/TLHG/ - The Loud House General 4 Things Everyone Hates Edit

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=T3de4mCrLNc&feature=youtu.be

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A happy Lisa is a cute Lisa!

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A happy Leni is a cute Leni!

Reminder that Lacy Loud is an abomination of incest

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Luan

>Cutest design (charming smile, big beautiful eyes, cute ponytail)
>Multi talented within the comedy genre (can juggle on a unicycle, act as a mime, do stealth camouflage, do standup etc.)
>Happy, upbeat personality and takes everything with a smile, even when she loses her teeth
>Some of her jokes may be corny, but she always does her best to make her siblings smile, even when they're having a hard time
>Some times gets abused by her sisters because they are too dumb to understand her sophisticated humor
>Has 50,000 followers on "Youtube" which should bring in a significant amount of money
>Has accomplished more in life than any of her sisters except Lisa
>One known episode involves her looking out for her brother by giving him a chance in the comedy world
>Makes 140 dollars a day as a clown
>Is the richest Loud sibling except maybe Lisa
>Is a genius mastermind and a brilliant prankster
>Crashed the incest plane with no survivors
>Can speak "poo poo" and is great with Lily
>Has a great butt
>Is a cuter Lucy than Lucy and a cuter Leni than Leni
>Has a bright future
>Perfect in every way

Luan confirmed for BEST SISTER.

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#Rule3IsNotEnforcedYouFuckingTripmods

>>5433543
>Leni in the Big City

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>tfw you will never study chemistry with Lisa

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Spoonheads > Beanheads

>>5434128
That's it.
Luanfags confirmed MOST AUTISTIC

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>>5434128

Luan

>Ugliest design (widow's peak, beaver teeth, plad clothes)
>Female Rodney Dangerfied, 95% of her dialogue are shitty one-liners, 4% is "GET IT?!" and 1% is actual relevant sentences.
>Abusive towards her siblings aside from one scene with Lily.
>None of them can stand her, Lynn whacks her once and everyone but Dad just groans at her jokes.
>Even Luna has more backstory and development.
>One known episode, the April Fool's Day one, involves Lincoln just trying to keep the fuck away from her.
>The other involves Lincoln being a better comedian.
>Pulled a prank on Lincoln where she literally had rabid raccoons attack her sibling.
>Is Reddit: The Character.
>Always goes "Get it?! GET IT?!" like the attention whore she is.
>Looks even more like a monkey than Luna does.
>Has no future.
>Even the baby is more interesting than her.
>Her episode got removed previously
>Thought an ideal date for her brother was an ugly fat chick
>She abuses animals, her own pets no less
>Her episode was a solid 0/10
>Her family clearly dreads her being around on April Fool's because of how insufferable she is
>Confirmed psychopath that doesn't give a fuck about others
>Ronnie Anne was the highlight of Luan's episode

Luan confirmed for WORST SISTER.

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>>5434129

>>5434190
What's the difference between a spoonhead and a beanhead?

>>5434190
Ronnie Anna cosplaying as Maggie WHEN?

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>>5434128
No.

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>>5434238
Cuteness

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>>5434238
Beanheads look like this. Spoonheads look like Marceline from Adventure Time.

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>>5434128
Fuck you Luan.

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>these thread openers, lately

>>5434306
So the spoonheads are cuter?

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>>5434326

You do NOT make my Luan cry!

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Luan was made for mindbreak porn and nothing else

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>>5434326

>>5434326
I'm triggered by the bottom half of the pony tail defying gravity.

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Cast yer votes

http://www.strawpoll.me/11297245
http://www.strawpoll.me/11297246
http://www.strawpoll.me/11297249

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>>5434204
>pic related

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>>5434473
>Immorticon isn't on any of these lists

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>>5434459

>>5434473
>Moondaffodil with the most votes

Apparently most of us are cucks

>>5434539
He's at the bottom of list 2, m8

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>>5434387
No, the spoonheads are not cuter.

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Have a Lynn. She's cute!

And she's not a spoonhead.

>>5434573
He's leading by a whopping 1 vote.

>>5434591
I'd rather spoon with a spoonhead than be with a beanhead tbqh

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Post your pajeet Louds.

>>5434573
He's tied with Nito, Abuseguy and Wrightfag right now, so cuck, abuse and feels are leading

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>>5434580
Oh...

>>5434663
I kind of want to see Indian Lisa, if only for the glasses factor.

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>>5434625
The only spooning I want to do is with this sporty girl.

Do it, Lincoln! You won't regret it!

>>5434725
dont forget to use a condom lincoln

>>5434725
>Lynn

That's not only illegal, but also shit taste

>>5434473

Wow, I don't recognize 2/3 of these faggots.

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>>5434663
She ruins some sacred cows.

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>>5434758
>Spooning with a sibling is illegal
There's absolutely nothing sexual about warm cuddling

When thinking about your relationship with your waifu do you age her up to your age or age yourself down or keep ages as is?

>>5434719
Oops, that is kinda bad, didn't mean to have the captchas on the first two

>Watching the dance episode
>R.A voice is deeper than usual

...what the fuck happened?

>>5434128
I feel like there aren't many people who believe this.

I on the other hand, completely support Luan.

>Il be as dead as disco
New VA completely flubbed this line
Get him out of here

>>5434788
She and Lincoln made fuck and her hormones took over

>>5434751
Condoms are a sin.

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>>5434788
Her old voice actor died, so she got replaced.

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>>5434473
well holy shit I got a vote on list 3.
that's an uplifting feel.

Fuck it, I've been a lazy melancholy shit for too long.

Three drawfag requests, first come, first serve.

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>>5434782
I imagine an aged up Lisa.

>>5434822
Carol and Lincoln sitting next to each other holding hands

>>5434128
>>Is a cuter Lucy than Lucy and a cuter Leni than Leni
I was agreeing with you until then. Go watch Amy schumer talk about her vagina somemore

>>5434782
I fap mostly to lolicon, so nothing weird about keeping everyone the same age.

>>5434822
Luna consoling Luan for having a shit episode and everyone hating her.

>>5434820
Wait why didn't Pepe shit in the brownie mix?

>>5434788

Inb4 ronnie anne is actually a transexual and is just Ronnie

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>>5434822
Leni dressed as pic related

>>5434751
See next slide, please.

>>5434758
Furnace is on the fritz again. Cuddling for warmth is the only way they're going to survive.

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>that episode where Luna visualized her terminal cancer as pink robots

>>5434822
Lincoln and Clyde as Brad and Terry from Lisa the Painful.

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>>5434473

>tfw Cell, a guy with one decent fic under his belt and has been gone longer than he was around has more votes than you

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>>5434894
The one responsible for the slide has bee sacked.

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>>5434926
The one responsible for the previous slide has also been sacked.

>>5434921
Are you implying Memecoln Memer is decent?

>>5434751
>>5434926
oh yeah i almost forgot make sure that there arent any holes in the condom

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>>5434957

>If I spam the word "meme" it will make it seem like I'm making a point!

>>5434986
>If I attack his word choice and post an epic reaction image I can write off his opinion

>>5434953
MR. HARRY BLACKITT: Look at them, bloody Catholics, filling the bloody world up with bloody people they can't afford to bloody feed.

MRS. BLACKITT: What are we dear?

MR. BLACKITT: Protestant, and fiercely proud of it.

MRS. BLACKITT: Hmm. Well, why do they have so many children?

MR. BLACKITT: Because... every time they have sexual intercourse, they have to have a baby.

MRS. BLACKITT: But it's the same with us, Harry.

MR. BLACKITT: What do you mean?

MRS. BLACKITT: Well, I mean, we've got two children, and we've had sexual intercourse twice.

MR. BLACKITT: That's not the point. We could have it any time we wanted.

MRS. BLACKITT: Really?

MR. BLACKITT: Oh, yes, and, what's more, because we don't believe in all that Papist claptrap, we can take precautions.

MRS. BLACKITT: What, you mean... lock the door?

MR. BLACKITT: No, no. I mean, because we are members of the Protestant Reformed Church, which successfully challenged the autocratic power of the Papacy in the mid- sixteenth century, we can wear little rubber devices to prevent issue.

>>5434326
That's not how hair works.

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>>5434473
>Moondaffodil and Abuseguy have more votes than me despite the fact that I killed them

Politics man, they don't want me to be the champ because I'm not a puppet like that fool up there

>>5435021
(continued)
MRS. BLACKITT: What d'you mean?

MR. BLACKITT: I could, if I wanted, have sexual intercourse with you,...

MRS. BLACKITT: Oh, yes, Harry.

MR. BLACKITT: ...and, by wearing a rubber sheath over my old feller, I could insure... that, when I came off, you would not be impregnated.

MRS. BLACKITT: Ooh!

MR. BLACKITT: That's what being a Protestant's all about. That's why it's the church for me. That's why it's the church for anyone who respects the individual and the individual's right to decide for him or herself. When Martin Luther nailed his protest up to the church door in fifteen- seventeen, he may not have realised the full significance of what he was doing, but four hundred years later, thanks to him, my dear, I can wear whatever I want on my John Thomas,... [sniff] ...and, Protestantism doesn't stop at the simple condom! Oh, no! I can wear French Ticklers if I want.

MRS. BLACKITT: You what?

MR. BLACKITT: French Ticklers. Black Mambos. Crocodile Ribs. Sheaths that are designed not only to protect, but also to enhance the stimulation of sexual congress.

MRS. BLACKITT: Have you got one?

MR. BLACKITT: Have I got one? Uh, well, no, but I can go down the road any time I want and walk into Harry's and hold my head up high and say in a loud, steady voice, 'Harry, I want you to sell me a condom. In fact, today, I think I'll have a French Tickler, for I am a Protestant.'

MRS. BLACKITT: Well, why don't you?

MR. BLACKITT: But they-- Well, they cannot, 'cause their church never made the great leap out of the Middle Ages and the domination of alien episcopal supremacy.

NARRATOR #1: But, despite the attempts of Protestants to promote the idea of sex for pleasure, children continued to multiply everywhere.

>>5435042
Nito and Abuseguy are the kings of wirters, it looks like, unless more people get in here

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absolute perfection

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Well I'm invoking my sacred right on trash to be a worthless shill.
I wrote a fic about Leni and Lincoln being married as little kids, Leni finds an old picture of it and tries to make up for lost time.
It gets somewhat lewd, but people seem to maybe like it?
I just finished a new chapter recently, maybe check it out (I'm even remembering the link this time). If you've read it a few days ago, the new content start at line 269.
http://pastebin.com/j4UevSXW

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>arguing on the internet

>>5434473
>zero votes for Immorticon, themaninthecouch, and Caliborn

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>>5434473
>skeluigi
huh, didn't know I was a writer but okay

>>5435067

But AbuseGuy fucking sucks.

>>5435079
The fuck you trying to say nigger, FITE ME.

>>5435077
good fic

>>5434473
wheres emmay?

>>5435092
Oh, I just put up everyone who was on the booru, didn't think of people uploading work for others

>>5435079
>choosing to be a cuck

>>5435104
He does, but this is just a popularity contest.

>>5435080

It feels bad, man.

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>>5434128
Luan is a keeper!

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I don't know.
>Rita's working out with Lincoln but you know she's sneaking twinkies when no is looking. and brownies, and cakes, and milkshakes.

>gets caught by Lincoln on one of her snack binges
>Lincoln gets infuriated that she's been pressuring him to exercise more while she's stuff her fat slutty face with treats
>for revenge, Lincoln overpowers his mother, in her moment of weakness, and begins taunting her with food
>he calls out her girthy thighs and how even a mother of eleven shouldn't have a waist like that, all while occasionally partaking in some of her treats
>picking up one of Rita's known favorites, he wavers a bar of chewy, tantalizing goodness that she just can't resist, Lincoln practically makes her beg for it
>eventually, Rita loses all control and gorges herself on Lincoln's long, thick bar
>as Rita precedes to make a mess, Lincoln's feelings of injustice remained
>not satisfied with teasing, he grabbed some of the most fattening treats from the pile
>Rita's still weak from shame after gorging on the last treat, now faces Lincoln in complete subsidiarity

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>>5435195
>Lincoln only shows disgust at the sorry display of his piggish mother
>holding the horde of treats, he waltz towards Rita, threatening to expose her secret binging
>Rita, still a bit dazed from being caught and going wild on her last treat, says nothing, quivering at her shame
>Feeling sure of himself, Lincoln decides to befit divine punishment
>with one hand he grabs a hold of his mother, by the chin, spreading her pucker open
>continuing to taunt her, with his other hand Lincoln begins picking, treat by treat, from the pile and stuffs whatever he grabs into his mother's begging mouth
>as the food enters her mouth, pushing through her throat and into her slightly expanding belly, Rita couldn't help but moan as the onslaught of flavor combined with Lincoln's dominance drove her wild
>Lincoln loses himself into the rhythm as he keeps stuffing her, filling her more and more, until her small, tied-up work-out tee, already messy from the food, could barely hold
>with every bit of food, it was as if the top was a dam that was about to burst
>with one last, fat, juicy treat, Lincoln shoves it into his mother's piehole. With a final break in food intake , Rita falls back with an orgasmic moan
>the dam had burst

>Lincoln looked upon his retribution
>sitting before him was a broken woman, breasts laid out in the open, body covered in food particles, and a slightly bloated belly
>Lincoln, feeling that he had more than enough of revenge, tells his mother to clean herself up.
>he didn't expect any forced attempts at exercise any time soon

>>5435154
That's ClearlyCleverly I think, used the names of the booru accounts since there were so many

>>5435163
ur the cuck

>>5435179
>one day a prank will go wrong and you'll die

Nah, I'll stick with literally any other sister.

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>>5434473
who the fuck are any of these people

>>5435104
>>5435164
What exactly do you dislike about my writing if you don't mind me asking? Is it more about that way I write or what I write?

>>5435126
Thanks senpai.

>>5435217
but clearlycleverly is just a guy uploading emmays works

>>5435219
That's just what a cuck would say in response to being called a cuck!

>>5435263
no u

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>>5434782
Me aged down so that I can relive my teenage years without being a complete fuckup.

I wrote this
http://pastebin.com/YuMfTEsq
Is there any constructive criticism?

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>Luanfags responding to Luan hate
C'mon guys, let's not going to be autistics like Lenifags or the "cummies" meme.

>>5435237
Ayy, not sure if you're still lurking one back but I finally came up with something, sorry for the wait!

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I want to put my nose near Luna and take a big inhale

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>>5434782
Age myself down, so we can share those few extra years together.

>>5435322

It's too late, Luanfags are already just behind Lenifags as the most autistic people here.

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>>5435195
>>5435210
And a pastebin, since I guess that's what you're supposed to do?
http://pastebin.com/g4RZuHvv
Hopefully that one guy who actually asked for more enjoys it or whatever.

>>5435347
I still consider Lucyfags worse than us, but if we continue in this way we are gonna be worse.

>>5435297
not a critic but I liked your fic

>>5435322
> cummies
> autistic
What if Luan asked you for cummies? Would you give them to her?

[sp]but yeah I do agree responding to bait isn't a thing that people should do[/sp]

>>5435080
I can't see them. I'm on fucking mobile.

This strawpoll sucks

>>5435237
The thing that jumps out at me is the formatting. The way you break up your paragraphs can be unappealing to look at. Like, line 109 of HLS, as a random example, is really blocky, and I don't like the way you have dialogue buried in actions and not on its own line. There's things like that all over your stories, and while they're not a big deal individually, they add up.

Also, I should clarify that I don't really think you suck, just that you're far from my first choice for "best writer of all time."

>>5435374
I... well, that's not going to happen never so... yeah, I would give her my "cummies".

taking simple sfw draw requests. no references to other things, just general requests.

>>5435419
Rita carrying embarrassed Lincoln
Like he hurt his foot or something

>>5435419
Luan hugging a sad Luna

>>5435419
Lana brushing her teeth.

>>5435419
Lola putting makeup on Lincoln

>>5434663
>Loo na

>>5435419
Grunge Luna and Lincoln

>>5434473
Looks like shitposter-san is mixing it up from the "worst artists/writers", I see

>>5435419
lincoln wolf-whistling/cat-calling lynn

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>"W-why are you naked, anon?"

Why was this weeks episodes wayyyy better than last weeks?

>>5435419
Luan weeping at Lincoln's open casket muttering "It was just a prank, bro. Just a prank"

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>>5434473
>didn't make the list
Feels good, man.

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>>5435297
The way you transition in the beginning could be a bit stronger, instead of writing
>As he closed his door he heard a throat clearing. He stopped and looked down at his small neighbor.
Maybe write something like
>As he was leaving his room, he heard a distinctive throat clear. He looked down to find Lisa staring back at him.
Your dialogue is pretty solid generally speaking.
If you have a buddy, there's some proofreading stuff like using sister's instead of sisters.
When writing a character, instead of said, consider using their defining speech pattern. For Lisa, instead of her saying something she may lisp something.
Another line that could maybe use a slightly different transition is:
>He let his body go limp, which allowed Lynn to take off the shirt with a powerful force, now that the resistance was gone
>He let his body go limp, the lack of resistance allowing Lynn's effort to easily pull it from his body.
This is personally but I prefer Lincie to Lincy, as Lincy feels like it would be close to Quincy for me.
I loved the way you wrote Luan and Luna, but my distaste for Lola ruined her otherwise fairly well written bit.
Overall, it's good and I'd like to see more.

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*Insert pun about butts here*

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Lucy's exposed bare feet

>>5435483
More Ronnie.

>>5435483
Cause they consistently save the best for last.

Did the anon save his greentext of Luan getting raped in the ghetto?

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>>5435498
I wanted to make a pun about having anal with Luan, butt fuck it.

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Lucy's exposed bare tail.

>>5435516
Hopefully he got in a car crash.

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I want to give her a swirly!

>>5435548
I want to give her an atomic wedgie

>>5435404
Thanks for the criticism man. Honestly, if you didn't let me know about the formatting issue, I'd be none the wiser about it. For whatever reason, my brain just clicks to
>"First Character's Dialogue" First Characters Action
>"Second Characters Dialogue"
Instead of
>"First Character's Dialogue"
>First Character's Action
>Second Character's Dialogue
I'll at least be more mindful of stuff like that in the future and not bury dialogue in between ten sentences of action. Again thanks.

Also, I'm surprised by the results of the poll. Honestly. This isn't anything I've asked for or aspired to achieve. None the less, I am greatful that people are enthusiastic, but I acknowledge my several flaws and by no means consider myself good.

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>>5435524
Hey, nice one. Pretty clASSic.

this is the blandest, most cliche, and unoriginal show i've ever seen. why do you folks like this garbage again?

>>5435483
Because this week's episodes was mostly sister interaction and focused on the family while last week's was "Lincoln/Clyde's Adventures feat. his sisters in a few scenes"

>>5435297
This is surprisingly nice. Good mix of lewd and comedy. But pobody's nerfect.

First things first, you used "your" instead of "you're" on line 159. You should commit sudoku for that one. Second, you've got some weird shit going on on line 175 - incomplete sentences, sentences joined by commas, that sorta thing. I get that you're going for some kind of montage-y description, but you can do that while still using complete sentences.

There are places where you use adjectives that don't seem to be the perfect choices.

But, most importantly, it's kinda hard to tell what's going on because it's hard to tell what the environment is like. If I skip a sentence, I end up not really being able to tell what's going on. However, the problem might be that your sentences aren't gripping enough, and so I'm inclined to skip them, just to "get to the good part." Or maybe they're just different from the way I write and think, so it takes me too much time to process what they're saying. It's hard to tell what the problem really is.

Also, ignore what >>5435497 said about "said." I did not think once while reading this that "said" was a bad choice. It's one of those words that just disappears when you're reading a sentence, like "the" or "of," so you can repeat it way more often than people seem to think you can. You already add enough variety by ignoring the "said" synonym altogether.

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>>5435483
Because it cemented the status of Lori being a slut and Lynn a filthy scat fetishist.

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>>5435563
I, for one, prefer the first one. It's what I do.

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Howdy mates!

>>5435597
Yeah, seriously why does clyde exist?

>>5435514
>DDR ended better than expected
>Bro tme with bobby was pretty cool
>Lola's antics and Luan's antics were hilarious
>the basement episode was comfy

Last weeks were just boring shit or lincoln apologizes/does something stupid but these were pretty great. I wish Savino would do more like this weeks

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>>5435195
This is great Dylan!

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>>5435538
I've seen hotter lamias

>>5435563
I believe in you, abuseguy. Also, you should give yourself more credit. It's not that hard to see why people like you.

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>>5435638
I forgot how cute she is being a cowgirl.

I need more Luan abuse

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>>5435668

>>5435646
Who is Dylan anyways? I always see her around /co/ but never really found out what show shes from...

>>5435654
Post em then

>>5435605
Oh, there definitely wasn't a gratuitous amount of saids, I was simply saying that it could be nice to use Lisped or Giggled. It doesn't detract from the fic to not do that, but it helps me personally get into the mind of set of that is the character when we're inherently lacking the medium of sound. I know Lisa lisps, but when I hear her lisping in the fic, my head fills in the voice a little better. It was by no means terrible though.

>>5435605
Shit, forgot to elaborate on a paragraph, there. Knew I was forgetting something.

There are places where you use adjectives and adverbs that don't seem to be the perfect choices. For example,
> the strange turn of events was enough for him to want to exit rapidly.
"Rapidly" is usually used when talking about something that happens a bunch of times, right? Like, you can tap your foot rapidly, or do jumping jacks rapidly. But the word you're looking for here is probably "hastily."

But, honestly, you should be trying to avoid adverbs anyway. They're great at describing things efficiently, but not interestingly.

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>>5435654
Me too.

>>5435678
Golan the insatiable or whatever.

She's basically one of those poser goths who plays with a fat, lazy demon who was exiled from his planet.

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>>5434782
Aged down. At the very least we could have just one summer romance together.

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>>5435667

Even when she gets rekt.

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>>5435678
Golan the Insatiable, from Fox.

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Kiss/Marry/Hug/Fug

>>5435657
Thanks, man. And I'm not just saying I don't like my work just out of, like, humbleness or anything. Ask any other writefag and I feel like they'll tell you something just as harsh about their own. When you're this attached to something you've worked on, I doubt you see it through fresh eyes.

>>5435687
Oh, I see what you're saying. Yeah. Personally, I like using "lied" in that place.

>>5435734
So she can juggle six objects of two different shapes while balancing on a unicycle, but she can't juggle a few horseshoes while standing? What gives, Savino?

Give me a rule 63 write request

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>>5434845
Sorry that took so long, I'm feeling really sluggish today

>>5435753
Kiss Leni
Marry Leni
Hug Leni
Fug Leni

>>5435760
their own stories*

>>5435654
Where is this from

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>>5435764

She was distracted by Sheriff Lynn.

>>5435596
Because you touch yourself at night.

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>>5435768
Lucy and 63 Lucy
Lynn and 63 Lynn
Either

>>5435753
Kiss Lori
Marry Luna
Hug Luan
Fug Leni

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>>5435753
Luna/Luna/Luna/Luna

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>>5435753
Watch a Kiss concert with Luna
Drink a bloody Marry with Lori
JHuggle some stuff with Luan
Fugget about basic things with Leni

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>>5435753
Kiss Luan
Marry Luna
Hug Lori
Fug Leni

>>5435753
Marry Luna
Fug Leni
Kiss Lori with tongue
Reluctantly hug Luan without really touching her

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>>5435753
Hug Lori/Kiss Lori/Marry Lori/Fug Lori, in that order.

>>5435753
Kiss Lori
Marry Luan
Hug Leni
Fug Luna

>>5435768
Uh... R63 Lola and Lana arguing over who's gonna be the good guy and who's gonna be the bad guy.

>>5435780
Rosario + Vampire

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>>5435825
> in that order

>>5435825
Are the kiss and marriage happening at the same time?

>>5435445
Congratulations on getting the joke.

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>>5435753
Kiss Luna
Marry Luan
Hug Leni
Fug Lori

>>5435851
Yes, though they're not mutually exclusive.

>>5435859
That's my line.

>>5435753
>Kiss
Leni
>Fug
Lori
>Hug
Luan
>Marry
Luna of course!

>>5435760
I actually totally get what you mean, on that front. It sucks being in a bubble where no one tells you where you need to work on things.

>>5435753
If you pick anything other than the same girl for everything you are a monster.
Hugging other girls is acceptable since they are your family now.

>>5435753
kiss luna marry leni fug lori hug luan

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I would motor-boat Luna's flat chest

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>>5435825
Gotta love nice, wholesome Christian values. The question is, can you truly subvert the devil's wicked temptation in the form of Lori's rockin' hot body?

>>5435678
She's from another lackluster animated show from Fox that got canned

Waifu material is the show's only appeal

>>5435753
Kiss Lori
Hug/Grope Leni
Marry Luan
Fug Luna

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Fuck/Marry/Kill/Be

>>5435936
Be killed.

>>5435919
I'd bury my face in her bare feet

>>5435753
Marry - Leni
Kiss - Luan
Hug - Lori
Fug - Luna

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>Ronnie Anne as a pirate

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>>5435926
It would definitely be a challenge, but it would be worth it in the end, for both of us. That anticipation will make things all the sweeter.

>>5435936
Fuck Lori
Marry Lana
Kill Lisa
Be Lucy

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>>5435965
>Something like this with Luan and Leni.
>Something
sorry

>>5435965
I want to see Ronnie Anne plunder the booty!

>>5435936
Fuck Lori
Marry Lucy and going to jail
Ignore the rest

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>>5435972
>some Lynncoln, doesnt have to be lewd

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>>5435972
Nice.

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>>5435919

Why is she flat, though?

>>5435965
Adorable

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>>5435985
>some Lynncoln that doesn't have to be lewd totally can

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>>5435965

CUTE

>>5435919
Is she even wearing anything underneath.

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>>5436002
sexy late bloomer

>>5435936
Be Lisa
Fuck Lori
Kill Lisa
Marry Lucy

In that order.

>>5436025
Of course not. Girls don't wear bras to bed.

>>5436046
But...I mean, that kind of makes sense, but...why Lori?

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So, I took my cleaned up gif of Mrs Loud exercising and made an edit with it.

Not super pleased with the result but it's ok for a first try, I guess.

Will try again later.

>>5435936
Marry - Lisa
Fuck - Lori
Kill - Lucy
Be - Lana

>>5435972
> Luan will never take your bra off through your dress
I mean, not that I'm even eligible for such a thing, but still.

>>5436066
Boobs are bouncing too much and don't match her body movements.

>>5435936
Fuck Lori
Marry Lisa
Kill Lucy (she'd probably like that)
Be Lana

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I wanna go on an adventure with Leni!

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>>5436030

>Has at least 664 images of Luna

>>5436065
For the shock value of Lisa/Lori. No other reason.

>>5436066
Boobs are too smooth compared to the rest of her. Try making sure that they hold still for most of the time she's holding still.

>>5436096
The way she says "thank you sign" is heart melting.

>>5436096
What..? How the fuck is she so stupid?

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>>5436098
> replying to yourself
Also,
> not using more descriptive filenames

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More genderbends. Chris and Ron.

>>5436106
>>5436081
Good critiques. Thanks.

>>5436166
mice

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>>5436145

Why do you think I'm replying to myself? I only have 116 Lunas and most of them aren't numbered.

>>5436166
I'm gay.

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>>5436166
I don't have a sweating lincoln pic.

>>5435790
>Lynn Loud was not like most girls.
>By that I mean most girls couldn't sack a 250 pound man.
>That's what made her announcement that she had a boyfriend so shocking.
>Most of her siblings laughed it off, the ones who didn't were happy for her.
>Both sides of the argument wanted to meet him though.
>So Lynn invited him over, and the family anxiously waited to meet this guy that Lynn wouldn't shut up about.
>Lynn stood in front of her family, by the door.
>"Alright everyone, are you ready to meet the strongest, fastest, toughest guy I've ever met?"
>Lynn pulls open the door to reveal...
>A boy who looked exactly like Lynn, but with shorter hair, even had the same number 1 jersey.
>He stood smiling proudly with his fists on his hips.
>"Everyone, this is Lynn!" The girl excitedly yelled.
>"Yeah but what's he call himself?" Luan cracks.
>"Lynn Lad, can you believe it? I meet the perfect girl, and she's got such a cool name too!"
>The Lad lad gives the Loud girl a kiss on her cheek, making her blush hard.
>She playfully punches him and calls him an idiot.
>"Well, Lynn, why don't you stay for dinner?" Rita asks awkwardly
>"I'd love to Mrs.Loud, but I already invited Lynn over for dinner and my family really wants to meet her."
>"Especially my sister Liberty, I mean, she's the only girl in a family of ten boys."
>The whole Loud family tenses up when they hear that as Lynn and Lynn start racing away.
>Lincoln looks at Lisa and points accusingly.
>"Did you have something to do with this?"

>>5436166
Gay gay gay

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Which one has the most slurpable semen?

>>5436166
Now the real question is, is Linnie going to be upset or aroused?

>>5436166
Gay gay gay gay

>>5436144
By not reading

>>5436225
Leni.

>>5436225
Loki is the least gay option.
Emo boys are basically girls.

>>5436225
I don't know why, but I just hate all the Lori genderbent designs.

>>5436261
Its impossible to not make her a Chad.

>>5436238
Can Leni even read? I think by now it should be apparent that she is actually and literally mentally retarded, she probably can't even take care of herself. What a shame, I thought she looked nice.

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>>5435435

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Post cute.

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>>5436166
Genderbend John DiMaggio characters when?

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>>5436279
I'm not a Lenifag, but not liking her for being retard is gay.

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>>5436286
I think this one's pretty cute. Wouldn't you agree?

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>>5436284
Liam scoping that choice ass.

>>5436261
Literally all of them but the official one are perfect.

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>>5436286

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>>5436295
> not liking her for being retard is gay.
Enjoy fucking a girl who doesn't know which of you puts on the condom.

>>5436213
CUTE

>>5436295
I don't like her just because she is a fucking potato. Call me gay or whatever, but if she can't count to her age she is dumber then a sack of shit. Her being stupid isn't cute or funny, it's sad.

>>5436311
Tabby is cute! Also, I only just now noticed her pierced ears.

>>5436324
Leni is more than just a piece of ass.

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Art.

>>5436314
I like sb99's original one, the one on the Loud crew's wall where he looks like Patrick Swayze.

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>>5436324
Bet your ass I'm gonna enjoy it.

I swear to fucking god I cannot make that choose all street signs captcha perfectly.

>>5436322
jcm, if you're in this thread would you please consider doing something similar to this again, like one of the sisters tying a noose for me?

>>5436341
Oh, right. She can pick a lock and sew. Woohoo.

>>5436356
Try enabling legacy captcha on quick replies.

>>5436329
I try.

Give me Rita requests now since I recently got mine answered >>5436284

http://www.lizdaponte.ca/need-a-debit-card-look-no-further-than-twitter/

Requesting these images redrawn with Leni.

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>>5436349
>mfw this is the oldest pic in my Loud House folder

>>5436376
Rita accidentally walks in on Lincoln masturbating

>>5436374
That's a booru filename, nigga

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Luan will always be the light of my life.

>>5436397
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0WxYvvcb0BE

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>>5436440
I want to tell her I love her, but she'll never hear me.

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Is it feetposting hours yet?

>>5436397
I remember reading a greentext a while back where Rita 'catches' Lincoln masturbating in the bathroom and helps him out. It was short and sweet. Dammit, I'm gonna have to sift through the archives now. GROAN ZONE.

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What did she mean by this?

>>5436484
She's saying she's pregnant with a boy. Duh.

Would you tell your waifu's VA that you're in love her character?

>>5436397
Eh, it's a little easy
>>5436473
See?

>>5436484
She's M I N E. :)

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Pure love.

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>>5436484
Sex, I think

>>5436484
I would tell her to fuck off.

>>5436500
He wants to be able to talk to Bobby without Lori knowing what they're saying.

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>>5436494
Yes, but only in person - not on the internet.

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>>5436484

>>5436494
No, but some autusts in this general will.
I hope to God they never have a Q&A

>>5436484
Kitchen in this way.

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>>5436471
Yes

>>5436507
What's "sex"?

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>>5434108
Would you, though?

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>>5436471

>>5436537
There's something in the face of Leni that makes me laugh.

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who should i replace lola with?

>>5436557
Lucy

>>5436557
Pure loli Luna

>>5436557
Lucy, duh.

>>5436557
Lana wearing a Lola wig

>>5436557
Lana, except instead of money it's mud or a lizard.

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>>5436557
Lily

>>5436279
>Can Leni even read?
>In response to the webm which has her reading signs

Nigger what?

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Good night everyone!

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>>5436286

>>5436484
It's how they do it in the states homeboy.

https://youtu.be/VNrDRETq6Ik?t=104

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>>5434957
It's a good fic nigga.

That shit was an amazing read over the summer

If only he finished it.

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In anyone's eyes, throwing acid would be wrong.

>>5436593
It's not a case if she can read or not, it's if she can understand what she is reading. Dude, she can read them, know's it's april fools, and fucking is right next to the kitchen. Yet she follows the signs. She is fucking retarded, pure and simple.

>>5436557
Luna, and also replace cash with concert tickets.

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>>5436619

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>>5436564
>>5436574
It's already been done

MORE LUAN ABUSE

>>5436145
To be fair he probably took a lot from the weird guy with 900+ and didn't rename them.

>>5436191
But also to be fair you shouldn't avatar fag like him or have 116 images of your waifu. This is coming from me, another Lunafag. I swear there are like 3 of you nonstop Luna posting with no content. Probably that might add to the reason nobody's been writing fics about her.

>>5436627
>She is fucking retarded, pure and simple.
>Implying she didn't nope the fuck outta the house to escape the pranking hell

>>5436635
If I was Lucy's first, I would be sweet and gently and make sure she was OK the whole time as we made tender and loving sex.
I would be slow and careful, I wouldn't want to hurt her, and as we reached the apex of connected our love, I would whisper that I loved her more then anything in the world.