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>Please wash your hands before consuming your rations
>The Imperial Ministry of Health.
I get about a page done while edging.
>write a little
>edge and imagine what happens next
>write it down
The problem is when I come back to edit it and it's just a bunch of disconnected horny stories that's hard to string together.
Some anon(s) came up with this idea a while back... Any writefag around kind enough to bring life to it?
I've never really managed to fap to anything I've written (at least for ten years). By the time I've done putting it on the page, it's pretty much drained of all excitement. But, others like it, so I'm happy.
Funny, I'm the exact opposite. If I couldn't fap to something I had written, I would consider it a total failure. Luckily for me, that's never happened yet and I don't predict it will anytime soon.
Okay, so after much internal turmoil I broke down and wrote my first story. It's significantly more vanilla than just about anything on /d/ and I know futa isn't a favorite around here, but I've been craving something that is both bisexual and happy. So, hopefully someone else likes it.
Conbert and the Cleric
And in traditional /wst/ style, it's in a D&D setting. I plan on continuing it and adding more characters, including a few monsters, so we'll see if there's any desire.
I cannot fap to my stuff either but I think it's more because of the powerful pills the doctor has me on.
They fuck with my mind and body terribly and writing smut is about the only way I can get a proper erection anymore but I cannot fap to it.
The "having to come up with new ones" has been my curse since I've been twelve. For any given scene or fantasy, I can either fap to it three times (give or take) or write a story, but not both. It has been frustrating for *many* years, but it also means that I'm conversant with a wide variety of fetishes and very little shocks me. :)
I would love any yuri stories (and illustrations even more so) about a civilized, innocent, modest girl visited by a playful, lewd, nudist animalgirl twin of herself.
e.g. Serious high school girl put off relationships to focus on school, wakes up in the middle of the night to a mysterious naked catgirl twin, who makes lesbian love to her until morning and then disappears, and that's her sexual awakening (in whatever direction you want).
Most of us when we were on /tg/ never cared much for futa, or at least nobody really showed interest. Of course, since we're on /d/ now things have changed.
Also, put that in a pastebin and tag it please.
>I know futa isn't a favorite around here
What universe do you live in?
>So, hopefully someone else likes it.
Overall, I loved this. I thought it was great in very many ways. Seeing as this is your first story, I wanted to put together some of my detailed thoughts on it. So I put together pic related. You may have to save it to zoom in, but it is legible.
I wanted to clearly note that I am not a writer nor much of a super active reader, but I am sure the hardened word-wizards will agree with my comments.
I reformatted the dialogue to something more common since it's what I'm used to.
Are you sure you're not me? I've been struggling for a long while to find someone who likes things as extreme as me (though somehow I doubt that it causes you as much angst as it does for me), you ever decide to write something and fancy splitting the workload, let me know. Be fun to work with you.
I found it is easier to list the things that don't turn me on (which consists of the following: scat, vomit) than to list things that have turned me on (everything besides scat and vomit). :) But, it has caused me a great deal of trouble over the years. "So, what you do last weekend?" "Edited my erotic lesbian cannibal novel." doesn't exactly go very well. :)
The best thing I can say is don't worry about being yourself. Yeah, you might have an interest that no one has, but eventually you find places like /d/ where you find a home. It's easier if you draw though because not enough people appreciate stories (one reason I'm hanging around here and various /lit/ or /elit/ channels).
I like working with others, but lately, I haven't had time. I'd answer at lest a few of these, but I'm in the process of finishing a weekly serial for said lesbian novel plus working on a commission.
If it wasn't for the commission, I'd probably be trying to write one of these stories. I really want to do a few of them (lizard breeding... yummy).
There's always going to be oversensitive anons; that's why tags are so important. It gives the sensitive types an early warning that they should just skip it.
Don't get discouraged and know that there's always going to be an audience for you, no matter what it is you're writing.
This thread has become so weeaboo, after coming to /d/. Where are all the western content??
Like that ever happened in /wst/. More like it has only been only a week and western contributors are busy elsewhere, not the first time it happen. Inker is practicing for exemple.
If this thread devolve in written futa/farting/whatever others weird /d/ fetishs general we can always create back the /wst/ threads anyway.
Stop worrying so much about hypotheticals, it only makes things worse. Post content, request content, do anything EXCEPT bitch and moan because that just guarantees nobody is going to get anything done at all.
It's pretty simple. You post the general idea of what you want written (or drawn), and if you're lucky someone will like it enough to pick it up.
Whether that happens or not depends on who's on at the time, but as a rule you should give as much detail about what you want as you can. Don't forget to put it in that requests document database- it'll stick around in there even after the thread 404s so there's no need to repost it.
As the other two replies to your post suggest, don't get discouraged if nobody picks it up. You can always try again another time.
>Someone read the story
>And liked it
>With helpful criticism
>What universe do you live in?
Sorry, I could've sworn that I read in some past /efg/ that most here don't really liked futa. I know /d/ loves 'em, though.
>Just saying here. I honestly thought he was about to get raped.
That was the idea, that if it were most other stories he would've.
>The narrator has never once referred to her as 'Maddie' since she mentioned it. Why start now?
Ah damn, thought I had got all of those. I had changed the relationship dynamic, but thought better of it and changed back. Whoops! Quick edit to fix.
What'd you think of it after the wine? That's where the commentary stops.
Not that anon but more commonly several kinds of drugs taken for attention deficit will have side effects like that. I've taken everything up to the anti-psychotics and I'd say about half of them do that.
I got a bad Vitamin B12 deficiency leading to severe depression so I got pills and vitamin supplements from the doctor.
Usually I would fap at least 3 times a day but now I haven't fapped for weeks. I write smut for /gfd/, the only way I can feel some sort of remnant of sexual excitement.
It could be worse, a known side effect of Sertraline is bouts of suicide and hopefully I'll be able to pop a proper boner as soon as my depression clears.
I've been there. My sex drive has never been the same since I got Crohns. For a long while, jacking off just wasn't worth it; it'd be over in like two minutes.
Even now, I tend not to do it much; sometimes I get to the point where it just stops being enjoyable, and the only satisfaction I get with cumming is the knowledge that I can stop.
I wish to see this cute Twi'lek guy(The person in the middle), laying on a couch like the man on the right. The image on the left is how the headtails look without the hat on. His skintone can be a splotchy green/white pattern throughout his whole body like his face is.
I planned to have it done a few days ago, but life-related delays set me back. I'm looking to knock off the majority of the rest of part one tonight. In other words, expect late this weekend or early in next week.
>What'd you think of it after the wine?
Mostly masturbation. The thoughts I did have I deemed as just compliments and unnecessary critiques to your writing style. I didn't think anything I had to say there was very substantial.
It was mostly just the dirty bits there. Which were executed quite well. It was detailed enough to be a story but simple enough to not obscure masturbation with reading comprehension. And I don't want lube on my dictionary.
>Keep writing senpai, the world needs you
>Tell people you'll have a story done last week
>Things come up and you end up getting only some of it done
>Say you'll have it this week
>Simply be lazy all weekend instead
>Will be doing things next week
I really should stop trying to set deadlines
No healdo story this week either, may have a WIP by Sunday though
So /ws- I mean /efg/, how do you stay focused when you should be writing?
Hi there. This is a story about sex in micro gravity.
Tags: monster girls, hetero, fantastical science-fiction, telepathy, goo-girl, lava-girl, zero-g coitus, undertones of mind control, deep throat, cunnilingus, female-on-male rape, porn with plot, ambiguous protagonist fate, rest in peace Bowie.
P.S I am in dire need of constructive criticism.
Exciting, thanks. Also posted in the doc and will update and clarify things too.
The animalgirl's intelligence is up to you. If she speaks both human and animal, I do prefer normal words with occasional animal sounds between sentences, rather than ikamusume-style puns or mixing sounds with words (like "purrrrfect").
Some more possible ending ingredients:
- Animalgirl comes again some time(s)
- Girl runs away with animalgirl, or animalgirl stays with girl
- Girl turns into an animalgirl herself, either permanently or when she's with animalgirl
Had idea from a caption I once saw with a guy who gets abducted by a river dwelling slimegirl during the wet season for sex, before being returned the next day.
From there, he would return throughout the season and through prolonged exposure/osmosis turn into a slimegirl as well, and be unable to exit the river during the dry season, before going native and joining in on the abductions the following season.
>I would love any yuri stories (and illustrations even more so)...
>...about a civilized, innocent, modest girl visited by a playful, lewd, nudist animalgirl twin of herself.
...Oh, that's rather more specific...
>- Girl turns into an animalgirl herself, either permanently or when she's with animalgirl
Hmmm, any preferences on the Animal?
...And how set are you on the Twin thing?
>From there, he would return throughout the season and through prolonged exposure/osmosis turn into a slimegirl as well, and be unable to exit the river during the dry season, before going native and joining in on the abductions the following season.
Woman is sexually frustrated with partner.
She buys experimental suplements and feeds them to him without him knowing.
The suplements slowly make the man's cock and balls grow.
Two points of view with the man slowly becoming aware of his new assets and the exploration of his changing body. And the woman becoming increasingly lustful, to the point she can't help herself as her sexual fantasies slowly become reality.
If I had the willpower to write that Slimegirl TGTF story, it would be about budding romance/friendship between the Slimegirl and the protagonist, as Slimes abduct people to live off their "fluids", and retaining individuality despite a hivemind instrumentality/mentality through slime TF.
I lean towards feline or canine.
Sorry to burst any bubbles, but I would not choose slime or other naturally shapeshifting creatures. I would prefer the animalgirl twin were mysterious, and shapeshifting ability would solve the mystery too much.
I think if the animalgirl is a twin, she can have some interesting meaning - say, as a manifestation of the human girl's repressed or latent sexual desires.
At the very least, the animalgirl could look like someone the human girl knows - maybe the human's lesbian crush which she won't admit to.
If it's some stranger then, well, that was fun, but basically no more than a supernatural one-night stand.
The human being a girl is important because I'm just not a TG person.
Requesting something involving a Sister of Battle Hospitalar who nursed the baby orphans of soldiers who died in battle. Her formerly gene modded boobies become divinely blessed with blessed milk that other Sisters sup on before going out to battle.
Kinda like a WH40K version of Seiken no Qwasar
Alright, here we go. There were a few simple errors that could use correcting but were not particularly serious. I did notice that you tend to use superfluous apostrophes, however. You used them in the pluralization of golem a few times. Also, as a physicist, I feel the need to reprimand you with respect to the unit Kelvin. Kelvin is a unit in and of itself. There is no such thing as a degree kelvin. Also, lava is vastly more viscous than you portray it as. Then again, it's monstergirl smut, so whatever.
As far as the story goes, it was very enjoyable. The overall length was about right, but I would have preferred to see more smut relative to the length of the story. The pacing was fine and the tone reflected the action fairly well. The story part led rather smoothly and naturally into the smut.
If I had to make criticisms of the smut, the first would be that his transition was far too fast. Mindbreak is among the most difficult of fetishes to write and you missed the mark by quite a bit. His actions do not make sense, given his mental state and the relatively mundane form of stimulation. He almost seems like he switches into NPC mode the moment the smut starts. The voice even shifts away from his perspective slightly. If this is intentional, it does not achieve the effect you probably wished for. Instead, it comes off as a bit stilted. You also could have done more with the scene itself. You built an excellent setup with a pair of ooze-like twins in zero gravity, but never took advantage of any of this. The great thing about viscous women is that they aren't really limited by anatomy. In space, this only becomes more apparent. Form manipulation and even melding could have added a lot to the scene. The threesome could also have been played up a lot more. As it was, the second girl seemed more like a hanger-on than active participant.
Aside from what I said above, you did a good job emphasizing the nature of the women. Sensation was well-described and fitting. I also enjoyed how straight you played their golem features during sex.
Overall, I did quite enjoy the story. Most of my complaints are minor and with respect to the smut. Basically, it just needs more: more smut and more depth to the scene. You make a great setup then don't take it as far as you can or probably should. I'm not suggesting to add any new fetish content, but just to make full use of the biology of your characters and the scene itself.
I've read quite a bit of your stuff before and what I said here is broadly true for most of it. I am glad to see you posting around here, though, and would love to see you stick around, particularly if you start to emphasize the smut a bit more. It's always nice to pick up new writers. We're also a whole lot nicer to our writefags than some other, unnamed generals and will actually give feedback.
I have a couple of possible ideas involving some giantess, hourglass expansion and light lesbian action.
In WoW during BC there was a boss, vexallus, who would emit sparks and attacking the sparks would make your character grow in size, but it would also make you take a buncha damage until you killed the boss and then the effect would end. Would like to ask for something involving a night elf absorbing them and gradually growing out of her clothes and plumping up like an hourglass ending up barely fitting in the room.
There was also a drink in scholazar basin you could drink over and over again and become enormous with and you'd get drunk as hell as well. I'd be grateful for a couple of curious night elf women who have yet to confess their feelings for one another to get drunk, grow out of their clothes and plump up into a sexy hourglass. There's also a stormy shelf that always rains where they could cuddle up together before/after drinking. Honestly mostly into the growth aspects over anything else.
I just cluttered a couple of night elves, a giantess and a sexy plump chick in the picture for clarification.
hello, thread previously known as wst
I dont have much again: real life conspires to keep me from spending enough time on a single thing.
i have been practicing some, so here's some sketches. last one is a wip i hope to ink by next weekend.
did anyone have any requests for me that i missed?
Those sketches look pretty good. The poses of the first and fourth make me think they're consensual, so it'll be interesting to see how the one you're planning on inking turns out, especially since it's not immediately obvious what the setup/pairing is. The third one jumped out at me since you don't do reptilian creatures much - was it just an experiment, or were you planning on doing more?
I didn't see an requests left for you, but I haven't been following the threads super-closely over the past few weeks. I wouldn't mind seeing the Vampire/Seer sketch you posted a few weeks ago finished though, IMO the pictures you've done of that pairing have been some of your best.
so im looking for more like this, shemale transformation stories. most forced feminization stories end up with the male getting castrated or permently flacid or with a full on pussy.
need more shemales D=
This needs to be tagged with Death, Snuff, or something of the sort. I can't give any sort of feedback because, after taking an initial skim through, it turned out to be not my sort of thing at all.
Has anyone seen much smut of a fetish (I don't know if there's a proper name for it, seems doubtful) involving women eating the cum of a creature or person?
Not because of some kind of contrived reason that its what they need for sustenance (although that's also good if its done well), but purely as a fetishy idea.
One good example I found was a /ss/ story I once came across where these women were so devoted to the shota because of his huge dick (yeah yeah, I know) and one scene that stuck in my head was when one of them "milked" his dick into a glass when he was having his breakfast, and then ate out of it in front of him.
Kinda gross when you think about, yeah, but that may be why it gets to me so much.
No, /tg/ as in Traditional Games. Common mistake for first time visitors here.
We're an outlier to the rest of the board, inasmuch most of the active contributors are indifferent to dickgirls at best. The sheer amount of dickgirl material that already exists makes it functionally impossible to write anything with them that isn't either overdone, cliche, or just plain works better as a visual than as text.
Still, you never know when you might get lucky enough to get a taker, so dump it in with the rest of the requests in the link at the OP.
>or just plain works better as a visual than as text.
This is the fundamental reason that futa wasn't common in /wst/. Futa is inherently a point of visual appeal: You get to SEE two female bodies at once while the standard sex act occurs without having a male to look at. (Although most good porn artists drawing for a male audience will de-frame or underdetail the man unless his traits are relevant)
In a written piece, you can't lean on that simultaneity. Description is description, and describing two pairs of tits isn't noticeably more titillating than a description of one pair. Thus, the primary appeal of futanari is lost in a purely textual medium.
i was joking, i know what the tg board is for
it's not so much the duality of it, but the hypersexualization of it. you're giving someone a new sex organ and jump starting their libido, so not only do they have to deal with the embarrassment, but they have an influx of new desires. an entire new end of the sexual spectrum becomes open to them.
with the shemale stories, the main character has to deal with being treated as a subservient woman and a sex object, because even though he's filled with new emotions and a new body, he has to deal with the desire to be penetrated, and not even as a woman
Not really, inasmuch as most of them I've seen don't even attempt to do what you describe. 99% of the time, it's just finding new synonyms to describe the same basic "plot" of "woman has a penis now, and this makes her a nymphomaniac". Given that people here value the story as much as the smut if not more so, it's frequently considered mutually exclusive with quality writing
More importantly, it's just a big old fashioned turn-off to many active contributors here. (Yes, we understand we're an exception to the rule that /d/ is for dickgirls.) If you want anything with futa that doesn't have a damn good story behind it, you're often better off writing it yourself.
TL;DR: Writing futa is more trouble than it's worth and invariably ends up being less satisfying than a picture.
I just dislike futa because of how vanilla it's become, I don't want the same story rehashed several thousand times
If you do something different I'll take a look but 99% of the time futa is as >>6652530 put it >"woman has a penis now, and this makes her a nymphomaniac"
And that's boring as hell
no shit most erotica is rehashed crap. the good futa stories well weigh in on the emotional aspect of it
besides im looking for Man turned into Girl with Penis. Theres lots of sissification stories but im looking for ones where the mans cock stays intact
Isn't that normal sissification?
I thought TG was a different thing
I usually don't have any trouble finding non TG sissification, I acutally love it but I prefer it when it stays femdom and hate how it always ends with the sissified guy getting fucked by another guy so there's not much for me
Just, y'know, look for sissification or feminization, and you'll find what you're looking for
Or do you mean guy with dick + pussy
Cause I don't think I've ever seen that
This is an pic I made to go with the latest chapter of a story I'm working on.
Hope HF links are ok:
Tags: demon girl, bondage, non-con, deepthroat, bukkake
I've been thinking about something... Why don't we have a chat-thread? A thread where people can meet and chat and just lollygag around, discussing our various fetishes. God knows I want one. I'd love to meet other people who engage in erotic roleplays. What do you guys think? Should we make such a thread? Probably the wrong place to ask it, but I figured we could start the discussion here, if at all. It's not like this thread will disappear in an hour, after all.
>I lean towards feline or canine.
Well I was thinking Cow myself...
>At the very least, the animalgirl could look like someone the human girl knows - maybe the human's lesbian crush which she won't admit to.
Acceptable, the twin thing just raised to many questions for me...
>Her formerly gene modded boobies become divinely blessed with blessed milk that other Sisters sup on before going out to battle.
>Kinda like a WH40K version of Seiken no Qwasar
But is it truly a divine blessing?
>Because lesbian SoBs are hot?
Story request from some time ago. Already on the drive document but it will get more exposure here. /d/, feet need love too!
A sister of battle squads is purging a hidden slaaneshi cult intent on opening a warp portal. The cult is cleansed, and sisters destroy whatever artifacts they find. What they can't destroy, they place in a sealed vault inside their monastery.
Main: A tiny piece of an artifact resembling a human foot falls from a transport in the monastery. A lone sister discovers it and mistakes it fo a piece of broken ornamentation. She makes an amulet out of it, which begins to corrupt her when she puts it on. She soon starts obsessing over (yes, this is a footfag smut, oh well) feet in every way possible, and despite her best efforts, cannot satisfy her desires. Her self worship soon drive her to seek other sources of foot related pleasure. The sister starts to corrupt other sisters with her same desires by forcefully shoving her feet into her victims mouth/pussy, (resistance gives way to foot sex/worship) who soon spread the corruption to others. As the corruption reaches a critical mass, a giant foot orgy erupts at prayer (all sisters are attending) which begins to corrupt the room. A warp portal begins to open at the peak of the orgy, which starts physically corrupting the sisters. Many become futas which introduces footjobs into the orgy. In addition to turning pinkish, various sisters hands change to feet. The more clumsy appendage keeps some of them from getting off as much as they like, causing a buildup of sexual frustration which turns them into slaaneshi feet-abominations. The originally corrupted sister (one of the most mutated) takes charge of the frenzy leads the orgy to dominate the rest of the sparsely populated planet.
The epilogue is up to writefags
>OK, a cow is fine too.
Alright, but HOW cow?
Large-breasted Hucow/Ushimimi, quad-breasted, with or without an Udder?
>sees this thread after a long absence from /d/
Welp. I just remembered I had an incomplete fantasy story.
A centaur stallion courier gets held captive by a slutty apothecary whose life's dream is to become massively bloated from gallons of centaur cum after getting rutted by hyper-enhanced horsecock.
/d/ had better be interested.
Hello, would someone be interested in reviewing/critiquing my centaur story? I finally finished it and I'm looking for any tips and suggestions. This is my first time writing smut, so any help would be greatly appreciated.
>MxM Centaur/Human, cock worship, face-fucking
Trolls turning the shitposting in overdrive for weeks, and mods getting tired of their shit and banning everything to solve the problem. More or less.
We were purged from /tg/ when a couple of trolls decided to take out the lowest hanging fruit and trolled our threads for the hell of it by posting the lewd art and fics uncensored in our threads, making Weekend Smut Threads on weekdays, evading bans and generally making our threads misery filled holes that were autosaged automatically, at best.
The mods were no help either. They kept quiet, banned both the real /wst/ threads and the fake ones as quickly as they came and didn't do anything to help or set things straight.
The threads were banned because of trolls and the /tg/ mods did nothing.
Tags; Tentacles, Aphrodisiac, Orgasm Denial, Female POV
Girl gets trapped by tentacles. They cover her eyes then begin rubbing her body all over, coating her in an aphrodisiac fluid. Afterwards they grope and massage her breasts, and small bumpy tentacles rub the outside of her pussy, taking care to avoid her clit. She is edged until she begs for an orgasm, causing the tentacles to stop rubbing her. The tentacle blindfold is removed to reveal three mouth-like tentacles in front of her, two looming above her breasts and the third above her clit. All three then latch onto her clit and breasts and begin sucking, causing her to cum instantly, and keep sucking as she cums over and over
Pic related is an example of the mouth tentacle
Well in that case I'll post something I wrote a while ago, for /lit/, which has tentacles
I can't post a link to my ASSTR because Hiroshimoot thinks my post is spam, but there are 4 chapters if anyone is interested. Also a load of bondage stuff.
ok, another request:
A hard as nails soldier reflects on her past as a prostitute, where she was content up until she does a jig with a frontline type of guy, gets interested in that kind of work and the money. The town she works in is hit by enemy forces, to which she personally picks up some weapons to fight it out alongside others, finds out she really likes this line of work, and doesn't mind getting intimate with the other guys in her regiment.
Just aquick reminder that we have way more requests/requesters than we have actual writers. Don't be discouraged if yours never gets picked up- use it as an opportunity to jump into writing yourself.
I'm not into MxM, but since you're new around here and asking for help, I figured I'd try my hand at giving you some advise. This will likely take a few posts to get through.
First, what needs work:
You really need to proofread better. I would suggest reading aloud, as many of your mistakes are just poor constructions that can be easily found this way. Correct verb form is a persistent issue, featuring notably in lines 14 and 92. There are an even greater number of constructions that are correct but incredibly awkward. Lines 12 and 210 are particularly egregious. You make a statement and immediately contradict it with weaker language. Everything about "completely different yet somewhat the same" rankles.
There are also a number of narrative errors. You use direct quotations for thoughts far too often. Internal monologues make horrible prose. They break the flow and provide little detail. Even when you are not using direct quotes, you describe state of mind far too directly. You spend too much time telling the reader how the characters feel and not enough time showing it. Again, this hurts the flow of the story and also comes off as stilted. Instead of saying "he was embarrassed", tell how he reacts to the embarrassment or how he tries to hide his shame.
In general, you have a tendency to over-describe scenes. Line 94, for instance, can be pretty easily cut down by saying that he was having trouble hiding his arousal. There is no need to say that he's getting hard, then kinda stops it, then immediately fails. This kind of language is incredibly awkward and distracting.
These narrative errors become even more glaring due to the language you use. There is simply too much action: nearly every sentence is "he did this, so the other guy did this". While there is nothing wrong with that construction, it becomes incredibly tedious as the story goes on. This is particularly intrusive during the inspection scene.
On a related note, you may want to work on your transitions between perspectives. They are altogether too frequent and casual. You jump between the inner thoughts of characters without any indication, simply relying on the changing names to show that the reader is listening to a different character. This is particularly noticeable during the first oral scene. Pick one perspective and stick with it for as long as you need to. Instead of talking about how the centaur was enjoying the feeling of the appraiser's cock and then immediately switching to describe what the appraiser is feeling, stick with the centaur's perspective. Talk about how he can feel the man growing harder, or how the throbbing/heat/whatever told him how close the other man is.
There could also have been a better transition into the smut. The language was fine, but the development of the scene was awkward. The centaur's embarrassed only until the appraiser pretty much tell him that he's going to jerk him off. Then, all of a sudden, the mood changes. It feels like porn logic. Instead, try extending the "inspection" scene and making it a little more personal. Play up the centaur's embarrassment then seal the deal by making the appraiser do something sexual-enough that there are no mixed signals. Dialogue is going to be hammy in this scene, no matter what you do. Instead, have the petting become more and more erotic until it crosses the line, ending with something as overt as fingering or other light penetration.
Finally and most egregiously, you managed to write an entire oral-focused story about a centaur without making a horse's mouth joke. Puns are the lifeblood of fantasy smut. At the very least, you could have had an overly erotic mouth examination during the inspection scene. That would also have been a great way to show the erotic intent of the appraiser. Spending a couple minutes fingering someone's mouth is a pretty explicit way of signaling intent.
What you did well:
You set the stage pretty well. While the owner may have been largely useless as a character, the centaur's introduction is good and gives the reader a good feeling for the character. The appraiser seems to operate entirely on hentai logic, but I know all too well how hard it is to establish a character's motives with so few words.
The smut is also pretty good. There are some language and narration issues, as described above, but the scenes have definite potential. I particularly liked the hot and heavy petting in the inspection scene and the centaur's sympathetic arousal during the first half of the oral scene. Even if you change perspective too quickly, your description in the smut scenes is good. You do a good job of showing the character's arousal, which is not always easy to do. You also make full use of the scene, emphasizing the unique features of each character and drawing appropriate contrasts. One of the advantages in MxM and FxF smut with characters of different species is the opportunity to emphasize the gender-specific differences between the two species. You do this well. You also managed to dodge one of the biggest landmines in same-sex smut, the march of the indefinite pronouns. Despite the frequency of perspective changes, it is not difficult to figure out who the active character is.
In brief summary, the ideas and situations in your story are well-done but suffer from poor language and narration. If you can correct the over-description, awkward and pointless dialogue, and floating perspective, this story would greatly improve. You have some skill at establishing smut scenarios and describing the actions and sensations of the act but should probably be careful of ruining the scene with too many superfluous words. Overall, I think that you already succeeded in the hardest part of smut writing: making the sex sexy. All you need to do is iron out the details.
Thank you for the advice, as a very new writer I'm pretty bad at over analyzing/over-descripting things way too much, and dialogue is difficult at times for me.
I did feel like I rushed myself with the thought/action transitioning and didn't do it gradually.
>you may want to work on your transitions between perspectives
What are some good tips for that, are there any websites or books that deal with this?
>Puns are the lifeblood of fantasy smut.
But I'm terrible at puns.
Dialogue is difficult in general. It's easiest to avoid it whenever you don't need it. Too much talking, particularly in smut, just makes it harder to read. Basically, if you can describe something without talking, do so, particularly when describing feelings.
Unfortunately, I can't really point to any specific advise concerning transitioning between characters, but I can give a few tips that I've learned or hear from other writers. Only change perspectives when you absolutely need to. While it can be tempting to switch in order to tell how a character feels, you can describe the same scene even from another character's perspective. For instance, you could have told your entire smut scene from the perspective of the centaur. While he is performing oral, you can go into greater detail about how he can see/feel the signs of pleasure in the appraiser. You already started doing that, you just need to stay the course. There is no point in switching to his perspective to say how good it feels/how close he is when you already described how the centaur could feel the throbbing of his cock and the subtle, involuntary thrusts of his hips. Then, when the roles reverse, focus on what the centaur feels, not what the appraiser is doing.
When you do change perspectives, it's best to do so in a way that is visually and contextually obvious. Inserting extra line breaks helps, as does starting the new passage with the new character taking an action. As far as context clues go, set up the perspective change with action. The first perspective should end with the character doing something. The new perspective should begin with that new character taking an action as a response. Don't say what they feel, say what they do. This generally leads to a much smoother and more visible transition.
I hope this can be of help, but it's rather hard to describe in text. Basically, you just need to do it.
>Don't say what they feel, say what they do.
Thanks man, you've been really helpful and the advice you're giving me will really help in future stories.
>Inserting extra line breaks helps
That would definitely help with perspective changing.
I found a request that resonated with my very soul and I'm hoping it's enough to pull me from my writing slump and get me back into the game. (Perhaps I can get to a few other requests if this happens since there were others I liked)
Unfortunately, I've no idea how to cite the request in the document like other anons are doing, so could some kind soul please edit the document to show that this request is being worked on:
I'd like to request a story with the following plot:
A girl is captured by a cult for a virgin sacrifice. One of the younger members of the cult is tasked with guarding her. He's in way over his head, not expecting the group to do this sort of thing, and feels horrible about what's going to happen to the girl. He talks with her for a bit and they come up with an admittedly feeble plan to save her life. If she's not a virgin anymore, they won't have reason to kill her. They hope they can convince the group to let her into the cult after that, to keep her quiet.
Turns out she's either already a member or is the actual demon/god/whatever being sacrificed to. The sacrifice is actually the sacrifice of virginity itself, and the guy happened to be a virgin. He "sacrificed" his own virginity willingly to save the girl, and thus completed the ritual
Nah, more like still getting used to digital. I'm feeling pain in places I never knew existed when I was doing traditionals only.
I realised that a bit later on, of course that would have been the sensible thing to do.
Shilling my writefagging from /tg/ and otherwise, general tags bondage and tentacles, though not at the same time:
>Curvy girl with cow ears, tail, and slightly elongated nipples.
So a Ushimimi then?
You're in the wrong thread then because that's too human for /wst/ people/writers. We've made porn of gnolls, dragons or various sizes, skaeven, werewolves, female monsters, giant spiders, and much more weird fantasy/scifi creatures.
I finally got a chance to read this. While I'm not usually the best at critiquing, but I'll do my best.
First off, the characters were so well developed, I especially liked how even quite early in the story you could see Marus' sly, but kind nature. You showed enough of the characters that by the end I had a pretty good sense of who they were, even Hammond, who was barely in the story.
I saw no blaring mistakes, there weren't even any sentences that stood out as odd or weirdly worded, which is a problem that even I have as a writer.
The sexy part of it was great if my arousal by the end is any indicator. You certainly have a knack for knowing the right words and phrases to illicit the right mood and that skill shined in the climax of this story. Overall, the entire scene was both sexy and cute which is a wonderful combination.
The only thing I would say to work on is the dialogue which on occasion would simply sound too much like a script and not a natural interaction or was simply unneeded, but niether of these things killed the mood for me so it was certainly not that big of a problem.
I'm looking forward to what you write next. You can count me in as a fan.
PS - Your horse knowledge was incredibly broad for writing smut, are you an equestrian?
>are you an equestrian?
Nah, but I'm great friends with an equestrian and I knew some phrases and terms throughout my years of knowing him. I just looked up the rest in a glossary so I didn't make any glaring errors.
I didn't like it as well, believe me. It's one thing I'm working on though.
That's more than you usually come up with, and given our constant need for new content I can't say I would object to you giving smut another shot even after last time.
Just try not to use the Random Capitalization that you tend to do for No Apparent Reason. (Like I just did to illustrate it)
I wrote this as just a joke and then gave myself a boner. I may expand it into an actual story at some point.
>Well, well, well. What do we have here?
>Another lonely virgin who tried his hand at summoning a succubus to be his girlfriend?
>Looks like you need to brush up on your summoning circles. There's nothing stopping me ripping out your soul right here and now.
>But since you brought me here I suppose I'll give you a deal.
>If you can make me cum using only your tongue in less than a minute, I'll let you live.
>Hell, I might even let you take me on a date.
>But if you fail, your soul is gonna be mine, and don’t even think it’ll feel pleasant.
>Your one minute starts now...
>Aww, looks like the poor little virgin here wasn't able to prove his worth.
>That's ok. They never do.
>Now remember that deal. Your soul is mine now.
>You'll probably want to close your eyes for this part. I've heard it hurts like a bitch.
>Say goodbye to your existance Anon. You won't be missed.
>How was that Anon!
>I was a little nervous at first but I think that was a lot of fun!
>Are you alright?
>Aww, you're shaking.
>There, there. It was just a game.
>I didn't mean to scare you. I read some of the things in your search history and I thought that was the kind of thing you liked!
>Shhh. It's alright.
>Anon, I want you to know that I love you and I'd never do anything to hurt you.
>Here, let's just cuddle for a while. That always makes you feel better.
So I've finished writing my first fic in ~8 months or so. It still needs some proofreading and spellchecking but it'll be posted later tonight.
Expect some M-dragon of F-tiefling sex. Size difference, consensual maledom, that sort of thing.
Tags: F-Tiefling/M-Dragon, oral, vaginal, cunnilingus, size difference, large penetration, cock worship, excessive come, comeplay, consensual maledom. Minor exhibitionism.
For those of you who didn't follow the threads over on /tg/, this is part of an extended series based around the various misadventures of a Tiefling adventurer-slash-prostitute. Several of the previous fics I wrote had a slightly more serious plot arc running through them, but given this is the first time I've written about the character in over a year, I've decided to abandon that for the time being. You shouldn't need to have read the previous stories to enjoy this, but there's a few characters and past events which are touched on that might not make sense otherwise.
It is a tad on the long side, about 10,000 words. One way or the other, enjoy.
It's ended up being a bit longer than anticipated and with considerably more mindbreak themes than originally planned. Mostly I ended up getting a bit carried away and writing more than intended. It will be finished this weekend, though. I just need to finish up the end of the exposition at the end and do a once-over.
That was the plan for part two, which shall come later (tm). I have a pair of other requests to work on as well, at least one of which I shall write before continuing this one.
Incidentally, does anyone know if that smut-off is still going to happen? I rather liked the prompt and have been meaning to write something in that line anyway. I just haven't heard anything about it other than a couple people discussing it last thread.
Have some smut I wrote. I don't think I did a good job at it.
Tags involve Gnoll, Pseudopenis, Femdom, and other things I dunno. Enjoy /d/. I'll be back in the morning to see if people actually liked it. If they do, I'll type more and post it in a week or so.
I gave it a read and figured that you might appreciate some feedback. I have a couple suggestions.
There are many, many construction errors, ranging from awkward phrasing (like lines 21 and 28) to redundant description (line 43), unreasonably long sentences (line 13), and excessive word repetition. I lost count of the number of sentences that used "as" more than once to create unnecessary extra clauses.
The good news is that this is easy to fix. First, read your work aloud. This will catch a lot of these problems. If it doesn't sound right, it probably isn't. Second, stop trying so hard. I've been a proofreader for many people (mostly engineers) and have noticed that people who write this way tend to lack confidence in their writing style, thinking that they need to use more complicated constructions. This is almost never true, particularly in smut. Write the way you speak; it comes out more naturally and is easier to follow.
Aside from that, it was a fairly clean story with only a few rough points. First of all, I did not for a moment buy that the main character is a gnoll. Her manner of speech does not, in any way, match what I think of when I think of a gnoll. It sounds more like a first-time dominatrix who learned the art from porn. In general, I believe you used far too much dialogue. This is a particular issue when it is also rather cheesy and unwonted. You also interchanged penis and pseudopenis a bit too much towards the end. It became difficult to tell which you were referring to.
Finally, I'm not sure if you should use second person. It's rather difficult to write in general, much less smut. You sentence style is also awkward as a result, overusing the you [verb] his [noun] construction. Third person is more common in smut for a reason. It's far easier to write and generally cleaner.
Read your story over again with all this in mind and you'll see what I mean. It's a good start, but a bit of cleanup will do wonders.
I gotta say, that was as adorable as it was sexy. No more critiques than a few grammatical errors, either.
And I've never fapped to anything involving scales, so... kudos to you on that, mate.
So I was looking up portable hole for engineering shenanigans and I noticed this line:
>A portable hole is a circle of cloth spun from the webs of a phase spider
That resulted in some reading on phase spiders.
Has anybody every written up a phase spider girl before? Spider is already OP, this seems like it would be completely broken.
There's technically two, but one seems to be a dead link. The second one is a three-parter:
http://pastebin.com/jzW1bx8p Part 1
http://pastebin.com/ft6Xp4Nu Part 2
http://pastebin.com/Ar88ucwx Part 3
>try writing a story for the first time
>get about 500 words done
>can't stop beating it off to the scenarios I'm planning
>have zero desire to work on the story after jacking off
>few hours later, get horny again and go back to working on the story
>restructure some sentences and flesh out descriptions in the work that's done while not really adding anything new just so I can say I did something
>jack off to it again
>rinse and repeat
How the hell do you guys cope? Also, does indentation not work in online formats? Most writers don't seem to use them and put a space after every line of dialogue or paragraph instead.
It's all about willpower. Jack off BEFORE you write, and have the end result of your work in mind the whole time. Failing that, use writeordie.com, which adds a few extra motivational tools.
And indents don't always work in places like Pastebin.
Well, the way it's always been with me is that all sexual impulses I have fade for the rest of the day once I jack it.
And considering how much of a struggle it is nowadays to just start writing something, the end result is that I've not written any smut for weeks now.
I kinda wish my libido was high enough to get off to my own writing, but alas, I kinda just write while flaccid and hope that my sex scenes don't sound bored or forced which always seems to be the case
You're not me, are you? Much the same, anyway, I do occasionally find myself getting a bit tight down below when I'm writing, but that's it.
Wonder if my sex scenes are good as well, they seem alright in my head, but when I start actually writing them out it just doesn't seem to come through.
No, seriously, I get comfortable and stick an Aneros up my arse when I have an afternoon to myself. Keeps me aroused without being distracting, and when I'm done writing it makes for a great orgasm.
Granted, it kinda helps if you're actually into butt stuff.
Sorry I haven't been around much lately, have a sketch.
Also fuckit, I'll start doing sketch requests again tomorrow maybe because it's already late here.
I'm not a digital artist, but your anatomy is okay aside from a few minor things, however, it does look like you've been using texture brushes and I'm no fan of that, it looks too flat especially on his pants and her skin a bit too.
Something is weird about your background though, the way the wood panelling flows doesn't match the corner.
Glad to see you're still alive and kicking.
Also glad to see you're still around here.
From the same team that brought you Electric Sleep and Fertility Rites comes Electric Awakening, Part 1!
Have a story request here.
Guy is on the floor after losing a battle against two female goblins. They strip him of his clothing, then start kissing his chest, slowly moving down to his crotch as they do. Once there they each alternate between sucking your balls and your dick. As you cum in one of their mouths, the other slides her pussy along up your chest and wraps her legs around your head. The story ends with one of the goblins sat on his face verbally abusing him as the other milks his cock with her ass
I don't really have lewd work of that calibre, I have some non-lewd things but I keep that very separated. It's not that different, but the shadows will be just right, as will the anatomy, because I'll do studies before getting to the actual image. Right now when I look at it I can just point you to all the mistakes.
>Right now when I look at it I can just point you to all the mistakes.
Lemme guess, her arm and throat?
I can imagine that would be hard to do reference photos for. Although I did find this rather amusing one before where someone mentioned using a can of pringles...
>can of pringles
Actually her throat is fine, but her waist and torso has gone missing, her arm indeed, her calves, his proportions are out of whack compared to hers (I didn't work with a horizon line either, silly me, but I could always claim Eldar are taller and whatnot) and his left under arm is wrong.
This is also why I don't post that much, I ONLY SEE MISTAKES.
I'm also posting SOMEONE ELSE'S pic I got from one of the old /wst/ threads that I love, because too much talk and not enough images.
Yes, from the gist of what he said I reckon he may have conscripted a member of the opposite sex to use it as a prop (not like that, it was a titfuck pic).
Don't really see what you like so much about that pic, to be honest, looks somewhat plain to my jaded vision.
Would I be able to see some of your non-lewd stuff?
I thought the linework was really well done.
As for the non-lewd stuff I do pick up things in the /tg/ drawthreads once in a while. Unfortunately those are also fast. Won't post it here though, it's not the right board for that.
It's better when coloured imo
The day started off pretty well, the dogs barking let me know that I'd slept in and someone was at the door. Dazed and slightly groggy I adjusted my junk in my boxers and grabbed for my robe, tying it around my waist as I stumbled for the door. The dogs leapt at the door and I shouted "just a minute" before giving them commands to sit in their kennels. They obeyed, one in particular moving slower and more clumsily than the others.
Opening the door and greeting the stranger, I made some small talk. "Don't worry, they're friendly." I noticed him peeking curiously over my shoulder as he had me sign for the package I have been waiting for. "Have a great day" I grunted as the screen door slapped shut, closing the door behind it.
I sat down on my couch, the dogs whining for food. They knew better than that. "Cut it out," I growled at them. They silenced themselves immediately.
I opened the package, inspecting the contents with excitement. "Come here, bitch."
She trotted over clumsily and sat in front of me, watching eagerly. I patted her on the head. "Good girl!" I rubbed her back for a moment. "Present yourself."
She turned around immediately, obediantly sticking her ass in the air and pressing her face into my rug. She held still, spreading her knees slightly and using her hands to spread her ass for me.
I reached out, grabbing her ass, slapping it gently watching it giggle. For good measure I slapped each one a few times, watching it get nice and red. She didn't make a noise but she did squirm a little. "Good girl!"
I pulled the plug out of the box. I'd been promising this bitch I'd get her a tail ever since I picked her up from the club four weeks ago. Took a little while to break her in but she seems to get the program now. I played with the tip of the butt plug, feeling it's firmness for a moment before setting it down on the table.
She hates when I play with her asshole so I've been pretty excited for it to arrive.
I reached forward and grabbed her ass spreading them harder, trying to make her asshole gape a little. No luck, she was clenching. "Stop clenching," I commanded, watching her asshole closely, spreading it again. Still no give. She wasn't clenching.
I slapped her ass hard, and she whimpered a little. Still no give. I slapped the other cheek. Nothing. I got up off the couch and grabbed the back of her hair, pushing her face into my rug and rubbing it in. "I said stop. clenching."
She whimpered her understanding and I got back up, grabbing her ass cheeks roughly in my hands, trying again to spread her ass hole. There didn't seem to be much difference, but it did seem that maybe she'd tried.
I collected the contents of my mouth and spit them onto her asshole. I watched her flinch at the sound, shuddering at the contact. She hates when I spit on her. I love it when she shudders like that.
I took my fingers, rubbing it into her asshole. I could tell she must have been bearing down in an effort to prevent clenching instead. She's learning! I worked my finger into her and pumped it slowly a few times, adding more fingers as she squirmed under me, clearly uncomfortable.
I grabbed the plug and got off the couch again, going down to her face.
"Suck on this," I said, putting it near her mouth. She hesitated for a second before taking it in, making a show of licking it all over. She understood that the wetter she got it, the less this would hurt.
Getting back up, I sat back down on the couch, immediately pressing the tip of the plug to her asshole. The cold feel of it made her visibly jolt and I could see her tense up. I hauled off and slapped her ass again in warning and she went rigid, from her face I could tell she was bearing down again.
I worked it in slowly with some resistance until finally her ass seemed to suck it in. I admired my handy work, a little tale peeking out of her tight asshole. The obvious and intense discomfort on her face made me laugh.
"What's wrong? Does that hurt?" Her face stayed scrunched up but she made no response otherwise.
I got up and walked toward the kitchen, leaving her there to deal with it. I needed to feed everybody, I could hear them getting antsy. They watched me from their kennels, at full attention, eager for breakfast but well trained enough to know that rushing me in the morning will result in discipline. Training German Shepards was how I made a living, and I was fucking good at it.
I put food in all of their bowls before finally giving them the okay to have at it. The last bowl, left unattended, I stared at for a minute, laughing as I got an idea. I hadn't pissed yet this morning and I really had to go now. I pulled my boxers down, grabbed the bowl, and pissed in it, filling it almost right to the rim. I was kind of impressed, actually. I didn't know I had that kind of volume. I grabbed a spoon and mixed it in a little, making a kind of dog food piss stew. I pulled my boxers back up and went back to the living room. "Better go eat before the rest of them beat you to it, bitch."
She crawled over to the kitchen slowly, knowing that if she missed her meal, she wouldn't get to eat at all. Not to mention, she'd be punished. She knew better than to let that happen. I made myself a coffee while I casually observed her breakfast situation. I could tell she recognized immediately that I'd tampered with it. As I reached for the cream I thought I heard the sound of her gagging as she realized what I'd done. I wondered if she'd try to say something. She knew she wasn't allowed to speak. I waited, expecting something.
Impressively, she stayed silent. I grabbed some sugar and poured it into my coffee, stirring slightly before turning around and watching her. She was attempting to eat it, face in the bowl, taking a small bite.
"Don't forget to eat all of it. Every bite." I sat at the table, grabbing a newspaper and watching from a distance as she struggled.
After breakfast she seemed a bit more distant than usual, probably just nausea. It looked as though she'd cried a little bit during her meal and I could really hardly blame her. I had a bit of an erection but I decided to wait until later to do something about it. She had earned a break with her good behavior.
I decided to watch a little television to pass the day, catching up on shows I hadn't seen all week. My boys strewed around my feet, relaxing and content after a good breakfast. I made sure to rub each one down like the champions they are. Dogs are wonderful beasts. Loyal to the very end. Nothing like stupid whores that make up the female race. After years of training dogs I decided to try and see if I could train a slut. If girls want to be bitches, why not treat her like one? So far, the experiment has been overwhelmingly positive, I'm very satisfied with the results and so are my boys. They have open access to their bitch whenever they want and I film it and sell the videos online, supplementing my income.
It's very satisfying watching her whimper and struggle when they knot together. Sometimes they try to walk off while she's still stuck to them and she gets jerked along while they pump their jizz inside of her, meekly trying to make it hurt as little as possible. Sometimes I make her suck my cock while she's being mounted and film it in the POV position. I love releasing a fat load all over her face while she's getting knotted.
Her pussy is so beat up, between me and my six champions it's a wonder we haven't fucked her to a bloody pulp. I don't usually like to fuck her pussy anymore since it's pretty wrecked by doggy cock and pretty much constantly dripping with doggy cum, but her mouth is still quite serviceable. Given how well the pilot program was going I was thinking of picking up a second bitch and saving that one as a human bitch, though my hands area already pretty full with the one. Maybe next month.
Post it in a pastebin and tag it, like the OP says to do. Not everyone can be bothered to gather all of this together in one place so it doesn't vanish when the thread 404s. Plus, not everyone will like having a kink like that dropped on them unnanounced even on /d/.
There is no such story. You're probably thinking of something else entirely.
Haha, thanks. I haven't written anything like this in ten years. When I did it before I felt guilty for doing it, like I was afraid I'd get caught by my family and reprimanded and sent to the crazy bin and get my head shrunk for daddy issues while people put dolls in my face asking me to show them where they touched me because why else would a kid write like that, right?
Now that I'm a full-grown freak I should do this more often. It's pretty fun.
That was great. You really nailed it with the dragon's personality. As the other anon said, a couple of typos slithered their way in, but nothing a good proofreading will solve.
Happy to read from you again!
Unfortunate. Perhaps we should make more mention of it before this thread 404s (whenever that is going to be) and hope that there is sufficient interest. I rather liked that prompt.
Just mention it in next thread's OP. something like
>SMUT OFF: (insert prompt here)
The more eye-catching, the better. That said, these threads die slowly, so even after this hits autosage it's bound to last for a few more days at the least.
Came to check on a the magic dick-exchange story.
One where the bard loses his dick and his party has to share it before he loses it completely.
Also looking for advice on how to tell a story.
I might do a short story/greentext for that tomorrow night
No promises though
Don't remember that getting posted at all
But it's in my interest and I want to see it too
Also good, we need more body part TF/absorption stories anyway
That may be one I picked up, made no progress on any story in the last three weeks, sorry
Just haven't be in the mood to write
Story request of this girl from her POV getting it on with her parents, siblings, friends, classmates, teachers and strangers, and turning into a complete sex-obsessed nympho.
Anon, there's no need to bump your request 15 minutes after you made it. Those that do take requests have quite the backlog, so you need to expect a bit of wait--of course, that would be the perfect excuse to take up writing, yourself.
Well, now that we're /efg/ I would assume that means we're open to do any subject matter, not just /tg/ stuff.
And what kind of "weird shit" is that?
Anon here. It wasn't me who did the bump. I know full-well that writing can take a long time to do, and that's assuming there isn't any backlog to go through. It was another Anon who bumped my post.
'ppreciate you sticking up for my request tho.
I don't know if you're still following the thread, but I'd like to see some Dark Elf stuff. Morathi and her dark pegasus, or some female beast handlers working together to take on a Hydra, or even come depraved-but-consensual negotations between a lady Dreadlord and a Skaven chief.
Not an awful idea
That's the struggle. Although it's interesting. It's nearly impossible for me not to jack off to my shit as I write it, but once it's done, and I whack it to the final product, then that's like the only time my own writing can get me hard. It never does after the first time. Which fucking sucks since I'm one of two people putting out stories for my fetish, and the other one uses me as a translator. I can get off to his shit twice since its not my writing and even in his broken English his is fucking great, but since I have a hand in writing it, it loses its magic to me quickly as well. Anybody else like that?
As I've mentioned, I'm the polar opposite. Knowing that I wrote it just makes it more enjoyable. Perhaps it would help to think of your own role in writing it less, and read it as if you were reading it for the very first time.
Alternately, don't jack off until it's all done. Use a chastity belt or something if you absolutely must, as long as your willpower doesn't falter.
It all depends on yourself, anon.
It took a bit longer (read: significantly longer) than intended, but here is the promised hive tyrant on Sister of Battle story. As always, criticism is appreciated.
Tags: 40k, SoB, tyranid, rape, chemical mind control, mind break, huge penetration, excessive cum, breathplay, orgy
Part two shall come soon(tm) and feature psyker sex and reverse mindbreak. I'm unsure of where that slots into my schedule, as I have a number of yet-unfilled requests to finish, including a story about dragon breeding and another about lesbian clone sex. I'll probably finish one of those before writing the sequel. I need some time to figure out what the hell "reverse mindbreak" is.
Ever heard of the cliche of "healing sex", where fucking your One True Love™ heals all physical and mental problems?
I'm guessing it's precisely that. If not, bug the requester to say exactly what he wants so he doesn't get disappointed.
Well, as the original requester, he's a psyker, so he'll likely go into their mindscape to piece together their broken minds. However, for maximum effectiveness, he needs to be in physical contact with the patient(s), so....
Well, can't unsee all the slime rancher play throughs on youtube right now.
Of course I immediately imagined someone trying ineffectually to vacuum up a slime girl who might take exception.