Pokemon Fanfiction General and Writethread

>>28457521
Fic recap:

There was a motherload of Wicke-centric fics that have been made. Thankfully they already condense all of their content into one pastebin, so look in here for some. Assume they're all NSFW.
http://pastebin.com/KpvPszZx

Traipsingexodus started another fic called The Errant's Hearth. SFW(?)
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12140893/1/The-Errant-s-Hearth

An anon is looking for feedback for something he scrapped up to work on his style of writing. Help him out. SFW
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1As2-dv1GkFnyNmDR7dJnzcsrKqYf1eMllzw-BR8u7x0/edit

Among the Wicke love comes one for that Aether Foundation leader involving the male sun/moon protag. NSFW
http://pastebin.com/EynDJBSc


Updated fics:

Mimiga's Marriage of Mew chapter 4
http://archiveofourown.org/works/7771954/chapters/18265969

Solar's Gift of the Protector chapter 14
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10121590/14/Gift-of-the-Protector-Radiant-Heart

Gallanon's chapter 4 of his Gallade fic. Don't remember if it has a title or not.
http://pastebin.com/3ynQHee0

Snapath's wrapped up Forest Temple fic
http://pastebin.com/8WEa6q4T

I wanna see how fast /vp/ becomes in hype season

>>28457544
Considering thread dropped to page 5 in 15 minutes, kinda fast, but o recall thread dropping in literally 28 minutes

Lopunny love when?

>>28459948
Are you the Roselia fellow by chance?
I wasn't the guy taking requests, but I am a bit interested in doing it. Do you think you can make an outline and share it on a pastebin? I need to try and get the juices flowing again.
Dunno if I wanna keep it suggestive or lewd, so have a branch for both if you wish.

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Fuckin hell, last thread sure did die quick. Guess I'll just repost what I said last thread.

To the anon I was talking to 2 threads ago thread.
Well it took about a hour or so of rearranging things and rewriting a few things. But here is a improved version of things. I took most of the criticism you had to give and I feel as if I have fixed a few glaring issues with it.
http://pastebin.com/AiddFuKf (embed)

>>28457544
It's titled "Curiosity" for future refrence

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>>28460042
I'm not roseanon but I did suggest a roselia story at one point. An anon did write a storyboard for me.

I'd imagine a fic where Roselia was the first Pokemon a trainer was ever given, and has secretly been growing more and more attracted to him over time. One day while he is feeding her Pokepuffs, she gropes her owner's crotch with one of her flowers out of lust. As he gets nervous, she releases the aroma from her flowers to relax his tense body, before blushing and staring into his eyes, waiting to see how he'll react to her confession of love.

I did also suggest this last time.

How about some roselia/roserade ass play/playful teasing? The trainer could make some remarks on how his rosepokes ass looks bigger compared to the others of her species which makes her mad/embarrass.
Or you could do a short about a roserade/roselia and gardevoir competing to get their masters affection. Which could end with him loving both, just being oblivious or in sex if you can write that stuff.

I can try to come up with more stuff if you want.
I've never written on pastebin so I don't know how its works really, sorry.

>>28460395
>How about some roselia/roserade ass play/playful teasing? The trainer could make some remarks on how his rosepokes ass looks bigger compared to the others of her species which makes her mad/embarrass.
This is the one I'm interested in. While ideas that are open ended are ideal, I am have difficulties trying to make something from scratch. If you could give a bit more detail as to how the story rolls/chains together (A happens, B happen, C happens, etc) I could give a shot.

As for pastebin, all you have to do is type in the goods, click on create new paste, and share link.
http://pastebin.com/

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>>28460706
Oh boy your asking a lot from me mate but I will try to fine a good idea, since I really want to see it. I'm really not good at writing tho so don't expect a full, detailed, golden texte.

>>28461076
barebones are all I need.
Do mind the pics posted though. Don't want you to spend 3 days on vacation now

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>>28461229
Alright ill do my best if anyone else wants to try and help they are free to do it. Like I said writing and story making were never my strong point so this may take a while.
If it take more than a day its probably because I got banned for some reason will try to send you the link another way.

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http://pastebin.com/SYMtjkrL
Oh hey some more Lusamine love for once. This one has a bit more of an /ss/ teaching thing involving the S/M male protag. NSFW

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>>28461229
By the way are you expecting to try writing a short story or a medium/long oneshot?

>>28461801
Will definitely be a one-shot. Length will depend on how I'm feeling.

>>28460395
I think I have an idea for the first one. I'll see what I can do in a couple hours.

>>28461801
That ludicolo is losing his god damn mind.

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>>28462814
He's a party animal.

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>>28461229
Alright I've finally finish this thing sorry for the grammar and barebones writing like I said writing his not my strong point. I understand you guys troubles now.
Anyway hope this helps in some ways tell me if its ok and I could maybe had some more ideas later if you want and if I get more.

http://pastebin.com/DmQ3GAYr

>>28463304
Hmm...I'll pick and choose the parts I like and make some changes here and there, but I think I can do something with what you gave me. I'll see what happens when I get back from class.

>>28460138
I'll go ahead and critique/nit-pick your phrasings:
>can on cola
"on" should be "of"
>He attempted to get the phone off the nightstand with a awkward “slap” of sorts.
Why quotation marks?
The "of sorts" is unnecessary.
>This only proved as a effective way to knock over a can of cola.
The "a" should be "an".
The sentence can be made stronger with more efficient wording: "This proved an effective..."
>Disgruntled he tried again. His anger serving as a way to wake him up furthermore.
Need a comma after disgruntled.
The second sentence doesn't stand alone, try connecting them: "tried again with his anger serving...".
You can remove "as a way".
"Furthermore" is used incorrectly, "further" would be fine here.
>his phone
The phone is referred to as "his phone" or "the phone" seven times in the first four paragraphs. Use some pronouns.
>He looked at his phone to see what was so important to wake him up on his day off.
Needs rewording: "so important that..."
>Checking the phone he saw that it was a message from Sanders.
The last sentence already established that he is checking his phone, so the first of the sentence is redundant.
>gave into the fact that
Accepted?
>Ray walked into his kitchen, grabbing several slices of store bought bread and laying them onto a skillet and tossing a few pieces of sliced cheese on them to make his daily shit tier grilled cheese.
Unless Ray has a longstanding habit of baking his own bread, "store-bought bread" should just be "bread".
This structure is preferable when separating three or more ideas: "...bread, laying them onto a skillet, and..."

I'm short on text and time, so I can't finish looking at the rest right now. Try to be more efficient in your word use. Reading things out loud is a pretty good way to see if something sounds normal or if it's awkward or too wordy.

>>28463487
Alright can't wait to read it like I said hopefully my ideas help in some way. Tell me if you need more ideas I'll try to comme up with more.

>>28463487
Your able to access the link with no problems right?

>>28464059
No problem over here

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>>28464350
Alright just wanted to make sure everything was fine also bump.
The thread is dropping very fast today did the corocoro leak impact /vp/ this much? Its not like a lot of things were revealed unlike the trailers.

>>28464714
/Vp/ gets fast during news/leaks. Very fast. Before it would take a few hours to drop this fast

ITT: severe autism
>inb4 autists get mad

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pastebin.com/ss751XEi
pastebin.com/Mxm99Yfg

Two pieces I'm working on simultaneously, Still haven't decided on the MCs name although I like soul.
If anyone has any tips for developing dialogue and fight scene skills I'd greatly appreciate them.

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I will be gone for a one or two hours anyone else could bump this thread in the mean time? Just so it dosent get deleted.

>>28465065
Oh hey I remember you. I think you shared one of these stories before.
Grammar-wise, you got a long way to go. Make sure to check for typos whether by yourself, getting an anon to help, or using a program to help polish the story up a notch.

>Slyveons charm
>Sabrinas resentment
Whenever a noun is being possessed by another noun, a ' needs to be put before the s
>Slyveon's charm
>Sabrina's Resentment

You also got run ons scattered about in both passages. Look up http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm and see if you can turn them into sentences.

>dialogue
try looking at http://www.ef.com/english-resources/english-grammar/direct-and-indirect-speech/ to help with dialogue writing. Periods/Commas should be before the end of the quotation mark.
>fighting
From my experience, I don't think trainers will be shouting at Pokemon to dodge attacks (anime). At the same time, they probably wouldn't just stand there and take whatever hit being thrown at them unless they can guard it (games). My suggestion is to look at average fights in media and see if you can pick up any descriptive/action points from there

>>28465980
I shared the rough version of the rock gym before, fixed up the spelling.

Cheers for the links and feedback. Run on sentences have always been a real problem for me.

>>28465065
Check your capitalization mate. Make sure proper nouns are capitalized and decide if you're going to capitalize Pokemon and the species or not.

>>28466557
Thanks, I hadn't actually bothered to check that either.

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Do electric type attacks or electric types in general generate actual, usable electricity or just attacks that are reminiscent of it?

>>28468437
I think the attacks generate actual, usable electricity considering their relationship depicted with technology in the game and anime

>>28468437
They can power things and absorb it.

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>>28468437
I feel like it either is real electricity, or so similar that it might as well be. If you look at the descriptions of Electric-type moves, a lot of them say that they use actual electricity.

>The user attacks with an electric charge
>A flare of electricity is loosed to strike the area around the user
>The user hurls an electric orb at the target
>A strong electric blast is loosed at the target
>The user shrouds itself in electricity and smashes into its target

And so on.

This electric talks has me wondering: are fusion reactors used to produce energy in addition to geothermal energy? I never investigated the power plants in the games enough. I should probably fix that.

I want to write Plumeria smut because I have a ganguro fetish and I find her attractive, but there's not much to base her personality off of aside from her being an onee-san type. Any ideas?

>>28470045
You'll have to just guess if you don't have any real material to refer to. Take notes on her visual design and decide what of it informs you of her personality.

Worst that'll happen is you're wrong about someone who's personality wasn't confirmed at the time of writing.

>>28463487
>>28463872
guy doing that story here.
While the idea did help get my juices flowing again, my mind ended up coming up with a different take on the roselia idea.
http://pastebin.com/jZt0fQZR
If you're open to it, I could try this idea instead.

>>28470279
Sounds interesting, Its does seems to make the story a little cuter but I don't really get how a young kid would have sex or have sexual attractions at a young age. If you don't mind me saying its does seem silly to go from playful ass slap to full on sex the way you wrote it does seem like it would be more of a funny story and less of a romance/sex story. I feel like my idea would work for a longer one shot and yours would work for a short story.
I hope I didn't insult you or anything and I hope you don't get the wrong idea you are the one writing it.

>>28470279
>>28470558
Aldo I do like the defence training thing it could be a starting point for the story. Where ever you chose to go with it.

>>28470558
Hmm...perhaps school kod isn't the right word I want to use. Im thinking more of the older ones, but I'll see if I can find a similar one and incorporate some level of romance in there. There will be detailed lewds either way though, per law of being an ass man

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>>28470792
Going the be honest I do prefer my idea but this might just be me being bias. Maybe ask the others what they think would make a better story? That is if you want and what kind of story length your feeling.

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>>28463849
I never really get the chance to read out loud when I skim over it to proof read I should proofread shit more often due to the fact that I live with other people in the same house, and I don't really want to disturb them.

But other than thank thank you for pointing out what you have. I am still trying to improve my word choice, and pretty much my writing in general with this fic.

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Holy shit the thread is going down fast.

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I'm wondering is !Ee4ee/vYmA still around? I didn't hear from him for at less some time now wonder if he's ok?

>>28471449
It will be difficult to keep one of these on the front page once sun and moon drop.

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>>28468437
It's the real deal. Ever since the invention of the Pokeball, Pokemon capable of generating electrical currents have been depended on by millions of people living on the power grids.

Now for some interesting DYK.
Some electric types are able to communicate using electrical currents. Something you'd expect from a telepathic Pokemon. Sounds wild doesn't it? Well, that's not all. It is worth noting that research undertaken by Devon's neurology branch has made it possible for electric signals from Pokemon to interface with the human brain. Signals can be sent remotely to a receiver who will then conjure images based on the part of the brain stimulated by the focused charge. What a time to be alive! The potential use for mass marketing of ideas and other communications over distances is now much more feasible than depending on finicky psychic types or their human counterparts.

That's what I'm writing about.

>>28471656
Yeah they're still alive. They were in the last thread before it died an early death to the latest wave of shitposting.

>>28471916
I'm gonna shock an entire fucking library into you son, and we're starting with War and Peace.

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Alright, /vpwt/, I've made another story for your viewing displeasure. I'm still proofreading and finalizing the later parts of it, but the first chapter is here if anyone wants to check it out: http://pastebin.com/ANw7U0n6.

This one's called "The Azure Sun Rises", and like my last story, it's based off Mystery Dungeon. It's about a Lurantis and a Stoutland making their way through a dungeon. I actually wrote it a month ago, but I recently went back and revised it with what I learned from posting "The Forest Temple" here, so hopefully it's better than outright unreadable.

And as always, any kind of feedback would be much appreciated!

>>28471656
Hi, I'm here!
Tonight I finally resume work

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>>28473392
What are you going to write? Latias or the requests?

>>28473462
Honestly that depends on a couple factors, but there will be SOMETHING here tonight.

I have the following requests onboard:
>Socially Disfavored Pokemon request, featuring Absol and some Teatime Misdreavous
>Gijinka request someone mentioned a couple threads ago
>Rapidash OS
BStF still in editing, rip

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>>28473522
Damn that tea midreavus/mismagius request was made a couple threads ago, I thought it didn't interests you.

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It sucks when you like reading but despise writing an also being a beginner artist. I have all these ideas but I can't write them or draw them well.

>>28473878
Hey man, my best friend started drawing ten years after I did, and became better than me within two. Keep practicing and you'll put out something you're proud of.

>>28473939
Thanks mate I'm sure I will become better someday but its just hard to stay focus sometimes. To many things to do, to many other activities you want to try and sometime I just feel like giving up when looking at how beautiful other artist do there things an mine are still at cringe level.

Anyway >>28473522 do you still take any request? I think I gave you an idea last time but I'm not sure if it interested you.

>>28473795
It's not really as simple as "Pick one, discard the rest." Sometimes seeing it different times can jog my mind a little. That's why I put the call out even if I already had before in the thread and ask people to link to it again.

Sometimes I can come up with something sitting on it for a few days after passing it over a couple times first for things I have more immediate ideas about executing.

Other times, like this Misdreavus thing, another request comes down the pipe I think it would work well with. In this case I didn't know what I wanted to do with it until I started thinking about the Absol request and realized I could plug the "Misdreavus bugging their trainer for teatime" thing into it as a lighter counterpoint. Then after thinking about how I'd structure it, I realized it'd make a lot of sense for the trainer I was going to write to have a Misdreavus, or at least to have picked one up along the way.

>>28474215
>do you still take any request?
I do, but I'm not going to put out the call at this moment. Between those three, BStF #7 and #8, and maybe something with this Minesweeper Flygon idea I got last thread I've been kicking around in my head, I think this week is booked. I might ask during the weekend!

>>28471110
Hey Gallanon, it's the guy from last night. I read a bit of your rewritten stuff and was reminded of something that's been holding back your writing. You depend on passive voice when you're not sure exactly how you want to frame a scene. The very first sentence begins with "It was". This is not acceptable for literature. I'm not sure what word processor you use, but I'm certain that all of them have an option to review the text for passive voice. As a few anons so expertly explained a few threads ago at my request because I've got no clue how to use it either passive voice should be reserved for objects (I think). Either way, if a character does something, you shouldn't narrate it with "he was" or any other variation of the verb "to be". With passive voice, that extra verb takes away from the action the reader should be focusing on.

Example: "He was walking to the store."

The reader is supposed to focus on "walking", not "was". That first verb is filler that weakens the impact of your sentence. Remove the filler and change the tense so that you can accurately convey your meaning.

I've probably given you a god awful explanation. If anything is unclear, hopefully the other anons can help you out. Godspeed, Gallanon.

>>28474215
You're not alone man. Every time I remember that Rumiko Takahashi drew Urusei Yatsura when she was 17 I consider jumping out my living room window.

Best of luck to you m8.

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>>28470792
By the way if your still around what did you end up doing? Did your start writing it, brainstorming for ideas ect.

>>28474397
>or any other variation of the verb "to be"
Be careful here; down this road leads the wackiness of e-prime. Eliminating passive voice is most often beneficial but in a couple specific scenarios, but going full e-prime can cause some very stilted writing unless you're very sure how to handle it.

Passive voice is a specific formulation that relies on a copular verb but it isn't the ONLY one

>>28474397
>Example: "He was walking to the store."
What you're saying applies to the passive voice, but I'm not sure from your example that you even meant to say "passive voice." That's not the passive voice, it's the past progressive. So it sounds like you think using the past progressive is bad, which I'm not quite sure is true. "He was walking" is not interchangeable with "he walked." They mean different things.

example:
"He walked to the store and then a man jumped at him from an alley."
vs
"He was walking to the store and then a man jumped at him from an alley."

These sentences mean different things. The first sentence describes two events that happened in sequence, while the second sentence describes an event that happened while another event was happening. That's what the past progressive does: you use it to describe an incomplete action. As long as you use them correctly, there's nothing wrong with progressive verbs.

PS - the passive voice is like "he was punched."
Active = "billy punched him"
Passive = "he was punched by billy"

>>28474908
You are completely right about that. I just figured that I'd address the most glaring issue first. Plus, because I am still a rookie in terms of proper PV usage, I thought it best not to give advice on that.

>>28475012
And you are right as well. I'm retarded today.

>>28475042
Passive voice can be easily recognized by its format: some form of "to be" followed by a past participle (a verb with -ed on the end)
ie: Noun was verbed.

The passive voice version of your example would be:
"The store was walked to by him."

>>28474625
brainstorming. Will probably start tomorrow. Not a big fan of writing drama, but I can incorporate romance outside of the smut though. Will probably pick the other idea that sparked up from reading your outline. Still planning on it to be a one-shot, but it might be a long one.

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>>28475302
Alright can't wait to see what your going to come up with, and can't wait to read it obviously.

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Does anyone have a good florges/floette/flabebe story? Aside from the rape one. I'm kind of in the mood for that family line.
If none exist could request one?

>>28475518
no one is stopping you from dropping a request.
Looking around there are a few Floette fics, but that's literally it

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>>28475680
Alright requesting something base on either pic related or this>>28475518 or both.

Or found this in the previous threads.
A young floette gets a childish crush for her trainer and tries to get his attention. He just thinks she's being cute/playful ect. When she get tired of him ignoring her advances she just strait up kisses him on the check stuff appends afterwards ect. And then she evolves and with her new ASSets she wins him over and they end up having hot passionate sex.

>>28474397I use Open office. And I'm not sure they have a option for searching for passive voice. Or at leas something the came with the thing in it's vanilla state. But other than that I have no other way to check for shit like that.

Fuck I remember my Language arts class always made me write that way because they had to clump it together with history. So I think I know where I got that from.

>>28471110
Use a text to speech, it sounds autistic as fuck but it gets the job done if your either too shy or too loud for other people

>>28474215
Id say as a beginner artist as well,
find something you NEED to practice every single goddamn day of your life and do it over and over again.
Take drawabox for example http://drawabox.com/
we'll all make it anon

>>28476474
> The thought of MS sam reading hot gardevoir lewdfics
Are you trying to kill me anon?

>>28476520
Thanks will check that out.

>>28476538
> The thought of sam not understanding a phrase and spelling it out instead
Maybe

>>28476669
>>28476538

I found something.
https://soundcloud.com/doc-dic/50-shades-of-gardevoir-as-read-by-microsoft-sam

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>>28476749

>>28476829
I will never understand what that face is trying to convey.

>>28476749
I listen to exactly one minute of this once. I almost died. Sam reading lewd is a special kind of hell. An abstract one where you are at once are stick in the midst of hysterical laughter and crushing cringe.

>>28476927
I think its sort of "Im laughing like the devil deep inside"

>Try to make a giant production out of a chapter, dragging on the middles bits to generate a little suspense
>Underestimate the length and imagery of the final parts

Lolwhoops

>>28477193
I've noticed you don't use fanfic.net Mimiga, any particular reason why?

>>28477374
Cuz I have an AO3 and I'm too lazy to copypaste all of my stuff over to another site entirely for about the same amount of nothing.

>>28477537
You never know you could be surprised and become a star, leaving us little people behind to star in your own production of The Writing Writer. Or you could just be another drop in the bucket.

>>28477603
>>28477537
Im pretty sure i could get away with copypastaing my work on both sites right?

>>28477603
Nah, nah. If my shilling on many boards results in about the same amount of apathy regardless of what site the fic is posted in, then it's going to be even easier to be buried beneath the many in more popular fanbases who have actually gained notoriety for one reason or another. Having a page on a fanfic site is pretty much for convenience of the people involved since I reached my pastebin account's max without having to pay. Any traction I get will likely be from my own pushing.

>>28477664
Yeah, it's what I do. Works out just fine since the audience for the two sites is (kinda) different. In my experience though, stuff on AO3 is going to generate views and response more slowly.

>>28477860
AO3 is the pitch drop experiment of fan-fiction.

>>28477957
comfy name too

>>28477957
That's a distressingly accurate way of putting it.

Anybody know of a way to find passive voice in open office?

>>28478361
Apparently this: http://extensions.openoffice.org/en/project/after-deadline-grammar-checker can do that for you.

If you're not averse to it you could get LibreOffice and use these: http://extensions.libreoffice.org/extension-center/after-the-deadline-grammar-style-and-misused-word-detector

>>28478688
Addon was not able to install.
May just move to LibreOffice.
What are the difference's between open office and LibreOffice?

>>28478889
Apparently they're only technically different. Most of the differences are little nitpicks and toolbars? That's what I gathered from skimming this one page really really fast: http://www.howtogeek.com/187663/openoffice-vs.-libreoffice-whats-the-difference-and-which-should-you-use/

By all means switch, you probably won't notice too much of a difference? I use LibreOffice and it's quite nice.

>>28478993
Looks like the addon for Libre office is for a much older version of the software.

And from the screenshots I have seen, i like the layout and toolbar Open office has better.

>>28470117
This is what I'm thinking so far:
>guzma has a tattoo fetish
>one day plumeria finds him having a jerk session while looking at a zoomed in photo of her skull tattoo
>she barges in and acts really tough and mad
>guzma drops his spaghetti
>plumeria engages hyperslut mode and orders him to "show me what you were doing"
>plumeria getting excited about how big it is and she's never seen one like it even after all her years of thuggin
>"youre really a virgin aren't you boss? ill make it so you don't have to lie about it anymore"

Something like that but somebody should give me better ideas

>>28478889
OpenOffice was being run by Oracle. They decided to drop it and it went to Apache which is the current OpenOffice. LibreOffice forked from OpenOffice near the end of the Oracle run. Apache OpenOffice seems to be burning out, so momentum favors switching, but there are differences between the flavors, especially in how spreadsheets (kinda) work, that matter if you're operating with MS Office users on the same files.

>>28477693
>letting riolu and eevee cherishers own FFN

Go where the readers are, you'll definitely get more viewship on FFN than you do on AO3. If you time your postings, you might get a decent number of reviews. One or two may even be of decent quality.

>>28479136
Then stick with it if you want to mang, it's you choice. Don't discount what cge >>28479162
said, though I dunno how much you work with people that use spreadsheets.

>>28479148
Hey man, if that's the idea you had in mind, then go for it. That's as valid a setup for smut as any other if you're going for more or less just pure smut.

Write something out and mull it over. If you don't like it then get the cleaver, thread and needles.

>>28479136
May just end up using that pos Hemingway editor for finding passive voice.

>>28479296
I like to imagine that it would be almost impossible for them to mess up passive voice detection.

>>28479293
>>28479162

>spreadsheets
The only time I ever used a spreadsheet was in High school.

But I guess I'll switch, but I really no need to....Fuck me I'm indecisive as hell.

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Recently I found the first chapter to a PMD fic I tried to write a few years ago. Usually I would just ignore it due to the laughable quality of the writing. The story I came up with actually seemed a bit interesting though, yet I'm hesitant to attempt a rewrite because I think I would fuck it up. Perhaps one of you could tell me if the idea is salvageable or if my edgy teenage self was just stupid.

The premise itself takes place a bit more than a decade after the events of Explorers of Sky, and the world has been mostly explored and mapped. The MC and Partner from Sky start to investigate odd sightings of unknown, incredibly fast flying types, sightings of strange Pokemon on the coast, and other spooky shit. It turns out that through some inter-dimensional spacial rifts , humans in the military from our world, assuming the concept of Pokemon never existed, have been transported to the Mystery Dungeon universe during a training exercise. Its just a concept, and I never expanded upon it further, though I do have some ideas for it. I wrote this sometime shortly after Gates came out, so I could add something about the team from Super (Never played Gates)

So is it a cringy shit idea that I should toss out or could it work? I've heard that actually putting real humans into PMD works is a taboo or something.

>pic unrelated

>>28479908
It can work, but you need to make a hard decision about what the story is actually about and from which perspective(s) you will portray it.

>>28479908
I wouldn't know about taboo, but it sounds neat.

>>28479205
Yo, I just like writing. Whether people are rushing to read my shit or not is irrelevant, as I force people to cherish their special doggos in all the places I need them to.

>>28479992
I agree. I'm narrowing down what I actually want the conflict to be about and where exactly the story will go from the premise. Thank you for the advice. For perspective I'm gonna go with third-person from the view of the Pokemon in the Sky team rather than from the human side, though that could change. As of now all I've got are some notes I've jotted down and the original chapter from some years back, but I might start work on a first draft tonight.

>>28480015
Thanks. I hope it will turn out nicely.

>>28479908
I think you could probably turn that idea into a workable story. It would provide a good opportunity to write a plot about humans meeting what amounts to an alien civilization--a sort of "first contact" scenario. Just make sure to give enough thought to how that kind of interaction would realistically go down.

>>28479458
>Put in the 1st chapter into this thing.
>Only 4 instances of passive voice found.
>Questioning if this thing really works.

>>28480186
That's what I was thinking. I don't know exactly what about that scenario interests me so much but now I really, really want to make this happening. I'm working on the first chapter as we speak.

>>28460395
I did the first story for ya. I may have taken some liberties though, whoops.
http://pastebin.com/rgG6fHj5

It's my first time so please be gentle

>>28479833
...you know, this would make for a cute short of how Misdrevus somehow got trapped inside a bottle

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>>28479908
>>28480169
>>28480605
Orangefag from these here. I've made significant progress on the first chapter, and I think I'm going to resume writing tomorrow.

Question: Is there a certain standard to how long a chapter should be? Is there a minimum?

Here's another orange for your troubles.

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>>28481286
Here anon: http://pastebin.com/23fN2ts9

It's short and rough, but it was a cute picture and worth it to get the juices flowing before I resume work on ACPC.

>>28482130
Not particularly. As long as you need to get what you wanted done in that chapter over with. Some people say 2k, I usually go for 3-5k, others swear by 10k+

Your call man, it's what you think will work for you.

>>28482130
In a first chapter, prioritize establishing why the event it portrays is the beginning of something interesting. Afterward, a chapter is sized according to the space that its subplot requires.

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>>28482130
As far as I know, there isn't really any set-in-stone length that a chapter should be. But I've heard it said that a chapter should always include a sort of arc within it, with conflict and a resolution along with some foreshadowing of what's to come next. It should be satisfying to read, giving enough info to be substantial without dragging on too long, but also make the reader want to continue on to the next chapter. At least, that's how I understand it.

Also, pic related was my captcha thing for this post. What are the odds.

>>28482218
>>28482368
>>28482396
Thanks for the advice all. I'm very out of practice, so your wisdom is helping me get back in the game.

Also I think I'm gonna call it a night. First chapter is about a third of the way done not counting possible redrafts. I would give you all another orange but it seems that the remainder my daily supply has been stolen by those pesky tangerine lovers.

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You know, I was never really into fanfics to start out with, but. I think these threads are swaying my opinion a bit.

Kind of gives me a few ideas to write out. Just venting for now, though I might have something in store later.

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>>28474397
Alright I ran the thing though Hemingway app to get rid of some of the examples of passive voice it pulled up.
Don't know if it fixed everything and considering how it is 1am right as I type this. I'm too tired to sift though the entire thing I have written for examples so I'm just gonna post a new version here.
http://pastebin.com/TFz8kCj2

Hope I'm not spamming these threads too much with this shit.

>>28482130
Treat every chapter like its own miniature story leading into the next, with the first being like a pilot, enticing the viewer/reader into continuing further.

>>28483271
at least from my experience dont try to proofread late at night. Do it when your most alert, otherwise you might skim over a huge plothole.

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bumping for late night

http://pastebin.com/xG8LfW0s
Finally, I'm able to post something again!
As requested several threads ago, some social outcast and his social-outcast pokemon.
I threw in a dash of Teatime Misdreavus for that other anon.
A first for me: Trainer POV! And characters in a OS actually getting a name!

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>>28484129
p good anon

I ran out of ideas,
who would you say makes a good companion for a grovyle. Someone who would wait for their lover for decades if necessary.
I know pokemon dont really come with a set personality, but the thought process of it, the companion just has to fit the look im going for.

>>28484789
[Spoiler] you [/spoiler]

>>28484815
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MNW-qxl8uHc

>>28484789
A Lilligant?

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>>28484789
phox only alternatives off final destination

Any advice for a fellow writer with a little bit of writers block? I just came back to my story after a six months hiatus, yet I can't seem to find that spark which got me into writing in the first place. Really want to finish it, because I don't want to disappoint all my followers :/

>>28485862
Put a yotube video on and start wiritng down the dialogue.
It's like a jump start.

>>28484789

Why not try the shiny Celebi from pokemon mystery dungeon? I think her and Grovyle make a cute couple. Also, she could literally wait ages for him and the crush she has is canon ^^

>>28485882
not the same Grovyle, OC

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Eh, you know what? I've been dabbling onto something the past few days.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RHZNPytJ7EnYPwYX25hIBBQvzl0NTsTIuDKA5uA7N6A

It's supposed to be a story about Zinnia and Steven traveling the world. It only has three scenes so far, but all you gotta know for the context of what I;ve written is that Zinnia gets blown out of the sky after the first scene and is saved by Steven, and after that scene Steven takes Zinnia to the hospital and takes care of her pokemon while she's in there.

I left it commentable, I believe, so feel free to say some shit.

>>28483271
>hope I'm not spamming

I only remember one person who did that, and even then, they were keeping the thread afloat. Don't worry about it.

>>28483271
>It was sunset on the end of a warm July day.
I again apologize for my retardation last night. In my stupor, I saw "it was" and screamed "PASSIVE VOICE". The real issue here is that this is telling instead of showing. You literally say "this scene is this" instead of describing it. A more appropriate version of this introduction would be, "The lively afternoon breeze blew its last over the grassy hill, painted orange by the low sun. As he sat, he knew the wind would soon carry colder air with it. The summer season did not last for long, and July already marked its midway point."
That probably sounds terribly purple and not your style, but it shows the reader a more vivid picture than what they would see with "It was sunset on the end of a warm July day."

Next, you introduce the fact that our Gallade will be heading home soon. Then you reiterate that in the next sentence by repeating the word. You can cut "for home" out of the last sentence in the paragraph and the reader will understand just fine.

Also, I suggest you plug the word "he" into the search function on your word processor. You use it enough to become distracting.

>Digging through the pile he found some rather odd items. Some of the items
You use the word "items" twice here when you could have replaced one of them with a different noun to make the sentences flow better. Like the other anon said, try to find time to proofread when you're not too tired to spot little things like these.

>On the inside of this odd artifact was a array of coils and other things that was completely alien to to Gallade.
>to to
You probably meant "to the".

Tbc

>>28483271
>He soon made it back to his home, a old log cabin
>a old
Should be "an old".

>When he made it to the doorway, he moved aside the boards laying over the doorway to act as a makeshift door, and proceeded to enter the cabin.
This sentence is redundant. You just said he made it back to the cabib, so you don't have to narrate every step he takes to get inside. This sentence can easily be condensed into "He moved the boards laying over the doorway to act as a makeshift door, and proceeded to enter."

This is it for now. Review your text when you're alert enough to notice repeating terms and redundant phrases. Even if you don't know what to replace certain words with, make sure you mark them (I use brackets) so that every time you read, you'll remember that you need to change them.

>>28487512
>The real issue here is that this is telling instead of showing.
The real issue is that it's the same thing. Passive voice tends to tell; a telling narrator gravitates toward passive voice.

That doesn't make it wrong, however. If a character is delivering monologue, this is a natural way to begin a confession. It's a cliche in writing because beginner writers often relate their story idea as though the author is recalling and relating a memory (a character can, the author must not).

>terribly purple
Verified. Also, it's a soft continuity error:
>blew its last … the wind would soon carry

>items
"Them" is likely sufficient in the second position in this case, but it's better to repeat the noun than to permit an ambiguous anaphor.

>proceeded to enter.
By this time, the process of entering is over, there's no procedure remaining but just entering. Consider:
>Reaching a makeshift door—a few wooden planks leaned across an opening—he lifted them away and slipped beneath into the cabin.

>>28483271
Content is content, plus updates are better than just bump

Are you guys all pokefuckers or is human on human welcome here too?

>>28488287
Anything goes buddy. Anything goes. As long as the fics are linked offsite you're good to go.
So trainer x trainer is fine too, as well as sfw stuff. Take a look at the catalog to see what has been done here

>>28488392
Sweet. I was thinking of something where Plumeria gets more and more jealous of Lusamine since she's the head of her own foundation, loved by the public and always appearing on tv.

Meanwhile Guzma sits around in the Skull headquarters getting drunk and doing nothing. She decides to break into the Aether foundation to steal tech and generally make then look bad. Plumeria ends up getting caught by Lusamine, and dommed into revealing why she's there. It piques Lusamine's interest and she decides to test Plumeria by fucking her. Of course part of the reason Plumeria is so jealous of Lusamine is that she's terribly attracted to her.

I was thinking of going somewhere like a secret relationship where Plumeria tries to be reluctant but really can't hold up that facade, and under Lusamine's tutelage takes over team Skull

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>>28488287
we're mostly pokefuckers though

>>28488619
I would fap to this.

>>28488619
A bit of an odd pairing, but it seems to male sense. Sounds like it might be a little longer than a one shot, but I say go for it if it piques you enough.
>>28488753
the poll dictates we're both though

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>>28484129
I like it.
It was a really cute short story, I could see it becoming a longer story if you ever when with it.
I like how you made use of the pokedex entry saying ,even if misdreavus can put curses on people they are also able to give good luck or a good curse on people it likes. And I really like the ay you described her ghostly ability of course the absol and Cal were good to read too. Can't wait to read you other storys.

>>28483800
I am only able to really work on that sort of thing between 8pm-1am. And I usually work on other things at the more reasonable times.

>>28487512
>>28487541
I guess that editor is not all that it was turned out to be.

I'll try to remember all of this shit, may just end up putting it all down in a .txt file for future reference.

>>28488790
>trusting polls
Please, I was closeted for a long time before I finally admitted it. I know I'm not the only one.

>>28489297
Annotating your work in a Google Doc helps if you're marking up your work. Course, you need to be ready to juggle between your preferred processing program and Docs.

Works out really well if you do though.

>>28482218
OK now that is just adorable.
Would you shake the bottle?

>>28491192
Glad you liked it anon. Aw, now that's just mean.

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How do we fix this?

>>28493646
IMHO Ghost pokemon can make themselves corporeal at will. Problem solved.

>reminder it's the same egg group as Gardevoir

>>28493646
She could posses your prostate and make it orgasm against your will.

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>>28493818
You need to die so you can fuck it.
She's such a tease.

>>28493856
Sure but what if you ant to feel her? (or him if your into that stuff) Seems unfair to just have one get pleasure.

>>28493930
You're going to have to tie yourself to a chair and wait for a passing gengar to rip her ghost pussy up.

>>28493646
commit sudoku

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>>28493951
Damned gengars stealing all our ghost woman's.

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>>28472392
Bump for feedback, please.

If you don't mind, that is.

So, mostly random question.

How do you guys deal with weather moves? Like, Sunny Day an' all that.

In the games they are pretty much click and go, like any move without a charge/cooldown turn, but their particular mechanics make me think that for my setting they would be more difficult to pull off, or at least egregiously telegraphed, techniques.

Not to mention what happens to a Trainer abusing Sunny Day while on the road who then arrives to next town, where a mob of angry farmers eagerly await for him with pitchforks and torches as he's just ruined the year's crops?

>>28493818
>amorphous
I never understood why they put Gardevoir in that group. Then again, iirc a fair number of Pokemon have been put in weird ass groups.

>>28494287
If I remember to when I get home from work I'll give it a look-see for ya.

>>28494490
I highly doubt regular Pokémon could make weather moves last long enough to cause lasting environmental/agricultural damage.

>>28494490
>>How do you guys deal with weather moves? Like, Sunny Day an' all that.
I think this anon;
>>28494789
has it right.

If we say ten second rounds, weather moves change the weather in only the immediate area for just under a minute. I think it only changes around you; e.g. in a rainstorm using Sunny Day puts a hole through the precipitation and cloud cover just around the battlefield's immediate area.

Furthermo

>>28494946
>it cut off my post halfway through

Furthermore, it requires the pokemon to exert constant effort to change the weather; the five-turn/fifty-second rule is basically them running out of power to maintain the unnatural alteration.

>>28494540
Thanks!

>>28494490
Personally, I feel like it would make the most sense for them to just cause temporary, localized changes that only affect the battlefield. After all, they do wear off after a few turns and can't be used outside of battle. I don't think there's a risk of destroying crops with them or anything like that.

>>28494287
Its pretty good anon, didnt go too fast or too slow and was pretty satisfying. Hope you continue it

>>28481021
>>28482218
Just got back and all these cute story have been posted will read them give critics when I'm done doing my things.

>>28494946
>>28495130
B-b-but the idea of mobs with pitchforks and torches chasing after trainers is just too fun to pass~

Oh well, I'll have to resort to something like "weird sexual practices". Or Magikarp scams.

>>28495182
Thanks for the compliment! Good to hear that the pacing's alright. And I am planning to continue it--I've spent this morning finalizing and proofreading the second part, so it should be up relatively soon.

Do we have a discord server up? Would be a bit better than using IRC imo That and I'm too lazy to get a irc client

>>28496389
no discord server I believe. Plenty of online IRC clients to use though

>>28496389
None that I know of, and none that I'd use if there was one. Discord is far more oriented for gaming, they don't provide wide offer of clients, and they don't have a good privacy or data protection policy, if any.

Plus, come on man, it's IRC. Simple. Symbolic. Old reliable. inb4 someone mentionsthey have an AOL account...

>>28496389
>encouraging even more group chat shenanigans
Don't you remember swapnote? God knows how the IRC hasn't crashed and burned by now.

>>28496613
I'm getting mine set up now.

>>28496636
It's a publicly accessible domain that gets posted with every thread for anyone wishing to join. That keeps it from becoming retarded I think. Been a while since I accessed the IRC though. I blame the sheer number of other messaging clients I have running simultaneously.

Have you ever fucked a major point of your plot over because of the way you said a sentence earlier on? 'Cuz fuckin ghost disease and shit.

>>28497553
in what context? You could just go back end edit the first chapter or so, wherever the hell you fucked up.

What tips do you guys have on creating good suspense?

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>>28497651
Too late, it's been published on AO3 for a week. It's a significant enough line that people would remember, and technically it's not a mistake, so I gotta weasel my way around it for the plot. At least it's not going to interfere with the suffering, but I know one guy in /pmdg/ who's going to throw a real fit if I don't make my concepts and mysteries coherent and logical.

>>28497736
Well first of all, to create suspense, the reader has to be interested at all in the plot which is meant to drag them along. The hooks you use are the very things that make suspense matter at all, as it would build upon those first and foremost so that the rising action has foundation to stand on. Once that's out of they way, one way I know of making something fictional important is by engaging in heated dialogue often along the rising action. Verbal or internal, it doesn't really matter so long as it engages the reader the same as the character who has to endure the suspense in the first place. Of course, that may be a tell and not a show, but discussions are usually points of plot to begin with, and a scrub like me tends to use the crutch that people think to themselves all the time.

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>>28481021
I hope your still around.
I'm goin to warn you I'm not a writer so I don't know if I should be trusted but I liked it. It was a really fun read cute and a little "sexy" at the same time. I like roselia's personality childish but still mature-like. My only complain would be to maybe go more into detail and we never saw what roselia did in the contest but still I really enjoyed reading it and I hope the other writers will read and give a better critic. I hope to see more of your stuff in the future. If you ever need more ideas I could give you somme request I had in mind.

>>28497553
Yeah. Accidentally worded a sentence in an early chapter which implies the main character is from another world, when the big twist later on is that he actually isn't.

Thankfully words and thoughts are just that. Maybe he was just confused or acting cool or something.

>>28497736
First and foremost you need the outcome of the scene to not be completely predictable. 99.9% of media is the same crap everyone's already seen before so it's easy to swerve off the beaten path.

Now that you have a unique goal to work towards, the suspense should come automatically.

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>>28494490
Sunny Day (and other weather moves) create changes in the environment with a defined proximity radius. Certain Pokemon can alter the weather but if you get far enough away, eventually the weather changes back. Useful in battle, only situational outside of combat. Weather - and do not forget terrain moves - can be instrumental in winning a match, especially outdoors. Also it's cool to imagine.

>>28497553
Not yet, I think? I have almost done that, but in editing I have so far caught every instance of this happening. One day it's gonna slip by me though.

>>28482218
That was both a cute a funny read I loved it.
Really like the way you utilise both misdreavus pokedex entries and its childish nature. Hope to see more shorts from you again. I'm always bumping the thread so if you need a images inspiration just tell me.

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>>28472392
>>28494287
B2F: Watch adverb use. The general mood is implied or outright shown pretty well in many places here, and adding on the adverb doesn't do much when it is quite clear how the character would be reacting.

>“I think I’m starting to forget what the sun looks like,” Lurantis said, glancing around nervously. “I hate the dark. It’s not good for a Lurantis to be in such a place for so long.”
Here's a good example; the prior paragraph explains at length how awful Lurantis feels. We know her glancing about is out of fear, so you don't need to tag it as such.

B3F: Check over your sentences and reread them (this applies to B2F as well) for awkward phrasing. Say it aloud if you aren't confident in repeating it in your head and ensure that it flows appropriately.

>Despite his attempt to hide what he said, though, Lurantis still heard him.
This is awkwardly phrased: "though" disrupts the flow of the sentence, consider just removing it or rephrasing.

>Cold darkness surrounded her as she entered the tunnel, and she shivered as she ran to catch up with her companion, who was surrounded by a ring of the only light around.
This too has some awkward phrasing; the last portion is rather passively phrased.

Bear these in mind, but overall you're making fine progress. Watch your ellipsis use though. Commas and periods, mate.

>>28499968
Glad to hear it anon. I might do some more drabbles if the mood takes me, they're usually quite fun.

>>28500328
Could you do me a favor and check out >>28481021 he made this story for me and I feel bad to not be able to give it a good critic since I'm not a writer.

>>28500328
Thanks for the advice. I'll go back and try to fix the phrasing and adverb issues.

I had a question regarding ellipses, though: is it usually best to never use ellipses at all, or are there some times when they are acceptable? I remember one of the issues with my last story being overuse of them, so I tried using fewer this time, though some still remain. I'm unsure if I should just remove them all entirely or not.

>>28501227
Ellipses can express hesitation, changes of mood, suspense, or thoughts trailing off. Writers also use ellipses to indicate a pause or wavering in an otherwise straightforward sentence.

Examples:
>I don't know … I'm not sure.
>Pride is one thing, but what happens if she …?
>He said, "I … really don't … understand this."
Otherwise, they are only used to shorten quotes

>>28501227
>is it usually best to never use ellipses at al
Like exclamation marks, they should be used sparingly but have their place.

>>28501439
This anon's got it but for the third example; in that case I'd indicate it in the speech tag (e.g. '[_____] said, haltingly')

>>28501439
>>28501589
Okay, I'll bear that in mind. Thanks.

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Same anon from a couple days ago, who made the post with the happening photo and the pirate idea.
Pretty much done with the first chapter, just need to proofread, I'm probably not uploading it until i finish a few more chapters, no more than three. Unless you guys want me to.

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>>28501227
As >>28501439 and >>28501589 put it, ellipses as a form of punctuation have their uses - to rely on them when you could say something instead though, especially if it adds to the mood, is to rob yourself and your reader of an opportunity to do more with your prose. Unfortunately, well used ellipses also have this very effect, and the lack of further elaboration produces a greater effect. It becomes a judgment call really. I use ellipses generally if I think that their use can perfectly convey exactly the pause/hesitation I want at that moment, otherwise I'll try to write something out.

>>28500401
Sure.

>>28481021
The lack of speech tags is sometimes a tad bit disorienting. I can follow speech without he saids/she saids pretty well, but there were a few times early on where I got turned around once or twice.

Descriptions, when present, are pretty good, and they marry well with the considerable amounts of dialogue present, but at times the dialogue becomes overwhelming and you're left wondering why there isn't some description to break it up.

Overall though, it's fine. Nothing jumped out at me that was outright offensive, broken or otherwise. I liked your use of scents and actually would have liked to see it used more to convey other emotion.

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Cute bump.

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>>28502779

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Well my last bump for tonight hopefully someone else bumps the thread for tonight thread is dropping fast for some reason.

>>28504429
Personally, the thread only needs a bump if it goes down to page 8. /vp/ only goes sanic speeds in hype news

Speaking of bumps: can anyone tell me if the images used in bumps here are supposed to be related to anything (like fics that are being written) or are they just random images for the purpose of keeping the thread bumped? I'm still trying to figure out what the protocol is for that kind of thing.

>>28498286
Thank you, anon! I'm glad you liked it. I'm open to doing something else if there's something you wanna see. I'm not really a writer either but I can give it my best shot.

>>28502515
And thank you so much for the feedback! I'll take it to heart.

>>28505148
I don't think there's much of an image protocol, since threads here are a bit more text-based. Just make sure they're SFWish and Pokemon related.

>>28505148
I just post whatever I think of. It doesn't really matter.

>>28505148
I mostly post images for fun an sometimes it inspires people but you can post whatever.

>>28505202
Long or short? I may have an idea.

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>>28505202
Not that guy, but I think Maractus could use some love and loving.
If you need an idea, perhaps the trainer could end up asking his Maractus for dancing advice to get a lady (or get into a club). However, as they practice he could end up making his own dance that unintentionally garner's the pokemon's love interest (mating dances and whatnot). Anything goes after that, until the two share a duet or something before she makes her move on him...and then vice versa...which then turns into a prickly but lewd situation

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>>28505148
I bump with things I like
Such as this catsnake

>>28505303
I could do something longer, but it might take me a little more time. Certainly not just a few hours like this one.

>>28505520
Sure. I have a long flight tomorrow so I'll think about it then. But I'm curious, do the thorns and stuff get you off? Is that part of it?

>>28505202
>>28505303
Going to sleep but this was my previous idea if it interest you.>>28475886

>>28505750
That's a cute catsnake
I like it too

>>28505780
The pricky part is more of a joke, though it would be curious as to how you can make lewd out of that. Otherwise I was thinking more straightforward in terms of lewd.
Can't deny that cactass though

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>>28505148
>>28505750
I bump with oranges. Here, take this one.

>>28482601
Also first chapter of this story is about halfway complete.

BStF Ch.7 finally out of editing hell!
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12125737/7/Big-Shoes-to-Fill
http://archiveofourown.org/works/7944409/chapters/18396562
It's a boat episode

>disclaimer: I dont own pokemon

Every fucking time

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>>28507540
>swapping the word god for arceus

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>>28509312
>what would you even replace the word Jesus with?

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>>28509312
Fucking dammit.

>>28509312
I do this. It's awkward, so I try to keep it to only people that it would make sense saying it, but I do this nonetheless. At last count I'm at 3 uses I think.

I have yet to have anyone say, "Jesus" and god help me no one ever will.

>>28509405
Just dont use it, there are plenty of expressions in English to convey surprise/fear etc that do not involve God.

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here's my absolutely amazing fanfiction.
Kill me.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12120874/1/My-Light-in-Lumiose

>>28509476
Oh I use those. But Arceus is an actual deity-figure to some people - and those people aren't above taking its name in vain at the height of fear and surprise.

It's why I've used it so little. It's not a commonly held belief. I'll mull it over.

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>>28509312
>>28507540
>"Dodge it!"

>>28509312
On that note, what's this thread's opinion on treating expressions involving animals? Do it the Hold Your Hippogriffs way or just don't alter it? Would these expressions exist in the context of this world or would there be completely different idioms?

>purrloin got your tongue
>luxray's share

>>28509734
I dont mind that as much
I think the games might have done it

>>28509734
If the pokedex/lore defines certain pokemon to be attributed as "Bird-like" or "cat like" and hell even the Bug types, Im pretty sure its safe to use them even in the MD lore.

>>28509734
I use terms like cat, dog, etc to refer to classes of pokemon. For example, in BStF I've referred to the Ninetales as foxes several times, which could also refer to a Fennekin.

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>>28510102
But you gotta be more specific.

>>28510133
>Flopwop
>not Catsnake
You lied to me!

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>>28510133
Slippery tube dude never grabbed me quite so well as the simple "snek."

Tarantula's really aren't that bad leave 'em alone.

>>28502433
Finished my chapter. Fucking proofreading hell now i suppose.

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>>28510174
Also known as the original tube dudes, fuzzbutts have been a vital piece in determining why things happen.

Yungoos is my favorite gen 7 pokemon and that will probably not change.

>>28510425
Furret, Linoone, and Yungoos fic when

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>>28510425
>Commiefornia wont allow legal ownership of tube fellows because 'muh rodent infestation'

>>28510453
its an abstract kind of state here
half our laws don't make sense

>>28510453
>specifically meant to hunt rodents
>is banned because rodents

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>tfw prefer Catsnek's bigger cousin, Waterdoggo.
It's a floating cuddles sorta feel

>>28510485
fucking terrible here mate i thought we were the golden state for a reason

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>have an idea I really good premise for a story
>can't start it until I play through Pokemon Sun and also see how the XYZ anime ends
It's been a long time since I've felt this kind of frustration.

What time do you guys recommend publishing chapters on fanfic, you know, to get at least one review.

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>>28457521
Ok, not fic related, but the Joltiks... co cute... had to make the dancing one into a gif. Enjoy.

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>>28510855
I've had fortune by publishing on the weekends. Focus on trying to capture an audience first, if you have people interested in your work that equates to a steady lifeblood of reviews no matter when you post.

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>>28502433
>>28510381
First chapter done.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12148633/1/Desolate-Sea
I probably shouldnt have uploaded it the night i finished it but what the hell.
Any commends/criticisms would be very helpful anons.

>>28509312
This triggers me so hard. No one says "Jehovah/Yahweh damn it!" We just say God. Because god is a single syllable noun that has come to be synonymous with that specific deity. Therefore, logically, it would be the same in a Pokémon universe. We don't call god by his name casually, so why would they?

>You can always spot a genwunner when they use Mew instead

>>28507540
better safe than sorry if I say so myself. You'll never know
>>28511113
A bit of a wordy intro, but otherwise looks okay. There are a few parts where Grovyle and Braixen's dialogue lines end up sharing the same paragraph though, so be sure to look back at it and insert the enter key there
>rapped
probably meant wrapped