Hey Can You Guys Rate My Story? It's Supposed To Be Kafkesk:

This is unironically good. I wouldn't call it Kafkaesque

>>9637912
Op didn't call it Kafkaesque

>>9637912
Oh, well I was baiting. If I write a novel in the style of a shitpost, will it be good?

>>9637927
I was aware you were baiting, but the excerpt is genuinely good. I don't think it would work in a novel though, maybe a short story or a poem

From behind the edge of the windowsill
There appeared the delicate hand of a child
His face was flush and timid
He stared at the captain through frightened eyes

The captain reached for something to hold on to
Help me, he whispered, as he rose slowly to his feet
The boy's face went pale
He recognized the sound

Silently, he pulled down the shade against the shadow
Lost in the doorstep of the empty house

I'm trying to find my way home

I'm sorry
And I miss you

>>9638005
kys

>>9637963
But this isn't a good short story
>why would the captain be below deck if they haven't left port
>if they were pirates, as the vernacular implies, they couldn't be in a port
>unless they were at a Caribbean pirate bay town
>if it's fiction, why is this town not mentioned or described
>where are they even going
>who calls people maties but then also signifies the same sentence with lads
>if he's so retarded to call a group two names back to back, how did he become captain
>are we in a society where might, the apparent characteristic of the captain, is superior to tactical skill, which he cannot have if he is retarded
>why is everything in title caps
>why are there two colons
>is one the title
>but then why are there quotes
>but it's supposed to be a story