I am going to write a dark fantasy short story soon, so I'm

>>8428456
If YOU'RE writing the short story, then YOU should be the one to come up with the phrases that YOU are going to be writing. /lit/ is not going to write your stories for you.

>>8428456
You need simpler words. Having these sophisticated phrases for something that is horrifying will take me out of the experience.

>>8428465

* "Upon closer examination, I came to know that the strong-smelling parched membrane stretched before me was, in fact, the gutted vaginal walls of a dead woman."

"I accused her of the following: that she enjoyed the lustful weight of Turks pressing upon her, that she enjoyed the unholy lifeforms they injected into her and finally that she had done this a thousand times."

"He had an eyebrow-raising attraction to those dull husks infected with the Great Pox, along with the nasty itch to brought to all those afflicted with it."

Does this affect you?

>>8428456
i dig that image OP

>>8428476
>* "Upon closer examination, I came to know that the strong-smelling parched membrane stretched before me was, in fact, the gutted vaginal walls of a dead woman."

How would anyone other than an experienced gynecologist recognize what vaginal-wall membrane looks like?

how many pickled peppers did peter piper pick

>>8428476
>strong-smelling parched membrane
If it's 'parched' it's unlikely to be strong smelling anymore.

and but so the titillating coprophagist, the nauseating insects gurgler and the viscera ripper all raped the sickly woman (repeatedly) (they were turks btw)

>>8428476
>the gutted vaginal walls of a dead woman
You sure they weren't the gutted vaginal walls of a live woman? Or perhaps of a dead man? Or the fake vaginal walls of a post-op MtF?

>>8428502
>he's never been in a vagina

>>8428456
Only the first one is good. Rape mother sounds terrible and he who craves many itches? Seriously?

Sunset found her squatting in the grass, groaning. Every stool was looser than the one before, and smelled fouler. By the time the moon came up she was shitting brown water. The more she drank, the more she shat, but the more she shat, the thirstier she grew, and her thirst sent her crawling to the stream to suck up more water.

>>8428843
>tfw no syphilitic gf

>>8429038
Tfw no kuru
Tfw no alzhimers
Tfw no brain degradation and degeneration

Okay fucking first of all.

The fucking first rule of short stories is that you do not do fantasy.

There is too little space for you to explain shit.

>>8429054
>thinking you need to explain everything
You are the reason fantasy is shit.

>>8429054
Read the cyberiad