/hyw/ - How's Your Webcomic? #390

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>>94210392
Scrub Authors GOODIE Bag
Here’s a short list of sites that any new webcomic artist or writer will find handy:
>*-Struggling to find that perfect FONT? Create your own using this link;
calligraphr.com

>*-Don’t forget to brush up on that ANATOMY:
http://artists.pixelovely.com/practice-tools/figure-drawing/
http://www.quickposes.com/pages/timed

>*-What’s a list without some reference STOCK IMAGES?
People: http://senshistock.deviantart.com/gallery/
Scenery: http://www.shutterstock.com/

>*-Here's a big fat compilation of CHARACTER DESIGN REFERENCE:
http://www.pinterest.com/characterdesigh/ (surprisingly not a typo)

>Links to get a rough WEBSITE started up:
Easy to use tumblr webcomic theme: https://www.tumblr.com/theme/39018
Do’s and Don’ts for starting a site: http://pastebin.com/kNR2W5mV
>Contact sheet if anyone wants to put information down, like their site and webcomic:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uwfOSHXfrgvcf--PkPz9jXL6p5RqIsrYvXYwgQpgT3k/edit#

>DISCORD CHAT going on:
https://discord.gg/rXMbdqP

>Wise words from John Cleese:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Pb5oIIPO62g

>Invisible Ink:
http://courses.cs.washington.edu/courses/cse456/07su/administrative/invisible_ink_part_1.pdf
http://courses.cs.washington.edu/courses/cse456/07su/administrative/invisible_ink_part_2.pdf
http://courses.cs.washington.edu/courses/cse456/07su/administrative/invisible_ink_part_3.pdf

>Paper Wings
http://chrisoatley.com/category/podcasts/
https://web.archive.org/web/20140625035030/http://paperwingspodcast.com/

>Fonts for your webcomic on Blambot:
http://www.blambot.com/

>Writing Resources:
http://www.cienciasecognicao.org/rotas/wp-content/uploads/2013/12/Robert-McKee-Story.pdf

>Guide to promoting your comic:
http://miss-melee.tumblr.com/post/143483233951/

>Comics for makin' comics!
https://www.mediafire.com/folder/9pf1nwwa92lbp/Comics_for_making_Comics

https://www.youtube.com/results?search_query=how+to+draw+comics

>>94203155
>>94203176
>>94203197

Oh hey another entry! Didn't manage to arrive on time on the other thread so I will comment here.

I have a bit of trouble to understand what is going after after the second page, it's a bit confusing how everyone is positioned and all.

I just updated it!

(It's a Pokemon comic... pls no bully)

>>94210769
Where is it though?

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>>94210838
http://s7.zetaboards.com/Nuzlocke_Forum/single/?p=11073157&t=11025924

Here, you can find all the pages on this.

It's not that good.

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wip, issue 3 of >:Maggot Treats

introducing Stu's roach roommate

i don't really like how Stu's clipping through his shower curtain pole on the last panel but i don't want it obscuring him too much either, gonna maybe revise that bit

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Trying to pin down a style for it

>>94210898
For starters, don't use the circle or line tools. I know it's tempting, but it looks unprofessional. Never be lazy! Sometimes you have to draw things you don't want to draw to get a good product. Also, the proportions of the arms and legs look a bit wonky. Sometimes one of the limbs are longer than the other and it often looks unsettling. Don't draw stick figures. But most importantly, never use Comic Sans.

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>>94211184
Yeah I know about all these things! The shape tools, the comic sans the stick figures... the whole schtick of the comic is that it's comedic... but not well drawn... or the humans aren't anyway.

After this comic's over, I plan on doing a serious comic. Here's a little concept art for that... (I still used the shape tool, but it's just a beginning sketch y'know?)

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>>94211139
I tried something else before but Didn't Like It

>>94211402
sorry but is it left to right or right to left the reader's supposed to be reading now?

not tryin to be rude, it looks good man

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>>94211184
>Find a cute comfy font to use for lowercases in my comic
>Someone gets triggered because they think it is Comic Sans

I didn't even think the font looked like comic sans, although I guess that is mostly me being too much of a typographyfag to notice the actual differences. Should I get worried and change the font altogether or stay on my horse?

>>94211597
That looks like the font in classrooms

>>94210992
Nice to see you again anon
Your bugs are really cute, even the roach. And I hardly find roaches cute in any form.

>>94211718
kek now that you mention it yes it looks like it could be from a classroom.
Is that a good or a bad thing?

>>94211597
that looks different enough from Comic Sans. I'd say you're good.

>>94211477
Left to right. I have the same problem all the time. I keep weighing between whether i want something like that page or something sketchier.
after i decide on how i'm supposed to panel this shit

>>94211722
when i was a kid i watched this movie called Joe's Apartment about a mob of talking roaches that just kind of live to be disgusting, skeeved me out man

>>94211880
you're doin a real good job, keep at it

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>>94212228
Thanks anon. I'm not exactly sure what to bring to these threads half the time

i dont usually come to this general but do yall have a list somewhere of good webcomics i can read? preferably finished ones and/or non-fantasy. need some inspiration so i can start writing mine.

>>94212756
Pictures for Sad Children if you can find it
Minus if you can find it
something else if you can find it

>>94212756
>>94212819

Here is a minus archive
http://kiwisbybeat.16mb.com/Kiwis/minusb1.html
Have fun, although the not-being-fantasy bit is a bit subjective.

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seemed a little early for the thread to each its bump limit, but whatever, reposting with a little touch-up, not much but I'm fine with it
>>94182096

>>94210898
This is actually one of the better pokémon comics in terms of everything but the art. You should really get yourself an artist and do the writing

>>94211597
Looks good to me. Then again, comic sans looks good to me. To me this looks like comic sans but with a few nice changes and straighter lines. I should use it.

>>94212756
there used to be a /co/ recommended reading list but fuck if I can find it
I suggest SITM just off the top of my head. good shit. I wouldn't call it fantasy although a portal to a demon dimension is a major part of the story. 90% of it is normal real life shit

>>94213270
You's-a gettin'-a there. I think it's time to double down on your construction process now that you have proportions about right. That'll help make those shapes better

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>tfw never gonna make it
At least the Loomis chemotherapy is helping.

>>94213675
i love the jaw shapes and hair on that skellyman. i also love his glasses but that goes without saying. also cool cheekbones. basically i like this skull guy is what I'm trying to say

>>94213586
don't you mean (You)'s-a gettin'
but mostly i think my problem is i don't really have a steady hand for my tablet. My line control is pretty fine on paper, but i can never seem to get any digitally

>>94213776
When I made him I tried to think of the three coolest things and put them together.
>skeletons
>pompadours
>triangle shades

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Been brainstorming concepts for a story with a friend.
A concept for a somewhat villanious lady that floats around like a fairy.

>>94214704
ah does she fight that robot girl from earlier? floating is always cool. I like her outfit, though it could use a belt and maybe boot demarcations

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>>94210392
Messing around with color and emphasis on large illustrations.

saw08.tumblr.com/post/163479580657

>>94215064
cooool. Looks like something adult swim would air

>>94213793
>don't you mean (You)'s-a gettin'

Oh (You)

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Been working on this little comic series a lot lately

>>94214887
yep! she fights her.

she's actually wearing some sort of techy bodysuit that allows her to float around.

>>94216117
oh cool. Maybe you should indicate that with some kind of glowy bits that largely face downward? like the bottoms of the boots, maybe underside of the forearms.. buttcheeks..

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>>94216025
How bland.

>>94216025
There She Is! Already did this years ago and 10 times better.

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Toying with the idea of a comic focused on witch's familiars. Here's a WIP design for an extra-thick witch character. (I seriously need to stop letting my dick influence my art, I'm turning this entire story concept lewd just by the designs) Mostly happy with it, but I'll be redrawing that hat, doesn't look right. Thoughts?

>>94216329
hat looks good. it has a fun tilt off to the side
her thickness is pretty awful though, not because of any weird puritain guilt you're feeling, but because it's severely disproportionate. She could fit her entire hand in her mouth, and for a girl like that that's dangerous. Her tits are also too high and everything else seems vertically abbreviated. Go ahead and think with your dick, but try to think with your aesthetic sense too. It guided you really well on her face, which is purty.

>>94216329
That's not thick honestly, that's just fat my man.

>>94216284

Here you go >>94216025

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WsWgrf3XLKQ

>>94216025
>>94216284
originally doesn't really matter
different interpretation is what matters

So what is going to happen with the third week challenge?

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>Not sure whether to reference an extremely obscure old website or EAT A BOOK EAT A BOOK EAT A MUHFUCKIN BOOK
That last drawing was just going to be in the background, being cute and explaining why she suddenly knew words.. but I couldn't find room for it, kept reworking it, ended up doing more work. It's at least amusing to me that those who don't have automatic clothing repair might be slightly jelly. T'was Megan's idea to work this in. She has good ideas. Lots of 'em.
Either way I had fun drawing possibly the best attack ever one more time

>>94216374

Thanks for the criticism, I definitely see what you mean about the proportions now that it's been pointed out.

>>94216494

Yeah, you're right, she's fat. Designed her with the intention of being well, just thick, but I think I lost that with the proportions.

I kind of like the idea of her being fat, though, considering my idea for the character. She's going to be a descendant of the Hansel and Gretel type witch, living in a gingerbread house and all that. She doesn't eat kids like the Hansel and Gretel witch, but there could be some jokes there, other witches teasing her about it because of her being fat. "Oh, how many kids did you eat today?", stuff like that.

>>94216949
That's a funny idea actually. More like she's been eating her gingerbread house
Just remember, fat is just like clothes.. it's something you're wearing over your bones, so draw a skinny person (in terms of construction) first, THEN add the fat, giving it appropriate weight. That way your proportioning will never go wrong

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>>94211402
What's wrong with it?

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>>94216576

whats the point if the weeb is going to auto win before the deadline everytime because OH MY GOD IT LOOKS JUST LIKE EVERY OTHER MANGA OUT THERE AUTO WIN BECAUSE IM A TOTAL FUCKING LOSER WEEB! ALSO I LIKE ANIME, ....AND MANGA, ~GIRUGAMESH~

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ji2TYVUicTs

>>94218427
We need that weeb to improve our selves. only the strong servive, and the weak should learn to fear the strong.

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>>94216329
Just a quick work over, but I think in general her legs would suggest to me that her torso, chest area would be longer, and overall taller figure. Her upper body in general have not been build up structurally, so it would help if you familiar yourself with what's underneath before laying on the thicc.

Although a lot of it just what I got attempting to make sense of things by drawing on top it, alot comes down to my personal preferences, you might have something different in mind, so take it with a grain of salt.

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>>94218515

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>>94218554
I don't understand this reaction.

>>94218710
Yea you do

>>94218427
weeb actually cares about his work and takes it seriously, stop sperging out and set weeb as your new goalpost and dedicate your time to climbing that rock all day instead of jerking your cock all day

ya heard?

>>94218515
That ain't thicc.
That's flabby and chubby. Now don't get me wrong, chubby can be cute, but it isn't thicc.

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Hopefully this makes sense.

Overly busty superhero Pulse is trying to find out about the powers her father (the guy with the glasses) once had. She can get that information if she steals something of seemingly no importance from her father and gives it to a friendly rival.

She's built a drone for another reason, and using testing it as a cover to look for the item she has to steal. It was said to give off a signal. And she can use the drone to scan for that signal.

So I'm trying to rely the information I need to tell in a limited space, and retell some of the information from earlier in the comic in case it's not remembered.

I worry it's not as obvious as it could be in panel 5 that she found it. Maybe I should have had a visual kind of light for the drone scanning or something.

She has to steal it in two pages if I stick to my (semi-recent) 12 page chapter rule. I have the other pages planned out, but I'll have to keep tweaking them to make sure they're as easy to follow as I can.

In panel 1, I think he probably has his head turned too much compared to his body, now that I look at it. And it still seems like it might be weird without any text, but I wanted a transition from the last page.

>>94218345
That's pretty great. The colors, and the motion, and the angles.

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Little nub feet for merchant.

>>94218345
TTTTTTTTORPEDO TITS

>>94218972
It's definitely not obvious to me. I thought she turned around and gave up during that last panel, especially when you specifically said come back later

>>94216025
>No joke
>No weight
>No subtlety
>No nuance
>No inerpretation

You would have been better served writing "Racism is BAAAAAD!" and nothing else. What you're doing works fine as a vehicle for simple jokes, but you're not going to make anything that's "serious" of worth or interest with this little effort. This comic tells the viewer nothing except the extremely obvious.

>>94220671
>missing a t in interpretation
Well don't I look silly.

>>94216025
You really oughta work harder. I have literally nothing to say about this, it's not a story, it's not a joke, it's just a blatant statement and that's it. This is the comic equivalent to a speed bump sign.

>>94218427
>He cares about winning when there is no prize to get in the challenge

Is just a formality, the idea of the challenge is to stop sitting on your ass all day and get a story done.

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Finished at last, I hope there is no mistakes and it doesn't read stupid.

>>94221756
>Crossing the speechballoons in P9
Never do this again.
Flip the panel, or put one at the top and one at the bottom, but it's considered bad practice to have balloon tails crossing like that.

Also, what's your target audience?
"Cunt" is quite a strong swearword and would easily get you a Mature rating.
inb4 britbongs using it as casual punctuation.

>>94221945
Thanks for the advice, I'll try to remember that.

Also, that character is british, but usually tries not to be very rude with her speech, only speaks that way when angry/on selected company, if that makes sense

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>>94210392
The Pulsating Nigga-Watt is still in the works

>>94221756
P3: *Should

P5: "I will do" or "I'll do that" sound better.

P8: I'd put line breaks in after "garden" and before "lowliest". That one line is just a little too long.

P9: As stated, avoid crossing balloon tails like that.
Best to move the top right balloon into the bottom right.
Or, left balloon into the top left, and right balloon a little lower.

Assuming London British, you can get away with "ya cheeky cant" if you want to drop the rating.

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QUICK,


What sort of character arcs do your MC's have?

What events drive them?

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>>94218345
Nice colors, dude!
I just started feeling something was off during the color phase. Color has always been my weakest when it came to filling in semi clean lines. I feel better when I get to be sloppier I guess.

>>94222507
I need to redo it but an amnesiac construct awakens with nothing but her research notes on the plague and uses it to figure out what happened leading up to that event.
The other mc in the same story is a fledgling doctor whose family was assaulted and experimented on, following a similar pursuit of knowledge and revenge to reverse what has happened to them and their family.

An. Edit in progress kind of. I'm trying to divorce myself from the first two drafts of the story.

>>94222507
Well I hope I get what a character arc is right

His first character arc is him opening up to his teammates who later become his family of choice. He had a really shit past but his squad boss showed concern for him right away, the rest of the squad had a "tsundere" approach to him.

His second arc is discovering that he isn't as much of a coward as everyone -even himself- think, when he decided to sacrifice himself fighting a battle he knew he couldn't win just to buy time for his friends to get away. He survives though.

His third arc is him coming to terms with his past, when the source of all his traumas comes "back to life" and so he has to fight his own represed fears and demons, while also trying to protect what remains of his chosen family from them.

>>94223012
That's for the first part, then the events lead up into them finding out the cause of their mess was the same guy. The amnesiac is tempted by the knowledge the Bad Guy is offering and to give up the doctor friend for it and it's a moral dilemma.

>>94218834
stop replying to that guy

>>94222507
Coping with death and foreign, irreconcilable morality.

>>94222507
Life should have a character arc of her finding a way to find genuine joy in her job, but the most she gets over a lot of time -and Death's motivational speeches- is her tolerating some of the outcomes.

Death has more of a character arc going on for him, which I find quite ironic because he was thought more as a help but became second main MC the more I wrote about him. His deal is mostly that he actually likes Life but doesn't want to pursue any kind of serious relationship because his job will eventually make him take her life away and he thinks he will avoid the pain that way. It comes to Life of all people to make him accept that side of the "you only live once" concept.

>>94222507
one of my MC's has a pretty rough time trying to figure himself out. His body was altered to such a biological level that he has to continue taking the drug that caused it or his body will break down. He has to learn to deal with the fact that nothing can change the past and that he has to be who he needs to be (but doesn't want to be) in order to continue his goal. He gets into a lot of ordeals and his whole story is really just suffering.

>>94222507
>MC starts as a naive girl who believes that everyone is worthy of forgiveness
>The Love interest/villain loses his shit and orders a purge that kills 1/10 of the worlds population
>MC becomes pessimistic asshole

>>94222507
Most of them just want money. One of them just wants that sweet sweet adrenaline rush. Eventually they get both the money and the rush.
Most of the events that drive them are people offering to pay them money for their service.
I'm a firm believer in not shoving unneeded morals where they don't need to be, the story just is, it's a story, it entertains, it's fulfilled its purpose as far as I care.

>>94223551
only a tenth? that's kind of low.

>>94223585
I mean, he only has swords and shit at his disposal. Kinda hard to kill even that many.

>>94223597
Well, how does he kill even a 1/10 of the population? That's a lot of fucking bodies for just a guy with swords. He doesn't find some kind of ancient doomsday device and reactivate it or something?

>>94223637
>He doesn't find some kind of ancient doomsday device
He does, but he doesn't use it for that. By this time he controls 2/3rds of the world and just systematically kills those who don't submit over the course of a year

Are there any webcomics focused around detectives/mystery?

I have been working on a concept for a comic with realistic cases but outlandish character behaviours/designs. Like Ace Attorney, but a police procedural rather than courtroom drama.

I'm not sure if the concept would work well as a webcomic though? Maybe I ought to publish entire chapters at once rather than daily page updates, so readers can better keep track of the mystery?

>>94222507
He needs to learn that the women around him treat him like dirt and use him, but just because he's going through turmoil in his personal life he still has a responsibility to those he has to protect, as he's the only one who can protect them.

>>94222507
The MC starts shy and cowardly, and lets others tread right over him because it's the only way he knows to get others to accept him. With the heroine's guidance, he realizes this mentality is only hurting him, and that he has no real friends because people like him only as a punching bag. He starts to become more assertive, and more courageous to pursue the heroine, whom he has feelings for.

The Heroine starts off as seemingly confident and personable, but then it's revealed this was only a persona, and in her daily life she's a grumpy and stand-offish person. She's actually a genius, and wants people to acknowledge that, but most just find her condescending and obnoxious, and prefer to just ignore her. Being with the down-to-Earth MC makes her realize that her smarts aren't enough to get other people to like her, but she needs to treat them as equals as well.

>>94223829
You can publish entire chapters if you want but keep in mind you have to watch out how it will appear on your front page if you don't use "bookmark" widgets

Also pretty much anything works as a webcomic plot as long as you know how to write it, and I know I need more procedurals in my life. My local TNT Series channel became pretty much Detectives and Police series only and is not enough

>>94223829
>Are there any webcomics focused around detectives/mystery?

well the cult control webcomic that gets posted here is pretty much detective work, isn't it?

Other than that I only know about a furry comic that has a few detective/mystery chapters. I forgot the name though, something with utopia on it.

>>94223332
wait, do personifications die?

>>94223829
>Like Ace Attorney, but a police procedural rather than courtroom drama.
Are we talking like a Barney Miller kind of thing or more like Monk stuff? Either way as long as it's something as interesting as that, I'm down

>>94224531
Good point

>>94224612
Yeah I know the one. Dreaming of Utopia. Bit of an odd one as far as the genre goes though

>>94224962
I'm not American so I don't really get those references, from what I can see, Monk I guess? It would be set in the UK though if that makes it sound any more interesting (and because I'd rather stick to what I know than make a fool of myself writing about a country/culture I only know about from TV and films)

>>94224930
In my setting they do. Them dying is a sign that the universe's current cycle is coming to an end and must be "reset". This is a kind of top classified info so not many know about it.

>>94225069
oh okay. It'll be more fun on my end then

>>94225092
Iiiiinteresting. That adds a really nice wrinkle to it.

>>94212926
Could always read Great instead.

>>94225126
Thanks, I must admit it isn't a huge deal in the comic's plot itself since it's mostly just gags and chilling, it only comes out as Death's reason to not wanting to get serious at first. Their boss is the only other one who knows the "secret", since he is the personification of Mystery. I couldn't resist.

>>94225165
I'm a big fan of Ribald Youth / Let's Do it Forever myself
that's why copyrezo is grand, there's something for everyone

>>94225304
Yeah that's exactly how that should be. But it will definitely interest the reader as they ask themselves why that would be an issue and why a fellow personification wouldnt be perfect for ol' Death, and why he has to be alone

>>94225318
My favorite copyrezo work is actually Fist. ;_;

>>94223551
Are you the one with the jerk Gods ruining everything? How is the progress going?

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Been making silly little 4koma comics of my mascot characters for my blog

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>>94210898
Like.

I don't like comics where all the girl's tits are bigger than their heads.

My comic is growing way too slow. No subscribers, everyone would rather read comics about gay boys or self-deprecating autobiographicals. How fucking unoriginal can you get? I'm assuming the average tapastic reader is a 14 year old with blue hair.

How come no one likes mild child abuse?

https://tapas.io/series/Hooligans

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https://tapas.io/episode/772623

Wow what a gem.

>513 followers
>relatable

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https://tapas.io/episode/776386

>14.8 k subscribers
>relatability intensifies

>>94226406
am I being baited? you have 9 comics so far, what do you expect a plethora of followers?

also the humour is kinda lame. like... newspaper comic tier.

>>94226560
Steady, mellow burn, that's they way I'm going. It'll climax when it climaxes.

>>94226632
the problem is the casual viewer doesn't want to invent in a potential payoff. they want something punchy and interesting right there on the page they're reading.

if that's not your style, fine, but don't expect many followers in the meantime

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>>94226397
Another 4koma, feel free to check out the rest of my stuff (I also do some lewds but I'm still getting used to my new tablet, so don't expect anything special) brandonartquest.tumblr

>>94226712
I think it'll be better appreciated when there's a library. Eventually I'll start doing Sunday style pages,and those will have rolling jokes. This is an era of instant gratification, I gotta understand the viewers better.

>>94226731
I have always loved this gag

>>94226731
>That news one
hehehe. When you have a proper comic site, let us know.

>>94226731
>GET OFF OF ME, PLEB

I chuckled

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>>94227174
>>94227368
>>94228146
G-g-golly you guys~
You sure know how to make an Anon feel loved!

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>>94222507
I can't speak about main character arcs for my comic, but the band my charcaters are in will evolve and be a big deal in the comic's universe.
Since this is kinda taking place in a bizarro version of Metalocalypse, the band will likely meet not-dethklok members and stuff. I want my comic to loosely tie in with metalocalypse in a very vague way. I though about the basist from gloryhol being a temporary replacement in not-dethklok for a chapter or two, unable to keep up with their dangerous lifestyle or something. Not everything is planned, and i'm trying like hell to make contact with Brendon Small to have more info on how metalocalypse would have ended, but shit ain't happening soon.
But on the bright side: a french pagan metal band has been starting to promote my comic on their facebook page, as they seem to like my stuff, I wish I could make them write some songs with me for the band, so my comic could have a soundtrack to go with. Could be cool to have a Gloryhöl EP alongside the comic or something.

>>94210566
So, where's the poll's at, man? We need to male another one to finally close the contest.

>>94228451
>So, where's the poll's at, man? We need to male another one to finally close the contest.

You know what? Yeah it looks like the most fair thing. Duplo looks to be missing so I will make another one to include the last 2 entries. Just two questions though, should we add naf into the poll? And should the poll be multi-choice or just one?

>>94228625
just one choice and naf too. It's stupid to say: hey look this is our winner. Let the people choose.

>>94228734
Yeah it's clear that was done with good intentions but it somewhat backfires if you think about it

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>>94228734
Alright then all come here to vote for your favorite comic!

http://www.strawpoll.me/13561707
http://www.strawpoll.me/13561707
http://www.strawpoll.me/13561707

And here our entries for quick access

>>94182387
>>94183256
>>94184272
gloryhol anon (Campusvania)

>>94185989
>>94186015
>>94186050
naf (loli drac)

>>94189661
>>94189693
>>94189733
duplo (DRACULA TITS)

>>94193185
>>94193198
>>94193214
marawis (Okeano's Four)

>>94201394
>>94201416
>>94201431
anon #1 (IMG)

>>94203155
>>94203176
>>94203197
anon #2 (Amulet)

>>94216025
Honestly the first one you posted was nice (about the food on the face thing), and I thought it was just going to be a cute slice of life thing.
Don't make it political, that's all I really have to say.

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so after a long time of debating it internally, I have decided to give another shot at trying to make a small comic

>>94210392
you all niggas need more loomis

>>94229026
NO! i will have alll the lemoose to myself! MINE
*draws in spanish*

>>94228816
>http://www.strawpoll.me/13561707
vote for me. I have cookies. (Who am i kidding, naf is published grade quality)

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>>94229109
If it makes you feel better, your comic was really funny so I hope you get any of the first places. Best of luck!

>tfw I can't vote for myself because otherwise the guilt would eat me away

>>94228947
Damn you did that map? It looks really neat.

>>94229486
Yeah, I did it. Kinda spent too much time on it, probably procrastination of sort so I don't have to get to the main comic yet. My human anatomy is a shitshow so that kinda puts me off slightly

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http://www.capeworldcomics.com/

It's Friday, and that means another comic page posted at Capeworld Comics.

Tell us what you think. (Is it obvious the guy that keep frowning is going to be one of the main characters?)

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Testing the new pages.

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>>94229890
i'm posting pages as i complete them so bear with me. It's to see if the pages are readable on the Tapastic format.

>>94229887
Your art may not be the prettiest in terms of technique, but it's damn good. I like the early 60s comic feel to it. I'm feeling like reading a pulp comic

>>94229932
It looks to me like some balloons have the letters a bit too small, in the first panel for example. Is a bit hard to read.

>>94230341
you're right yeah. i'm trying to get them bigger. If it were printed, it could be no problem...

What size/aspect ratio should I be doing for a page? I'm trying to get into the groove with a basic transformation sequence

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>>94230684
It depends about what orientation you want to follow and where will you publish. Pic related kind of has a rule of 3:1 to strip sizes. You can choose more traditional paper sizes like Letter or A4 too, specially if you sketch it on actual paper first.

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>>94230684
i'm going for a good old normal sized comic page as I aim to get printed. Plus that paper format is pretty interresting in terms of pacing and paneling so...

>>94230750
I wanted to go for a portrait style orientation, but I'm more going for a web comic, I don't think I'll be printing anytime soon.
>>94231109
What width/height and bleed are you using for that? Love your work by the way, I'm interested to see more from you.

>>94228816
I hate to get on your tits after all the work you've put into this whole thing, super appreciated, and all the input you've taken
but this time you CAN'T choose multiples, and now I can't vote for my first and second favorite together..

>>94228873
>Mfw I wasn't going to say anything because I knew it was just a reference to that old webtoon, but honestly did not find that one funny either and am sick of political racial shit working its way into everything, and am now glad someone else said it instead, kind of

>>94231128
to be honest, I keep the presets from manga studio on this. I guess I'll have no problems with that in terms of printing.

>>94231109
If you're aiming to get printed, then there's a specific aspect ratio you want, and the size isn't super important as long as it's above a certain size. Go 3000x4000 and you cannot go wrong sizewise (I don't think that's the exact 8.5x11 aspect ratio though. Hey, here's an idea, tell your program 8.5x11 then tell it 300dpi and see what it gives you. alternately, tell it 8.5x11 then go to resize and tell it 3000 pixels, whatever the 11 turns into, that's fine)

>>94231158
I just watched the old webtoon since somebody put it in the thread, it's honestly ten times better and it's much more gracefully presented.
The anon who's posting those comics is good at doing cute, but he really should stay in his lane.

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>>94210392

Ok, a bit of a weird question.

There's this character of mine who I have a hard picking a love interest for. The character (I'll call him character A) is a guy and there's another guy (character B) and a girl (character C) that both have reasons and chemistry to have a decent relationship with character A.

>choose the relationship that would help the story or choose both at different times

The problem is each character has their own baggage and like a dating sim the story would change based on who character A picks as well as all the characters involved developing differently based on those events. Furthermore both paths have pros and cons of similar weights so it's hard to pick between them. Due to this, I'm kinda left to choose the path based on personal preference.

I kinda prefer character A and C being together but I already have too many heterosexual relationships in my story.

>Don't write a characters/relationships for brownie points

I know. I don't want to write AxB for progressive praise but rather to balance out my cast. I want everyone to feel included in the story and I really don't want to leave any group out.


What do?

>>94231278
Better story > feeling included
If you want gaybos to feel included, leave some unpaired characters and let them decide. People love that shit.

>>94231218
dude I work with like 9000 pixels on 300dpi.

>>94231252
I think when you're doing something that is obviously going to draw comparisons, it's good to just put something right out there that makes it clear you're aware it's obvious and you'd rather just wink about it. Maybe put the other thing on a tv in the background, that kind of thing.

>>94231278
>I already have too many heterosexual relationships in my story.
This is where I stopped listening to you. If you think these things are something to "include" and "balance" then we do not think alike enough for me to give you any advice.

>>94231372
yeah well there you go
also I didn't mean to reply to you, meant to reply to the guy asking for print size advice.

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>>94231137
I'm an insecure person who never knows what options a poll like this should have, please understand.

>>94231278
When in doubt, threesomes.

>>94231586
Yeah no worries guy. I think it's great you're revitalizing the threads like this.
Basically, what I think is... if there's a "clear winner", it's good to be able to vote for multiple ones. If not, if everything's more even, then it makes sense to have just one option for favorite

>>94231278
The unfortunate part about this post is that you are leaving out what kind of characters they are. If we are to determine who has more chemistry with who, we'd need to see them in action.

When in doubt, write drafts.

Also don't forget, if you really think there's too many straighties, do you really want to write a gay couple? Doing something like that has to be a thing you really want to do and are willing to put the time into doing while feeling like it's right.

Otherwise you get a gay audience member like me reading willis shit and rolling their eyes.

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>>94231726
welp. Maybe you're right.

>>94231128
thanks mate!

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>>94231726
That makes sense. I did multiple choices on the first poll because of that reasoning actually (even if I forgot to say it on the post), but I got the doubt again for this one and went with what I was replied. If I ever have to do the poll again I will have in mind to make it multiple so there can be more options for the 2nd and 3rd place. Duplo if you are still with us have it in mind as well.

>I think it's great you're revitalizing the threads like this.
Y-you too!

>>94231893
Yeah when I objected last time, it was because you didn't tell us that until after I'd voted. Because I'm a big mr gun-jumper mcgee. Not because I have a problem with as-many-votes-as-you-want, that's sensible. Fuck, I wish we had that in politics. "I want this guy unless he loses, then I want this guy". There's a name for that, I know you can choose to establish that in NationStates

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Man I love writing assholes.

>>94232262
Still love that page. Not sure about the hand on last panel, though.

>>94232480
crap, that hand does look pretty bad now that I took a step back.
Does anyone here have refs for a hand in that position?

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>>94232643
something like this perhaps? I'm not really good at drawing hands.

What separates good character design from edgy Deviantart/Tumblr OC-tier character design?

>>94232794
well it's better than mine, so I might as well use it, Thanks!

>>94232855
make them as bland as possible, then construct their personalities around their perception of the world, their relationships (going deeper than "hurr durr my parents were killed") and then try to make them blend in the best way possible in your world.

My characters are designed around people I know, friends, acquaintances. I base their relationships around my own experiences, so there it is. I treat them as actors: like Harry is played by "me" as i put some of my features on him like beard and all, ezekihell is based on my best pal etc.
Saying all that, I still don't consider this characters as self inserts, as i work around the situation and the fictional nature of the medium to make them stand out in a way.

>>94233013
>make your characters as bland and uninteresting as possible
this seems off

>>94233085
nah because then, you can do everything to make them stand out, in terms of action, relations, capabilities..

>>94232643
The hand itself is fine, more or less. It' sjust very very tiny. as is her head. Your hand should never be smaller than your shoulder-joint

>>94233313
nah, hand and head sizes look fine, it's the lines on the hand that look fucked, like it looks like the other side of the palm or something

>>94232855
>edgy
all the problems in themselves and the world around them define them. kind of a prototype of social justice types minus the high-and-mightiness regarding themselves.
>deviantart
covered in a million tiny details that literally exist because they could be written in a character appearance profile paragraph. think sparkledogs
>tumblr
as un-anime as possible. grotesque, exaggerated features, overly hipstery style (and not the good aspects), trying to pretend the 90s never happened. Either hugely detailed eyes or facial features are just muppet symbols. Either way, coloring is incredibly deep and soft and blended

>>94233458
we're talking the last panel, right? her palm has two lines on it, one for the thumb muscle, the other is the muscle that lets you fold your hand in half and bring your pinky up to your thumb. It looks just right. It's just incredibly tiny. Put your hand on your shoulder and tell me which is bigger

>>94233171
You still need a hook, visually speaking. Something that sets the character apart from the crowd, so that if someone were to draw a picture of them or cosplay them at a con, you would be able to easily recognize it from the sea of generic OCs or even worse the mass of normal 3D irl humans walking around the streets.

>>94233541
Oh god, I think about that all the time. I would absolutely shit a brickload if anyone ever cosplayed as my characters. That's my primary goal in character design, even if I don't think about it conciously. I want this to be something a person would cosplay as, or buy a toy of (or MAKE a custom toy of), or draw in their own style

>>94233468
frighteningly accurate.

For the tumblr, i'd like to add: Pointless details to make the character look UNIQUEEEEE like "muh character is sapiosexual demisexual genderfluid and also XHE HAS VIRTILIGO.

>>94233541
Well, I was speaking about comics set in a realitstic setting, but yeah, then try to make like some really interresting clothing style for that MC. I mean, look at attack on titan: that uniform is pretty good.

>>94233468
>sparkledogs
what are these

>>94232480
Lol the character looks like he should be coming over her in the last panel ,but he's such a perv he has to be under her titties.

>>94233599
Even in a realistic setting you need to do this. Something about your characters visual design needs to pop so that they stick in the reader's memory. Think about drawing a picture of your OC and sharing it with someone who knows literally nothing about what you're doing. If their reaction is "Why did you just show me a picture of a guy wearing a suit? Did you like the outfit of someone you met at work?" You've got some work to do.

>>94233599
>vitiligo

Oh fuck this is so damn overdone it did a 180 and became mainstream I swear

>>94233654
>"Why did you just show me a picture of a guy wearing a suit? Did you like the outfit of someone you met at work?"

nervouslaughter.jpg

>>94233615
Oh my, you haven't seen them? I'm sure you have
animal OCs, often from a template, drawn in either Lion King or Balto kinda style, with a bunch of spiky hair and a ton of different neon colors.. and a super special snowflake name and a ton of little specific details like a scar here and a marking there and claws painted these colors...

>>94233724
I've never seen a character with vitiligo, but I'd like to. It's kind of cool. It's just really hard to draw since you'd have to keep the spots consistent and make sure it got slowly worse over the seasons
seriously of all the autoimmune disorders, vitiligo is the coolest. It sucks people never naturally have spots beyond freckles. Spots are cool.

>>94233867
There is nothing wrong with having your character have scars/tattoos/etc that they got as a part of their backstory. It just comes across as autistic if you dump a fuckhueg paragraph worth of exposition about what they mean in your character reference sheet, as opposed to leaving that shit in the actual story, where it belongs.

>>94233888
Oh well I mean it more on the OC don't steal area. Once you get too much taste of tumblr you find that every character has heterochromia or vitiligo or both.

As for actual funded media I remember someone once posted about a cartoon here in /co/, it was about a bunch of kids with Egyptian lore and one of them had vitiligo

>>94233924
I didn't think I had to specify this, but almost anything that is popular but generally done poorly.. is awesome if you do it well.

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>>94233530
I enlarged the hand and head, but it now looks kinda too big to me

>>94234069
Oh wow, I was replying to the wrong picture. I got confused by >>94232480 and thought it was gloryhol anon talking about himself

Everything I said, pretend it was the last panel in >>94232480, not >>94232262
The advice given for the hand in >>94232262 being wrong was accurate, it does indeed look half-upside down. one reason for that is the thumb isn't integrated properly.

>>94234210
and by "the advice given for the hand in >>94232262 " I mean >>94233458 's advice. That was correct, now that I know who it was talking about.

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Last pic so far. I'm going to bed. I'm tired.

How much asymmetry is tolerable before we go full Battleborn-tier?

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>>94231893
I'm sorry I couldn't manage this earlier, I went for holidays and just came back! but thaks a lot marawis, in fact we're all a team for this challenge!
did you guys already chose a topic for the next one?

>>94234273
She turned bipolar af right there.

>>94234665
No problemo, hope you had fun there!
I thought the topic for the next challenges were mostly your thing to do

>>94234729
I would like it if they were fortnightly challenges instead of weekly, but as for topics.. eh... what about.. barbeque

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>>94234665
>>94235450
last time we rolled for this one, we could include barbecue as well heh
yeah we could make the next one in two weeks as a way to take a little break and maybe polish the entries

>>94235975
let's roll this!
And yeah 2 weeks sounds better

>>94235975
how about this time we don't make it about DRACULA TITS
(the loli dracula was alright though)

>>94231804
>Me liking or not metal music
Awkward wording.
>Me liking metal music or not
>Me liking or not liking metal music
Sound more natural.

>>94236643
knowing what i know about the differences in negatives between francais and english, I can't blame this guy getting that confused
good catch, fellow correcting guy

>>94226397
I can relate with this. When you get into a sneezing fit, it feels absolutely amazing for some reason.

I-I'm not the only one am I?

>>94235975
roll

>>94236952
>>94236598
>>94236296
so The Internet Memory loss Martial arts?

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>>94234069
the hand is a little large

>>94235975
>>94236988

>>94237038
I thought it was for the exaggerated angle

>>94237038
i thought that foot was a penis

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>>94213270

>>94236867
i miss being able to allow myself to sneeze. if i do now it triggers an allergy attack so I have to suppress them

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>>94236988
>The Memory Loss of Martial Arts on the Internet

>>94235975
>Emperor
>Electricity
>Theatricality

What the fuck do I do with this?
There's an emperor of a world where theatre is the highest form of art/power, but the people who really pull the strings are the electricians who keep the endless plays and performances well-lit?

>>94237686
i would think an emperor who has some simple electrical trick that he theatrically uses to keep his people under his thumb. something like an elekiter

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>>94218984
Thanks! Finalizing this page, I am coming up against the deadline this week, so this is as far as I go for this page.

>>94220487
That's why the other girl is like "you and your ridiculous boobs can go stand over there".

>>94222857
Thanks.

Although I thought it looks decent so far. Didn't you have a story you want to tell with this?

>>94235975
Maybe rolling 3 times this one is too much for the challenge? I think maybe rolling 2 times is enough to pick a theme without it getting too weird.

>>94237835
>She have
*has

>>94235975
Seriously though how is rolling going to work/who is doing the rolls???

>>94238128
You just reply to the post with the pic and check for the last digits. If it's ok for everyone I could roll to see what we get. Also may just leave it at 2 because 3 may make the themes a bit too complicated than what they should.

>>94235975
Sorry I'm a gacha addict
roll #1

>>94235975
roll #2

>>94235975
Remember when I said maybe just 2 rolls?
Well that was before the first roll was cartoons. My gacha luck follows me eveywhere...

bonus roll #3 I guess

>>94238808
>>94238834
>>94238880

>Cartoons
>Post-apocalyptic
>Animals

Hu... I guess this one works?

>>94238924
>the survivors of the apocalypse that killed humanity have become humanlike, but they have the records of the cartoons where humans used to imagine what that exact scenario would be like, and they find them offensive!

>>94238924
>The Memory Loss of Martial Arts on the Internet
either ones fine imo

>>94238997
>and they find them offensive!
Kek I laughed more than what I probably should

>>94238924
I'm down with Post-apocalyptic Cartoon Animals.
>>94239030 is just too random of a topic. What the hell would you be able to do with that?

Everything is a poll now.

http://www.strawpoll.me/13565195

>>94239600
>Fast forward 25,000 years into the future
>The internet is considered a tale told to children
>Some say it grants infinite knowledge
>Others believe it's a gateway to the dead
>A lazy monk, the last of his kind, is finally given ownership of the temple.
>First thing he does is open the forbidden door of power.
>There's a box sitting in the middle of the room.
>He slowly paces toward it all cross legged like - almost like a crab with a weird look on his face to what this could possibly be.
>Finally he powers the device on.
>Millions of screens open simultaneously.
>He browses and learns a bunch of garbage that was lost knowledge
>Finally a screen opens
>Its a distress signal from a qt3.14 ayylmao girl, and she's across the woods
:^)

>>94239857
You gotta keep in mind this is a 3 page short. Any theme that needs a whole lot of exposition for anyone to understand what is going on is not going to work well. The setting being the post apocalypse can be established in 1 panel. Same with the previous topic of space castaway.

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I have the first 4 pages of my comic done but I don't want to post it here and receive Bones-tier criticism

>>94240103
>Bones-tier criticism

what?

>>94239772
Looks like Post-Apocalyptic Cartoon Animals is the winrar.

>>94240103
Post it and I'll give it flesh tier criticism.

>>94240103
Don't blueball us and post it

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Well, here goes nothing

https://imgur.com/a/v7qrG

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>>94240103
I'll save you some trouble and give you the standard /co/ criticism

it's shit

>>94240202
The open mouths on side faces look kinda weird, but other than that the art isn't so bad. Nice to see that you have indeed started working on your webcomic other than the porn commissions. Or is this another porn commission?

>>94240274
I know they look off but if I stress in drawing everything perfectly then I lose my will to draw because I get bored. So I prefer to have errors and progress than make a perfect page and drop it.

And no, it isn't a porn comic, it's my actual comic. I've been working on the story too long, I need to start drawing it now.

>>94239857
Dig it
>>94239985
yeah that'd be better for something else

>>94240124
I'm more of a winzip person

>>94240202
>those that have cute kittens on them
we don't usually do that in english unless we're talking about people. You'd wanna say "the ones that have cute kittens on them"
I wonder what that is at the end.. her suspicions about the wound? Or.. not liking being called Lucy..
>>94240274
yeah it looks like there was a concious evasion of sidemouth there and it didnt work out. I can never not draw sidemouth. it looks weiird.
I think it's because in real life, people have cheeks.. so an open mouth isnt visible much at all from the side. Like, you know how eyes get narrower when seen from the side, because they face forward? mouths do the same.. but unlike eyes, a mouth that looks horizontally narrow comes off as a very specific 'ooh' mouth, that you don't always want.

>>94240614
Yeah I just double checked and googled "open mouth in profile" and every single real-life photograph looked freaking weirdly unreal. I don't think I could draw that, or ever see it and not think it looked odd.
On page 1 though, the problem is her lower jaw is too big and sticks out too far, or rather her upper jaw and nose area doesn't stick out too far enough.

>>94240638
I drew this with no references, what did you expect?

>>94240614
And the story is still gonna be continued for another few pages

>>94240202
damn that took a dark turn fast.

>>94240103
the problem isn't Bones-tier criticism, the problem is if you respond in a Bones-tier way. the reason we don't like him goes beyond his comic being poor

>>94240202
The art looks rushed, sloppy and lacks strong or even decent fundamentals. Characters' facial structures change from panel to panel. Bodies look flat, and hands in particular lack structure.
You unironically need Loomis.

The writing seemed passable, at least

>>94240851
the only times when the hands look off is lower page 3

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>>94241176
Yeah no. These hands are pretty fucked, the best looking hands are the panels where we see very little of them.

>>94241258
certainly, doesn't bother me, but i'm a hack
personally i think just telling someone "le loomis" doesn't help much. on the level of telling someone to just "practice"
it's very disingenuous
probably following a character sheet could help them keep a consistent structure
and the art does look flat
it's super noticable on the last 3 panels
stuff like this doesn't normally bother me as long as characters have other defining features other than hair styles (strong jaw lines, big noses, etc.)

>>94241305
what i feel that could be done about the flatness of the art is probably color
i don't think BW art should be used unless it compliments the art. here it just makes the art look unfinished. and not in a cute way you can get away with like sketchiness

>>94240726
Did you see my post above? I have some additional corrections.
>>94236643

Add a comma or a colon after "And that's my job" in the second panel of >>94231804

>>94232480
Two corrections in this one. Add "I" after "As the sound engineer,". The last sentence should be "What did you SAY", not "said".

>>94234273
In the third panel, "aren't you" should be "don't you".
In the fourth panel, you misspelled "success".
In the fifth panel, it should be either "What did we even hire you for, you LEECH" or just "Why did we ever hire you, you LEECH".
In the last panel, it should be "This will be the last time I work with you." "This is the last time I'll work with you" is also acceptable. ("This will be the last time I'll work with you" isn't wrong, but it's a bit weaker than the previous two.)

>>94240202
>personally i think just telling someone "le loomis" doesn't help much. on the level of telling someone to just "practice"
It's Lucy, he's barely on the same level as Bones. Giving him more thoughtful advice than Loomis is a waste of time, the dude's too lazy to improve, and will still act like he's the hottest shit either way

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>>94237916
Its up now, thanks.

>>94240695
>I drew this with no references, what did you expect?

See this is why people give you the bones treatment

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This is my excuse why I named my character pike, a small gag.

>>94240202
Booooooooring.

>>94241789
UNF

>>94234273
Why are her boobs so big?

>>94244711
"thirst quenching"

>>94244711
Fetish

>it's another "webcomic artist drags the reader into their magical realm" episode
why

>>94244931
>>94244742
oh the faggot defense force is here

>>94245209
oh the "if you're put off by comically oversized tits you're a faggot" defense force is here

I guess by your logic we should all be content with gaping vaginas, because the bigger the sex organ is the more straight you are, right?

>>94240202
>>94240851
>Loomis

fuck off. It looks fine. I don't see where her facial structures change. It's a fucking comic man. A cartoon. There's no need to make them feel as if there's only one way to get good. Telling people that shit stifles creativity and their drive to perfect their own style. Their style is so far consistent from what I was able to read.

>>94237835
I do have a story, this was just one of the scenes (there's like 4 more pages before I started to feel blegh about it) where they're doing some kind of feeling confessing thing.

>>94245209
>>94245209
>asks why he draws boobs so big
>get answers as of why he does it
>"hur faggot defence force"

I don't follow

>>94244987
>webcomic artist drags the reader into their magical realm

nani?

>>94244639
Cute.

And now some capitalism ho!

>>94246086
>>94237835
I kind of put it down over here. I realized a lot had to be overhauled after I went to several writing workshops. The thing was based on a DND campaign and I was learning fast that those aren't actually the best structured stories and require a lot of changes to make them work better on paper. (Especially when figuring out where the other player characters actually fit and if at all.)
>>94223012
>>94223122

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Goin' pretty shitty, t b h

I dont know how to draw. I have pic related in a folder somewhere on my computer, but should I start with these or draw-a-box.com?

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>>94241258
See how this compares.

>>94240202
The side view of the black haired girl is fucked, she has a massive underbite

>>94246162
"My god, we both might be stuck in here, with a monster outside that door trying to tear us into shreds, but so help me, I will make a profit"

>>94231278
I mean honestly sometimes you gotta kill your darlings. If you can make AxB WORK in the story, I mean really genuinely work, then do it. /co/ will hate me for saying this but sometimes you need those diversity brownie points to help boost your comic's popularity. If AxB seems forced or mediocre though, probably don't go for it.

>>94246256
Can you show us a drawing right now? Maybe we can pinpoint areas in need of most work. A process of how you draw would be better.
IE, how about someone carrying something heavy?

>>94232855
I think the easiest way to put it is coherency. Whether your character designs are super stylized and ridiculous or super low key and chill, your character designs should build to a singular point on who this character is. In cartoons this usually translates to "I can look at this character and instantly know what sort of person they are", but in more realistic works that sort of extreme stylization doesn't really fly.

In any case the big issue with OC-tier design is that it blandly copies the elements of more popular characters without understanding why those elements were there in the first place. More concerned with looking like a Kingdom Hearts character or a Steven Universe character than having a coherent design.

>>94246256
Post a drawing flat out and we can pinpoint whether you should start with Keys to Drawing, Loomis, Draw a Box, or something else. If you were the kid who drew shitty anime nonstop from the age of 8 to 14, you can probably level up with just Loomis, but if you're absolute /beginner/ tier you may need something more basic, like Keys to Drawing.

You can (and should) still do drawabox though. The Lesson 1 and 2 exercises can basically be "warmup" exercises before you start your real work every day in order to gradually improve your lines and circles and perspective.

>>94246256
Post a drawing so we can see at what point you are.

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I'm not letting this thread die.

Also don't do art when you're drunk. I'm lettering my comic and i'm making a lot of mistaekes.

ALSO FUCK YOU RECAPTCHA I CLICKED ON THOSE CARS

>>94244387
It's okay to say what he said in >>94240309 that's a valid excuse.
However,
>>94240695
I wasn't criticizing you, m80. I was helping point out what looks weird. You actually got more realistic and put more work in than you would have had you not made that mistake.

>>94244639
I did not know there was a difference..
>>94246162
Good ol Recettear. We need more like that, even if there's been a glut of it here and there. i miss that cute faun merchant comic

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>>94247917

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>>94244711
It's her character. I know loads of people are like "these tits are too big", and some are like:"dude, that's cool".

I'm just the kind of guy who like drawing them big. People say i'm overcompensating or something: I just like big tits.

>>94248285
This
though I wish I could set it to flip back to the original once in a while. The original gives you like 2 or 3 'just click it once and you're in' instances before going back to the infinite loop of cars
still, the last year or so has been a lot better than the bumpy previous years, I have to give them that. No more of those impossible ones with the distinct fonts

>>94248375
>POMF

So what is she gonna do on the bed?

>>94248375
There really is nothing wrong with having a character with idiosyncratic anatomy, if that's part of the fun or whatever.
I really, really think the problem here is how bad the rest of her anatomy is. She looks like her hands and head lost oxygen in the womb. I'm not saying you have to make her as realistically fat as a woman with breasts like that would be, but her little baby arms are so weird-looking and if she were to try to crush her own head between her thighs (say a clone), it wouldnt even hurt. it'd be like 'there is enough thigh squish here to fit my small head easily'
and said thighs appear bigger than her hips, which is another odd incongruity. She kind of looks like a pose doll. I mean shit she must have been a really easy birth, just sayin

>>94248375
That's cool, but in the effort of honesty that particular thing makes me want to avoid reading your comic, I just see it and it's unappealing to me. Granted I'm not a fan of cheesecake so maybe I'm not your audience.

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>>94247917
>>94248375
Also is it me, or this character reminds you of either Slut Girl or Bomb Queen?

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>>94218968

>>94248442
she's designed to be an uptight bitch with unrealistic anatomy, but then again, i'm not the best artist man, so yeah. Bad anatomy, but i'm feeling that i'm getting better as I pump out the art, so maybe one day i'll get there.

Also, she's based on a girl I dated. Granted her boobs weren't that big, but that girl was massive, yet slim. Never understood why she loved me though.

>>94248478
I understand. I'm kinda sad you won't read that, but trust me, she is not the main character of the comic. I'm just making chapters about setting up the cast before going down into the action.

>>94248515
Bomb queen? Seriously man? Bomb Queen is a terrible character. Never heard of slut girl, tho. Might give a read.

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Been trying to get better at drawing before making another comic, so i practiced by doing a rule 63 version of mokou. I still feel shit, but feel ready to try again. But now im realizing how hard it is to get back into writing again.

btw, which one of you identified me on ic!? How the hell did you do that
>>94246256
I suggest you learn to draw kneepads first. Good luck, im struggling myself

>>94247917
Like where this is going. I really like older women milf characters for some reason, so its interesting seeing a whole story around one.

>>94248600
she's not that old mind you. She's around 29; while the main cast is around 25-27

>>94248577
Ah, okay then, as long as she's meant to look a little odd, then mission accomplished.

I mean let's have perspective here, you turn on any TV animation, you're seeing weirder stuff than this.

>>94248573
Looking at your watercolors and studio thing makes me feel really comfy

>>94248600
You're showing some promise here, but I can give you one tip right away that will improve all of these:
eyes closer together. you want one eye-width between the eyes. You also want to leave more forehead and cranium room, so you might try shrinking them slightly and moving them slightly down. I can photoedit this picture if you want and show you what I mean.
Obviously you have work to do in general, but this one little change will make you less of a target for shitcrit

>>94248600
>btw, which one of you identified me on ic!? How the hell did you do that
That was me, your stuff is pretty distinct.
Here's my advice for you: grind fundies, human faces and figure drawing. Work on your line consistency, actually try to copy face styles from manga you enjoy.
You need to acquire a decent foundation for your art before you start focusing on more complex stuff like stylization. Put in the hours and mileage and you'll start to see improvement.

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last one before i go. Almost done with this comic.

>>94249320
Typo on the second panel, it should say "forever"

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>>94248665
im 19. Anything 23 and older falls under my milf fantasy.
>>94248750
>>94249001
>pretty distinct
>https://2.bp.blogspot.com/-ijTY67vhd7U/WSlZHP5shjI/AAAAAAAAADc/QBxpfPdrdgkS0-JK_YtSHMpghDmCYbj9ACEw/s1600/675417.jpg
>https://2.bp.blogspot.com/-ST9Ex84ODGs/WTba_5dckgI/AAAAAAAAAGg/zPj2_b8tvUw0E_5toqAui-MyCbleYa21QCEw/s1600/515.png
>this is distinct
thanks dude. My biggest influence is actually burne hogarth and the manga battle angel alita. My favorite anime style is probably DEEN's higurashi adaption, so ill keep that in mind.

Its funny you mention the eyes, because before i heard they were too shrunked in, and then when i looked at one of the proportion guides, i interpreted eyes as being separated by the exact width of the mouth. okay, here i go to practice my fundieeeeeeeeeees

>>94249583
>kiss anime
excuse my plebness. I got it from google and do not stream

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>>94247205
>>94247330
>>94247846
Ive not drawn in a year or so because I just gave up on it. Also because Im more concerned with getting a stable job and writing stuff like screenplays and general writefaggotry.

I just want to be able to draw so I can make detailed storyboards that arent stick figures. Not Ridley Scott-tier, because that mafacka went to art school. Obviously his storyboards are going to be beyond dope.

>>94249922
Seems you have the basics covered. That is you at least have a stick figure with meat right there.

I'm more concerned about the actual details. You know, how you draw faces and all that. Again, to me looks like you at least know how anatomy works overall, if anything just a bit of polish but that comes with practice.

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>>94250309
im pretty much shit at everything but basic shapes.

I see fairly often that lots of people do a thing where they throw shapes together to make an interesting head-face, so maybe thats the secret.

>>94250348
My personal advice would be to draw from life and check on how other artists you like draw. Really you aren't so shit, you just need a bit more of practice to nail details, at least from what you have shown in this drawing. Maybe some other anons may have other things to say though so bare with us.

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>>94250434
When I last drawed(drew, drawn, whatever) I did some still life stuff.

I think I was onto something, but I stopped for whatever reason.

So, I guess Ill skim through my pdfs I have and draw random garbage in my house, then move onto anatomy.

1/2

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>>94250476
2 / 2

>>94249922
It's not as bad as you made it sound. This looks pretty good, it shows you understand that the human body has dimension to it. Small things that need to be worked on are understanding joints, evident by his right wrist, and how you drew the kneecaps/shoulders. Hands (but everyone has to practice on those), a little touch up on muscle (I actually just google Roman/Greek statues for that).
I think the biggest issue for you, is understanding gesture, a natural pose, and weight. While the proportions are not a glaring issue (leg on the rock - thigh needs to be longer, or foreshortening needs some work), the pose just doesn't make much sense. When I get up to test the post out, naturally, my forearm rests mid-thigh, and I'm of hunched over. For a straightened back, the left leg would also need to be straightened, to balance the weight.

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>>94248573

>>94248742
Artist has just moved so off camera there's probably quite a few boxes.

>>94250834
I always feel that your watercolors look a bit washed out, have you tried experimenting with using deeper, richer colors in your pages?

>>94250892
Not the artist, but these are just the initial flats - there are a fair few layers (and thus deepening of colours) to go yet.

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>>94250584

>>94250959
I know, I'm saying this after seeing plenty of her pages posted here over the months

>>94218345
>>94211402
Comic name please?

>>94214704
Got an art blog? Looks fucking amazing!

>>94251365
>>94218345
>rococo_comic_wip.jpg
http://rococo.smackjeeves.com/

>>94249320
Looking good man, I'll advise you to do the criss cross with a heavier line, sometimes it's barely visible.

how do you guys do heavy detailed backgrounds? do you use refrences or what? I'm struggling myself to make it look more natural

So when is the deadline for the current challenge? Is it still this upcoming Wednesday, or has that changed?

>>94252316
>Upcoming Wednesday

I sure hope not! I don't think I'd have enough time to put my entry together. I thought the deadline was in two weeks based on:
>>94235975
>>94236296

>>94251898
References and notions of perspective basically.

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I really suck at light sources, so go easy on me

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>>94252663
new page

>>94249922
>Beat PunchBeef
>Blast ThickNeck
>Brick HardMeat
>Splint ChestHair
>Butch DeadLift
>Punt SpeedChunk

>>94252663
wait. i thought only the writer posted on here. huh.

Also, that kids has been on like a 2 year adventure so far. how is he still fat? shouldnt he be fit by now?

>>94252876
That's true, but I also do the colors. Just writing makes me feel like I'm doing nothing at all, so I help wherever I can. My artist has made some posts before, though.