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>Over many long, long years, Humanity grew. Blossomed and spread.
>They built their palaces of steel and crystal, forged their own paths through the great darkness unknown. They crafted massive constructs that could take to the very heavens beyond to seed new worlds. And yet still despite all this, they found no signs of anything other than themselves.
>Many amongst them asked: "Why is this so? Why have we found none other in this lonely dark? Are we truly alone?"
>This thinking had dictated much of why they decided to Pierce the stars on high, and to take off to scour the cosmos. To venture out to find any sign that would say that "No, We are not alone. There is something here, a purpose, a spark".
>Over time however, the thoughts that theyou would ever find anything that could be considered as 'alive', and as filled with 'purpose' as they were. They became disillusioned with the very notion of there being life across the stars, and decided to expand and build wherever they could, to make themselves the sole rulers of a dead cosmos.
>They thought that they were truly alone in an empty void, bereft of even a singular flame of lice. That there was nothing more to the space beyond.
>Unbeknownst to them, their cries of anguish and despair were heard.
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>>55421521
>It came.
>What it was, few truly know, but It came, and it brought with it the unraveling of all humanity had built.
>Where once stood palaces of glittering crystal, of steel and ivory, nothing remained except channel houses and ash. Where once stood glorious thrones upon which grand-emperors would dictate their laws and truths upon the masses and they would openly proclaim their rule to all, only broken remnants lingered. Where there were once great-courts in which the many minds of man could come and debate amongst themselves as to how to develop and grow their might, only shattered seats of power stood amongst the ruins of once-great power.
>This all-devouring Shadow, this abyssal intelligence swept through the granday empire of Man, and reduced it all to naught more than dust in an instant, paving it's way towards the crown-jewel of it all, Earth.
>The people screamed, the royals and would be god-kings despaired, and even the brightest minds of understanding that they held no answers to this chaos.
>All was as ruin across the stars of Humanity, and Earth found itself now under the gaze of this blighted force, this Infernal process that drank deep of the despair and Sorrows of Mankind.
>Even amongst all the other worlds that It had ocnsumed, the Earth was particularly 'savoured', not utterly destroyed, but enjoyed as how a great-duke or lord would partake themself in a feast, relishing each piece of food they decided to put into their hungry maws. .
>And thus, when the dread Shadow had its fill, It left, leaving a charred waste behind, full of the now desolate works of Mankind, and the Broken souls of the few survivors that remained.
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>>55421521
remove qu
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>>55421902
Hahahaha, no.
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>>55421521
>>55421714
What is this from?
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>>55422318
Don't know where the first image is from, but the second one is from Destiny. Specifically, the Darkness encroaching upon the Sol System
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I didn't like the ending because it just says 'here's a rad backstory but it's really just another post-apoc story"
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You're laying on the purple prose a little too thick, anon. Put down the thesaurus and try instead to use words more sparingly and more precisely (some of yours are a bit off in meaning).
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>>55422318
A land that lost all of its spell checkers in a curiously specific cataclysm.
>>55421521
>>55421714
Sarcasm aside, good enthusiasm.
Paints a decent image of the crumbling remnants of a space faring civilisation and the few survivors struggling in the shadow of an apocalypse.
However it requires a second read through to catch spelling errors and grammar.
If intended to be read aloud to a group, probably fine as is.
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>>55422785
Thanks for the critique Anons. This was really just something I wanted to get out of my mind for quite a bit. I'm pretty glad that you liked despite the glaring grammatical errors and all.
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