Hey /lit/, So here's the deal, I'm a uni student

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Hey /lit/,

So here's the deal, I'm a uni student and I got mad blazed before realising that I have an editing assignment due.

Can any of you brilliant minds with an incredible handle on english see any mistakes that I may have missed?


The differences between the twins, who were separated at birth and raised in two different countries in very different circumstances, are certainly surprising. Each child requires a lot of attention from their guardians, and neither of them enjoys school. However, the subject that is the most interesting to the researchers in that it demonstrates the significance of nurture in shaping one's attitude to their environment, is the behaviour that the two children exhibit towards authority in both school and at home- neither Daisy or Antonetta were prepared to be removed from their guardians or their classroom. When Daisy was separated from her mother due to a school camp, which occurred just after her mother's birthday, it affected their relationship deeply. She couldn't wait until she got home- she spent a lot of time inquiring about when this would occur. As research began when the children were only five, the years of their short lives were marked by considerable intervention from both the education and welfare system. When Daisy gave a hair-raising performance in her school play, the audience failed to applaud. They were horrified by her improvised simulation of a grizzly murder- the first thing that she saw from her place on the stage were their petrified faces. One of the twins rides to school every day, and always terrifies pedestrians and law enforcement agents with her antics. When a collection of stolen items were found in Antonetta's schoolbag, she confessed to her adoptive mother that neither of the books, or the DVD, was hers. Daisy is one of only a couple of girls in her school who play soccer. Though her style is unconventional, every team that she has been a member of since primary school- the under 12's, under 15's and Talton Women's team, has won the finals.

BTW Bukowski sux and Tennyson is the height of classic poetry. Help me pls.