I made this today, that took me 4h to finish it. What do

>>2449678
Go to the drawthread and kill yourself.

>>2449679
K.

Can a mod sup my thread pls ? and sorry 'bout the spam

>>2449678

is she up for anal?
nice tho

foh desu senpai

Nice tits

>>2449678
Her belly is weird. Also plz drawthread

You need to construct the proportions correctly before going into the details. At the moment, her head looks too big for her body.

You lack the 'spark'

>>2449678
4h to finish it? it's not fucking finished dude
but it's great, you've got talent
try some harder lighting tho

mod pls sticky

>>2449678
Only complaint is that the facial proportions are very slightly off.
And also finish the fucking hands.

>>2453576
>talent

don't do this to him, my man

Proportions in general are lol off. It's like you put massive fakeballon tits on a twink which a tragic bone disorder that makes its arms stick like. Head is say to big. Revist your basics before shading.

>>2449678
I love your style! Honestly you don't need to bother with beginner tutorials or books. The best thing for you to do now is focus on making your art unique and progressing your style.

>>2449678

I'm a total beginner, but I like it, definietly has something to it and I like those values/shading.

What I think can be improved - lineweight. More contrast and sharper lines, in parts image gets too blurry, especially on the edges of major features and in darker areas.

Also boobs can be improved a bit I think, they are too ideal/plastic. I know that it might have been intention, but making boobs drop a little and flatten more in contact with skin underneath them would make them more interesting.

Plis I'm pretty sure that outline of right arm should be different.

its shit. kill yourself

>>2454221
I sense this to be very good bait.

>>2455414
No, I'm serious. I think he's got the spark.

Overall it looks fine, but there are many really small imperfections. Left eye is a bit too light, it should have more shadow around it to correspond with the other. The right shoulder shape is minimally off, but a bit more bothersome is the lack of detail, or rather definition in the armpit, look up some reference in the same pose and try to draw a few versions of that region. It looks like there is no depth to her ribcage in that spot.
Her right boob looks a little bit smaller than her left, it should reach a little bit further down. The placement of her left nipple is just plain wrong, move that nearly an entire width of the nipple to the right.
Oh, and her hips are too narrow, especially on her left side (that would be the right side of the picture - just so we are clear what I am talking about).

I don't know how old you are, how much practice you have had or any of that stuff so ...
My marks:
As a school project - straight A
As porn - B- (can fap just fine)

>>2449678
Pick up a book. The best art book for beginners ever written is legit like three clicks away.

>>2458775
Hello man, thanks for your great critic, I am 18 by now. And only draw for fun in fact.
I will reach your advices for good.
(I'm french so pardon my bad english pls)
(and for the contrast problem it's because I scan my draw so it's more lighter than it was)

>>2453576
Thanks but I don't think it's because I got talent, I just keep practicing

>>2452940
sry man, I think she don't have a butt...

>>2454221
Haha thanks very much bro, I work hard looking for my unique way to draw
thanks for the support

>>2455359
k. mate I'm done