FimFiction thread - Now with 71% more on-topic posts

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Would you look at that, September is about to be over.

Now that three quarters of the year are gone, it's time to reflect. How are you faring in your horsewords output?

>>28536868
>second day: 0 words

>>28536868
0 words

Now that the fandom is kill, where can I go to feel like part of a writers community again? Maybe an animeme website?

>>28537274
You could always write highly specific erotica in Amazon for pennies at a month.

>>28537295
Honestly, I wouldn't mind writing doujin... But I can't draw.

>>28536868
This has probably been my most productive year yet. I think a good 1/3 of my stories have been written in the past year.

>>28537274
/r/writing
not even joking

>>28536868
I'm worse than ever. But I can attempt to justify it by the fact that I'm somewhat productive in other fields.

>>28537295
>tfw you will never make a living writing about girls fucking dinosaurs

>>28537328
Never been to Reddit. What kind of stuff do they write about?

>>28537340
That sub is for writing in general - tips, questions, sharing good feels etc. Most of them publish their stuff on Amazon, and a few people even earn a fair amount of dosh out of writing fetish smut and shared tips on how to do it.
If you want a place where you can actually write, read, post shit and receive feedback, apparently /r/writingprompts is pretty good?

>>28537369
Well... Maybe... I'm still kinda hesitant about the whole Reddit thing. Are there any websites that are as good as fimfiction? Not fanfiction.net

>>28537391
well theres always fictiondick

kek

>>28537391
Reddit's advantage is having populated subreddits dedicated to even the tiniest of hobbies or interests. If you don't want to deal with the stereotypical redditor, avoid the bigger subs and /r/all.

>Are there any websites that are as good as fimfiction?
No. It's either ff.net or tumblr.

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>>28537411
Well... If those are my options...

>>28537437
yeah ffnet suddenly doesnt seem so bad, eh?

>Fimfiction thread

>Literally discussing how to move on from the very site.

Pathetic and sad.

>>28537461
It's either this or the nth gun debate.

Plus, we're at least thinking ahead.

>>28537461
If only it were 2012 again...

>>28537461
Just helping out, man. I'm not planning to move anytime soon.

>>28537411
What about that Archive of Our Own place?

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>>28537476
Say it 'is' 2012 again...

Just for the sake of having something to talk about.

If you could come back to your first day in FiMFiction, with all the knowledge you have right now, what would you do regarding horsewords?

>>28537494
Wasn't that for original fiction? Or am I getting confused with another site?

>>28537505
I would write more, I would write better, and I would throw out the occasional fan-pandering story. Then at least I'd have a place again.

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I TRIED SO HARD AND GOT SO FAR, BUT IN THE END, IT DIDN'T EVEN MATTER!

>>28537505
Not much.
Now if I came back to 2011, I'd write FoE myself and get all the horsefame.
I'd also write My Little Dashie and Past Sins, except even worse, just to prevent their respective authors from writing them.

>>28537411
>ff.net
Why is this serving malware and ads.

>>28537572
cheers for the spoilers lad
fucking twat

>>28537624
Fuck if I know.

>>28536868
I wrote a lot. Noone of it has gotten serious recognition.

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>>28537505
I would do exactly the same.
I would spend all my time reading again because good stories make me happy and my life is pretty well on track regardless.

Maybe I'd have payed a tiny little bit more attention in my classes instead of literally pulling out my phone and spending all year reading. But not by much.

Never written anything, don't think I'll ever be able to.

>>28537505
Write Blankness in its entirety before posting it.

It may cost me whatever meagre amount of followers I have amassed, but the thought of living guilt-free is enthralling.

>>28537505
I would've written "A She-Devil in Plain Sight" right away and try to take the lead in the Foalcon community.

Page 8

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>ywn have 1k+ followers

>>28537505
Run away and never come back.

>>28536868
Better than it's ever been. I wrote and published my first story to reasonable reception, and managed to crap out another 40k-50k horsewords in unfinished/abandoned projects. I'm currently working on something for /pa/ and have temporarily suspended two of my projects pending some reflection on the premises and waiting to see what canon does. (I've written myself into a corner for my future Sunlight fic, and Legends of Everfree sort of went the opposite direction of my story, so I'm trying to figure out if I should take inspiration from it or just completely ignore it since I'm writing an AU that branches off before Friendship Games anyways. My unicorn A-Team fic is on hold until the Season 6 finale, since the description sounds kind of similar to what I want to do and I want to see how the show handles it.)

All in all, a good year for horsewords. My non-pony stuff suffered a lot, but them's the brakes.

>>28537628
That's from Friendship Games. If you still haven't seen it, I don't think you ever will.

>>28537505
Skip reading Past Sins.

>>28539328
You can never escape in any reality.

>>28537505
not read Displaced stories

>>28536757

>Take advice to write whatever I want to beat writers block

>Story gets downvotes

>Try to make a quality story.

>Cant write past the few hundred words and inevitably forget or am unable to continue.

I'm cursed.

>>28541387

The "write whatever to beat writer's block" part only applies to creating a rough draft. Once you have that, you still have to actually edit the damn thing, and I don't just mean "run it through a spellchecker." I mean, you have to go through the story and FIX it, make it coherent, add or delete scenes and characters, that sort of thing.

Luckily, that part's easy, once you've got a completed rough draft. It's not as much fun as writing, but the payoff is that you have a quality story to publish.

Lots of people try to write a quality story on the first write-through. A few even succeed. Most would be better off writing a draft without worrying about quality, and then shining it up over multiple revisions later.

>>28538710
>ywn disappoint 1k+ people
feels bad

>>28540175
To this day I still cant quite grasp the concept of displaced.

If you want to write a self insert HiE, go for it. Thousands of others have done it so whats one more crapfest?

If you want to write Xcharacter in equestria, do that and use the disgusting crossover tag.

I can only conclude that displaced exists as a genre simply because even the lowest of the low admit that crossovers are more cancerous than self inserts, but is that it or is there more to it?

>>28536868
Abysmally. Last year was so much better...

>>28537340
>Never been to Reddit
It's basically a more heavily moderated 4chan.

>>28537391
UI-wise, I haven't encountered one. Deviantart's total shit, Fiction Press is fanfiction.net, Archive of Our Own will be in beta longer than DayZ will, and LiveJournal is Tumblr's dad.

>>28537505
I wouldn't freak out when my multichapter fic I wanted to update once in a blue moon and had no plans for suddenly gets featured and has 1000+ upvotes.

Then I wouldn't get burned out trying to focus solely on writing it and instead work on multiple stories at once to keep things fresh.

>>28537514
AOOO is the Organization for Transformative Works' (yes, there is a fanfic NGO) fanfiction website. It's been in beta longer than Gen 4's been around.

>>28537622
>I'd also write My Little Dashie, except even worse,
is such a thing even possible to do while remaining coherent?

>>28542612
It's because it combines the two.

>>28543853
people would create double cancer by combining self insertions with crossovers? No. No one could ever be so foolhardy to do such a thing intentionally

>>28544539
Think again, buddy.
Not only does it let them self-insert into MLP and write a crossover at the same time, it also allows them to insert themselves into the fictional character of their choosing, so they can pretend they're as cool as that character.

>>28544585
I could see your point if any of these people ever chose actual cool characters in their little girl fanfiction.

However most of the ones i've had the misfortune to encounter, the main character was always a cheap ripoff of some very obscure animu shit that i had to google to have any idea of who it was supposed to be.

Which sadly still seems preferable to 'emo loner faggot character from bleach' or 'emo loner faggot character from naruto' or 'emo loner faggot character from one piece'

>>28544765
I don't see how this contradicts my argument.

>>28544877
well you had mentioned they want to be as cool as such and such character, while I point out that your claim would hold more water if any of them had actually picked a cool character.

>>28544991
'Cool' is subjective.
Case in point, autistic children think emo loner faggots from The Big Three are cool, while we don't.

>>28545019
true enough. And if fanfiction writers had any taste, there would be no fanfiction.

Amazing that you can find elitism on an Internet forum for My Little Pony fanfiction enthusiasts.
We're already at the bottom of the barrel, but there's still some fuckers below we can shit on somehow.

>>28545145
theres always someone in a crappier position than you that you can shit on. it helps make me feel better about myself being a fan of a toy companys little girl marketing line

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how does something like this get a ratio like that?

>>28545658
Half of the readers come from Equestria after Dark, so his audience already knows what they're looking for.
It's pretty hard to have bad ratio on a clopfic, because people who aren't into it won't see it.

>>28545708
yeah but
>anthro
>admitted self insert
>Dick Peter McCockjoke
that seems bad even by clopfic standards

So who else watched Legend of Everfree for the first time today? And is anyone writing fics about it yet?

>>28545823
I watched it when it first came out because I wanted to know how badly it would mess up my story idea. Having watched it, I'm probably going to completely redo the premise of my story, which may be a blessing in disguise, but we'll see.

>>28545823
Where can I watch it anyways? It's not on yayponies.

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>>28545145
>>>/reddonychan daily/

>>28545823
I'm not going to watch it, but I'm sure there are tons of fics about it

>>28545897
yayponies only accepts certain sources, I'm guessing the leaked movie is not from any of them

>>28545920
>reddonychandaily
Haven't heard that one in a while.

>>28545937
Probably because of 60% of today's /mlp/ posters being from ponychan.

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>>28545942
People love to say that but I haven't seen blatant ponychanners in here since that time we taught Faust how to tripfag.

Then again I don't spend much time visiting shitposting threads these days.

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>>28545968
>People love to say that
Didn't even know. Came back here in 2014 or 2015 (been gone for ~2 years) and it was just infested with blatant hugboxing, tripfagging and generals created solely for circlejerking. Found this thread by chance, posted a little and never went out there again.

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So either ponies don't have fur, or this makes zero sense.
How can ponies even have chest hair sticking out.

>>28545823
I already tried to make a Shadowbolts' version, but is pants.

>>28546076
Have you missed all those ponies with beards?
Their coats are probably very thin, with actual body hair growing in between.

>>28546171
coats are actual body hair...

>>28546202
wow ur so rite.......

>>28545658
>""""""ironic"""""" anthro clopfic
This mad genius has found a way to write an anthro clopfic that appeals not only to people who actually like anthro clopfics but also to people who think they're dumb

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>>28546218

>>28545897
It's on netflix now.

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>>28546608
I'm not seeing it.
Probably the MPAA/RIAA/MAFIAA said I'm not allowed to buy it in my country, so I'll just have to pirate it instead.

>>28546778
>not watching a very minty christmas

>tfw never rewarded for the amount of effort I put in
At least when I write scat, people notice me.

>>28536757
I'm going stir crazy waiting for the next chapter of final solution.

>>28547711
You alright Mythril?

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>>28547711
If you take a shit in the middle of a busy street, people will notice you too.
That's probably not the way to success, tough.

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>>28547735
>Mfw Mythril claimed to be the inspiration for one of my stories

>>28547742
screens or didn't happen

>>28547741
Would you rather create a masterpiece for everyone to enjoy, just to be the only one who sees it or create something that won't make you feel alone anymore?

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>>28547755
Whoops. Guess it was Megapone.

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>Thursday
>OH FUCK THIS IS THE GREATEST THING I'VE EVER CREATED! I CAN'T STOP WRITING HOLY SHIT, BY THIS RATE I'M GONNA FINISH IT BY HALLOWEEN!

>Friday
>I never want to type another word for the rest of my life

>Saturday
>I just had the greatest fucking idea for a NEW STORY,

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>>28547761

>>28547770
Iktf. Are there any good romance stories (remember, emphasis on good) that tackle AppleShy?

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>>28547770
Remove Saturday and that's literally me.

>>28547776
>7776
>>28547777
>7777

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>>28547761
I strive for quality because I believe it's a good goal to pursue in and of itself.
I like looking back at something I made and being able to be proud of it, flawed as it may be. I like getting better and I like a challenge.
Writing cheap fetishist MLP smut is none of that.

Your masterpiece might not be recognized for what it is, but your scat will definitely never be a masterpiece.
Life is pointless regardless, but you might as well try to do something with it.

>>28546171
wrong.
>>28546076
look at a pony up close and you will see that they have wiskers all over. though not to the extent depicted in this fucking show. the point is simple, some hair grows longer than other hair. it doesn't break biology.

>>28547816
>tfw wrote what I considered to be a masterpiece horror
>3 months later, still hasn't even made it to 10 thumbs up yet
>then immediately wrote about a peeing pooping principal
>it was noticed immediately
Sadly, I got a better thrill from Pregnant Principal Poopy Pants than I did with my masterpiece horror story. /vanity

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>>28547848
Honestly chances are your masterpiece horror story just was pretty damn average.
Usually when people think they've created a masterpiece, it means they're so bad that they can't see how bad they are.

I guess you can't achieve perfection without being a perfectionist.

>>28547723
It's been on chapter-a-month for over two years now, why is it bothering you now?

>>28547870
The thing is, nobody read it. How can you gauge how good something is if it goes unnoticed?

>>28547895
Nobody decided to read it, or nobody even looked at the description, or nobody even saw a link? Three different things.

If the premise is already bad, I won't read it, I won't vote, I won't give feedback. Most bad stories on fimfiction don't have a terrible ratio, they have 20 views and 3 votes because nobody even bothers to open a chapter.
The stories with many negative votes are either so obviously terrible they get downvoted on sight, or the one that disappointed after people gave them a chance.

Maybe it really is great and unnoticed. Post a link here, shill it, see what happens.

>>28547933
O-OK. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/336379/this-is-no-musical

>>28547817
Why is their body hair and facial hair so human-like and different colour than their coats?

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>>28547990
because it's a cartoon

>>28547967
>mature
>gore
>dark
>horror
0% relevant to my interests

>>28548002
So that's why you're objectively right even though your theory makes no logical sense?

>>28548006
It's almost as if he mentioned writing a horror story before posting a link!

>>28548006
Take the gore with a grain of salt. I only put it there in case a mod got their jimmies rustled.

>>28547967
>>28548006
Pretty much this. Mature-gore-dark-as-my-soul-horror is a hard combination. It usually signals edgy angtsy teens writing their first words.

I also happen to really dislike Cheese Sandwitch as a character, but I'll read it anyways.

>>28547876
because! its so fucking good and every god damn time it updates I am forced to remember that it is not only amazing but all of the other good shit I used to read like dungeon keeper ami and on a clear day you can see forever are dead and will remain dead along with every other cool thing I find.

>>28548007
I didn't give you a theory and I didn't reply to your assinine "why is it X" question. All I did was explain that fur can have sections of fur that are longer and stand out differently. thats how manes are a thing you fucking faggot. you can autism explosion over chest hairs all you like and invision bald wrinkly skinned ponies if you feel like it. I did my part. I am not participating in that.

>>28548033
Maybe you should try it too. Expand your creativity by trying out a mix of genres that you hate and making it good. That's what I'm looking at doing with le random comedies.

>>28548015
Not really the point. The question was why nobody read the fic. In my case, looking at the tags was enough to convince me to avoid it, even though normally I would be inclined to read at least a bit of it and post some feedback.

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>>28548083
>calls me autistic
>gets this mad about a "discussion" about fucking pony body hair
And since you take this so seriously, why don't you answer my "asinine" question?

>>28548087
I have tried, though. That's how I formed my opinions in the first place.
At a point I started reading all of the gorey grimdark edgy stuff to see what it was all about — Cheerilee's Garden and its Harvest sequel, Cupcakes, Rainbow Factory, Sweet Apple Massacre, smaller stuff, you name it — and after you've read several different ways to slice, dissolve and crush people it starts getting dull unless there's something more to it.

Now horror is a different genre than pure gore written for the shock value, but in general and from my experience Gore/Grimdark/Mature/Dark is a particularly bad combination of red flag if you're looking for more than poorly written gratuitous psychopathy.

>>28548141
I knew people weren't typically interested in this genre, but for 3 months to go by without even 100 views? Are there that many people opposed to the edgy tags?

>>28548060
>on a clear day you can see forever is dead
>last update: September 7, 2008
Holy shit dude, you weren't kidding

>>28548157
This is what I try to stay away from. If I can shamelessly defend my story (specifically for discussion purposes), the story I wrote is less about the killings themselves as much as what they did to the character and why she does it. I try to hit it with the "this is real life" train that makes the reader (hopefully) almost want to root for her.

>>28548164
>Are there that many people opposed to the edgy tags?
On a website dedicated to cute little horsies living in a magical fantasy world? What do you think?

It doesn't help that ALL your tags are edgy tags. If there was at least a hint of something I like mixed in with all that edge, at least I would have reason to consider whether it was worth reading.

>>28548164
Just the gore and horror tag mixed together drives me away. I like psychological, subtle horror better, not obvious "2much blod 2edgy4me" fics.

>>28548285
Again, I only threw in the gore tag because I was afraid the mods would get their panties in a bunch of I didn't. There's no blood and guts in the story, and I agree that stories that rely on it are typically poorly written.

>>28548304
> There's no blood and guts in the story,

Then remove it you braindead idiot.

If you know there's no gore, don't put the tag in the first place, since a good amount of people have associated it with uncreative edgy fics.

>>28548233
>On a website dedicated to cute little horsies living in a magical fantasy world? What do you think?
>FoE
>Cupcakes
>Rainbow Factory

>>28547967
So, in addition to bitching about the tags like everyone else ITT, I went ahead and started reading your fic. It started off a little rough, with the *unsheathes katana* stuff, but otherwise it was fine. I liked Cheese Sandwich's dialog in particular. On the other hand, the characters' emotions didn't come through very well when Octavia was talking about her career.

Then this happened:
> There, in the middle of the room, is a pony tied up to a chair, motionless. It's mane is gone, along with all of its skin. I can't even tell what gender it is anymore due to there being nothing left of it other than raw muscle tissue and whatever lies underneath. Even its eyes are gone, gauged out from its skull and leaving in its place two dark and empty sockets. I think I'll be sick to my stomach, not from the sight of the corpse, but from the rancid scent of a pony who had probably been sitting there for days now.
So, before I nope the fuck out of this entire fic, I'd just like to point out that while killing people to get ahead because she's addicted to the attention is plausible, torturing them and mutilating corpses is not.

>>28548332
I'd love to, but the fimfiction mods aren't exactly the pinnacle of proper judgement. I don't want to get the story or my account taken down because someone was trying to "protect the children."

>>28548336
>FoE
>Cupcakes
>Rainbow Factory

These were done first, like early HiEs. Their ideas have been milked out so badly there's nothing left about them. They're pretty much popular because they were first and probably only ones, on the same level as Past Sins and FOE, despite the first being a Mary Sue fic and the second a complete rip-off of FO3.

>>28548357
To be fair, she only did half of it.

>>28548384
>and the second a complete rip-off of FO3.
Leaving the Stable to look for someone, maybe. Too bad this takes like a few chapters to be over and the main plot switches focus.
I swear, if you people tried reading FoE, you'd be perfectly justified in disliking it. There are other, more important things it ripped straight from the games, even though none of them make the story predictable.

>>28548379
I just saw >>28548357, and realized you need it. Keep it if that's in your fic.

But then, that description is just as bland as

>Feel sick, because I tell you to do so.

When you could do

>Before me lied what was once a pony. Once, when it had some skin over her tissues and eyes in her sockets. Even her mane was scalped, and without the hole in the nether regions, I couldn't tell if he was male or female. A rotten odor crept in the room, through my skin and under it, permeating the whole neighborhood with a dump's perfume mixed with Canterlot's fish market. I was dulled out to the odor, but I saw my assistant run out the room, barely holding her mouth shut with some of her magic.

This isn't stellar or good, but it's better than just providing a basic description followed with "FEEL SICK AND DISGUSTED DAMN YOU!"

>>28548412
>if you people tried reading FoE

I don't, since it doesn't fit my interests at all. I've just read the synopsis and noped out, and concluded it was a shitty rip-off from another anon's resume.

>>28548441
Glad to see you form your own opinions and don't spread misinformation.

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>>28548188
at least they got to a milestone before they abandoned it, but shit on a clear day has basically replaced the entire sailor moon canon for me (not that that is especially hard to do, SM is awful even at it's best, and unwatchable at its worst, particularly arc 1 and 2)

writing fatigue and deadfics have basically been slaying every fic I like for the last 3 years. Final solution is what little I have left between that and a few undertale fics. I'm bankrupt for anything to chew into.

>>28548146
yes, I called you autistic because you are trying to turn this into an argument and it's not worth having, nor was it ever one.

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>>28548472

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>>28547967
Alright, so I read it as promised. Here's some thoughts.

First the description. I don't want to repeat myself, but those tags and the whole edgy theme is not encouraging. The description made me expect detailed, graphical violence, but there wasn't any unless you count the ending as violent.

The writing style is fairly good and readable, I liked the start pretty well even though I'm not a fan of Cheese's over the top character in general. Then it gets a little dull though, Octavia does a lot of talking but none of it is particularly scary or disturbing, it's not boring, but this is not horror at all.

It becomes pretty clear at some point that Octy is completely insane, but her decision to tell everything to Cheese with no intention of harming him and no intention of ending her own life made absolutely no sense.
What exactly was the crazy psychopathic pony hoping to do here by revealing everything?
Are we supposed to believe that she genuinely just decided to redeem herself on the spot, as if admitting to being a serial killer to some random guy scared out of his mind would have zero consequences?

And the ending made just as little sense. Cheese conveniently loses hold of the knife at just the right moment, then the serial killer decides not to kill her would be murderer, and then she kills herself even though she apparently had no intention of dying just moments ago?

Furthermore, the whole keeping bodies in your house for long period of times thing is complicated. Dead things stink like you would no believe, it's impossible to not throw up if you're in a five meter radius of Pestillence. And then the insects start swarming around.

There's a joke somewhere to be made about Cheese and the plot being full of holes, but I'll spare you that.
Overall you can write well, but it's not horror, not surprising, and it all makes little sense. 2000.

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>>28548563
Shit.

Thanks for the feedback.

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>>28548617
Some extra advice, but take it with a whole shaker of salt because I've never actually written shit.

If you want to do horror you have to stop giving everything away right from the start.
In your story things go from a two people talking with nothing to be afraid of beyond the description of the story, to knowing that there's a pile of dead body, knowing who killed them, and knowing that she's not actively trying to kill anymore.
At this point what is left to fear, what should I be afraid of?

A good horror story needs to appeal to my fear of the unknown, it needs to let me imagine the worst, because human minds are very good at shitting themselves if you just give them a nudge.
Show as little as possible to make a real threat. Make me afraid of the the possibilities, don't just show me dead bodies. Make me afraid of the dark.

Your story didn't do that, and I'm going to sleep just fine tonight.

>>28548817
Makes sense. I'm just frustrated that I didn't make it happen this time.

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>>28548836
It's okay, the important part is to keep trying so you keep getting better.
I do a lot of critiquing things, but I couldn't write what anyone here writes to save my life.
Keep on keeping on.

>>28548467
>I'm bankrupt for anything to chew into.
...seriously? I'm only into the one franchise and I still have a backlog hundreds of stories long. Not to mention the 100+ fics that I started reading this year alone.

>>28550151
I like to read stuff that's good and I'm interested in. I also am a setting fag and I prefer character driven stories that focus on the world around them rather than comedy, emotional rollercoasters, or tradgedies. I can enjoy pretty much all of those things if they come second to the afformentioned fleshing out of a setting, but most of the time, they either are completely neglectful of it, or burn me at the end like twilights inferno FUCK THAT PIECE OF SHIT It's not like I dont' have other fics on fimfiction that I read but I wouldn't consider any of them nearly as good as this one and they do not update nearly as consistantly

Has anyone read the 'Savage Skies' series?

There's like, shit, I don't know, four or five stories in it each ranging from 150 thousand words to 300 thousand words. It's pretty good.

>>28550303

I started the first story in the series. Gave up pretty quick, when the animu OC who's faster than Rainbow Dash and has super-magic noone's ever heard of beats up the serial rapist who was stalking Fluttershy.

Are you saying it gets better? Granted, it couldn't get a lot worse, from what I remember.

The average story on FimFic is an Adventure, Slice of Life or Comedy rated Teen and Complete or close to it.

It has 12k words in 4 chapters, it's got 80 likes and 7 dislikes, 1500 views and 50 comments.

Why are you not better than average?

>>28550407
It's all explained later in the story.

Think Dragonball Z characters minus the excessive yelling and 'powering up' nonsense. Except the fights can be more brutal in this story.
It's pretty good.

>>28550489
>It's all explained later in the story.
That doesn't actually help unless it's a good explanation. And the stupider the power, the better the explanation needs to be.

Example:
> OC knows a special type of magic
> at night, he can gather moonlight and form it into a sword
> this technique has been lost for over 1000 years
That's fucking retarded, right?
> don't worry, it's all explained later in the story
> when he was a foal he loved the moon and prayed to it every night
> eventually NMM hears him and realizes how much he loves her night
> she comes to him in a dream and teaches him this secret technique she used long ago
This looks vaguely like a logical explanation but in reality helps not even a little. It just moves the problem around. Instead of being a snowflake because he inexplicably knows this unique spell, he's a snowflake because NMM inexplicably favored him and taught him this obscure (but super cool and badass) battle magic.

>>28550645
> the better the explanation needs to be.
Magic.
Really anon, they're in a magical world full of magical creatures with magical powers.
Also, if you really want to know and don't care about a little bit of spoilage;
Various pones get so powerful with both a latent talent and extreme training under various different types of magical based martial arts that hones their natural earth/pegasus/unicorn magic. It basically gives them much better control over the magic they use everyday.

>>28550681
I figure I should also mention the story has a lot of cutesy moments too, and some emotional ones as well.

>>28550681
>Really anon, they're in a magical world full of magical creatures with magical powers.
Yeah? Well so is my stupid moonlight-sword OC

>that last spoiler
Yeah, that still doesn't help given what that other anon said in >>28550407. RD is canonically one of the fastest fliers in Equestria, if not the absolute fastest, even as of S1. If a fic's going to have some OC that's faster than her, there had better be an explanation beyond "talent + training". Especially given that RD also has the talent and has been training for years.

>>28550729
I just explained it.

The MARTIAL ART they practice is what allows them greater control over the magic they already wield. Without it a lot of that magic is wasted since few ponies know how to utilize it.

>>28550737
Honestly it sounds fucking dumb. I'm glad you have something you like, but I'm gonna stay away from it.

>>28548384
>Their ideas have been milked out so badly there's nothing left about them.
Is there anything left in mlp fanfic that's original? Let's be honest here. Everything's been done to death, and all the good writers are either gone or just going through the motions.

>>28550792
Suit yourself.

I'm more of a fan of the relationships he builds and the character progression myself anyways.

>>28550822
It depends. Do you want a 100% ALL ORIGINAL broad premise? Too bad. They don't exist anymore. Everything's been done before. Alternatue Universe? Sorry, you're isn't new. Slice of Life? That same incident's probably happened before too.

But uniqueness still exists. There's unique or superior AUs, likewise for every other genre. Will we forever trend toward less originality and more rehashed garbage? Yes, but original stuff won't just go away like that.

Here's a couple in progress ones that a lot of you are likely familiar with, and maybe aren't super unique, but I think fit the bill nicely. They're well written and have interesting premises that are handled well within their equine confines.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/280598/faultlines This one is one of my favorites, with a very different, somewhat Matrix-esque take on our little horsies.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/247031/the-mare-who-once-lived-on-the-moon MrNumbers is really good at writing.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/316852/empty-horizons It'd be generic if it wasn't almost unique for its premise. Sort of like above, where the artwork seems to have inspired the story, rather than vice versa

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/303160/synthetic-bottled-sunlight NorrisThePony has been writing fairly unique stuff for a while now, Duck Falls was pretty good too.

Defo can recco the lot tbqh familia

>>28550878
Ummm... Dusk, not Duck. My b

>>28550303
I started it, and got caught up to where the writer was at that point, but havent touched the final 3 volumes.

Its one of those 'oh shit this is terrible but I can't stop reading it' stories

The pony kung fu shit is retarded. the constant OCxcanon shipping is retarded. the psychotic cyborg-pegasus frenemy of the MC is retarded. Twilights blind samurai coltfriend that can kill with the pine needles and dirt stuck in his tail is retarded. The special snowflake stu MC who is possibly related to girokon is fucking retarded.

But.

its fairly well written. I imagine this is whole thing is somewhere along the lines of getting a good writer to create something that is intentional shit just to see if they can make a flaming turd successful

>>28551201
Yeah, it's pretty well written. And he most certainly did go overboard with the shipping.

But I love the psychotic pegasus and I will fite ya m8 swer on me mum.

>>28551201
>girokon
who

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>>28551229
lance fucking greenfield or greenberg of whatever the fuck his name was

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>>28551278
...who

>>28551298
how can you possibly not be familiar with the most prodigious OC around after nyx?

>>28551315
i dont take the time to learn about or memorize the most cancerous things around

>>28551337
then you don't belong here, newfriend

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>>28551340
thats nice

Anybody read Bad Mondays? Fantastic writing and world building. Characters are great too.

>>28551423
Depends on the chapter. some are better than others, but the main plotline sucks and the asshole main character cliche gets old.

I'm only sticking with it because I have too much time invested to just drop it

>>28551448
Man, you guys are cynical and ornery as hell here.

Do any of you actually enjoy the stories you read?

>>28550457
The average is pretty fucked up by upvotes sinks and things like The Chase.

>>28551517
Yeah, they just have to be good.
That said, we're all extremely opinionated and will voice those opinions harshly.

>>28552286
its easier to criticize than praise. or something to that effect

>>28552301
Easy praising is exactly what creates shit like the feature box meta and most popular stories.

>>28552301
It's easy to hate and praise, not to criticize.

Why aren't you writing?

>>28553863
Cause fuck you

>>28553878
I concur with the sentiments of this fine gentleman.

I'm currently in too much pain to think about writing, or think about anything in general. Good chance to catch up on my reading, I suppose.

Spanksgiving by Regidar
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G_S0nPcNkHI

*unsolicited opinions on Israel?*

>>28554146
Do you do requests? If you do, can you do this for me?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/341214/rainbow-blubber

>>28553863
Because I get no enough comments and feedback from readers.

>>28554582
Then post it here and let us take a shot at it. There are some (3-4) pretty good writers here.

>>28554599
Well, if you say so...

Here is my most recent work:
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/344460/the-shadowbolts-adventures-the-glory-and-legend-of-eternal-city

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/309531/a-she-devil-in-plain-sight

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/324594/a-nightly-visit

>>28550729
>>28551201
That's actually another instance like 7DSJ and AAG, where I've gotten probably more intrigued than it merited by their prodigious length and TV Tropes entries. I don't actually remember Dawn being shown that early to be faster than Dash, though it doesn't surprise me. I only put it on the back burner because it was shaping up to be yet another story which turns Applejack into a racist, paranoid bitch to drive conflict (see also Triptych, A Wolf In Pony's Clothing, Sharing the Night...).

Though speaking of trying to justify somepony outflying Dash, has anyone read https://www.fimfiction.net/story/3782/higher-flier ? You could argue that it's still bullshit, but I think it gets around the "special snowflake" thing pretty well, as well as emphasizing that the characters still mainly excel at their own niches. (I'd explain more, but I'm not sure how to spoiler. Besides it's like 30K words total.)

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>>28556038
that was a close one, fuck

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I have three different stories in three different states of development and even though I finally have time to write, I can't bring myself to do anything.

Why do I suck so much?

>>28550878
In line with this, trials of kindness and blood is pretty much the only good "fluttershy is a vampire premise" to bad the sequel about nightmare moon isn't good.

>>28555129
That one was a decent one, but it falls far outside my headcanon. It's definitely a product of its time, where people were still playing with weird stuff in their fics. I have to say I thought of that same fic when the "faster than dash" argument came up, but I would never have remembered its name.

>>28555129
>>28556597
higher flier was also very specialized, only being faster at high altitude.
back to savage skies though I dont recall anyone being faster than dash when it comes to flying, though she may have gotten her shit pushed in during a fight, which is obviously a different thing since shes the fastest flier, not the fastest fighter.

At least that series didnt have anyone pulling rainbooms on demand, which is a step up from many oc centric stories ive seen

page 10

So, on the offchance that the board does get deleted, what would you guys do?

>>28558587
Maybe actually write a fic for once. Or, more likely, go shitpost on /k/.

>>28558781
/k/ does seem like a much better place to discuss the intricacies of mouth swords and dong guns

>>28558815
I wonder if I could get away with making a thread about equiping quadrupeds with weapons before someone called me out.

>>28558877
I'm sure someone there has come up with the idea of a battle burro or combat cattle before. you'd probably be safe so long as you avoided mentioning equines

also ch-ch-checked

I still want to hurt ponies but I'm sick of wasting my time on grimdark. What are some of the more popular fetish groups on Fimfiction?

Whassup guys. I've been running a Fimfic author podcast for awhile now. I'm curious if there's any writers on Fimfic you guys feel should get some spotlight? Got any suggestions?

>>28559116
When's the next PonyASMR video, you hack fraud?

>>28559159
due to creative differences, I am no longer a writer on the PonyASMR project. The team is hard at work building a new trailer for you guys. But I only stay in contact as a consultant at this point.

That's about all I can say.

Since ideas are always shit, let's talk about prose. Where on the sliding scale of beige prose (the sex scenes of My Immortal) to purple prose (Amanda McKittrick Ros) do you prefer your stories? From 1-10.

>>28558587
Shitpost on other boards

>>28559569
I'd say somewhere around 6, bordering on 7.

I like the stories I read to be colorful and have engagin prose, as long as the author doesn't go overboard.

>>28559569
4-ish, maybe? As long as the dialogue is as beige or purple as needed for the character, I prefer the descriptions and stuff to be on the more efficient side, brevity being wit and all.

>Want to make a warfic
>literally all the good ideas are taken

Fuck this

>>28560288
Nobody reads warfics anymore anyway. Better off writing another genre or for a fandom that doesn't vomit at the sight of them.

>>28559569
As long as the writing isn't bland, I'm happy. I would rather all the senses be covered than none, likewise I would rather cover the mundane than skip the extraordinary. My favorite things in writing are long descriptive stretches where the action slows down to provide some insight and perhaps even, dare I say, world-building? into the scene at hand. Too often, I think, a good story is let down by a lack of description, and it's one of my personal triggers when the author makes no effort to describe the main characters, even though I know we all know exactly what they look like when if comes to MLP fanfiction.

>>28560288
As long as it's not edgy and instead focuses on character development and doesn't include anything stupid, out of place, or otherwise ill-fitting the nature of horse-words, go for it. state your intent and we'll shoot it down so you can have closure for the idea ^:)

>>28560309
Main Protag is a slacker, never movitated to do anything outside of what he is good at, bodyguard of a special AI made by a Canterlot scientist designed to control airships.

Learns what it means to be motivated while keeping a curious child in control of a death machine out of harm's way.

Almost no fighting would take place, but its set in a warzone.

>>28560309
How can a warfic not be edgy? Unless it's like the skirmish with the buffalo where they fight by throwing pie, I don't see how a warfic can avoid edge.

>>28560336
Ever see mash? hoagans heroes? china beach? uh the a team I guess?

Not everything in a war takes place on the front line.
So maybe the equestrian army is currently gettiing raped senseless both literally and figuratively by the deer a thousand miles away and if your main character is a janitor at the tiger fucking tank assembly plant then I wouldnt expect to see a lot of edge

>>28560332
Ain't nothing wrong with that I guess.

>>28560336
War isn't edgy by nature. It's the faggots who think it's cool to describe in detail how much pleasure their MC is getting from all the gore that makes it edgy. I wouldn't consider WW1 poetry to be edgy. Harrowing and emotional, yes, but far from edgy. It's about how you spin it. If you don't go into needless detail for the sake of your own sick entertainment, and make sure your characters aren't unrealistic psychopaths, you're halfway there. The other half is making sure the premise of the war itself it's utterly stupid and contrived just to make LE WAR IN EQUESTRIA xDDDD happen.

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Managed to write one entire sentence.

Fuck it, it's better than nothing.

>>28560647
>mash? hoagans heroes? china beach? uh the a team I guess?
I was under the impression that "warfic" meant the characters were actually in war. I wouldn't consider MASH or Hogan's Heroes warfics just because the background story involves a war.

>>28560696
>War isn't edgy by nature.
War is literally large groups of armed men eviscerating and getting eviscerated by different large groups of armed men at the behest of governments who want to achieve a political goal. Unless you include abstractions like "culture war" or "war on poverty", or dial down the realism for the rating's sake, I don't see how it could plausibly not be edgy.

>>28560874
I always figured 'warfic' simply meant there was a war going on, and the main character just happens to normally be smack dab in the middle of it.

But using a war as a setpiece instead of the focus is probably just about the only way to have a war themed non-edgefest

>>28545823
>watching EqG
After how shit the first one was, I've opted out of that portion of the ride ever since.

>>28547761
Since writing itself takes all of the time, I'd rather write something I enjoy then write for the common denominator. It can take 40 hours to write a fic of decent length and quality. It only takes two hours to read/reply to comments and stare at it in the featured box.

>>28548157
>written for the shock value
Is that even really a thing anymore in MLP fics? There's been so much gore--from edgy "look at this cute thing that's been corrupted" comedy over to the serious deconstruction--I don't really think anything's that shocking anymore.

>>28548164
The edge has been used so much, it's been worn dull.

>>28550822
It all depends on how broad a net you're casting. Most basic plots have been done, but has every iteration of every plot? Absolutely not.

>>28558587
Probably shift over to cripplechan's /mlp/.

>>28559569
5. Anything higher and I start skipping over all the pointless bullshit that pads out each chapter. If it gets really high, I drop the fic like I did BP.

>>28536868

App. 1600th day: 3 words.

>"Please kill me."

>>28561474
That, or try to reflect the attitude of futurists towards (modern) war, namely as an ethimologically awesome clash of machine and man combined together.

Or go for The epic poets' route and depict it as a glorious endavours only.

>>28559116
I've kinda had the urge to get more involved in fandom stuff lately (I've been really dormant for a while), but I've never really explored podcasting before. What all does it entail exactly in the case of yours? Is it like a platform for writers to spotlight / offer commentary on their work? Is it more of a writers' workshop / educational venture to give advice to newer writers? Or is it just "a bunch of dudes bullshitting and occasionally it's about a ponefic or two?"

(also I write smut almost exclusively so I dunno if that's a disqualifier?)

>>28561648
The weird thing is they keep getting better? Like, the first one was alright but not amazing, and I can totally understand not liking it, but somehow they improve each time. I dunno, they might be worth giving a shot next time you have a couple of hours to kill, they're not even an hour and a half each.

Does anyone else go through all the new popular stories and dislike them, hoping to knock them back down to mediocrity?

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>>28562376

>>28550303
>>28551201
I've read through all of them now except for the final volume.

I think the final one is my favorite so far, just because it's all about the peace afterwards and it's so cozy and cute.

>>28558587
go back to /b/. you can post actual horsepussy there

Trump bump

If scilight came to Equestria, would she have wings?

>>28563575
Doubt it, she'd probably still be a unicorn, unless whatever it is that happened to her in the previous movie altered her in some way, though I couldn't say that'd be similar to ascension.

>>28563575
Well, she got wings when she ponied-up in EqG4. which is fucking bullshit btw So I wouldn't be surprised if she also had them after going through the mirror. Because fuck consistency and fuck worldbuilding, pretty pink/purple princesses are what sells, so cram some more into the show at whatever cost.

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Tell me, Anon.
Are you working on a story?

>>28565128
Yes.

>>28565150
Well, I wish you the best, Anon.

>>28556394
Are you me? All of my pony-steam is gone, man. It really sucks.

>>28558587
Continue writing non-pony projects. Surf Derpibooru. Same old, same old.

Name a story you absolutely LOVED, from beginning to end.

And a story that makes you nostalgic.

>>28565894
>story you absolutely LOVED, from beginning to end.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/326560/discourse-on-fillies
A little on the shorter, but I did really enjoy all three acts of it.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/18087/the-best-night-ever
A nice blend of funny and emotional and is strong the whole way. If only he would finish the sequel.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/234937/fractured-sunlight
I'm still on the fence about whether it's the best Sunset fic of all time (Long Road is really good too), but it was more consistently good than Long Road, and I really did love the whole thing, from the initial handling of the premise, to the evolution of the story/relationships between characters that went past but still included the premise, to the ending drama.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/141549/the-celestia-code
I don't care what anybody says, this was a fun romp from beginning to end.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/34029/best-young-flyer
Another fic that is consistently good, with not much in the way of ups and downs.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/284137/a-gay-old-time
Every chapter is funny in a slightly different way, keeping the story fresh and making me laugh from start to finish.

>story that makes you nostalgic.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/48108/statistics
One of the first "literary" stories I read, that made me see that ponyfic could be "profound" and "avant-garde" (in hindsight, it was really just an interesting concept executed well, but at the time, this was my first exposure to non-standard storytelling).

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/5921/eternal
First fic to ever make me cry, although how much of that was out of pure emotional exhaustion from slogging through that pile of verbose feels in questionable.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/22706/aurora
The first multi-chapter story I ever read, it showed me that horsewords could be dark and handle mature topics like murder, and also introduced me to shipping.

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>>28565980
>First fic to ever make me cry
First fic that made me cry bitch tears was Background pony, like... shit four years ago now? I think it was four.

>>28565894
>Name a story you absolutely LOVED, from beginning to end.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/3513/keeping-it-simple
Always. There's something about this story that just makes me happy all this years later.
Here's hoping the sequel lives up to the original.

>And a story that makes you nostalgic.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/74679/treating-her-right
This is the story that made me like AppleDash back in the day. Good times.

>>28566094
>http://www.fimfiction.net/story/3513/keeping-it-simple
I still maintain that KiS was the most depressing pone story Ive ever read

>>28565894

>a story you absolutely LOVED, from beginning to end

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/19308/the-rummy-business-of-old-blooey

A brilliant melding of Wodehouse's signature style and humor with a pony setting, this story had me laughing throughout. It's one of the only comedies I've re-read which held up just as well years later as it did when I first saw it.

>a story that makes you nostalgic

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/182859/its-a-dangerous-business-going-out-your-door

Tolkien and ponies - what more could you (I) want? I remember how excited I'd get when a new chapter came out, and how I'd stop whatever I was doing to read it. That story was tailor-made for me, and it was a blast.

>>28561890
It's a bunch of drunks talking ponies taking questions from different users.

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>>28566700
>It's a bunch of drunks talking ponies taking questions from different users.
Sounds like a lovely way to pass the time.
What happens if I don't drink?

>>28566394
You know things are going great when your "heppy ending" is basically Big Mac giving everyone the finger and moving to Canterlot to live with a crazy mare who would have been the villain in any other story.

That being said, I'm actually really looking forward to the sequel and am hoping it doesn't take as long to finish as the first story did.

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>>28565128
yes

>>28562376
Not worth the effort. Usually, I'll only dislike a story if it's either offensively bad or infuriatingly overrated. Especially if it's both. I absolutely cannot hit the dislike button hard enough if it's a piece of shit that happens to be popular.

>>28565128
I'm doing a CYOA. I imagine it'll be one of the most fun things I've ever written.

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I am writing this post to send some well-meaning motivational energy to all struggling writers out there. Here: \T/

Also, I propose an experiment of sorts. I'm going to try to write either a short story or a chapter or two tonight. I'll post it on pastebin, then upload to Fimfiction later on.

If I fail to write something substantial (full story / complete chapter or two, a few thousand words) by 7 AM Eastern Time, y'all can pile on me and punish/insult me as you see fit. What do you guys think?

>>28568048
If you haven't gotten to the point where people calling you a retarded autistic faggot 5000 times doesn't make you laugh instead of feel bad, you haven't been on 4chan long enough.

>>28568048
>y'all can pile on me and punish/insult me as you see fit.
we can do that either way regardless of whether you write something or not, homo

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chapter 1, page 1, paragraph 1
/dropped
its a new record

>>28568149
>it is with my sincerest regrets that I must tell you the tale
>this terrible story
>this horrible tale
>my immortal

It is as if his subconscious is trying to tell him that this story sucks and that he shouldn't be posting it.

>>28568113
>>28568144

Eh, I'm just trying to experiment or whatnot. Trying to get motivated and all that. Couldn't come up with anything better.

I'll still try to write something up, maybe.

>>28568149
Happened to me only once.

>apparently famous fic
>tagged with gore
>can't be too bad, right?
>first few pages detailed descriptions of ponies brutally eviscerating each other, as well as Celestia and Luna as murderous weapons of mass destructions in some kind of pony civil war

Ok, nope. Don't care what "good" reviews it gets.

How can I make this more 'nasty' tentacle monster? Not rape, but bloody, gory, nasty.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/347337/we-is

>>28568208

comments -> https://docs.google.com/document/d/176gmrRnKSgcwzH3vuTk7zPC46_P4bUe1KRlzBAqaLIU/edit?usp=sharing

>>28568208
>not rape tentacles
You disgust me.

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Alright guys, about a year ago I wrote a story about Anon being a succubus pony due to creepy grandmother shenanigans, here:

http://pastebin.com/BLH9fRXY

My question is, would anyone be interested in me continuing it?

>>28568250
I mean it's gonna walk into that town, find somepony on their lonesome who's away from pying eyes, then murder-eat-rape the ever living fuck out of em so....

Do you want sexualized rape tentacles?

>>28562376
No, I'm not that bitter.

I only downvote fics I've read that are either shit or pissed me off.

>>28565980
>executed well
Thanks. I still think I could have tied all the statistics together better to make a tighter narrative.

>>28568208
>virus
>killed most living creatures
It's not doing a very good job at reproducing then if all its hosts die. Also, the faster it kills, the less likely it is to become a pandemic.

How does it spread? It would almost certainly have to be airbourn, as body fluids get nowhere once proper sanitation and quarantine are used (see: ebola).

How can a virus create life, let alone have some kind of malicious intent/evil plan? It's a microscopic thing that corrupts cells' DNA to spread.

I'm only nitpicking because it's a grimdark fic and has to pass through the fire.

>>28568399
The guy writing that story isn't the one who came up with that virus, i.e. the premise for the whole AU, so I wouldn't recommend blaming any flaws or inconsistencies on him.

>>28568301
_no

>>28568399
>I'm only nitpicking because it's a grimdark fic and has to pass through the fire.

>desu post-apoc Equestria isn't ever done well.
I only wrote the story to put my self in the drawing for dat free art

>>28568301
There's always a "no" in the middle of writing "Anon."

>>28568149
You made it all the way to the end of the paragraph?
You're a stronger man than I am.

>>28568301
Try the writefag's guild, if they're up.

>>28569240
not really. got about halfway through the chapter before saying fuck it

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When will the next chapter of Article 2 drop?

>>28569834
some quick and dirty math says march '17

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>>28570187
Well, it's come around... eventually

Could I ask some of you learned anons to critique a short thing I wrote for another thread? I'd like to be a real writefag, but I seldom see anything I feel able to write, so I don't get a lot of practice. It didn't exactly get a lot of attention, so pretty much anything would be useful. Also, I'm fairly sure it's not that good, I just can't pin down why, so I'm not going to scoff at any criticism. Thanks

>>28570249
Sure

>>28570256
domo, anon

>>28569426

>>28570281
Well, it's not exactly a story, so I'm not exactly sure how to critique it, but I'll try
You nailed Twilight's character, and that's basically the most important point of the letter
The sentences are kind of robotically short for the most part though, a few longer sentences would have been nice, if only for variety
The prose itself is also just kind of "eh", it's mostly just "this happened, then that happened, and then another event happened", which is especially jarring when Twilight describes her feelings
I know purple prose is looked down upon, but some descriptions in place of "I felt x" would make it much better (Something like "As I recalled all of the times we helped each other, even when we didn't realize we needed it, I noticed my eyes watering" flows better in my opinion)

>>28570377
Thanks, that really is helpful. It occurs to me now that a lot of the mistakes you outlined were me "telling" and not "showing," which is something I need to be more cognizant of in the future. As for the sentence length, I deliberately tried to keep that down a.) to keep with the style of the show's writing but also b.) because I personally have a nasty habit of drawing sentences out into paragraphs. Good to know that that isn't something to so rigorously avoid in the future. Good tips, thanks again, anon.

futaloo

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>>28568149
What story is this?

>>28572651
insanity my immoral enemy going by the url

horsepussy

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>wanting to turn an 800000 word incomplete deadfic into a hardcover because past sins

>>28574718
If anything, that means it'll update soon, right?
R-right?

>>28575345
He says that later. But hes also been saying that for 2 years now.
I'm not holding my breath

>>28574718
>didn't exist in 2012
Why wouldn't you just put it as the first comment? I thought that was the standard back in the day.

>CMC Fly Delta Airlines
I could see this a crackficcy oneshot, but why is it a multichapter story?

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>>28576098
>I could see this a crackficcy oneshot, but why is it a multichapter story?
people do all kinds of dumb things on fimfiction. why should this guy be any different?

>Why wouldn't you just put it as the first comment?
or an AN at the bottom of the page was pretty popular too before the an box come into existence. sounds like hes just migrating it from the end of the chapter to the box where its supposed to be

>>28576151
shit i just noticed thats part of a shit sounding verse too

Page 9 because too busy to wait for page 10 bump

page 10

No shit - what's the greatest pony fiction ever?

>>28578098
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/336121/the-religion-of-peace

No shit. I enjoyed this story more than any other I've read.

>>28578098
Through the Well of Pirene.

>>28578340
Couldn't get past the first chapter, to be honest.

>>28578294
Looks like a period piece. Won't last the generation desu.

>>28578098
That's kinda tough to determine, isn't it?
Do you narrow it by genre or try to make an overall guess?
Can the best pony comedy fic stack against the best sadfic out there?

>>28578499
I just want something that runs like a professional literary work honestly.
Surely out of the mass blob of works something out there exceeds the connotation of 'fanfiction'.

>>28578098
Maybe The Best Night Ever or Sunflower based on how much I liked it.
Pirene on the other hand could have easily been published as a 'real' fantasy book, so I suppose if you consider fanfiction to be inherently worse, then it's the top of fanfiction.

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I thought these didn't happen anymore.

>>28578772
Works for me.

>>28578792
Yeah, it sorted itself out. I just had to refresh twice.

Boy that sure sent me back. The red background is new, though.

>>28578806
I stumble on them from time to time by curiosity.

For example this link always derpies out: https://www.fimfiction.net/news/0

>>28578393
Gets better des sempai

>>28578098
Murky Number Seven

>>28578558
Hmm... Salvation, maybe? The story of how two very different people react to/recover from traumatic events and an exploration of their sexualities and the evolution of their relationship seems like the type of things that would win awards I don't care about.

Discourse on Fillies also seems like the kind of thing one might read in English class, where you might be expected to write essays on how each character's backstory/personality explains their worldview and some stuff about metaphors and comparisons between the themes discussed in chapter 2 and the events of chapter 3.

I'm sure there are others, but I can't think of any at the moment. Probably some of CiG's other works and possibly some of the writeoff.me stories.

>>28579198
Will check these out.

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>>28579275

>>28578558
Depends on your criteria for "professional literary work honestly." There's a lot of crap on the shelves nowadays, and as a result tons of fanfics are better than a lot of stuff in your local bookstore. I mean, it's not hard to imagine a fantasy story better than the Inheritance Cycle (aka the Eragon books by Christopher Paolini) or a romance fic that's Still A Better Love Story Than Twilight.

Pirene, Dangerous Business, The Dusk Guard Saga, Twilight Sparkle of the Royal Guard, Flight of the Alicorn, Sunset of Time, The Celestia Code, The Sisters Doo, One Last Quest, Children of the Sun, these stories are all better than a lot of published Fantasy-Adventure stories.

The Prince of Dust, Twice as Bright, Her Majesty's Secret Service, Fractured Sunlight, University Days, Eyes on You, The Gentle Nights: Audience of One, Salvation, The Diamond in the Stars, these are all better than the typical book found in the "Romance" section of your local bookstore.

Long Road, Hocus Pocus, and Fractured Sunlight would blow most YA novels out of the water.

I could go on, but my point is that literature is dead, drowned in a sea of garbage indistinguishable from fanfiction.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xaDknBpqZSo&feature=youtu.be
Rainbow Blubber by Defacatus Piccolitus

People ask for the weirdest shit.

>>28579462
Isn't that one of Bleedin's alts?

>>28579275
I'm sorry anon, but I'm going to have to ask you to give you're pass back.
This is not VIP quality.

>>28579134
This. It made more of an emotional impact on me than anything else.

>>28579504
Hell if I know.

The guy who requested it seems more calm and collected then Bleedin.

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>>28579572
Couldn't say for sure...
I liked Vernacular Torture, though.

>>28579504
>Isn't that one of bleedins alts?

Everyone is bleedin.

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>>28579619
That would be a terrific homebrew.

>>28579342
I meant as in the 'literary fiction', distinguished from 'genre fiction'. At least as those two terms are commonly understood. This might sound stupid considering it's pony fiction and all.
>literature is dead
Eh, there was and always will be a majority of crap.

Can someone remind me of the quite popular/lengthy story where Luna stayed in power instead of Celestia and raised Twilight (or possibly Trixie) to be her emissary?
Can't recall much else other than the story was a bit dark. The uni protag might have also been picked up from an orphanage or something instead.
Last time I read it was at least 3 years ago.

>>28580765
Oh and its not the Lunaverse one-shot fic series.

>>28576151
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Japan_Airlines_Flight_123

>>28578806
500 and 502 are different kinds of errors.
500: there's a bug in the server code, it tried to do something invalid (like divide by zero, or read a database entry that doesn't exist) and crashed
502: server is overloaded, there are too many requests coming in and it can't handle them all

>>28580765
Sounds like Night's Favoured Child, the famous deadfic
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/5523/nights-favoured-child

>>28581157
>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/5523/nights-favoured-child
That's it. Thank you friend!

>>28580919
I dont see the correlation to that wiki link and the story referred

>you write well technically but you can't come up with a good idea to save your own life
Anyone else like this?

>>28537505
I would start the Conversion Bureau genre.

>>28582817
>>28537751
Would you do as other-anon and do so badly in order to prevent cancerous fads from starting, or would you be trying to do it right?

>>28582788
opposite here.

>>28583623
Have you ever read the original fic "The Conversion Bureau"? It was already done badly. Didn't stop Chatoyance from running with it.

>>28578098
Mendacity.

>>28578558
MENDAAAACIIIITYYYYY!!!

>>28582788
Fucking yes.

;_;

So I'm doing this CYOA where the audience gets to be Joffrey Baratheon in Equestria. (I know it's dumb, but it's the fun-to-write kind of dumb.) It's struck quite a few nerves, and I don't see why it would other than the fact that Joffrey is the protagonist. Could you guys maybe look it over and tell me what autism buttons I'm pressing?

Chapter 1:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NRY-6w_eYs5h3R4tSHceBZSztyJ0Eb8-AzGYcjVzY1o/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter 2:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1eG-37ZP9sxClsu0sZNsuITGcsUulnnLqRN7KagAwqsI/edit?usp=sharing

>>28585353
There are better threads for this.

>>28585371
This CYOA is on Fimfiction.

>>28585222
mendacity could have easily done well as original fiction by changing a few names. dude sold himself short by making that fanfiction. same for pirene honestly

i want to try and write some fetish clop, but ive never written clop before. wat do

>>28585990
Have sex.
You can't write believable clop otherwise.

>>28586007
i don't think i'm gonna have sex with a parasite work that crawls in the end of your dick, so i think i'm safe to write about it w/o experiencing it

>>28586013
you cant write what you dont know. now go jam a tapeworm in your dick and see if it gets you off

>>28586034
This.

>>28586034
mind control dick parasite that tries to spread itself...

don't think that exists IRL

>>28586059
Just take some acid before you do it.

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>>28586007
>>28586034
I feel like we've had this discussion before.

>>28586284
we've been doing this for 175+ threads now.

we've had every discussion before. repeatedly

>>28586284
If you've never died before and you get it wrong, it's fine, because most people haven't died before, so they won't know the difference.

Sex is a slightly more common occurrence. In fact, there's probably tens of thousands of people having sex right this instant somewhere in the world.

>>28585990
Think about what it would take to turn you on, and what you would want to see if you were reading it. Write that.

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So just a heads up- we gonna need a standby overnight bump guy.


'cause even if I dont die its highly likely my internet connection will

so whats everyone else doing tonight?

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>>28586349
>implying anyone in this community has ever had sex
The only person qualified to write about fucking mares in this thread is Regidar,