Write-Faggotry Thread #18 Last Thread: https://desuarchive.

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I'll probably finish this mess today.

Probably.

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Anchor posting for Bunny Mint story.

>>8521559

Keep it up!

>>8521559
What story are you working on by the way?

>>8524718
I said I'd do one of those daily picture things, but I got really annoyed halfway through.
So I put it off for a few days, then picked it back up because I have absolutely nothing else to do and it feels at least slightly productive compared to watching shows.

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boop

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well I've got an assortment of works. I did a few stories back in my days on here. I've got a stash of all my old free stuff her, including a long-running shortstack story tentatively called "The Goblin Diaries" and I grab the occasional prompt from these threads
http://luffy316.blogspot.com/


also got a novel and a few pet projects in the works, including a Patreon for all the smutty stories I write cuz I feel like it (with people voting on the ideas I've got at the time). goal's even reached the point where I'm commissioning art from the stories every now and then
https://www.patreon.com/sandcastles

Write on

morning bump

>>8531839
aand another

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Still not giving up on Florges farts

To keep autism contained. The idea/suggestions are linked herehttp://pastebin.com/Zx3Uj2QY

tl;dr Main character dominates Florges by making her embarrass herself via teasing/lewding her to fart. Stuff in pastebin are suggestions

>>8532781
once more

>>8525122
Is it that pit/paulitina/Bayonetta one?

>>8535093
Yeah, with that cosplay spin on it considering I don't know a single thing about those characters.
I was wondering if I should use their actual names in descriptions alongside their character names (since they're still real people in costume), but I think that would get too confusing.

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Day #46

>>8535843
http://archiveofourown.org/works/10523937?view_adult=true

Yeah these greentext to story oneshots are a lot easier to read than the chapter ones considering the limited time I have. Will give the school thing a better read when I get the time.

Just read the Roserade one. Sweet god thank Christ the couple I observed for my oneshot wasn't this sexually blatant. I don't think my dick could handle it, nor my notes. Not much to say since it is mostly pretty good smut, though I was surprised he didn't blow his load in her pussy as well. Surprise aside, the only thing feeling weak was the climax in her ass, which was pretty short compared to the lewd foreplay the couple did throughout.

Ever thought about adding onomatopoeia in the story, or short descriptions of thrm? I'd imagine having sex right there on the beach would emulate muels from the Roserade, or capture the smacking sounds of flesh on flesh action, the lewd sounds of Roserade's pussy being eaten out until she climaxes, that kind of stuff. Just something to take into consideration.

Also, have you done any other first person stuff or is that something to work on?

>>8537206

>Ever thought about adding onomatopoeia in the story, or short descriptions of thrm?

Onomatopoeia? I may have given it some consideration, but right now I don't think I could pull it off. Some reason I think it would look silly. Short descriptions of them, that'd be a good idea, though. I try to include as many of the main five senses as I can when describing a scene, but I feel like too often I rely too much on touch. Sound would be a good one to focus on, then maybe taste, and finally smell.

>Also, have you done any other first person stuff or is that something to work on?

Not that I'm aware of, though I've been submitting for years, so there's a chance I forgot one. I did a greentext in the 2nd person, and that was a little odd. Debating keeping it that way for full text, or moving to first or third.

Had no idea there was a write-thread. I'd post some of my stuff if you want it. Thinkin about taking requests.

>>8539594
>I'd post some of my stuff if you want it
Yes, considering most of the threads are bumpbumpbumpbumpbump

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>>8539659
Sure, I need some critique anyway. I wrote this story on request a while ago. It's a Prequel fap-fic.
>https://pastebin.com/R01v86hw

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>>8539733
I'm a terrible critic so all I can say is that I love the descriptions presented, a constant flow of new that doesn't seem to get stale. You paint the words in a lovely artistic way, if you understand what I'm getting at.
Honestly, I'm quite jealous of your skill.

>>8539733
>tfw someone does noncon/rape
Yes my fetish. Gotta say you capture her emotions pretty good for a quick story. What I would suggest is a bit more description of her appearance for someone not familiar with her or the series she comes from. Some dialog of her begging to stop/mercy could do as well, unless I missed a ball gag during reading.
If you do end up taking requests, what will you take/not take?

>>8540416
Wellllll, the best I can say is try me. I'll say if it's something I'd write or not. I'm pretty degenerate so feel free to try!
>I've done stuff for some pretty degenerate fetish boards in the past.

>>8540840
not him, but I'll wing it and redirect you to my request at >>8532920 .

>>8540988
You know, I wasn't gonna say it, but I've written fart-smut on request before... I could post it if anyone here is into that kind of thing.

>>8540053
Fuck man, thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

>>8541184
ah that actually sounds good. I'm into M/F though, but feel free to post it.

Does my request interest you?

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>>8540840
Requesting a story based on this pic, in which Tina (Magician's Quest) gets sexually harrassment by pompadour anon throughout the school day, and no matter how much she strikes or fights he comes back to do it again to her frustration. It starts light with verbal talk and skirt flips, but gets into boob/ass groping territory, ass slaps, wedgies that show off said ass, and accumulate to him having her way with the wolf girl after school.

If you can think of more sexual bully antics be my guess

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>>8541283
Extra Tina ref if needed

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Any update on the Way Bad/Ben story?

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>>8541224
>>8541283
Not really for me desu, sorry. Also here's that fart-smut story I told you about. It's in the Prequel universe again.
>https://pastebin.com/mCxT14jQ

>>8541557
aw a shame, you'd be perfect for trying the Florges and putting me to rest.

The details for this piece is pretty spot on. Not too into messing fetish, but I liked the humiliation she experienced throughout the fic. Thanks for sharing though

>>8541533

Update me again about what specifics you wanted? Body exploration, insertion, and mouth play were involved, I believe. Was it gentle or unwilling-prey? Based on the pic, I'm guessing gentle, but I want to make sure.

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>>8540840
Requesting a wild, bitchy Tsareena variation form made by my friend (called Sour Cherry) being punished by a trainer, spanking her enormous jiggly ass and fucking her in the butt until she begs for mercy, him filling her hole(s) with his cum.
Don't mind talking Pokémon
Have some spanking while she's being pounded for good measure, until her ass is nice and sore for groping
Other pic http://atriplezero.tumblr.com/image/154789608912

>>8537820
Hey, I'm the Sakichan guy >>8526978 from a few threads back. Don't know if you like writing in different persons, but I wouldn't mind if you tried first or third person for the story if you decide to take it on.

Also, do you mind if I suggest more scenes to take place between her and the villain/thief MC?

>>8546108

>Also, do you mind if I suggest more scenes to take place between her and the villain/thief MC?

By all means. When I get around to this story, I want it to be as close to what you envisioned as possible.

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>>8546158
>tfw late for reply
Alright so detailed one heist and clarified on the ending sex.
Perhaps in one of his jewel heist she could take the gem from him (or preemptively own it with store's permission for protection), only to stuff it in her zipper cleavage and make him feel around inside to get it, with her making very immodest, purposely loud moans while he searches for the gem.
Just one of a couple ideas of lewd things she can do with him. She's probably more chatty than the guy (though he talks too).

I think hot/ice breathplay contrast works better with the duo too.

Also for when the end comes that they fuck, he should indulge in those big tits that she used to tease and seduce him with all this time, motorboating, squeezing, sucking/nipping, titfuck while he gropes her, fuck her from behind while groping, or pinning her to a glass window to fuck, breast pushed to window and all.

That's all I can think of at the moment, so feel free to add more heists and stuff when the time comes.

Thanks again for putting up with me.

mornin bump

>>8543413
I was hoping for some Scantybad using Ben as a living sex toy, sucking him off, dropping him down her shirt, stuffing him up her pussy. Ben is a cocky dude so he's trying to give as good as gets.

>>8539733
>>8541557
Khajiits are always good, even the degenerate ones.

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>>8543521
Oh, I recognize this image. Someone on the JOI/JOI thread made a caption for it.

>>8551998
Huh, didn't know it got captioned. Kinda neat, but I'm hoping for something more forceful/resistant than a quick submission.

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Have you ever been worried about getting into some kind of shit with the content of what you write?

All of this shit going down with Shadman recently has made me realize that I have seen a few cases of people going to court over fiction, but I've never actually been able to find out how they ended up.

I know one was about a woman who wrote about a violent underage rape after being a rape victim herself as a kid, and another was a guy who wrote about a happy incestuous family that just happened to have some members with one-digit ages.

Thinking about stuff like that makes me wonder how sites like AFF don't sweat a little every day.

>>8521786
Yo-kai Specs has another chapter finished. Author hasn't put in Merrikan Yo-kai yet though.

>>8553352
>All of this shit going down with Shadman recently has made me realize that I have seen a few cases of people going to court over fiction, but I've never actually been able to find out how they ended up.
Some details please?

>Thinking about stuff like that makes me wonder how sites like AFF don't sweat a little every day.
They do.

I do not think HF admins were too happy to banhammer down on the loli after letting it sit just fine for so long.

Flist closed down subscriptions rather than submit to the "no degeneracy reeeee!" demands of billing services, although they still had to ban off RL pictures on loli and beast profiles in fear of attack.

Nutaku, a weeb porn games site, had managers come on 4chan to respond to /jp/ whining about them giving lolis boob boosts or omitting them from games with apologetic explanation about banks refusing to work with if they didn't.

>>8553438
Oh and to add to HF example, sinnersgate that was born out of that storm, also initially had proudly "loli" category, but at some point renamed it to "petite" for evasive purposes.

>>8553438
>Some details please?
You're going to see "ROBLOX IS SUING HIM OVER FANART" but that's not correct, he said that himself to bring light of the situation. It's on his Twitter.

His host randomly decided that his content might be illegal and kicked him out. After some phone calls and fighting, his website is back up, but he's not done. He wants to make sure that he can draw whatever the fuck he wants because it's a drawing.

>>8553360
I'm anchoring for a different story/author actually. A guy who did some long Rick & Morty oneshot was interested in my request some months back and I've been here since. He shared a small wip, but apparently he said it is now in a lot more detail last he replied (February or so).

>>8553473
Just seeing a Yo-kai picture made it come to mind, I don't know if Goombario's shit is wanted in here or not.

>>8553500
>Ah, so similar to HF/sinnersgate thing (except that sg has better artists, huehue)

.

Oh also /every single guy/ that does lewd commissions through paypal sweats buckets because they're against TOS and if a client carefree writes something in exchange messages about "thx for good porn" they're fucked.
Soyeah mate, Shad's case ain't new.

>>8553500
While Shad's case ain't new, Shad's being new by not just replying "O-Okay, yeah, I guess it IS just like the r-real thing, heh..." and slithering into a corner.

>>8553512
>try to fix paragraph
>screw it in a different way
ah fuck it

>>8553513
I wouldn't put it that simple.

I.e. right now on twitter I see that he says the site isn't earning him money, he keeps it for publicity.
HF was different, they are much bigger and thus cost much more, and try to earn it through ads. So they're more vulnerable.

>>8553542
Yeah, so they have to bend over and take it hard up the legal ass. All Shad would be losing (besides freedom) would be a website. He can actually fight it and not worry about where his next meal will come from.

I've seen it argued in /v/ a lot, everyone wants someone to come along and make the change, to prove to the normies of the world that 3D isn't 2D, and that fictional characters are just that.

Thing is, for that to happen, one person has to take one for the team, and if they fail, their life is done. No one's stepping up to try.

>>8553352
>Have you ever been worried about
Yes. It's why I never finished a Powerpuff Girls one-shot I started years ago.

>>8553632
>worried about it
>when the 'new' Powerpuff girls have begun twerking like little shits.
Honestly I think it's the least of problems now, but to each their own.

>>8553694
It's Blossom tending to an injured Anon.

For some reason I thought that finishing it would prove more harm than good, but then I saw AFF has a PPG section.

>>8547962
Just thought of something more for thay heist: when he finally grabs the gem, she could zip up her suit on him to ensnare his hand/arm inside, loving the cool feeling of his hand while it struggles in-between her cleavage.

>>8551653
Ty ty. I wrote a story about the girls from Planet Dolan as well if anyone wants to read them. One is a fart-smut story.

>>8554651
Post it

>>8554651
If you're there, I tried another request if it piques you. See >>8543521

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>>8554747
https://pastebin.com/qv5JJQ4A

>>8554880
I have another story if you guys want it.

>>8557285
Go right ahead

>>8557302
This was another request. Probably one of the weirdest stories I've written.
>https://pastebin.com/N1T73uFg

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>>8557339

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>>8535843

Day #47

Who's up for the weirdest request yet?

Bumping because idiots are spamming new drawthreads again.

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>>8558763
Sure, I guess

>>8554880
After reading the fee of these you posted, I do think it is a bit open ended as to whether the farting characters end up liking it in the end or would be open to doing it again. Kind of a head scratcher to me, so perhaps making the end a bit less ambiguous can work

>>8560809
Are you sure? It's the craziest yet.

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>>8564099
Yeah sure, it's not handholding, is it?

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>>8564470
Okay, here it is.

Having been bested in swimming class (yet another sports activity) by the chubby Nikuko, Galko desperately tries to improve her technique. However, she gets exhausted too quickly. Then she tries to add to her "buoyancy" (she has to think of Otako's remarks about her body) by filling her swimsuit with air. After another failure - the air refused to stay inside - she tries the cartoony approach, but couldn't understand why only her cheeks blew up. Air floats better on water than fat, isn't it? Abashed, she tries it from the other end of her "inner tube" and sticks the tube into her butt. The first filling making her belly a little billowy, but the second causes her to feel "hot" and needing to relax by floating on the water.

>>8565125
Welp, I forgot to say the second filling made her look preggers.

>>8565125
I don't think that's very crazy at all.
That's like, simple inflation, isn't it?

>>8565225
Yes. I cal it crazy because it's tame compared to what you'd find in the designated threads. And it's fun.

>>8565125
well that was anticlimactic

Here's a request. Let me know if anyone likes it and I'll elaborate.

>Fantasy setting with current technology.
>Monstergirl attacks are a real problem.
>Guys train to defend against them with sex instead of physically.
>Tiring them out, not cumming, and looking really enticing.
>It generally works, except a few cases.
>Study is conducted to find out what makes them so successful, and how they react to various sex acts.
>Including being forced to orgasm, whether certain things make them cum earlier than most, etc.
>Guys participating are worried the results will possibly damage their field of work and encourage other to give in to Monstergirls.
>Has lots of medical, forced orgasm, mild humiliation, and ultimately a happy ending.

>>8537206
Technical criticism:
Paragraphs are double spaced. Format conversion problem?
"Andy admired the crisp, cool, waters of the ocean..." When using multiple adjectives, commas substitute for "and". E.g. "...crisp and cool and waters..." so the second comma is unnecessary. Also "smooth, emerald, skin.", "big, huggable, ass".
"Bum" is British English, "butt" is American English, it seems weird to use both.
Sentence fragments: "Andy from having that big, huggable, ass snuggled up against his groin. Roserade from having Andy's rigid cock pressed up against her bum." You could use a colon and semicolon to merge them with the previous sentence.
Typos: "motoins", "cock.On a"

Comments on style (not technically wrong but possibly unintended): Heavy use of passive voice stood out to me. Average sentence length was long. No readability metric is perfect but they're worth paying attention to. Most readers are lazy and distracted. They want something easy to read.

>>8568866
I'm interested, tell me more.

>>8569762
>"Bum" is British English, "butt" is American English, it seems weird to use both.
I use both.
But then again I'm ESL so I kinda mix them during learning and practicing, rather than being immersed in one or the other.

>>8570315
>>8569762
eh, I think in this case bum is another one of those dirty talk stuff used to associate with ass,the likes of rear, backside, booty and other lookalikes, so I think it's fine

>>8570426
Bum seems more sweet talk than dirty to me.

>>8541283
>>8541375
Hey depressed anon. If you're lurking and end up finishing that cosplay story, do you think you can take a whack at my request?

>>8571270
I suppose if you really want me to. I still feel really bad about those other requests I did.

>finishing that cosplay story
bleghh

>>8569762

All good advice, thanks for giving it a read. Paragraph spacing is undoubtedly a conversion problem, or just how AO3 displays breaks between paragraphs, because on HF that double-spacing doesn't appear to exist. Comma placement could use some work, I agree. I tend to throw in commas where I feel a slight pause in the sentence would take place, as if I were speaking the lines aloud.

Using both bum and butt is just a matter of me trying to avoid using the same word to describe the same body part as little as possible. Bum, butt, backside, ass, rear, buttock, tush, facemask, etc. Sentence fragments are due to my wanting the flow of the story to change speeds. Early on, I often have longer sentences, that drag out (at worst). As the story reaches the climax, so to speak, the sentences become shorter. Things are going "faster," so to speak. It's grammatically incorrect, but hopefully it gets the desired effect. If not, it's something I need to work on.

And I know what you mean by readers being lazy and distracted. I don't know if I'd go that far with it, but I understand where the idea comes from. I know a lot of people will ctrl+F a body part or action they want to see, and start reading from there, and that's perfectly fine. At the end of the day, so long as it got their rocks off, and they don't immediately forget about the story afterward, I feel I did a good job. Additionally, if I somehow wrote a story they enjoyed the plot of, well, all the better (though Roserade at the Beach wasn't exactly plot heavy).

Thanks for the feedback!

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>>8558638

Day #48

>>8573155
Did you see my detail heist post?
>>8573167
>Duck dodgers
Now this is something I haven't heard from in literally ages. Might rewatch a few episodes to refresh my memory for this piece

>>8573244

I did see it, and I've made a note of it in my backlog of requests. I still can't 100% promise I'll get around to it in a timely fashion, but it's honestly at the top of my list.

>>8573263
Sounds good! Feel free to ask me any questions you have, as I'll definetly be lurking about.

>>8572080
I don't mind at all. Besides, not many people here are open to doing sexual harrassment/rape.

As magician's quest game is pretty obscure, the context needed is basically that it takes place in a school of magic. Like animal crossing, there is only one human (pompadour guy) and everyone else is animals, plants, mythological creatures, or animate inanimate objects. Magic is used for convenience or pranks. That's more or less it.

>>8573155
You'll have to do your spacing manually on AO3 if you want it to look just right. It's a pain in the ass, but it's worth it.

>>8575201
Seems like more trouble than it's worth, honestly. I've seen formatting in stories that make them unreadable, and personally I don't think double spaced paragraphs qualify for that.

>>8575447
I never had a problem with doing it and my stories tend to average 10k+ words per chapter. I use the time to make sure I don't have any typos or weirdly phrased sentences that I might've missed in WordPad. Granted, I am a typical self-flagellating creator who takes their porn writing too seriously. There's a plugin for stripping out excess spaces on AO3 but I've never used it so I can't testify to how well it works.

Are ERP logs welcome, at all? I went back through and made a complete overhaul to fix the tenses and story progression to flow more like an actual collab fic than a lewd conversation between strangers.

That said, I wouldn't be surprised if the majority of people here were against logposting of any form.

>>8578040

Go for it. As far as I'm concerned, ERP is just a collaboratively written smut story.

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>>8578210
Hey, that's the entire reason I got into it to begin with.

http://archiveofourown.org/works/10551320

Unnamed Goblin Girl/Human Male fic, plenty of claiming and fun with size differences. I wound up tagging it as WoW in the end, since the other anon in question came from /v/.

>>8569818
Are you thinking about writing it? What kind of detail do you want?

>>8575201
I write in LibreOffice, export as plain text, and then run "cat filename.txt | sed '/^$/d' | sed 's/^/\<p\>/' | sed 's/$/\<\/p\>/' | sed G | fold -w 80 -s > filename.html" to convert to very simple HTML that I can copy into AO3 with no problems. If your OS doesn't support this then maybe you could install Ubuntu in a VM or something. Ask /g/.

goodmorning fellow degenerates

Would anyone here write something like this?

>Trap with complete control over his arousal and dick.
>Will do almost any porn scene for enough money.
>"Fuck this guy and cum three times even though you're not gay, then when we strap you into this fucking machine don't spill a drop of cum!"
>"Okay."
>"Fuck this girl to orgasm, then ruin yours right outside of her pussy."
>"Let us brutally edge you for hours, until your dick is dripping precum, your ass is clenching, and you're about to die. Then when the girl offers her pussy to you, walk away."
>"When do you want me to cum?"
>"We'll have a scene for that in a few days. Don't cum until then."
>"That's okay. Some people wanted to look at how an edged guy responds to various forms of pleasure. I'll do that while I wait."

>>8586796
Ahh that's good stuff, would love to see it if anybody picks up too.

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>>8573167

Day #49

>>8537820
Just read the misdreavus story.

Honestly the talk about human wrestling Pokémon reminded me of one of my old ideas that I never explored: guy gets plates and uses powers to take on and give black eyes to legendaries for X purpose. Never got to fleshing it out.

Early memories aside, that misdreavus pic is hot as hell, though I wonder if the story would be the same without the pic reference. Would've been amusing if the tables were turned (story influenced pic).

Plotwise I was amused by Ethan's antics to prevent her from getting the jump on him, mostly from the ditto gag. Seems pretty straightforward enough. Would have been a bit more fun if Ethan kissed her ass while he undressed her panty line.

Smutwise you focused quite some emphasis on making sure she is shorter than Ethan, which is fine considering misdreavus is pretty small. While I find it nice to look more into the plot critique more, the previous anon does make a good point about sentence fragments being around, whether entirely or should be connected with a comma (i.E: ctrl+f her was incredible. Far ; was in ecstacy. Eyes, etc.). Pointed it out since there is enough of them to make a comment about it. Must be all the blood rushing to the dick while making them.

Finally a tagging nitpick. When a story is tagged, I presume there will be a focus of said tag in the story. There are only two mentions of spanking in the story, and doesn't seem to be a big focus. I would recommend removing the spanking tag from the story, or go back and add more instances of it to keep the tag, but I think it should go with what little amount of it there is in the story.

Otherwise this is a mighty fine read, with an ending that hints at another story to come. Good stuff.

reviving

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http://archiveofourown.org/works/1407019/chapters/2951644

I have an idea for an Invader Zim fapfic involving Tak in her human disguise. No other Zim major characters are involved, none of that. Just Tak and a bunch of guys.

Anyone interested?

>>8592785
>Anyone interested?
Are women in pornography surprisingly pliable when it comes to requesting sex?

(The answer is yes)

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>>8591231

This story also inspired me to think of an idea for a multi-chapter story, about a young man going out into the world to catch ginjika pokemon. The taboo (and in some areas illegal) activity of using them for anything sexual would exist, but the protag finds he has better luck catching, taming, and training his growing army of empowered beauties with sex rather than violence. I had a selection of pokemon lined up (attached is the pokemon who would be the protag's "main" pokemon through his journey), and came up with personalities for most, based on the real pokemon's pokedex entries. Sadly, nothing has come of it yet, but maybe one day.

I'll take another look at how I shorten sentences to up the speed of the read, but can't promise I'll make swinging changes. I've always been of the mindset that perfect adherence to grammar rules is only necessary when writing academic papers and non-fiction. Fiction, I feel, allows for more bending of the rules.

That's a good point about the tagging, though. Usually I just include a tag of whatever is in the story, but only including tags that relate to the focuses would probably be best. I could also do both and leave the tags be the focused kinks, but include all kinks in a list in the description. "This story contains:...." kind of thing.

>>8567779
Excuse me. I can post another, even weirder request. I'm not sure if it's a good idea to post more than one request.

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>>8598724
If you hadn't noticed, we're a fairly slow thread.
So really, anything is better than repeating bumps.

Go for it.

>>8578337
Aw, no buttfuck for the goblin?

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>>8574291
>As magician's quest game is pretty obscure
No exaggeration, I could only get most world and character info through miscellaneous videos on youtube. It looks very entertaining though, and has a nice soundtrack.

I'm still lacking in what personality Tina might have. As for the Pompadour, I've been portraying him as a self-proclaimed stylish guy who makes absurd attempts at being cool. I think that's the default stereotype I have of pompadours, either that or school punk.

>>8593094
I haven't worked out the bugs yet, but the quick version is that Delicious Weenie is risking going out of business so one of the corporate heads recommends loaning out Tak (in human disguise) to a room full of possible investors. Takes place before her episode.

boop

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Bumping with recent stuff for bump's sake.

https://pastebin.com/dNUJRLes Yo-kai Watch

https://pastebin.com/5Z0NFBFi Senran Kagura (Unfinished)

CAPTCHA: Calle Calle

I'm going going, back back, to

>>8601870
I still have the game with her in my town.
The wiki describes her as studious, and she is often focused on studies and encourages (read: demands) others to study hard for their grades. A little uptight about it I think, and quick to critique.
Not sure if this helps much, but better than nothing I guess.
The soundtrack is basically classic music of various kinds for the US/JP version, so it helps the setting very much.

>>8521141

penisleleleleXDXDXDXDXDsuckdicksgetmoneyxXx420blazeitxXxkillatoplelkillyourselfggwp

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Hey, I've got a question for my story. Say there's a half-dragon that desperately needs money. In a world where high mythological creatures like dragons, unicorns, thunderbirds, ect. are routjnely hunted and searched for their highly prized magical materials, do you think it's a big enough preventative from the half-dragon selling some of their saliva for a good amount of money?

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>>8600930
Anon wanted to be bred, and goblins can't get pregnant through their assholes.

In the end, I couldn't do much more than tease anal without going full godmod.

>>8604776
Damn. So much for the sexy talk about also fucking her ass.

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>>8606077
In retrospect, we probably could have easily managed to fit in a few paragraphs about anal and then transitioned over to PIV and picked up the breeding angle from there, ignoring the unhygienic nature of going straight from an ass to a vagina.

That said, I think we'd been writing for two to three hours at that point and we were both trying to wrap things up.

>>8604692
If they're routinely hunted, it could be a problem.
But there's always that fringe of society that goes against the norm for benefits, maybe even a hunter that finds it just easier to pay for slobber instead of murdering for it.

I imagine some sort of underground market of mythical monsters could spring up, wringing out as much cash as it can from keeping their creatures alive.

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>>8604383
Bumping. Started #16 of Yo-kai Specs, I know at least 2 Anons read it in here.

https://pastebin.com/PzX9E8T3

Contains death, but no gore or anything, just implied. Still very much in-progress.

>>8606104
Ah alright. Makes sense.
Also read a few of your senran kagura stories. They all seem pretty simple compared to the goblin thing, but hot damn. If you did the same thing you did to make goblin smut, I wonder how much lesser those stories will be.

>>8604692

Totally believable, though I don't think the half-dragon would be opening a shop; more of a back alley deal. I think a smart hunter would realize it's better to leave one dragon alive and continuously come back for saliva than to risk his life constantly hunting dragons.

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>>8591059

Day #50, the last one

bumpery before sleep

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Apologies, but I would like to request criticism on a lewd story I'm working on for the waifufag Ghoul School threads at /co/.

It's not finished, nor has it gotten to the sex yet, but I wanted to ask if what I currently have is adequate or if there's any advice on how to make it better.

The section at the top is the request post, partly there to remind myself on what should be what, and should serve as a decent cliffnotes on how the story would play out. I can delete it once the story's complete if it's troublesome.

Otherwise, is there anything I can do to make this better or is it fine as is? Also, any advice on writing sex? I can find more information myself, and I have written one smut story before, but the more info on what works best the better.

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I wrote about the Amulet series of comic books. Please critique it. It's probably bad.

Late bump in the night.

>>8608695
Always good to see a new chapter.

>>8617470

Looks pretty good so far. Another route to take is to have Anon initially reject her offer, either out of cowardice or fear of what it would do to their friendship, thereby establishing a timid nature. That's when she pours the potion in his drink, and asks him to drive her home, because she's "way more drunk than [he is]." The potion, in addition to the biology changing, essentially brings out the animal in him, unearthing his desires from the crust of his insecurities and fears, and general awkwardness. That'll be what convinces to take her up on her offer. However, if that sounds too date rapey to you, what you have so far, in that regard, is perfectly fine.

As for describing her clothes, try to pepper than in through the story, and find ways to bring it up rather than just listing the articles. Rather than say "she wore a loose t-shirt with a red logo on it," maybe say, "she fidgeted in her seat, idly tugging at her t-shirt, warping the faded red logo that sat between her breasts." That way you're giving her something to do, and forcing the reader to think about the sexy bits before anything sexy has actually happened yet.

I'd also recommend some light foreshadowing on the groin change, while in the car. Like Anon starts to feel an itch on his crotch, but resists the urge to scratch because he doesn't want to appear lewd in front of her (which also establishes his timidness even more, so there's more to strip away as he becomes progressively more feral during the sex). Adding to the complication is Anon stealing glances at her, trying not to notice her legs, stomach, chest, and even her lips and eyes, and the boner that could result if he fails to resist looking.

First and third ideas are purely up to your preference, but the second is something I learned in a writing class, so it should be good advice.

I look forward to reading more of the story!

>>8618283

Main critique would be that just as in sex, foreplay is important in writing, especially smut writing. If you'd rather get straight into the juicy bits, you'll need to be more descriptive. A single action is permitted to linger if you are taking time to point out the details. One thing I do is try to think how the action, or just the other person, is being perceived by the five main senses. Don't have to do all of them, or several in a row, feel free to mix it up a little in that regard.

Also try to avoid just listing off things that are happening. He did this, she did that, he started doing this, and then she responded with that. You have to give the reader time to let the moment sit in their brain, and start to arouse.

In addition, a trap a lot of writers fall into (myself included, more times than I'd like to admit) when writing fanfiction is not describing the characters' appearance, because it's assumed the reader already knows what they look like. This can be taken advantage to a small degree; you don't have to be nearly as descriptive with established characters as OC ones, but it still helps to lay some foundation down.

Above all else, keep on writing!

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>>8622570
Thanks, this does help. Especially the 2nd and 3rd tips.

Like you mentioned with the date rape, I'm not sure how to pull that through with an overall "feel good" ending if I do that, but I like the progression of Anon's sexual drive and overall confidence, where I can see it then degrade during sex into beastial lust. Works very well progressively.

But I'm not sure how I can have Anon agree to the forced change and still be in sane mind to go through the sex after the change. I felt at the time that having him agree to it before drinking would avoid opening a can of worms with agreeing to sex after previously disagreeing, especially after being "drugged" into getting a dog-weiner.

Maybe have Winnie go full apology mode, saying he doesn't have to go through with sex and do a whole "nah, it's cool mang." I dunno. Still have to figure out how to get around him changing heart and saying he's fine with sex after discussing it was his own fault for not previously agreeing or something along those lines.

I did a similar thing before hand, but that was a whole spiel of Anon being too cowardly to initiate any romantic moves during a full year or so of dating before ending with him kissing and apologizing, then ending with sloppily written shower sex. I'll think a bit more on it all.

Thanks again.

Boop

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>>8623275

Yea, the whole non-con/dubious consent rope is a tough one to balance on; easily could lead to falling into the rape pit. My idea is more that the potion changes him physically into a wolfman, but also mentally. Removes his anxieties and inhibitions so he can allow himself to go after Winnie, something he's wanted to do for a long time, but never had the guts for. However, that's also very close to the idea of getting a girl super drunk so she's more likely to agree to sleep with you. So, it's probably not worth going that line...

Unless you keep in the bit about him agreeing to go back to her place under the inferred promise of sex. Winnie senses his trepidation, however, and offers him a bit of liquid courage, this time with the potion mixed in. Then, the rest of the idea follows. That way you've removed the dubious consent portion.

>>8628649

Another thread you can add to take it further away from dubious consent is have Winnie misunderstanding the potion's effects. Like the bottle just says, "Grant one the courage of an alpha wolf." She just assumes this would be a mental thing, and he'd stay the same, but once back at her house, they both discover his body changing to have canine features. She becomes very apologetic, of course, but he, under the effects of the potion, making him more brave and bold, says it's fine and wishes to fulfill her birthday request she made earlier.

>>8628688
Ooh, that's a good idea. Thanks for the help, I'll spend some time thinking about this and edit the story.

I'll probably come back once I've completed the sex part and epilogue. Thanks again.

>>8604383
Do you even plan on finishing that ryouna story? What was it supposed to contain?

>>8595546
So what's next to be uploaded tomorrow? Think that will be the last thing I'll review and then take a break to focus on other things...and maybe try finishing stuff of my own.

agonizing

>>8641558
Pain

>>8639047

Next on the list would be the Olivia/Sun "Christmas cake" story.

>>8643424
Sounds tasty

>>8604593
I'm still here, despite how slow it's been.
I thought about putting this up on an account so I could slowly improve it over time, but with pastebins traffic deletion rules it'd be pointless.

(bump)

>>8649401
>traffic deletion rules
That's the first I'm hearing about that. How does that work?

>>8649703
I read this when signing up, it seems as though if a paste doesn't get traffic it'll get slated for deletion. While their paid service keeps it safe from deletion.
https://pastebin.com/pro

>>8650065
ah, guess that explains why bots view the free pastebins then.
Doesn't seem to affect unlisted/private pastebins though since mine are still around since 2014.

>>8650065
>>8650455
I also have some ancient pastebins, private, never linked and on account I haven't touched for a couple years that were still around when I checked it at random.

So the algorithm for the deletions is a mystery.

>>8650065

Well shit, knowing that, I should really transfer all my stories I have on pastebin into a word document.

>>8643424
>>8645101

Making more edits than I had anticipated to the story (plus P5 has eaten up some time), so it's taking longer than I'd hope, but I still plan to post it tonight, hopefully before 10PM EST.

>>8656944
>>8645101

It'll also be a bit longer than most of my fulfilled requests, so if you decide to sit that one out, that's totally understandable. Next week will likely be the Tiff Crust story, which will be shorter.

>>8657185

Yea, no way is this going up tonight. I'm barely half way through. I really should have started this process earlier in the week, but P5 occupied so much of my attention (and thoughts of writing fapfics about the various waifus, particularly Tae Takemi). I will work through the night and get it up tonight, though, I can promise that.

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>>8584951
>x days later
I tried out Apache OpenOffice Writer because you can save files directly as HTML without a need for converting them and my test file maintained all proper formatting and spacing. While I'll still spend unhealthy amounts of time obsessing over my final edit, now I'll be able to spend the bulk of my time actually editing rather than copy pasting everything line-by-line. Thanks bro.

>>8657185
I don't mind the wait personally as long as I get to read something that makes my mind and my dick go some good distance

>>8659954
OpenOffice is dead. When Oracle bought Sun, the OpenOffice developers forked it (copied it as allowed by the license) to make LibreOffice, because everybody hates Oracle. Eventually Oracle gave OpenOffice to Apache but it was too late. All the new development happens with LibreOffice. OpenOffice doesn't even get security updates promptly so you risk getting pwned every time you open a third party document with it.

/trash/ is being flooded with purses and various totes.

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>>8662094
Noted. It looks like LibreOffice also supports exporting to HTML directly, so everything works out fine.

>>8663530
I would be surprised if it didn't.

Over 6,000 words in, and still I haven't gotten to the sex, though I have just finished the heavy PDA scene. What can I say, when I'm given an idea that I click with, I go full force with it.

>>8666090

Since it's becoming so long, I'm going to break it up into two chapters, the first ending after Olivia and Sun go their separate ways after his "how to be a girlfriend" lesson. That chapter will go up tonight, but the other half will have to wait until later in the day, Monday. I'll post a link to the AO3/HF versions once it's up.

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>>8666173

Clock in at 6,906 words, here is the first chapter of "Olivia the Christmas Cake." There's no sex, technically, in this chapter, but things do get hot and heavy. The next chapter will be almost entirely sex, probably.

http://www.hentai-foundry.com/stories/user/TheDjinn/23986/Olivia-Christmas-Cake

http://archiveofourown.org/works/10587378

If the original requester is still in this thread, I hope this first half to the final draft of the story is to your liking. I definitely added in more of the relationship building, and somehow added in some romance to this smut story. It's not the first time I've done that, and it probably won't be the last.

>>8666396
Olivia OR. Now this is the 'relationship teaching' that I looked forward to back when the greentext was first made. The added details of their encounter and Olivia's problem also had me a hard kek, along with Sun trying to help her tone down the straightforward/intimidating speech. Not sure if you're up for edits, but that public spank in the greentext was also pretty hot. Do you think you could add it in that scene as well if possible? You know, a hard one for the audience.
I don't mind the addition of some romantic buildup since in a situation like this it is inevitable. I will definitely look forward to the next chapter!

Bump

>8666699
Noice numbers.

>>8666699

>Do you think you could add it in that scene as well if possible?

Definitely. A few minutes after I posted it, I realized I had left it out, and was determined to put it back in. Glad you enjoyed the rest of the changes, too.

>>8649401
You could try an Ao3 account then, but the wait list for registration will vary

>>8670093
Seems like a place actual writers go, and not a platform you can just vomit anything onto.
So it's not really for me.

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>>8666699

Alright, added. Here's the new part, so you don't have to go searching for it in the story:

"Olivia must have greatly enjoyed this, because the next thing he knew, she stopped nibbling on his neck to whisper, "Spank me," into his ear. His eyes opened in surprise, even though he really should be shocked at her request, given their very public display of arousal. His eyes were cast down along her body, watching it writhe as she straddled half his lap. He never bothered to look at the crowd, though it was clear they were there. The murmurs growing louder, the shadows they cast around the pair. Nothing about being so public with this increasingly lewd display deterred him from fulfilling her request. As his hand reached back, the crowd took in a collective gasp, knowing what must come next with such a motion. When Sun struck her right cheek, he bounced his hand back off immediately, so he could watch it jiggle and her body tense up to the sudden pain and rush of pleasure. He did this twice more, observing the miracle that was her backside, before letting his hand stay on her after she spanked her. His white hand gripped her chocolate skin, reddened by his strikes, and sunk just enough into her flesh to demonstrate, to everyone, how thick and soft her ass was. While he did this, he began to spank the left cheek with his right hand. Eventually, he was kneading both of her cheeks together, teasing the crowd with the idea that he could, at any moment, spread them apart and show them what even a thong would have otherwise covered up. He was only so bold because of Olivia's reactions; how her mews and squeals began with just shock, and, with each slap of her ass, became overcome with lustful tones."

>>8521559
>nope haha

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>>8666090
I started what I thought was going to be a stress-reliever project from my main story, figured it would be a quick 5-8k words, and now it's 14k+ and has something of an actual plot. I'm estimating it'll be in the realm of 18k-20k when I'm done. Meanwhile the thing I really need to be working on languishes at 36k+ words and I'm estimating that'll be around 50k when I'm done.

Never underestimate the sheer volume of words you can vomit out when you get into something. I also think it's easier to power through a short story/novella than a proper novel-length work because once you're done, you know that you're done and there's not nearly as much to revise.

>>8663670
Because >>8584951 mentioned that he goes through a separate process to convert the file, I initially assumed that LibreOffice didn't support it natively but once the LibreOffice/OpenOffice connection was explained I realized that it would. I should've checked it out the first time it was mentioned, but I was in buttfuck nowhere on frozen snail-tier country internet at the time and already had OO installed on my laptop from using it once several years ago.

On the subject of word processors, what do the rest of you use? Prior to getting LibreOffice I did all my stuff in WordPad and I keep story concepts in a Notepad++ file. I fucked around a bit with Sublime 3 but didn't care for it much and I've heard good things about Scrivener but the UI seems a bit cluttered for my taste and all the features it touts are things I don't think I particularly need, so I haven't tested it yet. Would be interested in hearing if anyone has experience with it and how it compares to other programs.

>>8673143
Slow and steady does it. The more you write, the easier it gets.

>>8673533
Ooof, that is quite the amount of work out on for that Olivia story. While I do love long smuts/romance stuff, I hope you are enjoying writing the story as much as I am reading it. It probably is a lot of work, but know that the audience (or at least me) is probably enjoying the story.

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>>8673143
Yeah, I didn't feel like it was really worth anyone's time.
I don't think there's any point in finishing something I or other people won't like.

Any update of that Ben/WayBad story?

So let's say I wanna get into the writefag game to make some quick cash. What's the commission scene look like? Is it a viable field to enter just for some spending money?

>>8676106
http://writing-commissions.deviantart.com/journal/A-Beginner-s-Guide-on-Pricing-551412412
This might help

>>8676305

Gotcha, what about advertising? How do I get my name out there, where's a good place to go and set up shop?

>>8676829
Post.
Literally.
Everywhere.
Deviantart, Tumblr, hentai foundry, crossboarding on 4chan, just be everywhere. Keep in mind 4chan has a no advertising thing so you can't just ask for commissions. You could build up a portfolio as a sample of your work on or from 4chan as advertising, kinda like how >>8529314 got going.

>>8673533
It's happened to me a few times, where I start on something that is supposed to be relatively small, and I just keep adding more and more because I like the premise, the way the characters work together, or because I can see that the story could have some real legs. The Misdraevous story is an example of that; it's also an example of when I added romance to a smut story.

>>8674552
Oh I'm absolutely enjoying writing it. I doubt I would have churned out so much if I didn't. Whenever I think about doing a romance/sex story, I can never get the gears going. The first bit of "romance" I did was between Black Cat and Spider-Man, and for the longest time that was completely one-sided and resulted in the death of several men due to Cat sitting on their face and suffocating them, and it doesn't end in a healthy way either.

There are some romantic elements, I think, in my stories. Pairings that I enjoy so much because I somehow began to add in romance without realizing it, like between Supergirl and Wonder Woman. The Roxy Rocket story was the first one I tried to really do romance, and while I don't think I've failed, I've also stopped doing that story, even though I have a lot left to do.

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>>8674552
Wrong person m8

>>8676106
People are more prone to scoffing at the idea of commissioning writers, which can make finding a marketplace more difficult. As noted by >>8676930, you'll have to put your work out there consistently in a lot of different avenues. You might be able to find a pod of whales you can farm early on, but I wouldn't bet on that.

Snek from the /d/ writethread is someone you could ask about getting started, but you'll have to keep in mind his strength is always putting shit out consistently, at a far greater rate and volume than anyone else in that thread and probably any other writing thread on 4chan. (He's a NEET, so this is more viable for him than it may be for someone not in that situation.) I haven't sat in on the /d/ thread for a while because there was a lot of tension and drama going on last time I did, but the thread might've cooled down since then, so no harm in asking.

At the bare minimum, you're going to want to get yourself established. You can't really just go "will write porn pls gibe mone." People have to know you can finish work and won't disappear randomly. Reputation is everything as a freelancer.

Who here's up for some pretty degenerate stuff?

>>8681059
Well, we are on /trash/.

>>8680137

That's essentially my goal right now, just establish a name for myself, then ask for money. I'm not sure if I want to even ask for commissions, though. I like the lessened pressure of fulfilling a request that doesn't have money involved, but I'd still like to make money doing this. Right now my goal is to get a big enough name that I can open a Patreon under the purpose of supporting me while I put out free content. I'm not well versed in backer rewards, but I'd probably give the sugar daddies things like direct requests, submitting ideas to go into a community poll, stuff like that. I need to do more research on it, for sure.

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"Possible inspiration for a future story" bump

>>8681795
>but I'd probably give the sugar daddies things like direct requests
Well, just measure that against commission pricing and don't forget to account for patreon taking off a slice.

>>8673533
The reason I use a separate process for converting the file is because I want the simplest possible HTML that AO3 will accept.

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>>8666396

Once again finished far later than I had intended, here is the second, and final, chapter of "Olivia the Christmas Cake."

http://www.hentai-foundry.com/stories/user/TheDjinn/23986/Olivia-Christmas-Cake

http://archiveofourown.org/works/10587378/chapters/23424420

As always I hope you all, but especially the OR, enjoy it!

Write

>>8685364
nooooooooooooooooo

>>8681169
Yeah, considering that this place could already be called a cesspool of degeneracy anyways

Anyway, I'm requesting a sequel/spinoff of this story: https://www.dropbox.com/s/yv2c7va3khs9b03/1327118893.barkarr_guilmon_and_the_green.txt?dl=0
I'm not exactly sure how it should go, so here's some general ideas for it:
>another digimon encounters the pool (or at least a similar one) with them having a unique reaction to what has happened to them (and at least include a scene that's similar to the second half to the original story)

>a digimon encounters guilmon, possibly wondering what has happened to him with lewd acts a while later (and maybe the cum has a transformative effect)

Possible Candidates:
>first prompt
Agumon, Veemon, Shoutmon, Gabumon, Exveemon, Wargreymon, or Weregarurumon (have the pool's effects be stronger on the latter 3)
>second prompt
Renamon, Agumon, Veemon, Shoutmon, or Gabumon

>>8684457
Olivia OR. Wow, that wait was worth. I'll admit a few lines have some cheese in them (Goldilocks being the notable thing) but they do put a smile to my head...and penis.
I still think her first big orgasm should also have Sun coming inside her pussy, but it is a hot read. Thanks so much!

>>8684457
Just read that story.
/Vp/ loves jabbing at Olivia's single state, so it's nice that she gets some attention. Found it amusing Dun had to try to tame such a sexually frustrated woman, though it seemed more like it was injected into him as the date went on.

There's a bit of conflict of age with Sun, where some lines either say he's grown up to 18 or being referred to as a teen. Do you mean a teen at heart?

Otherwise their interactions during the date was almost cute until it got to the lewd bits.

Chapter 2 is fine smut wise, though I do think it suffers somewhat from TMI (too much information). For example, throughout she refers to porn, where as only one or fewer mentions of references to porn would suffice. The big one that sticks out to me is the mention of hymen loss from dildo. Personally, I don't think it would need to be mentioned. In a world like Pokémon, trainers are always riding on things and exploring. Realistically the excercise is plenty enough to break hymens, but I think the mention at all is not needed.

I wonder what her porn collection looks like...

>>8687198
Happy to hear you enjoyed it!

>>8689507
>Found it amusing Dun had to try to tame such a sexually frustrated woman, though it seemed more like it was injected into him as the date went on.

That was fully intentional, I'll admit. How he was out there to try and teach her how to be a proper lady out in public, but she ends up teaching him how to craze sex as much as air and water.

>There's a bit of conflict of age with Sun, where some lines either say he's grown up to 18 or being referred to as a teen.

I mean, 18 is the legal age to be considered an adult, but he's still technically a teen. That's why. It's also to reinforce the age disparity between the two characters.

>The big one that sticks out to me is the mention of hymen loss from dildo. Personally, I don't think it would need to be mentioned.

That's something I always go back and forth on. Add in some detail that explains why X isn't happening, or leave it out and worry that readers are turning their noses up at the screen saying, "Immersion broken!" First time was when I insisted on mentioning condoms every time, so I could explain why everyone wasn't getting pregnant. I've since dropped that, and only add it if it's relevant to the character's personality (like most stories wouldn't bother adding in a line about getting lube before anal, but Sun, and the circumstance he's in, it makes sense for him to take the time to get that; plus I wanted to say Goodra lube).

>I wonder what her porn collection looks like...

Scrooge McDuckian levels of hoarding.

>>8690958
Eh, personally not everything has to be explained, especially when it is time to get dirty. With the description you got, it is easy for the audience to let their minds make their own choice as to how it happened without a mention, but that is just me. We might not see eye to eye about it.

>>8692032
No we do, I'm just still in the process of figuring out what does and does not need to be included, regarding the mechanics of sex.

>>8573263
me again. As an excuse to bump the thread, have some sakichan pics I have saved if you ever find the time to tackle her on for related dumping.
http://imgur.com/a/7wv3t

I could add more, though the remaining pics aren't quite as plump with her breasts.