Guys, rate the first sentence of my new (approximately 600 page)

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2016-03-23 20:38:34 Post No. 7843732
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Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:38:34 Post No. 7843732 [Report]

Guys, rate the first sentence of my new (approximately 600 page) novel. I release one chapter at a time and get paid by the character.

>It would be remiss of me to abstain from explicating to you, dear reader, the vagaries of happenstance that propitiated the fortuitous currents of fate that led my G*d fearing soul to my current state of events.

Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:41:32 Post No.7843739
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Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:41:32 Post No.7843739 [Report]

>>7843732
Is your narrator supposed to be a pompous try hard pseud?

Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:42:25 Post No.7843746
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Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:42:25 Post No.7843746 [Report]

rather lovecraftian

Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:43:26 Post No.7843751
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Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:43:26 Post No.7843751 [Report]

>>7843732
It's fedoric

Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:46:43 Post No.7843756
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Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:46:43 Post No.7843756 [Report]

>>7843732
>G*d

chosen

Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:46:44 Post No.7843757
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Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:46:44 Post No.7843757 [Report]

I grimaced. Who talks like that? And it's not even poetically artificial. It's just trash. Trash. Try again, without the thesaurus this time.

Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:47:56 Post No.7843761
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Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:47:56 Post No.7843761 [Report]

>>7843732

This smells of De Quincey.

Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:48:18 Post No.7843763
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Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:48:18 Post No.7843763 [Report]

>>7843757
Shit I thought this was a Dickens opening you were posting for irony, but it's actually original? Good God. I'm sorry. I'm sorry for being so mean. It's... it's not that bad, Anon.

Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:49:13 Post No.7843767
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Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:49:13 Post No.7843767 [Report]

>>7843732
if you can keep up this uppity sounding twat style for 600 pages,I will eat my hat.

Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:52:39 Post No.7843777
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Anonymous 2016-03-23 20:52:39 Post No.7843777 [Report]

>>7843767

Wew lad, you should've seen the amount of furniture, building, and clothes research I did in order to have huge amounts of description. Reading my book will qualify you as an interior decorator

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>>7843777
doesn't matter that you have tripliners,you shouldn't treat the reader as an inferior in this noble from of cooperation called reading.

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