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Undyne thread - She's Rooting for You edition
Previous thread >>7207536

Image Collections:

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*IMPORTANT*
If you have many or rare Undyne images, please consider sharing your collection too!

Resources:

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Comfy fish stories -> http://pastebin.com/Xf3GR6TA
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Friendly reminder to read captainjingo's comic.
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For drawfags, requesting undyne crouching or on her knees blowing a guy who is standing up.
Good part, they're holding hands, fingers merged.
Very lewd.
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>>7253074
Man his comics were something else.
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>>7233519
This could've been better if I wasn't so tired. On the other hand I'm glad I bought the tablet. It would've taken me several hours to draw something like this back when I just used a mouse.
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>>7253324
oh my god
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>>7253324
Gold star for trying.
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>>7252917
Hey, that was cute. I like how you didn't go like overboard with Undyne being uneasy with the manatees but you still got it across pretty well. And FYI Seaworld is more like an amusement park than an aquarium. Didn't bother me too much but it wasn't really authentic.
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>>7253130
I'll think about it. Don't have time to try today.
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>>7253350

>>7253335
Is...is that good or bad?
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>>7253615
It was just a very goofy image.
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>>7253324
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I suppose I'll repost that last story since it was so close to the end of the last thread.

http://pastebin.com/Fi6sDJ04
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>>7253658
Oh sweet, I missed that one!
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>>7253632
That's good. That's what I went for after I got frustrated. It was supposed to be longer and it was supposed to make sense but today's just not a good day to draw.
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Which is best
>bald undyne with ponytail
>normal hair but pulled back to ponytail
>hair loose
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>>7253815
normal hair
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Underwater woman
Underwater lady
No one on the shore
Will ever know
Whats in her heart
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>>7253815
Normal hair for her casual look and possibly loose hair whenever she wants to look formal.
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>>7253815
If there's one thing Khoppang has above any other Undyne artist, it's the hairstyle. Even though I love flowing hair, Khoppangs style is really unique and stylish.
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>>7253832
FLAT
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>>7253924
flat is cute, too
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>>7253954
flat is best
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Eyepatch could use some more shape but still a great drawing.
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>>7254172
I agree. The visible eye could also be a little bigger. I assume from the filename and the way you wrote it you didn't draw it yourself?
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>>7254280
lol no it's from deviantart
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>>7254172
Everything's too round.
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>>7254395
Fucking ears too round.
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>>7252176
>You'll probably see more girl-girl stuff soon then since I find it more exciting personally.
This makes me really happy, since that's my personal preference too.
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>>7254560
[fakespoiler]as long as we get some guy on gill stuff too because I want to cum on this fish[/fakespoiler]
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>>7254665
Oh, I definitely don't have anything against male x Undyne, girl on gill is just my favorite.
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>>7254665
>>7254560
I think I've said it before but I don't have any problem writing whatever you guys are interested in as long as I can make it tasteful.
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>>7253924
T H I C C
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>>7254733
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>>7254733
Y U C K
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>>7254722
Speaking of writing, since we did a threesome story with Alphys and Undyne how about one with Anon tagging up with another character, maybe Metatton or something, and giving Undyne a "birthday present"?

Asgore could work too, but... you know... that might be breaching the pseudo father-daughter thing they seem to have.
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>>7255129
I'm a little exhausted from that first threesome, honestly (hopefully I never say that again) but I could do something like that. You'll have to wait for a while, though, I'm a little busy right now. I'm fine with Metatton, I suppose, although if people want someone else, now's the time to say so.
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>>7255228
Awesome! I definitely won't ask to rush it out, it was only something on my mind when I finished reading through the story. I imagine a story like that... takes a lot out of you.
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>>7255558
>Mettaton and Undyne as your best friends
That's a pretty comfy AU to be honest, friendo.
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>>7254707
>those nips
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>>7255272
Okay, just letting everyone know I'm starting on this story now. Check back in an hour to an hour and a half I think.
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>>7258229
Also, do we think it'd be hotter if it was from Undyne's perspective or - ? I've only written one sex scene from her perspective so far, as part of that impregnation story, and I didn't really hear anything about it.
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>>7258288
Writing from a woman's perspective is always hot, especially so when done by someone who can accurately describe the emotions and feelings.

So yeah, that would be a fitting perspective for the story.
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>>7258229
Man, a happy Undyne in a dress is one of my favourites. They have a schmaltzy "these are the good times" feel to them.
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>>7258418
I'm admitting defeat. I can't finish this properly because I'm too turned on. Luckily I write the endings first and fill in the middles later, so it's still complete and readable, just not as much as I might like.

I'm a little iffy on it overall so please let me know what you think. I have to go do something now, I'll be back in ten minutes.

http://pastebin.com/n0teT1ag
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>>7260136
Alright, awesome! I'll give it a read when I finish this DS3 boss run.
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>>7260136
What did you have to go do?
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>>7261043
Don't worry about it.
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>>7260136
I liked it but yeah, I think it'd be better if you actually filled in that part in the middle.
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>>7260136
>>7260884
I love it! I'm glad you did not shy away from Undyne's BF and Mettaton being a bit naughty with each other too since it adds to the erotic appeal to the whole thing.

The transition between first and third person took a bit of "gear shifting" in my head, though I don't know if that's necessarily a bad thing since it draws back the perspective to Undyne writing and I quite appreciate that. If anything, the anticipation for the lead up to the "main dish" of the story was probably distracting me.

I agree with you in that it's missing... something... though I can't put my finger on it. Possibly something with Mettaton, he was a bit quiet, though I can understand not wanting him to steel the show with a comment or reference.
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>>7262454
Yeah, the main problem is that due to the way I'd been pacing it it would really need to be about twice as long and I simply wasn't up to it. I'll probably finish it later tonight, or tomorrow sometime. I agree that Mettaton is too quiet, and I managed to misspell his name. I was going to work that in later but that didn't end up happening.
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>>7262542
Regardless it's already pretty presentable. I had to put some time aside for it.
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boy is it just me or are we deader than usual tonight
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>>7262979
Sorry, I've been busy.
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>>7262979
>night
>not dead
>implying
ree
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>>7263317
I really don't know what to say.

:(
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>>7253324
I still get a kick out of this image
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>>7263317
Please talk to someone anon, it might not seem like it now but things can get better.
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I've gone back and fixed up >>7260136, it's complete now although it isn't much longer, I couldn't take more of that abuse. I'm not very pleased with it but I think it does what I set out to do, just not very well. If anyone goes back and reads it again, let me know what you think.

>>7263317
If even Undyne can't cheer you up then I don't know what we can do, anon.
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>>7263625
Awesome, I'll check it out after some exercises.
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>>7263907
Pirate Undyne!

...I know I have some pirate pics around here...
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>>7263936
Here's some
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Alright guys, I'm going to bed. I just want to say thank you for being such a receptive audience. I never really thought my stories would end up being such a big thing here but I'm really glad people like them and that I get a chance to keep writing them. See you all tomorrow.
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>>7264433
Goodnight writeanon!
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>>7264430
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>>7264478
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>>7264525
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>>7264433
Okay, she's probably gone by now. I kind of want to do something to say thank you to the writefag but I don't know what would be appropriate and what would be a good gesture or whatever. Does anyone have any ideas?
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>>7264433
See you later, space cowboy.
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>>7264627
If I could draw, I'd make fanart.
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>>7264674
Speaking of which, I should get back to drawing. Been pretty lazy this month.
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>>7264535
>>7264525
>>7264478
>>7264430
Thanks for the pirates?
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>>7264738
Woops that sounded sarcastic, didn't mean to add a question mark lmao
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>>7264627
Get one of the other writefags to write a girl-on-girl scene and heavily imply that it's her.
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>>7264738
>>7264762
No problem, and don't worry about it.
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>>7264775
That might be a little weird.
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>>7264831
It's 4chan.
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>>7264866
>>7264775
We want her to stay in the thread, not leave and never return.
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>7 posters
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>>7264902
Agreed, gonna have to veto that idea. That's pretty creepy t b h.

Short of commissioning one of the drawfags, I can't really think of much. Maybe having everybody reply to one of their posts at once with something cheesy and encouraging?
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>>7265224
feels good
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>>7265324
Wait, I got it. She has that email she uses for this thread, right? I think it's in her master pastebin or whatever. We can all send her nice emails thanking her or something like that.
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What is fish's cannon height and weight?
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this is a nice thread
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>>7265473
We don't know. She's probably fairly tall since in the sprites and official art she's only shorter than the boss monsters, who are huge. She's also taller than Papyrus, who describes himself as tall.
No idea about her weight.
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>>7265575
1.90 meters, 85 kilograms, go go.
Nothing better than fucking a girl taller than yourself.
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>>7265608
>The woman who can life boulders has my weight and height
nah mate
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>>7265445
morefishplease at tfwno.gf

Knock yourselves out
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>>7265766
But don't be creepy, please.
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>>7265766
>>7265445
Sound cute.
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>weekend, visiting the local comic book store
>go over to the anime section
>spot a cool tomboy with an eyepatch
>she's checking the jojo shelve
>walk over next to her and see she's looking at phantom blood
>pick up a book of episode 5
>sup?
>sup
>your waifu a shit
>now she's looking at me
>later that day we're walking in the mall
>implying you could take on dio
>but I could though
>you could maybe take on speedwagon
>you're thin like a stick, girl
>so are you
>at least I'm not a girl lol
>give me your number so I can kick your ass
>how about you give me yours so I can take you on a date
>no way fag I'm into girls
>nooo
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>>7266351
fug
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>>7266351
Something similar happened to me once, but I was fortunate enough to learn that she wasn't into men before making things awkward.

We're good friends today, I have a hard time seeing her "that way" now because of that so that helps.
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>>7265503
Comfy, isn't it?
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>>7266667
Nice doggo
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>>7266667
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>>7266547
Ask her for the succ.

>>7266682
Anti gravity tits engaged.
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>>7266995
Undyne would be the coolest stand
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>>7267014
>stand master
[GENDERLESS CHILD]
>stand
[FISH TITS]

A in destruction power
E in anime taste
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>>7267045
>E in anime taste
RREEEE
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Undyne would fangirl so hard over hellboy.
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>>7267843
Yooooooo, didn't expect to see Hellboy here
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>be a turbo nerd perma virgin
>discover undyne thread
>re-establish belief in girls
>go on free dating since because lol no smartphone or tinder
>made a profile yesterday
>three visits since yesterday
>sweating_man.png
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>>7268129
Make us proud, anon!
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>>7268257
Who's is that semon demon?
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>>7268283
Undyne
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>>7268351
*ba-dum tssh*
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>>7265445
Can anyone confirm they've done this? Cause I kind of want to but I don't want to be the only one.
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>>7268466
We've all done it, just waiting for you, anon.
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>>7268575
Sounds legit...
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>>7268465
*ba-dum-fish*
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>walk into room
>stupid sexy fishgirl lying on your bed and masturbating
>caught her by surprise
>she quickly tries to strike a cool sexy pose on the bed like she had been expecting you
>oh hi anon, didn't see you there~
>you walk over, crawls onto the bed and positions yourself over her
>undyne
>I'm gonna start fucking you now
>I may never stop
Her face when?
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>>7263354
Heh, glad you like it.

>>7263625
As a botfag I was kind of against this idea since Undyne doesn't seem to like Mettaton all that much in the game or she's at least really indifferent towards him. I just don't really see any kind of connection between Mettaton and Undyne other than Alphys perhaps. I think they'd be a fun duo with their personalities clashing so hard but that's about it.

I feel like paragraphs 8-12 kind of ramble on and lose focus for an odd moment. The sex itself is hot. I'm glad you didn't make Mettaton completely passive and involved a bit of anon on Mettaton.

I like your writing style. It's not perfect but it can hold attention and it seems to shift between funny and interesting in a nice way. Even though I didn't like the idea that much it was still fun to read.
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Requesting undyne wearing leotard and jeans, the unholy outfit.
Just a sketch would be amazing.
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>>7265766
>>7265445
It really isn't necessary to thank me, I'm doing it more for myself than for you. Thanks to the one guy who emailed, though, that was nice to wake up to.

>>7269545
I agree, I didn't really see the connection there and that's what made it so difficult for me, I couldn't really get a handle on how Mettaton and Undyne would interact. I think it's okay but I'm not particularly proud of it.

What don't you like about my writing style, just out of curiosity? I always find that an odd comment since I obviously am quite attached to it, but I agree, I don't think it's perfect, it's just something I'm very used to at this point.

Anyway, if anyone wants a story, let me know and I'll get to it when I can.
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>>7269630
That looks more like a swimsuit and jeans. A leotard is supposed to reach the top of the thighs so you wouldn't really see it from under the jeans unless it's awkward like in that image where the edge of the jeans starts from somewhere near the middle of her ass. It'd be pretty indistinguishable from a sleeveless shirt.

>*quick google search later*

Oh there's a special erotic lingerie leotard for women that looks like that. I suppose that's specifically what you want? It still wouldn't show from under the jeans though. Now that I think about it, isn't that kind of what Undyne wears already but you'd just close up the neck part?

>>7269682
Hmm it's difficult to pinpoint. It's more of a feeling I get when I read your stuff. It comes and goes. Some lines sometimes irk me in a weird way. Like I wouldn't have thought about the things written in such a way or something a character said didn't feel up to par with the rest of the text. Like the paragraphs I mentioned earlier but I suppose you kind of threw those in afterwards so it wasn't as big of a deal.

This is pretty nitpicky though. I think it's ultimately more of a difference in the way we think than any kind of actual mistake.
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>>7270127
Agreed. Sometimes you can tell when something is rushed but it usually doesn't hinder the story itself. There's never really any glaring issues that take away from the story as a whole.

>>7269682
Can I request from that earlier list and suggest Undyne cosplaying for a con? Not sure who she'd go as, but it's fun to think about.
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>>7269682
>>7269545
Yeah, it was odd to request Undyne and Mettaton together but I couldn't think up another male character that I could see being in a threesome with Undyne and her BF (and I really wanted a MMF sequel to the FFM birthday story).

All things considered, it was a pretty good story despite some awkwardness. And in terms of the smuttiness it's pretty top notch, Undyne's POV is always refreshing in these types of stories.
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so this is like the first time in this thread
am i allowed to request the source of pic related? i've looked round but to no avail
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>>7270541
>>7270436
>>7270127
I think I can attribute that to me not editing very heavily, honestly. I have a very flowy style of writing and there's usually something stupid that slips in to most of my stories.

>>7270436
I don't mind writing that, but I've never been to a con. Quick rundown on what they're like?

>>7270634
The artstyle looks familiar but I don't know off the top of my head.
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>>7270634
Anything fish related is welcome here (kinda)! I recognize the artstyle but I can't pinpoint the source, I'm sure someone here can.
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Requesting undyne dating her own clone.
Now neither of them will be virgins.
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>>7270743
>Now neither of them will be virgins.

(though I would be lying if I said I wouldn't fug myself)
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>>7270743
If you're asking the writefag, she's already done a lewd of that: http://pastebin.com/kBF9GNRN
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>>7270715
They're basically what you expect them to be like. Tons of booths and panels, everyone is super friendly, and you're surrounded by people that are dressed up in ridiculous costumes.

And at any moment you can be violently assaulted by BO from someone who hasn't showered in weeks.
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>>7270967
Also a pretty good place to "meet" nerds of either sex, if you into that sort of thing.
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>>7270763
I want to boop Freya on the nose.
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>>7271183
Cons are the best. I've even got stabbed with a plastic fork in my weak point sigil tattoo from shadow of the colossus.
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>>7270436
Delivered: http://pastebin.com/JnVb6b09

Two disclaimers: I watch very little anime so I ended up googling 'popular anime girls' and picking from there. Don't tear my head off. In addition, I focused more on the characters than the con itself, but I figure that's what you guys are here for anyway. Let me know what you think.
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>>7271396
>like looking at a lithe, muscular grape

Also One piece? She dressed up as Nico Robin?
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>>7271737
Uh huh. Didn't do a whole lot of research but at first glance I imagined it'd be a fun look for Undyne.
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>>7271835
>>7271396
It was cute! I've never been to cons either so I don't know how disappointed a con goer would be with the descriptions but I think it was an ok choice to focus on the characters more than the crazy stuff at cons.
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>>7271183
Once went to an anime con, first and only con ever visited.
Got stalked by two homestuck girls and watched anorectic, scantly clad girls on a scene.
Was very weird.
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>>7272065
>>7271396
Yeah I liked it! Your Undyne is super cute.
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>cool uncle lives nearby
>always has my back, baby sat a lot when I was a lad
>took me to do cool stuff and see coom things
>get older he still is always there with advice and helps me out when things get rough
>passed always way last week
>his funeral is on a Friday
>3dayweekend.jpg
>come back in to work Monday
>guy who did my shift complains that my job is bullshit and that everything went to shit Friday night
>mfw even in death my uncle has my back
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>>7270634
Here you go
https://twitter.com/debdeb555/status/738397144504115201
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>>7269630
Not my art, but there are already some pictures like that.
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>>7273529
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>>7273547
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>>7273824
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>>7263907
>Pirate undyne
Fuck yes
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what if
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>>7274196
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>>7274203
>>7274196
too flat
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>>7274225
Is Undyne x swap Undyne ok?
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>>7274196
>>7274203
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>>7274265
unf
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>>7273843
>my dick
Have we done a tentacle story with Undyne yet? Oh wait, the one with Fuku and the squid girl counts I guess.
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>>7274225
I THINK YOU MEAN FLAT ENOUGH
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>>7274819
Yeah there was a little bit of it in there but it wasn't the main emphasis
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>>7274868
>Undyne gets caught by some tentacle monster while swimming
>[fakespoiler]wait where did this school girl outfit come from?[/fakespoiler]
>the monster l-lewds all over her

Not really sure how we could make the story interesting, since it just sounds like an old hentai. Perhaps if we sit on our hands we could see that squid schoolgirl show a more "dominant" side on Undyne in the future.
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>>7274920
I don't know, if you look at the writefag's stories as a whole she tends to flesh out a character in pretty good detail and then stick to it, which is good I suppose for actual writing but not so good for lewds. I think that's why that last mmf threesome one didn't turn out so well, it's cause she was struggling with how to make the second-person character and Undyne fit that into their personalities, if I had to guess. I mean, kudos to her for still doing it, and the actual lewd part was still good, but the build-up wasn't, her heart wasn't in it and you could tell.

I feel like she isn't going to want to do that with the squid girl (what was her name? Octavia i think) since her main character trait has been her being in awe of Undyne and that seems like it would lend itself more to a submissive personality than a dominant one.
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>>7274982
I suppose that makes sense, though I wouldn't put it past the writer to deviate from a personality and do it well.

Though you are onto something with Octavia. I guess you wouldn't need to see a "dominant" side to her, but more so make the tentacle play the main focus. I, also, wouldn't put it past Undyne to make use of Octavia's assets.
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>>7274920
>Undyne gets caught by some tentacle monster while swimming
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>>7275139
If you read closely, actually, she does do that in that story, there's even a part where she cleans off Octavia's tentacle afterward with her mouth. I was kind of surprised at how downplayed it was but when I went back and read it again I thought that was a good idea, like it was showing how this wasn't anything out of the ordinary for them, that it was just natural. So the real question is whether she did that on purpose or not I guess.
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>>7275286
I need to re-read that story.

That was a cute story.
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>>7275286
That's a decent analysis, I think. I've been approaching this much more as a traditional story or series of stories rather than normal fanfiction, I think. I think what you gain in character is worth what you might lose in lewdness. And you're right about that last story, I was really struggling with it because it didn't feel like it fit with either of their characters.

In regards to Octavia my problem would be less Octavia being dominant and more Undyne having to be submissive. I think that the only way it makes sense for her to do that is if it's with someone she's very intimate and trusting with, so the trouble there is that I'd need to work in a lot of character development, at least for my own sake, which I could see some people not liking. If I did do something like that I think it'd be best as a longer story, which unfortunately I don't really have the energy to do for the time being.

Also, has anyone been sharing my stories anywhere? I got about 200 views so far today which is way higher than usual.
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ayo my brothers
I've been away for a while, are there any new juicy girl-on-girl stories or nah?
friendly reminder that I love you all, except for you. You know who you are.
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>>7275734
depends, what's the last one you were here for?
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>>7275810
Undyne seduces swimmer girl
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>>7275702
Yeah, I feel you. Finding the "sweet spot" for making a lewd story that involves character dynamics must be hard. Though you have done it well before like in the New Year's Special and the aforementioned story with Fuku and Octavia.

If anything I'm glad you did the Mettaton story because it showed you what you can't and could do with a character. Heck, the whole Undyne flirting with Mettaton because she thought he was a woman is an interesting premise. It could make a funny story.

>Also, has anyone been sharing my stories anywhere?
Has anyone been watching /utg/ closely? It might have gotten posted there.
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>>7275702
>Also, has anyone been sharing my stories anywhere? I got about 200 views so far today which is way higher than usual.
Someone on /utg/ was interested in Undyne x reader and someone linked him to your pastebin. Someone also put a link in the /aco/ thread a while ago.
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>>7275867
http://pastebin.com/Tw8BV62M and http://pastebin.com/zhttLcnj also feature the swimmer girl, but the second isn't lewd.

http://pastebin.com/HJ5exuZu introduces some new characters and they get a lewd scene in http://pastebin.com/R1YHPtCY

http://pastebin.com/mPbYg8se isn't strictly girl-girl but it's probably the hottest of the bunch.
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>>7275976
>but the second isn't lewd.
It's super cute though.
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>>7275868
I think what it comes down to is really how much extraneous crap people are willing to go through before I get to a sex scene or whatever. Sometimes it feels like I have to check myself, I don't really have a good sense of what people here think in that regard.

>>7275935
That would explain it, I was just curious.

>>7275976
Thanks for saving me some time, haha.

>>7276002
I'm glad Brill's gotten such a good reception here, I wasn't really expecting that.
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There was an Undertale fan event in Korea (Toby even showed up) and people are posting some of the merch they got.
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>>7276728
I wonder if Toby is half as sarcastic irl as he sounds from his posts and whatnot.

>pay 5$ for UT soundtrack
>"they're just mp3s lol" is the only note from him in the file
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>>7276024
Helps that she's a cute "insert" character for the readers to put themselves into. Kinda like anon, but with a name and such.
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>>7275702
What do you mean about the traditional story thing you said? What's the difference?
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>>7277949
I'll freely confess that I may have modeled her off of myself a little bit.

>>7278038
What I mean is basically the difference between literary fiction and genre fiction. In genre fiction, stuff like pulp novels like Clive Cussler or whatever, the story is plot-driven and the focus is less on the characters. In literary fiction it's the reverse, the focus is on the characters and they're the ones pushing the plot forward. All the stories I've been writing are pretty literary in that regard, while there's an element of plot, obviously, since it's a different scenario every time, I put a lot more emphasis on characterization. I could just write porn, you know, I could just leap right into the sex scene every time or whatever, but I don't find that very enjoyable. What I like is that pretty much all of my stories are related, there's a clear line of events that you can follow through them, and you can watch the characters grow and change as they meet new ones, have new encounters, and do new things.

Obviously it's not high literature or anything but I get the sense it's a lot more developed in that regard than most fanfiction is. If I was going to do the opposite I think the characters would feel a lot more lifeless and a lot more like how they act in Undertale because without my having done all that work beforehand, all I would have to fall back on is their canon personalities and traits and so on.

This all ties back into the reason that that mmf story I wrote felt weird, because that one was much less character-driven than all the others, and it felt phony because I couldn't come up with a real good reason for any of it to be happening and when that happens, character falls by the wayside and you've just got little dolls screwing each other.
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>>7278281
The author always has to put a bit of themselves in their stories, it's part of the magic in my opinion.
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>>7278281
Regarding the "just get to the porn" bit, what I really like about your erotic stories is the buildup and focus on characters, so please don't change anything about how you write them.
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>>7279442
Yes, obviously. I think that's what grinds my gears when people complain about my Undyne not acting like Undyne, it's like of course she wouldn't, it's my Undyne, not the one from the game any more. If you don't like where I'm going with it that's fine but I'll never understand why you'd just look at it and see that it's different and dismiss it just from that.

>>7279495
I'm glad you feel that way, I don't have any plans to change.

One thing I find strange is that I've gotten practically no negative feedback, and I think I've mentioned it before, but I wonder if there are people here who don't like my stories and just don't post about it or whatever. I can't imagine everyone likes them but just going off of what people say that's what it looks like.
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>>7280111
>One thing I find strange is that I've gotten practically no negative feedback
If you mean no negative constructive feedback, it's probably because there aren't many people here who feel they are competent enough to give feedback that is helpful.
If you mean any negative reactions, it's probably people being polite and ignoring things they aren't interested in instead of trashing them.
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>>7280111
>>7280510
Plus it's still a bajillion miles better than typical fan fiction.
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>>7273658
This one is almost the best.
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post the 8th image in your fish folder
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>>7282424
>"Error: Duplicate file exists. here."
>>7270541
Feels bad.

Here's my 9th.
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Which console does undyne approve of?
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>>7282508
Only the most extreme console, the Sega Dreamcast.
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Requesting undyne and child/alphys as a sniper team, please.
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>>7282424
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>>7283033
I like to nurture the idea that Undyne is a woman that still sleeps with her childhood stuffed animals. It's pretty cute.

That, and it makes me feel better about sleeping with my stuffed gator, bears, and monkeys like a huge dork.
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good night
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>>7283821
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>>7283723
>land a date with a turbo nerd grill
>end up back at her place
>soon fooling around in bed, pinned her down with hand down her pants
>spot something hidden under the blanket
>reach out for it
>N-NO DON'T
>it's a pile of stuffed animals
>he smirks
>ohgodkillmenow.jpg
>he grabs one of the animals and does a silly voice
>"you're cheating on me, femanon??"
>u wot
>he plays with her clit again and she gasps in surprise
>"how could you do this??"
>what is this even
>he places the doll back and makes sure it faces the two of them
>"sorry teddy but she's mine now" he says with a smile
>he pulls her pants down
>"males perform better if they can see their competitor in the eye while working"
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>>7283930
You've breached my weakness. Lewdplay with my stuffed animals.

I didn't even know that was my weakness.

I gotta go to bed... and things...
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>she laid down on the bed wearing only her panties, awkwardly holding her hands, not knowing where to put them
>the guy crouched down between her legs with an impish smile
>he produced one of her stuffed animals from behind his back
>where di you get that?? I hid them all from last tim-
>he put a finger on her lips and hushed her
>she gave him an annoyed look
>nut then he gently started to rub the animal between her legs
>oh god it was so soft
>noo, that's what it's for, she whimpered
>she weakly tried to reach up after the animal but he held her back by her hair
>wow, hadn't expected that from mr. teddy, the guy joked
>he was grinding the animal against her sex and she was getting wet
>she gave up fighting and laid back down
>he moved his hand from her hair and somehow produced another animal
>mr. tibbers noo
>he ran the new toy over her breasts, playing with the nipples
>she bit her lower lip as the confusing massage intensified
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Morning all. If anyone wants a story, let me know and I'll get to it when I can.
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>>7283984
Requesting writeanon for teasing Undyne about her stuffed animals
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Stupid gay fish
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>>7273488
>>7273500
>>7273529
>>7273547
>>7273580
>>7273615
>>7273658
>>7273824
Exactly my point. The first one is a swimsuit and the rest are stylized versions of the clothes she already wears in the game with torso gills added in. Thanks for posting those.

>>7280111
I don't usually read any fanfiction. I don't usually care enough. Your stories are nice and short though and written very well. I don't have much to complain about personally. They're stories designed specifically for the readers and requesters and they perform that job well. I think we've mentioned this before but there aren't many writers here that could give constructive criticism or negative feedback and it's not like your stories have ever been disappointments so far.

You could write a story with a stereotypical "NGAH boulder suplexing and anime crazy" Undyne out of spite once. I'd find it highly amusing. Just go crazy with it.
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>>7284718
>she was lying down on the bed, wearing only her panties
>awkwardly holding her hands, not knowing where to put them
>the guy was crouching next to her with an impish smile
>he then produced one of her stuffed animals from behind his back
>"where did you get that? i hid them after last tim-"
>he put a finger to her lips and shushed her
>then the fluffy toy was suddenly brushing against her panties
>"noo, that's not what it's for" she whimpered
>oh god it was so soft
>but so wrong
>she tried to rise up to grab it but the guy pulled her back by her hair
>"oh femanon, i didn't know your were into such things" he said with the silly voice
>the fluffy toy was grinding her sex and she felt herself getting wet from it
>as she laid there and squirmed he produced another of her stuffed animals
>"where do you keep getting those from?"
>the new toy brushed over her breasts
>"noo, not there, mr. tibbers"
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N3kkNfH4yco

Undyne music videos go go
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>>7284718
I can definitely do that if you aren't satisfied with >>7284936 which doesn't seem to be about Undyne anyway. Lewd or no lewd?

>>7284901
Well, I'm flattered then. I guess I'm just used to everyone and their mother being eager to give their two cents.
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>>7285480
I'd definitely prefer you write about it. As far as lewdness goes, maybe around medium rare, but it's your decision to make.
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>>7285866
Delivered: http://pastebin.com/LTC6M8fP

I think this is about medium rare. Either way I went for cuteness over eroticism. Let me know what you think.
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>>7286497
Fug

this is nice to wake up to
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>>7286497
Agreed, that was cute.
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>>7286497
Cute-tier, I like it
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What about undyne finding a guy who's on her level of badass?
They quip at each other, flip boulders and end up having a sex standoff to see who can make the other reach orgasm first.
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>>7287262
pfft lol sorry dude good stories aren't allowed here, just feelgood circlejerk bullshit

see >>7278281
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>>7287319
I mean, the writeanon writes whatever gets requested. I'm sure she'd write that if you asked her to.
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For the guy who requested Undyne sucking dick while holding hands. I can't remember the original request precisely but I tried. It looks more like a rough sketch. I've just been sucking all kinds of ass this week. I can't get myself to sleep early enough.

Video very much related https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fly9EX0DI9Y
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>>7287262
That sounds pretty cool, actually.

>>7287319
You could have at least chosen a post where the author states that they want to write their own Undyne. I don't even know why you tagged that post, the author had good points about why Undyne needs to be fleshed out as a character so that she can drive her own story as opposed to the story driving Undyne.
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>>7287441
The positioning looks weird, like some kind of 69 gone haywire.
Was originally thinking of the guy standing up, undyne on her knees and hands up to merge with his.
But her expression is neat, good job anon.
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>>7287441
Cute AND lewd! The best combination!
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>>7287491
Ah fuck I knew I was forgetting something important about the request!

I'll just draw another one during weekend to make up for this shitshow. That would've actually been easier because I wouldn't have had to focus so much on her face from the front. I have a terrible habit of going for the most difficult perspective I can imagine and I can't always do it correctly.
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>>7287319
what did he mean by this
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>>7287491
Oh and the pose was supposed to be the guy lying on his back with Undynes arms coming from under his thighs so she's like pulled close to the crotch but I realized it also kind of looks like the guy is sitting on her. Man I'm just gonna go to sleep.
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>>7287471
Okay dude you can stop sucking his dick now. He doesn't write Undyne, he just writes some other character and dresses her up like Undyne. The real Undyne would never do all that cute shit.
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>>7287697
Hey, I thought you sounded familiar. Everyone give a warm welcome to our friend from /utg/
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>>7287775
We shouldn't encourage him, though even I can't help but try to whiteknight a bit.
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>>7287553
That sounds pretty awesome, can't wait to see it.
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>>7266351
>nooo
should have said ''I can fix you''
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>>7287697
>The real Undyne would never do all that cute shit.
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>>7288000
This is my other problem with this guy. Even in canon, where Undyne is basically a caricature, she still has a cute/shy side. I guess purists will just always look for a reason to complain.
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>>7288115
I think an unwillingness to go against his "ideal" Undyne is also an issue. My favourite Undyne is one that would bridal carry me to my wedding bed before dominating me raw the entire night. Yet I don't get up in arms when I read a cutesie Undyne story, heck I love them. The last one is the perfect example of that.
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>>7287262
Delivered: http://pastebin.com/79cjdvSa

>>7287319
ebin

>>7287441
I didn't think it was that bad, really, I liked it.

>>7288473
>>7288115
who cares lol
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>>7288888
>who cares lol
You're not wrong.
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>>7273464
you're a fucking legend thanks
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>>7288888
>Undyne x Duke Nukem
>those quints
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>>7288888
>duke nukem
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FINALLY
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>>7289443
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>>7289449
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>>7289458
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>>7289471
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>>7289476
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>>7289488
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>>7289495
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>>7289506
And that's all. Full comic here
http://g.e-hentai.org/g/1019576/249142d799/
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>>7289443
>>7289449
>>7289458
>>7289476
>>7289488
>>7289495
>>7289506
>>7289512
YES
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>>7288888
why the fuck did you pick duke nukem
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>>7290440
always bet on douk
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>>7290440
BALLS OF
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>>7290600
GET OFF VENT OR I'LL HAVE YOU BENT
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>>7283723
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>>7290879
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>>7289512
Made my day anon
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>>7289512
Shot a copy of the link over to the goatmom general. They are VERY pleased
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>>7291667
Great!
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>>7291667
Wait, can I get a link to the general? I can't quite find it.

Oh, wait. Found it.

And f-fuck, those comics are good.
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>>7291770
They are good. I find it hard to find good art of tori anymore and this comic is great
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>>7289449
>10
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>tfw there isn't enough art of writeanon's Undyne
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>>7292126
The first half of the comic is about Toriel and Asgore.
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>>7292161
And it is pretty damn hot. I actually liked it a little bit more than the undyne portion.

>inb4 heresy
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>>7293048
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>>7293101
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>>7289512
rip gallery
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>>7292161
>Toriel and Asgore
>the most patrician-tier of goatmom ships
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>>7292161
[spoiler] post it anyway [/spoiler]
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new >>7294537
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>>7293366
What do you mean?
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