/cyoag/ - CYOA General

i paid money where is hog

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>>53760974

>>53761105
>Horns of the Goat

Though I think goat eyes look badass

>>53761105
>Student of the goat
Time to go on an adventure to find the lost goat tower

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>>53760953
I'd honestly be giving myself maybe a little too much credit by saying I start at Willpower 5, but I wouldn't get to play at all otherwise as I don't want to go below 4 and all the other potions have drawbacks too steep for my taste. MAYBE I could get away with the Elixir of Knowledge, but I wouldn't want to chance it.

I will however take
>Binding Summon
And use it to summon a D&D style air elemental to my bodyguard and assistant. Make it an invisible stalker if I can just so it's even less conspicuous, but a normal air elemental is fine too.

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>>53760953
Willpower is 5
Potion of Youth
Potion of Impose Will
Potion of Binding Summon

Elixer of Peace

Draught of Punishment
Draught of Rest
Release Will

With this I am an undying shota with mind control powers and a perfect waifu. And the only thing I can not do is fight which my waifu is not bound by. Praise be to /ss/.

>>53760953
>4 will
>going below 4 fucks you
I guess I'll just lock the door behind me as I leave so nobody else gets to steal from the apothecary.

>>53761311
But the goat tower wouldn't have stairs; its levels would be connected by sheer near-vertical cliffs that only one with goat-hooves could climb

>>53760953
>Will 3
I am probably exagerating my will but whatever
>Draught of rest
I am fine with that (will 4)
>Youth
Obligatory inmortality (will 3)
>Elixir of form
Time to become the little girl
>Equalizer
Bye romantic apathy (will 1)
>Alembic (Insight sight knowledge)
It is worth the extra will and i don't care about their effects (will 4)
>Release will (Evil)
Fuck it i am stealing her potions already might as well find someone to steal some will (will 5)
>elixir of wealth
Neet life here i go
>Elixir of peace
And with this i am 100% deathproof
>Binding summon
I now have a waifu (will 4)
>Free access
I can finally not feel guilty for not buying winrar (will 3)
>Telekinesis
So useful i could not pass this up (will 2)

I think i got myself a pretty comfy build

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>>53761864
>Trainer
>Elementalism (Earth)
>Nature
Is that a rock or an elemental? Is that a tree or a treant? Oh and some of them will be traps instead of monsters. And some will actually just be rocks and trees! Enjoy checking every single one in every single room, heroes!
>Elf
While being shot at by hidden elves!
>Myconid
And be sure not to inhale too deeply while running from the monsters and dodging the arrows and climbing the trees!
Also helps heal my troops which is nice, and gets me more Myconid girls.
>I Have You Now My Pretty
CUTE Myconid girls!
>Monster Heritage
A fitting harem for the Myconid KING

>>53761960
Alembic only has enough reagents to distill ONE potion. You're dead, Fred.

>>53762085
Fuck it i don't feel like fixing the build i guess i will die then

So with all the Symbiote talk that's been going on for the past few threads, can someone post Symbiobros CYOA please? Carnage best girl, Venom deserves a hug though.

>>53762500
No. You can look in the archive and post it like a good boy. It exists for you.

>>53762500

Give me a minute to post it anon

>>53760953
That's odd. According to that willpower meter, I should be dead.

Have I been the skeleton all along?!

>>53762578
On the inside we are all skeletons

>>53762631
No, on the inside we are all inside skeletons.

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>>53762500

Finally found it, Here you go anon for having such great taste in choosing best girl

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>>53762695

Also Venom deserves no hugs NONE AT ALL

>>53762695
>Carnage

>Natural Weapons
>Resistant (Both)
>Tendrils
>Regeneration
>Strength
>Invisible

>Villain
>Scientist

>Menace
>Nemesis
>Hunted

>>53762695
>>53762776

Thanks anon.

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>>53762695
>Want to take Scream
>Not into gender bending

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>>53762941

No worries anon, You have great taste in best girl

>>53762913

Great taste as well anon

>>53762695
>Carnage

Always seemed like the best fit for me, I do love the ultra-violence

>Natural Weapons
>Enhanced Shapeshifting
>Resistant (Sonics)
>Tendrils
>Regeneration
>Strength

Yeah, it'll take a hell of a lot more than an army to put me down. Just because there are two or three after me won't change that.

>Vigilante

He shares my morality on dealing with evil, and it's always nice having a friend with enough explosive to take down a skyscraper on hand.

>Sidekick

She seems nice, and the world could always use more anti-heroes.

>Menace
>Nemesis
>Hunted

Yeah, this was pretty much inevitable considering I go around turning drug deals into blood baths and piling the heads at Kingpins doorstep. Oh well, I hate Shield with a passion, and Flash Thompson (Agent Venom) doesn't deserve a Symbiote. Well, I'll try to play nice with anyone who doesn't immediately try to kill me, even a super hero needs a friend without a public image on the line. Time to cut out some of the evil in the world, and have a damn good time doing it.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gevm2wPbC6Y&list=RDgevm2wPbC6Y

>>53762695
>Scream

>Regeneration
>Enhanced Shapeshifting
>Resistant (Fire)
>Invisible

>Bro
>Scientist

>Menace!
Joke's on him, I live in a small town where the most popular news source is a local newspaper!

>>53763308
Doesn't scream make you a girl? Isn't that weird?
And it means you need a new identity and shit. Sounds tiring. Where will you live? Where will you get money?

>>53762695
toxin
regeneration, shapeshifting, natural wepons, and imunity to sonic

bro and sidekick
and menace

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>>53762776
>Also Venom deserves no hugs NONE AT ALL
mean
>>53763289
>Flash Thompson (Agent Venom) doesn't deserve a Symbiote
Them's fightin words.
>>53763308
If the publisher is anything like JJJ, he'll find a way. Put up a giant billboard or something.

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>>53763938
>imunity to sonic
You'll sure show that hedgehog.

>>53763960
Menace isn't even a problem. Just kill him.

>>53763982
that hedge hog will be. Assimilated vial blunt force trauma to the body+ cutting down to be fried

[and you know damn well what I ment]

>>53762695
Scorn. Gun > Knife, even for Symbiotes.

>>53762776
Resistant. Kind of requisite when I might be integrating weaponry into myself.

Tendrils. Extremely useful and a lot of overlap with my Symbiote.

Stealth. Industrial espionage is a sneaking mission!

Hero. I'd like to be a good guy, and this is a good way to start a super-team. We could probably help each other out, too.

Scientist. Will help teach me a lot of shit I'll need to know for my technosymbiote.

Nemesis. What's a hero without a villain?

Spawning. Give the extra symbiote to my IRL wife. Basic hero team is now go.

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Postan my WIP again so more can see it, with some answers

>Is it possible to take conflicting Personality Traits?
Yes! You can do this if you want to, and explain it as two different sides of yourself in different situations. Such as, a Brash CEO who doesn't hold back on his employees who's a big Gentle softy with his family and pets at home. There's no real downsides to taking two conflicting personality traits, aside from maybe making it trickier to land a Partner

>Age requirements for hobbies
The bonuses for the hobbies is what made me want to restrict the ages. Such as, Carpentry is objectively better than Gaming as a hobby because it means you can get more magic.

>Font size
There isn't much I can do about this except for release it as a .pdf as well, which will be massive and probably won't fit on 4chan most likely. Either way, that'll surely fix any font problems

Ask any more questions you have

>>53762695
>Hybrid
The multitasking seems real neat and with my powers will have some good synergy, just hope the voices don't drive me a little crazy.

>Resistant (Sonic)
>Tendrils
>Regeneration
>Strength
>Invisible
>Mind Control
With this I am a juggernaught that can also pull off some more indirect actions. The multitasking ability of Hybrid will greatly help with the tendrils and mind control aspects.

>Sidekick
Every villain needs a nice person to balance them off.
>Henchman
His contacts will be real useful in dealing with some of my enemies, in particular the government. Can also help him out on occasion if he or his boss wants some help to build up my villain resume.

>Menace
An annoyance but since I am becoming a villain not a particularly major one. Might tentacle rape his wife for laughs however and leave a "Hybrid came here ↓" message on her stomach like a womb tatoo.
>Nemesis
Will add some spice to my life as a villain and if they are attractive will be very nice.
>Hunted
They will make my life hell once they find out about me and force me to defend myself and become branded as a villain which I choose to live up to out of spite.

Overall I will become an exceptional tentacle monster with mind control powers. I will not go full slaughter though as I see that as distasteful and will keep a a bottom line on actions I am willing to perform.

>>53763308
Lucky. Mine is the goddamn Washington Post.

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>>53762695
Symbiote: Venom

>Abilities:
Strength
Resistant: Both
Regeneration
Natural Weapons
Invisibility
>Companions:
Henchman, Reporter
>Drawbacks:
Menace!, Hunted

Don't worry, Venom, I'll treat you right.

>>53763802
Why so many questions?

>>53764178
It feels weird, like you get a twin for no reason.

>>53764178
Is there any advantage to being younger it's intended to balance out? If so, maybe let older brackets have extra hobbies instead. They've had more time to develop more skills, while a 12 year old has only devoted their time to one or two things if they want to be even slightly competent at it.

>>53764178
>Ask any more questions you have
Will there be a "get a pet Pallas cat" option?
Will there be a "get a Pallas-girl waifu" option?
Can I please pick Cosplay as a hobby even if I pick to be 15?
Can I ignore the "puberty is easy-breezy" part of the be 15 option?
Will there be a way to have my twin be more outgoing and social than me and she "forces" me to go to parties etc. with her?

>>53764303
Or a waifu, or superpowers, or a pocket dimension, or

>>53764178
Is there an option to be immortal ? If not would not most people just choose younger because they live longer. I mean you grow up either way so taking twelve years old seems like the only logical thing to do.

>>53762695
> Scorn
> Hunted, Nemesis, Menace!
> Natural Weapons
> Resistant (both)
> Regeneration
> Enhanced Shapeshifting
> Strength
> Mind Control
> Hero - Darkhawk, stole his Amulet/Shi'ar tech
> Vigilante - Punisher

Steal Darkhawk's amulet and other Shi'ar tech, eventually hijacking the null spaceship. Integrating the suit into the body as cybernetics, using the symbiote where it is stronger. Eventually creating intelligence boosting tech via the AI of the Shi'ar, plus using those to create techno-organic mind-control surrogates.

Goal is to purge the villians from the planet, while seeking immortality.

>>53764178
Are you only allowed one body type?

>>53763960
>Them's fightin words.

Hey, say what you will about the war hero who lost his legs, a guy like that would deserve that kind of power. But Flash will always be that blonde Chad jock who bullied Peter Parker because he was an asshole and jealous of his intelligence. A guy like that should never be rewarded with the kind of power a symbiote give you. Not to mention the fact that they lobotomized and drugged the Venom symbiote always freaks me out.

>>53764277
Might as well answer them, anyways.
1) I don't mind, and the others don't appeal to me -- with the exception of Scorn, but I doubt our personalities would mix well.
2) Enhanced Shapeshifting means that I could resemble anybody I want to -- one could look exactly the same while still technically being female in the genitals.
3) See above. Continue living where I am, if I can't find a better place.
4) I could probably find a better line of work with the abilities that the symbiote grants, and if not, I still have a job.

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>>53764362
>immortality-posters

>>53764439
>people don't grow up
Manchild detected.

>>53764439

That sounds like a perfect fate for venom, And do you even know how much of a jerk peter was to other people man?

>>53763960
>mean

Truth

>>53764004
>Menace isn't even a problem. Just kill him.
But then you'll just be proving his point, and making yourself an even bigger target by bigger news publishers.
>>53764172
I hope your wife is completely fine with having her body merged with an alien. It's gonna be quite the surprise present.
>>53764233
Well, have fun being a tentacle monster I guess.

>>53764178
While I do really like the look of this, have to agree with other responses that the twin element seems like a tacked-on afterthought.

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>>53764439
>But Flash will always be that blonde Chad jock who bullied Peter Park
Confirmed for never reading about Flash past his high school years.

He became one of Peter's best friends

>>53764541
>killing a lying scumbag
>proving his point
Justice is what it is.

>>53764594
this. and incest is even one of my fetishes.

>>53764629
I agree with this idea, do it and let the haters hate, there is not much they can do

>>53764178
Choosing traits
>Quiet - "I don't see why you'd want it though"
I hate when authors do this.
Yeah I get it already, you hate shy girls and probably hate small breasts too, I really don't need to hear this when I'm the one making the choices.

>>53764466
Just because you're on the verge of killing yourself, doesn't mean everybody else is.

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>>53764671

>>53764610
>back when Felicia was good

WHY GOD

>>53764671
P-post tits
please respond

>>53764671
That's because 3/4 of the authors are obsessed with their own niche fetishes and interests to the point that even "autism" fails to encapsulate the phenomen. I'd even bet several of them are incapable of not responding to posts that in any way denigrate said interests. And by "denigrate", I mean "express any opinion contrary to what they think"

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Anyone got any ideas for what would be especially desirable in a small cozy spaceship cabin? It's the one thing I'm stuck on. After I can fill it out I'll post the first version of the cyoa.

>>53764745
tsundere ship holo AI

>>53764335
Pallas cats are not good as pets, they have a very fragile immune system. As adorable as they are, owning one would be a bad idea because you'd put it into a lot of danger and it would suffer an early death. And that would be very, very sad.

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>>53764674
>if you don't want to force a needless option that destroys all balance and makes no sense in the CYOA t-then you must be suicidal b-baka!

>>53764766
Already got A.I. are you saying a dedicated holographic platform in the cabin?

>>53764771
It's a WIP, balance isn't even a thing at this point. And it's a needless option in pretty much every CYOA.

>>53764745
An unusually comfortable bed and a closet full of blankets.

>>53764311
That's actually a better idea. Thanks!

>>53764303
>>53764594
I'll retype the beginning blurb later then. Either way, >>53764347 is right because everything is arbitrary.

>>53764335
Yes I will add pets and a Manul too
Maybe, but I don't like self-inserts all that much...
Yes I'll do what >>53764311 said
Yes I'll add a clause to make it optional
Yes, this will be further explored in the Twin Relationship section

>>53764745
Self-warming blankets, a really comfy chair, and a garbage can you don't have to empty.

>>53764785
sure why not. make it so you can bang her

>>53764745
coffee maker

>>53762695
>Toxin
>Natural Weapons
>Regeneration
>Strength
>Invisible
>Bro
>#1 Fan
>Menace

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>>53764335

>>53764745

A really nice entertainment system, Books, A cozy bed that's big enough for 2 etc

>>53764785

Yes please

>>53764335
>Can I ignore the "puberty is easy-breezy" part of the be 15 option
Why

>>53760953
I recently graduated to 4 will, just another to go before a steady job and escape from NEETdom.

Release Will

Draught of Punishment
Draught of Focus (potion making)

I've already developed from 2 will to 4 with help so I should be able to do so again (regular exercise improves many things). Eventually I can release the will of people near death in exchange for money to loved ones and develop a flawless youth potion.

>>53764768
>>53764178
Will there be a "get a magical pet Pallas cat that has a normal cat's immune system and won't die until I'm older" option?
>>53764807
Pallas pls.
>>53764847
I like this very much but you posted this last time too.
>>53764877
Science. cyoas are the only way I can compare puberty between sexes.
Also it feels like cheating sort of. I mean I'm all for getting easy periods and no growing pains but if I can have a short time where things are "normal", that would be grand.

>>53764541
>I hope your wife is completely fine with having her body merged with an alien. It's gonna be quite the surprise present.
Believe it or not, it's one of those situations we've discussed. Long story short, as long as it gives her superpowers and will only share her brain rather than taking over, she's cool with it.

>>53765024
Being normal is overrated.

>>53765024
I'm just posting it every time someone mentions Pallas cats.

>>53765059
Pallas cats

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>>53765059
>>53765024
How Pallas Cat are we talking? Like, a Manul catgirl?

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>>53765163

>>53765185
Can I waifu Manaba?

>>53765043
Science, anon. Like I said I would like to not have period pains and bloating and mood swings, but I need to experience it at least a few times, for science.
>>53765112
I don't know what a Manul is. Less cat than >>53764847, mostly because the spots on her hair is weird (and you can see the human ears).

>>53765234
>for science
This is why test subjects exist.

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>>53765185
Okay, hopefully there are no things I missed.
Please tell me if you see any problems, things that could be improved or changed. And if the points given are too many or too few.

I'll make sure not to post it backwards like I did with my last cyoa.
(I almost posted without noticing the file size for the second was too big)

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>>53765296

>>53765234
Manul is another name for the Pallas Cat.

>>53765296
>Yauht
Did you mean "yacht"?

>>53765322
>Yauht
Damn.

>>53762695
>Anti-Venom

>Enhanced Shapeshifting
>Tendrils
>Invisible

>Hero
>Vigilante
>Reporter
>Scientist
>#1 Fan

>Menace
>Nemesis
>Strong Willed Other
>Hunted

We have no secret identity, one moment we are a dog eating trash and the next we are a visitor wandering a dementia ward. The symbiote wants to help and so do I, even though the miraculous recoveries draw the attention of those who chase us. But we have friends, meeting them under different faces we fight back against the media, the military and other monsters. When people see us for what we are they will welcome us with open arms.

>>53765296
This reminds me of the CYOA where the ship AI abducted you and is in love with you

>>53765347
I do not understand why you would seek to help others, despite many wanting you dead. this may be my cynicism speaking but why would you do it with no possible reward in sight?

>>53764178
The art style is dumb.

>>53765341
Honestly, it could do with a proper read-through, for checking typos and missing punctuation and such.

>>53765400
Anti-Venom would be corrupting him to do the right thing.

>>53765426
I like it.

>>53765296
>Ship
Alien, Medium: The Abductor

>Interior
Classy

>Facilities (20)
Bathing Facilities III (17)
Aquarium II (15)
Plant Garden II (13)
Expanded Cabin II (11)
Library II (9)
Leisure I (8)
Medical Facility III (5)
Fabricator III (2)
Cloning Tank II (0)

>Special Features
AI Companion III (12)
Nanobot AR III (9)
Synthetic Android III (6)
Holo-Map (5)
EVA Suit (4)
Power Armor (3)
Wide Windows (2)
Phasal Transporter (0)

>Wonders
Ruined Civilizations
Forgotten Mysteries
Alien Creatures

Explore the galaxy, studying biology and anthropology. My crew will consist of basic AI in multi-functional robotic bodies, with one main AI in the android body. This will keep us safe from whatever we find. The cloning bay exists as insurance in case my fleshy, genetically engineered body has something happen to it. And then I guess I hope to God my AI doesn't go rampant or some shit.

Love it, but one criticism. You like the word "facility" a bit too much. Additionally is spelled incorrectly on the Alien Scout.

>>53764671
One of my narrators is a bit judgemental, to the point they actively recommend against certain choices. Choices I myself as the author really like, though obviously I'm trying to not give preference to anything game balance-wise. It's meant to make that narrator contrast personality-wise with another character, who was generally very supportive and enthusiastic. Is that a bad idea? I don't want to make it seem like the CYOA itself is being judgemental.

>>53765571
>Is that a bad idea?
No.
Narrator with personality > Narrator

>>53765453
I gave it a once over before posing but I've likely glossed over a few typos and punctuation errors I'm not a very good writer. I'll give it another look in v2
>>53765570
Facility, I'll make sure to change it up abit more, like I said ^ awful writer I'm afraid, I used an online thesaurus to atleast make it seem like I'm a person.
>>53765571
I just personally like it when all the options are non-biased, I don't know how everyone else feels about those kinds of narrators. I'm not particularly interested in the whole narrator thing itself in waifu creators, I'd rather just play the cyoa and pick my choices.

>>53765296
Nanorobot A.R. is just too good, it makes a lot of the other choices redundant. I'd recommend at least removing smell and taste replication.

>>53765623
what if it's a constantly stuttering anime loli

>>53765296
Alien Scout Ship. I don't really intend to carry a lot of cargo, and a large ship seems more trouble than it's worth.

Plant Garden T1 (19): Requisite for some fresh air.
Fabricator T2 (16): For food.
Expanded Cabin T1 (15): For comfort.
Medical Facility T3 (9): Because flesh is weak.
Bath Facility T1 (8): Nobody wants to be dirty all the time.
Library T1 (7): Because I can't afford T2.
Leisure Facilities T2 (4): So we won't get bored.
Crew Quarters T2 (1): I don't want to be lonely, and I've always wanted to meet aliens.
Firing Range T1 (0): Because you never know.

>>53765315
Nanorobot AR T1 (14): Extremely useful.
Phasal Transporter T3 (5): Because sometimes you can't land but you still want to go take a look.
Loving Pet T1 (4): Kitty. Because kitty.
Wide Bridge Windows (3): Why go to Space if you can't see the views?
Upgraded EVA suit (2): For exploring space.
Power Armor (1): For exploring everything that isn't space.
Holographic Map (0): We need some way to find our way around, and 2D just doesn't work.

Natural Wonders. I love going to see astonishing natural scenery on our world - imagine being able to see alien ones as well.
Alien Creatures. Who wants to visit a dead world? Much better to see one teeming with exotic lifeforms.
Ruined Civilizations. The only thing more amazing than a breathtaking landscape is an ancient structure built into it.

Honestly, though, I wish I had more choices for that last category. I'd sacrifice many of my other options to add in more Wonders.

>>53765696
Try "Bathroom Anemities" or "Medical Lab". "Recreational Activities" might be decent too.

>>53765296
>Battleship
>Utilitarian
>T3 Fabricator, Cloning Tank and Medical Facility
T1 Expanded Cabin & Firing Range

>T1 Nanorobot A.R.
>T3 A.I. Companion
>T2 Phasal Transporter
>All Lesser Features
>Stunning Technology
>Prime Cynosure A.I.
>Dimensional Entity

>>53765296

More Adventures or a way to get more points I wonder if this is compatible with SSEN

>>53765296
This looks nice. Do facilities like Tier 3 Firing Range or Tier 3 Plant Garden require a large ship?

>>53765789
Medium-Large, options marked by the yellow/black indicator

>>53765729
terrible
make it carl instead

>>53765770
Only idea I have for more points is ship DLC, coming soon. I'll think some more on it. More wonders and adventues is doable but writing all that is really taxing for me.

>>53765296
Alien Small "which aditionaly can faze" additionally, faze? Did you mean fade?
Alien Medium "very clean and serile interior", sterile

>>53765893
Faze is a word that still works isn't it? Like fazing in and out of existence?

>>53765951
Phase. Not faze.

>>53765296
Assuming no cloning technology or AI upload, how long can a T1, 2, and 3 Medical Facility extend your lifespan?

>>53765296
Crew addon when?

>>53765990
If there is a mechanical version of immortality, I don't see why there wouldn't be a biological version of it. It's not like there aren't biologically immortal things right now.

>>53765988
http://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/faze

>>53766045
Never seen the word used myself, but phase would work better in this case.

>>53765990
Genetic Engineering, I assume could extend your life span indefinitely assuming you don't die along the way.

>>53765992
You'll have to get someone else to write crew. I'd really love to but I can't write people even less than I can do detailed descriptions.

>>53766024
Awesome. Mechanical copies and clone copies always feels like a lie to me, like an epitaph we convince ourselves is us.

>>53765992
>>53766071
Pick one
>Shy biologist with big tits
>Tsundere chef who will never cook for you, b-baka
>Lusty pilot ho demands sex while piloting the ship
>Tender loving nanobot swarm
>Android imouto

>>53766073
Seems to me like tier 3 Med. Facility is basically the biological equivalent of tier 1 Mind Upload.

>>53765296
Wait, does it cost 1+2+3 points or just 3 points to get the highest tier of something?

>>53765296
>Abductor (Alien Medium)
>Wood Panneling

>Plant Garden 3 (6)
>Aquarium 3 (12)
>Fabricator 3 (18)
>Medical Facility 1 (19)
>AR Room 1 (20)

>Synthetic Android 3 (6)
>Loving Pet 1 (7)
>Mind Upload 3 (13)
>Upgraded EVA Suit (14)
>Powered Armor (15)

>Stunning Technology
>Prime Cynosure AI
>Dimensional Entity

The Cynosure's gift tells me that I need a central hub to gain any insight into the cosmos worth having, but they just as often mock the robots' attempts at brute force transcendence. Instead I strive to experience ecosystems in their entirety, for with a thousand sensors and but one body. My attempts to replicate the android chassis with fabricator and medical facility have failed so far but rumours of technological wonders that blur the line between organic and synthetic give me hope.

>>53765296
Can Medical Facility T3 make changes similar to Cloning Tank T2/T3?
>>53765315
Do the costs work the same for Features as they did for Facilities (tiers cost 1, 2, and 3 points respectively, require previous tiers to purchase, making the total cost for each tier 1, 3, and 6 points respectively)?
Can I take Mind Upload without needing to discard my flesh (i.e. have some sort of hive-mind-esque setup between my original body and whatever other bodies I might choose to have - possibly including bodies from the Cloning Tank, or even the Synthetic Android)?

>>53766190
>tiers begin at 1 point, each subsequent tier costs 1 point more than the last

It's 1+2+3. >>53765570 here is heavily "overpointed", for example.

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Was waiting for a new thread to respond to some posts I saw because we were already over bump limit by the time saw 'em.
Then I got caught up writing up Horsey for Chinese waifu cyoa and didn't notice there was a new thread.
Sorry for being late.
>>53757731
>does it always even have to be a prince who inherits the throne?
...
Goddamit, now I need to make a Zodiac Daughters CYOA...
>Sebastian has a really high opinion of her and apparently visits her pretty often. Is he...
Sebastian and Catherine sound like they'd be an adorable couple!
Unfortunately... Sebastian's a homunculus and can't reproduce, so it'd take a pretty complicated invention from Oriadne and Scarlatina for him to be able to make Catherine's dream of being a mother come true.
I love hearing about people's plans to hook up Sebastian or their friends with the brides they didn't pick.
>can I still visit my family for birthdays and holidays, and would my wife be okay coming with me?
Absolutely!
You're welcome to visit Earth as often as you like and bring whoever you want from Earth along! I'm sure your wife would be ecstatic to meet your family.
One of my favorite posts I saw was the anon who talked about taking all twelve of them to his high school reunion and showing them off.
>>53759096
>any particular ideas about Luci's interests
Most of the Brides who I didn't explicity list hobbies or stuff for were usually because I couldn't really come up with any to do them justice.
That being said, Lucianna has a thing for the theater and the dramatic, so she'd smother you with hugs and kisses if you took her to go see something on Broadway or shared your favorite movies with her.
Even out of the context of her kink, she loves to play dressup and would probably really enjoy joining any tabletop games you're a part of, so long as they have a lot RP.
If you told her about Halloween, she'd practically beg you to take her out Trick-or-Treating every year.

>>53765163
Class
>Ranger
Skills
>Stealthy
>Medic
Perks
>Lucky
>Wasteland Healer
>Assasin
>Natural Leader
Vehicle
>Interceptor: 1,750 Dollars
Weapons
>Big Iron: Free
>10mm pistol: 250 Dollars
>Crossbow: 200 dollars
>Throwing Knives: 200 dollars
>Silencer: 100 dollars
Extended Mag: 100 Dollars
Money left: 2400 dollars
>Companion: Demetrius
Money left: 900 dollars

Now before I start the missions, I'll wander among the factions, being GUN JESUS with my supernatural healing ability and my ability to kill people undetected. And if shit hits the fan, ask my not-dad Demetrius to lend in heavy firepower to distract enemies while I slit their throats.
After I, GUN JESUS, am done exploring and looking for a waifu, I'll go for
>old world blues
I'll keep the tech for myself, and build up an army from the people I've helped by being GUN JESUS. Hell, I'll make it a Followers of the Apocalypse/Brotherhood of Steel combo, where I'll give medical aid and obsolete tech to my allies.
Then I'll move on to the big one
>Salvation-legion war
I'll pit each other against the other, and when one wins I'll come right up and annex them, and their spoils of war. I'll train the young child slaves in the legion to be my new breed of soldiers, while displacing the government in the Salvation City and establishing my own. From there, I'll recruit Xander, Varsuvias, Dr. Kavorkian, and Dr. Hassgard as my personal advisors through my vast wealth that I've gained. I'll establish a scientific government, as fedora-tippy that sounds, and bring peace to the region. I'll probably extend an olive branch to the Sanctuary by helping them take down bad mutants who would tarnish their peaceful reputations and give said bad mutants to Kavorkian, maybe he can learn something that might help us in the long run.
Then I'll waifu Kayla or Willow.

>>53765163
>>53765185
Love your CYOA, by the way. Only feel like the Wanderer gets the shaft but hey I guess it's the Hard Mode.

>>53766238
>Even out of the context of her kink, she loves to play dressup and would probably really enjoy joining any tabletop games you're a part of, so long as they have a lot RP.
why would you ever bring your wife to a tabletop?

>>53765296
>tfw anon includes one of your suggestions for their CYOA, but you can't justify choosing it in your own build because there are so many other better choices.

>>53766305
Why not?

>>53766317
>Choosing what is better instead of what you want

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>>53766166
>NBR imouto

>>53765296
>Ship
Human-Space Yacht

>Interior
Classy

>Facilities (20)
Augmented Reality Tier 3 (14)
Library Tier (9)
Fabricator (3)
Crew Quarters (2)
Medical Facility (1)
Expanded Cabin (0)

>Features
Mind Upload (6)
AI Companion (12)
Synthetic Android (15)

>Wonders
Forgotten Mysteries
Alien Creatures
Planetary Events

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Jesus you guys ask me a lot of stuff while I'm sleeping.
>>53759994
>I wish for the premise of Zodiac Brides to be real.
Me too, buddy. Me too.
>>53761433
>R8 my plan.
Little late, but you got it!
>earby national or state park
Welp, Vignette's gonna be fucking powered up.
Good thing one of your first steps is convincing to side with you.
>the Council of Queens
Ooooh! I like it.
>competition held every three years to officiate the process of changing the "High Queen"
...That's... That's a really fucking good idea. I applaud your creativity for coming up with such a unique way to keep your harem happy.
>That spoiler
My friend, you can have the biggest bed in all the land.
All you have to do is say the word to Sebastian and he'll come back with a bed the size of the average backyard.

All in all, I'll give this a 9/10. Only thing keeping it from being perfect is the fact that you kind of gloss over how you're going to convince everyone to join your harem and what you're going to do about Oriadne. Besides that, your approach is really inventive and unique and I'd love to see how it would play out.

Anyway, back to the fucking exhausting waifu writing process.

>>53766166
Android imouto is the only true option

>>53766474
you mean nanobot swarm

>>53766514
There was a tender loving nanobot swarm? Holy shit forget what i said im fucking blind

>>53765296
A) It doesn't feel like there is really enough to differentiate the different ship chassis types. A small ship is more likely due to restrictions to have more (if lower tier) facilities, but you would think something like a yacht would be more likely to have numerous facilities than a scout ship, particularly since so many facilities are recreational.
B) Many of the Tier 3 facilities just flat out aren't as useful as others. A tier 3 aquarium seems odd set right next to the tier 3 fabricator. For that matter, it feels like tier 3 is a little too expensive in general in most cases for the facilities. Maybe 1-3-5 instead of 1-3-6?
C) Do Features work the same way as Facilities in terms of exponential cost increases? I presume so since the points would be pretty absurd otherwise, but it's not explicitly stated.
D) Loving Pet seems like it gives you a LOT less than every other major feature listed. Maybe move it to lesser features, with the option of spending one extra point to make an alien/robot pet?
E) Point totals don't seem too terrible, sitting around 27% of options selectable on facilities (33% on my suggested cost reduction to 5 for tier 3s), and a whopping 37% on features (assuming exponential costs, an absurd 68% if not...if the other suggested changes were implemented, I would definitely reduce the points here to 12 or 13). For reference, I generally aim for around 30-35% when writing CYOAs without options for extra point gains.
F) More comment than critique, I really like the effort you put into the wonders section.

>>53765296
Augmented Reality Room tier 1, "all equiptment provided.", equipment
Crew Quarters tier 3, "The crew quaters serves", quarters, maybe should be 'serve'
Firing Range tier 3, "enemy A.I. positions to challange you.", challenge.

Also, I feel like there's a lot of overlap between high tier AR Room and Firing Range, so they are kinda overpriced if you want both.

>>53766238
Ah right, forgot about Sebastian being a homunculus. I guess I'll scrap that plan for now, but if Catherine doesn't win and the two of them grow closer I'm totally gonna be pulling favors to get a solution alchemy'd up.

Also I can't feel sorry at all for inspiring a Zodiac Daughters CYOA, it would be too fun to play. Just take it easy though. Don't get too swallowed up by feeling like you have to make a ton of stuff or whatever. I have a few dozen story and CYOA ideas I'm fairly certain I'll never deliver on myself...

Looking forward to that Chinese Zodiac cyoa though, and the Guardian one, and anything for the Zodiac kingdom. I'm pretty much tapped out of any questions I can think of for Zodiac Brides now. I just wish I could get my daydream to decide who would ultimately win the fight so I could start trying to imagine everything else. Ah well. I hope you enjoyed the rest of my thoughts on the remaining brides. I'm gonna try and get something progressed writing wise today before Nintendo's E3 tomorrow.

>>53765315
Good CYOA. It could be even better with complications (to award points), companions (if you choose crew), and quests (for that extra flavor).

Too bad there's a fuckton of typos. I could post all I've found, if the author doesn't mind.

>Ship Type
Drone Carrier (Medium): Great for building bases on particularly interesting places. I could even make a business out of it.

>Interior
Classy: Just the right balance between futuristic and familiar

>Facilities (20pts)
-3 Fabricator 2: Guaranteed food for anyone
-1 Expanded Cabin 1: For comfort.
-3 Medical Facility 2: For keeping everything together.
-3 Bathing Facilities 2: Mostly because "small hot tub" sounded too cramped for me. Also nanomassage.
-1 AR Room 1: Point dump, really. Zero-lag comms should be useful, though.
-3 Library 2: It's good to keep up with home culture.
-3 Leisure Facilities 2: A place for crewmembers to chill and enjoy themselves.
-3 Crew Quarters 2: Let's get to know some new people!

>Special Ship Features (15pts)
-1 Nanorobot AR: Too useful to pass up.
-3 AI Companion 2: Gotta love that extra company and telepathic comms.
-6 Synthetic Android 3: I'll let you guess why.
-1 Loving Pet 1: SHAMELESS POINT DUMP. I do like cats, though. Hopefully the medbay can treat my allergies.
-1 Wide Bridge Windows: Self-explanatory.
-1 Upgraded EVA Suit: Why explore space if you can't do it up close?
-1 Powered Armor: Just in case there's a need for defense.
-1 Holographic Map: Navigating 3D space in 2D maps seems like hell.

>Wonders
1- Stellar Phenomenon: To witness the grandest displays of raw energy in the Universe must be amazing.
2- Natural Wonders: Great places to build resorts, if possible.
3- Alien Creatures: Do I hear interstellar safari?

>>53766236
Oh shit, I did fuck that up royally. Damn, here I was thinking the author was giving us an awfully nice ship

>>53766305
Girlfriends are always a terrible addition to a roleplay group, wives seem to be about 50/50.

I think I need to reclarify how the points system works
Am I not explaining it right, am I using the wrong wording?
For those confused.
Tiers go up as 1-2-3 points
A total of 6 points for all upgrades of a facility, same with features.

>>53766553
I wanted to put restrictions on the amount of facilities you could choose in relation to ship size, but I didn't want to limit the amenities you could choose.
I'll may try and change up some of the choices.

>>53766675
Sure, I'd appreciate it.

>>53766675
>>Too bad there's a fuckton of typos. I could post all I've found, if the author doesn't mind.
Easier to put it into a pastebin fyi

>>53765296
>>53765315
I've got one idea for differentiating ships. You could allow for Large ships to have more points than Medium which gets more than Small, but Small gets more wonders than Medium which gets more than Large. Is your ship a home that lets you travel in style, or is it more of a vehicle that lets you go to all the places you want to see?

>>53765296
>Central Hub
Gotta do math.
>Worn In and Comfy
Science is easier when you're comfy.

>T1 Plant Garden
Need to store plants for doing science later.
>T3 Fabricator
Super useful.
>T3 Medical Facility
More science.
>T3 Library
Books will facilitate extra science. Also they're fun.
>T1 Leisure Facilities
If anything organic ends up on board, it must be provided with alcohol.

>T2 Nanorobot AR
>T3 AI Companion
They can help with doing science.
>T3 Mind Upload
Passing up an intelligence increase like this would just be silly.

>Stunning Technology
>Prime Cynosure A.I.
>Dimensional Entity

There is much science to be done.

>>53766723
>>53766740
On it.

>>53766723
Requesting answers for the following:
>>53766223
>Can Medical Facility T3 make changes similar to Cloning Tank T2/T3?
>Can I take Mind Upload without needing to discard my flesh (i.e. have some sort of hive-mind-esque setup between my original body and whatever other bodies I might choose to have - possibly including bodies from the Cloning Tank, or even the Synthetic Android)?

>>53758629
I just wanted to comment on your build as I was out of commission last night for a while. I do like alliterations though I'm not stuck on using them all the time and figured they kind of fit the setting, being a bit wonderlandesque.

Skeleton Orangutan crew...That's brilliant! Easy rig climbing and hard to hurt. The lighting on the weapon was good to for non lethal stunning for when you want them alive. Flying barrel was a nice touch too, though you could have just as easily gone with sail cloth. Good choice of girls too.

Thanks for posting a build!

>>53766903
>I do like alliterations
nooOOOO
you ADORE ALLITERATIONS
GOoddd

>>53765296
>Ship
Drone Carrier

>Interior
Classy

>Facilities
T3 Fabricator (14)
T3 Medical Facility (8)
T2 A.R. Room (5)
T2 Library (2)
T1 Cabin (1)
T1 Bath (0)

>Features
T3 A.I. Companion (9)
T2 Android (6)
T2 Teleporter (3)
T1 Windows, Nanobots, Holo map (0)

>Wonders
Planetary Events
Alien Creatures
Natural Wonders

Going to use the fabricator, teleporter and ship drones to gradually expand my ship and eventually add all the facilities I want, with the Library to provide reference books and the AI for actually understanding them.

Between expanding the ship and seeing various wonders, I'm going to spend the rest of the space-travel time playing zero-g Laser Quest with my AI bots. And any other fun zero-g group activities I can come up with.

>>53765315
Is Phasal a word?
Phasal Transporter tier 1, "one room to another instantaniously.", instantaneously
I'm not entirely sure what tier 2 does.
Can you teleport back from tier 3 probe?

Can't have A.I. control a pet body?

Loving Pet tier 3, "mind with slightly hightened intelligence", heightened.
I'm not really sure why robot cat costs so much and why it's specified to be long lived?

I question the use of Megalific a bit but that might be just me.
"The ammount of energy and resources", amount.

Ruined Civilizations, "Promising civiisations, lost to war", civilizations.

Forgotten Mysteries, "To ponder about the lost work and knowledge of a race which once belong is painfull". First, "painfull", second that sentence is kinda awkward

Dimensional Entity, "the sight of these entities is unparralelled", unparalleled

>>53766465
Reading a lot of your responses has made me really rethink my original plan, especially seeing Cassandra so low on the polygamy-acceptance ranking. I had kinda thought/hoped that her response would be more along the lines of, "Oh, yeah! That's a thing kings do sometimes, I understand. But I still want an important useful position both in governance and among your wives!" but you know, better written and more in character. Discovering that I (unsurprisingly) read her wrong throws my idea into turmoil.

My next choice of a betrothed would be Suri, since I was originally making my choice for practical reasons and not having to somehow track her down and having her help track down the other brides would be very helpful. Plus she's far and away my favorite from a lewd perspective and I imagine she's the one with the most experience with Earth and Earth culture. But my choice is going to be Lucianna. I kept trying to figure out how to explain to my betrothed, "I want your help in creating this harem but I don't think Lucianna's going to be easy to convince and if I can only have one wife I would choose her." and that's an absolute fucking heel thing to say But it's not as bad at all if I'm saying it to her. I chose her, I want her, and then I let her know that there are some other things I want and it's absolutely not her fault if she feels bad about that. Beauty and some persuasive speaking Skill will help me make my case but ultimately it'll be her choice. I also just really want to see her fighting for me.

>>53762695
Gonna make this interesting and roll for a random symbiote

>Scream
...Not sure how I feel about this

>Regeneration
Good if fighting supers
>Enhanced Shapeshifting
Can think of many uses for
>Natural Weapons
Punch punch, stab stab!
>Resistant
Both improved
>Invisible
Sneaky sneaky

>Sidekick
Be nice to have a little backup
>Reporter
Good for intel and helping me with my reputation

>Menace!
Who pissed in his wheaties?
>Nemesis
Every super needs a nemesis

Needless to say, I freaked out when found myself incased in an alien suit and even more when I started hearing a voice in my head. I started to calm down when it explained the situation and that I wasn't going to get eaten. When I realized that that it wasn't just the suit that looked feminine but that my own body had been changed the whole freakout process started over.

I ran away to the city, leaving messages about how I got a job opportunity far away, to avoid the drama with friends and family. A couple weeks after settling into a 9 to 5, cheap apartment life I came across a mugging. Before I knew it I was hunting down criminals to get the thrill I experienced beating thugs to pulp.

The whole alien symbiote thing isn't ideal but overall its not too bad.

>>53760355
>Learn to reading comprehension, and just take Kaleidoscope.
You can stack charges to go beyond that 4-5 and you get 5 charges a day, easily putting you on the level of Kaleidoscope in 1 day.

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>>53766701

>>53766968
>Is Phasal a word?
It's pretty much just the adjective form of "Phase", right? It might not have existed before now but there's no reason why it shouldn't.

>>53766860
Sorry there's soo many posts I'm trying to respond to.
Yes genetic engineering I assume can change existing organic matter in those ways, I was personally thinking more along the lines of, denser muscles, regeneration capability, improved memory.

If you wish to, I guess the process of uploading minds can be done in any way you think it works. Transferring of consciousness, or copying organic brain processes into a digital for, leaving the original body intact and with it's consciousness.
>>53766968
The word Phasal Transporter Is taken from the same one in CIV Beyond Earth.
Basically lets you and objectswith you teleport inside and outside of your ship.
Yes.

For a robotic pet it has it's own A.I. but if you wish you could swap it out for a crew or companion A.I.

I forgotten a left over from what I had it planned to be before I'll change it.

Thanks for typo reporting, I really fucked that shit up specifically huh.

>>53767047
How many times do you have to add 5 to 5 to get infinity?

>>53761544
* 1 pt per tier cost. so 1, 2, 3.
* State if previous tiers need to be bought before top tiers.
* Add up how many total tiers and decide how much you want someone to buy, then divide by that amount to get your point total.
* 1/3 is usually a decent point spend for options. So people can only buy 1/3 of what's offered.

>>53767087
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=elvOZm0d4H0

>>53765296
>Robot; Drone Carrier
If it can truly be useful in building, I shall travel to planets and make sprawling cities to make my mark as The Architect.
>Worn In
What architect wants anything else?

>Plant Garden Tier 2
Just like the pic. Would be comfy and relaxing for the crew too.
>Fabricator Tier 3
Need this to make my army of city building drones.
>Medical Facility Tier 1
I can find a skilled doctor in my travels. Hell, on might even already be in my crew. Tier 1 is just fine.
>Bathing Facilities Tier 1
Good hygiene is a must when traveling.
>Augmented Reality Room Tier 1
I need this internet access to advertise my cities and keep up on the world. Time to recruit the pioneers.
>Leisure Faculties Tier 1
Bars are a great way to maintain moral on my ship.
>Crew Quarters Tier 3
With human, aliens, and AI I can have a good crew to aid me in my goals.
>Firing Range Tier 1
To lightly train my crew in combat should the need arise.

>Nanorobot A.R. Tier 3
No real reason for this. Just seems neat to control the inside of my ship completely. This is The Architects domain now.
>A.I. Companion Tier 2
AI will act as a second-in-command and will eventually take up the mantel of Architect when I die.
>Phasal Transporter Tier 1
Just burning points at this point.
>Loving Pet Tier 1
See above
>Wide Bridge Windows
>Upgraded EVA Suit
>Powered Armor
>Holographic Map
All essential parts to space exploration.

>Megalific Structures
>Forgotten Mysteries
>Dimensional Entity

Exploring the galaxy, unraveling the lost secrets of life, exploring what's beyond even all that. All the while building great cities for all of life to follow behind me. Come. Let us expand across Creation and prosper.

>>53760953
i start at willpower 1 help

>>53767183
go outside

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>>53764178
YOUR TEXT

>>53765296
Classy Yacht
(I want old fashioned but Classy looks so Comfy!)

3 Plant Garden
1 Aquarium
6 bath
1 Expanded Cabin
1 Augmented Reality Room
1 Library
1 Crew Quarters
6 Leisure Facilities

1 Wide Windows
3 Synthetic Android
3 Ai Companion
6 Phasal Transporter
1 Nanorobot A.R.
1 Mind Upload

Planetary Events
Natural Wonders
Earth

I'll offer pleasure cruises to cool people who want to see cool natural wonders while I bang my Cyber-Waifu at the hot springs or by the fireplace.

>>53764178
>There isn't much I can do about this except for release it as a .pdf as well, which will be massive and probably won't fit on 4chan most likely. Either way, that'll surely fix any font problems

Sure there is bump your font size up by 2 points and make the text boxes slightly larger, in most areas that should work out ok, like the worst offender part being body and mind. If you need to space all your options slightly apart so you can make the text boxes bigger by a little bit. You have plently of border to do that without ruining your design.

What good is a pretty cyoa if you can't read shit?

>>53767152
Exactly my point. Kaleidoscope encompasses all possible infinities. You can't possibly equal or exceed it with Power Manipulation.

>>53765296
>Ship
Central Hub
>Interior:
Heavy Tech
>Facilities:
-6 Fabricator 3
-3 Augmented Reality Room 2
-3 Library 2
-6 Crew Quarters 3
>Special Ship Features:
-6 Nanorobot A.R. 3
-3 A.I. Companion 2
-6 Mind Upload 3
>Wonders:
Stunning Technology
Prime Cynosure A.I.
Dimensional Entity

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=T8XvegLkaqA
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HS65IB7WL4s
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HdeYwObD-j4

>>53766954
Sheesh give me a break. I just woke up after being sick last night. Diabolical Digestion and Terrible Tummyaches Times too.

>>53766723
>>53766831
Phew. It is done.
https://pastebin.com/scqa2h77

>>53767669
>dat format
Erect

>>53766903
And thank you for commenting, I really appreciate it. I'm glad to see that the literal "skeleton crew" thing didn't go unnoticed. About the barrel, it just felt too easy to go with something too magic-carpet-like. Also, barrels blend in very easily in a pirate setting. Even more stealth possibilities!

What's the most 'intelligent' CYOA?

Most thought put into it etc

>>53767758
>Most thought put into it
Traveller's Tale.

>>53766723
The wording could be better. It might seem a bit long winded to spell out each tier's cost, but it would be a lot clearer to just say "Tier 1 costs 1 point, Tier 2 costs 2 ..."

>>53767087
>>53767329
The numbers are the PRT's rating of how "powerful" something is with 12 being their "top". Power Manipulation is using those numbers to give you a gauge of what you can do with just a single charge. 1 days worth of charges puts you over 12, which is what Kaleidoscope would be listed as.

>>53767728
I do agree. Barrels remind me of the whole Treasure Island apple barrel scene and also riding over Niagra falls.

>>53767811
To expand, i just thought it was interesting that you went barrel instead of carpet shaped.

>>53767784
>Tier 1 costs 1 point, Tier 2 costs 2
That's pretty much what it says. It just needs to say that you need to buy previous tiers, so if you want tier 3 you'll need to buy 1 and 2 instead of just buying 3.

>>53767784
>>53767830
My bad, that's exactly what it says. I don't really see what problem people have with this.

mommy cyoa when

>>53767758
>implying the idiots here on /cyoag/ are intelligent

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>>53767669
Thanks anon this really helps.
I'm not sure why the font does that, and I'm reluctant to change to a different one, I'll see if I can fix it nevertheless.

Quests and complications, are something I'd like to do but that may take some time if I ever get to it. Companions is unfortunately not my area of expertise unless you want to see my flailing attempts at it, I'll probably keep it out.

Changes I may make in a v3 include: aforementioned quests and complications and ship differentiation.

I'll be fixing up the typos and changing around descriptions for now.
In the mean time some ship DLC.

>>53767830
Maybe it's better to reorder the sentences. How about you move up the yellow text up, above "medium-large warning", and make it the same size and color as the first point description line?

With minor alterations, it'd read like this:
>You have 20 points. To reach higher tiers, you must first purchase lower ones.
>Tiers begin at 1 point each. Subsequent tiers cost 1 point more than the previous one.
> ///// indicate that you must have a medium-large size ship

>>53767951
I'm not the author, but is it really that big of a deal?

>>53767859
Because 'Tiers begin at 1 point each subsequent tier cost 1 point more than the last' is a much longer sentence and requires a little bit more thinking to read than just spelling out the costs for each tier.

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>>53766166
Okay. Since we've arrived on that topic can someone explain WHAT THE FUCK the Travelers are fighting?

I keep reading the header and none of it makes sense. Do I have to read a Koran or something to understand it?

>>53767898
>ringworld
yes

>>53767898
You're welcome, glad to be of help. This CYOA is 10/10 art/design-wise, so I wouldn't recommend you risk adding bad content to it. Good luck on the DLC!

>>53768004
Fug meant for.
>>53767782

>>53767979
>much longer
Barely longer, actually. And unless you have a terrible grasp of the language, it really shouldn't take you longer to figure out what it means.

>>53767978
Not really, it's just a bit of a drag for the reader if he needs to read things more than one time to understand it. The fact that this part has created doubts means there's room for improvement.

>>53768004
Outer Gods and all that.

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what if husbandos are usually considered to be "poorly written" because they're more realistic while waifus tend to be overidealized by the authors?

>>53767898
>Companions is unfortunately not my area of expertise unless you want to see my flailing attempts at it, I'll probably keep it out.
>You will never get a tender loving nanobot swarm
It is a shame but if you don't see yourself able to make good companions better leave it be this CYOA is quite good regardless

>>53765296
>>53768013
Wow damn that really is gorgeous. It's a shame I hate all things space.

>>53768056
If people wanted realistic waifus and shit, they'd go outside.

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>>53767782
>>53768004

>>53766238
I think it would be cool if you would list the interests of those who don't have it mentioned in their letter/list some more specific interests in general. Really adds a lot in my opinion.

>>53767898
The true essence of Comfy is to keep things simple and allow the reader to imagine the universe as they wish. Comfyness can mean many different things to different people. Some might enjoy visiting alien worlds peacefully, others might enjoy fighting titanic battles with alien fleets from the comfort of their bathtub.

For the same reason I would stay away from adding companions - you already have options to add whatever humans, aliens or robot waifus are required. Easier for people to just imagine their ideal companions than trying to choose from premade ones.

I would say that this CYOA is probably going to replace Ship CYOA as my favourite 'Comfy Space CYOA', so good job.

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>>53768060
>It's a shame I hate all things space.

that's a difficult to understand sentiment

>>53767898
Time Warper seems a bit OP. Maybe make it a very expensive Ship System?

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>>53768072

>>53767785
But that's not how it works. The 1-10 number is a threat rating, not a power level. It goes from "civilian slap fight" at 1 to "get out of the way, we're calling Eidolon" at 10. Then there's 12, which is outside the scale; it means "fuck if we know what to do." But even that's still a finite level of power - at most it's a single Shard worth of power, and an Entity has an immeasurable number of those. And all of those shards of all of those Entities combined would have an upper limit. Kaleidoscope doesn't.

You're trying to stack powers to reach omnipotence, and it's not going to work. No matter how much power you add, you'll never reach it.

Any CYOAs based around the Victorian period?

>>53768042
Is it? Reading through it I could have sworn it was some kind of unfeeling antithesis reality. Kind of an inverse Azathothian thing, explaining why the actual Elder Gods of the physical realities actually helped prop up the travellers. Like the Gate and Key is nominally aligned with them while the Yellow Sultan is openly malevolent.

>>53768004
It's not something that's supposed to be well understood. Everything we got from the opening we basically get from the augurs who are mentally not all there.

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>>53768135

>>53768149
>Is it
If it's not, then what is?

>>53768036
I noticed misunderstandings about the point system with Choice of Amenities too, I'm using the same system from that for this cyoa.
>>53768060
I've got a Dragon cyoa I'm quite a way through making, although I may have bitten off more than I can chew, It's going to be about 5 pages and I'm stuck on what choices I'm gonna have.
I really want to do a school cyoa too, it seems kinda fun. But fuck, making cyoas is exhausting.
>>53768129
The ship DLC's are for now, just for fun. Not entirely integrated with the cyoa.

>>53768058
Not him, but would people "forget" a bad expansion? Is it the sort of thing where an author could just say "yeah that was a bad idea and tuck away poorly received content, or would it taint the main game even if retracted?

>>53768182
Not an expansion as such but I like to pretend that the Mystery Boxes in Zodiac Brides just don't exist since both choices ruin the setting for me.

If people don't like the expansions, then just ignore/don't save them. If you don't see it, it doesn't exist, right?

>>53768182
> it taint the main game even if retracted?

>>53768182
I guess it would be forgotten or ignored as long the original content does not make any reference to it

>>53768170
More like an element of existence I think. Like we have physical reality which we got from the 'First' and 'Second' entities hate-fucking each other. Whatever it is the Travellers are fighting it's the remains of that second. However the problem is they're too simplistic and esoteric in nature to really call them alive. It's like oxygen when our dimension is made of copper and iron.

>>53768410
So, existence was a mistake?

>>53768138
Kaleidoscope isn't omnipotence and threat rating is still similar to power rating. Those numbers are almost meaningless in the fact that it says that you can create any power with those shards and the more you stack the more powerful it is and can easily bypass any set scale.

Guess we'll just have to agree to disagree.

>>53768418
Basically. If the intro is right all life is basically the fetus of a dead goddess who existed without purpose.

>>53768440
Man, this is too deep for me.

>>53768440
Gnosticism makes for good settings.

>>53768440
> All living things are united by Orphanism and a complete lack of purpose.
Just open up the flood gates and let them in then I guess.

>>53768418
It's been widely considered as such.

>>53768481
But where do the infinite universes come from?

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>>53768440
Why don't we revive the goddess?

>>53768460
FUCK OFF FATPOSTER

>>53768460
I have no Idea what you guys are referencing but is it similar to Philipp Mainländer's rotting god?

"God decided that he can't bear his existence anymore and that he wishes to turn into Nothingness. But he was not able to reach that goal without thereby creating our world, because the path from his over-being** to Nothingness required a transition, which is being as we know it, our universe. This entire world is therefore nothing more than God's "body", that is in all its components rotting into nothingness now." - Philosophy of Redemption blog.

Its a good read nonetheless.

>>53768497
It was always an infinite miasma apparently. Incapable of supporting life.

THEN THE FIRST FUCKED THAT ONE UP.

>>53768546
>that feel when no goddess of nonexistence to put you out of this suffering

>>53768585
>>53768440
Fuck wrong link.

>>53768592
>Incapable of supporting life
But that doesn't stop them from existing.

>>53764178
>>Font size
If it can't be bigger, it's shouldn't be that kind of cursive, at that size it's really bad.

>>53768460
I saw you banned in the ban list. You're either ban evading or a different person because I'm almost certain it was a 3 day ban. The specific post was the cry fat Wojak holding a gun with you telling people to stop calling you fat.

>>53768626
Because they aren't actually alive like >>53768410 said. They're wills that are incapable or procreating.

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>>53768315
>I like to pretend that the Mystery Boxes in Zodiac Brides just don't exist since both choices ruin the setting for me.
I'm sorry Anon... I didn't mean to disappoint you...
How do the Head Royal Alchemist and Sebastian ruin the setting though, if I may ask?

>>53768656
Sure, but undead are a thing, right? Being alive and existing aren't the same thing. Removing someone/thing from existence is simply a much more efficient way of killing them.

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>>53767898
Just letting you know I totally dig the Giant Robot ship option. Combined with the "Interior" and Facilities options it makes for some very interesting combinations!

Looking forward to any addition and really anything else you decide to do. Keep up the good work!

>>53768712
Can't agree with you there. Since your mind is uploaded into the ship itself, Interior and Facilities are nearly useless.

>>53767898
>Space Mech
Could you just hook up your mind to the mech instead of uploading it? I like my fleshy bits.

>>53768421
But it literally is omnipotence. You copy the powers of fictional beings, so just pick the omnipotent entity of your choice that you don't believe is real. Viola, omnipotent.

>>53768683
Anon we're working with metaphysical entities from a pre-curser era where for all we know the only similarities we share with it are quarks.

>>53768667
He probably doesn't like that the alchemist fixed everything and he's not the true heir. Not sure why Sebastian would hurt anything though.

>>53768182
The mystery box to Picking-a-Goddess was garbage and was forgotten by everyone.

>>53768752
You could always just create representation of your organic body in VR and fill out your fantasies with your 'Fleshy bits' from there, all senses are replicated perfectly and under your controll after all.

>>53768712
Psst, you forgot to remove your name.

>>53768799
Still, you can resurrect dead things, but to bring back something removed from existence, you'd have to go back in time and prevent who/whatever removed that thing or person from existence. On the other hand, if someone made it so that thing never existed in the first place, you couldn't bring it back. Unless, of course, you killed or removed the one that made it that way before they did that. Is that how it works?

>>53768841
But that's not real.

>>53768901
Nothing is real anon.

>>53768813
Your tears are delicious, and your butthurt, immeasurable. Your taste is shit too.

>>53768914
Are you real? Am I?

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>>53768879
>Is that how it works?
I don't know anon, I just don't know.

>>53768926
Back to the hole you belong in Evangelical.

>>53768889
Idea: Use the temptation as an inspiration. Sit down, don't eat, start writing. Hunger will inspire. And if you put something worthwhile down, you won't just have a snack, you will have earned that snack, and it will be twice as delicious.

>>53768969
God is best waifu, and that will never change.

>>53768901
Being a giant robot is really cool.

>>53768772
Assuming there is an omnipotent version of yourself, which there may not be and if there was you may not be able to copy their powers as they stop you with their omnipotence.

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>>53768667
Alright Zodiac Brides Dude, serious question. I've made my build and going to shuffle around ideas and such but came to an important realization. While we all know about our own family circumstances and generally how good/bad it would be to expose our new life change to them...we know little to nil of our new inlaws. I know you're slammed right now but would you consider something to expand on that in the future when you get to updating things?

Also
1. How willing are the brides overall to meet their new inlaws?
2. Would there be anything to worry about for senpai here after taking the throne? As in Zodiac nobles making power plays or aiming at a weak link? I'd hope Seb, not!link, and the great houses would keep that a state secret.

I may or may not be getting too into this imagination game at this point.

>>53762695
>Toxin
>Resistant
>Regeneration
>Strength
>Invisible
>Vigilante
>#1 Fan
>Menace

Time to clean up the streets, and possibly teach Toxin about the value of friendship

>>53769103
Family...not sure why it went to senpai.

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>>53768926
>>53768988
Oh cool, you fan club Yahweh, real fucking orginal, way to forge your own path champ.

>>53768667
I'm not keen on trap options generally, and the Alchemist just feels like he might do crazy things in secret to me or my bride without me noticing because of not being chosen even though I technically don't know of him because I didn't take the box. As I said, if I don't look at the option, I can live in blissful ignorance.

As for Sebastian, I just prefer to have him as a loyal servant and not think that there was any hint of possible romance with him.

It's just personal preferences, I guess some people liked the choices even if I would never consider them under any circumstances.

>>53765296
>>53765315
Wow looks amazing. Well done, really. I'm not easily impressed. What other cyoas have you made before this, since you mentioned that.

Q: does scrivener have the capacity to make a decent cyoa?

>>53769504
who

>>53769460
Choice of Amenities
TFW/Feel CYOA
and a small 3 choice one.
Potion Seller's Weakest Potions

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>>53769103
>would you consider something to expand on that in the future when you get to updating things?
I'm not sure. The Noble Houses are huge, usually being comprised of 10-25 direct, blood related family members and that's not even taking to account various mistresses and bastards some of the Head of the Houses have.
The only concrete family connections I've outright confirmed are that Scarlatina and Oriadne are cousins and that Lucianna has little sister named Lillianna (pic related) that would take over her role as Imperatrix should Luck become Queen.
May expand on the House's members and their lands a bit more at some point, but I'd probably really need a solid idea for a follow up CYOA to justify it.
If I'm not careful, I may wind up making Order: Zodiac Edition.
>1.
While some of the Brides would definitely be nervous, I think it's safe to safe that the majority of them would be ecstatic to meet and get on good terms with your family. There's bound to be a bit of a cultural divide between them and your family, especially if you wound up going the harem route, but I think they'd try their hardest to bridge that if they think it would make you happy.
>2.
Not a lot of the Noble Houses would be nearly malicious enough to try to exploit your family to try and gain power. It's not Westeros (thank Christ).
But, if you tell them to, Sebastian and Oriadne would take the information about your family on Earth to their graves.
Out of all the members of your Court, your Right and Left Hands are the ones you can trust more than any other. The only one who's even less likely to betray you is your Queen.

>>53769504
Perhaps, if you know how to use it right.
>>53769524
Scrivener is a free text editor of some description.

>>53769527
It shows you really put effort into this one. Any plans for your next cyoa? I can't wait for you to make something bigger and more fleshed out.

>>53765296
Ship: Alien abductor

Interior: Worn in and comfy


Facilities
Plant garden 1 (19)
Fabricator 2 (17)
Cloning tank 1 (16)
Medical facility 1 (15)
Bathing facilities 1 (14)
A.R. room 2 (12)
Leisure facilities 3 (9)
Crew quarters 2 (7)
Firing range 2 (5)
Aquarium 3 (2)
Library 2 (0)

Special features
Nanobot A.R. 3 (12)
Phasal transporter 2 (10)
Loving pet 1 (9)
A.I companion 2 (7)
Mind upload 2 (5)
Wide bridge windows (4)
Holographic map (3)


Wonders: Alien creatures, Megalific structures and forgotten mysteries

>>53768004
>Do I have to read a Koran or something to understand it?
>1438 AH
>not being a hafiz

>>53769221
f a m gets filtered, senpai

>>53769221
senpai there are word filters desu

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>>53769564
>If I'm not careful, I may wind up making Order: Zodiac Edition.
I would be okay with this outcome. Glad to hear about 1&2. Now all that is left to do would be to wait for the DLC with ZBG as a bride candidate.

>>53765296
>Ship:
Space yacht
>Interior:
Wood Paneling
>Facilities:
T1 Plant Garden (19)
T1 Aquarium (18)
T2 Fabricator (16)
T3 Cloning Tank (13)
T1 Expanded Cabin (12)
T3 Medical Facility (9)
T2 Bathing Facilities (7)
T3 Augmented Reality Room (4)
T1 Library (3)
T3 Crew Quarters (0)
>Special Features
T3 Nanorobot AR (12)
T3 AI Companion (9)
T3 Synthetic Android (6)
Holographic Map (5)
Powered Armor (4)
Wide Bridge Windows (3)
T1 Mind Upload (2)
T2 Phasal Transporter (0)
>Wonders:
Earth
Ruined Civilizations
Forgotten Mysteries

These are the voyages of the starship Vexation of Spirit. Its continuing mission: to explore new worlds, discover ancient civilizations, to go where time forgot.

As I travel the universe I record and document every lost civilization, artifacts, and monuments that I find. I do it in part for the mystery but to ensure that these races are not forever lost to time.

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>>53769564
>should Luck become Queen
Is this her sword?

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>>53769694
Something Dragon related is the most I have worked on. Although that may be a ways off Especially since I'm soon to become a NEET and I'll have to begin looking for a job. I didn't become a graphic designer to make CYOAs on 4chan.

>>53769820
If only creating CYOAs paid ...

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>>53769820
Fellow /gd/fag here, I know that feel. I still do it though.

How is that going to be any different to pic related, may I ask?

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>>53769820
>I didn't become a graphic designer to make CYOAs on 4chan.
Why not both? Get a job and make cyoas. I didn't take courses into graphic design to make cyoas either but life is funny that way. Even with a job I still make them, though at a much slower pace.

Even though it won't tickle my fancy, I do have respect for any cyoa you'll make.

>>53766465
I thought she was sucking a dick in the thumbnail

>>53769910
That's what I'm still working on, I had intended it to simply be a revitalized version of the original. but now I'm trying to think of new things I could add. Perhaps a choice in your dragon's abilities, or quests, expanding upon a dragon's life, something, I don't fully know yet.
>>53769930
I'll certainly try to continue with cyoas, but I tend to focus on one thing at a time, so it'll be slow.

Hey ZBG, I just had a horrifying thought. We have the brides' internet histories, do they have ours? I assume Sephy does as a matter of course and Suri has probably seen more than enough of our browsing habits to get the idea but what about the other girls?

>>53769987
You can use the dragon page I made in the Overlord CYOA as another source of inspiration, I used the original dragon CYOAs as inspirations for that, but took a similar direction with it.

I'm sure there's other CYOAs not even related to dragons that could be beneficial too.

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>>53769773
>DLC with ZBG as a bride candidate
I'm not sure you want that, anon. I look like a blonde, chunkier version of pic related and my Aspergers and Bi-Polar would probably stress you out just as much as they do me...
But if you promise to hold me when I get depressed and tell me everything's going to be okay I-I might -c-c-consider it...
>>53769811
Fuck. I meant Luci...
>>53770025
Sebastian chose not to disclose them your history when Oriadne looked it over and told him it might, "Scare most of the girls off."
What exactly are you worried about them finding?

>>53770108
Overlord was your handy work? Always wanted to say thanks for making that, as that one inspired me to get back to writing.

>>53770108
Thanks, this actually helps quite a lot, you've got a lot of good idea on there. I'm worried that my own will end up looking like I just copied a bunch of ideas and choices from other cyoas.

I really want to make this Dragon cyoa, the original was one of the first CYOAs I remember reading. I'll need to think more on it hopefully in the future.

>>53770144
>What exactly are you worried about them finding?
This really isn't the board for those topics. But let's leave it as "porn".

>>53770144
ZBG ... you don't ask a woman about her age, and you don't ask a man about his browser history. Escepially on 4chan.

>>53770157
I was the graphics bloke, but ended up taking over as Overlord went AWOL.
Good to hear that we did that.

>>53770282
You could always do what I did, and do something completely different, like a CYOA about ships, necromancy, or something entirely fabricated with no relation another CYOA.

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I can't choose what to work on next
choose for me
http://www.strawpoll.me/13174651

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>>53770289
>>53770315
Okay, well now I really want to know...
What manner of debased, kinky shit have you guys been looking at?
Is it tiles?

>>53769311
Stay jelly

>>53770374
Are you trying to do a survey of our fetishes, ZBG?
Will it be the foundation for further CYOAs?

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>>53770374

>>53767866
Just play Gentle Femdom or Geenymous' incest CYOA.