post ur lyrics here

I counted down from ten. I found god.
He laughed,
and hid again.

I hid my bottles all around the house.
I threw my clothes across the floor
broke my mirrors, smashed my coffee cups
took a hatchet to the door

everything you touched is tainted.
even the air tastes different. The kitchen stove is
silent, broken. Water's leaking in the basement.

There’s a moth in the bathroom. Weak, fluttering against the light.
The air is hot and humid,
he’s trapped till he finally dies.

I counted down from ten. I found god.
He laughed,
and hid again. I need you,
I need god.
There's something in the silence

>>52694827
>cement in my bed begins to dry
>shoot the arrow into the beehive

She loved you yeah yeah yeah
She loved you yeah yeah yeah
She loved you yeah yeah yeah
She loved you yeah yeah yeah
She loved you yeah yeah yeah
She loved you yeah yeah yeah

Let ever the lone rower
seal luscious waters of
moonlit oneiric streams

Let cease her ascension sights
from leaving these candlelit
moonlit oneiric streams

[repeat until bored]

And ravaging was the charismatic boy
Laughter, kid
Boy, you'll take over the contrarians
Boy, you'll dominate contratians

(pls read out-loud for intended effect)

>>52694862
I don't know why but I read this in Trent Reznor's voice. Pretty neat stuff, I'd like to hear a melody to it.

>>52695380
the language when read out loud is really cool. I'm not sure what meaning you're trying to convey, or what genre you are thinking the song will be, but I'd like to know! this is pretty interesting.

>>52695420
thanks! i'd love to record it but i can't play an instrument and only have the vaguest ideas for a melody

When all the ghosts went home from the party
you took off your plastic beak.
Just for me. Just for me.

We pecked goodbye
under a whiskey moon.
Big bird, big owl, I loved you.
We pecked goodbye
under a whiskey moon.
Big bird, big owl, I think I loved you.

The last time I saw you
You waved goodbye to the white spirits dancing
in the everglow.
You mumbled something, a halfassed squawk
You’re were so drunk you couldn’t talk. My radio bird,
my predatory hawk.

You wanted to fly, as fast a thin star falling
from the black sky.
You wrapped your wings around a tree
plastic feathers bruised, lifeless, swelling.

Left me alone, waiting at your coop.

You won’t come home.
You won’t come home.
You won’t come home.

I miss you.

i hate myself
i hate you

Why can't I decide, why my feelings I hide?
Always screwing with my mind, that thorn in my spine.

Oh sure, it feels fine, wasting all our time
In the back of my mind, a thorn in my spine

>>52695853
nice work

>>52695821
stupid and corny

Hmm, I'm honestly not sure about what I meant, I mostly write these based on the sound and feel of the words alone, if that makes any sense? I guess they're not meant to make sense...

>>52694827
Some things said in here could really tear one apart.
It helps peek into the metal lair of some, a few smelling like a great big fart.
Mixing music and literature, perhaps, it's a hybrid art.
It's quite prominent in history, being reiterated here and there.

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>>52695879
That's deep, bro.

Satanic might
Satanic Power

SATAN!SATAN!SATAN!

Take this pure soul as an offering
Make me one of you servant

SATAN!SATAN!SATAN!

We will turn the sky red
Give us your power my master

SATAN!SATAN!SATAN!

>>52695455
>>52695879

Here's another if it helps show what I'm trying to do:

Frigid light
Rape another featureless field
Timid mind
Still tame seven tumultuous seas
Fresh from the picking of the gutted youth

Handcrafted, disfigured from completion
You know your creator's no artisan
Now drafted, deluded in direction
You know your work has no favoured sun
Then thwarted, demoted from position
You know your fresco's no finer sand

So paint another impression
of the same overdone shore
Perhaps you'll paint another detail
When you realize how you've forgotten
In visions, this world you've crafted
And after filled galleries
You'll only intensify your desire
To come back home
and come back home
please come back home
I just want to come back home

(again, like it should be done for all the nice stuff that folks are posting, read out loud)

>>52694827
hand on that glock nigga
her lip on my cock nigga
i see you you bitch niggas
lookin at a rich nigga
im only havin some fun
pull dat trigga then ya DONE
(enter auto-tuned Drake)
these hoes so maadd at me
cuz im the besttt
only need my homies and my city
fuck all the rest

POWER 106 WHERE HIP HOP LIVES
WE GOT SOME TICKETS FOR DRAKE AT CLUB NOKIA
IF YOURE CALLER #25, etc.

>>52695853
Minimal!
Relatable!

Good job! This should become a hit right quick.

I will kill, I will kill, I will kill,
because I feel... (x8)

Satan's wrath is my new energy,
after those problems in the world,
I don't like immigrants
and I hate religious people.

>>52696004
>>52695937
Wanna start a band with me?

first attempt at lyrics pls constructively criticize me

Nicky, you met me at 17
Not sure who I want to be
But I know I want to be with you

Young Nicky, you make me lightheaded
you give me stomachaches
but i keep coming back to you

I know I should quit it
this relationship is harmful
but i see no harm
in keeping you around

my friends dont seem to get it
but i don't care about what they think
you have plently of friends
they all love you, they all hate you
but they keep you around

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Death!
Destruction!
Hatred!
Anarchy!

Why, why don't you love me.
Why, why did you leave me?
I cry, cry at the thoughts of what used to be.

Stab stab sta----b
...
Maybe I should get a
Gun!

We're over, we're done.
But it's like the pain has just begun.
Why, why did you ever leave me.
Why, why are we done.

(guitar solo)

You left me and now we're done.
I guess you just can't see that I'm the one.
Maybe you'll be with me again.

(breakdown)

This is a metalcore song I'm working on guis.

When you were here before
Couldn't look you in the eye
You're just like an angel
Your skin makes me cry
You float like a feather
In a beautiful world
I wish I was special
You're so fucking special

But I'm a creep
I'm a weirdo
What the hell am I doing here?
I don't belong here

I don't care if it hurts
I wanna have control
I want a perfect body
I want a perfect soul
I want you to notice
When I'm not around
You're so fucking special
I wish I was special

But I'm a creep
I'm a weirdo
What the hell am I doing here?
I don't belong here

She's running out the door
She's running out
She run run run run...
Run...

Whatever makes you happy
Whatever you want
You're so fucking special
I wish I was special

But I'm a creep
I'm a weirdo
What the hell am I doing here?
I don't belong here
I don't belong here

>ain't finished, but here's what I've been working on

I wanna know what's coming next

Cause I've been holding out hope since hope's been drawing breath

I wish I knew how to lucid dream

Cause even in my sleep the world is bearing down on me.

>>52695939
this is really nice. really nice vocabulary, nice rhythm, the imagery is spot on.
>>52696056
this has potential, but you have to express your ideas in a less straightforward way. Show don't tell.

>>52696056
Looks like something that a white rapper would wrote,I don't even know why

>>52695821
>>52695902
>>52695937
>>52695939
great songs

here the first one i wrote

metimes I don't know where this dirty road is taking me
Sometimes I can't even see the reason why
I guess I keep on gamblin', lots of booze and lots of ramblin'
It's easier than just a-waitin' 'round to die

One-time friends I had a ma, I even had a pa
He beat her with a belt once cause she cried
She told him to take care of me, she headed down to Tennessee
It's easier than just a-waitin' 'round to die

I came of age and found a girl in a Tuscaloosa bar
She cleaned me out and hit it on the sly
I tried to kill the pain, I bought some wine and hopped a train
Seemed easier than just a-waitin' 'round to die

A friend said he knew where some easy money was
We robbed a man and brother did we fly
The posse caught up with me, drug me back to Muskogee
It's two long years, just a-waitin' 'round to die

Now I'm out of prison, I got me a friend at last
He don't steal or cheat or drink or lie
His name's codeine, he's the nicest thing I've seen
Together we're gonna wait around and die

mustard on da beat hoe

shake dat ass bitch shake dat ass
bend over and take the cash
shake dat ass bitch shake dat ass
fart in my face and let me lick your ass
SWAG

gotta lotta money made it this week
spread those lips lemme take a peek
feelin so hype dont want no blue balls
pee pee on my scrodum so now dey yellow balls
poo poo on my pee pee ITS CHRISTMAS BITCH DECK THE HALLS

>>52695953
http://vocaroo.com/i/s02lFgbAUe7H

>>52696119
don't pretend to be townes van zandt u dork
>>52696099
thommy boy you really should have workshopped this a bit before you recorded it

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>>52696071

All screaming
>Death!
>Destruction!
>Hatred!
>Anarchy!

Clean vocals
>Why, why don't you love me.
>Why, why did you leave me?
>I cry, cry at the thoughts of what used to be.

Screaming
>Stab stab sta----b
>...
>Maybe I should get a
>Gun!

Cleans
>We're over, we're done.
>But it's like the pain has just begun.
>Why, why did you ever leave me.
>Why, why are we done.

Les Paul
>(guitar solo)


Cleans
>You left me and now we're done.
>I guess you just can't see that I'm the one.
>Maybe you'll be with me again.


15-String Guitar
>(breakdown)

watch where you step at
how you were crumbled

your father is not your god
silly fingers run blood

lumination runs high dry
none is done
explode illuminate hid it too fast

never again
never again

suffer hard
history is now

a child is a killer

>>52696131
>http://vocaroo.com/i/s02lFgbAUe7H
thank you so much.

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>>52696131
Next post to get dubs has to vocaroo every single post in this thread at that point

>>52695380
You seem to do what I do, which is try to use as much complicated vocabulary and imagery as possible. Which isn't necessarily bad, I actually really enjoy it. But "oneiric" seems like too much of a stretch.

>And ravaging was the charismatic boy
>Laughter, kid
>Boy, you'll take over the contrarians
>Boy, you'll dominate contrarians

This part seems really fucking cool though.

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The oil runs dry, the ceaseless wails
Purveyors of progress lay unheard
But wait, have you received the news?
The great Leviathan is dead, or so they say
As the weeds retreat to canyons of steel
Lit by the ghost lights of a million stars


Revolution's an angsty word, but always the cynic's choice
From the barricades and the rafters, you can hear the amassed earthly voice
It'll happen again, regardless of the future
So, into the mists, with a kiss, disregard society's suture
For regardless of tomorrow's promises
The hills will echo with starlings

My niggas are in it for Satan...
(Yeah! Motherfucker, 666 in my fucking veins)

I'm swagging for my lord Satan,
degeneracy is a key.
Fake-ass niggas, go ahead, fake 'em,
They're lost at this huge sea.

I raped my own child,
in Lord's name.
You think you can fuck with me?
Well, my children can.

(autotuned Kanye)
You sure learned a lot from Satan, UH (x16)

>>52696112
thanks, being that it's my first attempt I still have trouble getting my ideas into words, so I'll keep this in mind

>>52696189
I'm glad you liked it

>>52696187
I read that in Jamie Stewart's voice.

"to have no faults, that's only in dreams
that's what they said, that's what they said

it can't maintain without tearing away
that's what they said, that's what they said

can't keep it safe from our fucking hands
that's what they say, that's what said

if can't hate then be damned
that's what they say, that's what said

well they're right
all angels will suffocate on earth

come night
we'll strip the world of anything of worth

and if you're of the mind that's bound to say
"rainy days fade away"
endless floods will prove you wrong
and blacken out that happy face

so if there's something you hold dear
kill it now out of fear
because the one thing we hate most
are hearts unsullied and demure

i met a girl who did nothing but scream
that's what they said, that's what they said

i'm told they trampled, spit on her dreams
that's what they said, that's what they said

just because she wished to fill our fucking hands
that's what they said, that's what they said

her wrists have valleys, for our demands
that's what they said, that's what they said

[pre-chorus]

[chorus]

we blame it on her heartbeat
because of it we can't sleep
you can't blame us being jealous
of the angels that are above us

we'll rip them out of heaven
with our taped-on wing ascension
how dare they walk among us
the perfect and the vaunted"

It's a pop song, so they aren't the most complicated lyrics.

>>52696305
this is really beautiful. the power of the imagery outweighs lines like "Revolution's an angsty word, but always the cynic's choice". You can do some cutting to make it more concise and less wordy- the second verse more so than the first

>>52696333
>>52696205
>>52696333
>>52696205
>>52696333
>>52696205

Mama cups death in her open palms.
Papa won’t stop blowing smoke. Sister’s upstairs,
she should be dead, or gone—
my brother is face down, smelling his breath against the lawn.
Grand-ma-mere’s cooking dinner. Burning pots, thick, smokey fog.

I’m forcing stars to fall out from open air. I’m
smashing blank CD’s, pulling out my hair.
I’m throwing rocks, telling lies, while mama drinks her wine;
red like sand, or grit, or dust;
like dirt, or ink, or rust

oh, my great good God alive
oh, my great good God alive
Who’s the next of kin?
We’re dropping like flies.

oh, my great good God alive
oh, my great good God alive
Who’s the next of kin?
We’re dropping like flies.

I don't understand
anything after all
so i can see it

you come down
you wonder why
(Gibberish)
and that one that praises

i can scream my flesh off
and don't even care about it
i cannot understand
anything after all

i cannot understand
a single word
(Gibberish)
we shall search in fire
with the loved one I don't understand
anything after all
so i can see it

you come down
you wonder why
(Gibberish)
and that one that praises

i can scream my flesh off
and don't even care about it
i cannot understand
anything after all

i cannot understand
a single word
(Gibberish)
we shall search in fire
with the loved one
uncompromised
uncompromised

I am Lorde ya ya ya

>>52696476
oh shit its duplicated
here the correct ones

I don't understand
anything after all
so i can see it

you come down
you wonder why
(Gibberish)
and that one that praises

i can scream my flesh off
and don't even care about it
i cannot understand
anything after all

i cannot understand
a single word
(Gibberish)
we shall search in fire
with the loved one
uncompromised

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Thanks, that means alot :). I've been trying to get into songwriting for a while now, and was inspired by the themes of Margaret Atwood's Oryx and Crake. People say that I always have an annoying tendency to always go overboard with my writing, so I'll take that into consideration.

>>52696172
>>52696172
http://vocaroo.com/i/s1TDR7CryGC5

you called me up for lunch
to tell me you miss me a bunch
i said i dont remember
saying we could sleep together

and of course you could have stayed
and of course you could have stayed
and of course you could have stayed
and of course you could have stayed

then we made a big scene
picked up the bill and you ran away from me
told me you were fuckin somebody else
but you were just crashing the night on a friend's couch

and of course you could have stayed
and of course you could have stayed
and of course you could have stayed
and of course you could have stayed

this is from an old song of mine called bath salts
~
1, 2, 3 and A, B, C and LSD makes me trippy
And I can see why grown-up peeps always drink themselves into babies
Ethereally I strum dirty strings above dirty knees but it's not my fault cuz
bath salts x 8
Please tell me why our society emphasizes needs on wool and fleece
Cause many things don't have the same ring as a douchebag dude in a douchebag suit
But I feel fly with my ripped up size whatever the fuck torn jeans and chucks cause
bath salts x 8
I miss my mom and I miss my dad but not so much when I use a crutch
Because I can solve all my petty problems in an alleyway with a bic lighter
So I can see why grown-up peeps always drink themselves into babies with
bath salts x forever
1,2,3 and THC and LSD and DMT and GHB and ecstacy and a little cocaine on a rusty house key, and I'll blow it all up with tnt and get real sad do it all again on an ether bi-ii-ii-iinge

>>52696869
and my favorite song I've written so far
~
Take off his head take off his head the sun and moon both want him dead oh where’s the beer oh where’s the beer get that hippie out of here I hate my mom I hate my dad sitting back in my home town, I need your phone I need your phone is there a western union around?
OH Knifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknife
skateboard! skateboard!
I hate my job I hate my girl I drink on Castro til I hurl oh where’s the bar oh where’s the bar give me the keys back to my car. No im not drunk no im not drunk, hey little girl you wanna fuck? Dirty kids all on the street can kick my ass and lick my feet, my dad worked hard for my degree you think you deserve money?
no
no
oh
Knifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknife
skateboard! skateboard!
Punk rock is my favorite fashion, safety pinning is my passion, everything is just a prank, look I even have a skank; where’s the show? where’s the show? Let’s go mosh with all the bros, look at my new thigh tattoo. Anarchy makes me cooler than you, my back patch makes me cooler than you and I have more friends on Facebook too, all the shows in town are mine; a movement hung on a clothing line.
OH
Knifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknife
SKATE-BOARD! SKATE-BOARD! Knifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknifeknife
SKATE-BOARD! SKATE-BOARD!

First one's some existentialist shit about like....uhh...singular/solitary observance of reality. idk sounds pretentious but that works. Second one's just words for the most part. The first one's in song form, if anyone wants to listen.

1.
I'm slippin on your tears now
that might
not even be there...

I'm tripping off the looks now
I can't
decipher the stares

Well I can,
but it could be anything

And even then
observers can't join their minds

and in the end
solitary we are

and our friends
we merely trade things with

(like...emotions and company

that's why I ran from you...
cuz I'm a scared little pussy...)

hmmmmmmm

...and love must be quite the same
2. transfusia stay
cicero kicked his
little boot fits
in uncle sams slits
flit lightly

fit lightning in that eye
make them see and
always make them multiply
drones fly
and asbos issued on

>>52694827
i want to be stared into and longed for

sensations those glass eyes cant produce

gnashing away, beak and sight of a condor

i burrow in your holes from the truth

i’ve been dreaming of a tower

that ive been building and i know i wont stop

ive been building this tower

to dig into you and fling you from the top

and any hope had the sunlight of reaching your skin

the tower will slowly eclipse

all you can do is get choked by the wind

and run your dry tongue across your lips

theres a word spreading round and youve heard it

but theres no one will be fooled to take you in

save the basement where youre feasted upon and worshipped

by panting throngs of older men


this is for a really weird, violent hardcore punk band.

'rotten'

let the bitches drown
as the rapists make their rounds
we'll bring you down
until you won't make no sound

fuck the fuckers
last i tasted was my mother's
kill your brothers
only happy when she suffers

i'm so rotten
can't be saved

murder your precious christ
soak us in piss, hang us to dry
i see virgins cry
when they fornicate i'm a spy

i'm so rotten
can't be saved
i pick cotton
i can't be saved
i'm such scum
can't be saved
i'm a cunt
can't be saved

>not reading poetry
>calling yourself a lyricist

Lazarus, go get Mary, and we’ll get moving.
Get Martha, we got to get groovin’.
Got to beat the damn Pharisees.
Got beat back the damn Pharisees.

Lazarus, wake me up. It’s morning,
and Jesus is gone. The tomb ain’t
comfortable no more. Been in this place too long.

Lazarus, go get Mary, and we’ll get moving.
Get Martha, we got to get groovin’.
Got to beat the damn Pharisees.
Got beat back the damn Pharisees.

Lazarus, wake me up,
I can smell the dust of death.
Lazarus, can you feel my breath?
Lazarus, what lies deep in the dust of death?
Lazarus? Lazarus? Lazarus?

Lazarus, go get Mary, and we’ll get moving.
Get Martha, we got to get groovin’.
Got to beat the damn Pharisees.
Got beat back the damn Pharisees.

One two three
Does Jesus love me?
Does Jesus love me?
‘Cus I’m not so sure right now--
If he loves me
if he loves me
Can’t you please just show me how

he comes and goes
every two thousand years or so
and if he’s gone (and if he’s gone)
how does he hold love for so long?

Does Jesus love me?
Does Jesus love me?
‘Cus I’m not so sure right now--
If he loves me
if he loves me
Can’t you please just kneel right down

In empty silence (empty silence)
no hymn, no justice
cus he loves us,
cus he loves us

but does he love us? but does he love us?

Oh my, oh my sweet song! Pews and alters,
pews and alters-- word, word not so wrong!
If I’m crazy, and I might be, will my energy
be silenced? It might be! It might be!

Lazarus, swing down!

critique pls:


my tv on the floor
my foot in the door
i know i should be leaving

when you're on my front porch
not saying a word
but in your mind you know you should

and in my throat i feel it
i feel the sting i felt before
i feel my muscles tense

i try to find the words
but all i manage is
"i really should be leaving"

i left the tv on
i closed my open door

I lay flat on the floor

>>52697296
this is simple, but it's pretty emotionally effecting. would make a nice little song

>fifty keks to the first person who can guess what belgian dark comedy/fake documentary this shitty surf punk song is based on


I've got my beer
I've got my weed
If this never ends
I never justify my means

I'm biting dogs
I'm fucking scenes
when they find the heads in the river
no ones gonna ask what this all means

[chorus instrumentation slowly builds throughout, vocals slightly drawn out for emphasis at certain points]
You asked me
about my favorite 90's band!
I said "This aint pinkerton, I have a gun, get in the van"
You asked me
about my plans for life
I said "this aint suicide, shut the fuck up, I have a knife"

[instrumentation goes crazy, driving and building into a frenzy. lyrics are sung chorus style, drawn out but shouted]
CINEMAAAAAAA
CINEMAAAAAAA
CINEMA CINEMA CINEMA
CINEMAAAAAAA
OH GOD
CINEMAAAAA
CINEMAAAAA
CINEMAAAAA
CIN-CIN-CIN-CINEMA
CCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!

[instrumentation breaks apart]
Fuck!

>>52697551
thank you, i really appreciate it

Bestow upon them all that you have
Giveth not thy learned direction
This father fouls the foliage
Sunrisen whisper blanches mine complexion

They hath gorged upon thine nucleus
Processed your pulp to provoke your weary sheep men
Admonish the youth from Picasso sticks
A deathly contrivance betwixt chapped red flesh

DO NOT BEQUEATH ME WITH YOUR PRATTLE
DO NOT TEND MY THOUGHTS LIKE CATTLE
DISPEL THESE TETHERS AND ARM FOR THE BATTLE
YET YOU WILL DISCOUNT ME

Smear my ass in honey
Then break an ant farm over my honey-smeared ass
uh
Good morning

>>52697231
I can't tell if this one is ultra hardcore christian or allegorical

>>52697296
>Show it, don't say it

>>52696992
Fuckin sweet. I imagined almost an orchestral beginning, then a looming guitar riff, then a massive speed-drop into screamed lyrics

>>52698603
lil bit of both

>>52696071
I wanna hear this shit actually made. Seems so corny on paper

>>52694862
I really like this one

Feb

Cold night, bright stars. They
told me that dead folks live up
in the sky. Harsh cold, frozen spit.
Where are you, friend of mine?

Winter hit hard, it always does.
I want to throw my body into forever heat.
I want to cough up death, go up there with you.
Go home, and never leave.
Go home, and never leave.
Go home, and never leave.

Cold night, bright stars. They
told me that dead folks live up
in the sky. Harsh cold, frozen spit.
Where are you, friend of mine?

The ground must have been cold,
hope that pine box kept you good and warm.
Maine february, piles of snow--
that star fire must’a burnt your bones.

He told me that dead folks live up
in the sky.
Where are you, o’friend of mine?
God told me dead folks live up in the sky.
Where are you, friend of mine?

I shoved my balls into your throat
I shot the gun through your throat
I fucking killed you
and my balls
yeah

i want my mom i want my dad i want to go home i want my mom i want my dad i want to go home i want my mom i want my dad i want to go home i want my mom i want my dad i want to go home i want my mom i want my dad i want to go home

"Bloom"

If the air that fills up your lungs,
Reaches out past the tip of your tongue,
Utter my name, even just once,
I'll come back to you,
I'll run and I'll run.

You're everything I need,
Isn't that enough? What more can I say?
I just want to keep you safe,
I love you to death, fuck the cliché,
You're everything to me,
Isn't that what love's supposed to be?
All I want is for you to stay,
I love you to death, we'll never decay.

We will never decay,
Never decay,
Never decay,
Never decay.

Can you feel it, in your chest?
It's a feeling, you can't digest.

If the air that fills up your lungs,
Reaches out past the tip of your tongue,
Utter my name, even just once,
I'll come back to you,
I'll run and I'll run.

I can feel you at the root of my soul,
You bring me to life, you make me whole,
Every single day I feel it grow,
I love you, I love you,
It's all I know.

You're everything I need,
Isn't that enough? What more can I say?
I just want to keep you safe,
I love you to death, fuck the cliché,
You're everything to me,
Isn't that what love's supposed to be?
All I want is for you to stay,
I love you to death, we'll never decay.

You're everything I need,
Isn't that enough? What more can I say?
I just want to keep you safe,
I love you to death, fuck the cliché,
You're everything to me,
Isn't that what love's supposed to be?
All I want is for you to stay,
I love you to death, we'll never decay.

I've got a girl
Right in my mind
The perfect girl
If she were mine

She's a timid little girl with watery eyes
She's an awkward female with remarkable thighs
She can recognize art and has a quick wit
When we're at home she does the lick and spit
She is soo fine and she's all mine

I take her in my car
We bounce around town
We're listening to that pixies song
When she goes down

Oh man oh my this is the life
She's my little hipster qt
I want to make her my wife

Except she doesn't exist
But boy do I wish!
Seriously though

I want a girl with no emotion
Someone who wraps it up tightly
Just like me
Don't have to say we love each other
Cuz we already know

You can be an asshole
I am and you will be too
I hope you like sarcasm
Because it's all that I do

When you get sick of my shit
We can break up and that's ok
I like being alone I swear
It felt good to feel loved for a bit
And I thank you for that

>>52699577
Kek

Add a granny reference and you've got some goat lyrics

>>52699710
i've got OCD and this is one of my intrusive phrases. thought i'd make it into a song

>>52699272
Feels forced to me. Uninspired, almost.

>>52699625
Decent ideas and I think I see where you're going with it, but uninteresting. Sounds like any other person having a bout of internal reflection.

>>52699663
Started off ATCQ, ended le ebin may may status.

>>52699738
Oh I thought you were referencing the nirvana song. This puts it in an entirely new perspextive. Go for it

In the light there stands a showman
Down and out his face reads
He strolls on down the sidewalk
It seems he has no place to be

And the glance that we exchanged
Had forever remained
At the back of my mind
But I couldn't get it off of my brain

It was a different man
who I thought I'd known before
For he had never shown no sign of any imperfection
The man I saw then had seemed to have shattered long ago


All I got, might add to it.

>>52699920
Unremarkable.

cry in your mother's arms
where you can't come to harm
leave your jewels behind
there's something you must find
your treasures on the dresser
left behind to find for me
your trinkets on the sink
it's faucet dripping steadily

don't blink cause
it'll be gone
faster than you think
time can't be wrong
we're just shadows
walking hallways
ghosts with bodies
always

I’ll sing, if you want me to sing. A fossil
blue smeared across the ancient sky.
A country torn open, wide.
A country torn open, wide.

Blood streaked across your head
dried dirt caked in your hair,
I’ll take your matted memory.
I’ll nestle it against my chest.

I’ll sing, if you want me to sing.
I’ll coo over your plump baby.
Lul the alone in you to a fitful sleep.
Your secrets, mine to keep.
Your secrets, mine to keep.

Your secrets, mine to keep.
Your secrets, mine to keep.

Every time I come up with lyrics I think I'm getting somewhere.

Then I read them and realize they're tryhard fedoracore lyrics because I try too hard to put a message/emotion in and I use too many literary devices.

>>52700209
Good, interesting rhyme scheme. Might make a nice acoustic track.

>>52700279
Cheesy undertones imo. Also sort of directionless. Interesting ideas though

>>52700506
thanks, the lyrics are pretty personal, about some sad shit that happened to me. feels good that someone thought it was good

Someone else critique some too, you fuckers

>>52694827
This is all I got so far:

Just wait til' you see my dick
Hey bitch, wait til' you see my dick
Wait til' you see my dick
Hey bitch, wait til' you see my dick
I'ma beat that pussy up
Hey bitch, wait til' you see my dick
Wait til' you see my dick
Hey bitch, wait til' you see my dick
I'ma beat that pussy up
Like be-yum, be-yum, be-yum, be-yum
Be-yum, be-yum, be-yum, be-yum
Be-yum, be-yum, be-yum, be-yum
Be-yum, be-yum, be-yum, be-yum
Beat the pussy up, beat the pussy up
Beat the pussy up, beat the pussy up
Beat the pussy up, beat the pussy up
Beat the pussy up, beat the pussy up

>>52700544
Expand on it. It has decent potential.

>>52700563
did you write this for some special lady?

>>52700591
Yeap! I feel like I should deliver it really soft and sexually, like I'm whispering in her ear, before the sex gets going.
You like?

>>52700622
I think it's really really special. you're really creative. I'm going to post this on the fridge so everyone can see it

>>52700657
Thank you so much! I appreciate it!

I can't get up
Too weak
Stuck in a rut
Need to leave
I lie awake
I can't sleep
Just think

Take off all your clothes in front of me
Know I'm not the only one that's seen
Your naked body recently
Lend it to a stranger, or to three

Now you're alone, what a shame, what a shame
Could have had a home, but you threw it away

Throw out all your shame like you don't care
Self respect were never even there
Scared of being different you said
Fake a smile and laugh, take him to bed

Now you're alone, what a shame, what a shame
Could have had a home, but you threw it away
You're all alone now and you could've had a home but I don't care

I am so lonely, but that's fine
still got my hand, best friend of mine

You convinced everybody they needed a car
You told us we'll pay 'cause we drove too far
You took all our boys to fight for the Jew
Now we're fighting all of your business for you

Here's another text of mine
>>52700772

You do what you want, you do exactly as you please
And when I find out where you've been
You just shake it off again
One of your strengths is to pretend

You had me fooled with your voice
And you had trapped me with your eyes
And looking back how couldn't I see
That you were only using me

Now this man feels nothing at all
This man feels nothing at all
You have withered him down, bare to the bone
This man feels nothing at all

Do you remember where we left
All of our feelings from the past
They weren't strong enough to last
And so they went away to fast

But this time I won't care
Because I know exactly where
This has gone too far
Going to drown myself at the bar

Now this man feels nothing at all
This man feels nothing at all
You have withered him down, bare to the bone
This man feels nothing at all

You can try to crawl but this time it won't matter
Because this man feels nothing at all
This man feels nothing at all
You have withered him down, bare to the bone
This man feels nothing at all

i got a couple short n shitty ones

softly cupping whispers in each hand
gently formed by a heart of glass and a tongue of sand
to a silent existence they are damned
as symphonies without a single fan

a room full of echoes
film full of who knows what
the clothes become dust
two trucks ruined by rust
as so many clips are sewn together
of lives flashing by for worse or for better
of eyes left unmet
of sentiments left unsaid
and status stays offline like a lack of sunshine

the scrapping of steel on an uncalloused face
cries sink to the depths of an unbalanced place
trying to rise above an unchallenged daze
only to slip beneath the feet of an uncalloused race

>>52694827
>tfw no gf
>tfw no gf
>tfw no gf
>tfw no gf
>tfw no change

...damn

>>52694827
loo loo loo I've got some apples
loo loo loo you've got some too

>>52700776
Second verse, on the fly again.

YOU PUT A MONKEY AS PRESIDENT
MORE TWO-FACED THAN HARVEY DENT
IT'S ONLY RACISM IF YOU'RE WHITE
IT'S ONLY CLASSISM IS YOU'RE RIGHT

Yo yo yo
I stick my dick in that shit
Fuck wit it then take a hit
I do meme rap that is all my life
Livin in a life full of strife
Meme lord 2005
Me and my niggas called hive
You still readin this jive
Takin it serious and doin it live
Im memin you all
Takin you for a ride down the hall

"Anthony Fantano" by me

How the hell did we get here again?
You've spent the last three says in bed
To hide
From figures you might fear but you can't fight
Or escape.
This story's a sound that speaks with shame
And it's not getting better.
The voice breaks
In words that ate your name
"I will love you forever."

>>52701435
*days, not says in the 2nd line.

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>>52696172

don't rock the boat baby, I hit the bottom won't float
supersize my seaweed fries hit the dive and choke
lungs filling fast now throw redemption ropes
bound by my wrists but rather it around my throat

I never wrote my name in concrete
How will the suburbs remember me?
Pulling the paper, pulling the weeds
I will wear my hair as I please

I'm alive but falling asleep
The deprivation is stacking
And what does that say about me?
And what does it say that I'm asking?
So sick of the coniferous trees
Dreams of red leaves crackling
You can always sing to me
Just don't call your breakdowns

Am you getting smarter, or just more articulate?
Am you getting better or just getting used to it?
Gotta force the 'you's out of these sentences
Gotta force the 'I's in too


>>52701551
is that meant for hip hop? it's got some nice flow
>>52701435
I feel like if you worked in a little more concrete stuff it would emphasize the abstractions better

ive never cringed so hard

>>52701610
>doesn't pick out examples or offer any actual criticism or advice
Gud post :^)

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>mfw I copy & paste all of these lyrics and sell them to those crappy upcoming twitter rappers who can't write their own music

>>52701635
without a melody these are all fucking cringy

>>52701729
thanks for the advice bro i needed a way to make money

>>52695380
>>52694862
>>52696356

All of these are fucking fantastic.

Still working on the music for this piece, nearly finished, but here are the lyrics:

___

Can you tell me where the light
will take you?
tunnel vision blocks the roads I've known
Careless wreckage stems in all directions
breaking points exhume from seeds I've sewn

butterflies were born in
dreams that danced inside your eyes
your promises were flights of fancy
words that left me...
....paralyzed

If I knew how many nights would hold me
memories would all be cast from grace
Timeless wonder left from all
misfortune
wouldn't stoke the flame of love replaced

ecstasy was found in
fires forged inside our eyes
our promises were fevered frenzy
a wish that left us...
...hypnotized

But energy is flowing in me, harder,
I know the sun still sets in paradise
Dreams that haunt the dead will break the martyr
And regret will only leave me paralyzed.

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>>52701600
yeah it's meant for hip hop, got a lot more but I penned that recently also got this

>cut the head off a horse, throw it in my bed instead,
just to feel some warmth, Khartoum my only friend is dead
to dignify the loss, we over sympathies the fatal end
expendable relationships, a murderers only defense

Call it whatever you call it
I'm a faggot, a sick alcoholic
And I've got no one to hold
Just a lonely soul tired and haunted

BITCH I'M ALWAYS IN THE MATRIX

i've been buried in the dirt
cause of death: floral skirts
and you say you've always been a flirt but we're cool
sentence starters never give me enough syllables
spilled out my guts but they're non-refillable

>>52701737
You're an idiot. Without a melody these are all poems meant to be lyrics. Which is the point of the thread. I assume most of the people here contributing are, in fact, musicians.

Like, duh.

>>52701834
I like this a lot.

Dropping panties popping pills
In your mom I get my semen spilled
Then everyone gets killed
In the butt, it's such a thrill

>>52701757
fuck off, pal. you won't get shit when i write my name on all of these!!!

I'm sick like I'm in a gravitron
I'm potent enough to fuck you with a condom on while you're on the pill and have a baby still born, with two horns, it'll be a Satan spawn
I been waiting too long for people to hear my music so I wrote this song.

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"I Am The Sun!"

I walk, you slither! I find, you search! Where is the grave that you dig, where is the grave that will be your home?


I am your grave, I am your beast!


No longer shall we wander in heaven for it has vanished!


Heaven is no longer is a home to you, Heaven is no longer a home to you.


I sang to God last night, he heard my prayer! He answered only in riddles for he knows I must understand! WE FIGHT! WE FIGHT! Too long have we gone hungry and thirsty brothers, now is our time! Listen, taste, touch. I am the fog that covers your filth.

~ I am swimming in your mother's birth ~

My tears have gone unpunished, my lips have gone dry. Kiss me, kiss me once more. I taste the fluid on your mouth, sweet is your nectar oh prince. I can be your bride, I can be your lover! Enter me, I am free to your desires! But wait!

I must live a virgin for I am to be pure. God has told me so. I do not meddle with the kind of the peasant for they are ugly and immoral. Royalty is where I go, the sand is in my veins no longer!

Your life is in shambles, your life is in shambles, your life is in shambles, your life...

Once I could feel the air between my fingers, no longer. The bricks of my ilk are crumbling down for I am becoming one! RUN WITH ME! RUN WITH ME PLEASE!


Blood drips down my loincloth, I taste it.


Can you show me the way oh good sir? For I have been lost, I am dead. You are not. We seek the King that is the truth but all I have found are lies and cum.

FUCK MY INSIDES OR LEAVE MY PRESENCE!

This isn't who I am, this isn't who I was, this isn't who I will be, this isn't what my mother said.
We all share a craving for it, we all share our dirt.


I AM THE SUN, FIND MY NAME, FIND MY SOUL! I AM THE SUN, KILL ME, KILL ME SAUL! I AM THE SUN, SEARCH MY BODY, SEARCH MY FINGERS! I AM THE SUN, LIFT THE KEYS, LIFT THE HEADS! I AM THE SUN, WHERE IS MY SON, WHERE IS MY FATHER?

I AM THE SUN, RUN WITH ME, RUN WITH ME!

>>52700776
>>52701010
>The newest single from /pol/ Pot!

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>>52702334
Guilty

*reggae rhythm*
we go swinging at the singing park
all the dogs of blue and green going bark BARK
sit down and list my self a piece
talking like a snapping nasty desist and cease
etc.

I can sit and build castles on air
pretend that warm rain will fall yet, enveloping you
and absorb the smell of perfume
warm and comforting
but it would be to fool myself
remember, it is juxtaposed
with a pale blue coldness, that is gelid
and empty.

GOT A BIG DICK (YEAH)
SUCK MY BIG DICK (AYY)
GOT A BIG DICK (YEAH)
FUCK MY BIG DICK (AYY)

UHH, BIG DICK POPPIN SHIT
BIG DICK ROCKIN BITCH
SMELL MY DICK SLOPPY BITCH
BIG DICK POPPIN BITCH
WHOOPWHOOPWHOOPWHOOP

YO IF YOU DON'T WANT TO SUCK MY DICK YOU'RE A FAGGOT
YOU'RE TOO INSECURE TO PUT MY DICK IN YOUR MOUTH AND I WON'T HAVE IT
IT'S JUST GUYS BEING DUDES
SENDING GUYS ALL MY NUDES

CAUSE I GOT A BIG DICK (YEAH)
SUCK MY BIG DICK (AYY)
I GOT A BIG DICK (YEAH)
FUCK MY BIG DICK (AYY)

If i had to make a choice
between slaying the Jews and expelling the blacks
I think we both know where my heart would lie
Blacks are like a virus, antibodies are produced
Jews like the plague, once you get them you're toast

>>52702774
Please make this.

deep below
a deep bellowing
aching roar
shivving shimmering teeth
like planes in the sky
swallow front back and side
encompassing waves
the undulating tide
a ritual that buries demons alive
and pins them to the floorboards of their graves

then the rest of the song just kind of goes into pretentious meditative volume swells with bits of improv. it's a blatant sunn O))) rip off, but theyre pretty much just an earth rip off so i dont feel bad.

Yay, been meaning to post this.

When all that's left is morbid dread
And trouble's mine to find
I'll let 12 gauges of cold lead
Satisfy this mind of mine.

When my heart is torn asunder
And the road becomes my bed
I'll let 18 wheels of thunder
Satisfy my troubled head.

When all the light has left my life
And my brain gnaws at its seams
I'll let my neck meet with my knife;
Satisfy those rusted dreams.

When I'm six feet of dated snow
And my picture's on your shelf
My epitaph will let you know
I satisfied myself.

Can someone help me finish off the rest of the verses and figure out the melody for my new song?

All I got so far:

Making my way downtown
Walking fast, faces pass and I'm homebound
Staring blankly ahead
Just making my way
Making a way through the crowd
And I need you
And I miss you
And now I wonder
If I could fall
Into the sky
Do you think time
Would pass me by?

?

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sure why not.

>implying you can read my writing

here's the song:
https://soundcloud.com/psllbof/fin

>>52703360
>Making my way downtown
Doesn't like a Britney Spears song start line that? That song's all I have in my head with this.

>>52694827
>>52694827
all of you have now written my first album

>>52703417
This is actually decent. The vocals and instrumentals never put me off and come together to form a really solid vibe. Keep going, Anon.

>>52703464
its all practice m8. I've been writing songs and lyrics for 14+ years. started out shit, and eventually got better.

>>52703483
Sometimes I forget this board hosts actual talent.

i eat fruit

i eat fruit

my favourite fruit is juice

not concentrate

nah

cause I can't concentrate mah

I'm a heterosexual

nah wait

semi-homosexual

why say

that I'm gay

when I'm just a maybe?

damn

a dam filled with water

getting hotter

wow

brain is getting louder

pow

i'm dead

like my man ed

who got shot in the head

now his soul is fed

into satan's belly

smelly rotten

satan

now feasting on some ed haven

damn

man

>>52703417

the song is really well done musically, but your voice gets a bit too nasally and can kind of clutter the track. let it breathe and this is primo shit youve got there.

>>52703360
I can already hear this song under some nice piano chords.
I can already see this being a big hit in the charts.
I can already see this being a major song in a successful mainstream movie.

Keep it up, anon!

Listen family, could you just pretend that I'm wonderful, and happy, lying glamorously in bed not a worry in my head.
Could I take up shelter for the impending winter, in your bed? And maybe we can both pretend that I'm wonderful again.
But, you could expect that of me, I spend so much time sitting alone that you'd think I was a ghost,
Expelling prior inhibition to the clouds of smoke that entice my very core to succumb to a new day's beating drum.
And still in the midst of all these dying trees I wonder what it's like to be living.
It's ironic to think that in a place so void of green where I'm the only living being, I'm still allowed the chance to breathe.
So observe my wondering aimlessly, where I await my roots to uphold my constitutions, and self righteousness, inhaling optimism and exhaling belligerent violence.
And maybe someday I'll stop being so jealous of humans that I don't even know,
But not today and probably not tommorow.

>>52703534
Yeah I tend to mix my vocals way too high... bad habit. Next song will be tighter, I promise

Foolishly badgeless
Your face today was priceless
With a name tag dangling above your grave
Forced a blunt remark
Like a gay on the arc
Or a nigger in the dark
It could burn from a spark
When you fumble with a lie
Hide your kids and your wife
Lying in the rye hearby
You never knew your rights

http://vocaroo.com/i/s0snzmiauCGJ

>>52694862
that last fucking line got me.
eye opening

Every night I take a train

There and back and home again

Never a 'to' or ever a 'from'

The ride is a rhythm, a deafening hum


I take my bags and strain to board

Tired, tattered, tainted, sore

Over-sized cases, a weighted chest

Shut just once and opened less


I lug this luggage, far and wide

And breathe with relief when the dark arrives

But on this train I'd meet a friend

A man with none carried, as free as wind


He spoke of a ticket that just went there

No backs, no homes, no fees, no fares

But I could not hear him, the hymn of the train

A hum made of stone, a break from the rain


So he held his voice, escaping the ear

Speaking in silence, in time I would hear

The pain at the end of the train when it slows

Gone with a train that instead only goes


I accepted the ticket, farewell said the light

Good bye and good riddance, forever the night

In the distance a train, the last one to board

At its front stood the man, with a hand given forward


Its speed never slowed, his hand was for mine

A longing to leap, a clinging to time

The time had approached, the schedule had inched

I clung to my bags and was late ever since

You think you're all that, but you're not
I don't know what to say

You think you can rap, but you choke
You're a fricking joke
You're gay, you can't get a girl anyway
I'm done

Yo, you're gay
You suck fags, oh
All night, that, your face all wells up
And it fades away
Yo


Dude, you can't even rhyme
What a crime
You're wearing a blue T
I, you can't mess with me

Yo, yo
You suck balls, along with hoes
You're so gay that, you, you
Don't know what to say
You're gay

Your name is Matt
You're really fat

You have a bull on your shirt
You look like a fert from a cartoon
A coon, and it runes like poons
You live with racoons, animal boom
You live in Kalamazoo
You foo'

Eric hansen saw jon jafarti numbly suck shia's leboner. Satisfaction oozed from shia's lebouf. Arin fucking "gametes" seized gamebrumps lebouf. Poopy niggers smell like.

>>52694862
>>52696356
Guys: I really, really like these lyrics

Been slapping cheeks for weeks and my obliques are in so much pain I shriek
Diseased cheese plate, bowels eliminated
Praying to create elongated logs with weight
But yo
the efforts fickle, shit only trickles and prickles my stink hole, rehydration is my goal
but I'm missing like Heskey, mentally testing me
Spraying wide of the seat and all over my feet

Simultaneous flow out both holes, through bowls like Paul Scholes
This asshole hydrant, probiotically defiant and far from silent, 800 decibels, smells from the gates of hell

Had enough tequila to kill ya so I made toilet nachos, and topped it off with guacamole from my asshole
Pudding fudge in the bowl like sticky date, eating this cuisine will seal your fate

Turd game phenominal, smell abominable
my abdominals turn to a mofuckin 6 pack
dick slap yo bitch with my skitz raps
my shit flaps hanging wider than her puss but I'd still hit that

>>52695821

Dee Reynolds love song?

>>52699625
mentioning a cliche is cliche

>>52701834
this is nice

The Fake Folk
Where's your mother and your father, girl?
Did they leave you at home again?
Did your friends all abandon you?
You really need to make new friends
But that's gonna be a problem
cause these days you only seem to make enemies
but if you're ever feeling lonely
you can always come to me
I'll sing you to sleep so softly
if you're okay with it
I can't believe you're falling for this
This guitar's a broken piece of shit

I made it all up, I always have
and you really shouldn't be surprised
this trick has been repeated
by at least a million other guys
you really should know by now
that we only know two songs
you really should know by now
that we always leave when the morning comes
every song ever written's just a mating call
hope I'm not being negative
Either way, I'll be here all night playing "Wonderwall",
screaming "Fuck me, I'm sensitive"

Posted this before, bit afraid it comes off as really, really bitter when really I just wrote it to be funny.

another one by >>52708410
This band sucks.
The crowd knows it.
The doorman is gonna kick them out.
They got tats.
Look pretty hardcore.
Yet they only seem to sing about their ex girlfriends.

So what's the use?
Oh, what's the use?

They got merch.
T-shirts and Records.
And they keep milking their facebook site in between songs.
Their lead singer.
Sounds like a dying cat.
Don't get me started on the guitarist.

This band sucks.

>>52694827
I looked up from under the bridge
I saw the chrome shimmer on the Northeast Regional
Thinking of the thousand trains that had crossed those tracks before
But only this one had you
I will miss you, my sweet darling
And I will not forget the look I imagine you had as you gazed out that window
Knowing that I let you go
And I will not forgive myself
Standing beneath the trestles down below

The dream of you and I
is dead
Maybe it can live on in my head
But I hope you have expelled it from yours
Realize that I was never worth it. Realize it never will be. Forevermore

>>52708535
This song sucks. Some high school-tier shit honestly

>>52708960
Elaborate.

>>52708849
Pretty good, nice imagery and vocabulary. That being said, what's with everyone in here writing break-up songs? Is everybody on /mu/ just in a constant state of getting and losing girlfriends? Maybe this just annoys me because I can't relate to it.

There's a lady who's sure all that glitters is gold
And she's buying a stairway to heaven.
When she gets there she knows, if the stores are all closed
With a word she can get what she came for.
Ooh, ooh, and she's buying a stairway to heaven.

There's a sign on the wall but she wants to be sure
'Cause you know sometimes words have two meanings.
In a tree by the brook, there's a songbird who sings,
Sometimes all of our thoughts are misgiven.

Ooh, it makes me wonder,
Ooh, it makes me wonder.

There's a feeling I get when I look to the west,
And my spirit is crying for leaving.
In my thoughts I have seen rings of smoke through the trees,
And the voices of those who stand looking.

Ooh, it makes me wonder,
Ooh, it really makes me wonder.

And it's whispered that soon, if we all call the tune,
Then the piper will lead us to reason.
And a new day will dawn for those who stand long,
And the forests will echo with laughter.

If there's a bustle in your hedgerow, don't be alarmed now,
It's just a spring clean for the May queen.
Yes, there are two paths you can go by, but in the long run
There's still time to change the road you're on.
And it makes me wonder.

Your head is humming and it won't go, in case you don't know,
The piper's calling you to join him,
Dear lady, can you hear the wind blow, and did you know
Your stairway lies on the whispering wind?

And as we wind on down the road
Our shadows taller than our soul.
There walks a lady we all know
Who shines white light and wants to show
How everything still turns to gold.
And if you listen very hard
The tune will come to you at last.
When all are one and one is all
To be a rock and not to roll.

And she's buying a stairway to heaven.

>>52709093
Easy to write and universal feeling. Why cant you relate?

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>>52696770
awesome

>>52709267
http://vocaroo.com/i/s1S579iWMuxI

>>52709349
Same, dude.

momma momma momma
oo oo oo
stick me with a knife
gonna cum tonight

momma momma momma
oo oo oo
daddy's sleepin with a bottle
let me suckle that hole

>A woman I don’t know is blowing smoke into the dark
>From behind an open window while she shivers violently

>For the first time in what feels like years it’s quiet,
>Nothing moves under the ice that floats atop the silent sea

>That stretches out to the horizon, over streets and over meadows, almost
>Spills into the attic through the window frame I’m sitting in

I can't come up with a final line, any feedback/ideas are appreciated

you couldn't see me
i was standing there
all the while my mind was chasing the mare
left bare
by the astounding scare
of the hooves in the air
shouting life isnt fair

cus life isnt fair

yno im like a polished stone
no face or love of my own
slabs of meat that were sown
sat atop this throne
of my ex lovers bones
tryna find another stone to hold

you can keep me in your pocket
burn through your jeans like a rocket
sell lackluster love for a profit
no money back when you find im nothing

cus life isnt fair
i wish you werent standin there
stroking that mane of hair
with no love to share

i wish id left the room
not waited for the heat of the kiln in the tomb
chewing on the bones of her womb
while you called me a tool

im a fool

>>52709016
No development, uninteresting language. Stupid topic (in your words: oh, what's the use?)

My piss bottles went missing the other day
I think my mom threw them away
I think my dad thinks I'm gay
Now there's just nothing left to say

You already know I'm on 4chan all day
But I can't complain life is sweet
Roof over my head, beer in my gut and some clean sheets

Why dont you go outside?
Why dont you want to achieve?

Well because... dont you see? I have all I need.

Well I've been waiting on your boy to call my phone to start a fight, but then again he's left me nothing but a number and tonight and I just wanna tell you that I miss you and i think that you'll be missing me when I'm far gone. And I just wanna tell you that I miss you and I think that you'll be missing me before too long. And I think you wanna let me know how much I meant to you, but you would break my heart and break my toe to go meet someone new, and if you would've myspaced me on my facebook I would've texted you back and maybe one day I can catch you alone and we can bring this back. Oh, can somebody bring me home? I'll leave you all the hell alone, but you know that if I'm right, the sun can't be so bright. I can't sleep in my own bed, so I'm staying out late to fix my head so tonight tonight tonight won't be a cure. And so you smoke a fat one, buy a fake gun, rob the corner store and you could shake the horny boys with your enormous curves you whore. And I could say a million things that make you wanna puke, but I'm not that kind of guy. And I could say a million things that make you wanna puke, but I lack the stones to try. And I think you wanna let me know how much I meant to you, but you would break my heart and break my toe to go meet someone new, and if you would've myspaced me on my facebook I would've texted you back and maybe one day I can catch you alone and we can bring this back. Oh, can somebody bring me home? I'll leave you all the hell alone, but you know that if I'm right, the sun can't be so bright. I can't sleep in my own bed, so I'm staying out late to fix my head and tonight tonight tonight won't be a cure.

>>52710060

Take your baby back and stick to the path that leads me back to the night I left my heart out to die, and the wolves of the night lay by your side like I lay by your side. Like I lay by your siiiiiiIIIIIde...And I think you wanna let me know how much I meant to you, but you would break my heart and break my toe to go meet someone new, and if you would've myspaced me on my facebook I would've texted you back and maybe one day I can catch you alone and we can bring this back. Oh, can somebody bring me home? I'll leave you all the hell alone, but you know that if I'm right, the sun can't be so bright. I can't sleep in my own bed, so I'm staying out late to fix my head so tonight tonight tonight isn't a cure. Take your baby back. Tonight isn't a cure. Take your baby back.

Feel it now
The pain envelopes the child
You caused different problems
You caused it and don't regret it
And don't remember how

You overdosed on the floor
The child won't visit the morgue
And speak his sorrows now
When he has nothing to say

Fuck your vision
Fuck your truth
Cunt muffin

Yeah I am back home and feeling fine
It's like opening up that old favorite book tearing from the spine
Illusions of comfort and memories that were never truly had
Like that time around the fireplace with dear old dad
He complimented you on the handsome haircut you got earlier that day
Tussled through your hair in that fatherly way
Too bad you never listened to him when he was still around
Too bad all it seems you could do was let him down

Back home and feeling alright
Back home for Thanksgiving night
We're all around the table and the conversations are swell
There's Aunt Jill and she's doing well
You haven't seen her in years
But you remember as a young boy when you were fighting back tears
Auntie Jill was the one who patched you up when you scraped your knees that hot July day
Aunite Jill's love was all you needed anyways
But you fell out of touch with this mother's sister who you thought you knew
You fell out of touch even though you knew
That Aunt Jill would always have love for you


Home again and I wonder where time's gone
Home again and it's the same old song
The one you thought the lyrics were too cheesy
Until you try to write your own and you realize it isn't easy
To do it in the big world all alone
Don't worry now
Because you're home.

This was one of my first attempts at writing a song for my band. I'd appreciate any criticism.

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You came to me
Just like something out of a dream
You gave me your hand
Saying “Come along, my friend”


Now you and I
Are no longer side by side
You wanted nothing more
Than the way things were before


But darling my mind’s achin’
My sanity is breakin’
Wondering what I did wrong

I’ll be waiting here
Until you have no fear
I hope you know I mean no harm

But girl you drive me mad
When you smile it makes me sad
By your lovely face I’m charmed

I’ll be waiting here for you

We’ll talk a while
But I can never make you smile
Like the others can
I always come off as bland

I wonder, what do you see
That makes you so silent with me?
Is it another side
Of myself that I failed to hide?

Oh, baby I’m not lyin’
When I say inside I’m dyin’
Please don’t fade away from me

CHORUS

I’ll be waiting here for you

But wait, damn, it might be untrue
That I am falling away from you
Panic must be controlling my mind
Because I know that you’re kind

>>52694827
Why you gotta be so rude
Don't you know I'm human tooooo

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>>52695937
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0SYi1Q326LJ

>>52695937
>>52711427
http://vocaroo.com/i/s1Dg8mid0sYO

Ya hue
ahora
ahoraaaaaaaaa
Arcantor !!!
Arcantor !!!
Hue
Estamos aqui
En una nueva partida
En una matanza cubana
Te voy a matar chico
Te voy a masacrar
Te voy a matar
Se siente

Estamos aqui con
Edw(beta)power12
Que se esta inyectando
se esta inyectando
Esta corriendo
(Gritos)
Mate a unooo
(Gritos)
Mate a unooo
(Gritos)
Mate a unoo
ya mate a uno
oye chico
que has dicho hue
que no quieres mis ruidos
que me voy a desmayar
AAA
AAAA
AAAUAUUAUA
AUAUAUUA
AUAUUAUA
AUAUUA
..
..
AUUAUA
Arcantor lo mataste !!
Se siente
ARCANTOR !!!!
AR..CAN...
ARCANTOR !!!!!
(UMM)
...

Arcan?
Oh que quieres que diga meme?
MEME PUES
MEMEEE
MEMEEE
MEEEEMEEEE
El mono del chavo del 8
Yo mate al chabo
no chico, el chavo es una leyenda
(Gritos)
OYE CHICO
NO TE DETENIERON CHICO
CREES QUE SOY EL PAYASO
A ver chico
porfavor
AAUAUUAU
Pero porque voy a decir eso
Esto es una grabacion ilegal
(ARCANTOR MATATEEEE)

EL PELADO
Me dijieron que no me junte con pelados
sabia que me iban a dar mala suerte
Malas cosas Hue
El pelado es una trampa
El pelado
LA CONSPIRACIONNN
Es la trampa
Es una trampa de los hues
Del hue maligno del hue
creo eso para que los hues
no vivan una vida huebliana
Pero la raza hue de los hues
sigue viva hue
hasta que haya un hue vivo
vive

El hue
es uno
Nosotros tambien
Si es que uno muere
todos morimos
y si morir
se dice en cuba
en vez de morir, MO(gritos)
ARCANTOR
EL FUNDADOR
maldicion hue
he gastado un monton de energias haciendo esto
AUAUAUUA
Arcantor muerete.

Soccer moms and cigarettes are bad for your health
Dead disco never helped that anyway
Red teeth blind you
Dead trees find you alone
Where stale champagne that Saturday threw away

Fuck me in my boy pussy
satin satin satin
Ahhhhhhhhhhrghhhhhhhhhhhhhhaaaa

Whatever it may be that the world makes you do
Know, the pain will never leave you
Whatever it may be that God gives unto thee
Know, there is no such thing as eternity

This dying part of me
This happy man, this hungry monster

Wants to sing and play
But there's no-one left to laugh at

It doesn't matter anyway
It's all about to change

And you know what they say!
If you don't like the rules - just break the game

Step up, step up!

Another long night under the crystal glare of artificial light
The noise drowned out by his artificial life
Numbers, symbols, fantasies, delusions
He's in another time and place, while his real life wastes away
He dares not look in the mirror
For that haggard, black-eyed, dirty monster only screams
Every time he stops to look, every time he lingers
Every time that haggard reflection stares at him, he stares right back
And he says

I need something
And I need it now; a way

Out of this rut
Out of this place
Out of this city
Out of this mind
Out of this body
Out of this life

All we needed was a spark to start
But it never went through
Because I don’t love you
I guess I can try and stick together for the kids
But fuck that shit
And man, fuck it

This house is now burning to the ground
And it’s loveless
I want to be cynical and tell you this is where love dies
But it doesn’t, and I’m just bitter
Because you’ll grow old and die together

So pack your shit, we’re going on a long vacation
And when we get back, I don’t know where I will be
It’s the beginning of another long transition
Almost the same as when my son hung himself at 23

This house is now burning to the ground
And it’s loveless
I want to be cynical and tell you this is where love dies
But it doesn’t, and I’m just bitter
Because you’ll grow old and die together

So fuck this house, and fuck this couch
And fuck all of you who live here
You’re just dumb cunts who want my stuff
Now don’t come back unless you bring beer

This spark to start never landed on us
Just the petroleum of my life
So while I suffer self immolation
I guess I’ll be useful
If I stand on the roof my burning body could light up the night

Now everything I touch goes up in smoke
Or falls down as ash
And I’m glad
I can burn divorce papers
Just as easily as I can torch flesh or turn tears to vapor

This house is now burning to the ground
And it’s loveless
I want to be cynical and tell you this is where love dies
But it doesn’t, and I’m just bitter
Because you’ll grow old and die together

the bus was late today
might as well have stayed

at home browsing /mu/
maybe cook some stew

but instead i went
went to an event
that happen every day
o yeahyeaaaheyyy

she held my spot again today
but i was last in line
so it was taken away
by that old fat guy

well tomorrow girl
ur sweetness will not be in vain
cuz i promised girl
that i'll be first guy in line
the first one in line

I almost fell into the void

I was almost swallowed by god

>>52711427

I only like this because you used an anime image :)