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Futaloo get.

>>26777560
Should've waited for >>26777777

>>26777523
>eating yogurt without hooves
I'm sorry what

>>26777523
>transformation
Fucking dropped!

>>26777567
the joke is nobody has ever gotten a futaloo get so there would be no point if I tried to go for it

>>26777582
What?

>>26777583
If the get is in any way related to Scootaloo, I'll hold you responsible.

>>26777628
Read the book nerd.

>>26777560
futaloo get buried. cause that bitch be dead. go harass TDAif youre so desperate to get some more marecock. or hit up confusedGoyim if a futabloom is fine too

>>26777571
it was a brief sidebar in which we discussed images on derpoboori that appeared to be ponies messily eating what we can only assume to be yogurt by sucking it through really thick straws that were nearly as thick as their legs

>>26777957
What?

>>26778075
>it was a brief sidebar in which we discussed images on derpoboori that appeared to be ponies messily eating what we can only assume to be yogurt by sucking it through really thick straws that were nearly as thick as their legs

No, Anon. Me and someone else talked about eating yogurt WITH hooves.

>>26778079

yeah I just caught that after hitting 'post'. it should be eating yogurt with hooves, because eating it without hooves is an entirely different thing altogether.

twas a fun conversation

>>26778075
It's right there you, you, DOUBLE NIGGER!

>>26778107
What?

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>>26778107

>>26777523

Has anyone noticed that all the mature tagged stories are gone?

>>26778129
try logging in

>>26778139

>making an account

>>26778144
ok check your setting to ensure 'show mature' is checked

page 8 afk bump

>>26776079

Just use normal spells and ramp them up like TSG said. The crystal spell showed by Twilight and Starlight seems pretty promising to be messed with.

Bumping for pone equivalent to Hungary again.

Other than Ponegary.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/319618/no-spell-for-that

I had originally written this off as unneeded LGBT stupidity, but after giving it a chance, I can say, without a doubt, that it's Pretty good.

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>>26779460
For what purpose?

This if Fimfiction, not YourmouthpiecetosaywhateveryouliberalcuckslikeaboutgenderandlgbtstuffFiction.

So I finally read Second Singularity, which had been in my read later list for ages.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/242424/second-singularity

Holy fuuuck that was a trip. I would highly recommend it if you're here for anything other than clopfics

>>26779866
Bump

>>26779467

I looked at that picture for just 10 seconds and now I'm autistic.

Thanks.

>>26780893
i enjoy it when you can look at something that retarded and immediately know how it ends, thus saving yourself from having to read it

>>26781003
Though its an antiabortion fic written by a religious guy and has a tragedy tag so maybe princess celery lets the little whore fix her mistake after all

Oh darn, 404 fimfiction again.

>>26782364
I'm not getting any problem. It's loading just fine.

>>26782426
Anonymous just wanted an excuse to bump the thread.

Do you ever hope Voicefag uploads something, and it's just him singing a song with that deep voice of his?

>>26782631
Voicefag has a deep voice to you?

>>26782669
He doesn't to you?

>>26782716
How hich is the concentration of helium in the air where you live?

>>26782746
How would you describe it?

bimp

>>26781465
I've heard that he actually portrayed both sides fairly.

>>26782898
Not that Anon, but I'd say it's pretty average. Definitely not deep.

>>26782898
It's almost as a kind middle school teacher that doesn't get paid enough.
And slightly nasal.

>>26783361
There was no one for abortion whatsoever, and the girl was kidnapped during her abortion of a rape baby.

>Be me
>Helping kiddies do homework for volunteering
>A kid tells me to draw something
>Draw Twilight as well as I can
>Oh, I watch MLP too
>Twi is my favorite pone
>She watched all the episodes up to S5
>Hyped for S6
>Ask her if she liked the finale
>It was ok
>Give her a sum-up of NH
>What do you think?
>Pretty cool
>Realize I'm on the same level as a fifth grade girl

Whew.

>>26777523
Nyx

>>26783705
Hey, that's awesome, she seems to have pretty good taste. I'd be friends with her.
Teach her about sex.

>>26783705
>>26783749
Conversely, learn about sex.

Why aren't you writing right now?

>>26783361
More like he tried to, except he can't really get away from his biases. But at least he tried.

>>26784492
Need to take another crack at Logarius in Bloodborne.

>>26784492
I have three different ideas and no motivation to do anything.

>>26784533

I don't know if I'd give him that much credit. I think he was so sure he had abortion figured out that he just assumed he understood exactly what everyone else in the world was thinking, and that they weren't as smart as him. I mean, his original A/N was

>This is a parable of truth & morality so everyone can learn something from this. Whether you are Pro-choice, Pro-life, or uncertain about your stance, there were three main lessons that was taught. What are these 3 lessons?

Does that SOUND like someone who's trying? It sounds to me like a self-important twat.

But hell, he got his horse-infamy, which I'm sure is what he wanted. Go him, I guess.

>>26777560
Daily reminder that futaloo get will never get a get.

>Look up military tactics so I don't look like an armchair general
>its no where near as complicated as people make it out to be

>>26784492
Give me a break, I wrote like five sentences this morning.

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>>26785219
Have some bonus tips, anon, for what it's worth.

[And now Captcha insists a horse trailer is a Recreational Vehicle.]

>>26785581
I'm not doing any of that bullshit AOL CISCO TANGO WIHISTY LALAs.

I just wanted order of command and general battle strategy.

>>26785581
>>26785932
I always find it funny that the military talk like memester teenager
>VIP AWL, LIA!

>>26785219
Not in the broad/general sense, but once you look into how things go on a deep tactical level, military operations can be very complicated. Especially modern day operations.

>>26785581
>Captcha insists a horse trailer is a Recreational Vehicle.
well a horsefucker like you could have a lot of fun in the back of one, so technically it is

>>26784492
Fictional research paper on magic. I've got the abstract and introduction done, though I'll probably have to rewrite them once I finish the paper. Currently inventing a new notation to describe spells and the associated equations governing their actions. I'm not entirely happy with the notation I've come up with but I think I can use it to describe any spell in the show and it looks technobabbly enough.

>>26787035
Why!

>>26787035
I'm with >>26787156
why would you want or need to write a fictitious, technobabble filled research paper?

>>26787156
>>26787174
Because I've always wanted to write a paper and my IRL research is likely at least a year from that, assuming it doesn't crash and burn, in which case it'll probably be a few years before I publish something.

Also, it's really fun doing math and coming up with nomenclature rules for stuff that's completely unrelated to my studies.

>>26787196
How about this? Write it as unicorn Twilight Sparkle, in the first person. Frame it in one of her magical studies. Then it'll at least appeal to someone.

Wat voicefage nat even a youtub on sant patties day

goddamnit voiefage it patty day, green is mean.

Wtf am I typing.

>>26787346
Bleedin, you could be a nice person and keep writing enjoyable stuff, or you could be a tripfag. Choose one.

>>26787379
I thought it would be funny.

Guess not.

>>26776893
>Of course losing the Golden Oak Library was hard for you too
Fun fact: it wasn't until after the library was destroyed that it was actually mentioned by name.

>>26783705
Could be worse. You could have told the Dean of your college's English Department you're a fan of the show.

>>26785581
>using acronyms in dialogue without the reader knowing what they mean
Pretty bad idea.

>weapon jamming
Reminder to never use guns unless you're going to devote a substantial amount of time to worldbuilding them.

>>26787592
>Reminder to never use guns
who said anything about guns? I take it youve never had a spear jam at a critical time. :^)

>>26787822
>Try to launch spear af filthy mudponeh
>Roll a 1
>Fuck FUCK FUCK
>Your horn jams critically, the bullet exploding and damaging your arm
>Limp away from filthy mudponeh, who rolled a 12 for initiative

>>26786055
I don't, it's there to relay commands quicker and as clearly as possible.

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>>26787896
>thief
>roll to steal their initiative
>20

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>>26785219
Play some Wargame. Any of them. Already complicated, and that's barely division level.

Just don't go into "Military=Evil" and Sergeant Kilgore stereotypes. The army is already in enough trouble for now.

>>26785581
>No Art of War

Come on, anon, that's one of the best books ever written.

>>26785219
Might I suggest "Tigers in the Mud" as a book to read too? Pretty good one, and includes plenty of combat documents, from casualty lists to newspaper cuts about the author.

For ranks and organization, that's easy. Platoons, Companies, Battalion, Divisions and finally Armies led by normal soldiers, Captain/Majors, Colonels, Generals. And no, Generals don't go on the field. Colonels are maximum rank on the field.

>>26785932
That's very into command and battle strategy. "Foxtrot company, moving into AO, over". That's a basic command for "F company is going into the area of operations, I finished my communication and am expecting an answer". AOL CISCO WHIHISTY LALAs are just memes spread by pop "Battle Biographies". Just learn the phonetic alphabet, basic radio replies and some abbreviations, and you'll be fine.

And one last thing. War is grey. No black, definitely no white, only grey. What I mean is that war is a complicated matter, where you have brotherhood, honor, psychopaths, war crimes, rapes, murders and good moments all mixing together. No side is completely good or bad, and there isn't any complete glory in war. If you write war as a white and black matter, that's just stupid.

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>>26789219

But he's writing about war, not business leadership...

>>26787346
I actually did look around for a good 'Irish' fic, but the best I could find was too long, and was just a pointless lyrabonbon shipfic

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New to the thread here, but nonetheless an avid fanfic reader.

I'm wondering if there is some tool out there that can convert Fimfiction stories into Epub files while preserving their formatting.

And if there isn't I'm tempted to write a script to do that, and is gauging for interest.

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>>26789513

>>26789675
>while preserving their formatting

Fimfiction's native epub file completely butchers the original formatting, compare chapter 2 of this fic with the epub version: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/59880/schemering-sintel

>>26783705
>NH
Goddamnit, just type the whole thing out. Now I'm going to be wondering all day what "NH" stands for and wanting to kill myself for not remembering.

>>26789717
Naked Horsewomen.

duh hes writing an epic eqg clopfic

>>26789675
>>days of a wasp and spider
muh zigger.

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I had an idea for the Superstorm Shared Story.

It's probably not an ideal solution, and it would require a considerable reorganization of the outline, but I think it would also streamline the writing and help with the focus of the story.

Let's have only 8 slightly long chapters for the first stage. Each chapter would focus on the journey of one of the Mane 6, plus the Princesses and Spike.

So, for example, the first chapter would be about Twilight and it would cover all of the time from the moment she hears about the superstorm until just before it hits, but just from her point of view. So we would have her insight of the problem, but not all the pieces. We'd only be able to see the whole picture once we read the other chapters.

I think this could be used as a way to condense the number of chapters in the first stage, and keep each part interesting.

But again, it's just an idea. What do you think?

>>26789219
Art of War says that actual battle is a last ditch effort and you should always try to avoid it, so I don't think it would help him write modern military.

>>26789733
Because it's such an obscure and underrated fic that nobody in this thread has heard about.

>>26789987
Who's writing what right now?

>>26790439
We're still hammering the outline.

Oh, and the other reason I think something like what I proposed could work better is because that way we can avoid conflict of characterization. If someone chooses to write a chapter with AJ on it and then someone else chooses another chapter that features her, the different styles could be a problem, but if someone simply writes the whole chapter that deals with AJ's side of the plot, then that would be avoided.

>>26788704
I am so doing this in the next game I play.

>>26789513
>>26789675
https://github.com/JimmXinu/FanFicFare
>>26789987
Sounds cool.
Now we just have to decide what the fuck will be Applejack doing.
>>26790419
That's a pretty timeless fact. War can be terribly hard to stop once it starts.

>>26791360
A guy made a CYOA adventure series about a thief on /v/ back when I was still lurking that place. One time, when a guard asked them what they're doing there, and they stole his badge and asked him what HE'S doing there. I've been obsessed with this kind of bullshittery since.

>>26790419
Yes it is. You're not going to go into a battle if you can capture their commander or force them to surrender.

>>26791447
I wasn't disagreeing?

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>>26791405
Fuck, I forgot to talk about FanFicFare's adventages over Fimfiction's own epub option
>Downloads images, instead of just having them linked to the online source (Which is pretty cool if you want to download for when there isn't internet conection, the main reason I do it)
>Has description, category, and in general all information of the fic
>Keeps all formatting
Pic related. I don't get why is that Knighty hasn't integrated fimfiction with the online version of FanFicFare, it can't be so hard to do.

ruh

OPEN THE CURTAINS
SINGING BIRDS
TELL ME "TEAR THE BUILDINGS DOWN"

>>26789513

https://fimfetch.net/

Also has .mobi downloads for all your FIMFic needs, both of which preserve formatting, author's notes, and story descriptions.

>>26791452
>>26791405
That's precisely what I needed, thanks!

>>26793512
Well, now I'm torn between the two. Does this also package external images into the fic?

>>26793554

Yes, it does. I prefer the search engine because I don't have to download anything to use it. But, if you're already going through calibre or something, using the extension is probably quicker. Really, they both get the job done fine, it just depends on how you want to go about doing it.

>>26793620
>>26793554
I just did some checking, Fimfetch still uses external links for images placed inside chapters, so an internet connection is still needed to view them.
I tried to test the same fic on FanFicFare but it keeps returning 404 errors on the fic.

>>26793694
Weird, it works fine for me. Did you check the standalone version?

>>26793765
Nope, I don't use Calibre so I just used the online app.

>>26793796
Oh, then download python, pip, and use "Pip install fanficfare" in CMD. The whole thing should be ready to use in a minute.
https://github.com/JimmXinu/FanFicFare/wiki

>>26793820
Cheers, I'll try that.

>>26793820
Pssst--
Got an link for those downloads?

>>26794339
Python is at https://www.python.org/ftp/python/2.7.11/python-2.7.11.msi . It should come with Pip preinstalled.

>>26789733
I tried reading it once (like, three years ago) and couldn't get past the first couple chapters for reasons I can't remember

when does it git gud? or am I just hopeless?

>>26794416
My main problem with DoWaS is that the technobabble, while good, can be just too much too often.
A standard scene opens with two paragraphs of technobabble before any character says anything.

>>26794438
can't possibly compare to Twilight Makes First Contact

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>>26794411

Curious, trying to test FanFicFare on most stories resulted in error like this: http://pastebin.com/kDJCcMmy

Tested with The Wind Thief by Cold in Gardez

>>26794881 (me)
Nvm, found the fix for the issue here: https://github.com/JimmXinu/FanFicFare/issues/118

However, the images contained in the chapters are still externally linked, is there a setting I have to modify somewhere?

>>26794416
Honestly I was pretty much sold when I saw the title for the first chapter ("Pony in a Particle Accelerator"). The first couple paragraphs (about the Pattern and shit) just sealed it. I fucking love hard scifi, and this is pretty much the hardest scifi known to fimfiction.

It does start out pretty slow, as I recall. First few chapters are background/worldbuilding kind of stuff (important, given it's a pretty extreme AU). Fusion's "thaumic excursion" is around chapter 5, then a few more chapters before she figures out what actually happened. After that she tries sneakan for a while, then around chapter 20 it starts getting into the "violence and explosions" part of the story.

Book 2 is a lot heavier on the "violence and explosions" front, if that's your thing.

>>26789675
>Time is measured in kiloseconds
For what purpose was this in the story, other than to be a complete annoyance for 5 chapters? Yeah sure, after a while converting became seamless, but it still makes no fucking sense. There are even parts where the author got confused about conversions and messed up.

>>26795088
I liked it cause I'm a turbonerd.

Anyway it's not that hard to keep straight.
> kilosecond: 1 hour = 3600 seconds, so 1 kilosecond is between 15 and 20 minutes (1/4 and 1/3 of an hour)
> gigasecond: 1 year = 3.15e7 seconds, so 1 gigasecond is something like 35 years
The only one I had to think about was megasecond, which is about 2 weeks.

>>26795201
Yeah but it's stupid and has literally no place in the story.

>>26795233
It's a reminder of what sort of world the story's set in. And anyway it's not that hard to do rough conversions.
> kiloseconds = minutes
> megaseconds = days
> gigaseconds = decades
And that's about all the precision you actually need to know what's going on.

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>>26794933
>>26794881
...weird, I just tested with http://www.fimfiction.net/story/320827/luck-of-the-lyrish (Randomly picked from the front page) and its working fine. Try opening the epub with 7zip or changing its extension to zip, there should be a folder with the images. Pic related.
>>26795258
>>26795233
>>26795201
>>26795088
In all honesty: Its a world that makes no sense. It makes no motherfucking sense no mater how you look at it.
We measure time based in predictable paterns, like night/day or moon cycles or something. We don't measure them with computer-based systems that require relatively complex machinery (Because lets admit it, even the most basic of timers os pretty damn complex and far beyond what most people understands) because we need to have measuring systems to have said machinery. Having kiloseconds and such assumes that somehow the people of that world invented computers before naming time, which is pretty twisted no mater how you look at it. And how do you program computers that measure time without having some time measure beforehand?
Also, no medium point between day->decade? Where are the years in there? Leaps in measuring scales need to be somewhat progresive, not jumping from unit A which has the given value of 1 to unit B which has the given value of 3650?
I love DoWaS, don't get me wrong, but the time measurement is a masive fuck up in worldbuilding.

>>26795353
>but the time measurement is a masive fuck up in worldbuilding.
i hate it when that happens. worldbuilding is great, but whenever someone decides to try to make up new colors, languages or numbering systems it usually just winds up full retard try hardism.

I shouldnt have to do mental math to figure out it took 3 hours for the group to walk from point A to point B

>>26795258
And also, how is kiloseconds=minutes?
Kilo means thousand, hence kilogram=a thousand grams. A kilosecond should be, speaking roughly, about... a bit above twenty minutes. We are leaping from a second to twenty minutes here.
Then there is megaseconds, and mega is iirc a thousand thousand AKA million, which is about ten days.
So here we have
>Second -> Twenty minutes ->Ten days and a bit ->A fucking decade
Incremental leaps of this kind are fine for digital data because by the time we are using the next scale in a regular basis, we will have masively bigger storage, but for everyday things like, well, fucking time, the better is to have smaller leaps.
>>26795419
Yeah, the only people who makes new time systems are mathematicians who seem to think that people will give a fuck and actually make the math every time they want to know how long will take the food to be done.

>>26795353
The dogs seem a little robotic in general, what with all the "this one" / "the pony" in place of pronouns. I don't have any problem with them choosing a single time unit (based on, say, one heartbeat) and measuring everything in multiples of that.

>Where are the years in there?
Just add numbers. 100 megaseconds is somewhere around 3 years.

>>26795258
>>26795353
It's still fucking stupid.

>>26795518
>choosing a single time unit (based on, say, one heartbeat
a universal timing system based on a variable. awesome

>>26795731
To be fair, there are very few things that don't change depending on the situation, even time and space.

>>26795353
Tested again with the story you provided, still no image. Are you using the command line version too? Is it possible that I don't have the latest version?

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>>26796106
Yup.
There should be a fanficfare folder with defaults.ini inside, mine is at F:\Python27\Lib\site-packages\fanficfare. In it, search for "include_images". It'll appear several times (iirc one for html output and another for epub), make sure that all of them are set to true.
I had forgotten about this step because of how long its been since I set it up.

>>26796149
They were originally commented out as "# include_images:false"
I have uncommented and set it to true.

Annnnnnnd... that appears to did the trick. thanks!

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I read "Small Scale" today.

----

>Small Scale
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/314797/small-scale
>Drama, Slice of Life
>30,8k words

A female dragon mistakes Spike for an abandoned hatchling. She proceeds to snatch him up and take him to her home to be "properly cared for."

Pros:
-Despite being relatively short, it packs a nice dragon lore.
-The character of the female dragon who takes Spike (Celia) is really well developed, and you can somewhat sympathise with her.
-When realisation hits Celia, you can feel the dread building up in side of her.

Cons:
-This may be just me being jaded, but I felt the big reveals of later chapters were too rushed. Specially the last one, it would have benefitted greatly from a couple of extra paragraphs.

This is probably one of the better fics I've read lately. It's definitely an enjoyable read.
8/10

>>26789987
>until just before it hits
The only problem with this is that it would spoil the story. The reader would know Luna was successful in dealing with the tide, Dash and the Wonderbolts diverted the storm, etc. We could avoid that by intentionally making everyone ignorant of everyone else's plots, but I feel like that kind of breaks the story up and defeats the whole point of making a single story as opposed to a -verse. There's also the problem that Pinkie and Rarity share a subplot, so they'd either get separate ones or their subplot becomes really boring as it's entirely done from one's POV and then the reader has to endure it again from the other's.

It also greatly increases the risk of continuity issues if characters or subplots interact and potentially cause writer friction as one has to follow the "canon" the earlier one wrote for a particular scene.

>>26791405
>Applejack doing
I'm rather liking the food supply idea that was brought up earlier. Yeah, it plays into the APPLES APPLES APPLES thing, but I think it fits better than her current one.

>>26795258
>days
>decades
>no measurements that are less than a decade but more than a few days
Sounds like a pretty shitty time system if you ask me.

>>26795518
>Just add numbers.
That's kind of stupid, though. There's a reason we have increments in measurement.

>how old are you?
>oh, I'm 8,095 days old. Don't feel a day over 8,020, though

>you must be 6570 days old to post here
It doesn't roll off the tongue as well

page 10 yo

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>>26795353
>>26795419
I disagree, but I am more accuainted with why the time naming system exists. its not to add some neat fascet of trivialty, its to show what kind of mind set the dogs opperate under, which is very much stark, precise, and imposing.

I just want to take this time to say Vanca is basically the best minor character in the story so far. Anyone that disagrees can fellate a dildo made of blessing-stone.

>>26796809
>I'm rather liking the food supply idea that was brought up earlier.
AJ isn't just a farmer. She's also a builder.
What if she gathers other Apples and tries to help neighboring, smaller towns to get reasy for the storm by building shelters, barricades, and the like?

>>26798677
Also makes sense, but I think AJ should be in charge of food and shelter while Rarity is off sucking Canterlot cock for money to fund that stuff.

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>>26798677
>get reasy for the storm by building barricades
i could see her being dumb enough to do that

>>26798905
10/10

>>26798966
thanks. i do pride myself on my artistic abilities which are nearly as gooder as my writings

>>26800591
Holy fuck, barely made it. What are you fags doing, letting my thread die?

>>26800596
>What are you fags doing, letting my thread die?
>my thread
And you are?

>>26800621
I'm Hiroyuki Nishimura, the new owner of 4chan, secretly knighty's father and the legend behind many of the top-rated stories on Fimfiction under different alts.
Who are you?

>>26800655
I'm Scruffy. The janitor.

>>26800680
I'm so sorry please don't wipe all my boards ;_;

>>26796479
tried to read it and just couldn't, the way the mother dragon treated Spike was cringey rather than cute and just not very interesting to begin with

not to mention that the story was almost certainly going to "oh she actually WUZ spaiks mom!!!" or some equally cliched direction

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Posted it here before, but I released a chapter or two since.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/313296/the-unending-days-of-the-curse
Critism is always welcome, I'm always looking to improve myself.

>>26801921
>Connected to a deadfic.
Nice.

If you want criticism, it would be better if you posted a chapter or two on GDocs, enabled inline comments and posted it here.

>>26802431
I'm a mobilefag. I don't have that luxury.

>>26802950
Yeah, you do.

>>26802957
How?

>>26803020
By installing first a shitty google services APK that weights like 90 MB and then the shitty GDocs APK which weights like 50 MB.

>>26803124
>installing custom roms
>not using gapps just for youtube and gmail

>>26803249
>Custom roms
What? I have out-of-factory android.
And out-of-factory android is shit, let me add.
>not using gapps just for youtube and gmail

>Even using them for that
And there ain'0t no alternative to GDocs on android.

>>26803266
Gapps come pre-installed with Android.

Also gapps are required to use the market. Third part ones suck cock.

>>26800704
>the way the mother dragon treated Spike was cringey rather than cute
I can see that, although her overbearing behaviour was the point, as far as I could tell. To show how smothering Celia was so that the reveal of her motives would carry more of an impact.

>not to mention that the story was almost certainly going to "oh she actually WUZ spaiks mom!!!" or some equally cliched direction
It was actually much more straightforward, and rather obvious in my opinion.
She lost a child of her own due to ponies, which is why she took Spike away from a pony town.

>>26803124
Thanks, m8.

Anachronistic emerhgency bump 2.0.

>>26805748
that word does not mean what you think it means nigger

also your spelling sucks.

>>26806651
>that word does not mean what you think it means nigger
Anachronistic? It means that something is unaffected by time, at least to a certain degree. Like eating, you can't pin it down to any single historical period or context.
And thread was at page ten, my concern was in the thread not 404'ing rather than checking typos.

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>>26806683

>>26806743
Huh.
I only now noticed that I've heard the word used properly several times only this week, yet I never paid it any atention.
Weird.

Here's an updated version of the outline.

(https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vGKNrPm5jBz15EXIMdj2VmyHkMVVWSrlLGaSC-EoSl8/edit?usp=sharing)

I'm really thinking we should scale down the storm. Maybe not have it swing back in and hit Appleoosa, Canterlot, etc. It's already at 24 chapters + interludes, and the thing's not even hit Fillydelphia yet. It'd probably get near 70 if we had it go all the way to Ponyville.

There's also the possibility of actually killing Spike to consider.

>>26798677
I like it, but the only problem is I don't think there's really enough time for her to do much. Currently, the storm takes three days to hit and she'd barely be able to board up a small town's main street in that time.

>>26802950
How do you write if you don't have a computer?

>>26803124
>not buying a 20 gig microSD
>not jailbreaking so you can install apps to it
To be fair, I've been too lazy to jailbreak mine yet.

>>26807403
>actually killing Spike
No.
I absolutely fucking refuse to this.
Call me a Spikefag, but this feels too unfair to the poor guy. Fics either ignore him completely or kill him every single fucking time.

I was reading something, and noticed than in dialogue there is always a dot at the end of every phrase(["bla bla bla" she said. "bla"] as opposed to ["Bla bla bla" she said "Bla"]). I checked it in a few other stories to make sure it wasn't just a mistake of that particular writer, and it does seem to be a rule.
Was I missing this? Or is it a matter of choice?
Some day I need to pick up an English manual and read it from start to end. I may be able to speak it reasonably well but these little details keep escaping me.

>>26807494
Yes periods go at the end of sentences. Its kinda 'advanced' english so its not terribly surprising a non native speaker would get it.

advanced rules like that arent taught in public schools until something like grade 3, so youre not too far behind the curve, anon

>>26807412
This.

>>26807494
Read the writing guide, it's in the fucking OP and it explains this and similar things.

>>26807494
I'm not very well versed in foreign languages other than a few too many years spent on Spanish in school, so now I'm just sincerely curious, in what language do you not use periods at the end of sentences? It seems like such a universal rule.

>>26807494
Standard format is
> "Blah blah," she said. "Blah."
when she said two sentences, "Blah blah. Blah."

The less common form
> "Blah blah," she said, "blah."
is for when she said one sentence, "Blah blah blah."

>>26808787
It's only in written speech I presume. That's what we do in French, Spanish, Chinese, English, and, I guess, other languages.


>>26807494

The correct for would be "Blabla," she said, "Bla". I think. It's even written in Ezn's guide, which I hope every Fimfag read.

>>26808344
Even Autismo writes "decent" English, and he's a native French speaker. But again, most writers on Fimfic are probably just in or out of public highschool

>>26809251
My bad for the speech. It would be "Blabla," she said, "blah" if it's a single sentence, like >>26809198 said.

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>>26810093

page 10 again?

i was reading something, and noticed that there is always a big letter at the start of every line. i checked it in a few other stories to make sure it wasn't just a mistake of that particular writer, and it does seem to be a rule.
was i missing this? or is it a matter of choice?
some day i need to pick up an english manual and read it from start to end. i may be able to speak it reasonably well but these little details keep escaping me.

I was reading something, and noticed than there is always a dot at the end of every sentence(["Bla bla bla."] as opposed to ["Bla bla bla"]) I checked it in a few other stories to make sure it wasn't just a mistake of that particular writer, and it does seem to be a rule
Was I missing this? Or is it a matter of choice?
Some day I need to pick up an English manual and read it from start to end I may be able to speak it reasonably well but these little details keep escaping me

>>26811375

>a big letter at the start of every line.

If you mean a capital letter, then that's not something I've seen in prose. You often see it in poetry, though.

If you mean that the letter itself is in a larger font, then many stories do that at the start of chapters for essentially decorative purposes, but I've never seen it done for every individual line.

In either of those cases, I'd say that the use of "big letters" is wrong.

You guys going to give Kudzuhaiku some money?

https://pages.giveforward.com/emergency/page-l133p76/

>>26807403
I write on my phone. It's a pain, but it gets the job done. I just have to spend more time editing.

>>26811778
Christ, just buy an old second-hand netbook.

ARROWHEADS, ect.

>>26811375
>>26811569
Oh no
Don't make me a meme. I implore of you.
>>26808787
In Spanish dialogue is slightly different. Standard format is
[ -Bla bla bla- she said -bla?]
Always with hyphens and no point, because technically is all constitutes a single phrase. Or group, or blob, you get what I mean.
In all honestly, I'll always see hyphens as the "Proper" dialogue marker.

>>26813012
That's what we use in Polish as well, though I'm more used to the English format nowadays.
Actually, I wonder if any languages other than English actually use quotation marks in dialogue.

>>26813057
Similar to French.

-Blabla, she said, blah.

Although we also use quotation marks sometimes, as;

<<Blabla, she said, bla>>

Ye gramatically correct anachronistic propulsion of thread

Poste écrit dans la seule intention de promouvoir ce fil de discussion

>>26811602
literally who

>>26814779
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/kudzuhaiku

I managed to write 200 words today while ignoring the growing sense of disappointment inside of me.
What did you write today?

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>>26816438
I woke up at six PM feeling like shit, cleaned the dishes with nearly boiling water because last time I did was like a week ago, almost puked when I saw whatever was on the frying pan, made a quick stew, drank some orange juice, and wrote a short story inspired by pic related.
It was a nice day.

I LOVE
YOU
JESUS
CHRIST

>>26816514
>wrote a short story inspired by pic related.
Please share it.

have a story idea
>Twilight one day wakes up with "The Alicorn Curse"
>she considtently shirk her responsibilties to other ponies, communicates only in exposition dumps and always dissappears when something along the lines of "couldn't twilight just do [blank] herself?"
>her friends have to go find a cure

>>26817395
Great

Now Voiceguy is gonna have to sing that when he sees it

>>26811602
what de fuq?

anyone know how to report a scam on that site?

>>26807412
Alright. It was just a thought.

>>26807494
Grammatically, the dialogue is not the end of the sentence, as there's the additional "she said." The punctuation's supposed to go like this:
>"Blah blah blah," she said. "Blah blah blah."
Same with description
>"Blah blah blah," she did something. "Blah Blah blah."
Alternatively, you can flip it around:
>She did something, "Blah blah blah."

It can get really fucking complicated when dialogue gets interrupted by narration, etc. To the point professional editors have written multiple blog posts about the grammar rules.

(http://theeditorsblog.net/2010/12/08/punctuation-in-dialogue/)
(http://theeditorsblog.net/2011/03/22/more-punctuation-in-dialogue-a-readers-questions/)
(http://theeditorsblog.net/2012/06/29/even-more-punctuation-in-dialogue-a-readers-question/)

>>26811602
>is too crippled to work and the only money he gets is from support from the people who donate
Isn't Social Security Disability Insurance a thing?

>>26811778
It's 2016. Why don't you have a computer, or at least use a library's computer to write and toss it onto gdocs? I can't imagine the pain of writing on a phone.

>>26818603
>Isn't Social Security Disability Insurance a thing?
You misunderstood, he just has crippling laziness.

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>>26813012
Oh, one of those languages.

Hyphen dialogue can be done in English (Joyce did it, and here and there some literary-types), but the practical effect for the reader makes the text and dialogue run together, distancing the reader from the immediacy of any spoken parts.

>>26817395
>Using JC and not Princess Celestia
See pic related.

>>26817513
I'd read it.
Now go write it, you fag.

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>>26821417
no

>>26820490
>Now go write it, you fag.
I have like. 4 story ideas already, and I wouldn't even begin to know where to start with the idea

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>yfw you will no longer fuck your dog

also bump

Is using a dead donor's head to explain crystal overdose in a practical way edgy?

>>26823495
Is there a reason why it has to be the head? And what do you mean by explain?

I mean, IRL we like to show pictures or blackened lungs and stuff to deter people from smoking, and no one thinks of that as edgy, but a severed head is kind of naturally more edgy compared to some random internal organ, so I'd say it's okay only if there is literally no other body part you can use.

>>26823535
Basically the professor using a voluntary donor's head to explain the Factor 10 thing I talked about in the last thread, and how it affects the body.

Since he cranks it up to Factor 11, where the crystal concentration is so great it shreds apart smaller blood vessels, he wants to make the students see what happens, as to deter to-be operatives of cranking it up to 11 as a jack-ass move and killing themselves.

>>26823495
Depends. Is the rest of the fic just as dark?

>>26823560
>Professor
>showing students a corpse's head
the fuck
Also I must have missed that "Factor 10" thing, but this sounds kinda silly. I'd probably make him present it on a slideshow.

>>26823591
>Just as dark

Darker than the show, but not that dark.

>Factor

Fluorite-Azurite Crystals; Thermomagic Obstruction Reducer. Long word to mean some injected stuff that makes using magic easier.

As the students are to-be agents in some kind of SEALS/Spetsnaz team and are going to use Factor extensively, the professor wants to give them a direct example of how it affects their body, so they don't abuse it under any circumstance and that a jackass doesn't go full blown stupid and get the concentration above suggested levels by showing them what happens.

>>26823591
>make him present it on a slideshow
Do this.

>professor shows gory pics on slideshow
Happens fairly often in med/bio classes I assume
>professor brings an honest to god severed head to class
Professor would most likely wind up in jail/looney bin

>>26823924
Not to mention
>Health risks of carrying a lump of uncooked meat around
>Ponies are herbivore, so they would probably frown on it more strongly than we do

>>26823924
It's not just any school, the students are going to use the substance mentioned when they'll be in operations. The teacher wants to show them what really happens so no one goes stupid and overuse Factor.

>>26824066
>Health risks
Magic.

>Herbivores
The head is from a consenting donor. Think of it like a dissection. Even my old sports teacher had a course in which they were manipulating a corpse to see how the muscles and other tissues where.

>>26824083
Look, you are seriously missunderstanding the importance of the head in all cultures. Showing students a severed head is lawsuit material. For a quick and dirty list of problems,
>Dead eyes staring right at you
>Protein rots EXTREMELY fast and invariably has a sickening smell, so you'd have to cut it and have it in exhibition within one hour to not be in risk of pandemics
>Try to explain shit with flies swarming uppon the head
>People kinda dislikes the idea of decapitation, even post mortem
>Have to cut someone's fucking head, which could keep a psychologist eating for a few decades
>You'd have to keep the head from leaking
There is a HUGE diference between random musculature and easily recognizable extremities, especially heads. Hell, you could even have a fake head or a photo. Usually no one but medicine students ever see something like this.

>>26824157
What would you suggest then? Would using a full body be more "ethical"?

I've thought about using small animals, but since the product has no effect on anything not using magic, it would be pretty useless to show its power.

I thought that just a picture presentation wouldn't be as strong of a deterrent as an actual practical experiment. You have to keep in mind the fic's universe is at about 1910 for technology.

>>26777523
haven't posted here in about a hundred threads

is rationality anon still around?

>>26824296
Show a video of the professor doing the dissection in a medical enviroment. You get all the nastiness and none of the lawsuits.

>>26824507
He left for the greener pastures of /r9k/. Now we just obsess over Bleedin.

>>26824629
A video just feels really off for deep impact over the student's mindsets, as it won't be as convincing as an actual live dissection.

Maybe have them visit some kind of medical school for the course?

>>26824705
No, having a "deep impact on students" is a stupid idea to begin with.
Instead, make it have a big impact on the reader. First, describe the corpse's head rapidly decomposing in as much detail as you possibly can, and then in the next paragraph talk about how everyone reacted to it. Overplay it, overdramatize it, but don't go too far. As long as the reader THINKS it was disgusting, you don't need to actually make the event itself too disgusting.

>>26824705
Are you literally retarded? Oh wait, I remember: TIGER FUCKING TANKS No actual person would even consider bringing a severed head into a classroom, no matter how strongly they want to make their point. It's just not the sort of thing a civilized person does. Have them give a fucking slideshow, jesus christ

>>26824705
>>26824850
I agree.

Have the video be graphic if you want. Psychology professors show videos of murder and rape to forensic students because that's the kind of stuff they'll deal with in their jobs, but they won't actually bring someone to rape a random person in the class.

>>26824850
This. They are supposed to be trained agents who understand the consequences of their actions, not hiperactive children. Any soldier of any kind should be this.

>>26824157

If it's being done by the government for national defense they can do whatever the fuck they want and are as immune from suit as they want to be.

Check Feres doctrine.

>>26825080
If the government is flailing heads at its agents, the government losses credibility and agents dessert very very fast.
GOvernments aren't some ominous force of evil. They have to play by some rules, and set standards of quality for private/subordinate sectors tomeasure against.

only use a live head if someone from that class ODs on magic juice. "see Kablooey Head here OD'd and his shit got rekt. don't let this happen to you".

otherwise stick to powerpoint because dragging carcasses in to prove a point is pretty wacky.

>>26823495
Yes.

Just have them draw a face on a cantelope and blow it up as an object lesson.

>>26826879
Oh wait, ponies. Make it an eggplant or something pony-head-shaped.

So, anon, why haven't you worked on that fic with tons of potential in weeks?

help

>>26826879
>draw a face on a cantelope and blow it up as an object lesson
Shit, that reminds me of the fic where Luna makes filly Twi dream about watermelons getting torn up by power tools, to teach her that trying to pierce your own ears with a drill press is a bad idea.

Can't remember the name but I really liked the fic. Too bad it hasn't updated in like a year+

>>26826928
Because I'm currently working on my thesis.
And I'm still writing, just a couple hundred words every day, or so.

>>26827087
>Twi dream about watermelons getting torn up by power tools, to teach her that trying to pierce your own ears with a drill press is a bad idea.

I know twilight can be a little retarded sometimes, but this is pushing the limits on my suspension of disbelief. Thats more along the lines of CMC tier retardation.

also
>filly twilight
>luna

>>26827529
You can be anything you want in your dreams, Anon.

G'night bump.

I'll be apart of Regidar's patreon if he unblocks me from fimfiction.

Heyo fuckboys, I'm looking for more of a theme which I've only ever read one story of, that being The Moonstone Cup. Can anybody gift me with the names of any other magic duel fics, should they exist?

>>26823495
Why would a head be used to explain an overdose? It'd be like showing a severed arm with needle marks to show heroin. It doesn't seem like it'd be very effective or make much sense.

Now a specific organ? Sure. Although I'd say the most effective way to show it is someone who's still alive, but suffering the debilitating effects of it. That anti-smoking ad of the guy singing with his electrolarynx is a lot more impactful and raw than just showing a severed neck with a hole in it.

>>26823560
>professor
How many heads do they go through a semester just for an object lesson? I really doubt the Ministry of Science/Health/Education would be okay with rare body tissue being destroyed just to show someone what not to do.

>live example
>magical holograms of actual victims
In my opinion, two much better alternatives.

Also remember that the more detail you give, the closer to the Mature - Gore tags you're going to get. And I really don't think the infamy associated with those tags is worth it for one scene of a severed head exploding. Hence why holograms or someone still living are much better alternatives.

>>26825080
>immune from suit
>what is the Federal Tort Claims Act

>>26826928
School and stresses associated with graduating soon and having to settle into working for the next 50 years.

I like turtles

>>26829015
>How many heads would we go through?

The program being a super-restricted one, it's more like one head/organ per 3-4 years.

>Still living

That I thought about, but the professor is going to push up the concentration to the point where the crystals don't let blood cells pass, and end up shredding the capillaries.

I had thought about using some criminals to do it, but the dangers associated with empowering them and the painful death from blood vessel shredding turned me away from it.

>>26828965
who are you?

>>26829015
>>immune from suit
>what is the Federal Tort Claims Act

What is the Feres doctrine?

>>26827529
She was twelve years old, and all the cool kids were doing it.

>>26830431
This is the story, for anyone who was wondering:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/253955/the-lies-we-tell-to-children

>>26830588
>the-lies-we-tell-to-children
>dont stick power tools into your ears

is this reverse psychology, or intentionally trying to get idiots to turn themselves into vegetables?

>>26829985
You monster.

>>26829008
This Platinum Crown has some magic duels, but they're kind of buried in 800k+ words or other stuff.

The Immortal Game just has some pretty interesting fight scenes, especially with the whole Unicorn Bladecasting thing, but that's less duels and more large-scale battles.

>>26830588
Goddamn, this was actually really good. Now I'm super displeased it's dead.

>>26830642
The point of the story is that Celestia gives Twilight the lying-to-children version, and then Luna giving her a more complete/serious answer right after.

If you haven't heard the phrase "lying to children" before: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lie-to-children

>>26777523
>or a world of their choice

I sure as fuck wouldn't go to Equestria.

I would go to a very specific world that I am the only occupant of, where aging doesn't happen, that would let me go into various fictional universes whenever I want, as many times as I want, and if I "died" my continued consciousness would return to that world in a body in the exact same condition as before I left.

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>>26831313
>I would go to a very specific world that I am the only occupant of, where aging doesn't happen, that would let me go into various fictional universes whenever I want, as many times as I want, and if I "died" my continued consciousness would return to that world in a body in the exact same condition as before I left.

Who's to say you aren't already there, Anon!

>>26831313
>quoting something that wasnt said in that post

this is a recurring thing in the last handful of threads
the fuck are you on about? and can I have some of what youre smoking? because its apparently some pretty good shit

>>26831344
It's in the picture.
What surprises me is that nobody seems to have noticed that it's the summary of Living the Dream.

>>26831357
probably because no one bothers to look at the full size op.

great now Im goingto have to go back through the last half dozen threads and find where someone quoted the op and threw in some nonsensical non sequitur and delve for hidden knowledge in the one pic in the thread that everyone ignores.

im still gonna need some of your drugs, anon

New drunk The Chase chapter soon.

Compiling videos in movie while drunk is quite hard.

>>26831735
Isn't it a little early in the day to be imbibing so much?

>>26831794
Says you

Time doesn't really exist, especially times like 'a little early'

Besides, I kept telling myself this night will be the night for a new drunk, but I kept falling asleep. So I decided, fuck it just do it in the morning, they can't stop you.

>>26829985
I like trains

>>26831393
I always check the full image and read the OP. It's interesting, because the format has been very slowly and subtly altered over the last few months.

>>26817534
>>26817395
You're god damn right I'm gonna sing it

http://vocaroo.com/i/s1tWt6HgyxdP

>>26831962
That's very deep.

Time exists, and so do methods of measuring it.

why is this thread so /mu/

>>26832029
a grimthony fantango 10/10

>>26832184
I actually like King of Carrot Flowers pt 2 and 3. I don't think bad songs

>>26832215
I personally love the title track on that album, and I'm not saying it's a bad thing. It's nice when music discussion comes up on other boards because most of you guys have pretty solid taste, especially because it gets away from /mu/'s shitposting.

I think I'm rambling. Anyways, has anyone listened to No Now by Clarence Clarity? Probably my favorite album of 2015.

>>26832029
if i was into bdsm, this'd be the soundtrack

>>26832184
because regidar.

hi regi

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CCRfHBI_c_Q&feature=youtu.be
The Chase by Kudzuhaiku chapter 907
You are all lovely people and I love all of you, yes, even you, unlovable person.

>>26832315
>I love all of you, yes, even you, unlovable person.
And that, voicey, is a fallacy.

if you love them, then they are not unloveable. if they are unloveable, you cannot love them. next thing you know youll be moving goalposts, you maniac!

>>26832341
>Next thing you know you'll be moving goalposts, you maniac!

The only thing that I'm gonna move is my fat ass into the kitchen to make tacos.

>>26832377
that was your own post voiceguy

>>26832402
wait never mind i'm retarded

>>26832415
hey theres something that we can all agree on

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>>26832415
It's all good, my friend. We all make mistakes.

Much like Kudzuhaiku, who made the mistake of believing that you need to keep writing, no matter how long the story has been going on.

3284487514

>>26830256
Something entirely diferent from Equestria.
>>26832458
>907
And this is the reason I made my daily upodate thing last a year. I already know the ending. It won't be a happy one, by any means.

>When we meet on a cloud, I'll be laughing out loud
>I'll be laughing with everyone I see

>you will never laugh on a cloud with dashie

>>26832030

"Time is an illusion. Lunchtime, doubly so."

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>>26832458
>I don't have a proper argument
>OH I'LL JUST SAY I'M NOT IN THE MOOD, THAT'LL SHOW 'EM!

>>26832811

How much time till some Kudzu fan brigade tries to downvote your non-existent stories?

>>26832811
Why? Why do you feel the need to try and start shit? Why? It's not like you'll actually convince him to stop, and even if you want him to stop doing something that doesn't affect you or hurt anyone, there are some autists out there that like this.

I think he did the right thing in avoiding your shitty bait. I myself really fucking hate pointless arguments online.

>>26833125
> I myself really fucking hate pointless arguments online.

Wrote anon, as he participated in a thread about writing cartoon ponies, replying to a reader's screen cap.

>>26833131
That makes zero sense, Anon. Instead of getting involved in pointless shitflinging that goes on in most other threads, I stay here to have calm discussions, read reviews and recommend fanfics.

>>26833151
Then why are you arguing about a pointless online fight? Couldn't you just, you know, not reply to something you find pointless?

>calm discussions, read reviews and recommend fanfics.

We barely have a single review per thread, and most fanfics have been recommended much longer before. As for calm discussions, I wouldn't call them that calm.

>>26833166
I'm not arguing with anyone, except for you right now, so thanks.

>>26833174

See >>26833125

If that's not an argument, I don't know what is.

>>26833217
It was me being slightly upset at someone attempting to start an argument and being mad when they failed.

>>26832503
>Something entirely diferent from Equestria.

So why cite the Federal Tort Claims Act?

Just pointing out that any nation has security issues and shit they do to their military and intelligence recruits is going to be immune from suit.

I bet Special Agent Sweetie Drops has had to do a few things normal pones can't know of.

>>26833253
Tell me of any single scene which even implies Equestria's government being evil.

>>26833253
Autismo here.

I've already ditched the head idea, and am definitely not going to let Phoenix get away with doing anything, especially since it was viewed in very bad light by Celestia prior to its dissolution.

>>26832308
h-hi

would you like to here about our lord and savior jamie stewart of xiu xiu

>>26833271

There's nothing evil with using even harsh disciplinary measures to ensure your national defense personnel are strong.

>>26833288

Good idea to ditch the head idea, because it is super edgy and therefore not really in line with poneworld.

It just wouldn't be illegal or even anything you could sue for in any reasonable society if it was for the defense of the nation.

>>26830170
beelder

What is the best Discord fic?

>>26833465
> if it was for the defense of the nation.

That argument is just plain stupid. That's basically how you get to a dictatorship.

>>26833913

No it isn't you idiot. Every functioning nation has rules like that.

When the fuck did tumblr take over here?

>>26833388
Kill yourself, you pedantic puertorican sandwich.

Anyone here ever read Wild Sky Yonder? I loved that shit, shame it's dead.

>>26833997
;_;

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Any short bittersweet/slice of life stories you guys know that will help me get through the night?

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>>26833125

>>26834412
>I don't have a proper argument
>OH I'LL JUST SAY WHATEVER AND WALK AWAY, THAT'LL SHOW 'EM!

>>26834412
This comic does have a good point.

But fuck you if you think boiling hot dogs is the same as grilling them.

>>26833808
I Am Chaos, by Feather Sigil. One of the very few fics that use format fuckery in a good way.

>>26834412

This isn't an example of when you should avoid a pointless argument.

This is an example of when you should justifiably kill someone.

>>26834443

What if you boil them on the barbecue?

http://www.eec-equine-therapy.com/Equine-Massage.html

I just found fuel for at least a dozen clopfics.

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>>26833388
I only worship Konishi Yasuharu, Regidar.

...But Pizzicato Five broke up years and years ago....

Is there any good way to make an expo dump without some flashback things? The subject being explained being already very familiar to the characters

>>26835641

If you can introduce a character who's unfamiliar with the relevant info, having someone bring them up to speed would be the best way.

You could add a short scene, set off with weak breaks from the rest of the story, that explains the info via omniscient narrator. This works best for comedies- Hitchhiker's Guide does it frequently- and less well in serious stories, though it's still doable.

If you're writing in first person, the narrator can tell the reader something that "they" might not know.

Or, if none of those work, your best bet is probably to parcel out the information in bits and pieces rather than in one giant infodump.

>>26835641
if its common knowledge in world then dont expo dump. just treat shit like its absolutely common and not worthy of commenting on, maybe dropping minor hints in dialog.

"Hey, Appeljunk, its almost Sacrificial Sunday and the orphanarium is empty. Do you mind if we borrow Appleboom for the ceremony this weekend" asked Twilot.

>>26832458
Voiceguy, you gonna continue my readings or not? I'm back now. And it's been nearly a month.

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>>26837164
Its probably a "Cultured" way to say Travels. Just look at the chapter names.

>>26836657
you could be a bro and just let him read the good ones instead of all of them

>>26837662
fine, I'll contact him then and see what I can do.

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>>26777523
>>26790434
yeah, speaking of underrated fics on this board
Any chrysalis fan owes themselves to read this. It's basically a masterful portrayal of her personality in the position of a protagonist.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/25694/changeling-heart-and-the-new-moon

>>26833253
>So why cite the Federal Tort Claims Act?
Wrong anon. I cited it as some lighthearted shitposting.

>>26833465
>ensure your national defense personnel are strong
>couldn't defeat NMM
>couldn't defeat Sombra three times
>couldn't defeat vines twice, if you count the comics
I think they need to do a better job training their special forces.

>>26834412
>>26834718
>barbecue, noun: a flat metal frame that is used to cook food over hot coals or an open fire
Pretty sure the second guy's actually right, in that he is using a barbecue to cook the hot dogs. He is not, however, barbecuing (to roast or broil on a rack or revolving spit over or before a source of heat) the hot dogs, but boiling them.

>>26835641
Do it slowly. That's part of why the expodump is a thing--it's dumping all the information at once. Let it trickle out like a leaky faucet.

How it's trickled out depends on what's being explained to the reader. For instance, a new city/location could be revealed through characters idly talking about their next vacation and their plans for it.

A new character can be plopped in and spend several chapters getting to know the reader.

And who's to say you have to explain anything? You can always let the reader figure things out over the course of the story (characters reminisce about the subject, a location is revealed as part of a plot point that sheds some light on the subject, etc.). Just make sure you've actually given enough information throughout the story to tie it together.

>>26838340
It's not one of those bullshit "the changelings were just starving to death and had to invade!" stories, is it?

>>26838544
>It's not one of those bullshit "the changelings were just starving to death and had to invade!" stories, is it?
is there any other option, really?

I mean its either that or 'changelings invaded just because they're assholes'.

Not that I've put a lot of thought into the scenario, but I really cant think of a third excuse for it

>>26838544
I mean, yes and no?
The purpose of their invasion has always been food. thats pretty fucking clear even in canon bro, so I don't know why you're calling it bullshit. It's nothing like most of them though, as chrysalis retains her caustic personality even during times where she is made to be sympathetic.

>>26836935
>Travails
>Works in French
>On the road, he meets a mare who decides to join him, and on their works, they find out about life and each other

Really interesting.

>>26838544
>NMM

Part of the reason why Celestia disbanded Phoenix in-universe

>Sombra 3 times

There's the time in the show, where the in-universe Harmony was still rebuilding up, and a time, I guess, before the show, when Sombra was alive. But then Phoenix was created at the same time as NMM, and Luna and Celestia defeated Sombra together according to the show. I don't really know where the third time would be though.

>Vines

Some random bullshit about why Harmony wasn't fully operational before S5

>>26839381
Correction; more like "jobs", but still stands

>>26838544
>I think they need to do a better job training their special forces.

Just waiting for Twilight Sparkle to show up has seemed to work so far.

>>26839239
The real reason for the Changeling invasion:
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/321200/where-is-it

(Cute bit of humor fluff.)

You've got me thinking about the ways you could run with a "what was REALLY happening" scenario.
Changelings invaded to recover a particular person.
Changelings invaded to recover a particular person who was unaware they were a changeling.
Changelings invaded as part of a very large operation to distract Equestria's attention from something else.
Changelings invaded as a result of perceived Equestrian aggression.
Changelings invaded after Chrysalis was mind-controlled by an unknown entity.
Etc. etc.

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>>26839781
>Changelings invaded to recover a particular person.
>Changelings invaded to recover a particular person who was unaware they were a changeling.
Based Amaryllis.
though I prefer when this is also paired with starvation anyway. I'm a huge slut for twilight being a changeling. Sadly I have yet to run into anything quite like the characterization quality offered by I chrysalis and changeling heart. pretty much all of these stories have their issues but I value characterization supremely, and those two had the most believable chrysalis.

>Changelings invaded as a result of perceived Equestrian aggression.
This is pretty interesting, though the most I got with thought experimenting was jealousy over equestria's standards of living for their people. thats not really "Aggression"

>Changelings invaded after Chrysalis was mind-controlled by an unknown entity.
This is possible I guess but I feel like it flies in the face of the context a bit, which seems to be that people/that guy is tired of chrysalis being secretly innocent of wrong doing. I personally prefer her as tight roping the line between antivillain and antihero. A more pure idea is that some third party could be strong arming the changelings. "I had never seen such a place rich with love before" or some such chryssy said. Makes you wonder where they came from and why they left?

'I, chrysalis' actually uses that one for its what's really happening scenario.

As for distraction, thats another idea but what would they want the distraction for? changelings already are invisible to equestrian society by that point, so what would they stand to gain by revealing themselves?

Floating down
Through the clouds
Memories come rushing up to meet me now
In the space between the heavens
And the corners of some foreign field
I had a dream
I had a dream

>>26841639
k

bump.

>>26841639
>In the space between the heavens
How many heavens are there?
Cuzz you can't be in a space between 1 and 1. Unless you are in pieces, which would kinda hurt.

>>26842147
>>26842037

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Cy0ABjAP0TI

Would having a story with a human in the cover art make everyone think it's a [HUMAN] story, even when it isn't in the tags?

>>26842213
If the story has a human, then yes. Everyone will probably think there's a human in the story.

>>26842227
It's just a humanized version of the MC.
I hate when these things happen. The cover art is great except for X detail.

>>26833808
Keepers of Discord was good
But honestly nothing will top Returns of Harmony

>>26842235
You mean the cover art is great, except it depicts a character who is not even the same species as the main character of the story?

>>26842349
The same character, only humanized.

>>26842362
Except it's a pony story.

Would any sane adult read Sherlock Holmes with a grey pony on its cover?

>>26842663
Yeah, I know. Hence me not using that cover art.

>>26842711
Great then, glad we helped you m8.

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>>26843395
Page 7

>>26843801
Bump is at page 9 or 10.

>>26843844
Page 1

>>26843844
no u I'm doing my anachronistic bumps at the wrong time.