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Sup anon, I'm trying to become a rapper. Can you please

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Sup anon, I'm trying to become a rapper. Can you please rate my lyrics 1-10 and give me some tips on how I can improve. Here's an 8 bar.

Yo, I be ballin' since I was born.
I buy shit you can never afford.
I fuck a bad bitch when I'm bored.
You better fuck with me or there will be gore.
All the lyrics I write are straight fire
And you know I kill like Michael Myers
If they don't like me they a liar
Hit em with a bat wrapped in barb wire
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>bob wire
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AYO FREE MY NIGGA BOB WIRE
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>>68270225
focus on passing 5th grade first
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>>68270225
>bob wire
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fuck you OP we had a potential great meme
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fuck
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Here's some more.

[Hook]
You know I'm the best at rapping.
You're probably just the best at fapping.
You're better off praising than attacking.
Cause while you're broke my paper keeps stacking.

I'm crazy and you hate me cause you're lazy and ain't got no ladies while I got eighty so don't you fade me. They can't stop me even if they tase me. My flow been hard lately. You won't go far hating and I'm so damn hot even straight guys try to rape me
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If you get some good production, yes
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>>68270325
who the fuck calls it "bob wire"

OP obviously didn't know if he thought it was worth deleting his thread
>bob wire
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>>68270338
>bob wire
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>>68270225
>>68270338

reads like generic horrorcore bullshit
super simple rhyme structure..
the "im dangerous" lyrics just come off really try hard...

come back when you actually have something to say with your rhymes OP
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>>68270325
lol @ those references, god wikipedia is the worst
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>>68270338
>guys try to rape me
how's that ass feel?

>bob wire
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Hey guys bob here, AMA.
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>>68270412
how does it feel to be dissed by an up-and-coming rapper on 4chan and can you recover
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>>68270412
What is square root
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>bob wire
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I got more lyrics you guys need to rate them.

You know a god I spit hot shit
You ain't shit you spit nonsense
My musics everywhere you can't even block it
Bitches wet like the shit that comes out of a fosset.

I'm a lyrical god I attack noobs
Then I fuck a bitch that you fap to
She wanna fuck I take her to the bathroom
Don't teach me shit we ain't in a classroom
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>>68270485
>bob wire
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>>68270503
Oh hush, some people call it bob wire anyway
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>>68270522
>bob wire
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>>68270440
I am actually quite stoked that he mentioned my name, but other than that, I felt pure fear when I saw him diss my name.

>>68270446
It's a root in a shape of a square.
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>>68270485
here's a rhyme for ya...

OP you cuck, your rhymes fucking suck
you couldn't sell this shit, not even for a buck
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>>68270589
>barbed wire
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I just rapped this over a beat. Tell me what you think of my flow. Rate it 1-10

http://vocaroo.com/i/s1W3MHSNCIUt
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here's mine guys

yo
suh
what it do
how it be
where it at
ay man ayyyy
lit n shit senpai
keep it 100 man
i'm da realest
you kno u feel dis
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Lyrics arent great but if the production and your delivery is good you can get away with it for now. also dont get discouraged. if this is something you really want to do keep at it and you will get better if you put enough time and work in.

Cheers
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>>68270485
>>68270626
>bob wire
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>>68270626
fucking kek
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>>68270626
I'm gonna die
Please stop saying my name!
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>no ratings
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>bob wire
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You would have to spit that at grime speed for it sound impressive. Also the line about straight guys wanting to rape you is so fucking George Micheal trying to be DMX. Just stop.
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rate my 4bar plz

I ball on you niggas so hard,
Y'all niggas can't afford a backyard,
Been dealing since I was a little boy,
Now I'm just deal with the fuccbois
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>>68270809
Shut the fuck up my lyrics are great. Here's some more.

pussy money weed need a honey and some g's
aint it funny how i be cuz i smoked a pound of weed
now give the crown to me cuz i got sumthin to prove
i got nuttin to lose when im clutchin the ooze
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>>68270626
>bob wire
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>>68270856
that's some str8 bob wire cuz
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>>68270856
>bob wire
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ITT: bob wire
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>bob wire
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WE'RE SO FUCKED
SHIT OUT OF LUCK
BOB WIRED TO SELF DESTRUCT
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>>68271028
Bob wire is two words
Barbed wire is also two words lol
Lol bob wire two words
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Got some more

Aye, alright, I'm a motherfucking king.
Ice chain with the 40 carrot ring.
The bitch want my dick she a motherfucking fiend.
You know ima fornicate after I smoke all my weed
I get money all day call me a money machine
I ain't printing out no shit but I'm getting green
I ain't no fucking rat but I'm still getting cheese
Smoked a fat blunt while I sip that purple lean
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rate my lyrics guys

my dick is so big
my dick is so thigg
my shit is so fire
it cut like bob wire
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>>68271112
>40 carrot
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>>68271081
Bob wire is two syllables
Barbed wire is three syllables
Hard wired is three syllables
>>68271112
>bob wire
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>>68271146
>Barbed wire is three syllables
>Hard wired is three syllables
best bait itt
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>bob wire
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>bob wire
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>wob bire
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heart throb guy
start the car fob-style
parked afar show the scar
from a sharp bob wire
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You have to admit I'm a pretty good lyricist. I'm not eminem tier but I'm pretty close
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>>68270338
>I'm so damn hot even straight guys try to rape me

fuck ya meng dats sum skreets shit skrt skrt
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>mfw people are still making fun of me for saying "bob wire" even though it's been proven to be an acceptable alternative to "barbed wire"
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BOB WIRE ft. BARB - "RAP A BAT"
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>>68270389
>thinking there would be academic papers about some rednecks mispronouncing barb
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>>68270856
Fuck off filthy frank fag.

Also >bob wire
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>>68271349
>bobwire
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>>68271380
Lol okay, this isn't funny anymore especially since I proved you guys wrong. Just stop, you can't make a meme out of this
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>>68271430
bob wire aside, your lyrics fucking suck OP
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>>68271430
>bob wire
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>>68271449
Yo bro, you think my lyrics suck.
Well I'll tell you what
Say that again and I'll beat you up
You'll have more blood than the wrists you cut
Now listen up boy, I know im the best
Which is why I got my rap name tatted on my chest
Young Rich Kid, that's why they call me
Making so money I can buy shit for my homies
Now don't you dare diss cause I always got the fire
While sit at home making fun of me for saying "bob wire"

Beat that, I fucking dare you
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>>68271695
Damn
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Is bob wire the new hot meme on the block?
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is this what rap is now?
lyrics that only make sense for two bars?
and only rhyme one word at the end?
kill yourselves, faggots.
jk, keep working on it.
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yea i get pussy and hoes
but i aint got no woes
got expensive clothes
my hair the freshest 'fro
got diamonds and chains
shoot you in the brain
make you feel this pain
more pain than a migraine
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Hang on guys, I could share some lyrics I came up with for my new concept rap album I'm writing about space pirates.
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>>68271949
it's either that or the boreds of canada one
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>>68271799
>bob wire
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>>68272055
dude shut the fuck up it's really not funny, especially since "bob wire" is a legitimate alternative to "barb wire"
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Harambe (x8)

My spliff out, my dick out/ smokin swisha sweets, and deez white owls/fuck a bad bitch on a beach towel/ full moon dick and i make her howl/ nigga i need a towel, to clean up OP's guts like CSI/, bitch i'm fly/ i bring this shit up, into the sky, and i drop it on ya to make u die.

So call me Ultron, i smoke flame chron and throw ya down like King Kong. Beat my chest for my nigga who's been gone..

Harambe, harambe. (x6)
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>>68272137
while this niggers gettin triggered, my dick is gettin bigger
i'll put it in your ass while it's covered in glass
yeah I'm a sick fuck, I got far for a nut
I'll spray deep in your ass, till it hits your colon
this my new form, bitch I'm Alolan
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>>68272167

Thematically, you slaughtered all these foos, but you gotta work on yo structure homie
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>>68270626
yung lean is that you??
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>>68270225
Ho's on my dick cause I look like Oprah, BasedGod immaculate, in the mall smackin dick, against your Ho's ass cause she too damn thick, I got a lotta of Ho's cause I have a Nintendo GameCube, damn she cute we gonna have a pizza party.
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>>68272137
This nigga think bob wire something other niggas say
but i think this fake mc is just really fuckin' gay
acting like he hard, like he got mad rhymes
but he ain't no mf doom nigga got no dimes
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I nutted in yo baby mama's cereal now I'm gorgeous, she called me Dali cause I'm so surreal, ate that ho out now I call that a meal, pussy so good it's gotta have its own address.
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>>68271799

I can easily beat that...

I'll say it again bitch, your lyrics fucking suck
Quit trying to be a rapper you suburban cuck
Edgy violence,
the hot topic shtick
Wanting straight guys to rape you?
Your all about that dick
I'll burn you as simply as I flick my bic
Wire to your lady, she bobbin on my dick
If you're not trollin and really got rap dreams
Your spit needs work son, straight fucking memes
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>>68272257

Bitch put down the pictionary, and lemme find u a dictionary. Because you sound like a real big fuckin' fairy.

Go back 2 school u ain't cool
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Them rhymes some fly shit,
I'd love to hear some more of it,
But if you wanna make a hit,
You gotta slice some deeper slits,

Make your wrists bleed and drink the blood,
Like a crip cuttin down red ones,
true blue like Noahs flood,
Last man standing, only weed and a gun
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I'm a thug motherfucker and I pack the heat
Sendin all them niggas way under 6 feet
26 kilos hidden on the back seat
sweet-
beats motherfucker and I'm spittin fire
my rhymes cut deep like a strip of bob wire
go and bust nuts to the new sears flier I got bitches on the hold and my cock don't tire

what can I say? some of us are gifted
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>>68270338
I'm not gonna lie those lyrics are garbage but for some reason if you get the flow right that hook is so catchy
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>>68271112
You should say get money all day like an automated teller machine because then everyone will be confused why the next line is literally I don't print out money
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>>68272364

Bob Weir nigga, i'm truckin/ with yo bitch riding shotgun for fuckin. All my niggas be stuntin and we all better rappers than u fuckaz. Strapped all day, we high even more got a cash machine that also vends lean, I'm trippy as fuck, but don't trip over me. I a 10/10 chad, but bitches think you a 3
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>>68272287
You talking about hot topic
But you ain't a hot topic
What you just said was nonsense
And I think it's time to stop it
I'm the best rapper on this board
I can do any style, technical to horrorcore
The shit I spit is wild, like your girl on my floor
She sucking on my dick, you know she want some more
Because I spit better than you and that's just a fact
I can do just about everything that know you lack
So quit trying to test me, because I'm just about done
Your girl just texted me, I'm about to have fun
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Legendary thread
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Aiiight sheeeyit

I'ma piss on yo face like Nicki Minaj on bass
Star Trek ain't got no space like Trump talkin bout race
Bust a fat load on yo gurl's face, fuck the first base
Shouldn't have been following me on Instagram in the first place
Yo, I fuckin slay shit, leave you wasted on the pavement
More bodies in the basement than /b/ crazed tits
Making ladies wet like tsunamis of Maggi noodles
Nuking North Korea sofly like Fugees, poodles and groodles
Fuck wit me on Fridays, I'ma take you to the fliest bars
I ain't lyin, cuz, we'll be drinking Grey Goose and eyein stars
Stoned and drunk, falling over like Clinton
We party like Trump and Milo Yiannopolous' dick, son
Never sober, fuck reality, come smoke weed and play with me
Eatin pizza and shotting straight fuckin Baileys,g
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ITT we remember why most rap is juvenile garbage
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thread of the year right here
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http://vocaroo.com/i/s003BVtVfqLR
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>>68274388
Str8 fyah shit, son. You gots dat smoov suthrn flow, nowumsane, you can lay dat smoov shit down str8 lyk dat son
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I'm a spiritual lyrical bob wire
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>>68270338
>>68270225
Your lyrics aren't good. The rhyme scheme is pretty elementary too.

Try not to come up with obvious similes like "my flow is hotter than the sun" or shit like that. Instead try something like "my flow is hotter than magma" which would be a double-entendre since magma is hot and also "flows" so to speak, and magma has much more interesting words that rhyme with it. The only way a simile works is if it's clever and unexpected.

Try to think of roundabout ways of saying what you wanna say without saying it. Also, find something interesting to rap about.

Think outside the box, don't just live in it.
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