How does this piece I wrote sound?

>>18101624
Sounds bad, but I don't really know how to explain why because I don't know much about music composition.

>>18101624
As someone that makes music, this is shit. It sounds like you just put random notes together so I'd guess you have no concept of scales, chord progressions or harmony.

>>18101624
holy fucking shit

this some dooky boy. Honestly, this is so bad I cried laughing. Beautiful.

>>18101624
The rhythm isn't terrible, but the actual notes you picked all sound like they don't go well together. Pick a standard chord when you play multiple notes, these notes are really unsettling to listen to.

>>18101624
I see what you were going for with the rhythm and I can tell the dissonance is intentional on your part. I think you just barely get the idea of what chord progression is.

OP, this is bad, but I see an artistic thought here struggling to be expressed and I want you to continue. Keep it up! You will learn more and get befter. You can read and follow all kinds of tutorials online, and for more comprehensive stuff your library probably has great intro to music theory books that will go into way more detail. Don't stop!

Bar 5 to 6 is the only good part. Other wise, nice bait.

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>>18101624
I like where you're coming from, and the rhythm isn't terrible. The notes themselves are petty bad though. What kept the dissonance for me especially was the constant use of G-G#-A and probably some A#'s in there. Just a bunch of minor 2nds, maybe some major 2nds. Hard to tell on mobile at 3am. But it's nothing but dissonance. The idea is there, but there's a lot to expand upon. Don't give up OP