/cyoag/ - CYOA General

Lewd elf cyoa please

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>>53771825

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So I changed these things
>Text size overall
>Certain wordings to make gentle puberty a choice
>Removed the age restrictions on hobbies, now you get less as a 12 year old and more as a 18 and 21 year old
>Rewrote most of the header to make the reason for having a twin more explained

>>53771851
nobody cares

>>53771861
Ok

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>>53771825
Elf Slave

>>53771838
This is exact opposite of what I requested when I made this thread but it appears to be about dark elves so it's ok

>>53771861
I care.

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so I've got the starts of a CYOA here, but I have no idea what to do next, any suggestions?

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>>53771825
I'm pretty sure this is actually SFW by dint of cropping.

>>53771883
and nobody cares about you

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Hypothetically speaking, if you were to turn into a magical creature would you:

> A. Stay in the same town because magic was here the whole time, just hidden.

or

> B. Move to a new town where literally every inhabitant is a magical being.

>>53771851
I don't get it, why can't you have more than 1 of the same hobbies? If you pick Heterozygotic, that is.

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>>53771891

>>53771891
Yeah, it's been posted several times before and there's never been a problem.

>>53771886
I've never watched Steven Universe, but I hate your CYOA already

is there one without a damn Pinocchio nose or body that isn't a trap?

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>>53771911

>>53771912
Ahh okay, wasn't sure if it was one of those two-version ones and I'd just saved the uncensored version. Looked clean enough at a glance.

Cute tomboy cyoa please

>>53771905
>Implying binary choice
Neither. I want to be the only dragon in town.

>>53771901
I care.

>>53771905
I would lean towards B but only if there was some help in actually getting home/livehood there.

A becomes far more attractive if for reason x nobody noticed that I'm suddenly three meters tall and breathing acid.

>>53771905
I'd personally want to stay here just so I can overturn my little slice of the world with my new power.

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>>53771930

>>53771905
Probably C. Move to a new normal-Earth town with some amount of non-magical beings but where I can more easily start a new identity.

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>>53771963

>>53771886

Why are all their noses 2 different shades of the same color?

>>53771929
>is there one without a damn Pinocchio nose or body that isn't a trap?
of the three Pearls we've seen so far on the show(Yellow, Powder Blue, and the one on the very bottom right), they all follow the dainty physique and big noses, so it's pretty likely that all Pearls follow that to some extent

>>53771982
just a quirk of the artist as far as I can tell, I have nowhere near the skills needed to change that though

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>>53771933
Maybe I'll include a tomboy in the CYOA I'm working on, just for you.

>>53771905
A until I rape everyone who is attractive, then B.

>>53771851
I care very little.

>>53771929
Anon, I have news for you...
Those are all girls.
Assuming lesbians count as girls because that whole show is pretty much the gayest thing since Will & Grace. Like... There are no words to describe how gay Steven Universe is.

>>53771891
the only tokhar cyoa my dick enjoyed

superprison was okay i guess

>>53771905
>>53771949
Actually, having read the answers of other posters, I would like to change my choice to >C. Away from everyone else

>>53771905
B if it comes with internet access, otherwise A, also assuming internet access, if not then B.

>>53771905
Tend towards B but my mother depends on me to get her medicine and my little sister is still living at home. It's not safe for them there by themselves so it would have to be A unless they can come with me.

>>53771935
There's not many dragons, so you can probably just move to Alaska.

Alternatively, no one is stopping you from turning the place into a smoldering dragon battleground.

>>53771949
Both actually. Your getting help regardless of which of these options come through, and there are upgrades to hide your dragon-ness.

>>53771963
Fair.

>>53772009
There's something akin to magic police force but like I said, who on Earth lives in Alaska?

>>53772008
Thank you for your consideration. There really aren't enough. Not that there ever could be.

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>>53771877
Here you go, a special version just for you.

>>53771905
B without a doubt having to worry about keeping the secret a secret is too much bother

>>53772069
I feel like the magic police force would try and stop me from turning it into a smoldering dragon battleground.

>>53771905
A. I kinda like the premise of establishing yourself in a place which used to be familiar.

>>53771838
Is it possible to make a warhammer fantasy empire and genocide orks?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rT17f25JMEs

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>>53772097
Wow, pretty rude

>>53772006
>of the three Pearls we've seen so far on the show(Yellow, Powder Blue, and the one on the very bottom right), they all follow the dainty physique and big noses, so it's pretty likely that all Pearls follow that to some extent
Then I already have 0 interest in your cyoa

>>53771851
Lookin good so far. Interested in just what is going to be on offer so keep up the good work!

>>53771851
One hobby vs 4 hobbies is a bit too harsh a difference for a few years of age, especially given that hobbies basically equate to special powers here.

What I would do is give younger ages 4 hobbies, and 18+ only 3 (or 3 and 2), with some extra adult-only options (some other anon mentioned clubbing, traveling etc, things you actually can't do when underage). The reason 18+ gets one less hobby choice is because they have to have a job, and therefore have less time.

>>53772097
Oy wots up wit dis hummies are for killin not sexin. Waaaaagh!

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>>53771838
Royalty (3 Tokens, 10/2)
Athletic (2 Tokens, 11/5)
Feisty (2 Tokens, 12/6)
Traitorous (4 Tokens, 12/3)
Douche (16/4)
Dressed like a Slut (18/4)
Trap (21/4)
Elf Ears (26/4)
Nether Seal (27/6)
Half-Beast (31/10)
All-Beast (36/7)
Get Mad! (0 Tokens, Effective 36/25)

The orcish rape raids are basically a generational thing for them. It takes a few decades for their population to recover from being scourged out of the region and back into the wastelands. I think they might think it's revenge for being forced to live out there but if they didn't do this shit every time they showed their faces maybe they might be worth not slaughtering.

Maybe someday they'll figure out that going after a werewolf tribe is a bad idea but today was clearly not that day.

How do you write appealing companions without them just all wanting the player's dick? I've invested a lot of time into trying to make these characters with hopes, frustrations and ambiguities so I have a lot of personal affection for each of them, but when I take an honest look at this stupid wall of text I can't imagine anyone actually giving a shit. How do you make someone give a shit?

>>53773525
Have a look at some other works that have made companions you find appealing and compare.

You could post a sample here for feedback too.

>>53772097
I've always wanted to be a High Elf rape slave.

>Role
Royalty 10/2

>Looks
Curvy 12/1

>Traits
Feisty 12/2
Douche 16/3
Traitorous 16/0

>Extras
Dressed like a slut 18/0
Elf ears 23/0
True Friend

Friend:
>Role
Bodyguard 8/8

>Looks
Athletic 9/11

>Traits
Feisty 10/12
Tough 11/14
Douche 15/15

>Extras
Dressed like a slut 17/15
Elf Ears 22/15

And I even have a token left over! The orcs convince my best friend and loyal bodyguard that if she gives in then they will spare my purity. Of course this was just a ploy I concocted to make her defenseless so they could more easily rape us both. Good fun!

>>53771875
>Half Elf
>Salvation
>Teenager
>Friendly
>Clever
>Charismatic
>Nothing
>Formal dress
>Guest room
>Fatherly
>Firm
>Reprimand
>Spanking
>Isolation
>Literature
>History
>Mathematics
>Management
>Journal
>Fine Jewelry
>Stuffed Plushie
>Warm Cloak
>Small Pet
>Free Time
>Outings
>Furniture

Half-elf daugtheru mode

>>53773590
This is why the Dwarfs are mans greatest ally. They aren't degenerates who fuck Greenskins they help the Empire kill them.

ffs some of my waifu descriptions are growing into short stories. Don't want to cut stuff from them but I'm worried people will tl;dr my cyoa. Hold my hand, /cyoag/.

>>53773525
Make their stories somehow important for the player's future.

>>53773793
Just make a pdf "extended lore" DLC

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>>53773525
Anon.
Chearacters are difficult. Those no way to make sure that they'll appeal to everyone. You need to do you best make come across as prople, and when Anon seems some he like, he's going to latch onto them hard.
I'd be happy to look over what you have right now tomorrow, if you like.
It may not help but I'd be happy to do what I can.

>>53773989
I have no idea how to link to posts from other threads but thanks for the description of Catherine's reaction (had no idea the portrait was of Diane from the Zero Escape Games, the styles make them look like completely different characters!)

And now you're posting with one of my favorite monsters from the MGE.

Desire to initiate intense friendship is rising.

>>53773989
Oh God damn it, MGE pictures. Wouldn't it be a blast to get stuck in there? As long as you didn't get burnt at the stake by the church. Also, the place has a serious structural problem because the Demon Lord's plan is flawed. But hey, if I get a lilim, lich, dark slime, liliraune or dark angel waifu, I'd be set.

>>53773989
Please drop the trip when it's not relevant

>>53774207
>Please drop the trip when it's not relevant
ZBG needs the trip so we can bully him via hand holding

>>53771851
Text is better thanks. I still have to blow it up a little but nowhere near as much as before. Thank you again.

>>53771861
>nobody cares
about you.
>>53771901
Yep confirmed. No one cares about you.

>>53771875
>Celestial Elf
>Conquered
>Adult
>Friendly, Clever, Charismatic.
>No Brand.
>Runes of Clarity, Stamina, Strength, and Sorcery.
>Naked.
>Guest Room.
>Mocking in Public, Respectful in private.
>Cruel in Public, Appeasing in private.
>Reprimand if necessary behind closed doors. Any disobedience in public gets a backhand and a promise of more once we're behind closed doors.
>Education in Mathematics, History, Sorcery and Combat.
>Sorcery, Management, Guard.

>Journal, Elven Trinkets, Free Time, Outings (Supervised only).

>Telepathy, Telekinesis, Heal, Nullify, Mystic Arrow.

I chose you for a very specific objective. Your people have lost this battle and if nothing is done soon, the war will be lost to you too.

I am a foreigner here, and they haven't decided what they think of me yet. I will show them that I despise your people and can tolerate theirs enough to facilitate an alliance. I'll be residing among them and you will do so as well. You'll bear no chains nor collars, but you Will bear the marks of servitude; runes that will help shape you into what I need of you, and what you will need for yourself; you'll bear naught else however, instead being bare to the world to see. Show them the strength you'll gain from these magic signs, the sigils themselves, and at the same time reveal your status in their eyes. You need to seem dangerous, but controlled.

You'll stay close at hand; can't ever break the illusion that you're unleashed from my side. You can't expect any kindness or decency from me if any eyes are on us, and I'll expect you to learn quickly or suffer for it, but I'll try not to be unreasonable in confidence.

You'll see once we've returned that you're not the first, nor the last, but there are others who will teach you anything else you'll need to know.

If this goes poorly we're all going to die horribly. If you can serve effectively and learn well, we might just keep the rest of your people out of shackles.

>>53774327
I have confidence you can bully them tripless just as easily, I believe in you

>>53773581
I've done a bit of that, which gave me the idea to make sure everyone has a frustrated desire, but I don't think it is enough.

>>53773825
They are currently important, but in a vauge sort of way I don't know is actually compelling. I may have focused too much in player freedom instead of player investment.

>>53773989
Honestly I would actually love this. I almost instantly loved a lot of your characters. But you have a really big workload right now, and on top of working slow I also have other daily commitments. If I'm still plugging away at this thing after the collab with StonedCelt is done, I would love help. And if not, the offer means a lot. Thank you.

>>53771891
>Miz'ri Telenna (0)
>Aphrodisiac x2 (2)
>Favorite toy x2 (6)
>Mistress nectar (8)
>Bondage (9)
>Sharing is caring -- Malica Darkblade
>Sexual Harassment (10)
>Succubus x2 (13)
>Liquid production (14)
>Dark elf maid x2 (16)
>Forced incest x2 (19)
>Immortality (15)
>Yandere (13)
>Blessing (10)
>Courtesan training (8)
>Mistress Bedroom (2)
>Slave rations (0)
>Fine clothes (-6)
>Face sitting (-5)
>Milking x2 (-2)
>National service (-1)
>Foot worship (0)

>>53774457
>almost instantly loved all his characters
See, this is why I went harem route and gunned for all of them. They're all pretty great.

However, ZBG! Tell us a little more about Cassandra, the one in the hot teacher outfit who likes the femdom. What's she like to just hang out with?

>>53771851
You need to edit the instruction for hobbies.

>>53771851
The font hurts the eyes. You're also wasting a tremendous of image real estate, but that's a stylistic choice.

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>>53774751

>>53771851

Most annoying narrator 2017

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>>53771886
Actually anon, there IS a pearl cyoa out there. If you want to dodge the pratfalls it fell into, try to assume that the reader has never watched the show or visited the threads in their life. If you want to be a little more unique about it, frame the choices as the reader getting to pick a pearl from a catalog as apposed to having one made-to order. For example...

>Taupe
>A pearl made some time ago but never taken home by anyone. Her lonely youth spent in a warehouse has left her a cynic and rather doubtful about the longevity of your relationship.

>Fuchsia
>A rather average pearl all things considered. Her passive nature belies her inquisitive mind.

>Matte Light Plum
>An el cheapo pearl fresh from the Kindergarten. Sweet, bubbly, and painfully naive.

>ect

Was there a list of cyoa ideas somewhere? I kinda want to mess around in gimp but I dont have anything in particular to do. Not that I'll come out with anything playable since I'm shit at balancing and points or whatever.

>>53774863
>Actually anon, there IS a pearl cyoa out there. If you want to dodge the pratfalls it fell into, try to assume that the reader has never watched the show or visited the threads in their life. If you want to be a little more unique about it, frame the choices as the reader getting to pick a pearl from a catalog as apposed to having one made-to order. For example...
honestly that is pretty close to how I was going to handle it(and I might steal some stuff from that earlier attempt), probably the biggest thing I need help with is figuring out the best "post numbers" and/or "dice rolling"* layout to use for the image I posted in >>53771886 since it'll be getting the most usage in SU threads on /co/, at the moment the only thing I know for sure is that the Pearls in the pic without color labels would be harder to get(along with Yellow Pearl and Powder Blue Pearl), with Terrifying Renegade Pearl being the hardest to get

*maybe do a version for each method

>>53766465
Council of Queens guy here, thanks for the feedback! Sorry for the reply delay, shit went down IRL and I had to clean up after it. Just three things:

>Scarlatina
FUCK. I mixed up her and Lucianna in my head. I really need Lucianna's natural charisma to bring the other Brides around, because Lord knows I probably don't have it until I sit the throne.

>Oriadne
Who? Wait, is that the mystery-box alchemist? If so, they can fuck right off, I ain't gay.

>recruiting the Queens
That's the easy part. While trying to make them yield, along with the lure of NOT getting beaten like a red-headed stepchild, I'll also tempt them with the creation of the Queen's Council as a purely political thing. That should get them on board with it in concept. Then, in private with each of them, discuss the marriage - a legal fiction, of course, unless they don't want it to be, in which case of course I'd be amenable to that just to "grease the wheels" as it were. Given what you mentioned before about the low-level brainwashing, I think this would entice most of them besides maybe Vignette (who might not entirely get what I'm leaning towards) or Cassandra (who might be insistent on keeping to the "spirit" of the law without realizing what said spirit really is), and leave me free to turn my whole Throne-enhanced skill towards wooing the remaining Brides into blurring out the legal fiction bit. And, well, if that fails I do have a secret weapon: cheating! (No, not that kind, put away the frogs.) When the High Queen competition comes, I subtly tilt the competition in favor of any Bride who hasn't entirely accepted it, making her the official High Queen, the first of the council...and officially the closest Queen to me. Politically AND physically. Checkmate.

>>53774844
You can pick her as a waifu later on

>>53775315
You have a twinfu, you don't need a waifu

>>53775324
>incest
Enjoy your polydactyly, you inbred hick.

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>>53775466
It's sad how some can't appreciate the purest form of love.

>>53771905
B, I don't even live in a town.

>>53775691
Are you a hermit

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>>53775826

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>>53775838

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>>53775870

>>53771838

Consensual Lewd Build:

(Start with 2 tokens)

My traits:
-Royalty (+1 = 3)
-Curvy (+1 = 4)
-Innocent (+1 = 5)
-Nympho
-Elf Ears
-Misunderstood (-4 = 1)
-True Friends (-4 = 0)

True Friend (with benefits) traits:
-Bodyguard (-1 = -1)
-Curvy (+1 = 0)
-Fiesty
-Nympho
-Elf Ears

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>>53775896

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>>53776067

>>53776067
i will never understand the author's autistic obsession with the fucking scarlet veil when its super vague and barely relevant to the rest of the cyoa

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>>53776147

>>53776067
>Half of the race options is slightly different elf
That's....pretty boring.

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>>53776211

>>53771803
>Be wizard
Use it to be a cute girl witch in an urban fantasy setting. Maybe like Sabrina the teen witch.

>>53775826
Dynasty:
>Brackmoor - your kin along -> alone
Fanged Tower. Political might is too much trouble. I'd rather have magical might and have the backing of one or two of the families. Knowledge is power after all.

> Version is different on second page

Magic:
Dispel Master (4)
Telepathy Master (4)
Heal 3 (3)
Shield 1

Pretty solid antimage and interrogation / mind control.

Item: Circlet. Dual casting and multitasking is incredibly useful.

Estate: Man 6 is not a lot of points. I want apprentice but meditation chamber and alchemy lab arent super useful.
Subterfuge , Lounge, Seneschal, Mundane Fortification, Magical Fortification, Scholar at arms. Mainly focused on defense, with my spymaster mostly on counter intelligence and Seneschal handling most of the business and paperwork.

Scholar at arms:
> brick's paragraph cuts off
Vance. Most competent and have a reputation that can ward off others.

Spymaster: Cypher. Magitech only gets more invasive after all.

Seneschal: Mr. Smith. I'm hiring him for generating research funds. Of course, I'm sure he could do wonders with cypher's intel.

Allies: Cpt Wolfgang Hawke. Rare goods and potions are always a boon. I might even be able to use some for my research. Abraham Crowley, for research purposes.

Complication: The Wyld Hunt. Going to go ahead and use those two spellpoints to bring shield up to level 3. With my dispel mastery I shouldnt have a hard time dealing with this. Plus, it's more about me not getting injured and letting everyone deal with it to be honest. I wonder if it'll make good research material.

>>53776067
here you have 6 races!
>are you an elf
>or a human?
>maybe you are blind?
What a waste.

Also doesn't it tell you straight up that you become Hitler if you pick the second human option? The description is borderline insulting for something that's literally a Greek-like culture.

>>53773525
Making people give half a shit about characters when they don't throw themselves at the character is difficult.

There are a few ways to make them care:

Make them relateable (hence yanderes and social outcast characters are popular here). Relateable characters can happen on accident as well.

Make the reader invest in them (Create a story where the player cares about them and wants them to be happy)

Waifus are a trick that really have a contract that make them fall into the second category. It's implied that they'll love the reader, so you don't have to be too sophisticated or detailed.

If you're trying to make the reader care about non-waifu characters, you need to develop them properly or make a setting that has the reader rely on them. Examples are the younger sibling that needs to be protected et al. Make the reader feel something about them. Make the reader hurt them on accident.

What makes you care about things or people?

This shit is really hard. Honestly, making waifus is much easier.

>>53771905
How does being a magical creature impact me socially? Does it make me too weird to maintain my job and current lifestyle? Does it isolate me socially?

That's how I'd choose A or B.

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>>53776354
I'm just posting lesser shared CYOA's, sorry if some of them end up to be kinda shit.

>there's a reason they're shared less
Yeah, someone might like it though.

Anyway, here's a WIP I really love.

>>53776147
how does this work? I can get a spell that give me +2spd...if I add that bonus right away, by the time I move to the next color I can already learn more spells than I would have been able to if I didn't add the bonus of the previous spell.

Is it without counting the bonuses you get by the spells themselves?

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>>53775826
Dynasty: Fanged Tower (abandoned, appears minor noble)
Spells:
- telekinesis master
- telepathy master
- evocation 2
- selective tangibility 1
- dispel 1
item: circlet (is there really any other option?)
estate:
- Magic: meditation chamber, alchemy lab, apprentice
- combat: scholar at arms
- subterfuge: spymaster, map room
Staff:
- scholar: Vance
- spymaster: Helen
- Apprentice: Heather
friends/allies:
- amadeus habsburg
- allison keynes
complication:
- none

Apprentices were the harest to choose. I want my character to be a black market information broker / private intelligence contractor. Working in plain sight among the middle class and ruling from the shadows. Hercules is too blunt, and both richmond and gaius could turn on me, leaving me with heather. I offer her protection and the training given to me at the fanged tower in exchange for her loyalty.

Vance is a no braining for the scholar's, essentially having my own personal spec ops hit squad. I like Helen because it lets me control what does and does not leak to the press. I can bolster her career and ruin my rivals through legitimate means; she won't be exposed to any of the dirty work that may need to be done.

my allies are chosen to get me an in on the senate and police for respectively. they are my friends so I will not push them to act against their interests, but I can use them to stay informed to otherwise confidential information.

Finally I think my spell choices allow for good in and out of combat utility.

>>53777525
I'll just break my monitor to close the entrance to the virtual world.

>>53777656
Why not go with them instead?

>>53774844
Agreed

Normally I narrators inserting their opinion doesnt bother me, sometimes it can be fun, but in this instance it just makes me want to say "Okay, fuck you bitch, I'll wait until an actual professional is here to deal with me".

And I'm not even going for the options she's trying to be clever about

>>53777525
IE-tan; seems like she make for a nice daughteru

>>53775466
Not really a problem with an identical twin though

>>53775733
No, I simply live in the woods.

>>53777925
Are you a elf?

>>53777939
Elves don't grow a beard like I do.

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Comfy Spacehip CYOA

V2 Changes:
>A small change for differentiating between ships
- Small ships gain additional Wonders
- Medium ships gain additional Facility points
- Large ships gain more Special features points.
- Swapped Mining ship and Yacht
>Clarification of Tier points system.
- Made it easier to understand (Please tell me if it is still somehow confusing)
- changed amount of points given for choosing ship features.
>Some changes with choice descriptions and tiers.
- Fixed as many typos as I and other anons could find.
- I tried to change up the Nanorobot AR tiers to be less powerful and have more clear descriptions. I think what I have now works better.
- Added a choice to choose one or all Leisure Activities(Now 'Recreational Activities')/crew members/Pets(Now 'A Loving Being')

>>>53766553
Any small changes (to points provided or glaring typos/grammar mistakes I missed) can be easily done if it needs to, but I think I'm done here for now. I'm happy with everything I've got right now.

Thanks for all the feedback and help.

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>>53778054

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>>53778065

>>53778054
>to reach higher tiers you must first purchase lower tiers.
>You can choose all 3 options or just one, without needing to purchase previous tiers to reach higher ones.
Getting mixed messages between the section intro and the tiny text at the bottom of the page.

>>53778134
The tiny text is positioned below the 2 special options that you can choose without buying previous tiers.

>>53778145
Ah. Didn't notice the "OR"s between the tiers at first.

>>53774751
Domesticated Kumiho, because Fluffy Tail.
Everlasting Bludwurst (hopefully it has a 'liver' setting)
Doggy Tesseract Toy (she's smarter than a normal dog, so I'll need this)
Bandolier of Holding (just generally useful)

I'm going to skip the bonus box because there's no way I'd be able to avoid touching fluffy tail.

>>53778189
>Not wanting to be a dog girl
What are you gay?

>>53777689
Wait the narrator is trying to force a certain build on her?
Is it the writer's fetish?

>>53774844
What is wrong with the narrator? i see nothing wrong with it

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>>53778054
>Space Laser
>Futuristic
>Fabricator 2
>Expanded Cabin 2
>Med Lab 3
>Bathing 1
>AR Room 1
>Library 2
>Recreational Activities 2

>AI 1
>Synth Android 2
>Phasal Transporter 2
>Loving Being 1 (Pet bird)
>Nanorobot AR
>EVA Suit

>Stellar Phenomena
>Ruined Civilizations
>Natural Wonders
>Forgotten Mysteries
>Planetary Events
>Earth

The plan is simple; use my mining laser to harvest the resources I need to live in perpetual space comfort with my AI friend and pet bird.

My AI friend may be female and inhabit a synthetic body for sex at times.

>>53778219
>Wait the narrator is trying to force a certain build on her?
>Is it the writer's fetish?
I wouldn't go that far, but every second option or so has her commenting on why its bad. I can see why it annoys anon, sometimes narrators can add flavour to the choices but in this instance it gets irritating fast.

>>53778054
>Battleship
>Utilitarian
Safety handholds are super comfy in an emergency, and in general actually kind of fun.
>Clowning tank tier 3
>Fabricator tier 3
>Medical Lab tier 3
>Augmented Reality Room tier 3
>Crew Quarters tier 1 and 3
>Bathing amenities tier 2
>Expanded Cabin tier 2
I guess I'm going to be spending a lot of time with myself, and some like minded people.
>Mind Upload tier 3
>Synthetic Android tier 3
>A.I Companion tier 3
>Nanorobot A.R. tier 3
>Phasal Transporter tier 1
I'm not even that fond of augmented reality stuff, but I guess it'll be fun, besides for the other stuff I can send robot bodies to do things
>Stunning Technology
>Megalithic Structure
>Dimensional Entity
This is the Battleship Fuck You I'm Comfy, in our continuing mission: to explore strange new technologies, to seek out incredible structures, to boldly go stalk gods. Honestly though it's going to be a very lewd time onboard this ship.

>>53778482
>Clowning tank tier 3
terrifying

>>53778489
Spaceship 13, I guess

>>53778489
>>53778533
I am now horrified at my typo. I can only assume I stalked the wrong god.

>>53778482
You need to take another look at your points anon.
You must buy the 1st Tier before you can buy 2nd and so on..
Tier 1 = 1 Point > Tier 2 = 2 Points Tier 3 = 3 points
In total for a full upgrade of a Facility costs 6 Points.

>>53778482
think you need to recheck the costs

>>53778547
>>53778553
So I do, oh well I don't have time to bother right now.

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>>53778547
>>53778482
Are people not good at reading or am I just wording it wrong?

>>53778558
No I just apparently skipped reading part of it.

>>53778558
Nah, you're good

The children are always wrong

>>53772656
The logic is that older folks have had the chance to pursue more hobbies. So if you're 12 you're just getting into something for real for the first time, but if you're 21 you've tried a bunch of different things and picked up more that you like and are good at.

Also, 2 was the baseline in the last version, not 4.

>>53778633
That's dumb. You drop hobbies when you pick up new ones.

>>53778644
By that logic, you should only ever have one hobby at a time. That makes no sense, and I bet most posters here would have at least 3-4 different hobbies and have probably only ever dropped one, MAYBE.

>>53778731
Yeah, so why the fuck do kids have one hobby? When I was twelve I played the cello like a little faggot while also playing 40k and vidya and rock climbing and reading and other shit too. Obviously I started some new hobbies later, but I dropped old ones as I did it -- I wasn't just adding more and more.

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>>53774079
Yeah, the picture I used for Catherine really sexied Diana's design nearly past recognition.
Sorry the thread got archived before I could keep going, Lucianna would probably spent most of her time investigating every little thing your room she didn't recognize and being utterly mystified by your most mundane possessions. She'd also constantly try to be as close to you as physically posible; sitting on your lap while you're on the computer, right beside you while your just sitting on the edge of your bed and I'll the while smilingly proudly to herself as if to say, "Yes. This is where I belong."
>Desire to initiate intense friendship is rising.
What are you talking about, Anon? We're already friends! I'm a friend to everyone who comes to these threads.
>>53774327
But my palms are sweaty!
>>53774457
My work usually comes in a rather quick, but spaced out bursts. I'll usually research the basis of the character [spoilet]in this case Zodiac signs, I'd really like to make something different at some point, dammit it Celt![/spoiler], then I'll write up all the text I can in one go. If I like what I have I'll then go through it again to edit and correct stuff and finally add it all the actual image.
It's not a lengthy process by any means, but it's how I work and it leaves me pretty drained afterwards which is why I work so slowly.
But, because that's how I do things I have plenty of time to fuck around in these threads while I recharge and I'm sure I could look over your stuff during my breaks as well.
The offer stands either way, Anon. I'm here if you need me.
>>53774559
>Tell us a little more about Cassandra
In terms of hanging out, she'd probably be kind of awkward. She's the kind of person who's normally all business so when you ask if she'd just like to spend some time together, she'd probably get flustered and wouldn't know how to approach the idea. She'd
Probably show up with a lamenated "date plan," and be terrorfied of boring you.

>>53778558
It's pretty clear as is. Though, if you wanted to make it foolproof, you could go with the 'Choose up to one from each category. Each tier includes the tiers before it." and make the costs 1/3/6.

>>53778633
>>53778644
I agree; it'd be better to have 2-3 hobbies no matter the age group, but just having being older give you more choices.

>>53778558
>>53778816
Oh, scratch that, didn't think about crews/Rec rooms.

>>53771851
Do you really have to pick that font? It's giving me eye cancer.

>>53771851
what exactly is this cyoa supposed to bring to the table, everything is the same as what we've seen 100 times before

I've been trying to tolerate his presence but am I the only one who's getting fed up with ZBG? I don't get why people even wank his characters, they feel so ungenuine.

>>53778919
Honestly I'm just ignoring him, and am only vaguely aware he is making some sort of waifu cyoa that doesn't look very interesting.

>>53778786
I'm starting to think Lucianna is officially my favorite just from all the info you've said about her at this point has been amazing.

Oh! Here's another question I thought off last night though. I'm immortal, and through my bond with my wife, she is too. What about my kids? When will I need to step down so someone else can empower the throne? How would each of the brides deal with being immortal, especially if our children aren't also like that? I imagine that would hit Catherine pretty hard but I'm not sure. I'm planning on sticking around for forever just so I can keep finding new media to enjoy and keep meeting interesting people and watching the world change. Hoping my wife will want to stick around as well, but if our children and all her friends aren't able to stick around...

I mean, immortality can be rough.

Lastly, how exactly will the kingdom's alchemist feel that I didn't end up picking their mystery box?

>>53778919
Vignette desu

>>53778901
People write (and play) what they enjoy, I'm sure this will see plenty of appreciation.

>>53778919
No. It is better than /pol/ posting and the like, but its gotten old. And while I appreciate the production values, another waifu CYOA doesn't warrant tripfagging up whole threads.

>>53778919
i guess the thing is, as annoying as that and posts like >>53778944 are getting, at least its on topic

Though maybe they should start a general of their own at this rate or go to reddit where this behavior is the norm

>>53778786
Wow, I go to sleep and you people go through two fucking threads.

>>53766465
Council of Queens guy here, thanks for the feedback! Just three things:

>Scarlatina
FUCK. I mixed up her and Lucianna in my head. I really need Lucianna's natural charisma to bring the other Brides around, because Lord knows I probably don't have it until I sit the throne.

>Oriadne
Who? Wait, is that the mystery-box alchemist? If so, they can fuck right off, I ain't gay.

>recruiting the Queens
That's the easy part. While trying to make them yield, along with the lure of NOT getting beaten like a red-headed stepchild, I'll also tempt them with the creation of the Queen's Council as a purely political thing. That should get them on board with it in concept. Then, in private with each of them, discuss the marriage - a legal fiction, of course, unless they don't want it to be, in which case of course I'd be amenable to that just to "grease the wheels" as it were. Given what you mentioned before about the low-level brainwashing, I think this would entice most of them besides maybe Vignette (who might not entirely get what I'm leaning towards) or Cassandra (who might be insistent on keeping to the "spirit" of the law without realizing what said spirit really is), and leave me free to turn my whole Throne-enhanced skill towards wooing the remaining Brides into blurring out the legal fiction bit. And, well, if that fails I do have a secret weapon: cheating! (No, not that kind, put away the frogs.) When the High Queen competition comes, I subtly tilt the competition in favor of any Bride who hasn't entirely accepted it, making her the official High Queen, the first of the council...and officially the closest Queen to me. Politically AND physically. Checkmate.

>>53778960
Is he supposed to just ignore people asking him question to preserve the purity of /cyog/ and your feelings?

Would people be interested in another protect-the-waifu CYOA or is that a bit saturated?

>>53779023
Do what you want in the end people who like it will be interested

>>53778919
are you sure you're getting fed up with him and not his fanbase? I'm indifferent about him, overeager orbiters are the problem

>>53778983
Splitting them into their own general will just empty these threads of talk or worse, the void will be filled with shitposting.

Just put up with it for now, I guess. Till the next author takes the spotlight.

>>53779027
Eh, sure.

>>53779037
He's really not a big deal IMO. Dunno what people's problem would be other than waifuwankery.

>>53778901
While there are comfy cyoas, they are almost all about making a home or small demiplane, spaceship comfy is pretty unique, especially with space themed choices. Only other that quickly jumps to mind is The Ship, which honestly isn't that big on comfy and the choices are fairly limited. It's a good cyoa tho

>>53779014
No, as I said its on topic and better than topics falling to other forms of shitposting as they sometimes do. Doesnt mean people aren't tired of the same handful of people (and you can tell it is) fellating a tripfag who's clearly enjoying it.

>>53779036
>>53779037
These are also true.

>>53779062
He's talking about the Pallas CYOA.

>>53779023
as long as can write descriptions longer than two sentences you're good to go.

>>53779023
There'll always be interest for that anon

>>53779095
Oh, somehow I managed to click myself to the spaceship cyoa, weird. Nevermind then. Now I wonder if I should delete that post since it's actually irrelevant.

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>>53778919
>>53778939
>>53778960
>>53778983
Sorry to be a bother.
>>53778944
Hmm...
This is one of those things I hadn't put as much thought into as other aspects of the setting and such.
Your kids would certainly be long lived, but your and your wife's immortality comes from the Throne.
So only whichever one you choose as your Heir is the only one who'll wind up with immortality.
But that would also basically mean you're sentencing all your other children to die, so I'm gonna have to think on this a bit more because that just seems kinda fucked up.
>how exactly will the kingdom's alchemist feel that I didn't end up picking their mystery box?
Oriadne is your Left Hand. He'll be pouty and probably shoot you longing gazes from time to time, but he'll still do his job and be one of your most loyal friends regardless of whether he's chosen or not.
>>53778992
>I mixed up her and Lucianna in my head.
Aaah. I gotcha.
>they can fuck right off, I ain't gay
Well that's just mean. He'd happily become a woman for you if you asked, but I suppose he'll just do his best to be a use to you as an alchemist if not.

But once again, I'm exceptionally impressed by your plan. Would love to see how it played out.

>>53779150
>cyoa
>deleting irrelevant things

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>>53779172
>Sorry to be a bother.
Dropping the trip would help, plenty of authors do Q&A without them

>But that would also basically mean you're sentencing all your other children to die, so I'm gonna have to think on this a bit more because that just seems kinda fucked up.

Lightly brainwashing a dozen or so women so they'd fall for some Earth schlub wasn't?

>>53779235
For all his sins, at least the name makes it trivial to search for his answers in archive if you care about it. Why not just autohide the posts he makes with that trip?

>>53771851
I hope there is a bicurious girl friend I can have threeway shenanigans with !

>>53779172
It does seem pretty messed up, but I don't think there's a better way to spin it lest you have the potential for vast numbers of powerful immortals running around. This can hardly be the only time a king has had siblings, and then of THEIR lovers and children are also immortal...

Basically, connecting immortality to the throne is pretty much the only sensible option unless you're gonna make pretty much everyone immortal, which while not an entirely bad idea in and of itself still feels kinda weird. I mean, I guess overpopulation isn't an issue in an ever expanding pocket dimension...

I dunno.

>>53779250
>Why not just autohide the posts he makes with that trip?

I'm not really bothered by him, just saying its largely unnecessary and makes a bad impression.

Besides, I'm interested in how the Stand/Persona thing turns out.

And again, its really the fanboys that are offputting, but at least they're on topic

>>53778054
What level of fabricator would be required to create robot bodies for an AI? Level 3?

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Anyone /k/ enough to help me with weapon descriptions?

>>53778919
I don't read his posts. Instead of whining I act like an adult.
Try it.

>>53779172
>>53779282
I assumed that only you and your wife were immortal, and any children were not. Your Heir is just chosen from one of your descendants rather than having to be your immediate child.

Of course, if you keep having children over the millenia, your family tree is going to look very interesting...

>>53779348
Only Tier one, you'd need an A.I. to design it specifically.

>>53779389
Awesome. More points to spend on Aquariums and Gardens

>>53779353
>Shotguns/rifles
>Heavy firearms

Everything smaller than an LMG is small arms. LMGs, MMGs and HMGs are machine guns. 20mm calibre or above guns are auto-cannons.

>>53779353
>Missile launchers/artillery cannons
>Medium weapons

>>53779420
Just treat those rifles and shotguns as using special ammo, therefore in a higher tier.
>>53779464
Also, compared to what heavy+ weapons are, medium, yes.

>>53778054
>Ship
Medium: Alien, Abductor

>Interior
Classy

>Facilities (25)
Medical Lab III (19)
Recreational Activities I (18)
Bathing Amenities I (17)
Fabricator II (14)
Cloning Tanks I (13)
Expanded Cabin I (12)
Aquarium III (6)
Plant Garden III (0)

>Special Features (10)
AI Companion III (4)
Synthetic Android II (1)
Nanobot AR I (0)

>Wonders
Ruined Civilizations
Forgotten Myseries
Alien Creatures

Maybe I'll do a Small build at some point too, with the Worn In and Comfy style.

>>53771851
Please include music as a hobby. Singer and or instruments. Looks good so far though!

>>53778054
Gonna preface this by saying space is without a doubt my least favorite setting. Floating aimlessly through the endless cosmos is not what I consider "fun".
>Human
>Small
>Space yacht (+3 Wonders)
Gonna go find a planet of catgirls so I won't need the ship for much.
Isn't it simpler to say the Small ships give +3 Wonders, Medium +5 Facility, Large +3 Special, instead of mentioning it under each option?

>Old fashioned
>Garden 1 (1)
>Fabricator 2 (4)
>Augmented reality room 1 (5)
>Bathing amenities 1 (6)
>Expanded cabin 1 (7)
>Library 1 (8)
>Training complex 1 (9)
I don't need more.
Also I just now realized some options may not be available to me. It's super hard to see those yellow lines.

>AI waifu 1 (1)
>Phasal transporter 1 (2)
>A loving being (doggo) 1 (3)
>Wide bridge windows 1 (4)

>Planetary events (1)
>Alien creatures (2)
>Hidden option: CATastrophe (3)
So are all the wonders dead or what? Ships deserted and such? I'm all alone?
It sounds basically like the Wonders are plans for sightseeing. It doesn't make much sense you can't see more stuff.
Space just isn't for me. That's on me, not you, I know.

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>>53779475
If comparison is needed, here's an unfinished page 3 with the rest of the weapons

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>>53779570
I couldn't think of a decent bonus for music beyond "You're really good at it" and that's why it's not in there
That said, I think I'll include it in the "Activities" section later on, to flag that you do it, but just without magic going on as well.

>>53779617
Maybe make music increase your ability to inspire or manipulate emotions? Good music traditionally does that

>>53772054
Did he make others than those two?

>>53779732
Deus vult nemesis sex magic slavemaster and 9 deadly sins

>>53778054
Ship: Alien Scout
Interior: Futuristic

Facilities:
T1 Plant Garden (19)
T2 Fabricator (16)
T1 Expanded Cabin (15)
T3 Medical Lab (9)
T1 Bathing Amenities (8)
T1 Augmented Reality Room (7)
T1 Library (6)
T2 Recreational Facilities (3)
T2 Crew Quarters (0)

>>53778065
Features:
T1 Nanorobot AR (9)
T3 Phasal Transporter (3)
T1 Loving Being - Pet Cat (2)
T1 Wide Bridge Windows (1)
T1 EVA Suit (0)

Wonders:
Stunning Technology (5)
Planetary Events (4)
Megalithic Structures (3)
Natural Wonders (2)
Alien Creatures (1)
Ruined Civilizations (0)

I'll be outer space's David Attenborough. Traveling across the cosmos, showing the world back home all the impossibilities the depths of space contains. Beautiful things, wonderful things, terrible things - let's let everyone see the stars, so that one day they'll come to them as well.

Dammit, 6 slots for wonders and it's still hard to choose.

>>53779588
>Floating aimlessly through the endless cosmos is not what I consider "fun"
I like to think of it more as a living in a traveling home where you'll come across a few interesting stellar and planetary landmarks theres nothing stopping you from parking it in the orbit of an interesting planet.
The fun comes from the things you do in your spaceship and the planets you discover with it, the coziness is partly that and enjoying the stunning sights space has to offer.

And besides space may be mostly empty but it is beautiful if you've ever looked at the stars in a rural area at night, but that's probobly an aquired taste.

>all the wonders dead or what?
I can understand why you'd think that, I didn't have room for a 'Meet Aliens' Wonder.
Alot of them are just for sightseeing, the sorts of things you can enjoy discovering out in space.

>>53779732
If only there was a repository with information about authors, with information on what they've made.
It could even be posted at the top of the thread! It would be so convenient.

But alas. No such thing exists.

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>>53779092
>fellating a tripfag who's clearly enjoying it.
Who doesn't enjoy a good fellating?
I'm just gonna come out and say that I don't quite understand the stigma assciated with tripping or namefagging. It's a helpful way to find my posts if you're looking for them or ignore them if you don't want to see them.
I try to only use it when I'm either talking about ZB or other stuff I'm working on and weighing in on something I feel the trip would be helpful for (such as offering to help >>53773525 with the trip on so he can easily find me in the Discord).
Believe it or not, I actually post all the time without the trip if it has nothing to do with me or my work.
Albeit, I do just forget to take it off from time to time.
And let's be honest, Anon. Even if I took the trip off and never used it again, I'd still be my same old autistic self, I just wouldn't come with a warning label. Doesn't that sound worse?
>>53779235
>Lightly brainwashing a dozen or so women
Now, now. I explicitly said that "may or may not" have been what happened.
If there's a more believable reason for 12 beautiful women and one beautiful woman(male) to lust after you beyond money and power (because making gold digger waifus kind of defeats the whole purpose), I'd love to hear it!

>>53779869
Maybe you were exaggerated for quite a while?

>>53779591
>>53779475
You're asking for /k/ autism, you're getting it. A rifle considered "heavy" is pretty much an artillery cannon or anti-materiel rifle, which serves a very different purpose to standard precision "small arms" rifles. And a shotgun is not going to be a heavy weapon.

If you're going to be autistic about it then don't ask for /k/ opinions.

>>53779172
>Sorry to be a bother.

Don't take it too hard; I'm one of the anons telling you to drop the trip, but if you don't the world will keep turning and these threads will continue to come and go. Silly internet CYOA discussion should never be cause for real life unhappiness

>I'm just gonna come out and say that I don't quite understand the stigma assciated with tripping or namefagging. It's a helpful way to find my posts if you're looking for them or ignore them if you don't want to see them.

Its just generally unnecessary and historically associated with attention whoring.

>And let's be honest, Anon. Even if I took the trip off and never used it again, I'd still be my same old autistic self, I just wouldn't come with a warning label. Doesn't that sound worse?

Yes but then its like an autist treasure hunt

>>53779869
>le trap (male) XDXD
fucking stop
it's the worst and most autistic part of you

>>53779869
>Now, now. I explicitly said that "may or may not" have been what happened.
>If there's a more believable reason for 12 beautiful women and one beautiful woman(male) to lust after you beyond money and power (because making gold digger waifus kind of defeats the whole purpose), I'd love to hear it!

I never said I had a better idea, just that lines have already been crossed, its hard to sympathize with my future bastard progeny when they'll still have a pretty long, sweet life ahead as my children even if they dont get to be immortal

>>53779172
>sentencing all your other children to die
I have vague memories of you talking about some sort of fountain of youth thing, which would make sense to me given how amazing alchemy apparently is. Although on the other hand, that's the sort of detail that's potential setting breaking (why would anyone ever die if 'live forever' is an option?), so in my head the workaround is that it's something very costly/difficult to set up. Most of the thought here is going towards justifying keeping family members alive and well.

Speaking of which, would my immediate family be likely to have some form of magic power (obviously lesser given they can't claim the throne), with the whole bloodline thing? It'd be nice to be able to set people up with superpowers, but it feels like something of a stretch.

Also, typing this out makes me think I've spent far too much time playing around with this whole concept in my head, so thanks for all the fun.

>>53779588
Why are you flying around aimlessly? Why not have a goal of some kind? E.g., go sightseeing, or go party with the aliens, or be an archaeologist.

>>53779851
I figured either the alien spaceships were the "meet aliens" wonder, or living aliens were ubiquitous enough that you wouldn't need a wonder for them. You could always collapse a couple of the redundant wonders, though - e.g., ancient mysteries and ruined civilizations, or natural wonders and planetary events.

>>53779958
It's just a shitty meme. I really wish he didn't use it so often though. Liking traps is fine, but there's no need to draw attention to it all the time.

>>53779851
>I like to think of it more as a living in a traveling home
I don't want that. I want to go to a nice planet with catgirls and stay there all my life. Maybe go travel the world.
Space is infinite. There will always be more to do, you can never explore everything. There will always be a race or a world that fits you better. It is impossible to be 100% satisfied.
>sightseeing
Again, don't want that. As vacation, sure, but not all the time.
>Alot of them are just for sightseeing, the sorts of things you can enjoy discovering out in space.
Yes and it's pointless and arbitrary to have fixed limits to how much stuff you can see.

tl,dr I do not and will not like space.

>>53780002
>aimlessly
Because that's what space is. You can't sightsee for your whole life nor would I want to.
>a goal
I do. Find a planet of catgirls.
I just want to settle down making the whole cyoa pointless because I'm dumping the ship when I find the catgirl planet.

>>53779869
>more believable reason for 12 beautiful women and one beautiful woman(male) to lust after you beyond money and power
'destiny' desu

>>53780002
Yeah I probobly could have merged meeting aliens with seeing Alien Spaceships or something like that.
I suppose Alien Creatures wonder is the closest fit for the meet aliens thing but the way I wrote the description makes it seem like you're only meeting non-sentient aliens only.

>>53780080
>Space is infinite. There will always be more to do, you can never explore everything. There will always be a race or a world that fits you better. It is impossible to be 100% satisfied.
That's a feature, not a bug. 100% satisfaction means nothing to strive for. In space there's always a horizon.

>Because that's what space is. You can't sightsee for your whole life
Maybe you can't.

>>53780096
I kind of dig the idea that most intelligent life is gone, but the crew options would imply thats not the case.

>>53779945
Fair enough, but I'm asking for ideas how to describe the options too.

>>53780140
Maybe if I added some sort of Universe complications or choices which let you decide what the state of the universe is in. Taken over by A.I., Galactic war, Empty Wasteland, Thriving Alien society, etc.

Ideas for the future.

>>53780045
it's every fcuking post he makes he does that. and spoilers it too like a mong

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>>53780045
>>53780175

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>>53779957
>Don't take it too hard
I'm not, there was just a lot of people complaining about it, so I thought it only polite to apologize. When it continued, I wrote up my little speal explaining why I do it.
>Its just generally unnecessary and historically associated with attention whoring
Well I enjoy attention so I can't argue there.
Though I would like to say for the record that I haven't been a whore since I was 19. Those were the days...
>autist treasure hunt
...Is it awful that sounds weirdly appealing to me?
>>53779958
Oh shit, are we not doing that anymore? Should I just go back to embrassing my inner weeb and call them otokonokos again?
Have a CYOA that I didn't make as an apology.
>>53779975
Well there you go.
>>53779986
>fountain of youth
I don't recall saying anything about anything giving you immortality besides the Throne...
Like I said, I'm not sure how to handle the immortality aspect with your children because I really don't like the idea of having a bunch of kids and having to select one to tell, "though your brothers and sister will die one day, I've chosen to give you the gift of everlasting life so that you may carry the guilt of knowing all of them died because of you forever."
And yes, your progeny shall inherit their mother's Hereditary Skill along with a few watered down versions of your abilities based on their personalities.
>spoiler
The fact that so many anons have thought so deeply about my first attempt at a CYOA warms my heart and gives me the motivation to keep making these.
>>53780081
That is, in my opinion, one of laziest tropes in fiction because it undermines all the character's effort and accomplishment.
>"You nearly killed yourself braving the dangers of the Demon Lord's fortress and trained for years in some of most brutal exercises imaginable?"
>"Of course you did! It's your destiny after all! Everything you do has been prophesized since ancient times, why should we be surprised or impressed?"

>>53780242
I really wish you would stop encouraging the turbo autists who are basically rping by themselves. I like reading builds, especially if they have a clever approach, but 'this is what I'm gonna do with my wifeys, after I'm king, teehee' and all that self wanking makes me want to ram a fork up my nostrils.

>call them otokonokos again
Please don't. x (male) is fine once in a while, just don't do it literally every post.

>>53780242
>so I thought it only polite to apologize
Actions speak louder than words. If you were truly sorry you would quit.

And besides, attaching a CYOA to your blogpost does not make it on topic.

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>>53780325
What about male (female)?

>>53780601
Depends on how male we're talking. Tomboys\just crossdressing are fine. Buck Angel is not.

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>>53780623
>Buck Angel
Are you implying something here

>>53780242
>it undermines all the character's effort and accomplishment
I mean, sure, but there's literally no effort or accomplishment. Having random people love you for basically no reason totally fits the definition of 'no effort or accomplishment' to a T.

>>53780601
The cunt makes it better (?)

>>53780657
>Are you implying something here
No.
post more Tomo

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>>53780601

>>53780705
sauce?

>>53780744
>Spirit of Misfortune
>Monk
>Mole
Summon the Spirit of Misfortune, and give cancer to a lot of assholes. Nine years, eleven months, twenty days later (just as a little safety buffer), summon the Monk for the first time.

Mole is just fantastic in general.

>>53780705
I am deeply confused. What's the source?

>>53778054
>Space Mech (Small)
>Utilitarian
>Cloning Tank 3, Fabricator 2, Plant Garden 1
>Mind Upload 3, Phasal Transporter 3, AI Companion 3, Nanorobot AR 3, Synthentic Android 3, Holographic Map
>Megalithic Structure, Dimensional Entity, Prime Cynosure A.I.

I am the giant robot now, making clones of my former fleshy self to go out and explore wherever it is I go. I'll see that strange incomprehensible being, and I will understand it.

>>53780897
Murenase. Use reverse image search, you fool. Quite fun, but pretty generic harem mango.

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>>53780778
>>53780897
Murenase! Shiiton Gakuen
It's all over Google if you do reverse image search, scrubs.

>>53780935
Features points don't add up.
Free Mind Upload from Space Mech
Full Phasal Transporter = 6 points
Full A.I. Companion = 6 Points
Full Nanobot AR -= 6 points
Synth Android = 6 points
Holo Map = 1 Point
Thats 25 points your spending when you only have 10 + 5 (From Space Mech)

Seriously for gods sake just how am I supposed to make it clear?

>>53780744
>Eye
>Mole
>Mask

I am going to commit so much insurance fraud you guys

So many burned down buildings they'll never trace back to me

>>53778054
>>53778065
>>53778075
Ringworld
Worn in and Comfy
Plant Garden T3 (Free)
Aquarium T3 (Free)
Fabricator T3 (6)
Cloning Tank T1 (7)
Expanded Cabin T3 (13)
Medical Lab T3 (19)
Augmented Reality Room T1 (20)
Recreational Activities T1 (21)
Crew Quarters T3 (24)
Training Complex T3 (30)

AI Companion T2 (3)
Phasal Transporter T1 (4)
Synthetic Android T2 (7)
Upgraded EVA Suit (8)
Powered Armor (9)
Holographic Map (10)

Stunning Technology
Planetary Events
Stellar Phenomenon

I will print out ships and waifus to explore the universe with.

>>53781058
Whoops, thought that ship features were all just 1 point per level. Guess instead it'll have to be;
>Mind Upload 3, AI Companion 3, Synthetic Android 3, Phasal Transporter 2

>>53781058
I think it's pretty clear now, just somehow the comfyness of the CYOA stops people's brains from working properly

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>>53781100
I guess its okay if people are enjoying the cyoa, but It hurts to not know whats going wrong with my communication.

>>53778054
Dumb question, is Earth our current planet, or future Earth?

>>53781449
Future Earth, The Human Manufacturer ship choices show this.

>>53781153
If you have to, you can just put "Buying the second tier of a facility would cost 1+2=3 points, and the third would cost 1+2+3=6 points" on there or something.
Also, I'd suggest you put the two bottom options that are different from the rest in their own box pointing to the clarification.

>>53778827
That's technically what the original version was, which I think was fine in theory. The problem is that it wanted to break up 16 hobbies into 4 groups which really screwed over the younger ages and didn't really make much sense in the way they were split up.

I would break it into 12+4 or 16+4, where only a small range of hobbies are exclusive and the majority are available to everyone. I get wanting age to have an impact but I don't think it should be a particularly large one. Plus or minus one choice in a typical build, that's it.

>>53778633
I know 2 was baseline, but since you are offering more I'm not exactly going to ask for less, besides I thought it could use slightly more, 3 is about perfect.

>>53781153
Honestly, the only way to solve this is to put the point cost next to the tier. This always happens. People never seem to read the text above the choices or at least they immediately forget it.

>>53781153
Just put a small note at the bottom of the last page that says, "If you calculated your points wrong then your waifu comes to life only to kill you in a horrific and entirely non-sexual way."

>>53780744
Ultimate NEET mode
>Totem
>Succubus
>Alraune

>>53781086
Switch the eye with the totem and you can have a safe base of operations for inbetween rapes and murders.

>>53778919
Just ignore him anon.

>>53778052
Swiftness: 2
Endurance: 2
Strength: 2
Resolve: 3
Quick wits: 2
Awareness : 2
Charisma: 2
Combat ability: 3
Magic ability: 3

Major archetype: Muscle wizard
Minor archetype: Ki master

Special skills
Improved training
Tactician
Increased willpower

Companions: Akshera and Augustis

>>53776455
>Someone actually reposted my shitty obscure star wars CYOA
>And they like it

Aw shit nigga

>>53776455
>>53782290
Despite some flaws, this is hands down the best Star Wars cyoa. I'm surprised it's not linked more often.

>>53777525
On one hand Chrome has a bunch of money but on the other hand Firefox has fluffy tail.

>>53771905
definitely b

id want to see what the magical being life is like considering i just became it and dont know anything about it

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>>53777525
>It is thanks to IE-tan that the others were able to get to your world

>>53778054
>>53778065
Ship: Battleship
Interior: Futuristic

Facilities:
Fabricator 3
Augmented Reality Room 2
Library 2
Recreational Activites 2
Crew Quarters 3
Training Complex 2

Special Features:
Nanorobot A.R. 1
A.I. Companion 2
Syntethic Android 2
Mind Upload 3

Wonders:
Stunning Technology
Alien Spaceships
Alien Creatures

Aboard my mighty battleship, my AI companions and I will travel the universe and discover strange and exotic alien life forms, enslaving or annihilating them depending on my mood that day. Any interesting technology we come across we will study and replicate. The rest of the time we just chill and play games on our ship.

>>53782346
>wip
>pdf
Solved the case

>>53780744
Eye.
Skeleton.
Sheep or Succubus. Probably Sheep.

>>53782525
>Probably Sheep.
Don't kid yourself. You know you want the succu-pussy, you filthy slut.

>>53771905
>Ferrean is back
>>53771851
>Pallas is back
>Box wine has been spotted

Don't pinch me I want this to be real!

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>>53782578
And I'm still alive, too.

>>53782546
Not really. Gaining several hours daily to shitpost with is more valuable. Besides, I'm so lazy I think masturbating is too much of a physical activity, and check the panda and written sources daily.

>>53782623
Every day I wonder what the purpose of topology is.

>>53782655
It's a category of mathematics. Its purpose is the same as all other branches, to help humans sort results which they can use in theoretical or applied mathematics.

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>>53771851
Why cant you use a normal font? Do you have [i]taste cancer[/i]?

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>>53782801
So it's obvious the narrator is speaking
If you don't like it make your own CYOA that looks as good as mine

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>>53780744
>Seer
My waifu!
>The Succubus
Boobies!
>The Sheep girl
But not for lewd! I will only cuddle the succubut!

>>53782655
>He doesn't want to calculate what it would take to combine the hairs of a spherical obamadog

>>53782841
Then let me say that he has a point. It's much harder to read than it needs to be.

has anyone made any eldritch monstrosity CYOA's I remember seeing one but I couldn't save it, do any of you have it?

>>53778054
>>53778065
>>53778075
>race choice is purely aesthetic, actual choice (sans "DLC") is small-medium-large
>interior has no benefit/drawback system
>some features potentially redundant, allowing more cost-effective solutions with few or no drawbacks and even benefits in some cases (eg mind upload 2 instead of cloning bay 3 which has the same relative value (30% of a resource), though I guess if you shell out for a crew they could also use the latter)
I'm seeing some issues. Also pretty sure phenomenon should be phenomena, assuming it's meant to be plural.

Anyway
>time warper
>classy interior
>cloning tank 1 (1), AR room 1 (1), fabricator 2 (3), recreational activities 1 (1), medical lab 1 (1), library 2 (3)
>AI companion 3 (6), synthetic android 2 (3), mind upload 1 (1), nanorobot AR 1 (1), powered armour (1)
>every wonder besides planetary events, stellar phenomena, Cynosure AI and dimensional entity

Gonna assume the Cynosure AI is the sort of thing where you would probably rather not possess the understanding it would grant you, Lovecraftian style, given the red tape over the relevant options, or I would have specced less for immortal timelord adventures with an immortal telepathic qt and more for becoming a literal god and understanding the cosmos.

Facilities seem kind of lame to me btw, I mean they seem like nice things to have but working with ten points and none of the medium-to-large options didn't really feel restrictive while working with one point less than the maximum for special features still did.

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>>53782841
>making something this bad
Only if you pay me.

>>53780744
>The Eye
Absolutely the best. There's so many things I'd like to know but my flaws or lack of time prevents me to. Not to mention topics I simply have no chance ot pursuing without materials, experiments and equipment I do not possess. This thing circumvents all those problems and I believe I could learn even quite advanced things if I'll parcel the knowledge properly.

>The Succubus
In pursue of knowledge I expect I'll have to make sacrifices. Also in regards to my personal life. While sex isn't it all, it should at least ease the burden a bit.

>The Soldier
Knowledge may give one power but it also provides one with enemies. And while with said knowledge I possibly will also know how to defend myself, it's not a sure thing. A loyal, disciplined, obedient and effective soldier such as this one would be a great bodyguard among competitiors, jealous, people willing to take advantage of me.

I also considered the Totem in the place of the Soldier but it's very passive defence, merely reactionary and could also force me to be safe only in particular dwellings, not in transit. Maybe I'll reconsider though.

>>53783035
I think you severely underestimate anon just to bash on him. While there are things that could use improvement, overall quality of the visuals is way above the average /cyoag/ presents.

>>53780744
>eye
can it teach things like art? either way, very good
>sheep
time is valuable and this gives me more of it
>totem
tie between this and the mole, but absolute safety beats teleportation

>>53782841
I have a feeling this is someone impersonating Pallas.

>>53783131
I just emphasize because font is that bad.
It's almost like comic sans.

He could've at lease used outline and a little less shadows but no.

>>53783191
>He

>>53783307
It's a she? Is she cute? Is there CYOA where I can waifu her full well knowing that the real person I wouldn't be able to create a stable, happy relationship with?

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>>53783374
>It's a she?
She says so
>Is she cute?
All we know is she's flatchested (and asian?)
>Is there CYOA where I can waifu her full well knowing that the real person I wouldn't be able to create a stable, happy relationship with?
Yes.

>>53783430
>>It's a she?
>She says so
He says so
ftfy

>>53783430
Where is my Tokhar /d/eviant waifu option?

>>53783493
Come on mang. Can't you let me believe there's a straight girl that writes some of these? I want to imagine she selfinserts herself as one of the waifus...

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>>53783493
Cats aren't people. CatGIRLS, on the other hand...

>>53783512
This is older than Tok, anon ...

>>53783551
>selfinserts
lewd

>>53783512
That thing is ancient. You'll have your Cuckhaar waifu when somebody makes a new author thing.

>>53783551
>I want to imagine she selfinserts herself as one of the waifus
Me too. Please notice me Pallas-senpai. I'd cuddle waifu-you as long as we can avoid disappointments inherent in actual real life relationships.

>>53783615
Okay getting into creep levels
>>53783599
Totally

reminder to not reply to SDA

>>53778054
Ringworld
Worn in and Comfy
>Facilities (30)
Aquarium T3 (30-0)
Garden T3 (30-0)
Fabricator T3 (30-6)
Medical Lab T3 (24-6)
Bathing T1 (18-1)
Cloning Tank T1 (17-1)
Crew Quarters ALL (16-6)
Training Complex T3 (10-6)
Augmented Reality T2 (4-3)
Expanded Cabim T1 (1-1)
>Special Features (10)
Phasal Transporter T1 (10-1)
AI Companion T2 (9-2)
Loving Companion T3 + 2xT1 (7-5)
Nanobot AR T1 (2-1)
Power Armor T1 (1-1)
>Wonders
Natural Wonders
Stunning Technology
Forgotten Mysteries

Pretty comfy and gud. The only change I would make, is that I would love to mix two Interiors, even if it costs points, to give the right feel to the ship that you want.

>>53783669
Why wouldn't I?

>>53783663
>Okay getting into creep levels
Sorry, slow day and for some reason I am sleepy despite sleeping quite much today. Can't muster much energy for anything beside passive entertainment and shitposting.

>>53783663
>Okay getting into creep levels
We're all okay with getting into creep levels.

>>53778054
>>53783681
On a secondary note, I'm assuming the Wonders you found when choosing the Ringworld, is the Ringworld itself. The reason it exists and the secrets hidden deep inside of it.

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>>53783009
>race choice is purely aesthetic
I'd personally rather not be forced to choose a specific ship I don't like just for some extra points.
>interior has no benefit/drawback system
It doesn't need one.
>some features potentially redundant
I wouldn't say that, more like there are different paths to the same outcome, I've noticed that some anons don't like the idea of Digital Immortality, so Genetic Immortality exists for them etc.
>Point System
I need to revamp it, if only to remove confusion and misunderstandings. The amount of points In my eyes are a good enough amount.

>>53783681
I had intended that when I first started making this cyoa but changed it in the end, sorry.

Would you guys say this is a better change?
(Ignore the number 5 bottom left)

>>53783773
yeah, that looks good
will there be a crew supplement?

>>53783819
He's said no. Says he's shit at writing characters.

>>53783819
No crew addons.
But I'm currently planning some sort of quest/complication choices to flesh out the universe you're in. Don't get your hopes up though I don't know if I'll finish it or start another cyoa.

>>53783773
If you bought Mind Upload 1+, I presume Cloning Tank and Medical Lab on all tiers are no longer useful and can be replaced by a tier 1 fabricator, unless you have a living crew. Is that correct?

>>53778054
>>53778065
Does the size mean anything? There should be size limitations depending on ship size. Some of the facilities are huge despite being low-tier and I don't see how they could fit, or at least how more than one of such could fit in.
I'd rather have less facility points by default, with some additional ones provided for big and medium ships. Small ships should have more special feature points instead.

>>53783930
....that's all in there. Can you not read?

>>53783956
I could but I couldn't see the bars on the choices. I retract my statement now though I request the construction bars be more visible - one has to up the contrast and brightness of a screen to see those.

>>53784031
No one doesn't you enormous ponce.

>>53783930
>There should be size limitations depending on ship size.
I thought of restricting the amount of facilities you could chose based on your ship size but it got complicated when making the points system fit with it. I didn't particularly like the amount of restriction in choices would it may caused.

>Some of the facilities are huge despite being low-tier
Only if you believe them to be. I made sure all tier 1 facilities wouldn't sound like they took up alot of room. Hazard lines show that you need a bigger ship.

>>53783925
That's correct, no use for Medical and Clones if you have a robot body. However you'd need Mind Upload T2 to split your digital consciousness to inhabit more than one robot body.

>>53784065
That's barely a sentence. If you want to call people names, at least make sure you don't come off as a ponce yourself.

>>53784169
You have no idea what a ponce is, do you?

>>53783773
>I had intended that when I first started making this cyoa but changed it in the end, sorry.
It's fine, just I want my Comfy with a bit of Woodgrain/Futuristic.

And that looks really good, much more clear and beautiful

>>53784181
Fancy way (beffiting a ponce) of saying "a faggot". To be used as a general insult. A dude who comes in just to throw shit around isn't less of a faggot than whoever he goes against.

>>53783773
I like this idea, although conceptually it's a little odd that multiple alien species costs one point but adding humans costs two more. It works, though.

If I don't buy the human crew option or the quarters option, is there some crappy default option I'm still going to wind up with?

>>53772097

Alright, let's do this.

Magical Guardian Elf-Bear Rapist

>Role
Bodyguard

I have been the stoic guardian of these elven lands for ages. I am the last line of defense against the constant threat of orc rape.

>Looks

Athletic

I maintain my impressive physique with a strict diet and lots of exercise

>Traits

Feisty
Tough
Mike Tyson

I take my duties seriously

Traitorous

But not that seriously

Nympho
Douche

It may or may not be that I take payment for my protection in the form of elf pussy. Willing or not.

>Extras
Dressed like a slut

Who needs clothes?

Elf ears
Family

Well, my family DOES have a storied history of raping elves that we protect.

Trap

I admit it, I'm on the small side. Small for a bear

Misunderstood
... Or not

This kind of subterfuge is beyond my comprehension. The elves decided they should be allowed in, and I took the orcs to be welcome guests. I was shamefully defeated.

Half-Beast
All-Beast

This bear isn't ready to give up.

Get mad!

How dare these Orcs rape the elf pussy that I have carefully cultivated all these years! How dare they turn their dicks on me! I am the one who rapes! Their cloak and dagger tactics may have left me defeated and shamed at first, but they'll soon learn of their folly.

Nether Seal

I even tried in vain to activate a secret defensive technique.

Final Score:

24/4

eventually upgrades to

24/16