Hey /lit/, I'm writing a novel and want your input. Is

>>8482132
>asking /lit/ for advice
your book will never get published.

>>8482132
yeah thats real shit n overplayed tbqh senpai

i know you've probably seen breaking bad, so think about how the writers portrayed gus fring. the real dangerous people are the people that know they shouldnt act in ways that would mark them as dangerous.

here's a toast to you developing a character past flatness.

>>8482132
Yeah, I feel I've seen this exact scene somewhere before...

And I don't know, if your intention is to convey how dangerous the villain is, then doing so in a humorous scene like that doesn't really work. Because it's mainly just stupid and laughable, and makes the villain and his forces look like non-threatening idiots. This kind of thing only fits a pirate movie for children.

>>8482132
>conveying how dangerous the villain is

But you greentexted a comedy scene.

>>8482132
I do not think it matter if it is a cliché, or common, even overused. It matters how you contextually flesh it out, aka what the end product is going to be like.

Post the writing and not the scenario. The scenario itself is mediocre, cliche trash, but what you do with it doesn't have to be.

We've all seen it but it doesn't need to be trite. You could also make the villain a chaotic character instead of the childish villain trope. See frank from blue velvet for a good example

Dont stuggle for originality.
We're basically talking apes, almost everything happens almost to all of us and everything worth said, it's been already said.

Struggle for yourself and your enjoyment. If the scene is fun to write and to read, than go on, it's not like you're gonna get published anyway.