Post that chapter rnding sentence, paragraph, frase or whatever

>>8492401
Sounds like the boy is a faggot. No human would ever tell something like that into the nothingness. Try again, faggot

>>8492472
>implying that 90% of things that characters do in fiction aren't autistic

I'm not proud of it (yet), but it's brief enough that I'd like a critique:

The flesh has rotted away or been eaten, piecemeal, by scavengers. Leathery skin, too tough to rot, cloaks bone in grey, remaining almost wholly undamaged. Far easier to tear a single hole in the carcass and make an entrance than shred the skin. To worm into it through the open mouth, or slackened anus. From between the front legs a jackal emerges with her pups in tow. Their heads tilt to the side as he mimes shooting them.

>>8492401
I hope this is bait. If not, you should not be proud of that passage, anon. Others will tell you why.

>>8492499
Jackals (usually) don't eat meat that rotten. Okay, maybe there's nothing else; still, she would not "worm her way through", much less "her puppies in tow". What carcass is this, a blue whale?

>>8492509
The implication is that the (elephant) carcass has been eaten and dried out awhile ago, and the jackals are using it as a den. Maybe it's not clear because it's an excerpt, and maybe it's just poor writing on my part. I'll make more clear and look at what you've said.

>>8492514
My point was you shouldn't strive for a biological standpoint realism as to how jackals eat their prey and rear their young. It doesn't matter. That is not my criticism. Your writing should be beautiful or strong enough that I stop sperging inside my mind about details you might have got wrong, which in turn derails my immersion and kills my enjoyment.

You know, I was secretly hoping you'd say it was a blue whale carcass.