Rate my lyrics 1-10. I'm trying to become a rapper, I think

6/10. Decent, but it sounds inspired and it doesnt sync well together
Here's a tip; make sure the syllables in a rhyme scene match. Like; if line 1 has 10 syllables in it, make sure line 2 does as well.
Last line is kinda clever, but doesnt rhyme well. You can get away with it if you accent it all well though.

>>68334174
Listen up hoe
I don't even know
I spent four figures on a line of blow
I don't give a fuck
You telling me my shits a six?
Turn that six upside down you bitch
You don't wanna fuck with me
I'm the best rapper on this board.
I can rap however I want and it'll always be fire you whore.

>>68334311
Look man, talk big talk for such a fucking little man
Keep acting like a rock and ill blow your flows up like Pakistan
Im not turning shit boy, you asked for my opinion
If you cant stand the heat, fuck outta this kitchen
Why would you make a drug reference in a retaliation rap?
You could use that space for more insulting crap
Why not fuck with you? This shit is Anonymous
Ill track your ip and shank your ass like Euronymous.
Youre a serf, im a king. You're the shit? Nah youre clean.
Keep talking shit and ill falcon punch your ass and remove your spleen
Rock to your head, gonna give your ass a stitch
Only turning upside down is what im doing to your bitch

>bob wire

>>68334311

You're callin this nigga whore
But you're a bore like Eeyore
reading your rhymes are a chore
except your shit don't rhyme
to call it rap would be a crime
go back to smoking dimes
you got no heart and no spark
your shit will always be a grind

My brain need the ganja
When i smoke i'm just reloading my weapon
Then leave the microphone covered, im fly, Emami my witness
I'm out for presidents to represent me, its so mysterious
I'm in and out of bitches, they never hear from the kid again
Foul mouth my thoughts just tend to speak loud
My mama proud of me, doing 10 years up in that harris county jail
Apologize in advance, cause when i'm at your function, ima be wilding out, Nike air force one printals on couch
Always had a happy foot up on the gas yo
Im in my sisters dead end Honda plotting on a Jaguar
Just getting older and colder
Sometimes the stress can control me
Sometimes my money not flowing like the vendon that she broke
Then i relax, laid back, sipping grapes from the glass
Conversing with my brother on how times keep flying so fast
He struggle finding work
Im just tryna lead by example
I tell him please be persistant, i say if i stay consistant
I get that 80s mercedes
Get you a 80s mercedes

>>68334395
Nothing you say makes any sense.
I don't think you understand my skill or wits.
Why don't you bow down to me instead of getting pissed.
You think you can teach me how to rap? Well I'll teach you how to diss.
GTFO with than internet tough guy shit.
I'm too tired to finish this diss
But I'll still give you an 8 bar.
Stop arguing with me now, you won't go far.

Wow you thought you could diss me, just leave I'm the best rapper on this board.

>>68334476

How can I teach you to rap
When you can't even read
There's steps to this shit
Keep your day job and dont breed

>>68334476
Bitch, youre not shit, you got no wits.
Youre just a stuttering rhyme-deaf narcissist
I could end you in 2, but ill give you a few more
You're pissed about criticism, I dont know what for
You asked for opinions and got pissed when you got it
Dont think you can rip a Kendrick bar and just mod it
I dont know what youre on, but its probably frying your brain
If you think you're that good, youre straight clinically insane.

hahaha no

Wow, kids on this forum really can't spit

>bob wire

Boom, bomb, clipped by the bond.
Single palm by the end of Vietnam.
Searching for a frequent wind to get on.
Brothers been by borrowin' off my left arm.
Brothers been by borrowin'.... god.

I heard it I seen't it I swear I ain't dreaming (hey)
There's a whole lot of (BANG BANG), can I please let me stay insane.

Oh shit, a ghostship, captained by the mob.
Using dollars' by the bill to get all of y'all.
USMC could use another MC
Or maybe they can just fuck right off.
Or maybe they can just fuck with..god.

http://vocaroo.com/i/s0nLKFsBaqgq
This is something i've been working on. If someone wants me to spit their lines tell me and i'll do the best i can, i'm gonna do some with the ones that are already posted.

>>68336448
this >>68334446 is one of the few with a concept of metrics so i did it
http://vocaroo.com/i/s1mUAu3Jp9a4

>>68334522
http://vocaroo.com/i/s1DWijYBOWBY
This is a good bar, got some rhymes interlaced within the lines and some interesting flow.