>tfw prose is awful and choppy and awkward Tbh, I want to

>>10007310
Write like me.

>>10007310
Embrace it. Have your prose narrated from the PoV of a character that IS awkward, has difficultly describing things, "choppy", and detached from the world.

>>10007310
Writing is an art. Do painters give up when they barely even know how to hold the brush, let alone paint?

Practice, practice, practice.

People don't know how to play the piano/speak a language/etc out of the womb. It takes hours, weeks, years of practice.

Knowing that you have shit prose means you at least have decent taste and can recognize your own ineptitude. Use that as a baseline for improvement and try comparing your writing after you've written 1000 more pages.

>>10007310
Your writing is fat and out of shape. You need to write a lot more. Then spend some time editing what you've written. Then write more, with a more attentive ear. Then edit more. Eventually the fat will come off and Staceys will start noticing you.

>>10007514
this is a genuinely good idea
or a very obvious answer that i'm surprised hasn't been suggested yet is to read more authors with a prose style resembling the one u want

>>10007310
Read it out loud.

>>10007310
Record and listen to actual conversations for how they ebb and flow, and try to figure out the nuances.

Dude I love dissecting rabbits. WOOT.

>>10007310
Just keep writing. You'll get better with practice.

If you want it to improve, stop calling it "prose".

>>10008339

This. Pick a couple of authors you like and literally copy their books by hand.