading for the central watch towers, the scenery changes, but the tower never gets any closer
>Meet Joy, she tries to get them all killed, kill Joy, Joy comes back and they learn about the respwan
>Begin looking for Inch High, find Pericles in his own kind of hell, save Pericles, Wall-E's cockroach's stand begins helping his mind heal after the ordeal, they have eyes in the sky now
>Dethklok gets dropped into the Superjail, they start... doing shit? I have no idea. Snatch begins chasing them
>Find Inch High, he's in a giant pinball machine with other inmates being played by someone, that someone is Gaz, gotta fight Gaz to free Inch High
Does Gaz join? Seems unlikely.
>Inch High is finally able to send that picture of the map to Penny before blacking out from the trauma of repeated deaths

>Interpol Intermission

>Come across Snatcher chasing Dethklok, beat the shit out of him, second hostage, Warden gives no fucks, find out from him there's an area of Superjail even more locked up, he tricks them into thinking a "key" is in there for getting out (he's lying)
>Fight Giffany, beat Giffany, Daffy's other kids are released from supermax into the rest of Superjail
>You dun fucked up
>Dethklok decide to put on a concert? Is this a distraction so Dora's group can do something?
>Vicky comes into play as she begins hunting for fresh meat?

PI is just way too not thought out yet. I'm still not even sure how they get out.

>>85418236
>where is she in PI?
This is what the doc says about Gaz:
>I suggest that Gaz should control her stand as if she is playing an RPG character in a video game, and that she has two parts to her stand; one's a "controller" resembling a portable video game device, and the other is the stand itself resembling what's in the original description, with its eyes giving a first-person view that is broadcasted to the controller. Her stand gets progressively stronger as she "levels up" by defeating or killing more "monsters" i.e. inmates, without a set limit.
>In most video games, the RPG character is usually given a set amount of lives or sometimes only one which means game over if they lose, but Gaz has basically "hacked" her "video game" stand; it has infinite lives, and when it's "defeated", it simply respawns back at a checkpoint, usually beside Gaz, with no damage transmitted to her, as a nod to how infallible she is in IZ. The stand can only be truly defeated by knocking out Gaz herself, but how to get to her (and then confronting her infallibleness) is another question entirely.
>Her cold and apathetic nature means she treats the world around her as if they were nothing but mechanics in a video game; she treats objects as if they were obstacles or breakables containing loot, inmates as monsters that give XP and more loot, and her own colleagues as if they were NPCs or expendable party members.
>It would work because it allows her to sit back in a closed room, working as if she is playing a real-life video game and casually eating pizza, without having to deal with unnecessary shenanigans such as interacting with other people.
Maybe she is inside the tower?

>Does Gaz join?
I think not, her role changed from inmate to guard during the creative process

>>85418768
So they have to beat her stand which is playing the pinball machine?

>>85418236

>Does Gaz join? Seems unlikely.

Maybe not yeah, but there should be a particular interaction between her and Wall-E after she sees him with Dora's group. Given he was created by Membrane, and Wall-E became a sort of surrogate son after whatever happened to Dib.

>>85420608
She recognizes him as her father's hobby project and wonders why he's with a group of criminals, so she holds back on attacking them again so soon after.

>>85420608
>after whatever happened to Dib
We aren't revealing that, right?

>>85421034
He just "got in trouble with the law" and that's all we're saying on the subject.

>>85421034

Well, his character was suggested long time ago for Part 5, then sent to Part 4 where nothing happened to his character and then there was some talk about him appearing in Part 7.

I would like him to appear in Part 7 in his usual conspiracy theory insanity as he is the one of the few characters that knows about Mr. Nobody's true intentions, but nobody believes him until Crazy Jane and her allies get involved in the plot

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>>85421238
I'm not sold on Crazy Jane being in part 7 if she's working against President Mr. Nobody.

She was going to vote for him in the comic where he was running for president, you know, before the government decided he was too dangerous to be left alive.

Makes no sense at all to me that she'd be working against him. Really need to rethink who the part 7 protagonists are. I know Jonah Hex was one of the new suggestions.

>>85421448
She was meant to be a Lucy Steel equivalent originally, but yeah, part 7 is pretty much barebones

>>85421500
We already had problems with the earlier ideas for part 7 with there being too many Doom Patrol characters in it. Maybe Mr. Nobody should be the only character from that series in part 7.

In 20 words or less, what did Steel Ball Run boil down to?

Crippled horse rider learns magic powers in a race orchestrated by the US President to steal Jesus' corpse, for reasons.

We have the race, we have the president, we have the Jesus equivalent. Do we need a cripple?

>>85421731
The only cripple that immediately comes to mind is Pelswick, but I'm not sure he's protagonist material.

>>85422032
Barbara Gordon came to mind for me since she was put in a wheelchair for a long ass time in the comics, but I feel we already have too many DC characters in major roles for the part.

We need a main character who's main motivation for being in the race is to find a way to recover some physical ability they had which is now lost.
Be it the use of their legs, a superpower, or some other deficiency they have recently acquired.

And that's only if we're going that route. We don't have to parallel part 7 that closely.

>>85422271
The original protagonist, Robotman, was supposed to join the race to wish for his Stand (that turned him into a robot) to be removed. Whoever is gonna be the new protagonist should race to get something back/removed, being an actual cripple could be optional (I can't think of many crippled /co/ characters). The theme of identity is also important.

>>85423256
Well, there's always Jack (a golden age superhero, originally Yellow Jacket, but then his name was copyrighted by another character and he lost all identity being reduced to just a character design) when it comes down to identity and obscurity.

Plus if Samurai Jack is also in this part it'd be funny to me if there was once again confusion over which Jack people were talking about.

But I guess that's a conversation for later. I would work more on part 6 if anons would give me more members of Wong's gang to work with.
Though now that it's past midnight here, that's something to work on tomorrow or even later.

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>>85423401

Speaking of suggestions for more prisoners, have the Beagle Boys ever suggested to this project?

>>85423401
The part 7 doc mention this about the identity part:
>Part of their journey should lie in the weight of their small identity vs that of Superman, the penultimate hero.
>Main characters should ideally be lesser-known in general or a subversion of the hero stereotype. If someone has a mountain of fiction dedicated to them they should be racing fodder at best.

>members of Wong's gang
I think we don't have more members of his gang listed in the doc, unless we move El Oso from Pure Imagination.

>Though now that it's past midnight here, that's something to work on tomorrow or even later
Yeah, now is the time I keep the thread bumped until I fell asleep.

>>85423524
Nope, they weren't suggested before.

>>85423524
I feel like they have, but I have no recollection of them being in any of the parts, so I don't think they have.

Could make for a nice group of grunts to back up Eris.

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>>85423575
It really makes Jack look like main character material based on that criteria.

Once again I forgot about El Oso. With his handprint powers I'd rather set him up as someone with more presence so his fight with Dora is more... pronounced I guess? It'd be a waste to have him as just fodder for a slog of action scenes like what we're in right now is what I mean. There's too much contrasting potential there.

And while normally I'd be up a bit later than this, it seems I have shit to do tomorrow morning for money.

Hopefully it'll actually survive this night as well.

>>85423975
There is also the idea of Dora having a fight with another spanish-speaking character and either El Oso or one of Daffy's sons fits the bill

>>85425481
It'd be pretty cool to have an all Spanish fight. El Oso would probably be the best fit for that.