Brave new world edition
>This OP is provisional until it's finalized.
>Please voice your thoughts on how it can be improved
>During this transitional period, your input and suggestions are of paramount importance to ensure peace, justice and prosperity in our new general.
This is the go-to place to discuss erotic fiction of all types, from the fap-and-go fics to porn with a substantial plot. Drawfags are welcome as well- illustrated stories are always the best ones!
We thrive on criticism and feedback, so if you feel strongly about a given work, don't be afraid to speak your mind about it. Constructive criticism will help everyone in the long run.
Requests are always welcome as well, there's nothing like a good request to get the creative juices flowing.
DISCLAIMER: Although requests are encouraged to promote a constant flow of new content, unfortunately not all of them can be fulfilled even at the best of times; don’t take it personally if we don’t get to you right away. Try to expand your ideas - a bare-bones request doesn't give us much of a good idea as to what you want. Remember- have fun with it!
Remember to post pictures when possible, but keep image dumps to a minimum so that more OC can be posted.
Master smut list:
Requests Document Database (feel free to add your requests to this when you post them in the thread!):
A guide to constructive criticism, because "Your writing/artwork sucks" doesn't help anyone get better at it.
Currently we are creating a set of guides to aid new and upcoming smut writers, if you feel as if you can contribute anything, please do so in-thread!
Smut Writing for the Sexually Inexperienced: http://pastebin.com/znDUfbtB
Writing from the Female Perspective: http://pastebin.com/M5FNyVWH
Guide to writing monsters in smut: http://pastebin.com/iXjPcUTb
Oh well. Something to remeber for the next thread.
Should we also place the flockmod in the OP? It could go under the requests document
Oh, and reposting this
Tags: boyxgoddess, /ss/, lactation, vaginal, oral (female), vanilla, impregnation
I should repeat from last thread
Wallbutt erotica, when?
Do we at least have any good stocks/pillories stories in the master smut list?
Not that I recall. But I don't have the most comprehensive knowledge of the master list. Some bondage stuff like that might be a good way of breaking in this new thread, if anyone's willing to take a crack at it.
The public use fetish is nightmare made flesh.
There is literally no fetish fuel for it. I mean, it's not even that there aren't good stories around. There aren't any stories around.
I'm seriously considering writing a story like that, but I'm afraid my expository skills leave much to be desired.
It would probably read like a pizza delivery pamphlet. Too descriptive.
I want to propose something.
The /d/rawthread has a lot of drawfags getting shit done, and it pretty popular for a /d/ thread.
What do you think about coming in contact with those guys, to ask if they want to add a "for story requests go to /efg/" reference in their OP? We can add a "for image requests go to the /d/rawthread" in ours.
My thought is that if we succeed in linking the two generals, we can get some more traffic, which I'm sure the old guard would appreciate, but far more than that, we might start a good thing with stray drawfags coming around here and stray writerfags going there, possibly ending up with stories inspired by their work or pictures inspired by ours.
Ok here it is:
Tags: MxF, willing, wallmount, vaginal, anal, bareback, condom
Never written something like this before, hope you like it.
Hi mates, I just heard the news of the exile. I wanted to stop by and see if anyone could give some feedback or some suggestions with something I'm working on.
Demon Hearts. A choose your own adventure game. The basic premise is that you play an adventurer (male) who was caught and sold as a slave to a monster girl town. I have a few fetishes covered, like bondage shortstacks ghost bj etc. I'm curious as to what you mates would want to see in it?
Like specific fetishes certain monster girls or scenarios.
Right now I have about ten girls and two men you can interact with. This is still in its roughest form at the moment, but I would love some I put.
I can answer some questions about it and I can link to the tumblr.
And a pic of the main cast at the moment
Anon, if our drawfags wanted to go in the /d/rawthread, they would have done so already. /wst/ isn't just about your stories, or art for your stories, it's also about production of /tg/ related smut, which the drawfags contribute to as much as the writefags.
Beside, I seldom see /d/rawfags draw anything vanilla, and their drawthread is filled with... /d/ related requests at best, which is not necessarily everyone favorite stuff. You are free to go and see if /d/rawfags want to take a look around there, but our own should stay there, or do as they please.
Wrote this for a request in the 'weirdest fetish' thread we had earlier this month. The requested theme was 'domination via food'.
Not my best but open to any criticism.
"Write a fic involving the creative use of magic and/or psychic powers during sex- the more exotic the better. Mind-linking, superhuman endurance, maybe transformation during the act itself- the sky's the limit!"
As transcribed from the original thread.
Okay, will this be designed like a typical eroge, with a number of routes leading to different sex scenes with different characters and then endings? Are you using a VN engine to do it? If not I highly suggest you do unless you're a proficient programmer.
So are you guys just interested in reading normally written fiction here or would you be interested in some logs from erotic roleplay sessions? I have a few logs from sessions playing on F-list, mostly centered around Futa-On-Male and some weirder kinkier stuff like smell, that I'd be willing to share.
Why don't you just post on pastebin as a guest? or make some sort of throwaway account there.
Take your logs, turn them into a story and post them. Of course, we're not an /erp/ general so it would be best to avoid posting logs as such.
Also ignore that other guy. I personally abhorr futa-on-male (or futa-on-anything, ir anything-on-futa, really) but someone else might like that and we're in the process of getting a bit more inclusive.
Then post it in several chapters.
And our delayed new year's revolution was to stop sending people away in order to grow and start getting shit done, again.
Maybe I don't like futa, but someone else might. Maybe you can post a futa story for the guy above, and he can organize his logs into a futa story for you and you two can be happier while otherwise you wouldn't, while I can venture forth and contribute to the unjustly overlooked genre of mechanical rape.
>> will this be designed like a typical eroge, with a number of routes leading to different sex scenes with different characters and then endings?
Yup, so far there are at least 8 characters to fool around with. Each will have at least 1 sex scene but the main girls will have multiple scenes as well as multiple endings, generally a good and bad end.
>>Are you using a VN engine to do it?
I'm using renplay, and there is enough of a community to help if I want to try anything new.
Character wise I'm trying to stay away from the normal stereo types and give them a better personality than just here is yandere girl, and here is tsudre girl 2. Ironically enough I would prefer it to end up like katawa shojo where the characters drive the story more than sex but the sex will still be there as some fun.
Also a small list of fetishes as of right now are,
I think there are a few more but they are slipping my mind at the moment
Gender Bender writefag. I'd appreciate some criticism of my work. I've been on hiatus for a while and want to start writing again. Also, hit me up with some ideas for TG stories.
Back on /tg/ somebody wrote what basically amounted to snuff and thought nobody would like it. People liked it.
Incidentally, I won that bet and still want that fic you owe me Cornelius.
>intentionally going to be written to be extra creepy.
That's more like it. I measure all villains by the standard of this guy I found in a story on AFF once. He's also the main character, the story is in first-person.
I literally cannot describe how creepy it comes off, but one of the other people who reviewed the story summed it up quite well: "Excellent story, and may god have mercy on your soul."
Very well, http://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600098537
Mayhaps I'll bring the tags over as well: Abuse, Anal, Angst, BDSM, Beast, B-Mod, Bond, BP, Contro, CR, D/s, Dom, Fet, Fingering, Fist, H/C, HJ, Humil, M/F, M/s, MCD, MiCD, Minor2, Nec, Oral, Other, Preg, Rape, S&M, SI, Slave, Solo, Spank, Tent, Tort, Toys, Violence
Don't say I didn't warn you.
>tfw you write a ppmm fanfic with dickgirls and xxx scenes, but the sex happens so infrequently it's not even a porn fic
Well, a good few of them are meaning less even to me, but I'll leave out the obvious ones and give it a crack.
Beast (bestiality), B-Mod (body-modification, though I'm not sure having skewers stabbed through your breasts and welded into a weird frame counts as "modification"), BP (had to look this one up, apparently it's an umbrella term for "horrific acts", which fits the story nicely), CR (Child Rape, I assume), Fet (either Fetish, or Fetters, which would be bondage related), H/C (Hurt/Comfort, those are the parts where the story gets creepiest), MCD (unsure about this, the closest I could find was a slang reference to getting head off a fat girl, and seeing as the victim in the story is often described as being on the chunky side, I figured that was what it referred to), MiCD (really not sure with this one, possibly referring to "A person or thing willing to do anything to get their way, as it is its belief that they deserve it.", which fits the viewpoint character nicely if it's correct), Other (fucked if I know, everything else, I imagine).
Right, that looks like all the hard ones, the rest are mainstream enough that I think you should get them.
Trust me, friend that happens to me more often then I'd like.
I've already talked about a story of mine on here that started out as a one-shot smutfic and ended up breaking out and running away from me to become a quasi post-apoc story.
(Fuck me, you read that quick) I did as well, actually. It's all the times that she almost escapes that gets me (that thing with her glasses was pure genius). Before long I wanted the creep we were watching all this through to get his head split open with an axe or something.
Yeah, I read fast. Faster when I find the plot progression interesting, in which case I don't take fapping breaks, I just identify the fappy parts for later. But now I'm feeling too uneasy to fap to them.
Damn thee efficient writers for making me root for characters with a death foretold.
Oh yeah, exactly the same for me.
It was only after, when the disgust (both at the story and myself for liking bits of it) had faded, that I was able to appreciate it more. The bit with the horse especially.
I wish she'd survived though, bashed his head open with a rock or something.
Though It wouldn't have been pretty seeing her trying to put her life back together afterwards, especially with all that he did.
Heh, that kinda happened to me with one of my distinctly smutfics, only in my head. My gnome mage from WoW got raped by vines in it, and now that's her whole character in WoW. She's completely traumatized after the events of the story, and is struggling to keep her shit together.
well... okay. go nuts
and here's the tentacle rape fic
Oh I'm not disgusted. I feel dissapointed. It's a strange feeling, like when you see an objectively good movie that drops the ball at the end.
She should have won. She deserved to win. I don't care about her life. What's the point of developing a character that is seen to be smart, enterprising, strong willed and unrelenting if she's just gonna be neck-chopped at the end. Especially after the scene where she told him she'd kill him and then again foreshadowed that by asking him whether he recalled what she had told him and he couldn't. A perfect setup. Then a waste. A bad ending. Boooooo.
But seriously, very well written throughout.
>She's completely traumatized after the events of the story, and is struggling to keep her shit together.
That reminds me of a brief discussion I had with a few other anons the other day. We were talking about a story where all the main characters are the party members (this was on /tg/) who are left when all the important ones get killed (or raped in catatonia, as I suggested), and now they have to try and save the world from whatever ruined/killed their friends because they're the only ones left who can.
I had to look up omega verse. Holy shit is that trash. Why the fuck would anyone want to simplify and compartmentalize human relationship dynamics in a fic where romance is supposed to be a key feature, especially when the compartmentalization is based on debunked theories created from horribly biased studies on captive animal behavior? Absolutely disgusting.
I know what you mean, and its kinda why I dislike snuff in stories.
Killing a character just for cheap gratification... it just doesn't feel right to me. Like reading halfway through a book and then tossing it away. Cutting a story short just as it's getting good, leaving you wondering at what might have been.
I get philosophical when I'm up late.
The advantage of killing important characters is that it preserves tension: If you know characters don't have perfect plot armor then danger matters even if you're not fully immersed. The disadvantage is that if you fuck it up YOU FUCK IT UP.
It also doesn't kick in until the first death a reader gets to, but killing somebody too soon means they weren't important.
Yeah, but it's like the other guy said; she should've won.
Admittedly it would've been a most pyrrhic of victories, considering the state she's in, but the fact reminds that all the story was leading up to it, and its a mystery as to how the evil bastard manages to survive all that she does to him.
She stabs him in the eye for goodness sake, and he still manages to chase her down! That sucks.
I'm positive that there are a half-dozen people wandering around the world un-murdered at this moment because the psycho that wrote this story was able to vent all of his pent-up lunacy into it, instead of taking it out on his fellow man.
I actually agree with you, and I wrote the damn fic. There's a reason I completely revamped how omegaverse works for mine.
I won't lie, though, I think part of the reason it appeals to me in the first place is cause I like bestiality and fucked up shit like that. :\
I mean, I'm not on principle against snuff, because I do have a sadistic streak and it can capture some emotions and some degree of despair that other kinds of stories can't.
However, there is an intrinsic problem with it, in that you seem to have one of two choices, either you build an uninteresting character just as cannon fodder, in which case it can't quite capture the same emotions, or you can build an interesting character in which case it's a damn waste. Alternatively you might build a good character, bring them to the edge then save them with a deus ex machina. But this is both silly and robs you from the warm and tingly feeling of a worthy character finally triumphing.
So eventually it seems that you can have at best above-average snuff stories, but not really great snuff stories.
I mean, since their dicks are magic, if they want dog dicks, they can have dog dicks. Why stop there, even? Write about their decent into debauchery as things get lewder and lewder.
Things are only gonna get lewder for the next timeline and a half, though. Third timeline, Madoka's gonna wish to be able to heal witches, but it makes her super goddamn griefy and depressed all the time. Things just get worse from there
And honestly, I think it's closer to human dicks that just happen to knot. Still magic, still weird.
Hm, that was similar, in "magical disembodied dick" terms, anyway. But still not what I was thinking of (I'm not that sure what I was thinking of, considering I only saw the last page of it).
Remember, while recommendations are fine and all, our main goal is to create new content, not just discuss the old stuff. OC won't make itself, after all.
I'm the guy further up yonder that was thinking of writing a story with an intentionally creepy villain, which led to your recommending the /tv/ fanfic. Then we had the discussion on the ending. I'm the same person.
So: Creeplord ultralunatic, abduction, rape, heavy mod, sensedep, bdsm, abuse and torture. And a non-GRRM ending. Probably four chapters. Will be done by...someday. I don't like deadlines.
I gotta lay the ground work for the rapey half-veela in my hp au fic. Good smut doesn't just arise out of context-free situations.
Hey guys, this is a really weird question, but would it be possible (discounting any risks of infection) for an organism of some sort to enter the breast (that is, the mammary gland) via the nipple without causing any damage?
I know futa is only barely tolerated here, but... I really, really liked that. Though it's a damn shame to find out that the picture is where the pastebin ends.
Though I'm not necessarily into futa, just bisexual male anal play, and futa is about the closest I ever get to there being a woman in a story about a guy getting fucked. Even strapons are a rarity! Still, thanks.
Depends entirely on the viscosity. If it's not a thicker liquid than milk it's not going to shatter disbelief if it goes in reverse.
Volume is going to be iffy depending on bust size and the description of the entry. Most people aren't going to look up lactation volume to factcheck you.
The psyker part won't be done for a while, but the first part with the Tyranids should be done in a few days. I'm planning on having it posted before the 20th, as I am out of town that day.
We're /efg/ now? Why not /dfg/ since we're one /d/?
Shout out to Deathleaper Fangirl.
Tentatively trying to get shit done for the first time in a very long while but suffering choice paralysis as always.
Options I want to work on are
>Supervillain and superhero's sidekick
>captured Beegirl laying eggs after waspmen drug her to make her a queen of a hive? It's based on a weird dream I had
>Doctor vampire and agoraphobe human friend cohabitation
Other news that I haven't shared here is that Monster and I parted ways a few months ago. We might write together still but it's hard to know. I don't know if monster intends to continue writing things here. Other than those pieces of information I'd rather not discuss anything here and clog shit up.
>I need more happy endings in my perverse torture erotica dammit.
this is my fetish too
Those all sound pretty good, but I'm leaning towards the beegirl. Incidentally, whatever happened to that drider story? Did I miss it somehow?
Nice to see you back around in any case. Get back in the game, maybe it'll keep your mind off of things.
So I've been stuck listening to a lot of old/classic music at work and it struck me that plenty of them could serve as the basis of wst/efg stories.
Love Potion Number Nine
In a rush to get back into battle the party bard takes the wrong potion...
There are several other good ones I was thinking of but they've slipped my mind and I don't have time atm to look them up.
I wrote this a year ago and I'm getting back into writing the third chapter. Would love some feedback/thoughts, still sort of in my smut infancy. It's niche, but hey it's /d/ enough.
Chapter 1 http://pastebin.com/0KQU2hbZ
Chapter 2 http://pastebin.com/S7wqq7tT
1st - m/f, elastic
2nd - m/f, elastic, tf, polymorphism stuff
I know. Didn't think that could even be a fetish until now myself.
I read this a few months ago, but it left a good impression. The transformation was horrifying, which was awesome. Though, was it just me or is it really hard to follow what position they are in, what with her being elastic and bending like a pretzel during sex? I think he did what any fa/tg/uy would do and munchkined the fuck out of the desired form. It was pretty solid in that regard. He fucked up when he didn't consider what her own fetish was when he made her base form rubbery. It would have saved him that grief when she flipped out since he violated her right of self-determination. If this were a webcomic or a much longer fic with much less smut per volume, I'd keep that as a point of contention for a while at least. It's an interesting concept in and of itself. Also, maybe some fear of her leaving him, since with a polymorphic body, she can get anyone she wants.
Oh man, its been forever since I visited /wst/. It's been at least since the /tg/ purge. Just seeing this thread makes me want to start writing again. What sorts of stuff are hot right now?
Well, given the holiday, Chocolate Elves.
Seconded, it's been way too long since we got anything with Drow.
How do my fellow amateur writers deal with the crushing feeling whenever you receive criticism? I have absolutely nothing against constructive criticism, in fact, I like giving my own, but for whatever reason, I just lose my drive to continue writing something whenever I put my draft out there and people mention even the tiniest of flaws. I want to improve, and the only way to do that is to let people read my stuff
Try this: Write until you consider you're done with a piece and only post it then. When people point out the flaws in the work, take them into account for the next time but as long as they're minor, leave them alone.
Perfectionism isn't bad in itself, but it can quickly drive you to waste your time obsessively 'improving' something that's good enough. Deliver, take note of what other people think should be improved and try to put it in practice next time.
The first step is admitting to yourself that the things you put out aren't perfect. We all strive for perfection, but if such a thing exists it pretty damn hard to attain. So instead of seeking perfection, seek self-improvement. Practice, practice, practice. Take the criticism and ask yourself "is this true" and "how can I improve". Accept your flaws and accepting criticism (as well as learning from it) will come naturally.
I drink heavily. The sting fades after a few days, then I can consider it with more distance.
I know some professional authors have a trusted friend filter out legit constructive criticism from shitposting.
Take it as something to learn from. Hell, we all get criticisms, but the story is already out there, so learn and move on. If you really hate it, write shorter stuff faster and get as much feedback as possible and then get more developed and extensive as you feel comfortable with it.
Remember, if you got a criticism, then someone was attached enough to write it. Most of the time, they read it, go "fuck it," and then move on without bothering to tell you what they didn't like it.
The other thing is that one person is an opinion, they are like assholes, and you can *never* get everyone off. Two people? Might want to look at it? Thirty people say it's wrong, then just fix the fucker.
I honestly haven't done anything like this in years. I can feel that it's terrible but I can't actively point it out. Please give me some advice before I actually start writing the smut.
It will be easier to read on pastebin if you put a blank line in between each paragraph.
Line 11 seemed the most awkward in English:
>Her chest was as well very heavy
should probably be something like
>Her chest felt heavy.
>She tried to shift her gaze down but found it difficult, something cold and heavy clasped around her neck. The realization sparked her awake, claws attempting to scrape away at the blockade on her neck.
I would add the following corrections and tweaks:
>She tried to shift her gaze down but found it difficult, something cold and heavy was clasped around her neck. The realization sparked her awake, her claws automatically attempting to scrape away at the collar her neck.
But like I said, it's fine, very readable. Don't agonize over it. The situation and the feeling is the most important thing in smut.
Going halfway through a male to female transformation, resulting in a futa with the sex drives of both genders.
A guy who wants to be a trap so badly he turns into one, and then immediately starts doing trap things.
Girl TFs a guy into an intelligent tentacle monster, and then is surprised when he starts teasing her as revenge rather than just ravaging her.
Well, I'm writing something right now that I don't think I'm ever going to finish but oh well.
Premise is based off this one recently-translated doujin on sadpanda involving a group of girls who go to a "doll corner" where they shrink and get turned into inanimate dolls and of course there's a bad end that is basically murderfetish. The basic concept was good, the execution was not.
What I'm writing is a better version of it.
> Guy and girlfriend go to "figure corner" where people get shrunken down and turned into living versions of anime figures (ie; actual flesh and blood not plastic).
> There's a "clean" side meant for roleplayers and people who use the place like a cosplay cafe
> They wind up going to the "adult" side, get handed magazines for ideas
> Guy picks what he thinks is a large-breasted succubus, girl picks this one cowgirl figure from Comic Unreal that is coming out in February
> Guy actually picked a futa succubus with full anal training and a tongue long enough to reach her own vagina
> Guy finds his sexual preference changing in that before he merely preferred women and now is such a lesbian that the mere thought of sex with another girl is almost enough to make him cum
> Lesbian funtimes ensue, succubus discovers the wonders of a breastfeeding relationship with her cowgirl girlfriend and also the pleasure of vibrators in both her ass and vagina while she fucks something with her cock
> When they go to get back to their original size/bodies, something screws up and they re-size but are stuck as sort of hybrids of the figures and what they were before, think of it as being a sister to the character rather than being stuck as the character themselves
I think it's a lot more palatable than a shitty bad end and also far more hot. I was considering having the guy turn into some form of monstergirl instead but the idea of a lesbian succubus sex machine was too good to pass up.
>I think it's a lot more palatable than a shitty bad end
You aren't alone there. Bad ends are always tricky to pull off at the best of times, and even when they're done well they end up rubbing a lot of people the wrong way, so to speak.
What about a story that is completely based around the whole idea of Bad Endings?
I brought this idea up in the last thread: "Adventurers slip up and then either meet sticky ends or longer, more drawn out (and much stickier, if you know what I mean) ends."
Came up with a few ideas as well, although they were all of a /tg/ sorta slant.
I'd read it
I'm on the fence about them, I like bad ends when they go from dubcon to consensual but given that most bad ends are noncon to mindbreak and usually not my thing
Which is bizarre as I'm currently writing up a nongreentext version of pic related
[spoiler]On that note, if anyone from the /tg/ thread I mentioned I was planing to have this done by last weekend is waiting for it, well it's a three day weekend for me, and I hope to have it done by tonight but I'm horrible at estimating deadlines, it'll be done soon I hope though[/spoiler]
[spoiler]No spoilers on /d/[/spoiler]
Depends on the bad end for me, and personally I like /tg/ bad ends, provided they don't focuse too much on how horrible it would actually be
I think you might have been the guy I was speaking to, actually.
The ideas I thought of last time where stuff like, public use (chained up so the minions can have a crack at the females one after the other), mindbreak (the evil alchemist needs test subjects to experiment on with his new potions), beast (the hell-hounds and the sorcerer's python familiar are getting restless) maybe a bit of impreg (the evil sorcerer and her cabal now have a chaste paladin on hand who perfectly fulfills the criteria to be the one who will carry the demonic overlord into this world).
Stuff like that. Can be as horrible or not as you'd like.
Y-you can always have a good ending where it turns out her mother was teaching her a lesson about keeping a bad company or something and so she eventually raises her...
[spoiler]I hate bad ends ;_;[/spoiler]
Not entirely sure how I'm gonna handle it, never really done anything with time skips before, but by the time she ends up in MILF's possession I think any damage would've already been done
[spoiler]Does it count as a good end if the healdo ends up taking a "I don't like it but I'm not against it" stance to her fate/she finds this fate shamefully enjoyable?
[spoiler]In the hierachy of bad ends, that's the least bad end lagging behind murder, horrible disfigurement, despair in continued captivity, catatonia and lilith mindbreak. It's basically soft mindbreak[/spoiler]
>I hate bad ends ;_;
Friend, let me give you a word of advice.
All the bad ends, all the shit I've seen on here and outside as well, all of that just makes the good parts look all the better by comparison.
So whenever I read a story like >>6638421 where it's suffering and misery all the way through, it makes all the fics that are about people treating each other with care and kindness seem all the sweeter.
Cheesy idea? Maybe. Doesn't make any difference to me.
Yep, that's me, t'Sade. Imageboards never handle the single quote, so I just use it without most of the time.
I also run Rodo, which I finally got up last weekend, though there is a lot of pages that need cleaning up after the last round of spamers.
That wasn't me, was it? Eh, the third one(?) was the only one I really enjoyed, I felt the others didn't really do enough.
I liked his couch monster one too, though sadly the ideas were again underutilized.
A'llo! Sooo, I wrote a willing, happy ending, Unbirth fic, and was wondering if anyone here might be willing to critique it? Pretty please! Do note that it's set in the skyrim. http://werdsmith.com/p/bJLYoSMRn
Well, been procrastinating all weekend and forgot how long this one probably will be, get the feeling I won't have healdo story done tonight, so sometime before the end of next weekend I guess
[spoiler]I am really bad and guessing how long story writing will take[/spoiler]
Also should probably start using my name for these thread
It's good, the explanation about the sword in the first paragraph felt unnecessary for something that's only a minor detail but other than that no issues
Odd but pretty decent, not my thing, felt too unsettling for me to fap, but that's just personal preference, so I can't think of any real criticisms
I liked it, wouldn't really call 17 /ss/ though (personally I consider 15 the max for that) but it's good, the flavored pussy was a nice touch. On a whole I'd say the romance was nice, smut was good, and it had no noticeable flaws, would love to see you do more
>would love to see you do more
While we're not going to continue that story, SmAA is working on a sequel to that Electric Sleep fic we did. I helped him for a bit, and then I kinda burned out (think I'm getting SAD, this shitty weather means I've not seen the sun for a week). I'm not even sure if this next one is going to have smut in it.
>I'm not even sure if this next one is going to have smut in it.
I already have some ideas on where we can fit the smut in, don't you worry about that. Don't underestimate how I can fit that stuff in without making it seem forced.
[nospoilerson/d/]I'll have to discuss the details with you later, but I can give you the general gist of it if you pop back in our google doc. I also finished that one segment of banter I was working on earlier too.[[/nospoilerson/d/]
I once ran into a bestiality story that involved it. Woman was presented with the reality that she was going to be public use, then presented the option of being used by dogs. Goes with what's behind door B... and is made public use after that's done.
Drider story hit a wall, as I often do.
I have this chunk of dialog that I'm really proud of but nothing to follow it up with.
He's a psychiatrist/alchemist who met the human after she was voluntarily committed to his private psych ward because her rich parents wouldn't let her be an agoraphobe in their basement anymore.
He neglects her as a patient for a few years to use her as a guinea pig figuring out how to make blood more nutritious to vampires. When he perfects it he decides to quit the job at the psych ward and be a full-time alchemist and he volunteers to take the agoraphobe with him. That's where the story left off.
http://pastebin.com/VpvQpUP6 Tags: Male Vampire Psychiatrist / Human Female Patient, minor injury and blood, fingering, vaginal sex
The next part will be cohabitation in his house. A lot of the idea is that what works for vampires works well for a person who is terrified of the outside--permanently blacked out windows, for instance.
"With his mind preoccupied on said events, Dakar failed to notice the tell tale shimmers of invisibility following the road behind him.." I'm never fond of a limited POV story telling something outside of that POV's. I believe the term is author intrusion, but if he didn't notice it, then don't mention it. It also gives it a larger impact when it becomes important. Plus, double "..". I follow Chicago style (at least) where you have an ellipse of exactly three periods (...) potentially followed by the end of a sentence (.) for 1, 3, or 4 periods in a row, never more or less. :)
"showed signs of occupation despite him having cleared it less then a week ago." Damn, this area populated again? :)
"Turning to face her, he reached behind him [to] unsheathed the Ice Monarch from [his] back holster." I'm not fond of inanimate objects having possessions, but this is a case where I feel that it is his holster. You could also strike "from its/his back holster" entire and still have a useful sentence.
"she attempted to warn him off, "That's close enough friend!"" This is a case where you have a tell (she attempted to warn him off) and a show (her speaking). I found that always go with the show. This could also be seen as a POV violation since he doesn't know that she's attempting to warn him off. It could be foreplay. Better to show with body language (She held up her hand, set her jaw, and spoke sharply...)
"These aren't my Daidric boots!" Cute.
"The bandit's joke" Depending on how you read it, "the" bandit is the one he just defeated, not a new one. It would be better to describe said bandit first or at least indicate it is a new one.
I found that narrative reads better if you put a paragraph when it is a new character acting. He swings (paragraph) She dodges. She strikes (para) He dodges.
As for the scene itself, enjoyable. :)
"gauntlet of her crease" That made me smile.
"He could hear Seranas lust filled groans" (Seranas's lust-filled groans) might be a better phrasing, stronger.
BTW, I love unbirth. The details were fantastic (a bit light for me, but that's okay, I *really* like details).
The final paragraph jarred me, mainly because the story is mostly in one POV and this is in a different one. I think it would be better if you remained in his POV and just had the response muffled by her body. Or end slightly differently.
Well, just my opinions.
So, is everyone satisfied with the OP, after all?
The following modifications will be made by the next thread:
>Writefags, consider pastebin/1d4chan rather than dumping for long stories.
will go under the "this is the go-to place ..." line
>our unofficial gathering:
will go under the requests document
>to keep the thread alive
will be added after "when possible"
I'm thinking of making some Destiny shorts, of all things. I was bit by the inspiration bug. Thinking of making a smut one now so I can contribute to this thread. I don't know, could be fun. Anybody interested?
Something involving the Queen of the Reef, rewarding a Guardian that she fancies. I was thinking an Exo Titan, for the fun of a big strong machine obliterating the Queen's orfices in true hentai style. Lots of (fake) jizz. I know it doesn't make sense, but let's be honest: a lot of stuff in Destiny doesn't make sense either. I also feel it's easier to name Exos than humans or awoken.
Sounds good to me, although I'm not entirely comfortable about using 1d4chan for adding stuff not directly related to /tg/.
Fortunately, I thought ahead and made a Titanpad containing everything on the list that we can use as well, so that won't be an issue. At the very least, we can use it as a backup in the unlikely event the original list is deleted.
I'll link it here as soon as I get back to my regular computer and copy down all the new additions from this thread.
I want to make a request for a story if anybody want to write it. A girl agrees to lock her boyfriend in a chastity belt, and finds she likes seeing him suffer in it. Jump forward a few weeks, and he's still not out. She keeps teasing and toying with him, keeping him hard and aroused, but ultimately refuses to let him cum. I'd be very pleased if you could write the girl as something pic related, wearing high heels. Good luck, and thank you.
Heh, sure thing. Hell, I can make it all about Cayde if you want. Let's hope I can do him justice in writing then.
I love chastity when it's mixed with femdom and tease & denial, anything else you want thrown in there?
And would a fantasy setting be fine? Elf ears make me assume so, and I was wondering if you wouldn't mind if I where to include a bit of magical enforcement to said chastity.
Also wondering what you were thinking of for the guy, because I probably default to my usual preference of younger, possibly trappyish, and somewhat submissive guy if not outright /ss/
No promises that it would be done soon, I have like four other stories I'm going to do first and my writing tends to be sporadic but I love the idea
I wouldn't mind if she treated him nicely while continously teasing him every day. Like, instead of calling him trash, she says how much she loves him, but prefers to keep him locked up. Some ball-torture would be nice too. I love the idea of a hot girl stepping on a boy's pent-up balls with her heels. And I'm totally fine with fantasy. Love fantasy. A magical chastity belt sounds fantastic. And feel free to bring out the sex toys. I'm sure they both would do good with a nice big plug up their ass. Or at least his.
Trappish is fine. Though I wouldn't mind if they were the same age, childhood friends if you will. Take your time, I'll be keeping an eye out for it. ^^
Thank you so much. That really makes me smile. Yeah, I can come up with a few good ideas now and then. Most of it I tend to keep to myself. What's your opinion on gags? I love gags. A nice thick gag in the mouth of a girl, her lips stretched around the rubber... *Shudder* I love thinking about that.
Right now, I'm just very into chastity and denial. Though I prefer a more active, cuddly mistress than a... um, well, for the lack of a better word, bitch. You know, the kind of girl who knows you can't do anything about it, so she does her best to make it a living nightmare you want to keep on experiencing, your cock aching as she cuddles up to you at movie night, or buries your face in her pussy in the shower, begging you to stick your tongue inbetween her folds. And at night, she lies next to you, her warm breath on your face. Or even worse, she makes you spoon her, your twitching cock rubbing against her heart-shaped butt. And she keeps on denying you, your balls aching with the need for release. She cradles your balls in her hand, squeezing them (I'll let you imagine how hard or soft she squeezes), fondling them, letting you know your place, not by beating you with a stick, but by dangling the carrot just out of reach... And you love every second of it.
>I wouldn't mind if she treated him nicely while continously teasing him every day. Like, instead of calling him trash, she says how much she loves him, but prefers to keep him locked up.
That would be my preferred way of handling it too, so no worries there
>Some ball-torture would be nice too. I love the idea of a hot girl stepping on a boy's pent-up balls with her heels.
Never done CTB before, I'll give it a try though
>And I'm totally fine with fantasy. Love fantasy. A magical chastity belt sounds fantastic. And feel free to bring out the sex toys. I'm sure they both would do good with a nice big plug up their ass. Or at least his.
mind if I include a bit of a minor fetish of mine? I love the idea of sextoy that is linked to a guys cock so he can feel everything done do it but (in this case at least) can't cum from it
>Trappish is fine. Though I wouldn't mind if they were the same age, childhood friends if you will.
Mind if he's shorter? Or at least when she's wearing heels? It's giving me ideas
>Take your time, I'll be keeping an eye out for
Hopefully it won't take more than a month
Knock yourself out. That magic toy sound fantastic. I can imagine the elf playing with it, plunging it into her while her boyfriend is forced to watch and endure it. Heh, a young girl's gaping holes after playing with a large toy... Anyway, yes, sure, everything sounds great. I'm glad we're on the same page. I'll write your name down so I don't forget it. Use your ideas, I don't want to hinder your creativity. You sound like you already have something planned, so that's good.
Actually, came to think of something. What would happen if that magical toy was used on the boy? It's linked to his cock, right? So, if he licked it, he'd essentially be licking his own cock, or at least feel like he is, right? What if the missy were to peg him with it? By the way, I love the idea of him not being able to cum at all, no matter what is done to him. That's the kind of thing that makes me diamond.
Gags aren't really my thing, and any that showed up in the fic would probably be on the guy, but if you have an idea I might try something
Actually thinking about it I do like the idea of a scene with him having one while she has him bent over her knee playing with his ass/giving him a few spanks (maybe because he tried to get the chastity belt off?)
>Though I prefer a more active, cuddly mistress than a... um, well, for the lack of a better word, bitch. You know, the kind of girl who knows you can't do anything about it, so she does her best to make it a living nightmare you want to keep on experiencing, your cock aching as she cuddles up to you at movie night, or buries your face in her pussy in the shower, begging you to stick your tongue inbetween her folds. And at night, she lies next to you, her warm breath on your face. Or even worse, she makes you spoon her, your twitching cock rubbing against her heart-shaped butt. And she keeps on denying you, your balls aching with the need for release. She cradles your balls in her hand, squeezing them (I'll let you imagine how hard or soft she squeezes), fondling them, letting you know your place, not by beating you with a stick, but by dangling the carrot just out of reach... And you love every second of it.
And you've just summed my preferred type of dom (at least not without getting into some very /d/ fetishes like giantess or inanimate TF)
>What would happen if that magical toy was used on the boy? It's linked to his cock, right? So, if he licked it, he'd essentially be licking his own cock, or at least feel like he is, right? What if the missy were to peg him with it?
That's part of the reason I like the idea
Also what do you think of a slight degree of feminization? Probably not more than the missy making him grow his hair out but I have an idea or two for it
>Giantesses and that other thing is not part of my fetish. Nor is vore.
No worries, I have no intention of throwing something like that in unless the requester specifically asks for it, also how I like the doms for those fetishes wouldn't fit with the GF's personality at all
I mostly just want a bit of feminization because of a bit with her playing with his hair before commenting how cute it (and his ass) looks as she slowly eases a buttplug in and her "encouraging" him to grow it out would be a good way to show her control over him. Also a subtle hint at how long he's been in chastity after a time skip
Sounds perfect. I'm already into it. Well, like your trip, it's time for me to hit the hay. Good night, Sleep, and good luck with writing all those short stories. I'll be looking forward to read my requested one. :3
Thanks man. Hahaha interesting to see that somebody thinks that the transformation was horrifying, it seemed tame but really sexy to me, the women undergoing a TF without knowing it's happening trope gets me diamonds, even moreso when they find out. Glad it appeals in a different way to different people. Also, new to this stuff, please explain "munchkined" :/
It's definitely hard to follow what position they're in, but it's a complex fetish in practice (if it ever were to actually be) and the contortions and twists are nuts. If I could illustrate that would help a ton.
He definitely fucked up by not considering her own fetish, and you're right that it could be a point of contention. I plan to bring it back up in the future, like when she wants to try something he's unsure about, she can easily dangle it over him in a "you owe me" sense.
You read my mind. He's gonna end up real scared that she can get anybody she wants, but lucky for him she's gonna make that possible without ever leaving him, if you catch my drift.
Much appreciate the feedback, I'll post the next chapter here when it's done if anybody is interested.
I'm the anon that was writing that centaur fic, so here it is. Please, give me some honest critique on it.
M/M, Centaur Male/Human Male, cock worship, face-fucking, happy endings, fluff
I'm currently in the process of writing a story about femdom and amazons and I have a bad case of writers block, how do I break it?
Also, critique and advice would be appreciated if you have some.
I'll try to force myself and see where it goes.
If you do find time to review, my native language isn't English which explains the grammars. Working on that to my best ability.
>Writefags, consider pastebin/titanpad rather than dumping for long stories. You can also use 1d4chan for /tg/-related smut.
will go under the "this is the go-to place ..." line
>our unofficial gathering:
will go under the requests document
will go under Master smut lists
>to keep the thread alive
will be added after "when possible"
Sure, I'll ask them if they're interested in doing this.
You might be interested to know that it's "to the best of my ability" and grammar, respectively, then.
If you feel the way you use the english language is awkward at times, you can always ask for someone to help you with editing.
The /d/raw threads use an anchor system, where an anon creates an anchor post for drawfags to link when they get a delivery done. This way it is easier to spot deliveries, rather than browsing the entire thread.
We may want to have something like that here as well.
Yeah, but they have a problem in that their requests usually also have attached images for reference, so you can't easilly distinguish what is a request and what is a delivery. We can just ctr+F for pastebin.
Note that I'm not opposed to it on principle.
If you feel it necessary we can always use the OP as an anchor. So every writefag making a delivery could also quote the OP.
Sorry, in the morning became after work
Don't think that word means anything in that context, what are you trying to say?
>Making a coughing sound, the propeller start turning.
Doesn't sound quite right, something like
>As it made a coughing sound, the propeller start turning.
Would be better in my opinion
Still reading chapter 1 and while some of the wording can be taken as awkward, I don't see much actually wrong with it.
It's also very hot so far
I like them, but they're not the sort of thing I'd want to see in these threads
Also I think the /d/ mods hate them
Sorry for the delay,
>Even when I'm writing in my first language it's hard for me to spot my own mistakes.
Yeah, same here, I probably won't catch all but the most glaring
Some are good, a lot are poor, but that's the same for most everything
But captions threads tend to disappear really fast on /d/, I'd be a bit worried if these threads ever became caption heavy
It's more trouble than it's worth, and writing a full fic based on a picture instead of a caption jammed into the margins of said picture really lets you do far more in the long run.
Sounds like a good idea. In this case, the OP itself would be the best anchor.
I've thought about writing stuff. There are a lot of particular ideas in my head, and specific fetishes that I have not been able to find in any real amount. Tentacles are everywhere, so that's rarely an issue. TG is plentiful, but it's all dried out and shitty now. There's some aphrodisiac play but it's rarely actually good. Shit like that. There's a bunch of other stuff, too, but those are my arguably my top 3 in no particular order. Rarely do they come together.
I have a few stories, both incoming a demon. One idea is sort of what I posted at the end of the Cursed thread (don't want to cross post).
I've started writing a story for /d/, but I can't help but feel like maybe I bit off a longer narrative than I should have. It's like the length of what is ahead gives me a writing block, so I keep pausing.
Well here is my first attempt and first draft for you guys. Dragon transformed into a dragon-girl and then fucked. Don't be too upset if it's mediocre, I'll get better.
Just had idea of this, with enchanted fake ears that turn the user into an elf maiden the longer without orgasm but the wearer cannot remove the ears or pleasure his/herself.
Or they could be the opposite, and they can only be removed by going WITHOUT orgasm for a day or so. OR each orgasm turns the wearer more elven, and the ears can only be removed when fully human which occurs naturally.
Guys, I'm in a bad place.
I've been dealing with a lot of difficult criticism with my work, it basically boils down to the idea I want to base a story around being one that a lot of people don't agree with.
I want to try and actually do this idea, but after all the shit that I went through with people tearing it apart, I can hardly bear the thought of starting again.
What do I do?
So you're getting well-argued dissent over something you're writing with the goal of generating dissent, and you're not happy with that?
Or am I misreading
>I want to base a story around being one that a lot of people don't agree with
I never wanted it to generate any dissent. Its just that I'm worried, based on this guy's reaction (and the reaction of a few tentative probings I've made) that it will.
And I'm finding it hard to get myself to actually go on with it because of this.
The idea I want to implement is something that will put the characters in the story through a lot of stress (drugs/medical procedures mostly, that have some unpleasant side-effects) and the thrust behind this guy's criticism is that he feels I'm making it needlessly edgy by making things harder for them, because he believes things are hard enough for them as it is (they're basically going through boot camp).
The given problem was, "find the indefinite integral of ∫ (x^2)/(1+x^2 ) dx.“ And I was eager to. To change this rank and disgusting abnormality into divine perfection.
I have… I guess you might call it a… “peculiarity.” Ever since I began puberty, around 13 or so, I found myself… attracted to solving math equations, numbers, any and all kinds of proofs and mathematical logic. I haven’t talked about it to anyone.
I began to develop an obsession with solving problems, and soon excelled in math. My peers thought me abnormal for having such skill, and I suppose it is. But to explore formal proofs is to touch the face of God, and find joy there. I’m majoring in mathematics for this reason.
I was in my room, solving the homework that is due on Monday. This was the best part of the week for me. It was my deepest sorrow that no one may know about the love I feel, the hope, the beauty, every single day. Truly, I lived a blessed existence!
My pen quickly moved across the surface of this white canvas. “∫ ((x^2+1)-1)/(1+x^2) dx," I begin. Already I had separated the equation- no, the challenge- into separate parts, like how God made a firmament between Heaven and Earth on the second day. I had now indicated a hidden number, as part of a grand and wonderful plan, a path to salvation. This excited me terribly. The logic cannot speak, or know, or love, or be anything besides itself, but I embraced it as a companion and a friend. I had changed it, and made it better, and it knew my devotion.
I continued. “∫ 1 + (-1/(1+x^2 )) dx.” Already I was shaping this, like how a sculptor carves a block of granite into a beautiful reflection of Man. But there was even more to be found after this.
My heart raced at the thought of what came next. The Answer. The Revelation, the information which shows an aspect of the Divine, one tiny aspect of the laws which govern the universe. I lived for moments like this.
x - arctan( x ).
>Writefags, consider pastebin/titanpad rather than dumping. You can also use 1d4chan for /tg/-related smut.
will go under the "this is the go-to place ..." line
>our unofficial gathering:
will go under the requests document
will go under Master smut lists
>to keep the thread alive
will be added after "when possible"
>For drawing requests check out the /d/raw thread
will be added under "this is the go-to place to discuss" since the people over at the drawthread decided to mention our general in their OP, after all.
I have no idea what to say about anchoring. Maybe:
>Writefags, quoting the OP when delivering a story will make it easier for everyone to find (and critique!) the new stories posted in each thread.
under the "this is the go-to place" paragraph, or under the "we thrive on criticism" paragraph?
Also I will try to make the DISCLAIMER line a tad bit less negative to make it clea requests make the world go round, and may use some combination of the old
>People especially appreciate it when you give them meaningful feedback and criticism, so make sure to do so.
with the "we thrive on feedback" line to make it abundantly clear we also want critiques.
Finally, will add:
>writefags, though not mandatory, you are advised to try and tag your stories so that people know what they're looking at. This is likely to attract more feedback from people who are interested in the themes you're exploring.
under the anchoring line.
More extreme situations strain suspension of disbelief. So when you want to write extreme stuff, its a dilemma. You can try to balance elements in your story to acccount for this. There are two quick ways: balance and tempo.
Balance means writing a variety of situations and motives, like putting in moments of humour (e.g. sarcasm can be hilarious in a first-person erotica story) or emotional relief (e.g. praise from a normally critical character). Tempo is about making the extreme moments happen at the appropriate time and place in the story. For example, if you were writing an erotic love story about chastity, but then change it to an erotic enslavement story, it will disrupt the suspension of disbelief if you do that without some explanation that people can see.
Yeah, I think you misread it. But that form of sentence is infamously ambiguous. See: "George wondered whether Scott was the author of Waverley"
I think he meant that he 1) wants to do a story about idea X. 2) it is the case that there many don't like idea X.
As opposed to: 1) I wanted to write a story about idea X. 2) I want people to disagree with idea X.
I am a simple person. I started writing erotica since 2004. By then, under the form of fanfiction or smut. I wrote pretty much anything; to see how far i could go while improving myself. I never thought i would live of it and truth be told it is harsh.
The market is mostly female and what the readers want, the writers write. It isn't easy to stand among thousands Amazon publishes everyday and even harder to actually sell for Amazon as a freelancer.
The three basic searches most women seek in literature is romance, character and foreplay. The setting is far more important than the description of the act and, believe or not, the only thing women want is weird sex with dinosaurs.
The worst part is that women in their whole have a far stranger range of philias than the common man. Believe or not i have read books about women having sex with cars, yes with cars, their cars such as Wheels of Passion. Or best sellers like Helicopter Man Pounds Dinosaur Billionaire Ass are, has it implies very serious stories.
And no, i am not making this up.
There also Homo Thug which even received an award.
For some reason, there's an unusually high demand for erotica featuring billionaire dinosaurs.
And that's actually normal compared to a ton of other stuff you can find on Amazon. Just look up anything by one Chuck Tingle and you will see for yourself.
Are they sapient raptors that drink tea with the protagonist before engaging in romantic intercourse respecting enthusiastic consent standards with the heroine, or are they mindless monsters that rape some unlucky adventurer?
You need to be more precise.
Remember that bbc episode where some strange ass bird started to hump the cameraman? I want a woman recording actual natural behaviour based on the latest geological and paleologic theories about behaviour intelligence and form until she is shagged by one.
Ok, so. You request a story about a young paleologist who is recording the behaviour of raptors in their natural habitat until she is discovered and raped by them.
Sounds fairly simple. Any Writefags willing to take this up?
>I gotta lay the ground work for the rapey half-veela in my hp au fic. Good smut doesn't just arise out of context-free situations.
Hell, this is what makes consensual Daemonette on Sororita smut so damn hard; You need to set up how they're together and NOT trying to purge one another...
>Or they could be the opposite, and they can only be removed by going WITHOUT orgasm for a day or so. OR each orgasm turns the wearer more elven, and the ears can only be removed when fully human which occurs naturally.
The latter two sound more erotic to me...