And when I look into your pale goblin eyes I see the reflection

>>74378501
It really just depends on how you deliver them. just written out like this, they're ass

>>74378501
Usually lyrics are hard to judge without the musical context. Those seem like they would be ok over some decent music, but it is FAR from a Leonard Cohen level, who's lyrics can read like beautiful poetry even without the musical accompaniment

get rid of the repetitions of animal and the oh babys please
please for the love of god
you can do better

needs more biblical references

>>74378630
Good call

Op here back with more lyrics


Fuck god the wall making cumbag old fart

And fuck the people who pray to the child molesting senile old fart priest


And fuck Jesus Christ and fuck the religious zealots and fuck the Christmas worshiping consumer hungry pigs

And fuck you

And fuck me

And fuck you

And fuck me


This is gonna be the first single off my new record kinda a hard rock jam track

>>74378725
It's not good bud. Too much repetition. Too hamfistes. Too tryhard. I wouldn't be surprised if you wrote that on the spot

>>74378501
OH BABY A TRIPLE

Op here again. How about this:

Oh man oh baby

Your pale sweet eyes reflect our mutual lost innocence

Oh baby

As you suck my dick and swallow the semen then I suck your moms dick

Oh Abby

Fuck trump, I shit on him... Yeah

Fuck you