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Holding onto lillithmon story

Outline: https://pastebin.com/nHUr959h

Suggested extra kinks: lactation from pent up sexual frustration, drinking milk from source, her receiving her first spanking as 'proof' of her desperation/frustration

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New chapter up for Northlands Garrison.

Setting Tags: Fantasy world, original work, melee line infantry combat, blood, snow, alcohol.

Character Tags: Maid (female), Military officer (male).

Content Tags: M/F, consensual, body cleaning.

Summary: In a conquered settlement far to the north, a young officer struggles to hold together the garrison legion despite constant attacks from indigenous resistance groups who somehow are able to bring high-yield explosives and powerful spellcraft against him. After a day of blood, pain, and unpleasant surprises, he retires to his quarters in an inn that has been commandeered as a command post. A familiar serving maid, always in the corner of his eye but never underfoot, shyly brings him his evening meal and a washing up basin. He's not taken great note of her before, far too much to do if he wants to keep his men alive in this hostile land, and she's not directly engaged him because of a natural shyness.
In his eyes, she's another victim of this drawn out conflict, an orphan taken in by the innkeeper after her parents starved due to food shortages caused by the war. Taking advantage of her would be shameful, the exact opposite of all he's fighting for. Besides, anyone could be an insurgent. But does the pointy-eared maid know something that could turn the tables against this mysteriously powerful rebellion, and if so, what does she want from him in exchange? Men kill in war. Hunger, cold, and disease kill more during the chaos. What are these two willing to do for the promise of restoring peace to this land?

Prior Chapters:
>Chapter I - Explosion
https://pastebin.com/nCuHz6bb
>Chapter II - Promotion
https://pastebin.com/vz62zdf0
>Chapter III - Admiration
https://pastebin.com/mcpNhpTz
>Chapter IV - Starvation
https://pastebin.com/eEXuBLfR

Available chapters focus on subtle character interactions and worldbuilding. No sexual content. Chapter 3 and onward contain minor intimate touching and body cleaning.

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http://landonbay.deviantart.com/art/Autzen-s-story-ch-4-page-39-414290765
http://landonbay.deviantart.com/art/Autzen-s-story-ch4-page-40-414856423

In these chapters Autzen, an autistic buizel, needs to use the bathroom, but is too scared to use the airplane toilet's loud noise. Despite wearing a diaper he doesn't want to use it, instead holds it throughout the entire plane ride, all six hours of it, even when he's sleeping during most of it, and makes it to the bathroom.
Can someone rewrite this page(s) so that Autzen ends up having an accident in his diaper, perhaps it happening during or shortly after his nap? Read the previous chapters to understand how he'd probably react to it.

Help a fellow autist out please.

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Female werewolf in a future-fantasy setting. Worked hard to get a position as staff manager in a corporation, finds herself quickly reassigned after she fails to command any respect amongst her subordinates due to her fluffy exterior and cuddly, sweet demeanor. Her new position with the Energy Crystal Maintenance department is largely just lip service to her contract with the company, as the crew is largely self-sufficient and requires little maintenance of their own. She discovers that working in close proximity to the energy crystals has several side effects on her crew, as the magical hum never leaves the workers. Sleep is extremely difficult, although the higher-ups say rythmic physical and aural stimulation is supposed to be especially effective, and the werewolf takes it upon herself to help those affected - her solution being to schedule snuggle sessions with her crew, reading them bedtime stories and giving plenty of physical affection.

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Not giving up on Florges toots

To keep autism contained. The idea/suggestions are linked here: http://pastebin.com/Zx3Uj2QY

tl;dr Main character dominates Florges by making her embarrass herself via teasing/lewding her to fart. Stuff in pastebin are suggestions

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D here.

I've started tinkering with a sequel to The Long Pull, which would be about the afternoon shift and a different selection of futas and some new stuff going down.

However, since so many people wanted to see about the 'date' between Melanie and Stella, I've thought of some other splinter stories to tell about these characters that might be posted as separate smaller updates.

Does this interest anyone reading, or do you think it should all be one big mass?

>>10540187
I'm looking forward to this. For the sake of clarity, I would prefer several smaller stories, just to cut down the number of characters to keep track of. Plus it gives a little breathing room for exposition and world building.

That's my two cents, I'll probably be happy with whatever.

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If the anon working on that Ever Oasis fic is here, how goes it? Are you still alive?

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Reposting this Yugo/Amalia idea based on the Miss Ugly episode but I'm not sure where it could go. So here's a bigass greentext for a prompt.

>They're wearing their 'siamese twins' disguise and the party makes the trek back to the castle.
>They have some trouble keeping a walking pace, so Yugo tries to hold onto Amalia under the dress. Her hips are too big a reach for him, so he puts a hand on her inner leg.
>She doesn't say anything about the boy's hand on her ass or where it's resting now because she knows it's not intentional. The walk is making it worse as her leg motions cause his hand to shift higher and make the touching effect her more.
>Yugo's oblivious to what he's doing but notices her leg feels hotter. Maybe he feels something like sweat hit his hand. Eventually one step causes his hand to bump up against something hot and wet with something slippery.

Not sure where it could go from there. Amalia might react but try to keep her composure. Yugo would be curious about what he just touched but I think he'd knows enough not to prod a girl's neithers. Maybe she cracks and whispers to him to keep going and maybe give him some instruction? Amalia could reach a point where she can't walk straight with it going on and they sneak away into the bushes and Yugo gets a crash course in getting a girl off.

>>10538091
>>10538353
>>10539842
Friendos, at this point it's pretty clear that every writefag ITT has seen these prompts and passed on them.
You would be well advised to either write them yourselves or pay somebody to do it

>>10544326
This. There's holding on, and then there's not knowing when to quit.

>>10544326
>>10544413
I'm afraid they're long gone anon. One's been at it since the inception of this thread's creation. There were people geuinely interested in the ideas, but usually disappeared. Your best bet at this point is just to filter it.

>>10544326
Lillithmon OR. Djnn usually delivers, but is suffering a bit of a block iirc. I'll still hold out until he returns.

>>10544612
>One's been at it since the inception of this thread's creation.
That's just impressively pathetic.

>>10544716
When did he last say that? He may have been trying to let you down gently. If not, repeating the request will not get him over it faster.

>>10544772
It's an anchor post, not a repeat request. Two different things. It's easy to post once and wait for a ping.
Iirc two threads ago.

>>10544868
Doesn't that imply he's actually writing it? I'd say to wait until he posts it himself.

>>10544890
I don't actively lurk the threads so I tend to miss things unless I get pinged. I'll keep on hoping until then. Guess we can't see eye to eye about it.

>>10545017
It's just something I've learned. Requesting or anchoring too many times makes you come off as desperate, and no writefag I know of likes that.

>>10545042
That's usually not the case in /trash/ in a number of threads. It's usually a polite thing to leave an anchor post to let the author know that the OR is still there and hasn't ditched the thread entirely. Was it that way in /d/, assuming that the issue has never been brought up until the move?

>>10545086
a thread on /d/ can last a week or more even past the bump limit with how slow the board has gotten

>>10545110
Yeah. And with our list of unfilled requests that's still available for use, there was no point.

Said list is here, by the way:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nyDKegfYhIvlv7ZvGoxswIVkiG5lw1lrOeDFvZbw_WU/edit?pli=1

And now that I realize it's not in the OP and probably should be from now on, here's the master list we've used. Edits have to go through me before they can be approved, but that's only due to past attempts at vandalism. On that note, it really needs to be updated since I don't have half as much time to do so as I used to.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ccAAmGecQiEE5ywZc4S4d1347WuMPEsF3DbSNAS4LRo/edit

>>10545110
These threads used to last a good while, up to a month since /trash/ doesn't get many writers.

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I've had this idea in my head for a while about some guy using a big suit of power armor or mech, paired with a built-in AI.

The user would be rather careless in battle, letting the suit take the bulk of damage rather than trying to actually strategize. At some point, the AI would override the user's controls, citing their inexperience as the the reason.

From there, femdom and other lewd thing ensue.

>>10544716
>>10544772
I'm 100% still on board with filling this request. I've been chipping away at it between projects, and despite moving at a glacial pace, I refuse to quit on it. I made a promise to fulfill the request, and I intend to follow through, for better or worse. I've told the OR he's free to have another writer do the story, but not because I don't want to, but rather because I don't want to make him continue to wait. I'm just lucky the OR has been so patient with me.

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>>10545424
Lillithmon OR. Glad to see you're still alive. Still rooting for ya!

>>10544326
I've seen more fetishy stuff delivered before.

>>10546013
That doesn't mean every request'll be done. A lot of the writers, at least from /d/, are usually occupied with their own stuff

I overheard this little gem about the animal kingdom on the discord, make what you will of it and at least have solace that nature has already topped most of our bizarre perversions.

>Some species of sea louse have developed one of the most extreme breeding systems in the animal kingdom. Adult females are ambulatory and adult males live in specially dug burrows. The males are set up kinda like ant-lions, except instead of catching prey they catch females. They capture females, drag them into their dens, and rape them. After raping them, they leave the female in a literal pile of other raped females. The females are usually too weak from being attacked to escape, then quickly become so bloated with young that they cannot move. The females swell to twice their original size and become translucent due to the sheer number of live young inside them. Eventually, the swarm of babies eat their way out of the mother and swim out of the burrow. The males eat what's left of the females they capture.

There was a gif of the last part, which I have chosen not to post because it's horrifying.

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2000 word update, new content at "He felt her fingers wrap around his wrists"

Rig Runner:
https://pastebin.com/xmLQAjyG
new tags:
>vaginal, light bondage

@Shiny, you asked how big Betelgeusian queens were in the last thread, I dunno probably around the size of a queen from Alien, that stuff is all in the planning stages.

>>10547445
I never got the point of Discord, why do people post things there that they don't post in the threads? Isn't that counterproductive?

>>10547931
Not him, but it does help keep off topic things not related to writing there and helps contain drama that may spark up (sometimes, discord is infamous for drama leaking into the threads)

>>10547931
I'll be honest, I really want this one to end with good old Steel Fists Moralez arresting nazka for piracy and murder with extreme prejudice and/or pro wrassling moves

>>10547931
it's basically just off topic stuff with very little in the way of actual writing, compared to here
also the moderation is iffy

>>10546013
It isn't a question of fetish obscurity at all, sure
It's that if something is in these threads continuously for a month or so and doesn't get picked up, it's not gonna
>>10548110
>and/or pro wrassling moves
I don't even like snek's stuff but I'd read that

I've been trying to get critique of my writing, but most people online I've found willing to look over what I wrote either never respond back after I show them what I wrote, or have comments that don't really make any sense and generally don't seem to know what they're talking about

>>10547931


Well I for one would love to spitball ideas with you, thread or not. Planning stages are the fun part!

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>TFW have barely written anything since I started the Writethread so long ago
Been putting this together over in the Anonymoo thread:
https://pastebin.com/CB8fQrfL
>Mini-giantess, extreme quantities of food, hyper hourglass, gluttony, general lewdness, drunk, light/moderate slob, and lactation

>>10549283
Oh right, more tags:
>Forced cuddling, public indecency, and cow-girl

>>10548914
Fine. Post your shit, post what sort of comments you've been getting.

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>>10547445

Book

>>10549283


Pretty fun story so far, though I wish Moo would have some more character development instead of just being a eating and lewding machine

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I'm curious if Djnn's into more SA but I dunno if to change to Kat or more Scarlet.

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Alright you creatures, there's a situation here and I want it reversed.

Pic related, none of this pairing, there should be, rectify that by any means available to yous. Preferably through the medium of writing.

For the newbs; she's Bayonetta, a flirty witch of great power and sex appeal, he's Loki, an ancient god who has taken on human form. Specifically that of a bratty twelve-year old with more makeup than a catwalk model and a terrible British accent.

I'll be watching.

>>10553667
Holy shit fuck off, faggot. No one fucking cares if you're gonna be an pompous ass

>>10553681
You cared enough to reply
:^)

>>10553754
Nah, it's fine, >>10553681, is right I came on a little strong.

I hereby withdraw the use of "creatures" and offer my apologies. I was a little groggy still at the time of writing and didn't realise why that might be a bad idea. Just trying to motivate people.

>>10553667
What makes you think you're in a position to make demands?

>>10554636
Well, the thread seems a little starved for ideas, I thought I'd toss one out and see if anyone could get their teeth into it.

>>10554802
I'm going to break this down for you barney-style.
Coming into a thread and being like "I have an idea, anyone want to write something about it?" is fine, and sometimes even works
Coming into a thread and being like "hey you plebeians, write this shit for me" does not work, and you sound like a fuckface
We clear?

>>10554959
>We clear
Inescapably.

So, I have an idea, as you all can see, does anyone want to write something about it? I'll help wherever I can.

>>10554959
Yes, Staff Sargent

>>10520405

Is the anon who wrote the anthro wolf greentext on the deer thread still lurking? Really liked that and wanted to know if you had a pastebin or some other place with more stories.

>>10555044
>>10554802
It doesn't help your idea is shit. Fanfiction based on pre-existing properties always limits a writer

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>>10557707
Nonsense. It gives you a base to build a story off without having to spend time constructing the world and getting the reader to care about the characters.

I've always found it to be a godsend for people who write these sorts of things.

>>10557776
Writings of established characters have been fairly unpopular since we started on /tg/ and that carried over to when we moved to /d/ too. Most won't even touch a setting unless they're very familiar with it. Using established characters is very restricting since what's the point of writing about them if they're going to act out of character. And the majority of us are very into worldbuilding and enjoy it.

>>10557897
This is /trash/ though, anything goes, Fanfiction or OC. Established character stuff has always been made and shared here prior to /d/'s move. There's no need to go offensive about it.

>>10557950
I'm just saying the new influx of readers and writers are like this and thus this changes the general flow and trends now. This being /trash/ changes nothing of how writers will write, the subjects they write, and what sorts of things readers will like.

>>10557897
>Most won't even touch a setting unless they're very familiar with it. Using established characters is very restricting since what's the point of writing about them if they're going to act out of character. And the majority of us are very into worldbuilding and enjoy it.
Fair enough on the worldbuilding, but sometimes I like to be able to just get straight to the smut.

And as for acting OOC, the kid and Bayonetta share a kiss on the lips at one point in their game, I really don't think it'd be that unbelievable.

>>10558124
written bayo porn won't work has well since it's harder to insert a combo meter into it than a drawn format

First time trying one of these things. The story is of a Warhammer beastman raping a Wood Elf. Critique very welcome, as I am going to write more.
https://pastebin.com/jyixbyvi

>>10559341
Back when we were on /d/, I tried to respond to as many new authors as I could. I see no reason to change that now.

One of the more common things I see (and see here) is an overly active narrative voice. You describe the scene almost exclusively through the main character. You tell the reader what she sees, smells, hears, and feels directly. While there is nothing strictly wrong with this, the litany of "she felt", "she saw", etc. quickly becomes repetitive and tends to interrupt the flow of the story. Consider the use of more objective descriptions and also reactionary ones, removing the main character from the subject (e.g. "The bark felt rough against her bare skin"). Also, your tense shifts throughout the story. This is probably partially due to your primary use of the past perfect. It is a very difficult tense to write action in.

I try to not go too deep into grammar, as it is incredibly time consuming. That being said, there are a number of out-of-place commas, as well as some that need to be there, yet are not. More importantly, "it's" is a contraction. The possessive is "its", without the apostrophe.

The smut was short, but showed promise. You describe the scene well, focusing on the senses, rather than mechanics of the act. It is difficult to write actual rape (as opposed to dubcon) due to the relative lack of material available. That being said, you did well with the scene. Look to the few paragraphs of smut to see the difference between the "noun verb object" style in the beginning and the much more fluid language you use later on. You should be able to see a difference.

I hope I can be of help.

>>10559814
Thanks! I really do need to work on commas and contractions, thanks for bringing it up. Now that I look over it, I see what you mean with the frequent use of "she", I'll work on that for next time.

Hey, is the guy who picked up my werewolf prompt last thread around?

>>10549047
Sure thing, will probably be another month before I can get to it though.
I've been neglecting Grave Goods over the past week but I put out like 20k words of Rig Runner, I've been so motivated to write that one.

Been as sick as a dog today though so today's update may be small/non-existent.

>>10562425
With how much potential these bugs have, a month of planning is almost mandatory imo

>>10562640
Well I'll lay down what I have so far.

They live in hives that are usually dug beneath the ground, they have no written or spoken language and communicate only through scent, they're able to leave messages and 'write' in pheromones like ants do.
I'm going to need to do a lot of research and put some real thought into that to make sure it's all kosher, because there are issues with that system like for example how would ships in a fleet communicate using such methods? Maybe some kind of chemical-to-digital software that works like voice recognition.

Their technology is a blend of biological and conventional, for example their ship designs consist of a skeletal scaffold made from metal upon which biological matter is grown. I'm going to play up how having ships heal damage during battle rather than needing to be repaired and how using neurons instead of electronics to transmit data gives them an edge over the UNN fleets.
Much of their smaller scale tech like guns and shields are just regular mechanical and electronic devices.

Their life cycle requires young queens to leave the hive and found a new one, in the age of space travel that means leaving the planet, which is one of the reasons they're so widespread and aggressive. They need every yard of land that they can hold on to. There's another reason for their aggressive expansion that I don't want to spoil.

The queens are gonna be big, they're very smart too, they're able to manage every individual in their hive along with directing fleet engagements and ground wars. Not sure what level of cooperation or antagonism I want between rival hives yet.
(cont...)

>>10566314
You've seen drones already in previous stories, they're humanoids with four arms, of average height and covered in ballistic armor and natural exoskeletons that blend seamlessly. They come in all kinds of bright colors and they have decorative horns like stag beetles that vary between individuals. They're moderately intelligent and they're adept in combat, they prefer to close and fight in CQC with handguns and knives.

You've seen Warriors too, they're much larger and heavier, covered in an armored shell that you need a belt of grenades to get through, and they fight with eviscerating claws. Even a squad of Borealans is basically helpless against them. Not sure how I'm going to make these sexy yet, maybe they're biological exosuits, maybe they're the result of a berserker drug like that one anon suggested. I'll find some way to make them /fit/.

Repletes are geared towards feeding the hive and caring for young, their bodies bloat with some kind of honey, something palatable that humans could eat, rich in sugar, energy, nutrients, etc. Perhaps they produce it themselves, or it's made by another caste, dunno yet. I think having parts of their bodies, maybe the belly and breasts, be transparent would be neat so that you can see the liquid inside. I don't want to write about breast feeding in a sexual context but that's essentially what they do. Maybe the MC can have them pour it into a glass or something, I dunno.

Foragers and workers are smaller than drones, maybe four feet tall, and their jobs are building the hive and collecting food. As a technological race, that includes engineering and science jobs. They build and maintain everything from the tunnels to the ships.

The constants between the castes are the colorful exoskeletons that cover parts of their bodies, the decorative horns and the six limbs. I'm thinking maybe the compound eyes that the Marines describe are just part of their helmets and they have more sympathetic eyes beneath.

>>10566314


I'm a bit lost on the "no written or spoken language" part. Forget the long range communication, the fact that they build and mass produce things at all requires a language far more complex than what can be represented with scent.

Think dimensions, material names and ways to identify them, numbers, hardware specifications, programming languages, so much shit. None of that is going to fly just using scent

>>10566825

And don't forget the fact that no written language means no way to store information. You either find someone who knows what you need to know, or you're fucked. That's horribly unfeasible for any sapient society. They can't label anything, can't give directions, can't write down instructions, the list is endless.

Even if you try the hive mind excuse(please don't), that would be way too much information for any single creature to keep track of, especially when you have no way of separating it without some kind of mental image.

>>10566314
>>10566462
This is a simple but important trio of militaryworldbuilding questions that you really should have answers for
>for what reason is humanity not just nuking them from orbit? (Keep in mind groundbursts and underground detonations)
>what sort of AAA defenses do they have, if any?
>how do they keep their troops at the front supplied? Especially with high-tech stuff

>>10566825
>>10566945
All of that can be achieved with scent, incredibly complex and layered pheromones that can convey complicated concepts and ideas. It would be a language system as deep as ours, just communicated via a different sense than sight or hearing.
I'm not saying that there's any existing animal that can do that, but as a concept I think it works for an advanced alien species. Pheromones have limitations, but so do visual and auditory mediums, they're just different.

Yeah I don't want a hive mind, nor any kind of psychic ability in the setting, I agree that it's stupid.

As for information storage, they can 'scent' something and then have that pheromone be detectable for very long periods of time. While I agree that it isn't as practical as writing, they developed computers and digital technology that lets them store and transmit data. How they developed computers without writing I don't know yet, I'll come up with something for that.

Keep in mind that their culture and their perception of the world is going to be very different to ours, and there will be both benefits and downsides to that. One of the best ways to create technology for aliens is to give them limitations, because all technology is born from it. We made arrows to extend our reach, we built telephones to communicate over distances that our voices couldn't, we developed writing to record memory beyond our natural capacity. All limitations that we overcame.

These aliens will have their own unique limitations, and hopefully I can come up with creative solutions after first creating the problems.

>>10567130
>for what reason is humanity not just nuking them from orbit?
There's a finite number of habitable worlds, and the bugs contest them, one of the themes of the setting is that humanity is running out of habitable planets and is reaching further and further afield and colonizing undesirable worlds like Hades. The bugs want the same planets, and if you want to carpet-nuke the planet to get rid of them, you'll render them uninhabitable.
Their tunnels go deep enough to survive bunker busters and weapons like those, which can be used on less desirable planets like Kruger.

>what sort of AAA defenses do they have?
They set up orbital defense platforms to lock down planets and strategic locations once they're established, and until then they rely on hunkering down in their tunnels, which makes them very hard to dislodge.

>how do they keep their troops at the front supplied?
As seen in Purple Heart they use their tunnel networks to keep the troops supplied, there are caches of weapons and gear throughout the hive and they can transport supplies extremely quickly as they bypass any obstacles and rough terrain. I figure workers can excavate a new tunnel wherever they need one within a matter of hours.

>>10567477
Throwing some ideas out. Not every caste needs to be has much of an individual or mentally unique like humans are. Lower castes like workers/drones/etc can have more basic minds and brains with fighting/building/tasks instinct built in like ants and similar bugs. They're more like organic machines. Higher castes could be more advanced/complex mentally and be the ones in control and ordering around the lower castes.

>>10567477


Scent is a horrible way to store information. It's subject to other scents mixing and overlapping, heat/cold modification, materials that naturally absorb or mask scents, natural chemical alterations, and so much shit that written and spoken languages are not. Based on what youre saying, scent is only their form of communicating, it's not their language.

>>10567578
Yeah the more complex castes will be more intelligent, though I'd like for the simpler ones to approximate human intelligence so that they can interact with the MC and give consent.

>>10567592
It may be horrible, but evolution has no set goal, that's the card they were dealt because of their insect heritage and a lot of their culture and technology will be centered around that quirk and the unique opportunities and limitations that it brings. Again, I want to first create a problem and then come up with creative solutions.

>>10567693

I think you already contradicted the "no written language" part my dude. Marking something something with a scent that can be later be translated into complex concepts and ideas is exactly what a written language is, but with scent instead of ink or other physical markings.

>>10567761
Well yeah but I mean they don't physically write in any visual way that a human could interpret. They have no alphabet and no characters, they don't record things on paper or label their shops with serial numbers.
Also note that this isn't a very developed or thought out concept yet, I'm working on other stuff right now and I'll flesh it out a lot more when I can direct all of my energy to it.

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>>10567892
This might interest you, but you're able to befriend a hive of bees/wasps by getting in good with the hive's queen. To the point you can freely move your hand through a swarm of them without fear of being stung. Leave your hand close enough and some might even crawl on it and dry to clean/groom you like they would another hive member.Could use that for sort of caretaker caste that would feel compelled by instinct to feed and groom them. Could even make it lewd and play into your tongue/kissing fetish by them shoving a long tube-like in their mouth/throat and spitting out honey or something similar to feed the captured human(s). Another thing you might get a kick out of is wasp hives do have a small population of males, but they do nothing. They don't work or even defend the hive if attacked and are just their to sometimes breed with the queen. They actually rely 100% on the female workers/warriors to defend them, feed them, and generally take care of them.

>>10546039
>>10548870
It's just an edit request though and, in my opinion, has potential for cute.

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>>10568139
Thanks, that's some cool info, lots of good ideas there. Becoming accepted by the hive could be the endgame.
Right now I'm leaning towards having the bugs modify the MC genetically to enhance his sense of smell, or give him new sensory organs so that he can learn to communicate with them.
So initially he'll think they're doing horrific experiments on POWs, but over time he'll learn that they're just trying to integrate him.

>bee tongues
The stars align!

>>10568783
Was about to post that since I once had a dream with similar idea. Bug ayys graft a blue biostuff to POW's spine, gives them very rudimentary communication / enforcement.

>>10568970
That's cool, I was thinking something along the lines of a new pheromone sensing organ or something that gets grafted to his sinuses, there could also be a sexual element to it where he picks up on the signals the females are putting out and the new sense makes it overwhelming.
I figure I've already done stories without verbal communication and it's kind of played out at this point, so having him learn a really unusual and alien method of communication could be fun.
Rather than just substituting words with smells, they could convey everything from concepts to emotions in ways that are more intuited than translated.

>>10567892
Sorry, but this is the first thing I thought of.
https://youtu.be/pjK5d0_Yd8Y

>>10551774
I probably would be, but I'm in no position to be taking on any new projects, at the moment.

>>10568139
>>10567892
>>10568783
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NGJUREA0cmQ
>Studies have shown that if you desensitize your captive wasps to your fingers and hands from an early stage, they will become used to you and not react in an aggressive manor. And, when workers come, the queen's body language around you will influence the workers' behavior too.

Not sure if bees are the same way, but it's uusally best to do that when the queen is new

>>10558171
I'm not suggesting she fight anyone.

C'mon anon, I'd have thought people'd be jumping at this.

>>10571685
ah, 9 superheroines. Really wished I could find more stuff about them on the net.

>>10570893
>C'mon anon, I'd have thought people'd be jumping at this.
it's fairly arrogant of you to assume your idea was some kind of gem or treasure

>>10571833
I did. Took much effort, very little of which was worthwhile. They're not very good, from a storytelling perspective.

>>10572107
I don't know about that, I just thought that people might like it. Though, perhaps this is related to why there is no art/smut of these two on the internet at large. How curious.

>>10572217
>I did. Took much effort, very little of which was worthwhile. They're not very good, from a storytelling perspective.

eh, I'm fine with just watching sexy women get into perils.

...linky plz?

>>10572307
I actually tried to come up with a story for them once, based on the pic up yonder. Hence my gathering of their info. It's all on here.

http://www.mediafire.com/file/77rq56csjr7gdr5/9HeroinesBadEndNotes.txt

Hopefully you can do more with it than I did.

>Want to continue writing an old fanfic of mine
>Can't find the words even though i know what i want to put in it
>Meanwhile, walls and walls of text are being written by themselves when i want to write a porn fic

>>10572367
isn't the green one supposed to be Lady Brazilia or something?

>>10572490
Erm, if I'm reading my own notes right, then that's "Dragonia".

Yes the names are all that crap. Some are even worse.

>>10567513
As an anon who knows a thing or two about nuclear weapons, I'd like to point out that they'd in fact be THE ultimate solution to the kind of tunnel complexes you're talking about, you just have to get the bomb into the tunnels
Would provide a not retarded reason to put the MC down in the tunnels, for one thing

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>>10561805
AzimuthFlirt reports.

Feedback from Writethread #25 ( >>10533498 , >>10536670, >>10534360, >>10536962 ) integrated. Advised emphasis on werewolf structure as a nuclear family with strong traditional values is in-line with initial story outline. Recommended positive parental outlook also in-line with feedback, useful in backstory. Intend to show sharp contrast between human family and society versus that of the werewolves. Humans will have a classical, magic-and-metal empire mindset toward the world, while the werewolves' traditionalist ways and 1950s Americana nuclear family are subtly anachronistic. Affirmation, as well as reader interest, appreciated.

First chapter up. 4790-odd words. Focuses on young artist's perspective on his "odd" friend at school. No erotic content. Future chapters will of course not contain erotic content of under aged individuals. Intent is to build visible relationships between the characters and showcase their world. Currently at candidate draft status, open to revision and edits. Likely contains errors/typos.


>Title: Paws, Pencils, and Kid Gloves

>Tags: Male(human)/Female(werewolf), school, fighting(fists), blood(minor).

>Chapter 1: Leave it to Loba...
https://pastebin.com/ePr6xUp3


Work still underway on summary, tags. Hope that this setup leads in the direction desired by the original request. Next chapter focuses on the characters in their teenage years, when the male lead first becomes aware of the werewolf-girl's secret. Editing needed.

Look forward to readers' thoughts on this chapter.


>>10557651
Not that anon, but you are referring to >>10520809 from Writethread #25, writer of >>10520405, >>10520424 correct? Would also be interested if that author has an additional body of work. Posted a story in that thread. Was inspired by that greentext. Do wish to give a hat-tip where due, this was an excellent opportunity for unity between /trash/ threads.

>>10572888
Hey, Azzie, are you gonna be able to do any more on that facehugger story eventually? Only I very much enjoyed it and I'm really keen to see more.

>>10572888
Hello, OR here
I like what you've done with this so far, especially the worldbuilding, and the characters so far seem good.
If you've not already written all of the future bits out, I have a few ideas, mostly salvaged from a megapost I was gonna make last thread but it died too early.
Let me know if this matches up with or clashes with your plans for the story

I like the idea of the guy being artistically inclined, wouldn't have thought of it myself. I think it would be fitting if his inclination was towards nature scenes and landscapes, maybe even the occasional animal, because it really lends itself well to the two of them spending lots of time together alone and outdoors.
like say the two of them going on a long hike somewhere because there's a waterfall or something that he wants to see and sketch
Also, I think it would be nice, and something not usually done in these kinds of stories, if Lapiz was actually quite good at say hunting or some other traditional outdoors skill, maybe after she gives a little push. I could easily see an artist's eye for detail and possible associated skills making him a very good tracker and hunter if he ever put his mind to it (or she put it for him?)
Actually now that I think about it, him teaching her how to fish would be a nice bonding moment for the two of them. What do you think?

I was also thinking about the "what does she see in him?" aspect, and I was thinking that perhaps (and in keeping with the slightly sappy 50s theme) that for werewolves the overwhelming consideration in mate selection is "do I want to spend the rest of my life and raise children with this person?", and as she gets to know him better and better, all signs increasingly point to Yes
>1/1.5?

>>10572888
>>10573463
And for a last thing, sorry if I'm rambling, but as regards the fathers, (and that was a good suggestion, anon, thanks), I figure that werewolves would by their nature have a certain special feeling of respect/support for single parents especially and those who've lost their mate in general. Like, it's not pity but they feel very sorry about it
I think it would be a nice dimension in their interactions

Also, I have to say that I do like the slightly Spanish theme you've got going here, not common in fantasy stuff but nice here

>>10572888

Yes that's the guy. His writing style also reminded me strongly of a couple of lewd greentext stories I saw in an archived /vg/ thread from 2015. I'm wondering if this is the same person.

I made something, i'm a beginner when it comes to writing fics, just so you know

https://pastebin.com/d3rVBVt0
>Title: Becoming her magic wand...
>Tags Male(Human)/Female(Delphox) - Pokemon - Rape - Unwilling - Watersports - Cock Transformation - Lactation - Death -Disgusting things

Please, tell me what do you think about it

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>>10577025

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>>10577025

>>10577238
>>10577397
Glad you enjoyed the themes

>>10572888

Fantastic story so far. My one complaint is one common in even the most skilled authors:

Lapiz is way too verbose for how young he is. Even worse are conversations where his vocabulary level seems to rise and fall between each line. I suggest combing over his dialogue and toning down how verbose and long some of his lines are.

>>10577025
You're not a native English speaker, are you?

All your quotation marks are wrong, see http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/quotes.asp

>no matter how dangerous it can sound
no matter how dangerous it could sound
>sleeping bad
sleeping bag
>leading to the Route 2
leading to Route 2
>trainer carrer
trainer career
>so easily that it was almost boring, catching wild Pokemon would be pointless
Comma splice.
>where beginners starts their journey
where beginners start their journey
>nothing can match out strength
nothing can match our strength
>even her looked pretty bored
even she looked pretty bored
>even though she enjoy battling
even though she enjoyed battling
>the human and the Pokemon started to sink into the woods, with no path to walk safely and surrounded by tall grass, Mark bumped into a wild Pokemon almost every two steps
Comma splice.
>pikachus, caterpies, weedles, fletchlings
Pikachu, Caterpie, Weedle, Fletchling
Pokémon names are always capitalized, and the plural form is the same as the singular (like "sheep" or "moose").
>But still no worthy opponent, when suddenly.
End an interrupted sentence with an em-dash: "But still no worthy opponent, when suddenly—"
>picked his curiosity
piqued his curiosity
>deep into unknown
deep into the unknown
>fighting a worth enemy
fighting a worthy enemy
>two huge ears on it’s face
two huge ears on its face
>It didn’t took more than half a second
It didn’t take more than half a second

And I'm not interested in the erotic content so I'll stop there.

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Anyone know why this happens in OpenOffice?
It does it with certain characters seemingly at random, and I can't work out why, only happens in OpenOffice.

>>10585947
>OpenOffice
OpenOffice is dead. All the programmers moved to the LibreOffice years ago when Oracle bought Sun, because everyone hates Oracle. LibreOffice is the same software except with a different name and not abandoned. There's no reason to use OpenOffice in 2017.

>>10586252
I've never been able to find anything that I really like, they always either have too few features, or they're a mess and they crash all the time.
I tried LibreOffice and uninstalled it within about 10 minutes because it crashed more than OO, and I've tried lots of more minimalist programs that are stable but lack the features I need like word count and spellcheck.

Right now I'm using WordPad and pasting the text into online tools for spellcheck and wordcount because OO is acting up, and it's a huge pain in the ass, slows me down. OO fucks up all the time too, but it's manageable.

All the ones that are supposedly 'made for writers' have ridiculous gimmicks that just get in the way, like this one I used that blanked out my external monitors by default in an attempt to improve my productivity, or one that forced fullscreen and wouldn't let me tab out.

Shit drives me crazy.

2000 word update, new content at "Erikson wanted to protest"

Rig Runner:
https://pastebin.com/xmLQAjyG
new tags:
>creampie

>>10569129
Brutal.

careful now, looks like /trash/ is spiking in speed again

>>10580484
No, i'm not

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>>10586594
>LibreOffice
>Crashing

Anon, what the fuck are you talking about? I think you've got more problems than software if LibreOffice is crashing.

>>10577025
Wow a double whammy, something shit both content wise and has grammatical errors out the fucking ass

>>10588271
Nope, I have two computers, one is a laptop running Windows 10 that's all Intel hardware, the other is a gaming rig running 7 that's all AMD, the same problems are present on both.
It isn't hardware or software related, the 'office' programs just seem really fucking unstable.
On my rig Open likes to randomly crash, usually several times in a session, it also fails to load files over a certain size, it also has the worst 'file recovery' tool imaginable that will often try to overwrite intact documents with blank files.
Fortunately it starts to fuck up graphically directly preceding a crash, so I can predict when it will happen and save my work.

Hard to say what Libre is like, because the first thing it does after installation is crash, it crashes when loading files on my rig, crashes when closing, crashes when saving, and I didn't bother trying it on my laptop.

I don't have that problem with any other programs, I can't even remember the last time I got a CTD in a game.

The only constant between the two systems is that they both use an SSD as the boot drive, but I can't imagine that being a factor.

>no thicc daddy wolf to snuggle with

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>>10589334
That's some great criticism, I'm sure they'll be able to improve after reading your eloquent wording.

>>10589347
>Hard to say what Libre is like, because the first thing it does after installation is crash, it crashes when loading files on my rig, crashes when closing, crashes when saving, and I didn't bother trying it on my laptop.
There's definitely something else wrong, because recent versions of LibreOffice almost never crash. That's one of the main advantages over OpenOffice. And even OpenOffice shouldn't crash so frequently, so it really sounds like there's something wrong with your computers.

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Hey, /trash/, how many words do you try and crank out a day?

>>10589347
I feel like we had this conversation before. Am I going crazy, or are you just some guy who's been here for a while and keeps having problems with LibreOffice?

>>10593889

LibreOffice isn't that great of a word processor in my experience, so it could easily be all of the above lol

>>10593914
I've never had the slightest issue with it. I also find its equation editor to be one of the best in any word processor.

>not just using notepad++

>>10589347
There's something seriously screwy going on there, dude.
I haven't used either for a couple of years (up until which LO had consistently been more stable in my experience), but neither of them should be crashing like that. For most purposes they're interchangeable, and feature set differences are trivial for general use.

Both suites have user profiles which can cause really surreal problems when something goes wrong, and which persist even with a total uninstall/reinstall - this could conceivably be hampering any fixes, but unless both machines have been going for a long while that wouldn't explain them having the same problems.

LO did have crash problems related to it using OpenGL, but I'd be seriously surprised if that was the cause of the problem, which I think has been fixed now anyway.

>>10593018
>red hair
Nah, I prefer the prime universe to the JJ Abrams stuff

>>10594852

I could see myself being mistaken. My old bitch of a laptop is getting there in years.

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>>10595418
Could be dye? Maybe her master likes gingers and she wants to impress him.

>>10593885
I never seem to have the time to write regularly. When I do write, I can easily crank out 1000 words in a sitting.

>>10595882
Could be, could be.
>"master"
That might be an appealing thing about alien men to Orion women, since while their pheromones still get them going, it's not going to turn them into total puppets with no free will after a month or so the way it does with Orion men.
Maybe the Orions seen on earth in the Abrams movies were there because while they still had the sex drive of any healthy green-blooded woman, they also held deviant desires such as having a conversation with their partner while cuddling afterwards.

How high of an action to smut ratio in a fic is too high, in your opinion?

>>10603173
It depends on what you're aiming for. Assuming your aim to to get people off then you're going to want to avoid having so much buildup that they move on to other stories. IMO, anything more than 60/40 action to sexy action in a one-shot is probably asking for trouble.

If you're doing a multi-chapter story, of course you have quite a bit of leeway, provided you included enough of both types of action in your earlier chapters to hook your readers and don't go too long without one or the other.

>>10603173
It depends
If it's supposed to be a porn story with action, 50/50 is about the max, but if it's supposed to be a lewd action story, that's a different ball game, and I'd be time with as high as a 5:1 ratio there

>>10597928
Possible. I just want to see some smut that actually has a stab at what these girls are meant to be like in the fluff.

Y'know? Animalistic and that. It's been nearly fifty years since they were introduced, for goodness sake, and yet I've never been able to find something that does them justice.

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>>10593889
Yeah that's me, lol. I've complained about it before and I've still not found a program that really does everything I need it to.

>>10595017
If I'm not mistaken, Libre is a continuation of Open's codebase, so it makes sense for similar problems to occur with both.

>>10603173
As someone who writes often very long stories with a lot of action, I feel uncomfortable if there's less than 20% porn. I've been told that I could get away with less, but that's about the limit where I feel that it no longer gives people enough of a payoff.

2000 word update, new content at "She lifted off him"

Rig Runner:
https://pastebin.com/xmLQAjyG
>no new tags

>>10603173
20-33%.
I like worldbuilding, characterization and setup.

Is anyone taking requests for shemale stuff?

>>10610451
D here.

I do futa stuff... is that close enough?

>>10610643
Sure! The idea was this.

>A guy decides that for some reason, he wants to be a woman. This is the /d/ future, where that's fully possible.
>His body becomes extremely feminine, and since you do futa he does get a pussy, but his dick doesn't shrink or disappear
>It actually grows physically and gets more sensitive
>Gets extremely aroused at really lewd things
>Instead of being a QT, this guy is forced to be an extremely hot Futa.

If that sounds like it could work, I'll give more details!

>>10612620
>I am a Drahon.
>I have seen countless empires rise and fall.
>I remember the face of God before he died.
>My cock is half-again thick as an ancient oak, and long as the mountain ranges.
>How do you plan to please me, little thing?
...
I could hug your dick?

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>>10613958
She could get right into his urethra with her hands/mouth? Though she'd have to be careful if she actually got him off, the cumshot could break her neck.

Embarrassing way to die, for sure.

>>10611739
I used to laugh this ridiculousness of having half-naked woman fighting Dragons. But it makes more sense if you accept that the Dragon will wreck ALL armor anyone could wear. Thus all that matters is speed, misdirection, and fucking huge hammers. Thus scantily-clad warrior women charging en-mass against a Dragon, only to get wrecked and enslaved as it's personal cock-warmers.

>>10614282
>Thus scantily-clad warrior women charging en-mass against a Dragon, only to get wrecked and enslaved as it's personal cock-warmers.
Works for me. Who are these three, in your mind, and how did they end up setting out on this doomed endeavour together?

And which is the dragon's favourite once he has them to himself?

>>10614396
not that anon, but they're likely mercenaries who need monies to make ends meet.

Probably hired by some guy wanting to get the dragon's hoard of gold or something.

I think the dragon would take that paladin looking one over the thief or the mage. She seems like she could take breeding sessions longer and have stronger children.

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>>10614552
Makes sense to me. I always was rather fond of adventurers being captured and enslaved/used to breed monsters for bad ends.

>>10614396
Dragon's are basically natural disasters in this world. These three are the latest in an attempt to destroy or avert a living act of nature. And the latest to fail.

Each was chosen on solely two qualities: Speed and the ability to wreck shit fast. Basically, they're different classes of DPSluts. It's actually a rite of trial for those whop consider themselves the best of the best to throw themselves against a dragon and survive. They're not expected to actually kill the thing, just hit a couple of times and return alive.

But these ones have failed to escape and now their lives are forfeited to the Dragon.

I'm going to say that the Paladin, the one with the strongest will, is going to be broken into a breeding sow. He'll teach her to love the feeling her womb full of hot dragon cum. The other two will probably be enslaved as menial labor, maybe even tell them to go whore themselves in a nearby town for shiggles.

>>10615239
Same here, albeit a dirty pleasure. I prefer to "soften" it by saying that the Monsters prefer humans/elves to raise their young since they're gentler than their own women.

>>10615365
>I'm going to say that the Paladin, the one with the strongest will, is going to be broken into a breeding sow. He'll teach her to love the feeling her womb full of hot dragon cum. The other two will probably be enslaved as menial labor, maybe even tell them to go whore themselves in a nearby town for shiggles.
the others still have their uses. The rogue will likely breed faster offspring and the mage will gift their children with more magical abilities.

>>10615418
>>10615365
I like, I like. Will other adventurers come, in time? What will these three do when their master/husband is attacked?

>>10615418
And now there's the eugenics involved.
>Near-immortal Dragon decides to dedicate his life to "perfecting" humanity with his own blood.
>To this end he fucks a child into every woman that takes his fancy.

>>10615722
>>10615987
if they've been properly trained, they'll defend him, and if the attackers are other women, they'll capture them and force them into breeding positions second to them.

though, he's making a dragon brood rather than human children.

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>>10616366
>>10615987
>though, he's making a dragon brood rather than human children.
Naturally, naturally.

Going back to the eugenics thing, would he deliberately try and attract stronger and more varied adventurers, in the hope of his brood being as versatile as possible?

>>10614282
Leather armor makes more sense, though, to maintain mobility while providing protection against blunt force trauma as well as the elements themselves while you run around, bump into things, if you're knocked down amidst a pile of rubble and sharp rocks etc.

The human body is very fragile. Even a small drop could fuck up a leg, break a rib etc and instantly remove 80%+ of your fighting ability. And in the context of high fantasy it'd probably be nice to have some modicum of protection against the flames that a dragon would presumably cough out on a regular basis.

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>>10616557
Mate, I doubt full plate would do you much good against dragonfire, never mind leather. Anon was right, your best bet is to just try and not to get hit in the first place, since there's not really any kind of armour you can wear that'll be able to protect you against what the dragon can bring to bear.

>>10616432
>Going back to the eugenics thing, would he deliberately try and attract stronger and more varied adventurers, in the hope of his brood being as versatile as possible?
of course.

>>10616633
Against a facefull of it, no, of course not, but against glancing hits it very well could. And it's a matter of taking a tiny hit to mobility in order for a large gain in protection against things that would be extremely dangerous if you're naked, but trivial with even a thin layer of hardened leather to protect you in the same way that the road rash from falling off a motorcycle at 30mph will severely, possibly even permanently fuck you up, whereas with even shitty, cheap gear chances are you'll be fine and walk it off with some light bruising.

Light leather: You might be able to get sideswiped by a tail or leg and tossed around and not be out of comission.

Thin clothing: You're absolutely positively fucked if just some light debris is sent in your direction from even a missed blow that hits a wood or stone pillar near you. Direct, hard hits from a dragon the size of a building is not the only threat on a battlefield.

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>>10616654
I like the idea of him actually going of his way to try and kidnap as many powerful females as he can, whether warriors, rogues, witches, whatever, so that he can breed with them and make use of their traits.

He'll have his own army going before long, both of his own progeny and their mindbroken mothers following them wherever they go to continue producing more dragonspawn and to take care of him.

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Requesting a story where a big rat monster female/not Skaven takes a fancy to a smaller human guy and captures him for snu snu and cuddling

http://archiveofourown.org/users/TimedWatcher/works

Still looking for reviews

>>10618655
I can already tell by the tags that your stuff is shit on principle alone

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>>10616722
>>10616717
Beast stuff is disgusting. Have some cute instead

>>10620128
What a nice fellow you are.

>>10620677
Almost every single on of your stories include rape. That's fucked up

>>10611127
Well... you want a short story focusing on the transformation? A gradual long story about the whole process? I'd be more interested in doing a short thing right now.

>>10620802
Not even the guy asking for reviews. Instantly dismissing their stuff as "shit" because you don't like the fetishes involved is absolutely moronic.

>>10620924
welcome to 4chan

>>10620802
>your story is garbage because it features fetishes I personally dislike

KYS

>>10618655
Quick thoughts at a glance:
Read the first chapter of Basement Dale. I don't know much about the show it's based on, so I can't say how well the characters are handled on that end. However, I will comment that Connie's reaction seems a little too deadpan. Deadpan seems to be the guy's character, but Connie is taking the whole thing way too easily in my opinion.

Stylistically I'm not sure about the changing perspectives. You seem to be trying to show to highlights of what each character is feeling, but in smut that doesn't really work all that well. For me, at least, I have to be able to get at least a bit into a character's head for me to get aroused by a written port story. When you jump from perspective to perceptive like you do in this chapter, often from paragraph to paragraph, I spend more time figuring out what's happening that I do getting invested.

tl;dr: I would suggest sticking to one character's perspective, or at least shifting less frequently and with larger stretches of one person's perspective.

Other than that everything seems solid. No real grammar errors or distracting style choices apart from those mentioned above. I'm used to reading stories that introduce their own characters, so the pacing of having established ones (and ones I don't know) seems off to me. That is my problem as a reader, though. I'm sure a fan of the series would enjoy it much more.

Like I said, these are just my thoughts at a glance. Might go more in depth later, work/time permitting.

>>10617727
Reading up on these Skaven things, how would they ever fall in love with a human?
It seems like if they aren't plotting to murder others, or seeking out power, they're plotting to murder every other race in existence.
They don't appear capable for any capacity of love either.

>>10623969
That's why I said "not skavens" so it'd give some familiar ideas or a base to work off of. They don't have to be the warhammer fantasy rat people. Trust me, I know how you'd need to rework or throw a lot of canon out to make my request work with skaven.

>>10624017
I had assumed as much, but I was curious if there were any noteworthy individuals or groups that go against that general form of thinking. Something that wouldn't be found on casual wiki-diving.
I do find the Warhammer universe interesting, even if I never dabbled in it personally.

>>10624408
Eh, you could make up an OC skaven clan and at most you'd make a few grimdark fags butthurt. Funny how those types all seem to ignore how goofy the settings are when you get certain groups like the orks. Anyways, I'm fine if you want to go with actual skaven for the idea, but generic big rat people is just has fine.

>>10624475
I suppose I'll give it a shot, just don't get your hopes too up.

>>10625524
no rush

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2000 word update, new content at "We see things differently,"

Rig Runner:
https://pastebin.com/xmLQAjyG
new tags:
>massage

>>10620802
Trying to pass on judgement on someone's kinks as expressed in fiction on 4chan in a /trash/ thread. Nigga, you dumb as a bag of rocks.

If I knew who your waifu was I'd commission some soul-destroying rape and torture fics of her out of spite.

>>10538271
How do these have so few views?

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>The class pet mantis was supposed to be a simple pet
>they live up to a year and then die from old age, allowing a new class to bond with a new pet
>It was such a simple cycle back then
>By why did this one in particular turned into something human-like instead of going on with the natural order?

>>10577025
Dang that tag spread is like 50/50 YEP and NOPE.

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AzimuthFlirt reports.
>>10573463
>>10573495
Happy you're enjoying the story. Detailed feedback greatly appreciated. Male artist character's inclinations are in-line with your proposal. Took idea for outdoorsmanship, in particular fishing, and used to fortify second chapter. Result was an additional chapter of content that replaced the original outline for chapter 2, pushing that outline into chapter 3. Unexpected, but acceptable.

Attitude of werewolves toward single parents was in-line with outline and included subtly in chapters 2-3. Spanish theme was chosen to prevent exhaustion from Roman theme in Northlands Garrison story, some elements of Persian empire also included to lend feeling of a more mythical civilized world that contrasts with the wild werewolves' 1950s family mindset.

>>10578255
Correct in all respects. Added to revision notes, with emphasis. Chief cause of faults was the size of the chapter, as well as some last-minute revisions that likely caused the "jumps" in vocabulary. Feedback appreciated.

>>10585947
Strongly advocate use of Notepad++, as mentioned by >>10594921. Robust software, .txt is compact for quick cloud backups and can be read easily by a variety of programs, and the spellcheck is functional. Far more trustworthy than MSWord. Have written extensively for both academic and personal projects with it. If WordPad is acceptable, as mentioned in >>10586594, then Notepad++ will more than suffice. MSWord and OpenOffice Writer/LibreOffice Writer are enterprise-grade document development platforms. Focus is on end-presentation and reliable reproduction of the document you create on other computers, not ease of workflow.

Personally use Q10 for all initial drafts, then pass draft over to something like Notepad++ or a story management program such as yWriter in the event it becomes too large to easily handle. Spellcheck is provided by Notepad++ or yWriter. Notepad++ counts characters, Q10 counts words and characters, yWriter counts words.
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>>10633600
>>10572888
Paws, Pencils, and Kid Gloves Chapter 2 up. 2200 odd words.

>Summary: In a world of magic carpets, clay houses, and verdant forests, the cities of man's empire are protected from corruption by vigilant investigators. But who, or what, protects the forests from threats within and without? As one boy grows from childhood to an adult, he learns that one of his schoolyard friends is perhaps more than she seems. The old myths tell of wolf-people who stalk the forests and devour those who would ruin the beauty of nature. But werewolves are myths. If they weren't, his yellow-eyed tomboy friend and her quaint nuclear family would have found out about them by now. They live in the woods, they'd warn him if those myths were true... right? There are more important things to worry about, like if he likes her as much as he thinks he does, and if she likes him the way he likes her, and why she keeps having those twitching fits during class now that they're all going through adolescence.

>Chapter 2: Family Fishing
https://pastebin.com/wSLjuicX


Summary still a work-in-progress. Difficult to ensure proper concentration of all information vital to intriguing new readers without spoiling entire story.


>>10572932
Appreciate interest. Currently focused on active stories (Northlands Garrison, Paws). Interested in working on a goo-girl story next, quietly saved notes on that from WT#25. Have ideas for another story centered around facehuggers. Not a continuation of the Mass Effect story, this would be set in a GURPS TL3 fantasy universe. Low-tech, high-magic, with an eye toward critique I received for the ME story. May opt to continue the ME story instead, based on reader feedback. Choice will be made after completion of currently-running stories.

For onlooker reference, this is the "facehugger story":
>Milk, Eggs, and Facehuggers: A Mass Effect Alternate Ending
https://pastebin.com/i8nWSpYR

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>>10633742
>>10629264
Interest appreciated.

Chapter 5 up, 3500 odd words. Large, complex chapter, required significant iteration. Feel that this is probably not what readers want. Largely focused on social backdrop for the situation and theological issues caused by the characters' cultures clashing instead of a muscley young officer cumming a pent-up load into the pointy-eared maid who's been crushing on him. This chapter provides the reader with a much clearer perspective of the officer and maid's mindsets toward their situation.

On one hand, such content provides the relationship aspect that makes erotic fiction more than penis-in-vagina-rub-rub-goosh. On other, feel guilty about taking a request to write a simple story about a maid and an officer snogging even though they know they should not, and instead shoving large blocks of text about a brutally heavy-handed empire and a wild, cold, possibly eldrich-monster infested northernland down readers' throats. Despite positive feedback from original requester, uncertain if anon expected this much dithering prior to dickings. Low viewer count, as logged by Pastebin, indicates this is not interesting to many readers. Or that the writing style is a turn-off.

But since this writefag literally cannot stop sucking cocks, this is not a personal blog, many other writers in this very thread with far greater talent endure far worse, and the only thing more contemptible than a bait-and-switch is a failure to deliver, into the /trash/ it goes!


Prior chapters, summary, tags: >>10538271

>Chapter V: Revelation
https://pastebin.com/KWfi5GNB

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>>10618655

Overlooked the other stories because they weren't exactly my thing. The ones I did read were the Racoon City and Velma one.

Excellent stuff.

Always been eh on Dog/woman stuff, but you made that a pretty fucking gnarly (like the rest of the story) scene. Maybe it was the lack of sleep, but zombie gangbang positioning was a bit hard to follow at times.

The Velma ones were dark in a good way, both futa and regular. You really got into the head of that creepy dude, and I liked how Velma reacted to it all. Quite hot.

>>10634426
Thanks man. I sometimes wonder if I'm writing stories for no one despite the views some stories get.

Have had a few ideas for a sequel to the Velma story, which would obviously be different and maybe explain some things in the first story.

Most people seem to like the dog entry, but it's not exactly my thing so I tried my best. Also, hmmm. Maybe I wasn't using the right terms or phrases on how she was situated on the car.

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Bump

Posting the stories I did for the dino-tits and gay werewolf threads.

Dino-tits: https://pastebin.com/3t6UMqcA (contains 1st person, size difference, feet play, sweat, rimming, scalie, alligator, milf, male/female, footjob)

Gay Werewolf (Need to fix the issues with both)

Part 1: https://pastebin.com/aMXHWKee (contains 1st person, mild blood, no sex, werewolves)

Part 2: https://pastebin.com/GAn54DnH (contains 1st person, werewolf, Mpreg, pregnant, males, transformation, corruption, mind break, knots, size difference, big balls, small cum inflation, incest)

Anybody else here got a rash fetish?

>>10637710
No, and in fact that's the first I've ever heard of someone having one.

>>10635983
Oh Lewdanon, how we have missed thee.

>>10639493
Sorry, but that's an old one from /tg/.

>>10627089
It's a good thing for Nazka's ego that it's not struck her that the completely untrained civilian human spacing her entire crew and only failing to end her due to a lapse of composure meaning he didn't put a hole in her visor instead of her torso probably means she's not as hot shit as she likes to imagine. A human with a little bit of combat training or who fluked into a particularly cold, focused state under the adrenaline would have ruined them.
She could complain that in a straight up fight that wouldn't happen, but exploiting the environment, using cunning, and not letting yourself be outdone on either are pretty central skills in hunting and combat. That's how humans ended up on top against species as fast and as immediately lethal as borealans back in the spears and rocks days, and it's the only way to beat a physically superior opponent. Something tells me that borealan hunters would measure their worth against things like the giant woolly spiders while using guns and guile, and would be, uh, "underwhelmed" by claiming strangling a space-rabbit while totally unarmed as a feat of prowess.

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Hey can anyone comment/give advice on my first two pastebin romance fanfics?
Theyre both based on the Out of Placers webcomic

A Reason To Leave [human(m)xbaxxid(f),OOPS, romance]

https://pastebin.com/nsz07h6j


Yinglet Maids [romance,dark, yinglets, OOPS]
warning:contains themes of rape and abuse

https://pastebin.com/Pz36Dn7s

>>10641643
Is that a sliver?

>>10642624
no, whats a sliver?

>>10643224
A thing from Magic the Gathering.

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>>10642624
No, but this is.

>>10643319
MtG has a lot of pretty nice characters to do porn of like ink-eyes

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2000 word update, I think I have a fetish for bickering edition, new content at "Erikson was awoken by blaring alarms"

Rig Runner:
https://pastebin.com/xmLQAjyG
>no new tags

>>10640589
Borealans do tend to have higher opinions of themselves than is generally warranted.

In other news, I just discovered that the laptop one of my readers donated has a drawing tablet function, if you're reading this you're awesome. I can use this to better communicate what I want from my artists.

>>10643428
>the laptop one of my readers donated has a drawing tablet function
jesus christ
sounds like you're doing pretty well

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>>10643851
Nah, there's just an uncommonly generous Norwegian out there somewhere who really likes femdom.

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Are anyone fans of the touhou series here

>>10645647
Touhou is trash

>>10645683
check the thread url, buddy

So, what's That Thing you're looking for in a fic but just can't seem to find?

>>10647394
Cuddly defloration a la https://nhentai.net/g/169757/, but with gigantic (and preferably nonhuman) dick and size difference
Tsundere girl's facade melting because she's so happy it's actually happening is also premium

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>>10647775
>Cuddly defloration but with gigantic (and preferably nonhuman) dick and size difference
The best taste

>>10637719
Welll I imagine it can be a significant movement in the diapers crowd, but I stay far away from those.

>>10647775
>>10647893
It's too bad snek decided he was done with the first two fetishes you listed after the dumpster fire of his last go at it, otherwise I'd recommend him as perfect for this

>>10647775
>>10647893
>qt farmgirl falls for qt farmboy next door
>only he's a minotaur/dragonboy/werewolf/catboy
>nobody has a problem with this
>they get married and mutually discover how nice fucking each other silly is
>in that order
Fuck, I would fund that manga

>>10648448
And this is why he won't do vanilla anymore.
Dude wrote like a 50 thousand word story and even commissioned character art for it, and you call it a dumpster fire because you didn't like the ending.
You had one guy writing the content you wanted and now you have none.

>>10648612
What was the ending and the hate for it?

>>10633600
>>10633742
New anon with a new idea: since this fic is most assuredly heading that way, I was thinking that part of the traditional ceremony for a human marrying/being officially mated to a werewolf would involve a declaration that if they're unfaithful, may they be forever cursed by the nature spirits and hated by all animals and so on, but less a threat than a declaration of seriousness
It even feels kinda 50s nuclear family to me. Hell, my grandfather made it part of his marriage vows back in '46 that my great uncle flat out shoot him if he ran around on my grandmother, because he'd clearly have gone insane
>>10648448
>>10648612
It certainly *ended up* a shitshow dumpster fire, in terms if reactions that I won't take a side over, without a doubt
Also Jesus, it's been like half a baby since the last outbreak of this fight, can y'all just cool it down?

>>10648752
>Anon requests a vanilla story about Snek's femdom rape machines
>he contrives a relationship where the characters are childhood sweethearts and the femdom rape machine grew up on Earth and knows nothing of it's heritage beyond some mildly rapey urges
>she leaves Earth and returns to the homeworld
>comes back fully grown a few years later and resumes their relationship
>extremely mild femdom ensues
>this one Anon is so mad about it that he's still bringing it up several months later

>>10649000
Woow yeah, that does look inordinately salty.

>>10649625
Hyper-pregnancy always seems to hit a kink within me. But I prefer the ones where woman just become, I quote, "sickingly ripe". Where instead the focus is on how the woman has become disgustingly fecund to the point where they can wring cocks dry just by engulfing them within their sopping wet snatches. Or where the men become so virile that they seem to lose their refractory period and become constantly erect, and their balls become seemingly endless oceans of cum capable of actually cumflating women.

>>10649658
If you want to just drink up the words of Snek Defense Force sure.

>>10650298
Oh hi, AA. Haven't noticed you being a whiny cunt for a few days. You ok?

>>10643428
Yeah, just flip the screen around and "close" it for ease of use. I hope you also noticed the release latch for the port replicator so you're not carrying around the entire monstrosity with it docked.

>>10647775
That sounds cute, I'd read it
>>10647394
High impact sloppy consensual gangbangs between a bunch of extremely slutty people
Speaking of which, any progress D.?

>>10650899
I haven't even posted until now, though I have been lurking for a while.

I'm way past the point of caring about that thing now, it's in the past and I'd rather keep my mouth shut until I have something substantial to show for it. I suggest the other guy does the same thing.

>>10650899
That was uncalled for. It's sad that people jump to conclusions just because they have a differing opinion

>>10651788

D reporting in.

There is some slow progress. Sorry it's taking so long. I guess something about this is keeping my enthusiasm down.

>>10652289
I mean, if you're really not into it, I honestly wouldn't mind if you dropped it.
No point if you aren't into it

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>>10640589
>It's a good thing for Nazka's ego that it's not struck her that the completely untrained civilian human spacing her entire crew and only failing to end her due to a lapse of composure meaning he didn't put a hole in her visor instead of her torso probably means she's not as hot shit as she likes to imagine.
At least she doesn't have an eight-year-old human with his brother's football helmet, a home-built spaceship, and his trusty pogo stick wrecking her repeated attempts to take over the Earth/Galaxy/Universe.

All while using a non-lethal neural stunner.


>>10641643
Unfamiliar with source material, can only provide feedback on your content. Response intended as supportive, curt tone due to character limit.

>A Reason To Leave
Advise including more explicit descriptions of characters/creatures in story for those who have not read source material. Current descriptions cover basics (rat-things, rock snake, mercenary culture, etc) and express a vague sense of their world. If your work is able to stand alone, with minimal prior knowledge of the source material, it is stronger. This should be considered an area for improvement, not a deficiency.

Greentext style well-suited to action and movement, such as beginning of story and combat scenes. Unsuitable for long exchanges of halting dialog, such as lines 190-206. Speech patterns clarify who speaks, but repeated paragraphs beginning in near-identical quoted exhalation patterns should have connecting lines between them to break monotony. Bodily shifts, alterations in tone, pauses for breath, would all prevent the reader's mind from becoming bored. Consider combining such dialog into fewer, longer paragraphs.

Done well in lines 276-281 with Yargeth's long paragraphs. Additional bodily movements or other activities (looking about, gesturing with hands) could be included to break up the large blocks of dialog, but it is serviceable as-is.

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>>10641643
>>10653155
Yargeth's first "switch" to ingrained responses is abrupt. On initial reading, was unclear that he was still acting on ingrained responses when he snapped at Karah. Mention of an alternate tone of voice is helpful, but changes in physical mannerisms (stance, facial expression) would help communicate the change since no prior indication of it was given in the story.

Combat scenes, especially Karah/Zeska duel at line 524-540, are enjoyably written. Focus is on the emotion of the fight, but the character's attacks and dodges are also expressed.

The human receives multiple mortal wounds over the course of the story. Initial fall from the bridge, brained with a rock, shot through the thigh, and a slashed throat. Without abnormal regenerative powers, or immediate and highly-skilled medical care, any of those could be lethal to a real-world Earth baseline human. Lethality of head injuries are often understated in fiction, but the slashed throat is particularly obtrusive since cauterizing it would not repair potentially damaged arteries. Open carotids extremely messy.

This is of course a fantasy world, and such injuries do serve a place in the plot. Mention only made because it seems Yargeth tanks more damage than Wolverine over the course of story. The reference that he would likely be unable to walk again, and is glad to be alive, is a good indicator of the damage he's suffered. However, he should not have survived that long to begin with. If this was the intent, with the goal of showing how lucky/sturdy he is, well done.

Advise mentioning that this story has no erotic content, and tagging it with "blood", "fighting". Clearly express to potential readers what sort of content to expect. Similar to tags used for Northlands Garrison >>10538271.

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>>10641643
>>10653176
Bottom line, a well-conceived story executed admirably. Would greatly benefit from use of conventional third-person paragraph format instead of first-person greentext. Remove "you", replace with "he", allow Yargeth to become the full-fledged character he already is. Unify smaller paragraphs into larger ones. Most short lines can be merged into paragraphs with minimal modifications. Remember, purpose of a writing style is to help the reader clearly understand the story told by the author. Greentext has its place, provides excellent outline for this story. Will take time, effort to convert, but is worthy and will be skill-building. Hardest part, writing the plot, dialog, and interactions, already complete.

Hope this has been of help. Given the considerable number of views already logged on that pastebin, you seem to be in good shape already!
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That you for the feedback I really appreciate the constructive critiques. Iam still a bit rusty. These are the two first "stories" I have ever written. Please do not take my responses here as lashing out.

>>10653155
>>10653176
>>10653199

greentext in and of itself lacks any real description. the initial story had much longer detailed descriptions but I was afraid that it felt too long-winded and bloated for green-text. If I was writing in traditional paragraph format I definitely would put in more detail. I am actually planning on making the sequel paragraph format for the very reason. The greentext is nice to churn out a quick story but lacks a lot.

Yeah I agree. Yargeth's ingrained responses are abrupt. I initially I wrote in more actions and flashbacks but decided against it so the greentext didn't become a repetitive "flashbackathon". Like I said there was a lot I pruned from the last draft for quick readability sake.

As for the damage on Yargeth, the wounds were supposed to be very crippling to him even if It doesn't necessarily so in the story. In the sequel I plan to show how all his injures have begun to take a toll on him. I really do worry that people will just scream that Yargeth's character is just "edgy". But Iam trying really hard to keep the character from going down that path.

I thought I mentioned it in the story that the throat wound for Yargeth was not fatal because Zeska didn't have the arm strength or force to cut clean through being a yinglet. I might have accidentally nixed it in the final. Whoops. I probably should have been clearer with that.

Thank you for letting me know about the non-smut, I thought I put it in the tags but I guess I didn't. I just changed it now.

Is 150 views considered a decent amount of views on pastebin? I thought it was mostly bots or something. I got 200+ on FA but I almost assumed that was bots.

That you for the feedback I really appreciate the constructive critiques. I am still a bit rusty. These are the first two "stories" I have ever written. Please do not take my responses here as lashing out.

>>10653155
>>10653176
>>10653199

Greentext in and of itself lacks any real description. The initial story had much longer detailed descriptions but I was afraid that it felt too long-winded and bloated for green-text. If I was writing in traditional paragraph format I definitely would put in more detail. I am actually planning on making the sequel paragraph format for that very reason. The greentext is nice to churn out a quick story but lacks a lot.

Yeah I agree. Yargeth's ingrained responses are abrupt. I initially I wrote in more actions and flashbacks but decided against it so the greentext didn't become a repetitive "flashbackathon". Like I said there was a lot I pruned from the last draft for quick readability sake.

As for the damage on Yargeth, the wounds were supposed to be very crippling to him even if It doesn't necessarily show in the story. In the sequel I plan to show how all his injures have begun to take a toll on him. I really do worry that people will just scream that Yargeth's character is just "edgy". But I am trying really hard to keep the character from going down that path.

I thought I mentioned it in the story that the throat wound for Yargeth was not fatal because Zeska made a quick cut and did not go that far in. Also, yinglets tend to not have the best arm strength. Whoops.I might have accidentally nixed the additional details describing that clearer in the final draft. I probably should have been clearer with that.

Thank you for letting me know about the non-smut, I thought I put it in the tags but I guess I didn't. I just changed it now.

Is 150 views considered a decent amount of views on pastebin? I thought it was mostly bots or something. I got 200+ on FA but I almost assumed that was bots.

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That you for the feedback I really appreciate the constructive critiques. I am still a bit rusty. These are the first two "stories" I have ever written. Please do not take my responses here as lashing out.

>>10653155
>>10653176
>>10653199

Greentext in and of itself lacks any real description. The initial story had much longer detailed descriptions but I was afraid that it felt too long-winded and bloated for green-text. If I was writing in traditional paragraph format I definitely would put in more detail. I am actually planning on making the sequel paragraph format for that very reason. The greentext is nice to churn out a quick story but lacks a lot.

Yeah I agree. Yargeth's ingrained responses are abrupt. I initially I wrote in more actions and flashbacks but decided against it so the greentext didn't become a repetitive "flashbackathon". Like I said there was a lot I pruned from the last draft for quick readability sake.

As for the damage on Yargeth, the wounds were supposed to be very crippling to him even if It doesn't necessarily show in the story. In the sequel I plan to show how all his injures have begun to take a toll on him. I really do worry that people will just scream that Yargeth's character is just "edgy". But I am trying really hard to keep the character from going down that path.

I thought I mentioned it in the story that the throat wound for Yargeth was not fatal because Zeska made a quick cut and did not go that far in. Also, yinglets tend to not have the best arm strength. Whoops.I might have accidentally nixed the additional details describing that clearer in the final draft. I probably should have been clearer with that.

Thank you for letting me know about the non-smut, I thought I put it in the tags but I guess I didn't. I just changed it now.

Is 150 views considered a decent amount of views on pastebin? I thought it was mostly bots or something. I got 200+ on FA but I also assumed that was bots.

>>10653906
if it is an unlisted pastebin then it's a lot. Otherwise they're probably bots.
>>10653865
>>10653769
you had file delete only option enabled when deleting the posts. Might wanna go back and delete them while you got time

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>>10654046
Well fuck i didn't even notice that. It says that they're too old to delete now. godammit. Sorry everyone for being so anal. All the posts above contain are some very minor grammatical corrections.

>>10654046
Is there any benefit to leaving it unlisted vs. public. does it really matter?

>>10652289
No hurry man, dome right is better than done fast.

Of course, I have been hitting f5 every 30 seconds since you announced a follow up to "the long pull".

>>10654272
Gives you a better idea of how many people are looking at it, since otherwise the numbers are inflated by bots.

>>10654272
not really. I wouldn't hold views/hits in high regard for pastebin because bots, and generally any view counts as a view, even when you, the author, makes the pastebin.
With unlisted only those with the links can see it, reduces bot count significantly if you care for such a thing.

>>10622270
Thanks breh - appreciate the lookthrough. Switching perspectives is one of my bigger failings. I need to get in contact with an editor I know for any future stories

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>tfw you don't have unlimited time/mental capacity to write whatever you want

Wow... so this is where it all ends up huh? Not even /d/ wants us anymore?

I barely made anything for the threads, but it still makes me kind of sad.

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>>10659385
Someone on the moderation staff has a grudge, that much is obvious, not just against /efg/ but against writing threads in general.
We were always very conscious of the rules, we always contained our activities to one general thread, and we made sure to post images wherever possible so that the threads were far from just discussion.
The mods couldn't even find a specific rule that we were breaking, and so they used Global 6 which references 'post quality' because it's vague enough to apply to anything they choose.
They didn't care about how we were behaving or if we were adhering to the site and board rules, they just wanted the threads gone.
Same applies to /aco/'s write thread, which similarly broke no rules or was in any way disruptive.

It's a complete abuse of the system, we can't post on /lit/ because it's a blue board, we can't post on any of the porn boards because 'this is an imageboard' despite the fact that we always post companion images, and the text boards were retired so we can't go there either.

I might also remind everyone that one of the most recent boards added to the site is /qst/, dedicated completely to text adventures, which should violate the very rules they used to oust our writing threads!

>>10659629
/qst/ arose from the exact same thing, a member of the moderation staff with a grudge

hiroshimoot has given mods free reign and they're on a crusade against everything that's badwrongfun

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D here.

Wrote 1,000 words in a Futa Pull-adjacent story today.

No sex yet, but it feels great to finally have a good long day of writing.

>>10645647
Yeah, 2hu is a fun setting. Like just about everything the fanbase is fucking awful if you get too deep in it, but hey ho. Don't be an excessively autistic fucktard and shit's cool.
Taiyakisoba did some nice stuff hosted on AO3 for assorted threads, I enjoyed Mayohiga Nights.

>>10645647
The first smut I ever wrote was a futa giantess Touhou fanfic.

>>10577025
Content's alright, but your editing is a bit off and you need to tighten up your grammer and punctuation.

>>10659385
What stuff did you write, might i ask?

>>10620247
>Space station full of youthful battle-androids with a hardwired obsession with humans and the existential concept of one's own humanity more generally
>The uniforms are designed around leather, lace and blindfolds
>Got told off by their IT manager because they literally filled the station server with entertainment media
Oh, to see even a shard of that database.
It would be a gold mine of cringy love letters, teen angst poetry and bewilderingly obscene fanfiction.

Plus lovingly created collections of the touchingly mundane, like photos of flowers and landscapes, or recovered diaries from the ruins of civilization.

>>10660683
I was FUBOT. So mostly just dubcon, monsterboy/monstergirl stuff, and some desperation watersports at the end.

>>10662248
Oh hey, I remember you! You did some pretty good stuff.

>>10662275
Thanks. Unfortunately poor time management and my longest stretch of no inspiration ever has lead to next to nothing for a while. So since /wst/ aka /efg/ was one of the few 4chan threads I went to anymore, I just stopped even coming around.

Now I come back and see more mod shenanigans. Never quits.

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2000 word update, new content at "It was hard to grasp the sheer scale of the vessel from the inside"

Rig Runner:
https://pastebin.com/xmLQAjyG
>no new tags

>>10651085
Yep, that dock is super convenient, I'm traveling right now so I can keep all my shit plugged in to the dock and just lift the laptop out of it when I need to write.
It's a bomb-ass laptop dude, it's making my life a whole lot easier.

>>10648752
It's here if you'd like to read it:

Worlds Apart:
>Lizka is the daughter of Borealan diplomats, raised on Earth and immersed in human culture. Jamie is a human with a burgeoning love for the feline alien that he's afraid to express. When an upheaval forces the two to confront their feelings, they must make the most of what little time they have.
31,635 words.
http://pastebin.com/H03yuTbM
Ebook: https://www.patreon.com/file?h=7991742&i=818547
tags:
>romance drama vanilla femdom virgins mutual defloration vaginal oral blowjob size difference large breasts muscle sweat creampie biting scratching

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Requesting a story based on Lizardman's monstergirl entry info.

If needed details:
A swordsman fends off a monster invasion led by a Lizardgal. After defeating her in a duel she offers him marriage, which he denies. Being a bit hard headed, she tries other methods to convince him to marry her, such as moving into his home (without his permission) and trying to seduce him with her body, pushing it to his back, directing hand to her boobs, and all that fun stuff until he touches her sensitive tail. Things get lewder from there, revealing that she has no idea what she (or what he) is doing.

>>10664721
Sounds cute. I second.

>>10664721
That sounds adorable, gonna third it
Thinking about it, a hot-blooded young knight who doesn't really know what he's doing either but isn't gonna let that slow him down would be perfect for this

>>10664721
>>10665298
I like this, especially if it's more on the idea of silly-cute
Like the two of them wrassling and throwing eachother around on the basis of them both figuring
>well, my fightin instinct hasn't failed to suggest the right move yet, maybe it'll work here, too

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>>10664721
>Don't do this, don't do this, other commitments already accepted, many other talented authors are better able to do justice to the concept, you'll only bloat it with unneeded worldbuilding, you cannot simply skip straight to the smut-
Daawwww...

Personal challenge. Two hours of writing, nothing more. Editing time uninfluenced, upload time uninfluenced. Useful as spacer between other projects. If another anon writer feels inspired, by all means pick up the request.

Likely tags: M(human)/F(lizardgal), fantasy world (GURPS TL3), tomboy(F), tsundre(F), fingering, use of sex as a "duel", oral intercourse, tail-job(F on M), defloration, mutual first-time, vaginal intercourse, creampie w/ leg-lock, excessive cum, impregnation, pregnancy, happily-ever-after.

>...

Well, this will probably end as well as throwing a case of Night Train into a group of homeless people's fire-barrel.

>>10665957
You are the damn hero this thread doesn't nearly deserve but is surely improved by

And hey, you're already writing a cute mutual first time story, so you're already in that frame of mind

>>10665957
Were you ever in this thread's ancient /tg/ ancestor? Because I swear your posting style is oddly familiar

>>10665957
Given the suggested scenario, I'd say that whatever the male equivalent of 'light tsundere' is would be appropriate as a tag

>>10654046
>Otherwise they're probably bots.
Bots give about 50 views to a paste and then run out. Anything over that is real people.

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>>10664721
>>10665957 AzimuthFlirt reports.

Unlisted pastebin with one-week expiration for this unedited draft, should anyone be interested in it: https://pastebin.com/SXLVvJFQ

>Title: Plate and Scale
Currently no erotic content. Not even handholding.

Experiment was a colossal failure. In just over two hours worth of work, was unable to produce desired smut. Instead, wrote just over 3600 words of build-up. This despite taking as many shortcuts as I could think of while still trying to ensure reader would be invested in the characters.
>Start immediately after duel, tell story of battle through armor damage and exhaustion instead of having to give a blow-by-blow.
>Have lizard-girl practically (and almost physically) throw herself at him while acting angry that he doesn't seem to want her.
>Minimal worldbuilding. Feudal system recently overtaken by communism, relies on knights as enforcers and protectors. Small knight population since the peasantry and workers are expected to be filled with the "zeal of the working class" and take up arms to serve as meatshields for the knights, also means that knights are able to put down rebellions easily.
>Move quickly to her efforts to seduce him through cooking/cleaning his weaponry.
>Build reader sympathy through revealing her "school of hard knocks" backstory in small chunks, while emphasizing that the knight is a young and headstrong fellow who doesn't trust her or the system he fights for.

Should have started with the smut, then come back and tried to write the build-up in whatever time remained. Ran out of time just when she was about to "get physical" in her efforts to seduce him. Did not proofread or edit, aside from a quick spell-checking pass, so there are likely flaws.

Am considering attempting to write the smut component after a breather and attending to meatspace concerns. Feedback always appreciated.


>>10657129
Preach it, fellow anon.

>>10657129
>tfw can knock out descriptions of sex (or other weird things) just fine, but can't concoct characters to interact with each other at all to put them into that position

I kinda wonder if its a consequence of having experience chiefly with RPing in which I am only responsible for one char.

>>10662697
Your stuff was always pretty great, good to see you're not completely ded. A couple of your fics actually got me reading up on L5R to make more sense of things.

The mod shenanigans have fucking sucked, but /trash/ seems alright. Excessively furry, but otherwise it's kind of reminiscent of /b/ in the early-mid 2000s when people actually made OC and it spun off into boards like /tg/ in the first place. The board being unlinked is probably the best thing about it.

>>10668235
>just over 3600 words of build-up
Get Gud. We're used to over 20000 words of buildup around these parts, you're falling behind.

Seriously though, nobody is going to fault you for adding 'excess' characterization when that's majority stock of the most popular works.

>>10665957
>Likely tags: tomboy(F), tsundre(F), defloration, mutual first-time, vaginal intercourse, creampie w/ leg-lock, excessive cum, impregnation, pregnancy, happily-ever-after
Fuuuuuuck, I can't handle having this many of my buttons pressed at the same time
It ain't even fair

>>10668235
>Am considering attempting to write the smut component after a breather and attending to meatspace concerns.
Would be a good plan
Writing final smut scene and then backfilling interaction there would probably be best way to do this

>>10668235
OR. What you wrote so far is pretty nice to me. Can't wait to see some good ol human on monstergirl action. While I am not good at critique, there are some things that quirk me some.
>line 59
I do believe the mention of ethnic cleansing came out of the blue. Not sure if it fits the setting, considering you already mentioned that she was 'touched' by one before in line 55. Is forced the word I'm looking for? There might be a better way to implement it.

up

Bumpx2

>>10647775
>>10647893
>>10648502
This, but with [spoiler] traps [/spoiler]

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>>10678328

2600 word update, new content at "Pragmatic, but perhaps ill-advised."

Rig Runner:
https://pastebin.com/xmLQAjyG
>no new tags

>>10678328
As in traps enjoying romantic monsterdick, or girls cuddlefucking well-hung monsterboy traps?
Cause those both sound good to me

>>10679352
imagine a monster trap but his species are still fuckhuge like he's got a foot or two on most humans and still acts all girly and wants to be the bottom for a human guy

>>10679398
>tiny guy/girl from XL monster species with 4u-sized human guy, who's still like an inch shorter
Fund it

>>10681612
>Make horse dick lemonade
Kinda kekked a bit that day

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Found an interesting greentext scenario that could make for some good comedy smut involving Pokémon. Was wondering if anyone would like to try out writing a story for it:

>Any stories about fucking a Rosarade but the trainer is horribly allergic to her?
>the Roserade is completely oblivious to her trainer's allergy

>Roserade doesn't know much about humans.
>Thinks all his violent sneezing during sex is part of the human orgasm.
>Random sneezes start making her bothered, which makes her produce more pollen as a side effect.
>One evening Trainer is in pokecenter.
>Another trainer has a Leavanny out.
>Trainer bumps into it and sneezes.
>her face when

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>>10678672
Gah dang I'm liking these two. really enjoying this one snek.

new thread
>>10682787