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Time for a challenge. Post better writing than this:
"The Brooklyn riverfront was a maze of rusty containers, sharp-boned cranes looking up from the snowstorm. On a night like this you couldn't help but think of the dark army of dead men, sleeping with the fishes, cement shoes in line. No minotaur lurked in this labyrinth, but somewhere out there, on the clanking deck of his cargo freighter, the skipper of the Charon was waiting, like the ferryman of the river Styx."
I know it'll be hard but let's see what you've got.
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>>8284036
Is this some crime thriller or something?
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Are we meant to improve upon that paragraph or find better prose which describes the Hudson?
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>>8284036
>No minotaur lurked in this labyrinth
Cliche and childish.
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>>8284036
>the skipper of the Charon was waiting, like the ferryman of the river Styx.
Charon IS the ferryman on the river Styx, what the fuck is this metaphor?
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this isn't very good
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IT'S PAYNE
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>On a night like this you couldn't help but think of the dark army of dead men, sleeping with the fishes
I do not have a anime face condescending enough for this
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>>8284236
>Charon is also the name of the boat
I gathered that, but that doesn't make it any less fucking stupid.
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Get. To . The . Point
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>>8284245
How so? The shared name is exactly why he's "like the ferryman of the river Styx."
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>>8284316
... no.
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>>8284321
Great comeback faggot, suck my dick.
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