General criticism thread
My attempt at writing like Céline. Rate edgy/10
>>8663323
Nice, would read more
Does this make sense? and am I using this semicolon correctly?
"Now I bring them from the dark and calm where they were cultivated back into the light; the light wherein I bla bla bla bla"
(Reposting from a previous thread)
>>8663323
Not horrible OP. Try using less "I"s though and to let some of the descriptions become less personalized.
>>8663323
>>8663391
It's probably correct but you should make it two separate sentences
>>8663323
>not a single ellipses
0/10
>>8663403
No dialogue
>>8663406
What does that have to do with anything
even in his least ellipses-infested work by a mile (Journey, which is at most the only one you've read if you think this, and you didn't even pay attention to that) he uses them multiple times a page when narrating.
>>8663323
>like Céline
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>in english
>
??