OK you autistic faggots, I'm trying to write a story. It's

They say it's best to write from experience, so hire a whore, then offset the cost as a tax write-off for your job.

>>35222115
>guy and the girl are naked in bed and have sucked eachother off

You should skip the sex scene writing for now.

>>35222115
Read other people's stories and take influence from them. Duhh, that's how all great writers do it.

Hire a hooker and tell her about your predicament. She can likely help you gain some experience.

>>35222188
I can't it's crucial to the story. You see the guy in my story is a detective and a virgin who just got assigned a new case. The woman is a sexual predator and seeks out virgins online. So he posts an add and they set up a meet. There she drugs him and takes him back to her place. There she forces him to eat her pussy while she's milking him with her feet. When she cums she drugs him again. When he wakes up he's home and sees a cd in front of him. She taped their scene and is blackmailing him to do stuff. Later in the story she forces him to kill a guy, to suck of an animal, to do nasty things really. In the end the guy kills her and himself.

>>35222115
I know this sounds fucking autistic but read some sort of porn fan fiction. They do write sex scenes the best

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>>35222319
>romcom
>they sucked eachother off
>the guy kills her and himself

good luck pal

>>35222458
what? it's romantic, it's funny
then they get married in hell

>>35222115
If you're writing a romcom, the only people who will read it are women, and that means you're fucked. Writing sex scenes for women is an art. You can't just ask 4chan and expect it to come out okay. You need to understand female psychology and what turns them on. You'd do much better asking Chad than us losers.

>>35222319
is this specifically a porn story? if so, its pretty bad.

if not, its even worse

>>35222543
well if you say so, it just doesn't seem very romantic. You may have some cute and romantic scenes with this storyline but the tone seems more on the funny side. I would consider a romcom something more in the romance side with some funny bits that add to the romance

>>35222115
go to literotica and just copy paste something.

Google SAO 16.5 and then copy the format.

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>>35222319
This sounds weird, idk, but maybe depending on how its written could be salvageable i dont know.

I dont really know much about writing sex scenes even thought i wrote some ones, but id say
-Avoid IKEA erotica (HE PUT HIS PENIS ON HER VAG)
-Set the mood depending on what do you want. Do you want to disgust the reader? Then be very descriptive about noises and smells and all the awkward parts of sex. Considering he is a virgin however, and the situation you describe, my guess is that he is shocked so you might prefer to use small sentences compared with the rest of your book.
-Dont use "his hardness" and "her wetness", its overdone.
-Thats a really weird story though, why would be fuck an animal because of that video? Does he have a small penis or something that could shame him? Most guys i know wouldnt give two single fucks for appearing in a porn video, if anything they would be happy to brag about it with their friends.

>>35222115
Wow that guy has a really big benis way bigger than mine

>>35222938
I'm glad someone said it.

That guy's dick looks like a fuckin' arm. Is it shopped?

>>35222319
that does not sound like a romcom

>>35222115
You don't have any experience in WRITING either

Nobody's interested in your stupid little story

Find a toilet plunger and get to work

>>35223075
That's a terrible insult, Johnny, you haven't seen his writing beyond that post.

>>35222319
Sounds like a poorly constructed personal fantasy. Not at all a romcom 0/10 start again.

>>35222115
>romcom
>sucked eachother off

I'm no expert in romcoms, but I don't think that's how they work.

I would post my story here but it says ASCII not permitted.

>>35223793
google "remove diacritics online"
thank me when you are done

>>35223908
Not him but I always manually typed everything when that happened, u a life saver mayne

>>35222135
Best advice in thread

All women secretly want to treated like whores though few actually want to act on it. Fucking a whore is how all women want to be fucked.

I took off my shirt quickly, exposing my hairy chest (thanking God I had my back waxed before we left) and muscular frame. My pants were tight and my bulge was pushing on the zipper, quickly I removed them as well. My boxer briefs were strained against my erection. While not a long man at 6 1/2 inches, Sarah's eyes grew ravenous as she saw how aroused I was.

Finally, I made my way to Sarah and dropped to my knees at the foot of the bed and grabbed roughly at her shorts. I removed both the shorts and her panties at once with a lift of her hips. Sarah's legs were toned, with thick thighs leading to her wide hips. Her pubic area was trimmed, but not shaven. I slowly moved up her calves, to knees and thighs; kissing her all the way to the top. Sarah spread her legs and invited me in, back arching slightly as my mouth found her lips. I wanted to go slowly, but she was so wet already. Her lips were engorged with bl**d showing how aroused she was. I licked from the bottom of her opening to the top, feeling her pulse through her clitoris drove me crazy. She tasted so sweet, the smells of her wetness overwhelming me.

Here's me, writing from experience

>I thought it was supposed to be hard.

>>35222115
>sucked eachother off
>romcom
That sounds oddly graphic for a romantic comedy but w/e

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>>35224621
She looked at him with disgust, the coldness in her eyes making him feel like a slug under her shoe. Then she went off and fucked Chad like they all do in the end.

>>35224354
your moms a fucking whore