I'm writing what I hope to be a 600+page sprawling sci-fi

>600 page
>Epic

0/10. Please try harder.

>>135434424
Faggot.

>>135434424
>Raoul
>Denton
How original
Also this >>135434482

Planet faggot. He goes to planet faggot and turns it into a giant night club, he then renames the planet to 'pulse' and then thr captain gets drunk and crashes his giant biggest galaxy spaceship into a rock but everybody survives and then donald trump reveals his nipples and the captain buttons up trumps suit and says "whoopsie, your nippleys are outsie" and then a giant pigeon bigger than the captains space ship squaks louder than anything in the universe and that makes the captain go deff and then the captain shrinks the pigeon by 00.01% and he thinks thats good but its not a major difference nobody really sees but, captain is a mad man and he gets old and retires from old age then the peace is restored finally when the captain realises that controlling wpace is to big a job for one captain so h3 clon3s his biggest giantess sgip in the galaxy infinite times and now the universe has no room cause too many ships

>>135434424
>I'm here looking for ideas for planets he can visit
mafia planet, american indian planet, cowboy planet, ancient rome planet

>>135434424
Nonono start with something liberal-ish with strong female role models, brave trans, heroic saintly blacks etc. Then once it's a success make the follow up red pilled as fuck and kill of all the tumblr favourites.

>>135434424
I want to read your progress on this, where is your website?

>>135434424

Talk about planets that failed like the degenerate ones

>>135434424
Planets with different governing systems you can critique/laud
>communist
>socialist
>anarchist
>theocratic of different stripes
>pure democracy
>republic
>fascist etc
Then breakdown by morals and mix match with government to create friction and conflict. You can have for example Neo Christian theocrats struggling against a marxist regime and the captain has to decide to take sides/fuck off while weighing the necessity of having the planet back the human efforts against the aliens. You could create interesting tension if you can create situations in which the captain must choose between pragmatism and his own desires for idealistic outcomes. There's plenty of grist for the mill really.

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>>135434424
>The secret theme of the book is about multiculturalism being a scourge that wants to destroy humanity and Raoul is a Human Supremacist, (read: White supremacist) and would do anything to protect humanity from other races


You are retarded, I'm literally speechless in front of your severe mental retardation. You've chosen a bad genre if you wanted to go politically incorrect.

>>135434424


If you want to write a 600 page sprawling sci fi epic, then you need some time travel where someone goes back to help Hitler.

Obviously.

Then you can show how good life was in the High Castle scenario.

Failing that just have a race of aliens with enormous noses who always whine and bitch about how oppressed they are.

>>135434424

>600 pages

C R I N G E

>>135434424
Just use as many penis-in-vagina metaphors as you can. Feminists will bitch non-stop but won't be able to stop reading.

>>135434424
>a Muslim Planet
>Kek
>an all female planet
>Muh feminism
>Muh men are all ahnimals

KYS, also, your story sounds like derivative shit

>>135437988
And don't forget to make it rapey.

>>135434424
If you are serious and and I hope you are, where can we get updates on your project? Do you have a blog? A website?

>>135434424

>Raoul

Don't like it.

Make it so the book starts off liberal and pollitically correct and then progress it outlining all the flaws with progressive democratic societies. Eventually have the characters rediscover the beauty and nature of natures true facism.

Ultra capitalist world where the many act like puppeteers, metaphor for jews

>>135434424
add some slut shaming and anti alien mixing. Raoul should shave heads of women sucking the aliens horse cocks

>>135435834
captain planet

Sounds fucking terrible.

The whole reason why Jews were able to brainwash millions was because they were SUBTLE, you dumb shit.

Not...
>Let's have a planet of Nazis XD

If you want people to swallow the propaganda you're pushing, it needs to be subconscious and subliminal.

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>>135434424
>the most politically incorrect, offensive, triggering book possible
That's cute. I like you. I may even keep you, later...

The muslim planet has to get destroyed at some point.

>>135438402
Multiculturalism is inevitable. Humanity will be unified at some point in the future and it will be by an an alpha Conqueror who will proclaim all humans to be equal, except for him at the top. The human dominion will be composed of all humans in the galaxy and thus there can't be any discrimination based on race.

Thus the Human Galactic Empire will be born and instead of whitey vs nigger, it will be human vs alien. Funny how the conservative human supremacist of the future is an extremist version of liberals today with all the globalist/multiculturalism shit.

So have you read Starship Troopers or no? Basically the same thing. I'd read that and watch Legend of the Galactic Heroes. Then you can have fun writing the first ten pages and subsequently giving up.

>>135434424
>Raoul Denton's job is to go from planet to planet checking in on everyone

So no pretence whatsoever. No disease outbreak, no natural disaster, no treaty to negotiate, no nearby phenomena to study.

>hi I am Raoul
>"what brings you here captain?"
>just checkin' in

Great novel, put me down for preorder.

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>>135434424

>I'm here looking for ideas for planets he can visit

Hollowed out asteroid planet.

Planet Hollywood. A bunch of hypocritical self-serving assholes who's every word is a complete distortion of the truth. They are greedy and rude, and have a galaxy-wide pedophile ring that recruits from all the other planets. Everyone knows they're assholes but they have they have mind-control technology that works by making cocks and vaginas tingle.

>>135438720
This.
Needs a Ted Turner world.

>>135434424
Oh you have to have a pedo planet and a trans planet

>>135434424
Dude, best of luck with that I'm doing something similar with fantasy.

>>135438176
Have a Stronk Womyn heroine who is sassy and kick-ass and makin' her mark in a man's world.

Then the hero kidnaps her and rapes the crap out of her for 200 pages thereby turning her into a docile submissive tradwife.

Planet Michael Moore. A man so fat that he's his own planet floating in space. He communicates by blowing shit out if his own ass. He owns have the land in the nearest star system but is always going on about how the peasants need to revolt. He hopes they do so he can defeat them and eat the prisoners and brainwash the children.

>>135435284
first day pre order.

>>135440139
that was done already by Stanisław Lem. It's called Solaris.

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>>135434424
Idea:
The fleet decides to invade a world which seems like a threat to humanity due to its strategic position and relative intelligence of the natives.
They draft men into the infantry to make sure every last alien on the planet is genocided properly.
However they cannot fathom the way of thinking of the alien since it's too different from them. They are unpredictable and fight to the last breath.
Earth loses.
The end

>>135434424
Nice viral, I'll buy your book (in spirit)

>>135437067
>Humans side with the communist planet
>Communist planet turns out to be kikes

Pro tip: Read and understand Gulliver's travels first before you adapt it to space. Also read the Odyssey but make sure you have a good translation.

>>135434424
have a black woman character be the cause of a huge engine malfunction and a bunch of people die

>>135434424
Have Earth be a black planet where the niggers destroyed all the technology after everyone else left in fear.

>>135440465
And she's only on board because of an affirmative action program

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You're all being very mean to OP, at least he has a hobby besides wanking and torturing animals.

OP, don't be subtle. Self publish an e-book and you can write what you want.

eg: Hitler is resurrected by the dying white race in 8814AD, and leads a campaign of extermination against a degenerate empire of faggotry, personally kills hundreds of space muslims and virus bombs the planet of the Jews. Have a sub plot involving a beta uprising on Beta Uprizz'ingh.

>>135434424
it might work if it was done by someone with talent

>>135434424

Hey OP, have you been to reddit.com/r/hfy ?
HFY> Humanity fuck yeah, a sub spinoff from i think it's vidya threads or whatever. will serve as good inspiration for you.

>>135434424
>raoul
>white supremacist

Nope

>600 page
>epic

Nigger that better be per chapter

>>135440225
How high are you to think that's the same as Solaris?

>>135434424
theres a new pc vidya game coming out Battlestar Galactic check it out lads

>>135440955
The book is about the planet being a sentient being. I don't know what your shitty movie is about.

>>135434424
>Not naming his ship ss.niggerkiller.

>Not naming the captain adolf "kikeslayer" garrison

>Not having him fight for the white ethnoplanet on behalf of president moon man.

its like youre not even trying. subtley is for faggots.

>>135439459

That would be an asteroid, not a planet

>>135441125
Foundation also has a senient planet in it. Ever hear of Foundation?

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>>135434424
Liberals don't read.

Conservative science fiction is too small of a niche for a publisher to care.

You are wasting your time. But if you want it to be triggering, have a very punishing law forbidding companies from making grandiose claims on man-rated rockets. Call it Musk's Law and exposit that it resulted from SpaceX killing every crew it ever tried to send to space until they were shut down and musk was killed by a mob. FTL is not and cannot be invented, etc etc.

>>135441459
Yeah

YOU BETTER POST A LINK TO WHERE WE CAN BUY YOUR BOOK NIGGA

>>135434424
>>135441248

this.

moon must be controlled by moon man who acts as the main characters boss

>>135441459
Sure you're not thinking of Nemesis? Or are you talking about the weird gaia planet the second foundation had?

>>135441903
Exactly, faggot.

>>135434424

An American mulatto planet.

>>135435834
The most triggering one would be a country with a advanced white civilization who has a non interventionist policy for space africa and the africans are still in mud huts and serve as reality tv entertainment.

>>135442056
The polack seems to think that any use of the concept of a sentient planet is a violation of Polish literary trademarks or something. I'm trying to educate him that you can actually use similar concepts in different ways. It's a tough slog as he seems a bit dense.

>>135434424
>multiculturalism is bad
>in the end all cultures unite to fight the bad guy anyway

>>135442176
I said that I heard about it, not that I acknowledge that you're right. Also how come you make so many grammar mistakes, yet you have murrican flag? "senient"? "ever hear"? Come on, are you actually retarded?

Don't waste your time and creative energy on a screed.

>>135434424
>Raoul Denton
Spics in space wew lawd

>>135442582
Not at all. I just said that your concept isn't original in a playful way, that you took way too seriously. Also Solaris is a great book. I wholeheartedly recommend it.

>>135442848
No concept is original.

The closest the polish got to an original idea was putting screen doors on their submarines.

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>>135434424
>alien force that wants to overthrow Humanity's rule over the galaxy, sever races, all banded together, called "The Many"

Gurren Lagann pulled that off way better than what you are getting at.

>>135443051
Gurren Lagann is meant to keep japanese children from killing themselves.

Nothing more.

>>135434424
Triggering? All you have to do is post about the facts that the unacknowledged special access programs have.
Sci-fi is shit.

>>135435284
Exquisite

>>135437581
thanks leaf for not hiding your flag, so i can call you a fucking leaf

>>135434424
Gas the xenos, space war now!

change his name goddamn trying to pronounce raoul in my head makes my aids tingle.

make a heterosexual, white male only planet. women exist only for slavery and while "vintage sex" still exists in the form of violent rape, the norm is for men to be happily married to their AI robowives

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>>135434424
There should be a planet like Kamino that is entirely populated with homosexuals. With no females to produce offspring, they have independently developed advanced cloning technology to create new generations of fags. They have a massive clone army full of asexuals (They were once fags, but were castrated so they wouldn't have gay orgies on the battlefield). The fags have strict laws on gay sex and other faggotry so that the planet doesn't fall to complete degeneracy, which makes the entire civilian population incredibly sexually frustrated. There is no law against dildos, but good, cheap dildos are near- impossible to make as most of the silicates on the planet are trapped under the deep ocean.

Raoul visits this planet in order to join forces with the fags, as their massive clone army would give humanity an edge in the imminent war. However, he is forced to leave the planet after the planet's representatives try to rape him in the ass. He eventually strikes a deal with the fags requesting the full power of their military in exchange for high-quality dildos.

>>135434424
Bio-retributive surgery, but not my idea, Stephen A Donaldson

>>135434424
This sounds like space fantasy and not science fiction.

>>135434424
Robert Bevan already does it better in his fantasy series. For example, one of his title's is "Nagga, Please".

>>135444389
* The Gap series

>>135434424
If you want to be genuinely edgy try portray child pedos in a sympathetic light. Worked with Lolita.

>>135434424
Subtlety? Allegory? Nigger if you want to make an edgy sci fi go all out, I have my own sci fi story I'm working on of intelligent super cyber bears on a distant dying former white colony who clone a white human, the first of his divine race in centuries, who heroes' journeys across the savage shitskin galaxy ethnic cleansing planets with secret resurrected super-weapons until he boss battles the capital of kikedom on planet zion (formerly earth)

>>135434424

> 1 post by this ID

SAGE
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also, read "Ghost" by John Ringo. Imagine if Tom Clancy browsed /pol/ and was 75% redpilled

>>135444897
I think we should all work on writing right-wing sci fi stories, shitty or not, just to get the ball rolling on fueling the rise of natsocscifi.

You got to have a futurist commie planet where they have everything they need. They reached a point of technology where all their needs could be met by automation. Then they killed off 80% of the population they considered uncivilised. No money is required. Don't have to work but everyone is listless and feels something is missing. The IQ has fallen massively due to breeding and diversity programs concentrating only on external features. Genetically they are now very similar. The only people now having kids are the least capable of making sensible life choices. No point choosing productive partners any more, just choose the best looking one who doesn't care about contraception as he doesn't want anything to do with bringing up a child anyway. The collapse comes due to disease sweeping through the homogeneous population. Then no one is capable of repairing the technology they have after a few generations and they no longer advance. It's a utopia where no one has any idea they are about to die and it's no ones job to stop it. Perfect committee based relinquishment of responsibility on a planetary scale.

>>135444967
I liked his Legend of the Aldenata series—especially the nazi tankers versus aliens entry.

I can't think of anything other than in the future there are no niggers, Jews, or women, so everyone pretty much gets along. Maybe make it about conflict with a space (((trade federation))). Story resolves with them being eliminated systematically.

>>135434424

>Planet Kangz
Retarded black supremacist planet, they take direct credit for every good thing that the humans ever did. Planet wide Detroit/Chicago levels of violence.

>Planet Wypipo
Retarded white supremacist planet, literally non-whites on the entire planet. Was peaceful for a time, until arrogant Aryans decided that brunettes and gingers were inferior. Now brunettes and gingers are basically niggers. The Aryans on this planet also claim direct credit for everything good that the humans ever did. No crime because the Aryans have written the laws so that they are never at fault, brunettes and gingers who break the law are disciplined by their owners

>New Australia
Penal colony on a harsh, barely hospitable planet. The worst of the worst prisoners are left to fend for themselves here. There are no guards, no contact with any other planet, and no chance of escape. Over many generations the inhabitants have degenerated into tribes that do nothing except rape and murder each other. Death cults are prevalent, each with their own bloodletting festivals featuring multitudes of human sacrifices

>Fagtopia
The planet became deserted after one generation.

>>135446668

*no non-whites on the entire planet.

>>135435284
Hitting the bottle before 6pm. Impressive for a leaf.

Planet MGTOW only sausage and sex bots.

>>135435895
this

>>135442306
Please tell me they send robot animals to fuck with the mud people.

Planet democrat, a hive planet of robots controlled by the bottled brain of hillary clinton, the premise being that it plays other planets off themselves, launching false flags planting seeds of distrust.

Pizza Planet

It's where an army of John Podesta clones rape little boy anus to the somg crawling in my skin by linkin park in a giant ritual designed to weaponized the boys into secret "refugees" who really rape other boys on other planets with the end goal of galaxy wide child buttrape assimilation

It's like the borg

>>135434424
Normie planet

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>>135434424
>Raul

>>135434424
ID CokeHead

Indeed you are.

>>135434424
>coKCAheD
that ID lel

>>135434424
>Raoul
>Not Aryan Smith

Any right-wing scifi books recommendations /pol/?

Name of book?

The story is pretty good. Just a damn shame you want to littler it with hidden-agenda trash.

Just write the story and use your creativity, but don't write it with the frame of mind that you want to sell some kind of world view; it will only become a frayed work of endless possibilities.

You don't wanna be that faggot, right?

>>135449657
John Carter of Mars.

>>135449672
Fuck Muslim & Jew Faggots: Space Wars

???

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>>135449657

>>135434424
>Doesn't have writing talent
>Tries to make it as offensive as possible to cover it up

Senpai, controversial and offensive writing isn't there for funnies. There is usually a deeper issue to warrant it; usually with well thought analogies and relevance to the mainstream public. Your "secret theme" isn't as deep or relevant as you'd think.

>>135437581 is right. Science fiction has always been forward thinking, especially when it came to race and politics. Ender's Game, Star Wars, Planet of the Apes, District 9, etc. are all cornerstones of science fiction in general and all dealt with racial and political themes. Some even way before their time. Star Trek wasn't about Kirk fucking a bunch of women; a retard would be able to see that easily.

You're "book" will be panned in a heartbeat, for good reason.

>>135434424
I actually want to read this.

How many planets do you want to include, and how diverse? There should be different kinds of muslim planets (shiite, wahabbi etc) and different black planets (African Neger, Neger Americanus, etc). You can even call the black species Nigers, like the fucking country, and no one call you racist for it because Niger is an actual country.

>>135434424
Make a planet full of weebs. Just do it.

>>135450193
You can even call the black species Nigers, like the fucking country, and no one call you racist for it because Niger is an actual country.

Ya man, because like nobody will see through that, right brah?

>>135447705
He's probably a native

>>135442030
Please do this

"The MoonMan has ordered full orbital bombardment of planet frijoles"

>>135434424
*yawn*

I was bored by the second sentance. Try to be more creative and fluid with your ideas

I tried to write a book recently. Opened an Amazon account and everything. Got to page 100 on the rough draft and got writers block.

My advice to you on writing red pilled stories is to learn to build the story in such a way that it makes the reader believe in the philosophy by the end. People like mystery even when they don't believe it. Asking uncomfortable questions by placing the characters in positions where exercising a healthy amount of controversy will lead to the expected results. Tease the reader into seeing that the philosophy is correct and never go full retard at the turn of the book. Symbolism is good for that.

>>135450350
The point is they will, but they can't call shit because niger is a fucking country, and you can say "in 2200, the African nation of Niger conquered half of the African continent, so when a new planet was named for them it was called Niger, and its people called the Nigers".

>>135450549
>Doesn't know Nigerien is what they call people from Niger

Whatever you say, bro. Makes $100% sense.

>>135440409
Underrated. Two stories essential to a well thought out scifi novel.

>>135450754
FUk u fag, naming changes over generations n shit, Nigers. You're a fucking Niger. I don't want to play anymore I'm leaving.

>>135450965
Make sure to drink your milk, Tommy.

>>135434482
fpbp

>>135434424
I'm on board if the only way to steer your starship is with your erect cock, thusly, women cannot be captains, but they can pilot smaller craft, with "joysticks"

>>135437067
Make an entire solar sytem thats perpetually in a race war, with a planet specifically full of savage blacks and another with weak whites, each side using tan and yellow folks to labor on war weapons

>>135439210
Don't listen to this guy^
Unless we develop a method to enforce laws using faster than light travel, tons of various cultures will spawn, some will even self-destruct or implode
>feminist fisting planet dies off because the holy bottle of semen supplying their planet was supplied by 10 ronery suicidal businessmen from Nihongo 5

>>135439728
^^^^ Make pedo planet populated with mostly filthy rich politicians and visiting merchants
Trans planet is where you go to have your genes juggled and set off to start new planet colonies, the Trappist System should be very isolated, but full of radio and laser communications, as the populations as they're all on GalacTumblr
Also, populations... a galactic civ will have trillions of people, so for effect, you should have PedoBear Prime be knee deep in children with like maybe just a million elderly freaks populating the planet

>>135440262
avoid actual space battles if you're writing a triggering story, nobody wants anything too deep

>>135434482
>>135437941
I write sometimes.
See if you can squeeze 20 pages out of this story.
Then see if you can AT LEAST turn each of those 20 into more pages.
No good book is over 200 pages (Nobody wants to read Gullivers Travels In Space)

Your book sounds like Gullivers Travels

>I'm writing what I hope to be a 600+page sprawling sci-fi epic, and I want it to be the most politically incorrect, offensive, triggering book possible

good luck getting your book to see the light of day.

>>135442265
Elysium?

>>135434424
You need a non military organization called the "Non Human Protection Front," which somehow managed to get universal laws passed among human government. It forces people to grant them trade routes, money, and supplies, even independent or freelance captains of small cargo vessels and medical groups.

Have the captain fall under scrutiny from the "lawmakers" when he vaporizes people claiming to be delivering on behalf of the NHPF, fucks a doctor into abandoning the NHPF, and have that doctor become the ship medic that refuses to treat future NHPF employees.

You *need* to mention about all the human rights and supply corruption at the NHPF, and how glad the doctor was she got back into human only healing and genetic alteration, with statements on how blonde hair was directly correlated with intellect and blue eyes with better physical prowess.

She needs to be rescued from an isolated desert planet that is in the middle of using small scale nuclear weapons to fucking destroy each other over a homebrewed religion, and the only reason anyone gave a shit was because they have a shitload of fuel for starships.

>>135451167
FTL travel is impossible thus not an issue.

>>135434424
Going to have to be at least 3000 pages.

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>>135434424
>600 pages
>epic

I consider 1478 pages light reading.

>>135451167
I meant to say turn 10 pages into 200 pages

Also, I've already rationaled out why you steer a starship with your cock: In the book Dune, you need Spice to get high and "probe" forward in space and time to avoid collisions with rocks planets and stars on your faster-than-light journey. Don't wanna smack into a star...

So, what's a better tool to "probe the depths of space" than the most sensitive part of the human body? The reason women can't pilot ships? Try probing deep into something with a clitoris

>>135434424
A planet officialy ruled by "democracy", but in reality ruled by a financial Oligarchy who owns 90% of the stuff, but nobody on the planet never heard of them, as their "media" never talk about them, so they cant revolt against someone they dont know.

Elected "leaders" are just bureucrauts loyal to the Oligarchy, so in the rare case of a revolt they are the one taking all the hate, and the Oligarchy can just replace them with new ones, pushed by the media as "democratic revolutionaries". This happen cyclicaly to give the population the illusion that they can change the goverment.

Raoul must decide to either work with the Oligarchy, who would easily manipulate the planet to obey to him, but under their condition, or try to overtrow them by redpilling the entire planet against their disonest media, thus starting a civil war.

>>135434424
You are a fag and you are not going to write shit all.
Much less have it published.

Fuck off.

>>135434424
(((The Many)))??

>>135434424
>theres a muslim planet, a nazi planet, an all female planet,
>theres also a jungle planet, a desert planet, an ice planet

that's just lazy imagination. You should scale it down to a single planet and develop the universe and back story. And also be a good writer

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>>135451450
Alrighty, but is this universe gonna be densely populated; enough to warrant a "galactic police"?
What keeps everyon from splitting off, or becoming so degenerate that PedoBear Prime doesn't get the Space V&
Kinda ruins the fun if the galacic popo show up after the dyke you fisted changes her mind about the orgasm she had and gets you indicted for space rape

>>135434424
make sure they visit Planet Lesbodian
https://youtu.be/D-5X1VTSmck

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I was merely a child when i saw the Sol Defence fleet, the whispers and rumors of children and adults alike, we were a mere independant farming world with only 2 billion, it took us over a month to reach Sol with our civilian ships, while they said Sol ships could reach almost any star system within hours.

The teachers taught us that Sol Sector were power hungry and dangerous and the only reason they dont attack us was because we are human too and they have bigger fish to fry. i almost belived them but part of me wanted to see these invincible dreadnaughts and fleets that blacken the skies.


Then it happened, a incursion of alien invaders, infringing on the outer colonies.
Our Planetary shields were outdated and basic, it wouldent keep them out for long, and our power grid was failing, so our leaders did the only thing they could, an action that they swore on their pride as Indepedants they would never do, but times were desperate, it was that or two billion dead or worse, enslaved.

They called for help. "Hawking Protocol" was what it was called, the act of any Human colony calling on the aid of Sol Sectors military might for assistance in the face any alien threat, established to protect independant colonies from harm while maintaining their sovereignity. but many who used this aid fell under the banner of the Sol Sector soon after.

But i understood why that day.

they waited in hope, that the sheilds would hold long enough.
then in rightous fury, they arrived.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iNcNOMiSQ5I

the first blast tore right through the main flagship, lighting up the sky in the middle of the day, those on the nightside of the planet said the sky turned into fire, the Sol fleet tore into the Alien ships, ripping them apart, outclassing them in size, speed and power and numbers. it was a slaughter. The remaining ships retreated through FTL, we were safe.

On that day i became a Human supremacist.

>>135451377
>>135434424

The NHPF influence rises over the course of the story. The tension between him and his corrupt government rises. However, his crew is almost entirely red-pilled and supremacist, thus stands behind him.

On the captains search for allies, he takes course to the nigger's planet. The nigger's planet is a big, resourceful planet in a position of high strategic importance. He seeks to bind them more tently to the human confederation, at sight of the "Manys" new rise.

However, upon arrival, the communication is chaotic, since the contacts dont follow the general human protocol. Furthermore, there is no global-nigger-government to be found, but many tiny governments, and even trolls and degenerates, using military frequencies for everyday chat, thus disturbing the communication.

The crew lands on a vast landscape of abandoned farmland, and quickly begin cropping in case they had to stay longer. The land is very furtile and easy to crop.

The humans slowly realized that since the 2000 years of the earths race expansion, the vast majority of the negro-race fell back into a quasi post-apocalyptic state, given the new freedom and independence from the aryan race.

Thus, as the captain bitterly realizes, is the enormous population of Niggerplanet of no or potentially even negative use for the human cause. Sadly, the NHPF doesnt give him free hand for the "immoral" plans he made for the nigs.

It is discovered that a sneaky, influential, and ambitious subrace of the "many", infiltrates the degenerate niggerplanet, and it is forseeable, that this development the nigrace has no capability of perceiving nor even fending off, could cause severe damage or even death to the human race on longterm.

The captain must make a decision. Will he finally disobey his government and execute his secret plans in order to save humanity, or will he obey and watch, while his civilization dies from the inside?

>>135434424

>The arc of the story is Raoul uniting all of humanity in one giant battle against the scourge of every other race trying to over throw them.

>theres a muslim planet, a nazi planet, an all female planet,

so nazis and muslims put aside their petty differences and work together hand in hand? sounds hella f*cking epic

>>135434424
>Raul Denton
Please an hero, anon. Please.

>>135451690
What the fuck did i just read

I just feel the need to mention you have better tactile sens on your hands and fingers then your dick

>>135434424
Just make sure it's actually well written and compelling unlike that pettibone turdpile

page one
Gamma ray burst
destroys Muzz planet
a lone survivor
believes he must be the true prophet
travels to White(best) planet for help
long journey
no wee girls to rape
crashes into moon like an inbred paki cunt

>>135454158


The crew has contact to another race of "the many", ill call them rabbits for now. It is a reptiloid, fierce and very martial one, very powerful, but intellectually occupied by the "sneaky, infiltrating"-race that is active on the niggerplanet atm. This race originally had the plan to wipe the niggers from the face of this furtile planet (Most of their plans they have for their enemies look like this). However, the sneaky race, I'll call them "shlohim" for now, convinced them to wait. (The shlohim dont want the rabbits to gain anymore strength by inhabiting this planet. The shlohims plan is to make the niggers a slaverace for their own.) The crew can convince a high-Tier rabbit-commander tho, in a sneaky move of their own, to cleanse the planet. Facing literally no defense, as the nigs abandoned space-travelling technology for ~1500 years, is is a Blitzkrieg-like hazard that wipes out most of the nigs, before the shlohim could even intervene.

>>135434424
>job is to go from planet to planet checking in on everyone

>first he checks on the planet Loo of Indian culture. He cannot establish the contact because Indian operators keep asking if he has hot girls on board and offers to upgrade his Poocrasoft subscription, so he lands on the planet but as soon as the airlock opens the toxic fumes rush in and kill half his crew and they have to evacuate. He spins up the warp jump as the locals angrily send transmissions about how defecating in the open is natural and their planet will become galactic superpower in 20 years.

>he then goes to Chinese planet, just to find out that the entire population went extinct because they exterminated all birds and boiled all terrestrial mammals alive and the entire ecosphere collapsed, so they starved and couldn't escape the planet or call for help, cause warp drives and comm. arrays were made in China

>He then goes to a Russian planet and finds out they have annexed the closest moon and started to build the bridge to it and it collapsed, fell, together with the moon, and caused a nuclear winter with -100c temperatures on the surface, but everybody is all right, so he goes to the next

>he then lands on the Muslim planet but it was captured by a Jihadist militia. They tried to board and destroy his ship, saying that space travel is Haram, but he managed to push them back losing another half of the remaining crew and killing quarter of the planet's population

>he then retreats to the Western part of the galaxy, but French, British, German, Nordic and Italian planets deny him entry, saying his crew is not diverse enough and the heterosexuality of some members of it could offend the inhabitants

>he then sets sails to the Land of the Free, the original Earth that is now inhabited by Americans, just to find out that there's a force wall around it and he cannot enter, cause he's a fucking Raoul and spics are not allowed. He rages and beheads the rest of his crew with a chainsaw.

>>135434424
if your story ever comes to a point where captain has to fight the muslim planet he should make it rain pigblood and bacon through some advanced technology

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>>135441248

Write it!

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>>135434424
Planet Turkey

>>135456991
That happened already in starship troopers. Turks were the antagonists.

>>135434424
Ill make a no-budget game adaptation to your story for the illiterate.

>>135434424
This sounds awfully derivative.
>Raoul Denton
>The Many
I think you should just neck yourself, especially if you're a Human Supremacist as well.

Autism : the thread.

>>135434424
>Raoul
Stopped reading there. Call him Archer, and he need to be trans. That's the bottom line of redpilledness.

This book sounds liek the gayest gayfarts in this galaxy.

Nigger the sentence construction in this post is abhorrent. How the fuck do you expect to write a book?

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>>135437581
Seriously. Someone who can write needs to red-pill women by writing subversive romance pulp sold at the supermarket.

Everyone has space aids from catching the space-gay-syndrome.

Have a space religion called space-Islam where everyone prays toward the Milky Way and fucks space goats.

Have a scientific study by space scientists proving ovaries decrease IQ

Make the annihilation of Space Moslems, Space Gays, and women in any role other than child bearing be central to saving the galaxy

Plot twist reveal at the end: Space Shekle Merchants are responsible for the proliferation of space aids, space Islam, and space feminism and the whole mission was set up by them in the first place to remove suspicion because they never expected you to Make Space Great Again.

>>135434424
Sounds boring.