What do you think of this song I made? https://clyp.it/hpag

It's a really simple song, there's really not much appeal compositionally, and while your voice is quite OK you're forcing this accent which makes it sound obnoxious, so there's no appeal there either really. You've written a functional but completely banal piece of music. There's no excitement and there's no interest. Back to the drawing board I'd say, it's really nothing special. Keep at it.

>>71218526
I usually make my production a bit more extravagant, but this time I stripped it down to put the focus on the songwriting. Did that not work? I think the words should be the main focus of the song

Bumping for more feedback hopefully

>>71220128
i don't feel like listening bro

>>71220361
>>71220128
just listened to it. it's fucking meh breh

>>71220384
O well thanks for listening anyways

i love penis

It sounds like a B-side Pink Floyd song lmfao

I mean, its not bad, but you should try to find a bit more original approach. Though I bet you'd get all the chicks with this

>>71220581
hahah nice my dude

Bumping again

>>71219763
Post extravagant example

>>71221167
https://samweinberg3.bandcamp.com/album/call-it-anything

Here's an album I made. The chorus of In July is pretty extravagant. So are the effects on My Blue Eyed Girl. You can pretty much hear it throughout the entire album except for a few tracks

>>71220642
it really does lol

Imagine roger waters singing this

>>71220642
this, and i don't personally like that kind of PF, but if you're into it then i guess this song is alright. Would definitely get hipster girls wet af

>>71218526
This.

Also, the song goes nowhere. It's the same thing all throughout in terms of energy. There's no build or release or recognizable climax. It's like a song that a minor character would die to on criminal minds.

>>71218319
HAHAHAHAHAGAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

it's fucking dogshit. Try & write something interesting

>>71221464
>would definitely get hipster girls wet af
That's all I could ever hope for desu

>>71221585
>It's like a song that a minor character would die to on criminal minds.
Ok that's aa pretty funny observation ngl