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>"Psssst..." >"Hey...Anon!" >"Psssst!

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>"Psssst..."
>"Hey...Anon!"
>"Psssst! Over here!"
>"Hey...hey...pssst..."
>"Hey Anon!"
>"Guess what?..."
>"I love you."
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ME TOO!
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>>25825389
tfw no weirdly clingy Sunset gf
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>>25825389
Let's see.

Time After Time!Anon would just shake his head and slowly turn back to what he was doing.

Homecoming Anon would wave and whisper I love you back.

Winter Formal Dash!Anon would probably do a thumbs up, but be unease. It would trouble him.
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>>25825461
No, Time After Time!Anon would have a paranoid breakdown, fall catatonic, and hallucinate about being on some kind of fucking magical pirate island.
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Only girl I need
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>>25825389
This makes me far happier than it should.
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>>25825389
"W- What?"
>You are Anonymous. Just your everyman at Canterlot High.
>You found a note in your locker asking you to come to the far end of the school during lunch, but you didn't know who it was from.
>You never would have guessed that you were called out by Sunset Shimmer, one of the most prettiest girls in the whole school.
>She barely even had your attention before she dropped that on you. You're absolutely FLOORED.
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>>25826550
Embrace Shimmer's love, Anon.
>>25826755
Dubs say continue.
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>>25826764
Are those even real dubs?
I've never written before, so I'll consider it if enough people actually want to see where that's going. That being said, I'd love to see a different interpretation of the prompt. I sort of just wrote that because it looked like something that could be spun a lot of ways.
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>>25826776
I would like to see the text you created continued, if you are willing, anon
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>>25825389
Love you too, Sunset.
Sunny.
Sunshine.
Shimmy.
Sunny-buns.
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>>25826840
ShimSham.
Sunset.
Sun-bun.
Darling.
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>>25826840
Sunny bunny
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What are you, fucking gay?

What are you, some kind of fucking... faggot?
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>>25826876
>That spoiler
L-lewd.

>>25826835
I guess I'll try to keep it rolling. Again, I have next to no experience doing this.

>She said it, plain as day, and now you're just standing there, struck dumb as you stare at her with a look of confusion on her face.
>As your brain manages to process it, you can see the warm, loving smile that she put on for her confession start to falter.
>You can't just say nothing and let this slip by.
>Come on, Anon, use your WORDS.
"Sunset.. I..."
>As you wrack your brain for a response, she looks at you with those beautiful cyan eyes, but your silence up to now has taken away that daring opening of hers.
>The gears in your brain are turning, but you're not fast enough.
>She starts to shrink away, and before you can get in a word edgewise, she hurries off.
>You're sure that you heard a small "I'll see you later, Anon," as she starts to get out of earshot.
>You blew it.
>SUNSET SHIMMER confessed her love to you at school and you BLEW IT.
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>>25825389
"I love you too..."
>You feel someone nudging your ribs.
>"Anon?"
>Whoops looks like you fell asleep in class again.
>You were having a good dream too.
>Sunset whispered something to you as you pick your head off the desk.
>"What did you just say?"
>It was almost too much to bear.
>You wanted to tell her you love her.
>You wanted to embrace her, feel her, taste her.
>This desire only grew with time. But...
"N-nothing. Just talking in my sleep probably."
>She seemed to buy it.
>Spaghetti overflow avoided for now.
"So how are things with you and Adagio?"
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>>25826958
I think I'm starting to formulate a really weird plan now if anyone's still interested after the way THAT post ended. I swear, I changed my mind three times during that trying to pick how I wanted it to play out.
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>>25827033

I wanna see how this turns out.
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>>25827033
I'm along for the ride
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>>25826755
>>25826958
>Before you can try to chase after her, the bell rings.
>Now you have to deal with this running through your mind during Math?
>You make it into class on time and sit down.
>The whole time, you can't focus.
>You can't help but think about how you froze up.
>Remembering the happiness drain from Sunset's face is even worse.
>A girl that you like, a girl that is WAY out of your league likes you and you can't even respond with a simple "yes."
>Before you know it, the bell rings again, sending you off to your English class.
>You walk into Ms. Cherilee's room and take a seat, far enough away from the front to not gain much attention, but not so far back that you make yourself an obvious target for being called on.
>You'd probably be distracted from yet another lecture by your mistake earlier if not for the fact that you're slowly becoming aware of a feeling that someone's staring at you.
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>>25827153
Don't be afraid to add just a little more detail on the surroundings
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>>25827153
>You glance out of the corner of your eye to either side of you, but everyone else near you has their noses buried into a textbook.
>That awareness that you're being watched persists and is actually starting to slowly creep into a sense of dread.
>As it gets worse, you take a chance at getting caught not paying attention and glance around, taking a look behind you.
>The feeling stops all at once.
>When you look back, there isn't actually anyone looking at you.
>"Eyes up front or on the text please, Anonymous," you hear your teacher say.
"Y-yes Ms. Cherilee."
>You stare down at the book, not wanting to make eye contact with her or anyone else.
>After a few moments, you start to get that feeling again.
>It's like someone's boring into the back of your skull with their eyes.
>You put a hand on the back of your neck to scratch it and realize that you're actually sweating.
>The end of class can't come fast enough, but it eventually does.
>Luckily, today is a short day, so you can get out of here and try to sort out your thoughts.
>You quickly grab your things and head out of the classroom, not even bothering to jot down the instructions for what to do for next class.
>You head to your locker and quickly grab the rest of your things.
>The door clanks shut and you realize that the wide hall around you is empty.
>Time to get the fuck out of here.
>You start to bolt towards the nearest exit-
>"And just WHERE do you think you're going, MISTER?"
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>>25827192
I do appreciate feedback from whoever's reading this. I guess I take for granted how we imagine the school to look?

>>25827223
>You freeze.
>That's a girl's voice.
>You recognize it, but you don't think you've ever heard anything like anger from it before.
>Slowly, you turn around and you can't believe your eyes.
"F-Fluttershy?"
>"Don't you "Fluttershy" me, Anon!"
>The piercing eyes staring you down are normally hidden behind that long, pretty pink hair.
>This is the most meek girl you've ever met, and you're having trouble making EYE CONTACT with her right now.
>You take a step back, and she responds by taking a step forward.
"Fluttershy, what are you doing? What is this about?!"
>She takes a step forward, and you take another step back.
>You slip on the tiled floor, and you're falling.
>You were blown away by a pretty girl today figuratively, and now it's about to be literal.
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After all of the green that I've read, I can't believe some of the bad grammar and formatting I'm reading. Gonna have to pay more attention to what I'm doing.

>>25827310
>The landing on the floor isn't pleasant.
>Your backpack "cushioned" your fall, as well as something overloaded with big, heavy textbooks can.
>Always knew that it would be hard on your back to carry that thing around...
>After a moment of being shellshocked, you glance up.
>Fluttershy is standing over you.
>You may not know what you did to bring down the wrath of Hurricane Fluttershy, but it looks like she's about to let you have it.
>You avert your eyes down and away from hers, knowing that the worst of it is about to come.
>...
>But it doesn't.
>You boldly look up at Fluttershy to see her eyes tracing your previous line of sight, eyes wide not with that powerful stare, but with horror.
>You were so scared out of your wits that you didn't even realize that you were staring up her skirt.
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>>25827436
>In the next moment, everything changed.
>"eep!"
>Fluttershy backed away from you, tripping on her own feet and falling onto her rear end with a thud.
>She's looking away from you now, a long lock of her hair obscuring half of her face.
>And she's blushing.
>That's a lot more like the Fluttershy that you're used to, that's for sure.
>Seeing this lets you gather up the courage to talk to her.
"Fluttershy... What was THAT all about?"
>You can see just enough of her face to notice that eyes turning to you, then away again.
>You sigh.
"I'm sorry, Fluttershy. I didn't mean to look at... you know..."
>Her cheeks may have been pink before, but now they're turning red.
"I didn't mean to. I mean, not that you're not really pretty-"
>You've gone from hardly getting a word out to putting your foot in your mouth.
>Good job, Anonymous.
>You sigh and take a moment to collect your thoughts.
>You're fortunate that Fluttershy can be so awkward that she might actually just sit there all day until you move.
"Really, Fluttershy, I'm sorry."
>She mumbles something, but you can't quite make it out.
".. I'm sorry, what was that, Fluttershy?
>She mutters it again, a little bit louder, but it's still not very distinct.
>She takes a deep breath.
>"You should tell that to Sunset."
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>>25827588
That's all for tonight. Namefagging for the sake of attaching myself to this thing. If anyone actually likes this junk, I'll gladly write more because I actually have a plan now.

Feedback is appreciated!
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>>25827640
Just a general rule of thumb, don't rush inti things. Build up what your going to, just don't go full dbz filler
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>>25827640
pretty much this >>25827769
i'm liking what i'm reading, just dont rush it ok? build momentum and a story, don't just write whatever comes to your mind
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>>25827769
>>25828030
I'm sure it seemed like I dropped a complete wildcard on the story, but I did that part for a reason.. Again, this is my first greentext story, but the weird plan that I started putting together actually needed this scene (in some capacity anyway, not sure if it turned out quite how I considered it.)

I'll add some more in a bit, I'm off on an errand.
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>>25825389
So those rumours about you being nearly blind are true.
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You realize that they only tell you this shit in order to get into your wallet, don't you?
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"Sorry, I'm not a Shimmerfag."
>"A... What? A fag? Wouldn't liking me make you straight, of at the very least bisexual?"
"No. I have something to tell you...
You're a guy."
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>>25827640
Make a road map for yourself of what major events you want to happen.
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>>25828907
Kek
>>25829067
And we only tell them that to get between their legs.
>>25829198
She's still a cutie.
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>>25829299
Already did. Now it's really a matter of making sure I can tie it together right and making it enjoyable to read.

More green coming shortly.
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>Candy-colored high school chicks will never shyly pass you notes asking whether you like them or not.
>You will never meet a candy-colored high school chick after class.
>You will never get pressured by her friends to respond to her advances.
>You will never go to the prom with a candy-colored high school chick.
>She will never look into your eyes and ask you what you're thinking.
>You will never date a candy-colored high school chick.
>Canterlot High School is not a real place.
>Real high school chicks judge you harshly, all the time.
>Real high schools a re cesspools of cliques and social ostracism.

Welcome to your real life.
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>>25825389
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>>25827588
>She knows about what happened earlier with Sunset?
>Fluttershy is still avoiding eye contact with you.
"Sunset?"
>The gears in your head start turning, but you're not sure you can believe it.
>Fluttershy turns her head to look at you, face still partially obscured.
>She's not giving you the stare anymore, but the look that she's giving you now gives you the impression that you've done something wrong.
>"Sunset's one of my best friends, Anon. She's liked you for a long time. She told us that she was going to confess her feelings for you today, but when she came back, she was in tears."
>Even though her tone isn't as serious as it was earlier, her words still hit you like a brick.
>Were you totally oblivious, was she dropping hints before this?
>You shared one class with her last year, but you didn't think that you left any kind of impression, let alone even stand a chance with her.
>You curl up and look at the ground.
"I... I didn't mean to hurt her feelings. She caught me so off guard that I couldn't even respond. I just froze up..."
>You sit there, the guilt seeping in that your lack of nerve managed to hurt someone else's feelings.
>It would be better if you just faded away.
>Much to your surprise you feel something rubbing up against you.
>You look over to see a small, white rabbit.
>Blinking in surprise, you then take notice that Fluttershy is sitting next to you as well.
>She's looking straight ahead down the empty hallway.
"Fluttershy?"
>After all of that, now she's showing you some kindness?
>There's a moment of silence before she speaks again, softly this time.
>"I know what it's like... You know... To be too nervous to speak up..."
>You knew you weren't "alpha," but are you really so quiet that FLUTTERSHY is showing you empathy?
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>>25829554
>She picks up the bunny.
>"If you really didn't mean to hurt Sunset's feelings, then I forgive you, Anonymous."
"Thank you, Fluttershy. I guess that I should apologize to Sunset as well. Maybe if I'm lucky, she'd be willing to give me a chance..."
>"You do like Sunset, then?"
>She's looking at you.
>You don't have to think long before you can at least say this much:
"I think I do."
>"I'll talk to her about all of this then, and-"
>She stops even though it seems like she has more to say.
>If there's anything you actually have good attention to, it's detail.
>Fluttershy has stopped making eye contact with you, she's looking down at the floor now.
>The gears in your head start turning as you try to grab any clues from this mess of a conversation.
>Wait, did she say "us" earlier?
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>>25829568
thank you anon pls continue
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>>25829568
>*click*
"She told us"
>You say it out loud this time as you recall what she said.
>Fluttershy seems to be desperately trying to not make eye contact.
"She told all of..."
>Oh, shit.
>You accidentally broke Sunset's heart, and they all know.
>Canterlot High's "Main Six"
>Six girls that are completely unalike from each other, but still manage to have more pull in the student body than any clique.
>You grab Fluttershy by the shoulders.
"Fluttershy... Please don't tell me that your friends are planning to come after me over this."
>She looks up at you, then closes her eyes and slowly nods.
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>>25829763
>Well, that's not good.
"But... you know that I didn't mean to hurt Sunset. You can put in a good word for me, right? This won't be a problem."
>You sound hopeful, but that doesn't last long.
>Fluttershy slowly shakes her head.
"Come on... You're kidding, right? I'll go tell Sunset myself and clear all of this up."
>"I'm so sorry, Anon. I'll tell Sunset the truth about what happened, but my friends and I look out for each other. They might not even let you get close to her right now."
>Fluttershy opens her pack and gently places the bunny inside of it before getting up and putting it on.
>She offers you a hand to help you up.
>"I'll talk to my friends about it. Maybe I'm just expecting the worst out of them for no reason."
>You take her hand, letting yourself break into a small smile at her reassuring words.
"Yeah, you're probably right. I mean, your friends are pretty reasonable people, right?"
>You stand up straight and shift the weight of your bag around a bit.
"Thanks, Fluttershy."
>"Anon?"
"Yes..?"
>"I'm sorry that I cornered you like this. I wish I'd known that this was just a misunderstanding."
"It's really okay, Fluttershy, I forgive you."
>A few moments later."
>"A-Anon?"
"... Yes, Fluttershy?"
>"You can let go of my hand now. I mean, if you wouldn't mind..."
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>>25829763
anon pls i cant wait any longer
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>>25830291
Your wish is already granted.

I sort of took a lunch break between segments there, but I'll admit that my pace isn't great.
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>>25830287
thx senpai
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>>25830305
It's good
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>>25825389
YOU MONSTER FREEZY POP
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>>25830287
>One awkward dispersal later...
>You step outside of the school.
>After all of the crazy things that have happened today, you're thankful that you have some time off to yourself.
>Your Steam library IS starting to fill up with games you haven't even played yet...
>You drift off in thought on your walk home, then you hear your phone go off.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e6DM5ckcH14
>Are you really that plain?
>You HAVE to remember to change that later.
>You check to see who it is.
>It's Flash Sentry.
>He's a good friend, even though you two aren't in the same clique.
>You hang out sometimes and talk about music.
>You answer the call.
>"Hey, Anon! You going to the Jo-Colt show later?"
>You snicker.
"Man, I'll never understand why you like 'soft rock' music so much."
>"Hey, don't knock it until you try it. So, are you going?"
"I don't think so, Flash. Not this time."
>"What, afraid to try new music?"
Nah, I just had a really crazy day and want to spend the rest of it doing nothing.
>"What happened, Anon?"
"Did anything in particular HAVE to happen? Classes are hectic sometimes."
>"Yeah, but you don't give a crap about that stuff. Come on, man, spill it."
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>>25830467
>You sigh.
"Fiiiine. But you have to promise you won't tell anyone."
>"Sure thing, bro... As long as it's not anything really juicy."
"Come on, Flash..."
>"Alright, alright. Just tell me."
>You explain to Flash the events of the day, starting with what happened during the lunch period.
>He doesn't believe you when you tell him that Sunset flat-out confessed to being in love with you.
>"Come on, Anon, you're pulling my leg."
>You understand his skepticism, but that doesn't stop you from taking it a little bit personally.
>You continue on, explaining how you froze up, and then she left.
>"That sounds like something you'd do."
"Why are we friends again?"
>"Chill Anon, I was just kidding. What happened next?"
>You tell Flash about how your day went more or less as normal until you were confronted by Fluttershy of all people.
>"She gave you THE STARE? Holy shit, Anon! I heard that she used that to reduce a bully to TEARS once."
>You tell him about the whole thing, omitting the part where you looked up her skirt by accident.
>You're a gentleman, after all.
"And that was it. We parted ways, and she's going to talk to her friends for me. Hopefully, everything will be fine."
>"Well..."
>Oh, come on.
>"You know, a couple of Sunset's friends are sort of hot-headed. Even if Fluttershy puts in a good word for you, they might still come after you."
"Not what I needed to hear today, Flash."
>"Better safe than sorry. They're not bad people though, so I can't imagine that they'll do anything too serious. Just know that you might have some more of what you got today coming up."
>You groan.
>"I'll catch you tomorrow, Anon. Good luck."
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>>25830588
>You head home and spend the rest of the day in your room.
>As satisfying as gaming is after a stressful day, you can't quite help but shake the nagging feeling that things have only just begun.
>This is going to be a long week.

END OF MONDAY.
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>>25830706
I know what the next part is like, but I'm going to go take a break and think on it a bit. Assuming the thread lives, I'll be back sometime tonight to write more.
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>>25830713
So far I like, Especially love friend sentry.
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>>25830779
Thought it would be weird if Anon didn't at least have SOME friends. Brad fit the bill just fine here.
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>>25830822
It's just refreshing to have him as a pal instead of being a douche.
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>>25825389
I love _me too
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>>25830706
>>25830713
I'm open to feedback on how things have gone so far.

Also, for title suggestions. Maybe "Rising for Sunset" is appropriate here? I almost called it "Anonymous vs the World" but that's not exactly what's happening here, even if those are a pretty good read.
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>>25830909
It'd be pretty neat to see Anon and Sunset get into some shenanigans together, if only to differentiate your story from greens like Time After Time and Homecoming Anon.
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>>25830706
Keep going... when you want to, of course.
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>>25830933
I rather enjoyed Homecoming Anon. I think that Anon and Sunset hanging out during the week had a pretty good pace to it, even though their relationship didn't grow all that rapidly.

I don't know Time After Time though. If anyone has a link, I'd be down to peruse it.

As is right now, my game plan for this story only runs through the remainder of the week, the next section being the events that happen on Tuesday. How much Anon and Sunset see each other is entirely dependent on how the events of the week play out.
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>>25831002
oh man i cant wait
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>>25831002
>If anyone has a link, I'd be down to peruse it.
>>25803003
Pastebins:
Part 1: http://pastebin.com/a4mFFJbB
Part 2: http://pastebin.com/Ak4v6Chu
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>>25831285
Holy shit. This is now on my list of things to read, but WHAT THE HELL IS THE WAY THAT STARTS?! Rocked me like a motherfuckin' hurricane.
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>>25830706
hoping for more
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Ready to resume, but posting is going to be a little sporadic for a bit. Moreso than normal, maybe.

>>25830706
>Wake up
>Fall out of bed.
>Drag a comb across your head.
>Find your way downstairs and drink a cup.
>Daily caffeine fix met.
>Out the door.
>It's Tuesday.
>Including today, you have four days to go until the weekend.
>Maybe yesterday was only so bad because it was a Monday.
>Things will get better, right?
>You can't help but hope that Flash was wrong this time.
>As you walk to school, you can't help but imagine the beautiful girl that confessed her love to you yesterday.
>That flowing red and gold hair.
>Those cyan eyes.
>Her smile.
>She's the full package of beauty and brains, with a personality that everyone seems to like.
>You fill with hope that you can be forgiven and that she'll be willing to go out with you after all.
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>>25832733
pastebin?
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>>25832733
>You arrive at the school, walking past some colorful stragglers who are conversing on the lawn and up the stairs into the building.
>Taking a look around, you think that you spot Sunset off in the distance.
>This could be your chance, Anonymous, go get her!
>You start down the hall, dodging through gaps in the hallway traffic.
>Before you make too much progress, you are overtaken by a familiar sensation.
>Are you falling AGAIN?
>As your face approaches the ground, your only thought is that maybe you should get some new shoes.
>Luckily for you, the impact never comes.
>An arm snaps out and catches you, hoisting you back up to your feet.
"I almost bit it for the second day in a row... Thanks for that."
You turn to look at who it is.
>Piercing green eyes.
>Long, blonde hair.
>That hat.
>You'd recognize that hat anywhere.
>And that southern drawl.
>"You ain't out of the woods yet, Anon."
>Damnit, why is Flash always right?
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>>25833497
Oh right. That thing I've never done before. Yeah, here. I think I'm gonna separate out each day.
http://pastebin.com/d26qXQP3
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>>25833498
"Hey there, Applejack..."
>"Don't you "hey there, Applejack" me.
>That sounds familiar...
"Look, just give me a chance to explain myself-"
>She lets go of your arm.
>"Save it. I heard what you had to say from Fluttershy last night."
>Wait, did Fluttershy come through for you?
"Okay?"
>"She may be quick to forgive, but the rest of us aren't so easily convinced. You really hurt Sunset, you hear?"
>You look down.
"I know, but-"
>"I said save it. You want to say something to me about it, you can do it after school."
"After school?"
>"Nothing like a little competition to make the truth come out."
"Competition?"
>"Cafeteria. Ten minutes after the last bell. If you're too yellow to show up, maybe you weren't good enough for Sunset to start."
>After that harsh verbal blow, she just walks away.
>As you stare in disbelief, you hear another familiar voice as a hand is placed on your shoulder.
>"Applejack this time, huh Anon?"
>It's Flash.
>And he looks smug.
"I guess you have until the end of the school day to brush up on your arm wrestling."
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>>25833696
oh yess this is getting good
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>>25825389
I want to be sunset shimmer
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Life is pain. Anyone who tells you differently is selling something.
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>>25833806
CRAWWWWWWWWWWWWLLINNNNNNNNG IIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNN MY DIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIICKKKKKKKKKKKKKK
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This thread is not going in the normal trash
Its going in the space trash
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TepBi8IwXpk
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>>25829433

Dubs confirm.
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>>25833696
>You shoot Flash a desperate look and grab his shoulders, shaking him.
"Flash, I'm not an athlete. WHAT AM I SUPPOSED TO DO, MAN?"
>Some people in the hall turn to look at you as a result of your outburst, then most of them start to shuffle away to go to their classes.
>Flash shrugs you off of him.
>"Don't have a cow, Anon. You're a smart guy, I'm sure you'll think of something."
>Real helpful, Flash.
>"Look man, I have to get to my first class. Shoot me a text if you're freaking out and need somebody to talk to about it."
>At least he's a good friend.
>You hurry off in the opposite direction to get to your next class.
>History with Ms. Harshwhinny.
>You arrive just in time to earn a look from your sour teacher, but not a tardy.
>You unpack your textbook and a spiral notebook, laying them out on the desk and taking a quick glance around the classroom.
>You see someone wave at you.
>Of course, it's Pinkie Pie.
>Is she smiling?
>Maybe Fluttershy at least managed to convince one person that you're not so bad after all.
>As the class starts up, you end up tuning out the lecture entirely, pretending that you're taking notes as you try to draw up a plan for what to do about Applejack.
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>>25834080
>You have to arm wrestle Applejack.
>From what you've heard, she's stronger than a lot of the school's athletes.
>You glance at your arm and flex your muscles.
>Nope, still pretty average.
>You probably can't win by brute force.
>Maybe you can ask someone else for tips?
>Who do you even know that might be good at arm wrestling?
>Flash?
>He has an athletic streak, but if he had any tips he probably would have told you already.
>Bulk Biceps?
>That guy is huge. Everyone's probably too afraid to even try him. What advice is he going to have?
>Big Macintosh?
>He's big, strong... He's a pretty quiet guy, but you've carried a conversation or two with him before.
>You're going to go find Big Mac during lunch today.
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>>25834283
>Class ends.
>Everyone filters out of the room in a pretty quick fashion, such is the typical reaction to Harshwhinny's lectures.
>You scan the crowd for a big poof of hair, hoping to get a chance to talk to Pinkie Pie about this whole mess.
>How can you NOT be spot someone that looks like a big ball of cotton candy?
>"Hi, Nonny!"
>You almost fall over again just from the sheer surprise of it, but you will yourself to stay on your feet.
>Not again.
>Not today.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=osMSoXl__58
"Hey, Pinkie Pie."
>Despite your apparantly shit sense of balance, you stand up tall and try to act like her sudden appearance didn't phase you.
>"Don't you 'Hey, Pinkie Pie' me!"
>She's puts on a really serious face, but then doubles over laughing.
>"I'm sorry, Nonny, I couldn't help myself."
>What the fuck.
>You chuckle, sounding just a bit uneasy.
"So, Pinkie... you uh... You know everything that happened, right?"
>"Yep!"
"And you're not mad at me, right? Fluttershy explained my side of the story?"
>"Yepperoonie!"
"... Good?"
>"Yep! I bet you're going to be just fine this week, Nonny."
>She rummages around in that giant puffball that she calls a haircut and hands you a small card.
>It's a written party invitation for Friday night, at her place.
>That's... pretty nice of her, actually.
>You've only been to a Pinkie Pie party one other time, and it was crazy.
"Thanks, Pinkie Pie."
>"Oh, it's no problem at all, Nonny."
>She starts to walk past you.
>"By the way, you're right. You really should get some new shoes. Before tomorrow, even."
"What do you mean by tha-"
>Just like that, she's gone.
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Cute story so far.
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>>25826916
You have a talent, you have a talent!
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>>25834562
i love your work man, keep it up (if you want to of course)
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>>25834796
No stopping the train now. I actually have a plan for the story. I've had a plan for the story since the second post, which took me ages to get through because I changed my mind about the direction of the story three times while writing it. If the thread dies and I have nowhere to go, I'll probably take this to Fingerbang.
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>>25834836
I believe in you.
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>>25834836
Nah, dude.The memories of homecoming anon are still strong.If there is another story with sunny bunny...I'm yours to bump
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>>25834796
>>25834993
Nice to see that at least someone likes it.
Also, I doubt I'll match up to Homecoming Anon with this, but I do hope you enjoy the ride anyway.

>>25834562
>Your next class passes by uneventfully.
>The bell rings.
>TO THE CAFETERIA.
>You make your way in and look around for the Big guy himself.
>You spot Sunset and her friends at a table at the far end of the room.
>You sigh and think about just walking over there to explain yourself.
>That's when you see Wondercolts star soccer athlete Rainbow Dash make eye contact with you.
>She drives her fist into her open palm, then makes an "I've got my eye on you" sign.
>[ABORT]
>You immediately turn away and resume your previous mission.
>It's not too long before you see Big Macintosh off at a table to himself.
"Well, here goes nothing."
>You approach his table.
"Hey there, Big Mac. I have something I want to ask you about. Is it okay if I sit here?"
>He looks up at you passively.
>"Eyup."
>A man of few words, for sure.
"Well, Mac... You're a strong guy. I imagine you're probably good at arm wrestling, right?"
>He blinks.
>"Are you challengin' me to an arm wrestling contest, Anon?"
>What.
"What? No, I just... I was hoping you could give me some tips."
>He says nothing.
"So... will you help me?"
>There's a moment where he says nothing.
>"Eyup."
>He puts his elbow down on the table.
>"Show me what you can do, Anon."
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>>25826755
>the most prettiest girls in the whole school.
>most prettiest
I hope that was on purpose and you're not actually that dumb
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>>25835259
Looks cute, doesn't it? It was actually the result of bad editing, which I will clean up later in the pastebin when this is all over. I changed the line partway through writing it and didn't quite clear up all of the words that I intended to. Chalk it up to me being a scrub at this, it's my first greentext story.

>>25835225
>This isn't what you were expecting.
>Firsthand experience is good for learning though.
>Right?
>After hesitating for a moment, you put your arm on the table and grab Mac's hand.
>He's so much bigger than you that it's really more like he's holding your hand in his.
>No homo.
>"Alright, Anon. Show me what you can do."
"Uh... Okay?"
>You immediately put all of your strength into attempting to defeat Big Macintosh.
>His wrist buckles just a little bit, but his arm doesn't budge. Not even an inch.
>Your eyes widen in disbelief.
>You knew that he was one of the strongest guys around, but you don't even stand a chance.
>You're forced to watch as he tilts your hand back and easily pushes it down onto the table.
>He didn't seem to go all out, and you're thankful that he didn't choose to just break your hand.
>"You could do with some strength trainin', Anon."
"You're telling me."
>"You also ain't usin' your wrist enough."
"What?"
>"If you don't keep your wrist straight, your grip gets weak."
>You have to stop yourself from facepalming.
>This is the most cliché thing you've ever heard about arm wrestling.
>Luckily, you think you get the gist of it from Mac's demonstration.
"Thanks, Big Mac."
>You get up to leave.
>"You'll need more practice than that if you mean to beat mah sister later."
>/What/
>The gears don't have to turn for long before you realize that you were an idiot.
>He's Applejack's older brother.
>At least he was nice enough to help you anyway.
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>>25835437
>You bid Big Macintosh farewell and leave to go sit somewhere else on your own before this can get any more awkward for you.
>Taking a seat, you take out your phone to text Flash to see if he has any more ideas.
>You see a notification that someone has sent you a message.
>It's from Pinkie Pie.
>How did she even get your phone number?
>You decide that it's pointless to ask and check it out.
>There's a video attachment...
>...
>It's a video of Rarity's grumpy cat.
>Doing nothing.
>While Pinkie giggles in the background.
>*sigh*
>You're about to put your phone away, when you suddenly get an idea.
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>>25835500
>The rest of lunch goes by without incident.
>As does your next class.
>You took Drama as an elective this year.
>It's not about being in the spotlight though.
>Playing up your namesake, you stay out of the way and do more behind-the-scenes and stage building sort of things.
>As you head towards class, you remember something that makes you start to wish you could skip it today.
>You get in and make your way to backstage before you have to deal with the Drama Queen herself.
>"If I do say so myself, these outfits are smashing.
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>>25835958
Oh god, the image size. That's what I get for taking them from a Google image search. Might be time to prowl the threads for more Equestria Girls pics.
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>>25835958
i dont get this whole story

so somehow anon is some kind of irredeemable dirtbag because he didnt reciprocate an i love you to some fucking chick he doesnt even know or something

this is really kinda retarded
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>>25836057
Oh, for sure. The whole thing is blown way out of proportion, on purpose even. This is outrageous high school drama, so far only about one day after it started.

I don't know how good the pay-off is actually going to be for you guys once I finally get there, but we're still pretty early in and I think that the journey is going to be the interesting part.
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>>25835958
>Of course you have class with Rarity too.
>She's not rough-and-tough like some of her friends are, but you generally try to avoid dealing with her directly.
>Praises her own costume work.
>Always blows every little problem out of proportion.
>And of course she won a role this season, so every last thing has to be just perfect.
>The teacher for this class somehow always seems to be missing, but everything keeps running from student effort...
>With Rarity calling a lot of the shots.
>You manage to stay out of her way for a little while, until...
>"Anonymous?"
>What could she POSSIBLY WANT?
>"I want to talk to you about some of the stage designs.
>Oh, thank goodness, she's not going to give you trouble about what happened with Sunset.
>"Really, the window on this piece is set just a little bit too low to really frame..."
>"It would be better if this were a different shade of brown to contrast..."
>And it went on and on.
>She more than doubled your workload just by making you RE-DO things.
>Hammering.
>Painting.
>You're sweating like a dog by the time that the bell rings.
>As you gather up your things, Rarity comes over to you, looking at your hard work.
>"Very well done, darling."
"Thank you, Miss Rarity."
>It's taking every fiber of your being right now not to inject your words with sarcasm.
>"I just wanted to let you know that my opposite number is out for the rest of this week, so I'll need you to brush up on the script for some readings next class."
>The one regret that you have in this class is that everyone had to audition for a role.
>This means that you're an understudy, and now you're going to have to actually practice your lines again for the first time since auditions.
"Yes, Miss Rarity."
>"Very well, Anonymous. I'll be seeing you around."
>After she leaves, you take a deep breath and exhale, shaking off the stress.
>You gather up your things and go to meet your prior engagement.
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>>25835225
>at least someone likes it.

Add one more to that list.
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>>25835225
I'm on for the ride
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>>25836688
I appreciate you saying so, sir. And if I must say, you have excellent taste in waifus.

>>25836519
>You head down the halls of the school, combing your way through the crowd of students heading out to enjoy the rest of their day.
>There's the cafeteria.
>After taking a moment to ready yourself, you throw open the double doors.
>Ahead of you is Applejack, leaning back in a chair with her boots up on a table and her hat over her face.
>At that sound of your entrance, she props up her hat.
>"Well, you had the gumption to show up after all, Anon."
>As you glance around, you can also see that Fluttershy is also here.
>As is Flash, who seems to be pretending like he's currently unaware of his surroundings.
>Headphones on, book in front of his face, the works.
>"So, then..."
>Applejack puts her arm down on the table.
>"Let's have that talk."
>You walk over and have a seat, then lock hands with her.
>She gives you a fierce stare as those green eyes ignite like flames.
>This is NOT the kind of hand holding you wanted to do with a pretty girl.
>"Begin on 3, Anon."
>"One..."
>"Two..."
>"Three!"
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>>25836829
>Almost immediately, it takes all of your strength just to stop her from instantly taking you down.
>"You hurt Sunset's feelings, Anon!"
>You can hear the effort in her voice as she tries to finish you off.
"Applejack, I promise you that I didn't mean to!"
>"Go on then! Tell me for yourself what happened."
>If it keeps up like this for much longer, you're going to lose.
"I was so surprised when she asked me out that I was just stunned! I didn't mean to hurt anyone's feelings!"
>You adjust your grip, raising it higher up her hand as you lean into the table.
>You almost can't believe it as you manage to slowly make some progress back towards the starting point.
>You straighten your wrist out, but your progress stalls as Applejack seems to put the rest of her power into it.
>"And what about Sunset? Are you going to apologize to her? Do you even really like her back, Anon?"
"I will apologize to her... But the rest..."
>This is your one chance.
>You draw your elbow in closer to hers and pull her hand at an angle towards your side of the table with everything that you've got.
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>>25826550
It had the opposite effect draining all hope with only despair left
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>>25833696
Mmm.
>all you did was not say anything
>unrealistic reactions
>completely unreasonable character actions
>treating it like you insulted Sunset for a solid 40 seconds while saying no
>unnecessary and contrived hoops and hurdles
This is reading like the plot to a generic Japanese dating sim.
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>>25837023
I'm guessing that you were home-schooled.
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>>25836927
>You pull Applejack's wrist back, causing her grip to weaken on yours.
"That's between Sunset and I."
>The sound of her arm slamming onto the table is audible through the large, almost empty room.
>There's a moment of stunned silence afterward.
>You look around nervously.
>Fluttershy's eyes are wide.
>Flash drops his prop book.
>Then your eyes settle on Applejack.
>You promptly let go of her hand.
>Then you realize how much you're shaking.
>Applejack straightens herself out and stands up.
>She leans over the table and offers you a hand.
>"I can tell from that match, Anon... You were tellin' the honest truth."
>She smiles.
>"It took guts for you to stand up to me, and you put in a real effort like I never expected!
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>>25837023
You're definitely entitled to your opinion, but we sure are only around 1/3 of the way through the planned story. The misunderstandings are clearing up pretty rapidly, and there's something going on here that I'm not sure any of you have caught onto yet.
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>>25837096
Oh fuck the book...
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>>25837087
>You shake Applejack's hand and notice yourself smile for the first time since you walked into the room.
>In fact, it seems that everyone here is happy with the result.
>"Really though, Anon. I never expected you to be strong enough to actually beat me."
>Your smile breaks out into a grin.
"Oh, I'm not stronger than you, Applejack."
>"Wha-"
>"I beat you by applying the right kind of leverage to weaken your grip."
>You turn away from her.
>If you had sunglasses, you would put them on.
"I learned how to do it by watching videos on arm wrestling during lunch today."
>She doesn't seem to have an answer to this.
"Come along, Flash. I need to go shoe shopping."
>Flash is trying hard to hold in his laughter as you exit with him in tow.
>Before you make it out the door, you even hear Applejack start to chuckle.

END OF TUESDAY.
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>>25837131
I talk too much sometimes. Ah, well.

>>25837023
And what kind of dating sims are you referring to here, because I'm not seeing the connection.

Misunderstandings and social strifes are common themes in stories of all kinds. I don't really get why you're so nettled.

Yes, the beginning is really out there and the immediate aftermath seems extreme, but is that really so out of place in a setting where the main characters are all teenagers? Did you even read Romeo and Juliet?
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>>25837225
Awwwww yes this story is really starting to develop. I cant wait to see the end anon.
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>>25837225
All about the journey instead of the destination
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>>25837190
Pastebin link for the Tuesday leg of the story.
http://pastebin.com/nwUWDrUZ

Probably no more tonight. I have a lot of time this week though right up until the holidays, so I might be able to get this done before that, actually.

As always, feedback is appreciated. As long as there's a thread up when I'm ready to start posting, I will be there. If there's no thread, then you'll find me posting this in Fingerbang.
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>>25826977
>Anon has a crush on a lesbian Shimmer.

WHERE IS THE GREEN?!
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>>25836688
>>25836829
Add another to that list
It's pretty good
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>>25837353
Welcome aboard.
>mfw I see the image that you posted
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>>25837319
Definitely passing out.

More green to come for sure.
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>>25837319
Decent so far, writefriend.
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>>25837319
I Rike it
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please continue
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Go on
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>>25837042
What high school did you go to and what kind of shitty people did you associate with?
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>>25837096
Enjoying the writing, and I want more, but >>25837023 hit the nail right on the head. If this is what you were going for, then kudos. You did it perfectly.
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Alright. I think I have this next day all figured out.

I'm gonna go out and run an errand. When I get back, we start Wednesday.
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>>25841327
Can't wait
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>>25825389
let's hold hands
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>>25841928
DELETE THIS POST ! STAR WARS SPOILERS AHEAD !!!
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>>25837320
Then Adagio and Sunset feel bad for Anon so they decide to give him a "show he will never forget." Maybe if Anon is a good boy he could join in.
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>>25842504
thanks for the heads up
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>>25841928
kill yourself
>>25842504
>pic related
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>>25841928
Rude, much? If you're going to use spoiler tags on this board, at least make it related to the thread or the board content instead of dropping Star Wars on people.

Also: Greentext inbound.
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>>25837190
>Wake up.
>Grab things.
>Quick breakfast this time.
>Feeling pretty good about things today.
>Head for school.
>You happen to meet up with Flash on the walk over.
>"Well, well. Someone's looking confident today."
"After all of the crap that I've gone through over the last couple of days, I think I'm feeling good."
>"Good for you, man."
>You talk to chat with Flash for a bit about music during your trip.
>Eventually you reach Canterlot High and step inside.
"Look, I understand why you like Rush. Nobody will disagree with it. But why is Xanadu your favorite track of theirs?"
>"You just don't get the artistic value of it, Anon."
>As you're about to give your rebuttal as to why that argument is bullshit, Fluttershy comes up.
"Good morning, Anonymous."
>Damnit, she's so cute.
"Hey there, Fluttershy. What's up?"
>"It's nothing really. I was just wondering what you thought of the English assignment that we have due for today."
>You were in such a hurry to leave the class on Monday that you forgot to write it down.
"Oh... Well... What was it again?"
>"Anon, you really shouldn't put off your homework like that."
"Yeah, I know..."
>Fluttershy writes down the pages that you were supposed to read for today.
>Just about then, you hear a voice call your name.
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>>25843006
Yiss.
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>>25843006
>Rainbow Dash approaches you.
>"I heard about your little 'competition' with Applejack yesterday."
"Yes. And?"
>"You may be good in her book, but you haven't proven yourself to me yet."
>Fluttershy speaks up.
>"Rainbow Dash, I'm surprised at you. Haven't we given Anonymous enough trouble this week?"
>Another voice pipes up behind Rainbow Dash.
>"Yeah, Rainbow. Anon's a decent feller."
>You never would have thought before this week that anyone from the Main Six would really care about what happens to you.
>Now Fluttershy AND Applejack have come to your defense.
>You put your hands out to your sides.
"It's fine, you guys. Really."
>They seem a bit surprised to hear this response.
>The only person that isn't phased by this is Rainbow.
"What's it going to be, Rainbow Dash?"
>"Half an hour after school lets out. Meet me out at the soccer field. And you better not chicken out."
"Don't worry. I won't."
>She turns and leaves without saying another thing.
>Everyone else is looking at you like you're out of your mind.
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>>25825389
I love you too bancon hair.
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>>25825389
If you say "Chicken Butt" one more time i'm gonna rape you
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>>25843159
Want moar.
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>>25843159
Ho boy, he's going to lose the race?
I need the next part
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>>25841928

Drop dead and rot, faget.
>>
Got pulled away for a minute there. More coming shortly.
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>>25843006
>Rush
fuckin dropped
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>>25844360
Hahaha, wow, really?
As good as Rush is, I don't even listen to all that much of it. I just picked a band so they could banter about it.
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>>25843159
guitar battle
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>>25843159
>Flash is the first to speak up.
>"Anon, you know she's the star of the soccer team, right?"
"Is she?"
>Fluttershy looks worried for you, because you seem to be unprepared for everything today.
>Applejack starts to lay on the skepticism.
>"You know that this isn't like yesterday, right? You can't just learn to get good at a sport in less than a day."
"Sure."
>They all look less sure.
"Look, I'm telling you guys, I'll be fine."
>You turn towards the hall that leads to your next class and start walking.
"Really. You don't have to worry about me today. I've got this."
>At that moment, you see Pinkie Pie walking by.
>She turns and calls out to you, without stopping.
>"Nonny, I told you that you should get some new shoes!"
>What is she talking abou-
>It's happening again.
>You feel the world fall out from under you.
>IS THIS GOING TO HAPPEN EVERY DAY?
>Just before you faceplant, you come to a realization.
>You forgot your new shoes at home.
>You're wearing the old, shitty ones.
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>>25844502
I will admit to being a musicfag, but I'm not going to write any guitar battles into THIS story.
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>>25844535
Awesome moar please
>>
He dun goofed.
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>>25844520
>Nothing saves your ass this time.
>You eat shit.
>You can hear your comrades behind you.
>A sharp breath in.
>An "oooh..."
>An "eep"
>Before any of them can ask if you're okay, you stick out your hand and gives them a thumbs up before peeling yourself off the floor and dusting yourself off.
>You hear a laugh and a groan from behind you as you make your way to your first class.
>The rest of your morning passes without anything else going wrong.
>Well, almost.
>The power flickered while you were typing a paper and you lost half of it.
>You came pretty close to having that solution blow up in your face during chemistry.
>But you made it to lunch just fine.
>You get your tray filled up and have a seat with Flash.
>After a little while, you hear your phone go off.
>Looks like you've got a text.
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>>25844729
yesssssssssssss
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>>25844729

>You don't recognize the number, but you check it anyway.
>"I hope you don't mind, but I got your number from Pinkie Pie."
>Okay, so that explains that much.
>It still doesn't explain how PINKIE has your number, but you know it's better not to ask.
>"I'm really sorry about all of this. Would you be willing to meet with me before school tomorrow so we can talk about it?"
>It's from Sunset Shimmer.
>She wants to clear all of this up.
>Maybe today is as good as you thought it would be after all.
>As the bell rings for classes to resume, you send her a text back saying that you will.
>Your next class period passes uneventfully.
>That leads you up to... English again.
>"Today I'd like you to fill out these worksheets on the reading."
>That can't be good.
>You only skimmed the reading after Fluttershy gave you the page numbers-
>"I will allow you to partner up for this.
>The room is instantly a massive shift of people trying to sit by their best friends so that they can chat.
>After the room settles, you're sitting next to Fluttershy.
>She didn't notice you for a moment and nearly jumps out of her seat.
"So... partners?"
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>>25844880
Go on...
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>>25840637
Hell, I'm out of school in the workforce for longer than I care to admit. Sounds like the bullshit I used to put up with at my last job.
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>>25844880
>"O-okay. Sure, Anon."
>You both work on the worksheet packet.
>But mostly Fluttershy.
>You help out where you can, but it requires a lot of reading the text thoroughly for the first time.
>It's going well, but it seems like there's something else on her mind.
"Fluttershy?"
>"Yes, Anonymous?"
"Are you still worried about how I'm going to deal with Rainbow Dash later?"
>"N-no, of course not..."
>That doesn't sound convincing.
"Really? Because you sound nervous."
>"Well.. maybe a little bit. Rainbow Dash is a really good athlete, and I just don't want you to feel bad if you can't win."
"It's really okay, Fluttershy. Thank you for being concerned about me, but I promise you that I know what I'm getting myself into. So don't worry about it anymore, okay?"
>"O-okay. If you say so."
>She gives you a small smile after you reassure her.
>You two wrap up the assignment and write your name on it.
>She has beautiful, cursive handwriting.
>Damnit, everything about her is adorable.
>The bell rings and you split off from Fluttershy to go wait for your challenge against Rainbow Dash.
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There are a few weird music references scattered around. Anybody happen to catch those?

Should be able to easily get through the Wednesday chapter today. Maybe even the Thursday one.
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>>25845149
Nothing here. Not good with musical references...
wish I were... I've been simply sitting with anger recently, staying away. May I ask you to help?
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>>25844520
>Pony known for her speed and races
>human counterpart plays soccer.

I really dont know why she isnt a track or cross country runner
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Okay, folks. I've got some black tea and a head full of baked and half-baked ideas.

Let's do this.

>>25845451
Because muh sports.

>>25845271
There's a really crappily ponified name of an artist in the Monday section, and the Tuesday section starts off by referencing Beatles lyrics.
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>>25845823
I see. Interesting...
add more references. Don't need to sell the world for it, though. keep hiding them, and do a better job. Not the case of what I did on my previous post
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>>25845114
>It's almost time.
>You're ready.
>You KNOW that you're ready.
>You throw open the door and step out onto the field.
>"Looks like you didn't chicken out after all."
>Rainbow Dash is standing at midfield with a soccer ball trapped under her foot.
>Scanning the field, you can see Fluttershy and Applejack are both sitting in the stands to watch this.
>No Flash this time though.
>Your eyes settle on Dash again.
"Nope."
>"That's fine with me. I'll beat you anyway."
>She kicks up the ball and catches it.
>"First to score ten goals wins.
>You nod and take your position on one side of the line.
>Dash places the ball.
>Fluttershy lines up at the center from off-field.
>"Ready?"
>There's a long hesitation before she finally blurts out:
>"Go!"
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>>25845953
>Before you can even move, the ball shoots past you with Rainbow Dash in hot pursuit.
>You try to maneuver around her to get it back, but she is FAST.
>She shoots...
>She scores.
>The game just started she's already ahead of you by a point.
>She turns to look at you and the look on her face is SO SMUG.
>"You sure you don't wanna just give up now?"
>You put on your game face.
"Never."
>You reset for the next one...
>Ready to go this time, you manage to get the first kick in and start dribbling the ball down the field.
>She hasn't caught up to you after a couple of seconds, and this is starting to feel good.
>Even if your soccer technique is awful.
>Just then, it happens again.
>You slip in the grass and Rainbow dashes by, stealing the ball.
>By the time you right yourself again, it's already too late to stop her.
>She scores again.
>And again.
>And again.
>And again.
>It keeps happening until she has nine goals to your zero.
>Then it happens.
>"ANON! CATCH!"
>You turn to see something sailing through the air towards you.
>You catch it.
>It's the new tennis shoes you bought yesterday.
>Flash is here.
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>>25846095
>You grin.
"Flash, you son of a bitch! You broke into my house for a pair of shoes?"
>"Just lookin' out for you, man!"
>You look to Rainbow Dash and call a time out.
>You kneel down and start untying the shoes that have been causing a lot of shit the past few days.
>"What difference is a pair of shoes going to make? I only need one more point to win!"
>You block her out.
>Flash is amping up the mood the only way he knows how to:
>By playing his guitar.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ONcxeHUxmaU
>You slip your feet into the new shoes and tie the old ones together by the laces.
>You turn and throw them hard.
>They land in a nearby dumpster with a satisfying thud.
>You turn to Rainbow Dash.
"It. Is. ON."
>You walk up to the starting position again, ready and raring to go.
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>>25846261
>You get your ass whooped anyways
>"Fegget"
>You go home and cry

>END OF WEDNESDAY
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>>25846325
That sure would be a sudden change of pace, wouldn't it?
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>>25846261
Ho boy, the tension...
>>25846325
Kek
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>>25846261
>Rainbow Dash is surprised this time when you actually slip past her with the ball.
>You can feel the fire within.
>Dash is quickly catching up to you.
>Pushing yourself, you can see that you're approaching the goal.
>You're NOT going to slip this time.
>She's outpacing you.
>This is all you.
>She's ahead of you now, but you see an opening.
>You shoot!
>Everything happens in slow motion.
>Your foot makes contact with the ball.
>It streaks through the air.
>Rainbow Dash whips around and throws a kick.
>It connects with the ball.
>Everything suddenly speeds up again as a black and white shape blurs over your head.
>You turn around to pursue it.
>It looks like a rainbow just shoots right past your face.
>She kicks the ball...
>And it's over.
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For the record, that wasn't influenced by this
>>25846325
post.

And that's sure as hell not where the story ends.
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>>25846515
>Rainbow Dash scores her tenth goal.
>Flash stops playing instantly.
>Everyone in the stands generally just looks down.
>Rainbow Dash immediately starts gloating.
>"AW, YEAH! Who's awesome? I'm awesome!"
>She turns to you.
>"So, what do you have to say NOW, Anon?"
>You stand your ground.
"Re-match. Right here. Right now."
>"Wha? I just THRASHED you ten to nothing and you want to go again?"
"That's right."
>There's a moment where she doesn't know how to respond.
>"F-Fine then. Have it your way. But don't start crying if you lose again!"
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>>25846676
>You won't go out like this.
>You refuse to go out like this.
>The game starts again.
>You keep putting your all into it.
>Rainbow Dash keeps walking all over you.
>It's a total blow-out.
>Again.
"Again."
>"Ugh, are you kidding?"
>You play her again.
>You get stomped again.
>You're both starting to get tired, you more than her.
"Again."
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>>25846798
>"What is your DEAL Anon? It doesn't matter how many times we do this, you're not going to win!"
>You look at her with a fierce look in your eyes.
"Because I won't back down. Not anymore."
>She looks surprised to hear this.
>You think back to your encounter with Sunset on Monday.
"I already made the mistake of getting in my own way, and I'm sure as hell not going to let anyone, even you, stop me either."
>There's a long silence as you stare her down.
>The air is still, no one says a thing.
>Rainbow Dash walks over to you...
>"You just stood up for what you believe in. You have guts dude. A lot of guts."
>She extends a hand to you with a smile.
>"You know... you're alright by me, Anon."
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>>25847061
>You shake Rainbow's hand, which quickly turns into a fist bump that you almost don't manage to reciprocate.
>Fluttershy, Applejack, and Flash are cheering from the stands.
>You smile.
"Thanks Rainbow Dash. You're probably not so bad either."
>She rolls her eyes.
>"Yeah, well, I AM pretty awesome. But you're cooler than I thought you were. Good luck working things out with Sunset."
>You nod to Rainbow Dash before departing from the field.
>You spend the walk home talking to Flash, laughing about the whole thing as he recalls just how bad you got wrecked.
>When you get home, you go straight to your room and lie down on the bed.
>You're exhausted from going three rounds with Rainbow Dash.
>But that's not surprising.
>Not giving up had been your plan all along.
>And tomorrow morning, you're going to meet with Sunset Shimmer and settle this whole mess.

END OF WEDNESDAY.
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>>25847236
It's gonna happen
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I actually got through that section slower than I thought I would.

The pastebin for the Wednesday section is up now, by the way.
http://pastebin.com/FAbYER5z

I might start the Thursday part here in just a little bit.

As always, feedback is always appreciated!
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>>25847331
No, really though. Feedback on that last section would be really appreciated. I feel like compared the previous day's challenge, the tone shift was a lot stronger.
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>>25847411
Try and build more tension leading up to things.
It feels like you're going
>Declare thing
>Stuff in-between thing that implies thing
>thing
Cool anyway
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>>25825389
"have you been drinking sunset?"
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>>25845149
>music references
>no Chop Suey jokes

Good story though.

>wake up
>Grab a brush and put a little make-up
>Hide the scars to fade away the shake-up (hide the scars to fade away the...)
>Why'd you leave the keys upon the table?
>Here you go create another fable
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>>25847931
Not gonna lie. I actually thought about it.
Just didn't feel right.
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>>25847956
Shoulda done it. Every time there was a 'Wake up', I was expecting it.
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This next part's not going to come as easily. Ironically, Sunset's active role in the story was the last thing that I figured out.

Green coming shortly.
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>>25847236
>You wake up to an alarm.
>Your arm sweeps over and knocks it off of your nightstand, causing the clock to conveniently turn off when it impacts the floor.
>Getting up a little bit earlier than normal today was important.
>You get ready for your day in an orderly fashion.
>Clothes on.
>Breakfast eaten.
>Bitchin' new kicks laced up.
>Out the door.
>When you arrive at Canterlot High, the amount of people hanging around this early is a lot smaller than you're used to.
>You walk up the steps to the front door, take a deep breath, and go inside.
>It's like a ghost town.
>It looks like the teachers are in their rooms, but there aren't any students in the halls.
>No chatter, no clanking of lockers
>You walk, nothing to keep you company but your thoughts.
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>>25848248
>This week has been a lot of things.
>Stressful.
>Unreal.
>Amazing.
>Satisfying.
>And it all happened because when an opportunity presented itself to you, you said nothing.
>You said nothing and it threw your whole world for a loop.
>All over a girl.
>A beautiful girl with crimson and golden hair.
>A girl who is intelligent and kind.
>This all happened because that girl chose to open her heart up to you and you didn't know how to respond.
>You can't help but chuckle to yourself.
>If you'd said something, anything at all, none of it would have happened.
>But then where would you be?
>If you could go back and change it, would you have?
>Maybe on Monday, you would have.
>But now...
>You're not so sure.
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>>25846641
Dang
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That's all for tonight.

Same rules apply. If the thread hasn't drowned under all of the shitposting, I'll continue this here. If there's no thread for me to continue in, I'll take it to Fingerbang.
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>>25848535
Oh yeah, that's right. Keep writing you dirty slut. You know you want it.
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>>25825517
That post is so accurate it almost terrifies me.
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>>25848394
Keep up with the good work, lolwut brony
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>>25848852
Hi Alex.
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>>25825461
Yeah, RD could be watching
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>>25849888
Nice trips
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>>25848852
Maybe at the beginning of your story. Not so much now though.

>>25849888
Oi. You need to show me the ropes of Payday 2. If you still play it.
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>>25850082
>still playing Oyveyshill's scam simulator
>any time after Crimefest 2015

Enjoy your skins, goy.

>>25849888
Nice trips farn
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>>25850101
That is actually exactly when I quit. It was fun, but Oy vey did overshill go full jewmode.
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>>25825389
bump
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>>25848394
Whose next I wonder?
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>>25825389
bump
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Page 9 begone
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>>25850101
I need to find a new multiplayer game to get into then.
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>>25850813
>>25851391
>>25851928
>>25852547
>>25852547
Your vigilance keeping the thread alive is appreciated. Green is being cooked up as we speak.

>>25851920
Well, if you were to map out the events so far, you could probably make an educated guess by referring to Anon's schedule.
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Bump?
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>>25848394
>And now you're here.
>It's the corner of the school where you met Sunset when all of this began.
>It doesn't take long for you to find her.
>She's leaning against the lockers, those cyan eyes lost in thought.
>Those eyes look up as she notices your approach.
>A small smile grows on her face.
>"Hey there, Anon."
"Good morning, Sunset."
>"Thanks for agreeing to meet me."
"I wanted to. I've been wanting to talk to you since Monday."
>"Please, let me go first. I have a lot that I need to get off my chest."
>You nod and listen as Sunset Shimmer tells you how this all of this started.
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>>25852839
Here we go
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>>25852839
Please don't let someone else take her
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>>25852839
>"I guess I don't need to ask you if you remember the Fall Formal."
>You do remember it. As does anyone who has been at the school since last year.
>Sunset used to be "popular," but disliked by quite a few people.
>You don't fully understand all of what happened at the Fall Formal, but apparantly it was magic.
>Literally magic.
>She turned into some kind of demon.
>Even more, she started turning the other students into zombies.
>Well, they were LIKE zombies, anyway.
>Something happened where the other girls that make up the Main Six teamed up with that bookish girl that transfered in from nowhere.
>They put a stop to it, leaving Sunset just a vulnerable girl with a lot of people understandably angry with her.
">You can imagine that I didn't have a lot of friends after that. I was lucky to have anyone forgive me at all."
>It was true. Applejack, Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash, Rarity, and Pinkie Pie all became her friends afterwards.
>They gave her a new chance.
>"But even with new friends, it wasn't easy for me after that."
>She looks down.
>"Everyone else wasn't so forgiving. Wherever I went, whatever I did, no one trusted me. They said a lot of hurtful things to my face and behind my back... Except for one person."
>She looks up and her eyes meet yours.
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>>25852937
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>>25852937
>"You, Anonymous. We had class together, and though we really didn't talk that much, you were never rude to me."
>Hearing this surprises you.
>You hardly talked to her at all, but it was true that you never gave her trouble for what she did.
>You weren't the kind of person who would hang on to the bad things in life, and you certainly weren't going to kick someone else when they were down.
>"To a lot of people, you don't really stand out. You tend to be pretty quiet for the most part, but I saw that you're also hard-working and kind."
>There's a moment of silence as she thinks about where to go from here.
>"Eventually, more people became willing to trust me. I made a few more friends, but it wasn't until the Battle of the Bands that most of the school was willing to forgive what I'd done."
>That was a weird week.
>What's the deal with trouble always starting up after students transfer in, anyway?
>After all of that happened, Sunset became popular again, but this time because she was well-liked.
>"But I didn't forget, Anon. I... I grew feelings for you that I didn't know how to express."
>She sighs.
>"Maybe I was just afraid that you would reject me. I wasn't in a good place in my life for a while there."
>She allows herself just the slightest hint of a smile, her emotional baggage starting to lighten up.
>"But recently things have been good. I started having thoughts about you again, and I felt confident enough to tell you how I really felt."
>Her eyes gaze deeply into yours.
>"So I did. But when you didn't say anything, I was afraid that you would reject me for what I did after all. I just couldn't handle that fear that my past might actually get in the way of my life again."
>"And I ran."
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>>25853073
yesssss thank u
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>>25853073
>You can hear the sadness and regret in her voice.
>"I'd been so excited before meeting with you that I told my friends about it. When they saw me come back in tears, they must have assumed that you hurt me.
>There it was.
>The catalyst that had brought you so much strife this week.
>Your staredown from Fluttershy.
>The arm wrestling match with Applejack.
>Destruction at the hands of Rainbow Dash's soccer skills.
>"I never meant to cause you so much trouble, Anon. I hope that you can forgive me."
>Her eyes turn to the floor again.
>"And I'd understand if you never want to talk to me again.
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>>25853073
MOAR. FEED MORE FEELS
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>>25853228
Grab her, tell her sorry you didn't do this sooner, and say you don't want to let go of her. Oh and don't forget to take her to prom.
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>>25853228
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>>25853228
>There it all is.
>Now, you have a choice to make.
>You weren't ready for it last time, you had a lot dropped on you to think about.
>But this time, you've already done all of the thinking that you need.
>You walk up to Sunset.
>You use your hand to lift up her chin and look her right in the eyes.
"Sunset, I've had a lot of time to think since Monday."
>She's staring back at you, her expression unsure.
"I like you Sunset. I really do."
>Her eyes widen in disbelief.
"If you'll have me, I'd love to go out with you."
>The corners of her eyes are starting to water up.
>She throws her arms around you.
>"Of course, Anon!"
>You wrap your arms around her and share an intimate moment.
>You've never hugged a girl before.
>It's warm, and you get a face full of her beautiful hair.
>After what feels like several minutes, you let go of each other.
"So... uh..."
>"Yes, Anon?"
>Her smile is so heartwarming.
>You almost have a heart attack from cuteness overload.
"Do you want to maybe do something after school?"
>She shuffles her feet a bit, you can hear her boots sliding on the tiled floor.
>"I'm sorry, Anon. I'm busy after school today... Will you be at Pinkie's party tomorrow?"
"Of course, Sunset. I'll meet you there?"
>"Sure. Don't be a stranger until tomorrow though, okay? You have my number now, after all."
>You give her a big smile.
"Of course."
>She gives you a wink and takes her leave.
>You can hear the school coming alive.
>The day's just starting, but it feels like your whole week has turned around.
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Gonna take a little break, but I already know how the rest of the day plays out.

Also, I never thought I would get away with posting three pictures of sad Sunset in a row without getting lynched.

>>25853272
>Oh and don't forget to take her to prom.
What do you think this is, Homecoming Anon?
It's not. I did really enjoy that story, though.
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>>25853549
It was pretty good
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>>25853523
YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS
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>>25826904

Pinkie
Get down from there
Pinkie stop it
You're not a 7 foot tall black man
You look ridiculous
You need to stop
>>
Bump.
kind of wish I had a relationship like this one between anon and shimmer... or just one at all
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>>25825461
I can't find a homecoming Anon thread. Anyone have a link to the pastebin so I can read it?
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>>25854685
http://pastebin.com/u/FulLR3tarD
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Live bump
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>>25853523
Good end
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>>25853523
>Go to history.
>Harshwhinny may be a sourpuss, but nothing's knocking your spirits down today.
>Class passes by without incident.
>Step out into the hall after class.
>Turn the corner.
>Your vision goes pink.
>You stumble, but you don't fall over.
>Fuck that.
>After a moment of feeling good for yourself about not being on the floor again, you realize at Pinkie Pie is RIGHT IN FRONT OF YOU.
>But... you're pretty sure you left the classroom ahead of her.
"Pinkie Pie?"
>"Hi, Nonny! Did you and Sunset talk things out?"
"Yes, actually."
>You put on a big smile.
"Things turned out great."
>She gets excited.
>"Oh, that's so good to hear! You're still coming to the party on Friday right? It's gonna be amazing!"
>You chuckle.
"Yeah, Pinkie. I'll be there."
>"Great! I'll see you later, Nonny!"
>She skips off into the hallway traffic.
>You can see that big, poofy hair of hers bob up over everyone else's heads as she gets further and further away from you.
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>>25855365
End? On Thursday?

I mean, if you want to stop reading there then you can, but this story isn't over yet!
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>>25855385
this ride is not going to end? I don't want to leave it then
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>>25854708
Thanks
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>>25855373
>The next class passes by in a flash.
>Speaking of which, you can't wait to tell that guy about your morning.
https://youtu.be/WB-aNl2-YoE?t=4s
>Wait, did your ring tone actually get MORE BLAND when you weren't looking?
>You have a text from... Rarity.
>[Greetings, Anonymous. Our instructor stumbled through the staging area yesterday and knocked over a few things. Nothing seems to be damaged, but would you be a dear and check it for yourself if you have a minute to spare?]
>You roll your eyes.
>Well, something was bound to happen today, even if none of Sunset's friends are out to get you anymore.
>Who needs the whole lunch period anyway?
>Did you even have lunch half of the days this week?
>You head to the stage.
>Of course there's no one here.
>Rarity just dropped a job on you on your own time and she isn't even here.
>You climb up onto the stage and find a few things out of their normal place, with a little note in Rarity's overly-curly cursive handwriting telling you that these are the things.
>Taking a look, everything does seem to be fine...
>Except for one piece that seems to be missing a nail.
>You quickly grab a hammer and scan the floor for the loose nail so no one will step on it by mistake.
>After a few minutes, your work is done.
>As you return to the toolbox, you notice that there are some papers scattered all over the floor.
>Picking them up, they appear to be a bunch of Rarity's design notes.
>You straighten them out into a neat pile and set them down by her work station.
>Before you leave, you stop and think for a moment.
>You have an idea.
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>>25834562
>"You really should get some new shoes. Before tomorrow, even."
11/10 best foreshadowing ever in a greentext
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>>25841928
I thought he nuked the commonwealth.
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>>25855856
I liked writing that in. It's a ridiculous running gag. I don't even know why I keep putting it in, but the opportunities to do so keep coming up.
I especially liked it because even though it comes up again, this thing that is a joke ends up not being important enough to effect the plot.
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>>25855856
Well I wouldn't go that far.
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>>25825389
bump
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>>25855819
>The rest of your day before Drama class sweeps by without incident.
>Here it comes.
>You have to "act" today to fill in for a missing player.
>Ugh.
>You take a seat with everyone else while Rarity stands up on stage and acts a coordinator.
>She calls out a scene and those players come up to the stage to do a reading.
>She also then calls out the next scene so that everyone reading that one can get ready.
>The first group of players come up to the stage and begin.
>Given that most of the people here double as crew, there's actually some pretty good acting.
>It's too bad that it's just a second-rate play.
>Why on earth would anyone think it would be a good idea to put on a fantasy story about a bunch of high school teenagers, anyway?
>After the first group finishes up, the second group comes up to the stage.
>Rarity steps up to the edge of the stage to call the next one.
>"I'll need Anonymous up here to understudy for Act 1, Scene 8."
>You throw up your hands in outrage.
>That's the scene where Rarity's character and another one try to seduce one another.
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>>25856734
https://youtu.be/q-jk-TJ78Lw
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>>25856770
Good... Good... Imagining Anon and Rarity in place of them makes this all the more delicious.
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>>25856734
>The next scene goes by as you gloss over the part of the script that you're about to do with Rarity.
>"Come up here, Anonymous. This will be the last one for today, everyone can return to their projects afterward."
>You climb up onto the stage and take a position off to one side.
>Rarity looks to you to make sure that you're ready.
>You let out a deep sigh and then nod to her.
>She walks offstage, then back on.
>This is how the scene starts, she comes into the room.
>"THERE you are, darling. You didn't think that you could hide from me, did you?
>She's got her flirty face on.
>Wait, is she not holding a script?
>After a moment, you realize that you're just standing there not saying your lines.
"Darling? Coming on a bit strongly, aren't you?"
>She's sauntering over to you, nice and slow.
>You sometimes forget this because you're usually trying to avoid her as much as possible, but it's true:
>She's gorgeous.
>"But of course. Why shouldn't I when I'm talking to such a big, strong, man?"
>She smirks and slowly strokes your face with the side of her hand before turning away from you.
>"And besides... are you sure that you don't like it?"
>She's laying it on so thick.
>Is she testing you?
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anyone know what happened to Liquid Plasma's whole story about anon? i think one of the stories was "High School Reunion" and "Lustful Temptations"
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>>25856985
>"After all, a lot of guys would *kill* for a girl like me."
>She gives you a look that screams "come hither."
>But you don't lock up.
>You don't show your anger.
>You are Anonymous, King of the Poker Face.
>And you're going to show her what real acting is.
>You throw down your script.
"Really? Because you seem to be pretty eager to have my attention yourself."
>Rarity blinks in surprise as you step towards her.
"Perhaps it's not just me that you're interested in, but the pull that I have around here?"
>She regains her composure.
>"I don't know whatever it is that you mean by that, darling."
"Oh, I think you do."
>You both step closer to each other
>"And if I were, you understand how well I can also sway things my way."
>She places an arm around your shoulder and gets up close to your face.
"I see, then..."
>You clasp her hand in yours and step away from her.
>You're now standing apart from one another, but connected by your linked arms.
"In that case, "darling..."
>You pull her in, holding her close and dipping her backwards, supporting her with your other arm.
>She looks up at you in surprise as your face contorts into a devilish grin.
"Perhaps we can have something a little bit more... mutual."
>Your face approaches hers and her eyes go wide.
>You can feel her becoming uneasy in your grasp. She almost tries to push you off of her.
>You lean in...
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>>25857296
aw shit dis gon be gud
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>>25857296
I like this. I want one green that Anon hooks up with character besides Sunset or Rainbow
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>>25857333
You mean for this story or in general? There should be plenty of stories like that
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>>25857368
In general. Don't take this the wrong way I enjoy all green but it's nice to see some variety.
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>>25857296
>Her eyes close.
>You lean in and whisper in her ear.
"Scene."
>You prop her up again and she nearly falls over.
>She's extremely flustered.
>You hear a some people talking from the audience.
>"The school will never let us use that scene as is."
>There are a couple of people with pens scratching out lines and re-writing some changes on their copies of the script.
>Rarity finally regains her composure and clears her throat.
>"That's a wrap everyone... Please return to your work."
>The script kids stay where they are and work on editing.
>You go back to building and maintenance.
>Rarity goes to work on her costumes.
>"My word... who did this?"
>Her work table has all of her tools set out neatly, with the materials that she needs for her planned costumes immediately on hand.
>You pause from driving screws into a plank to give her a hand signal.
"You're welcome, "Miss" Rarity."
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>>25857436
I get ya.. Even if many aren't being made now, there are plenty of completed stories I haven't even read yet, so I'd look into those.
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>>25853549
this is making my lazy afternoon comfy

>>25856770
this fits surprisingly well
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>>25857333
Unfortunately for you, this is a Sunset story.

Fortunately for you, I have a Fluttershy-focused story that I can recommend.
http://pastebin.com/FJezXs9N

Also, nice trips.
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>>25857504
And I am going to stick around because I like the story.
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damnit, now i want to be a writefag and make something with either FS, RRR or TW

what do you anons say? should i do it with this prompt but changing the characters or start from scratch?
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>>25857466
This is a really unique green. It's not explosively enjoyable or groundbreaking, but it's so... consistently entertaining. I really wish I had the stuff to write like this. All I can do is the occasional one-shot.
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>>25857561
That's totally up to you, man. I've never done any writefagging before this, I just saw the prompt and was like "You know, I've thought about doing greentext before. I'll just start writing and see where it goes."

>>25857569
I really appreciate you saying so. I don't know how to feel about some of the things that I write in and how you guys might react to it. Planning the story wasn't hard once I knew what I wanted to do, but the execution is like a big unknown.

So far, Thursday has been the hardest day to write for. I don't think that's going to be the case by the end of it.
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>>25857333
There's a bretty gud Moondancer green going on right now.
Depressing as fuck though
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>>25857600
pic related
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>>25857608
Here it is >>25805608
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>>25857466
>Rarity says nothing and returns to her work.
>In fact, she doesn't say anything for the rest of the class period.
>When the bell finally rings, you two are the last ones remaining.
>She walks over to you.
>"Anonymous. Could I have a word with you?"
>She's not using any of her usual flare.
>You don't think you've ever seen her so casual before.
"Sure. What can I do for you, Rarity?"
>"I just wanted to say that I'm was very surprised by your performance earlier. I never knew you could act like that."
>You don't say anything in reply, instead finishing putting away your tools.
>"It's just that... I don't see how anyone as talented as you could possibly lose an audition.
>You look at Rarity.
"It's really a lot more simple than you think."
>"She looks as you, confused.
"I don't like being in the spotlight. I'd really prefer to be backstage helping everything else move along."
>It's like she expects there to be more than that.
>But after she realizes that there isn't, she decides to speak up again.
>"I see. Well, then. I just have one thing that I want to say."
>You look at her.
"Yes?
>"Thank you, Anonymous. For everything that you do around here."
>That's a genuine smile.
>"You're a real gentleman after all, you know. If it weren't for Sunset, I think I'd have to snatch you right up."
>She picks up her purse and puts on a scarf that you know she's only wearing because it matches the rest of her ensemble.
>"Have a good rest of your day, Anonymous."
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>>25857748
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>>25857748
>On your way out of the school, you run into Flash Sentry.
>"Hey, Anon! You didn't show up to lunch again today. So, how'd it go this morning?"
"Let me tell you..."
>You fill in Flash on how your talk with Sunset went this morning.
>When you tell him that you'll be hanging out with her at Pinkie's party tomorrow, he bumps fists with you.
>When you get home, you go straight to your room as usual.
>After you put a dent in your homework, you take out your phone and send Sunset a text.

END OF THURSDAY.
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>155 unread posts in White Knight General
>still reading the derpy green somebody linked
>mfw

>>25857844
This tickles
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>>25857888
holy damn appchan X is acting up, didnt mean to put that green here
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That's another day down. Will probably start up the Friday part before I go to bed tonight.
In other news, I think we've approached the bump limit. I can hardly believe it.

Pastebin for the Thursday section is now up:
http://pastebin.com/aF1saEMf

Also, FUN FACT: I did this edit in MSPaint myself while yesterday in preparation for that one stupid joke.
.>>25857296


>>25857630
Fucking saved.
>>25857844
This one too.
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>>25857933
Pffft. Apparantly I don't know what the bump limit is for this board. We have a little ways to go, I guess.

A concern for tomorrow, maybe.
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>>25857943
I gotta go, so I'm finishing this story tomorrow. Well, actually later today considering the time here (12:20 am).
You've earned yourself a fan, good sir.
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>>25857888
Which thread is White Knight General?

>>25857978
Welcome aboard!
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>>25858031
>>25858022
So apprently Firefox is using the URL for this thread for all of my tabs. That's... fucking strange.

Let's try this again.

>>25842919
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>>25858044
Really? That one's a White Knight thread?
Who'd have thought it?
Actually, from all of my time on /tg/ I don't find it even remotely surprising.

Also, for fuck's sake, I meant to tag both of your RD picks in that post above. Yeah. I'm gonna take a quick break, because I am slipping all over the place now that the section's finished.
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>>25858075
Yeah. A few nurture porn addicts set the tone for the whole thread with like 3 gentle-themed stories and it just kind of stuck. Probably the happiest accident since Derpy.

Bump limit is 250... I learned something today.
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>>25857748
>If it weren't for Sunset, I think I'd have to snatch you right up
Well, at least we know Anon has options.

>>25858098
Image limit is 250.
Reply limit is 500.
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>>25858431
Thanks for the report on what the limits are.
Also, damn, that picture is comfy. Fucking saved.
Also, I think you're a little hopeful, Anon. This isn't a harem story. Maybe someday, if I feel like it.

As much as I like to think I'm throwing you guys for a loop here and there, the story is really straightforward.

The question is, are my tricks really tricky, or have some/all of you caught on already?
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>>25858497
Well I'm as dense as a brick, so no
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>>25858497
>Isn't a harem story
That's good. I find a lot of those kinds of stories aren't the best, what with shoehorning in each character and automatically finding a way for Anon to somehow click with the chick
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Okay. I think I have this next day figured out, but first I need to pass out.

Expect some fresh green when I get back, because Friday is going to be an interesting day for Anonymous.
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>>25859020
Good night, kind sir
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>>25825389
bump
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>>25825389
Psst
Hey Sunset
Pssst, right here
Hey hey pssst
Hey Sunset!
Guess what?
That was fucking annoying, stop it.
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>>25853059
saving this for my R34 folder
I don't even know why
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bumpa
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>>25859840
Not gonna lie, I was expecting the star wars spoiler
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>>25860579
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Bumping the thread 'til Lolwut comes back
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Bumping for the return of the author.
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Lolwut come back
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>>25862682
I'm back. The green is actually being cooked up.
Took me a bit to settle on how I wanted to handle the first part of this day.
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>>25862707
I'm excited to see what happens next.
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>>25857844
>You wake up the next morning feeling pretty good.
>Though you spent a long time texting Sunset back and forth about how your respective days were, you actually managed to get a good night's sleep.
>Even your morning classes end up being pretty normal.
>It's like everything is back to normal.
>The difference now is that you don't even mind how dull it is.
>You're still riding on the good feelings from how this week has panned out.
>Lunch time rolls around.
>You sit with Flash and give him shit for his recent flip to listening to '90s alternative.
>Just then, you get a feeling and whip out your phone.
>A moment later, you get a text.
>Lame ringtone averted.
>You brought your A-Game today.
>You can't help but smile when you see that it's from Sunset.
>It's a selfie of her smiling at you.
>Wait, you recognize where she is.
>You look up and across the room to see where she's sitting with the rest of the Main Six.
>You smirk and quickly use your phone to snap a picture of yourself and send it to her.
>From here, you see her look your way and smile.
>After a minute, she sends you another one, but this time, Pinkie Pie and Rarity are posing in the background of the picture.
>Flash shakes his head at you.
>"Really, man?"
"Shut up and get over here."
>You snap a picture of you and Flash doing devil horns like you're rocking out.
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>>25863117
>This continues on back and forth a couple more times until Flash stops cooperating.
>You roll your eyes, but you don't bother him about it any further.
>Eventually the lunch period comes to a close.
>Sunset shoots you another text.
>[I'll see you tonight at the party, right?]
[Definitely.]
>Flash decides this is a good moment to give you shit.
>"And here I thought you were done falling this week, Anon."
>...
"Even YOU know that joke was bad."
>"It was worth it."
>Even though you can hardly wait for tonight, the rest of your day just zips by.
>You go home and clean yourself up a bit.
>It's party time.
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>>25863184
>It's party time.
Excellent.
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>>25863184
Mmm, it's getting good.
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moar?
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Million things happened at once. Nothing to worry about. There's a lot of time left in the day, and I guarantee we're getting through Friday tonight.
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>>25863184
>>25863400
https://youtu.be/BxHNztg0X3s?t=30
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>>25864560
As much as I appreciate that you are aware of this, I still must question WHY
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>>25864560
every night in my dreams.
I see you.
I feel you.
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>>25864560
y u do dis
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>>25850101
>any time after Infamous 2.0
FTFY
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>>25862715
I wish there was more to this one.
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>>25863184
>You arrive at Pinkie Pie's house just a little later than the time posted on the invitation that she gave you.
>There are cars parked all over the street.
>Is the whole school here?
>As you approach the door, you can hear some kind of techno music pumping through the house.
>You join a small cluster of people that are on their way in.
>It really IS like the whole school is here.
>Pinkie Pie appears before you in the blink of an eye.
>"Hey, Nonny! Glad you could make it!"
>You give her a warm smile.
"Of course I wouldn't miss it, Pinkie."
>"I hope you have super-duper tons of fun! I've gotta go check on the refreshments, but I bet there's someone waiting for you on the dance floor!"
>She zips off.
>Wait, dance floor?
>That's when you notice that most of this huge living room is a crowd of people dancing to the music.
>Your eyes scan the crowd and you spot a certain combination of red and gold that sets your heart aflutter.
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>>25865203
aw yis
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>>25862715
>Coin slot on washer
>Lockable door
>Basement of apartment complex
>You will never have a sexy, exhibitionist high school girl as a neighbor in your building
>She will never learn your laundry schedule so you can conveniently catch her riding the rickety old Maytag in the corner
>You will never stand in stunned silence, while using your laundry basket to hide your throbbing erection, as the machine's unbalanced spin cycle, shaking like Michael J. Fox on a cocaine binge, brings Sunset to a Earth-shattering orgasm, causing her eyes to roll back in her head as she lets loose a string of lust-fueled profanities
>You will never stand there speechless, stunned and completely gobsmacked as you watch her recover her senses and slide off of the appliance before putting her sundress back on
>She will never saunter up to you and whisper in your ear, "Go ahead, tell someone. They'll never believe you" before leaving you alone in the laundry room, with your hands holding a load of dirty clothes and your trousers holding a fresh load of sticky ejaculate

>You will also never receive a busted lip and a chipped tooth when you try to lick Sunset's still warm love juices from the still spin-cycling Maytag
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>>25865292
Well, now you ruined the moment.
*sigh*

Lolwut, we need you!
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>>25865292
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THAT SHIT MADE ME ROCK HARD YO
>>25865292

PIC FUCKING SAVED
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>>25865203
>Sunset's eyes light up as you approach her.
"Sunset! How's the party been so far?"
>"Pretty good so far.."
>She gives you a sly smile.
>"But it's even better now that you're here.
>You swear, this girl's going to overload your heart one of these days.
>You can't help but put on a wide grin.
>"So... wanna dance?"
>You nod.
>She leads you deeper into the ever-increasing crowd of people filling up the house.
>You both start to move your bodies, getting a feel for the beat.
>Well, she was going to have to learn that you can't dance at some point.
>You move to the rhythm, though you're otherwise completely awkward.
>She laughs, but doesn't seem to mind.
>As she starts to get into it, you can't help but stare.
>The way that her hair sways around her face.
>Every motion of her body.
>You lose yourself in it.
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>>25865556
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q3Bp1QVVieM
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>>25865556
>You're not sure how much time passes.
>Eventually she grabs your hand and pulls you back out of the crowd.
>You can see that she's sweating after all of that dancing.
>Then you realize that you are, too.
>"I'm going to go see talk to some of my friends for a while. We'll meet up again later, okay?"
>"Of course."
>You couldn't deny her even if you wanted to.
>As she leaves, you scan the room.
>It looks like she's going to go talk to Rarity.
>You spot Rainbow Dash, and even Fluttershy is off in a corner.
>That just leaves-
>"Applejack and me, right Nonny?"
"Right, Pinkie."
>Wait.
"Wait, Pinkie Pie? How did you know-"
>"That you were figuring out which of my friends were here?"
>You slowly nod yes.
>"That's easy. I was standing here the whole time and just looked where you were looking!"
>You can usually ignore how strange she can be, but WHAT?
>"It's too bad that Applejack couldn't be here, too. She's too busy helping her family get ready for the fair.
>Is she just reading your mind now, or-
"Wait, the fair?"
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>>25865292
Moar plz
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>>25865841
Pinkie being pinkie.
what fair?
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>>25865841
>She looks surprised at you.
>"Nonny, didn't you realize that the fair is tomorrow?! Why do you think I threw this party?"
>The fair comes to the city every year.
>And you totally blanked it because of everything that was happening this week.
>Then it hits you.
>This is perfect.
>You can ask Sunset to go to the fair with you!
>"Gee, Nonny, you're all sweaty! I bet you could use a nice glass of punch!"
"You know, that sounds pretty good right about now-"
>Before you know it, Pinkie is dragging you by the arm over to the refreshment table.
>It's quite a spread.
>Chips, soda, a wide assortment of baked goods, and a punch bowl.
"Nice assortment, Pinkie."
>You pour yourself a glass of punch and drink it down.
>It's really sweet.
"Good job on the punch, Pinkie."
>"Thanks, Nonny!"
>The music changes.
>"Oooh, this is my JAM! Come on, Nonny, show me how you cut a rug!"
>You don't get a say in the matter.
>She drags you along and you dance with Pinkie Pie.
>Her dance moves are even more out there and awkward than yours.
>She DOES have a lot of energy though.
>Eventually, the song winds down.
"That was a lot of fun, Pinkie, but I think I'm going to go look for Sunset now."
>As you start to walk off, you feel a hand grab your arm.
>"Sorry, Nonny. I made a Pinkie Promise."
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>>25866200
Aw Shit!
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>>25866200
>"Sorry, Nonny. I made a Pinkie Promise."
Uh oh.
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>>25866200
>pinkie promise
Oh boy...
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>>25866200
>pinkie promise
Noice
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>>25866200
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>>25866200
>pinkie promise
Fucking radical
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*puts his feet up on the writing desk*
You didn't think it would be THAT easy, did you boys?

I've been waiting since Monday to do this.
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>>25866314
It's about to get real, isn't it.
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>>25866200
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>>25866314
Lolwut why would you do this?
I trusted you...
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>>25866314
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>>25866200
"You what?"
>You look at Pinkie Pie and the gears start spinning at full speed.
>And then it dawns on you.
>"Well, on Monday, Sunset came back from meeting you and she was super-duper sad, so we were just a teensy bit mad at you, and /I/ Pinkie Promised that /I/ wasn't going to let you date Sunset."
>What is happening? WHAT IS HAPPENING?
"But... You were nice to me all week. You even invited me to this party!"
>"Well, /yeah./ Later that day, Fluttershy told us about what you said about what happened, so I forgave you.
"But then why-"
>"Because I made a PINKIE PROMISE, NONNY. I can't BREAK a PINKIE PROMISE!"
>You're stunned in disbelief.
>"Besides, I saw how everyone else got to do all kinds of fun things with you, and I wanted to have a challenge too!"
>Ooooof course.
>You sigh.
"Fine, Pinkie Pie. What's it going to be?"
>She shrugs.
>"I dunno! I didn't get that far. How about you pick?"
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>pinkie promise
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>>25866477
Oh.
Well that's not so bad.
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>>25866477
>"Besides, I saw how everyone else got to do all kinds of fun things with you, and I wanted to have a challenge too!"

Goddamnit Ponka, I'm remembering why you were best pony
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>>25866477
God damn it Pinkie.
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>>25866477
>You blink.
>Well, that's... different.
>All of the other things that happened this week sort of just came to YOU.
>And you even had time to prepare for almost all of them.
>What are you going to do that you can beat Pinkie Pie at?
>Given how ridiculous she is, is there even anything that you CAN choose?
>You think long and hard about it.
>Then it starts to come to you.
"Alright. I'm going to need a paper and pen for this."
>She eagerly fishes both things out of her hair and foists them into your hands.
>You start writing.
>"Ooh! Ooh! What is it, Nonny? I'm so excited!"
>You fill the whole page up and then turn it over to show her.
"Scavenger hunt. One hour. Whoever has the most things wins."
>She snatches it up and reads it down, the smile on her face getting even wider.
>"You're on, 'Anonymous'!
>She laughs to herself and then dashes off so fast you could swear she kicked up an actual dust cloud.
>You shake your head and leave the dance floor to go talk to Sunset.
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>>25866200
>>25866477
>>25866733
I've been waiting since the beginning of the story to post this part.

And I was rewarded with DOUBLES ON EACH POST.
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>>25866752
Well aren't you special!
This isn't as bad as I thought, I'm curious as to how this is going to pan out.
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>>25866733
>It doesn't take long for you to find her.
>She's hanging around by her self off to the side of the room.
"Hey, Sunset!"
>She turns to see you.
>"Hey, Anon!"
>You join her in this relatively unpopulated spot.
>You chat about a variety of things.
>School, and how glad you both are that the week is over.
>Music, and what the Rainbooms are up to these days.
>When a lull comes in the conversation, you decide that this is your chance.
>You're going to ask Sunset if she wants to go to the fair with you.
>That's when the music changes again.
>It slows down.
>The lights dim a little bit.
>You can see some of the couples in the room move closer together.
>Sunset looks deep into your eyes and grabs your hand.
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>>25865556
>Dancer outfit
My only weakness
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I gotta go. Gonna finish the story tomorrow.
Excited to see the outcome!
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>>25867038
>You smile gently and lead Sunset back out onto the dance floor.
>You gently place your hands on her hips.
>Her arms reach up to your shoulders and gently drape around your neck.
>You lead as you slowly sway back and forth to the music.
>She's so close to you.
>You're practically hugging already.
>Even though you've already held her in your arms before, you enjoy the feeling of holding her like this.
>You both enjoy the intimacy of it quietly.
>As the song finally begins to wind down, you gaze into her eyes.
"Sunset?"
>"Yes, Anon?"
"Will you go to the fair with me tomorrow?"
>Her eyes brighten up like they're sparkling.
>Yes, Anon! I'd love to go with you!
>She pulls you in for a tight hug, which you reciprocate by wrapping your arms around her even tighter.
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>>25867314
>The dance floor starts to clear out as the party is starting to draw to a close.
>In the corner of your vision, you see a flash of pink.
>Keeping one arm around Sunset, you turn to look.
>Pinkie Pie is here, and she has unloaded a pile of things onto the floor.
>You wrote that list as a joke, but it looks like she got everything.
>A traffic cone, a bowl of oatmeal... She even got Applejack's hat somehow.
>"I found all of the things, Nonny! How many things have YOU found?"
>You glance at the ridiculous assortment of things that she brought.
"Well, since time isn't up and there are a bunch of things from the list here, I guess I also found all of those things."
>"But... Nonny..."
>She seems concerned.
>"Wouldn't that make it a tie? What are we supposed to do NOW?"
>You chuckle.
"Well..."
>You take out your phone and see the clock tick to the next hour."
"Time just now ran out, but I had one more thing than you."
>"Wait, you did? What is it?"
>She scans the page that you gave her trying to figure out what it is.
"You missed the one that I wrote on the back. Flip it over."
>She does. And then she's disappointed.
>"Aw, man. How did I miss that? Sunset was the last thing on the list, and you were with her the whole time!"
"Don't feel too down, Pinkie. You had fun doing my scavenger hunt, right?"
>"You know, Nonny, I really did. Thanks!"
>She gives you a smile.
>"Have fun, you two! I have a bunch of things that I need to take back to where I got them from!"
>After she leaves, Sunset turns to you.
>"What was that about, Anon?"
>You chuckle.
"Just another event in the crazy week that I've been having."

END OF FRIDAY.
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>>25867469
>I guess I also found all of those things.
fuckin'rekt/10
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>>25867469
Thank you anon.
looking forward to the following parts
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The Friday section of the story is now on the Pastebin.
http://pastebin.com/VEBm89Xu

Other than Anon's encounter with Pinkie Pie, I didn't actually know for sure what Friday was going to be like until today.

Saturday is the final part of the story, and I only figured out what's happening that day TODAY. That being said, I'm going to work hard on it to make sure it's just right. I'll probably be pretty busy tomorrow with it being Christmas Eve, but I'm pulling to finish the story!

So, yeah. Probably no more green tonight, but I will be hanging out in the thread and planning.
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>>25867588
We shall await the green.
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>>25867588
Oh, also, feedback is always appreciated.
ALWAYS.
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Not gonna lie, that ponk "challenge" bit was kind of cute.
I don't like to cosign too much, but what that other guy said was pretty much spot on. It's not new and mind blowing, but it's been consistently entertaining so far.
And you even managed to get this far without sticking lewd in it just to have it.
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>>25868219
Thank you for saying so.

I think that lewd really isn't integral to writing a story that people will like, though a lot of people will definitely appreciate it when and it it appears.
On the other hand, some stories practically run on lewd, but they're still have a kind of depth that make them an interesting read just because of the character interactions.

I guess it's really all just how you choose to go about it.
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>>25868219
It's certainly happier than other greens going on right now
>mfw that Moondancer green
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>>25868381
I haven't been over there to read that, but I will say that while I was writing the encounters for Monday and Wednesday, my inability the gauge the reaction of the readers was eating away at me HARD. Every post felt like I didn't know if I was digging my own grave or not because the story took a weird or darker turn.
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>>25868381
Jesus, I keep seeing people say my story is depressing. It's not THAT depressing.
Is it?
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>>25868417
what happened in the story? link me to it, lol
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>>25868417
I dunno. I'll read it and get back to you.
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>>25868417
I am watching that story you will succeed in making it good.
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>>25868406
Based off of experience, if people don't like how your story is turning, they'll tell you.
Adhere to the mentality "No news is good news". If people reply with good stuff, cool. If they don't, they might just be reading it, or they might not have anything to add.
>>25868432
>>25805608
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>>25868417
No it's fucking great.
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>>25868333
>On the other hand, some stories practically run on lewd, but they're still have a kind of depth that make them an interesting read just because of the character interactions.
Witnessed.
And it's a real treat when that happens. I only mentioned that because you see complaints often about these threads being nothing but back to back fetish setups.
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>>25868434
Okay, so I read the pastebin.

I'm not going to call it depressing, but holy crap, the sad feels punched me in the gut.
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>>25868565
pfft, babby.

>>25868417
I'll give you a real answer.
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>>25868595
Say what you will, but the sad part of his story blows the downer parts of mine out of the water.
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>>25868565
I guess I'm just good at that. Other story I wrote was about Aria killing herself.
Guess I got a writing style, persay. Really fucking sad shit
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>>25868747
Is it weird that I want to read that?

Aria has so little characterization to herself, so you actually have me curious.
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>>25868832
It's actually really wierd and probably bad, but it should be buried deep in the Dazzling Generals pastebin
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>>25868595
>>25868747
YOU EVIL FUCK
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>>25868832
http://pastebin.com/F9ba9547
http://pastebin.com/KbQ8xsje
Go to town
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>>25868880
>Check the pastebin
Oh, hey. I've actually read that before.
It didn't leave a big impression on me, but looking over it again, there definitely are some interesting things there.
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>>25825389
>"Y-you too..."
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>>25868910
I FUCKING LOVE THIS!!!!

THIS SHIT ISNT YOUR GENERIC FUCKING PORN. THIS IS REAL WORLD SHIT.

you sir have a talent that no one else can touch.

you need to do more of this.

make yourself known
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>>25868910
>http://pastebin.com/KbQ8xsje
do u have the positive ending?!?!
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>>25868910
Please for love of god write more
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>>25869171
It's in the /dzg/ pastebin list with the other two parts. Here:
http://pastebin.com/64yKGSy8

>>25869157
>>25869179
JSA's current story is over in this thread, lads.
>>25805608
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>>25869187
im sorry but this aria story got me all fucked up
;-;
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>>25869210
For sure, it's a huge swing compared to what's been written in this thread.

Not everybody digs negative feels. It's definitely not a favorite focus of mine, but every now and then it's good.
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>>25869187
I needed that to balance out reading the end of homecoming
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>>25869236
homecoming's finally over?
I had to peter out around where flash rekt anon and tavi playing that guitar. how much would I have to read after that?
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>>25869281
not much

the homecoming anon thread got archived not too long ago
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>>25869281
The entire dance
http://pastebin.com/raw/kccZtZMk
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>>25867469
YOU MUST MAKE A MONTH OF THIS GREEN, NOT A WEEK.
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>>25870418
Your enthusiasm is appreciated, but there's no way I could string this out for a month.

Also, posts will probably be rare and very sporadic today. Expect either nothing or no consistency until tonight, folks.
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>>25866314
But then!
>>25866477
>>25866733
>>25867038
>>25867314
>>25867469
I guess it was that easy.
Not bad. Good job Lolwut.
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>>25870418
your everywhere
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>>25870860
Yep.
Had you guys goin' for a minute though, didn't I?
That reveal was REALLY satisfying.
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Just finished reading the Moondancer greentext.
I know it's just fiction, but do people actually act like Anon in that story, immediately choking up when their crush asks them a question? I'm sitting reading the text and I'm just like, "Oh my god just tell her, its SO easy!"
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>>25871932
Oh, man. Truth is stranger than fiction in some cases. And this is coming from the guy whose story starts off in such a bizarre way.

How bad it is obviously varies from person to person, but people get nervous because they're afraid of saying or doing the wrong thing and wrecking their chances. Emotions can be so fragile that it's hard for people to speak up and admit their feelings, as well as responding to those kinds of things for fear of wronging the person who is exposing themself to you.
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>>25871932
You would be surprised friend.
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>>25866733
>>You fill the whole page up and then turn it over to show her.
>"Scavenger hunt. One hour. Whoever has the most things wins."
>>She snatches it up and reads it down, the smile on her face getting even wider.
>>"You're on, 'Anonymous'!
>>She laughs to herself and then dashes off so fast you could swear she kicked up an actual dust cloud.
>>You shake your head and leave the dance floor to go talk to Sunset.
>>25867469
>>"I found all of the things, Nonny! How many things have YOU found?"
>>You glance at the ridiculous assortment of things that she brought.
>"Well, since time isn't up and there are a bunch of things from the list here, I guess I also found all of those things."
>>"But... Nonny..."
>>She seems concerned.
>>"Wouldn't that make it a tie? What are we supposed to do NOW?"
>>25867469
>>You take out your phone and see the clock tick to the next hour."
>"Time just now ran out, but I had one more thing than you."
>>"Wait, you did? What is it?"
>>She scans the page that you gave her trying to figure out what it is.
>"You missed the one that I wrote on the back. Flip it over."
>>She does. And then she's disappointed.
>>"Aw, man. How did I miss that? Sunset was the last thing on the list, and you were with her the whole time!"
>"Don't feel too down, Pinkie. You had fun doing my scavenger hunt, right?"
>>"You know, Nonny, I really did. Thanks!"

This entire thing was genius. I don't care if it sounds overhyped, but goddamn if it didn't blow my mind when I read it!
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>>25825389
bump
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Psssst ____bump______
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>>25872681
I'm glad you liked it.

Even though I always knew I wanted them to face off at the party, I wasn't sure how to handle it until just before I had to write it. I at least think it was better than the other ideas I'd been tossing around.
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>>25873994
It was a clever plot line.
Enjoying the story very much.
Some of the best writing is done at the spur of the moment.
Most of my stuff I write as I go along. I only planned basic plotline.
What were your other ideas?
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Well after reading this, the Moondancer, and the Aria Greentext (both endings but the positive is my choice, of course),
I would say it has been a veritable emotional rollercoaster. Good job everyone.

I'm excited to see how Saturday plays out.
Do not disappoint Lolwut, I have high expectations.
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>>25874700
No pressure though
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>>25875117
Just a joke. ;)

>>25873994
>>25874700
You've done well Lolwut! It's your story, I trust you in your fictional literary decisions. Take your time and think it out fully.

As for everyone who sees this,
–Merry Christmas!
Have a great time tonight and tomorrow guys.

(Oh, and considering the type of thread we're in, Happy Hearth's Warming Eve too!)
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>>25874193
Dance-off and something about a cake eating contest?
At first I was going to make it a gauntlet and let the realization that she's keeping you away from Sunset slowly grow because she's hogging all of your attention, but it seemed to complicated so I changed it.
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Alright, folks.

There's less than four hours until Hearth's Warming, I have some black tea, an outline, and this is the last chapter of the story.

>Hit it.
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>>25875879
Aw right
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>>25875879
Aw yis.
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Hit it
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>>25867469
>Late Saturday afternoon.
>You do a quick comb of your hair.
>Your outfit is still pretty casual.
>You did put on a jacket, though.
>You take out your phone to check the time.
>It's about that time.
>You step outside and start walking.
>After a short while, you arrive outside of her home.
>You walk up to the door and knock.
>After a few moments, it opens.
>"Oh, hey Anon. You're right on time."
>She's wearing a blue top that really brings out her eyes.
>Are there no limits to how badly she can captivate you with just her looks?
"Are you ready to head out?"
>"Yeah. Let's go."
>She steps out and you take to the sidewalk side by side.
>It's a mostly quiet, but pleasant walk.
>As you travel, the edge of the sun reaches the horizon.
>Eventually, the fair grounds come into view.
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>>25825389
Eww worst character.
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>>25875858
>Love triangle side plot
Interesting, interesting. Alternatively:
>Mane five dont think Anon is good enough for Sunset.
>Try to tell her, she doesn't listen.
>The five come up with overly complicated plan: series of contests.
>Each one more difficult than the last, in an effort to make Anon give up.
>He doesn't, and eventually wins them all over, and gets Sunset in the end.
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>>25876427
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>>25876519
Oh, man. It wasn't even going to be a love triangle. She was going to be blocking Anon without there being any outright implication that she IS until he realizes that she's doing it deliberately.

Also, I wouldn't say that each challenge was more difficult than the last. That would be missing the point if they were.
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>>25876422
>You're greeted by a variety of sights and sounds.
>There are lights all over, coming from tents, strung up along the midway.
>A commotion of people talking, playing games, and what even sounds like live music.
>You approach the admissions area and pay for both of your tickets, handing Sunset hers.
>When you enter, you're greeted by a seemingly endless variety of things to see and do.
>Games of all kinds, food, caricatures, curiosities.
>You both look around in wonder and try to figure out what to do first.
>As you make your way through the fair grounds, the music gets louder.
>A large open area at the center of the event seems to play host to a stage.
>"He's always been pretty good at playing the guitar, hasn't he?"
"Yeah, well... I don't like to say so. No need to let his head get too big, right?"
>You both decide to stay and listen to Flash Drive play for a while.
>As you listen to him rock out, you scan the area around you.
>You spot that catches your interest.
"You hungry at all?"
>Sunset nods to you.
>"Actually, it would be nice to try some of the food."
"I'll go grab us something then. I'll be right back."
>You hurry off, as not to keep your date waiting for too long.
>Your date.
>Just thinking about that makes you smile.
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>>25876550
Ooooooo that's a good one, I like the way you think.
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>>25876574
>After a quick jog, you reach it.
>You've had the food from this stand before during previous years.
>It never disappoints.
"Hey there, Applejack!"
>She gives you a welcoming smile.
>"Howdy, Anon!"
>Despite being a high schooler, she always manages this stand.
>There are shelves of all kinds of freshly made apple goods.
>Everything looks so good.
"Two apple fritters, please."
>She gathers them up from their shelf and sets them out on the counter.
>You go to reach for your wallet, but she puts up a hand to stop you.
>"There'll be no need for that, Anon. Let's just call us square for the trouble I caused ya earlier this week."
>You give her a smile and a nod before picking up the desserts.
"Thanks, Applejack."
>As you turn to leave, she calls after you.
>"Y'all have fun this evenin'!"
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>>25876729
>You return to Sunset to find her trying hard not to laugh and failing.
>Flash is showboating HARD.
>Power slides.
>Jump kicks.
>Trying to play with his teeth.
>You can't help but bust out laughing at the sight.
>However, you do manage to get ahold of yourself.
"Here, Sunset."
>You hand her an apple fritter.
>"Good choice, Anon. Applejack always comes through when it comes to good food."
>She takes a bite and you can see the satisfaction creep into her expression.
>You both hang out and enjoy the fritters while poking fun at Flash's showmanship.
>Eventually, the number that he's playing ends.
>"Thank you! We'll be back for another set later!"
>Flash Drive clears the stage.
>The stage isn't vacant for long though, as a certain party-wild friend of yours drags up and starts up a player organ.
>Sunset shakes her head with a smile.
>"Pinkie Pie is so random."
"You're telling me."
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>>25876946
>The two of you return to the midway and browse the attractions again.
>There are a lot of games here that you could play to try to win Sunset a prize.
>Ball throw, ring toss, test your strength...
>Definitely going to pass on that last one.
>Your attention is grabbed when a softball flies past you and crashes into a tower of bottles.
>"Aww, yeah! Chalk up another win!"
>It looks like Rainbow Dash is dominating the games, one at a time.
>"Hey there, Rainbow Dash!"
>After Sunset calls out, she turns to look at the two of you.
>"Sunset and Anon, eh? Having fun?"
"It's been pretty good so far. I see you've found a way to challenge yourself."
>Rainbow smirks.
>"Yeah. I mean, these games aren't THAT hard. It's all either strength or skill, right?"
>As if to prove her point, she walks over to the ring toss, pays for three throws, and immediately manages to get one to land."
>She makes it look so easy.
>When she throws the second one, you're watching closely.
>It's not random.
>She throws the third one.
>She's snapping her wrist to spin the rings.
>"Too easy. I think I'm gonna take a break for a while. You two 'lovebirds' have fun."
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>>25876946
Who the fuck is Flash Drive?
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>>25877057
Flash Gordon obviously
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>>25877057
That's the name of Flash Sentry's band.
It's okay if you don't know that. I had to look it up.
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>>25877008

>You know that Rainbow only said that to give you two a hard time.
>It still doesn't change the way that your heart flutters when you see Sunset blush a little bit.
"Come on, Sunset. Let's try out some of the games."
>She nods to you.
>"Alright, Anon. You're on!"
>First, you both try the ball throw.
>Though you generally like to think that you have good aim, you don't quite knock all of the bottles over.
>Sunset on the other hand manages to beat it.
>"Nice!"
>You chuckle.
>She looks around, then her attention is taken by a nearby whack-a-mole game.
"Go ahead. I'll catch up to you in a minute."
>As she picks up the mallet, you turn to go for your own target.
>You put down some money at the ring toss booth.
>The attendant hands you three rings.
>You carefully take aim and toss the ring, trying to copy Rainbow Dash's technique.
>It fumbles on contact with the bottle, but just barely manages to catch around the neck.
>You take in a deep breath and exhale.
>You throw the second ring, which manages to land on its bottle more easily than the last one.
>Picking up the third ring, the tension is on.
>Getting the last thing right in a series is always the hardest for some reason.
>You focus in and throw the ring.
>It seems to fall in slow motion.
>You're relieved when it lands.
>"Good job, Nonny! You won a prize!"
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>>25877164
>You double-take.
>Did you not notice that she was the attendant?
>Or has she somehow inexplicably replaced the the person that was here before?
>You shake it off and look at the prize shelves that Pinkie is gesturing to.
>There are stuffed animals, cheap "jewelry," all kinds of random junk...
>Something catches your eye.
>It's a necklace.
>It's nothing spectacular, it looks like the pendant is some kind of colored glass.
>But when you see that red and gold swirl, you know that's the one.
"I'll take that necklace there, Pinkie."
>She picks it up and holds it out to you.
>"Good choice. I bet she'll love it."
>You hope that she likes, it anyway.
>Giving Pinkie a quick wave goodbye, you go to rejoin Sunset.
>Then you hear something.
>"Psssst..."
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>>25877351
>You freeze for a moment.
>Then you hear it again.
>"Psssst..."
>When you look around for the source of it, you spot a hand waving you over from behind a nearby stall.
>As you cautiously approach, you find yourself being addressed directly this time.
>"Anonymous, darling. Over here."
>Rarity is trying to quietly get your attention.
"Rarity? What do you want?"
>"Just trying to lend you a hand, darling."
>She looks away from you, then makes a gesture inviting you to look that way.
>You follow her gaze.
>And then you smile.
"Thanks, Rarity."
>"Think nothing of it, darling. Just a romantic trying to do her part."
>She winks at you before leaving.
>With a smile on your face, you head back down the path to meet with Sunset.
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>>25877471
>She's still playing the same game.
>She seems to be really into it.
>It looks like this round is wrapping up, though.
>Time to act.
>As the timer runs out, you sneak up behind her.
"Pretty good job, Sunset."
>You throw your arms around her in a hug.
>"A-Anon..."
>She sounds surprised, but she doesn't seem to mind too much.
>After a few moments though, she squirms a little bit.
>"You can let go now."
"Fiiine."
>As you retract your arms, you take the chance to clasp the necklace that you won earlier around her neck.
>Sunset turns around to face you, then looks down at your gift for her.
>She lifts it up to get a better look at it.
>"You won me a prize? That's so sweet of you."
>She looks up at you with a big smile.
>"Thanks, Anon. I love it."
>You put off having a heart attack from how cute that was and grab onto her hand.
>"Anon, what-"
>You grin.
"You'll see..."
>You drag Sunset along with you to your next destination:
>The Ferris Wheel.
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>>25877615
>The two of you excitedly get in line and are let onto the ride in a pretty short time.
>Now for the rough part of the ride...
>Waiting for it to finish getting loaded up and start.
>The wheel turns to let passengers into the next empty car.
>"So, Anon. How about you tell me a bit about yourself."
"Like... what?"
>"Well, I know what you're like at school. How about something from your past?"
>You think.
"This is probably going to sound really lame, but there's probably not a lot to tell."
>She doesn't buy it.
>"Come on, Anon..."
"Well..."
>You take a moment to think.
"You've even noticed for yourself that I tend not to stand out. I've done a bunch of things, been in lots of different clubs, but there aren't really any stories to tell."
>She looks at you like she expects more.
"I mean, I learned a lot of practical skills and stuff, but I wasn't really on top anywhere I went. To be honest, I don't really mind it."
>She smiles softly.
>"Well, you're a pretty special person in my book, Anon. And after this week, my friends probably think you're pretty cool too.
>Hearing her say that warms your heart.
>You've never had a lot of friends.
"So... how about you, Sunset? What was your life like before you came to Canterlot High?"
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>>25877669
>Sunset doesn't say anything.
>She averts her gaze.
>After a moment, you can tell that maybe that's an uncomfortable subject.
"Sunset? If you don't want to talk about it, you don't have to. It's okay."
>She looks into your eyes.
"No, Anon. It's fine... It's just... a little bit strange."
>She takes a moment to collect her thoughts.
>"You know about all of the magical things that have happened around here recently, right?"
>You nod.
>"That magic came from the place where I'm from."
"Okay... And where is that?"
>"I'm from a world that's called Equestria."
"Okay, I'm still following you."
>You can tell that she's getting a little more hesitant to keep going, but she continues.
"What is it, Sunset?"
>"It's just... There aren't any humans in Equestria, Anon."
>Okay...
>"Anon, I'm..."
>You reach out and gently grasp her hands.
>She takes a deep breath.
>"Anon, I was born and spent almost my whole life as a unicorn."
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>>25877798
>Your father always warned you not to stick your dick in crazy, Anon
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>>25877798
>Before she can manage to shrink away from her, you pull her into a big hug.
>"Wha- Anon?"
"It's fine, Sunset... Really."
>She's stunned.
"I don't care if you're from another world, or if you're a unicorn, or whatever. You're here now, and I like you no matter what you used to be."
>After a moment, she throws her arms around you.
>You can feel your shirt get a little bit wet as she buries her face into your shoulder.
>You stay like this for a while until she finally lets go of you.
>"Thank you Anon... I was worried that you might think I was weird and-"
"Sunset, we've talked about this before. Your past isn't as important to me as who you are."
>You gaze deeply into each other's eyes as the ride shifts again.
>Now you're at the top of the ferris wheel.
>The colors in the sky paint a beautiful picture around you as the moon begins to rise and the last glowing colors of the sun begin to fade out as it sets.
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>>25878069
>You hold each other closely as the ride starts up, enjoying both the view and each others' company.
>With each rotation, the evening shifts more and more into night, until the light of the moon and the fairgrounds are everything.
>Eventually, the ride comes to an end and you both step out of your car.
>Now that it's night, the fair has come to life in a completely different way.
>When you arrived, it was a little bit slow, but now there are tons of people here.
>You feel Sunset reach out and grab your hand.
>The two of you look at each other and gently smile before continuing off into the fairgrounds together.
>The whole place is bustling with people.
>Noise fills the air.
>The lights that are strung up cast bright colors onto the people below.
>Good smells permeate the air as the food vendors become busy.
>However, the two of you still manage to find a more quiet corner in the event.
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>>25878076
>There are some animal pens set up.
>Rabbits, goats, sheep...
>That's when a quiet voice speaks up.
>"Hello, Sunset. Hello, Anon."
Sunset speaks up first.
>"Hi there, Fluttershy. Running the petting zoo this year?
>"Yep. You know how much I just love taking care of little animals."
>You both smile.
>Fluttershy is so quiet and kind.
>It makes her outward happiness infectious.
>You and Sunset hang around the petting zoo for a while.
>You even get some things from Fluttershy to try feeding to the critters.
>When you look over at Sunset, she's gently stroking a pony's muzzle.
"Wow, Sunset, you're really good with horses."
>She turns and gives you a look that says "Really?"
"Oh. Right..."
>You reach into your pocket.
"Do you want a sugar cube?"
>"ANON!"
>Fluttershy lets out a quiet yelp as you dash past her, Sunset in hot pursuit.
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merry Christmas Sunnyfags
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>>25878135
Merry Christmas
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>>25878135
>You rush through the fairgrounds, being chased by your date.
>You're both laughing so hard.
>"Get back here Anon!"
"NOPE!"
>As you pass through the center of the fair, you see that Flash and his band are back and finishing up another song.
"FLASH!"
>He looks your way just in time to see you give him a series of hand signals.
>Then you look back.
>Sunset is gaining on you.
>Quickly, you dash into the fun house.
>Shortly after, Sunset arrives inside.
>"Where are you Anon?"
>You don't answer.
>This is a hall of mirrors
>And you're in the lead.
>Outside, the music changes.
>A soft rock ballad pours in through the walls as Sunset slowly starts navigating the room.
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>>25878280
>Every now and then, you purposefully send your reflection towards her, leading her further along.
>"Come on, Anon. Where are you?"
"Psssst..."
"Hey, Sunset!"
>"Anon, where are you?"
>She tries to follow your voice, but she's having trouble figuring out where you are.
"Hey... Hey... Pssst..."
>She's getting closer to you.
>"I'm going to find you, Anon."
>She's still playing along as you continue to string her along.
"Hey, Sunset!"
>"What, Anon?"
"Guess what?"
>She turns a corner to find you suddenly standing in front of her.
"I love you."
>You lean in.
>Your lips meet hers.
>After a moment of surprise, she melts into the kiss and puts her arms around you.
>"I love you too, Anon."

The End.
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>>25878316
Yay
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>>25878316
daww/10
well dome Anon
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>>25878316
Happy Hearth's Warming, /mlp/

I hope you enjoyed the story. All of the parts are now available on the pastebin for your perusal. As always, feedback is appreciated.

If any of you have questions or want to talk about the story, now is the time. I will literally share all of my plans and notes with you guys if you ask.
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>>25878363
>That ending
It warmed my cold heart. Motivates me to write happier
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>>25878363
it was such a comfy story
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>>25878399
Awww, thanks!

Write whatever you want, man. It's good to put out your negative feels in some constructive form or other. It's why I like the blues so much.

>>25878409
In some places, for sure.
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>>25878363
Oh, man. I really just have to gush about something real quick:

First off, this:
>When you look over at Sunset, she's gently stroking a pony's muzzle.
"Wow, Sunset, you're really good with horses."
>She turns and gives you a look that says "Really?"
"Oh. Right..."
>You reach into your pocket.
"Do you want a sugar cube?"
>"ANON!"

I came up with this horrible joke yesterday while I was outlining what would happen at the fair. I knew it was absolutely a bad joke, but when I was in the moment of writing it, I imagined it happening and I almost cried laughing.

What did you guys think of that?
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>>25878561
I kek'd at the sugarcube part
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>>25878561
I imagine it would go down a little different
>"Want a sugar cube?"
>Slap
>"Don't be like that, why the long face?"
>Slap
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>>25878636
Nice

Man, if Anon hadn't turned it into a chase, who knows how that conversation would have continued...
I imagine that he probably would have gotten slapped once for it. But of course, it would have just been for being cheeky.
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>>25878662
>cheeky
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>>25878363
Alright. Time to dish. I'm going to explain the planning that went into the story and the progression of things.

So, I think I mentioned earlier in the thread that I changed my mind while writing the second post.
I went through like, three different ideas.

>Anon reciprocates. Lovey-dovey story, go!
Honestly, it was too generic, I had no idea what to do with Anon, and it doesn't take advantage of the prompt.

>Anon messes this up in a panic.
Sad story, go? This would have been better than the first one.

>Anon freezes up and everything backfires on him.
As you know, I went with this one. During the process of writing that post, I threw together a notepad and planned out the major event of each day. This did include who Anon would be challenged by each day, but didn't include what the date with Sunset would be like on the final day.
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>>25878783
Okay, so this is the most important thing:
Character importance.

>Who's the protagonist?
That's easy. It's Anonymous.

>Who are the main characters?
Normally when you read a romance story, both of the people in the pairing are the main characters. But in this case, Sunset is actually not even IN half of the story.
>Why does this matter?
Because even though we get to meet most of the supporting cast enough to have a feel for them, the only character that has any progression is Anon.

This was the last trick up my sleeve. Sunset and her friends are literally plot devices in a story about Anonymous.
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cute/10 story.
Please don't push yourself to extend a story because a few anons want it.

Also really interesting insight into how this idea formed.
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>>25878826
When the story begins, Anonymous is a background character. He lives that way and he's okay with it. He's a deep thinker kind of guy who doesn't get into a lot of action. He's not only shy, but he's absolutely awful at making split decisions.

We see this for the first time at the BEGINNING when Sunset drops a confession on him and he locks up.

Fluttershy appears as the first opponent because putting her anywhere else in the week would never have worked. Her assault on Anon is the weirdest part of the whole story. Anon completely isn't ready to handle this and can only make it through because Fluttershy accidentally takes herself out. He shares a moment of empathy and Kindness with her.

The next day, Anon has to face off with Applejack. He's extremely nervous about how to deal with it, but he puts his thinking skills to use and makes a plan. In the end, he applies his thinking skills to find out how to defeat Applejack, and he demonstrates his Honesty to her.

We introduce Pinkie Pie here and she waits until the end of the week to spring her trap on Anon.
We also introduce Rarity and her conflict with Anon while setting up her challenge for another day. This is an alternating schedule. Friday didn't matter, so I didn't elaborate on any of the classes that day.

Rainbow Dash challenges Anon, who now from the get-go knows that he can't win. Instead of panicking this time, he demonstrates his Loyalty to both his own beliefs and his growing love for the girl that he's chasing and comes out on top even though he does lose.
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>>25878957
When Rarity throws him a curveball on Thursday, he not only has enough confidence at this point to fight back, but he is now so used to stressful situations coming at him that he thinks on his feet and REVERSES the situation. When he talks to Rarity later, he shows her his sense of Generosity.

Finally, when Pinkie Pie reveals her challenge, this is the most random, unexpected thing to happen since Monday. If he'd dealt with Pinkie at any other time during the week, he would have been flattened. But now, he's grown enough that he needs minimal time to come up with a response. Even more, he employs nonsensical logic to win sharing a moment of happiness and Laughter with her.

When the date finally rolls around on Saturday, Anon is unstoppable. His character is done developing, and it's all just the reward. Sunset finishes dishing out her own insecurities, but Anon entirely unphased and is ready to accept her no matter what, bringing them closer together and ultimately taking us to the happy ending of the story.

>So, this is the question, /mlp/.
Did you realize that the story is just one big character arc for Anon becoming a more confident person?
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>>25879004
Is it bad that this progression comes across as scott pilgrim-ish to me, just without the straight up fighting and honestly more likable characters?
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>>25879066

See:

>>25830909
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>>25879097
That post was like 4 days ago. You can't expect me to remember that, fampai.
Rising for Sunset seems a bit on the nose for a title though, to me.
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this was good i enjoyed it a loot thx :D
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>>25879309
Glad you liked it!
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I just want to say that I really enjoyed writing this story and I hope that you enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sticking with me in my first greentext.

Merry Christmas and Happy Hearth's Warming everyone.

Good night.
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>>25879536
>tfw you will never find a girl to spend Hearth's Warming with
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>>25879536
muhdick.jpeg
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>>25879685
i have a girl to spend hearth's warming day with......


but i'd rather spend it with my bros of /mlp/
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>>25879711
You absolute bastar—

Oh, is that dubs? Sorry, mate, thanks for being here with us in spirit.

Happy hearth's warming. Lang may yer lum reek!

Captcha's presents. Excellent!
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>>25879536
Thanks based notanon. I loved it. Merry Christmas.
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>>25878135
>>You even get some things from Fluttershy to try feeding to the critters.
>>When you look over at Sunset, she's gently stroking a pony's muzzle.
>"Wow, Sunset, you're really good with horses."
>>She turns and gives you a look that says "Really?"
>"Oh. Right..."
>>You reach into your pocket.
>"Do you want a sugar cube?"
>>"ANON!"
KEK
>mfw this is what I want in all my Shimmer stories

>>25878316
>The End
HHHHNNNGGGGGg

>>25878561
See the above!

>>25879536
Happy Hearthsmas :^)
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>>25879536
Great story Lolwut. Really enjoyed it :)

Merry Christmas!
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I'm so glad this thread made something so nice.
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How much Twilight is too much?
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>>25883036
There's never enough Twilight, Anon.
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Merry Christmas fellow shimmer/fags/
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>>25825389
bump
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>>25825389
bump
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>>25825389
bump
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>>25825389
>You wot mate?
"I'm tired of yur fockin games , I'll fokin hook you in the gabba you fockin frog and toad bloke, pansy git you fockin cheeky cunt."
>"But anon I meant it this time."
>you fockin wot? you fockin wot!
>This time, she's said this about 12 times already.
"I swear on me mum I'll end you; you fockin sentient hotdog."
>The whole class has simply stopped becuase of you.
>"Mr. Mous is that the end of your little out burst?"
>Mr. Segal looks into your eyes and sees the depth of your soul,and it makes you angry.
"No you fockin raggedy cunt you; fockin pea and carrot, put up your fockin dukes!"
>"anon calm down, I'll really prove it to you; afterschool meet me by the statue."
>Yeah like the last million times.
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>>25885660
>becuase
I'm so sorry
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>>25885660
cnt fgt
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>>25825389
Oh, my bad... should I stop?
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>>25885660
>So here you are , waiting alone, once more.
>You're gonna burst; you missed ball with the lads because of this cunt.
>you swear when you see her again you're gonna hook her in the mouth.
>One of your mates pass by giving you the look.
>"So, still giving 'er a chance m8?"
>You are and probably always will; she's just to good to pass up.
"Nah that cunt has used up her last chance, all shes getting is a hook to the muff."
>"I've heard that one before,how long have you been waiting this time?"
>He takes a seat on foot of the statue and whips out a fag.
>You comtemplate how long have you waited for her to come through, days, weeks, months!
"About 3 fockin 'ours I swear on me mum i'll end 'er,."
>"Fancy a drag then mate?"
>You grab the cig away from him and take a deep breath.
>"Oioi watch it!this 'ere ain't yah normal fag, it's a spliff."
>Oh yes.
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>>25887374
alright.
So feedback,If any.
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>>25887567
more faggot

you dont stop and ask for feedback just yet
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>Come back.
>Cockney Greentext

I don't even have a lolwut appropriate for this. What is HAPPENING.
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>>25887665
Ok
>Ah that..that was just so nice.
>He really does look out for you.
>your mate coming in your time of need he's just so...
>What are you thinking he's a one of da lads.
>"Annnnoooon.."
>That voice, the witch nears.
"You late twat!"
>Sunset only stares at the ground, she simply takes it.
>"Well mate I'll leave you two to it, Call me if yah need a ride."
"Will do;and you? What is this? 3 hours I've fockin waited."
>You get up in her face let it all out.
>you're going off instict comeing up with truly colorful insults.
"You fockin deamon hostin cunt, you reverse jew, you fockin double hotdog take 2 dogs in each hole cunt."
>"I do suppose I deserve that but I can explain..."
"I don't want any of your fockin 'but i can explain' bullshit I want to know how you expect me a young spring boy to keep and wait you like a fockin butler."
>Your really laying into her, you're starting to hurt yourself now.
>"But anon you gotta see this."
>She just looks into your eyes.
>those pretty sea-green orbs stare into yours.
>and it makes you angrier.
"Don't you fockin puppy dog me I ain't havin it."
>"Bu-bu-but anon please it's just, it's that time and,"
>Shes just embarrassing herself now, shes used about every excuse in the book.
"Yah 'no what I think maybe I could forgive yah."
>"Really anon, you do that for me."
"Yeah after ya get some better hair colours,smell yah later cunt."
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>>25887721
The thread was so good, and then...
And then...

CHAOS
COCKNEY CHAOS
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lol this thread went from good to great
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>>25887780
>That felt great.
>After just laying into her like a savage.
>But now you're troubled, you at one time liked her but now shes just gone a went soft.
>What happened the take shit from nobody sunset you fell in love with?
>You two spent many a afternoon going around and just causing mayhem.
>That one time you both dyed pinkie pie's hair black like her sisters, or when you put itching powder in the Crystal prep football team.
>All thats left now is a shallow husk of a girl who 'always here to help' and 'lend a helping hand to those in need'
>Then she came...
>That Twilight bloke is the cause of this.
>She and her damn horse witchcraft.
>You've never hated horses more in your life.
>your magnum opus ,turning your girl into an engine of destruction.
>Oh how proud you were when she took that crown and morphed into a sexy daemon chick.
>how you wanted to jump her then and there but then twilight stepped in.
"You can stop following me now creeper cunt."
>Sunset meekly steps out behind some convently placed lamps.
>"I just wanted to make sure you got home safe."
"Oh yah, I feel realy safe know Captain sunset's here."
>"Do you really?"
>Oh dammit, even now you see how this Sunset differs from your's.
>Your Sunset would never taken that and stuck back with her own comment like 'yah and here's my sidekick dickboy.'.
>"Do you wanna hold hands?"
"you..you..you.. Why would I never want to hold hands with you?"
>"Because I love you"
"Well I don't. Now scram before I hook yah in the gabba"
>It hurts you to say that.
>Why can't things go back to the ways they were?
>"Well..well,if thats how...how..you feel..then maybe...I'll just go die"
>Shes crying, your Sunset would never cry.
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>>25887931
How'd I do m8s?
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>>25887975
It got less outrageous as you added some background to it, but it's still pretty weird.

To be honest, I'd be really interested in reading a story where this happens, if Anon weren't laying thick on an accent for the sake of a gag.
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>>25888012
So lessen the accent.
gotcha
Anything else grammar of layout wise?
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So Anon's should I keep going?
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>>25888028
i thought you were doing this to make fun og like mlg's and 1v1 Doritos and mountain dew...

didnt know it was a actual accent\
do you mind if i re-write the story into a more sutable like accent? i wont chqange the words just into a more understandable context.
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>>25888028
The layout isn't too weird. There are a couple of lines where I would have split them into separate sentences, but that's the kind of thing that you can to take liberties with (so just use your best judgment).

As for grammar, punctuation is a little bit inconsistent in some places. Here are some tips:
>Don't be afraid to use full " instead of ' in a descriptive line.
>Make sure you use spaces after ellipses to separate them from the words that follow.
>If a sentence ends in quotes, the punctuation that ends it goes inside of the quotation marks.
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>>25888125
Fucking do it!
shia labouef voice
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>>25888130
>that's the kind of thing that you can to take liberties with

My fatal weakness: failure to proof-read after revision.
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>>25888130
Thanks,
I'm still a rookie.
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>>25888144
It's cool. This thread was my first story, too. Asking for feedback and tips is good, because it shows that you actually want to try.
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>W-what.....
>You realize you have had enough of sunset and decided to end it right here and now...
>you loo at her, she's having trouble trying to stay turned around in her chair to listen to you and not get noticed by the teacher
"I am sick and tired of your games, sunset,"
>She looks confused.
"I swear, if you ever bring that shit up again i will punch you in the fucking mouth, you piece of shit!"
>You're getting louder and louderas you went on but you didnt give a shit, you wanted to make sure she herd this.
>"But,anon, I mean it this time
>Is she fucking serious right now?
>This time, pffft, She said she meant it 12 other times already,
"I swear to god Sunset, I will end you. Now turn around and don't talk to me!"
>You have some sort of fire in your eyes, you've been breathing really heavy and clutching your pencil to the point where the veins in your arms are staring to show.
>"Mr. Mous is that the end of your little episode?" The teacher Mr. Segal says
>The whole class has simply stopped because of you
>Mr. Segal looks at you with a scoff, seemingly looking right past you and it starts to piss you off....
>But you have to keep calm, the day is almost over.
>It would kind of suck to be sent to the principals office in the last class on a friday.
"Yes, Mr. Segal. I'm sorry. Won't happen again"
>you lower you're head to keep away eye contact from anybody, even you'r friends in this class.
>Suddenly a crumpled up paper ball hits you in the head.
>You pop up and see the wad of paper sitting on your desk and everybody oblivious to it.
>Even the teacher didn't see it.
>You decided to open it
>it reads "Anon, this is sunset. Please calm down. I'll really prove it to you this time. Can you meet me after school at the statue in front? Pretty please? :) <3"
>This whole message wants to make you trow up
>You just want to crumple up the note again, and throw it in the bin in front of the whole class so sunset will see it
>But you guess you will do what she asks.....
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>>25887931
>You don't know how it happened but somehow she's gotten you to walk to the park with her.
>She looks at you with dried tears in her eyes.
>It doesn't guilt you but what she has in store might.
>Walking to a bench she sits down and looks up at you.
>Oh the sneaky cunt.
"You think taking me back to the last spot I ever said 'I love you' at is gonna work?"
>She simply looks at you once more, and takes a deep breath.
>"I did but it seems you saw through it... Why do you hate me?"
>She can't understand the pain you went trough when she had her "attitude adjustment".
" I'll say this in words even a dull bloke like you can understand; You're under the control of evil horse magic, now the Sunset I know would fight it but you ... you just embraced the change not that I'm afraid of it or anything"
>You take a breath it was more that just her attitude change, it was like your Sunset was killed and replaced with some goody to shoes teacher pet and it killed you.
"Sunset... sunset I dunno know whatever freaky horse magic has got you under it's control but I swear I'll reck that damn horse princess if it's the last thing I do."
>"You would do that for me. really?"
>Her face was starting to pick up, you could even pick out a faint smile."
"Of course, now buzz off cunt before I change my mind."
>There you go, can't end it off happy.
"And I'l need any info on the purple cunt so me and lads can give it to 'er a right and propa like"
>" Of course, Love!"
>Shes simply not happy, but in a higher mood.
>Now it's time to confront the council of Gans.
>>
>>25888259
>"Wat's da passwurd?"
" I'll fockin hook you in the gabba you big fockin oaf."
>"Yeah dats the wun."
>The door begins to open, and the large bodyguard steps to the side psuhing it the rest of the way.
>Oh look at those muscles,whats his routine?
"Yeah know I don't mean it Bor."
>He just waves you off.
>Inside the dank warehouse hideout its full of bodies.
>Gans from all over come to see the wonder of Kogansan
>you can hear shouts of "Spliffs for sell!" and "XXX movies 3 dollars!"
>Inside the mainroom is five office chairs all facing away from the door.
"Mighty Gans I..."
>"WE KNOW WHY YOU HAVE COME."
>Oh there goes council pretending to have psychic powers again.
>"Great Anon ; explain to us how you expect to break the barrier?"
>The what, that is pretty good.
>"The pathway to Equestria is rift with the forces of good, even now our greatest cannot push through."
>The five chairs swivel around and you can now see the council in all it's lumpy misshapen glory.
>All you can pick out is that each one has a staff with a diffrent gan symbol on it.
>Ulrich the leader of Crystal preps underworld the 'stealer of keys'.
>Newfog the cancer lord of ponyville Elm, they say he once took on a pack of vicious wolves.
>Nemo the 'Omen' leader of Applolusa tech, nothing is known about him only that he wields strange powers.
>Devin the "Devil", king of the new legion gang.
>And The leader know only as the "Greyseer", it is said that he/she has united all the Gan gangs in religious mayhem against the forces of good and principles everywhere.
>Stand with such legends has you frozen.
>The Greyseer begins to speak in his/her's gravly voice
>"Young anon we will lend you our powers."
>"Like fockin 'ell I will! I'm not empowering some random bloke off the ..."
>The Grey seer grabbed Ulrich and throttled him.
>"Now Ulrich won't you help him?"
>Ulrich's eyes are still swirling in dizziness.
>He just nods up and down.
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>>25888451
If the Greyseer isn't a ratman I will be disappointed.
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>>25888242
>The teacher Mr. Segal says
Tell me his first name is Steven
>>25888259
>"Sunset... sunset I dunno know whatever freaky horse magic has got you under it's control but I swear I'll reck that damn horse princess if it's the last thing I do."
>>"You would do that for me. really?"
>>Her face was starting to pick up, you could even pick out a faint smile."
>"Of course, now buzz off cunt before I change my mind."
>>There you go, can't end it off happy.
>"And I'l need any info on the purple cunt so me and lads can give it to 'er a right and propa like"
>>" Of course, Love!"
Oh god, she's goin' Cockney!

>>25888451
>>The five chairs swivel around and you can now see the council in all it's lumpy misshapen glory.
Oh god there is a council
>>"Young anon we will lend you our powers."
>>"Like fockin 'ell I will! I'm not empowering some random bloke off the ..."
A very cockney council of horse-beating apparently
>>
>>25888451
>The Greyseer speaks once more with it's? voice
>"You Anon will soon face many a channlege but for what?"
>Anon knew the Greyseer knew but it was testing him.
"For a girl I fancy."
>"Whats that I can't hear you."
>The Greyseer teases
"For a girl I fancy sir."
>"I'm a little hard of hearing m8 i need you t be a bit louder."
"IT'S FOR THE GIRL I LOVE!"
>"Oh it that it I thought it was for that sunset girl."
>Oh dammit the master of bants strikes.
>and you did tell her off at one point.
>"Hehehe, I needed that."
>Oh you begin to hope he/she gets on with it.
>"Now I need you to take an oath."
>An oath... hooligans don't take oaths.
>"dis 'eres a special oath yah see."
>Devin begins to speak.
>"This 'ere oath will ensure that you remain loyal to the one true god."
>"The Horned Rat!"
"Of course the great rat is the sign of all Hooligans.
Besides why would I not remain loyal?"
>The whole council just stares you bet even the Greyseer has a look of disbelief.
>"Have you not heard? Horse Pussy? any of that ring a bell?"
"You wot m8s."
>"Good good. you don't in fact need to take an oath anymore.Now we must converse with the great rat."
>Finally, you have a purple cunt to beat.
>After a few moments of intense whispering chanting the greyseer looks towards you again.
>"Great Anon the Horned Rat has chosen you!"
>you fockin wot.
>"Yes you are the chosen one now take this sword."
>The greyseer hands you a bitchin sword with rat tails entwined on the mantle.
>"I once wielded this sword against the Light gods, it is now yours."
>You grip the damn thing and give it a few stabs and slashes.
"Noice Noice, Now do I get to take da boyz?"
>"No this is your journey now begone before I take Ratta back."
>You briskly walk out the room and out the gate.
>"I see she gave you Ratta, She rarely lets anyone used the damn thing anymore."
>Bors say's while pushing the gate out the way.
>"and make sure to bring back a bunch of dem Cup o' cakes, tell 'em Boris sent you."
>>
>>25888596
>Oh so now your standing infront of the compound because you forgot to ask you directions to the portal.
>"I'll take you"
>oh shite who said that.
"Who's there, I've got a sword and I'm not afraid to used it"
>"it was me silly!"
>hmmm you look around.
>"The sword! yah dull bloke, I'm a talkin sword yah cunt,damn now I need a smoke."
>Oh rat the sword is talking.
>"Really? you're going to fight a magical talking purple horse and the talking sword is what bothers you."
>You never did realize how stupid it sounded until it was said out loud.
"Well yah, I guess it is weird, So cutcunt where's the damn portal?"
>"Oi cut it out with that 'cutcunt' shit Boris used to call me that."
"Oh yeah what are you gonna do bout it... Cutcunt."
>" I swear on me mum I fockin chop off your cock and bollocks and feed them to you."
"Wow so wheres the portal to horse-land?"
>"Yah you better change the fockin subject, it's the damn statue."
"Really?"
>"yah now shut your gob and lets get to stepping."
>After a really short walk you somehow make it back to the statue at Canterlot High from a warehouse half across town.
>The sword decides to speak again this time in it's cheery accent again."
>"now dis 'ere is your bog standarded warp nexus, what I need you to do is stab me as hard as you can in the E in 'Canterlot' don't miss our yah might bring in a bunch of warp horrors or something."
"Bunch of wots?"
>"Nothing,NOW FOCKIN PLUNGE ME INTO THAT DAMN E YOU BALLESS CLOWN!"
>Giving your mightiest shout you plunge the Sword into the E and feel yourself falling.
>"Now would be a good time to close you eyes and think of her because it's gonna be awhile before you come back."
>You feel like your falling through the water, but smell the scent of... rat.
>You swear you heard Ratta talking to someone.
>>
>>25888717
I feel my green became a bit convoluted.
Should I full steam ahead or dial it back?
>>
>>25888808
I'm up for full steam aheading it. I'm finding it pretty funny.

Maybe you can go in and out of convulutedness? Perhaps get covoluted during between phases like this, and then scale it back when you want plot things to happen, like with giving Twilight what-for. Or not. Honestly I can't see this doing anything but going full throttle.
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>>25887899
>iUnderstoodThatReference.exe
>>
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>>25887837
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>>25888882

Damn, I wonder where sextuplet 8s went to.

>>25888888

>>25888808

The more chaos the better, mate.
>>
>>25888830
Yassss
>"Wakey wakey... WAKE UP YOU FOCKIN FAILURE OF A MAN!"
>Jesus Nothing like being screamed at by a sword in the morning it really get the blood flowing.
>"Now feast your eyes on Equestria, land of sapient horses and one very kickass janitor."
"You wot Janitors?"
>"Yeah, don't as long as we don't go near the Castle of Cantlelot will be..."
>"Wait this portal only has one exit."
"Yeah and we're in the middle of a room, you blind Ratta?"
>"Jesus Anon for the love of rat get out of here before we end up having to play poker."
"I do fancy of good game of strip poker."
>Jogging out of the the room and soon out of the building.
>Wow that is a personal best you ran from a room streight out the front door.
>Now to find Purple cunt.
"How I'm I supposed to find one horse in a land of horses?"
>"Used me of course, I want to bathe in her blood once again."
"little gory don't ya think."
>" Kill her and the spells broken."
>you just changed your whole mind.
>"Now just what do you think you're doing?"
>You need to find the owner of that voice it sounds so magitistic and godly.
>Luckly it looks like Ratta knows the owner.
>"Oh hey anon meet The janitor."
>As you turn around you see the most handsome face is all realty.
>"Now Ratta I'm sure you didn't travel back here to get beaten up again."
>Ratta somehow gets an indignant tone to her voice.
>"Now Jani surly you think I would be here to do bad I just wanted to see my old friend Twilight."
>"Hey sword stop talking, now kid did the mean sword take you hostage?"
>oh rat should I fight him? I feel like I would have a bad time.
>You gotta play it cool, or else the inner monologue with throw everyone off.
"Uh no I just here to..."
>Shit shit lying was never your strong suit.
" I'm just here to see a friend, some purple sheila you seen 'er?"
>The man looks at the celing then back to you.
>"Do you by any chance mean Princess Twilight Sparkle?
>>
>>25888990
"Yah dats 'er alright"
>The man looks at you then at your sword then back to you then at your sword.
>"Well I'm afraid you just missed her, she just flew back to Ponyville 30 minutes ago."
>Damn your timing always late for the important shit.
" well how do i get to Ponyville?"
>"You gotta wait for a train my cockney friend."
"Oh fockin 'ell I gotta take a train now! Ratta where's the nearest train station?"
>"I'm not siri you cunt it's about 2 miles thata way."
"Good job Ratta."
>"Oh wow thats the first praise I've gotten in awhile."
>Saying goodbye to the most handsome man in existence was difficult but between the sword's continuous insults and the man saying he had to go clean up some splooge or something, you finally got back on track.
>You it make it record time after asking a few nearby rats just what direction 'thata way' is, you finally make it to the train station.
>"Now shut up and let me do the talking."
"Ah yeah like it won't freak him out."
>"trust me the engineers guild owes me after I saved their asses."
>Walking up to the ticket booth you see a pony in a stereotypical conductor outfit.
"Yes 1 ticket for..."
>"No! ignore him, 2 tickets for ponyville please."
>"Ah Ratta how long has it been 10,20 years since you last shown your mantle around here."
>"yeah it's been a minute but I'm calling in my free tickets now."
>Jesus just how many people does this damn sword know?
>"Here you go Ratta first class too."
>"I appreciate it."
>Boarding the nearest train you find seats near a dog like being with large hanging arms.
>You can't help but stare he looks so feral, so dangous, so...
>"Oi wat you lookin at. I'll end you."
>"Sorry my friend here a bit of fag, you also happen to have any one you?"
>"Why is matter of fact I do little swordy."
>the Dog-creature places a hand rolled fag in one of the rat months of the handle.
>"Jeez that Diamond-Dog I need that."
>"Anytime Herald Ratta."
"Could I get a drag?"
>"No yah cunt."
>>
>>25889118
Is anyone still lurking?
>>
>>25889126
Yes keep going
>>
>>25889118
>You always manage to fall asleep during train rides.
>lucky for you, you have a smoking talking sword.
>that's like it's 19th fag during this ride.
>It hotboxed the whole damn car.
>You feel the train slow down before coming to a stop in front of a town.
>"Next stop ponyville!"
>damnit conductors this just like shouting locations huh.
>You thank the 'Diamond-dog' for keeping her busy during the trip.
>"Oi don't mention it, it's not everyday you meet another human and a talking sword."
>You disembark with Ratta at the ready.
"Are you ready for this?"
>"Dude I'm a damn sword are you ready to Antoinette that bitch?"
"Always mate."
>You begin walking toward the plaza most of the ponies don't even notice you.
>"Hey didn't Boris say to get him some cupcakes, that's the place."
>Ratta points out the obnoxious pink bakery.
>You motain to kick open the door but a pink blur opens it.
>"Welcome to Sugercube Corner, you must be Boris's friends his order is ready."
"Do I have to pay or something?"
>"of course not , Boris is an old family friend."
>Oh sweet the huge wall of man is friends with horses.
>you take seat at the table the pink blur motioned to.
"Damn Ratta do you think she's one of Twilight's friends."
>"Definitely so you might have to kill her."
>Jesus that sword is a damn genocidal manic.
>"Here you go 12 strawberry cupcakes."
>she hands you a box of bright pink cakes.
>you chuckle as you imagine Boris having a tea party with the pink blur.
>"By the way my names Pinkie Pie nice to meet you."
"Yeah I'm Anon and this is Ratta."
>"It's nice to see yeah again Herald."
>"You too Pink blur I hope to see you soon."
>After you leave the bakery Ratta begins to talk again.
>"Yah know kid you're gonna have to rough her up if you want her to lift the spell."
"You Don't fockin think I know that?"
>"Yeah but I might aswell tell you again because I mean it's the finally boss."
"You realize I got a return trip to do right?"
>>
>>25889126
About to snooze for the night myself. But I'm still following this, yes.
>>
>>25889214
noice.
I'm out anons.
I'll be back tomorrow.
>>
>>25887567
You're doing good, cunt, keep going.
>>
Heads up, we're fast approaching the bump limit.

Again, thanks to everyone who read my story.

Those of you who are writing or planning to write, you'll have to take it to another thread at some point, because this one is collapsing.
>>
im not even following this thread. i just like the sunset smut.
>>
useless 500 post, yeah im so productive!
>>
>>25889444
Taking the bait. Consider suicide, anon.
>>
They wanna share my light
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>>25889444
Your trips speak of a deeper purpose.
>>
goodbye thread
>>
you will be missed
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