Writefags' Guild

>>29923808
Tips and links:

Writefags' Guild Discord Chat: https://discord.gg/XNM2tVS

Things you should know about before writing clop:
Vhatug’s tips for anatomically correct clop and squash soup:
http://pastebin.com/g4VpEg4f

http://www.literotica.com/s/erotic-synonyms (Because using dick, balls, and pussy just isn’t enough to get the reader off. Remember, the reader cums first.)
Had to. Puns are awesome.

Things you should know about writing:
Clever’s Tips on How to Write Short Stories: http://pastebin.com/GGBkxi7e
How to into writing: http://pastebin.com/V1ujiyJt
Writing rules from Navarone: http://pastebin.com/bnMmZ2T3
Ezn’s Guite to writing Fanfiction: http://eznguide.neocities.org/
Writing Book for beginners: https://mega.co.nz/#F!pwo21SKA!dljqCUmOhkwLX3x9_ApEgQ
Help for creating OC characters: http://www.dawnsomewhere.com/ocguide/

A few authors from different threads should you seek inspiration from their stories:
Flutterrape general’s writers: http://pastebin.com/eG8iY7Wy
Active AiE general writers: http://pastebin.com/mVG33ERX
PiE general’s writers: http://pastebin.com/Mgd0QuNy

>“How do I cure my writer’s block?”
Magic.
>“FUCK YOU ANSWER THE QUESTION!”
There’s no one way to cure it, but, if you can’t write, you may as well read stories. There’s more to writing than writing; there’s reading too, and that helps. Check some of the links above.
Try the following (keep in mind this won’t work for everyone):
-Figure out when it’s the best time for you to write.
-Fap then write*.
-Write anyway, and allow yourself to write shitty stories. More often than not, the block is the fear of it being bad. That’s what editing is for.
-Seriously, drink coffee. It’s a writer’s best friend.
-Listen to music while writing.

*Unless you’re writing clop, then listen to your boner.

>>29923813
Here’s some more stuff that didn’t fit in the second post.

A couple writing podcasts:
http://www.writingexcuses.com/
http://typehammer.com/podcast/

An archive of how to write pretty much anything:
https://curiosityquills.com/limyaael/

An idea generator:
http://writers-den.pantomimepony.co.uk/writers-first-lines.php

A worldbuilding forum:
http://worldbuilding.stackexchange.com/


I figured I'd copy over this since there have been three or four people asking about it the last few threads. Though for the most part if people bother to come here they get the basic greentext correct.

>How does one into greentext?
Greentext is always second person, and almost always present tense. Every line except for the viewpoint character speaking is green. You don't have to restrict yourself to one sentence per line.

>Why does one into greentext?
To my knowledge, greentext stories were born from quest/CYOA threads. Since the audience was essentially roleplaying as the one making these choices, they were almost always written is second person (just like CYOA books).

Quotation arrows are one of the only forms of markup available on 4chan, so they were used liberally, which eventually settled into this pattern for stories.

If you want to write more typical prose, I've never seen anybody REEE'd at for it yet.


Since I'm at the top anyways, I'll repeat a warning that I've seen a lot of people saying Vhatug's tips for squash are inaccurate. Do some independent research if you give a shit.

>tfw have to post a whole new thread for one fucking update before I disappear for the weekend

Jew, I'm on eight hundred lines, just working on catching up to the part where things will be new for me. Not much to report, actually.

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We're really bad at this.

>starting your thread right before the new episode
Rookie mistake, guys. I thought you'd know by now

>>29924627
do something.

did we died

>>29927569
Not yet

>>29927958
But grammar?

>>29929059
Nah

Fucker is dead.

>>29930673
No it isn't

Goodnight

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>>29933860
she wants it

>>29934208
She wants it hard

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>>29934947
N-no, appulhoers is pure.

>>29935379
For now

>>29935379
>rape
>"No you don't
>She rape hard

What does the guild think of this abomination I wrote? It's called "The Worst Thing I Could Write in 15 Minutes" https://pastebin.com/7xukmd6f

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bMTwkasxDRA

>>29939529
>Deleting your request for a critique
Well jeeze, now I have to do one just to spite you.

Disclaimer: Keep in mind that most of my following criticisms are minor bugbears for the most part, probably only issues to me and to me alone. Your writing is very solid from a technical standpoint, with very few (if any) spelling or grammatical errors to speak of. Also, I can only judge your story based on what you’ve written so far, so I can’t make any comments regarding plot decisions in good faith.


I wished you had made it clear the lantern used a flame in the very beginning. Personally, I associate the phrase “flicker[ing] to life” more with flashlights and the like.

Too much passive voice for my taste. Lines like “I find myself overwhelmed by a sense of pure dread, [as I glance] aimlessly around at my claustrophobic, featureless enclosure.” It’s very reaction→action, whereas I prefer the other way around. There’s just the slightest split-second pause in my head where I have to piece together what you’re trying to get across, but it’s enough to break up reading flow.

I don’t like how you try to ascribe artificial importance to the lantern in the first paragraph. It’s very heavy-handed and unnecessary. The fact that the protag is comforted by its light in this dark space is reason enough for her to treasure it.

“Were it not clear that I was unnerved by my current predicament just moments prior, it would be blatantly obvious to any outside observer now.“ This line is a little clunky, could do with some rewording.

Speaking of, you state how the protag “somewhat lost [her] composure,” though I don’t see in what way. I rubbed my eyes because I thought I had skipped a line or two. At no point prior did the protag react as I would think a character would react to the prospect of being trapped in a state of eternal undeath. She doesn’t react much at all in fact, at least in the first portion of your CYOA.

1/2

>>29940128
You would do well to ease up on the lines that flatly state how the protag ‘feels.’ She can ‘feel’ dread, nausea, tearing up, et cetera, all she wants, but these ‘feelings’ can never compare to acting in a way that naturally conveys such sentiments. More lines like the protag clutching at the lantern because it’s her one and only source of safety in this pitch-black void please.

I like the mental dialogue when the protag is trying to piece together their memory, going from cog to cogs spinning to steam to steampunk. I hope you do more with this.

Your prose is a little too verbose for the situation I feel. I don’t get a sense of the dread or fear you’re trying to instill into the writing when the protag is coming up with such eloquent thoughts to describe her current predicament.

You go back and forth between present and past tense a couple times during the ‘cobblestone alley’ portion.

Wished you had made it clear the protag is a mare earlier.

It’s quite the escalation when the protag is trying her best not to scare ponies, then tries to terrify an entire crowd. “Childish mischief” isn’t quite enough to explain this jump in behavior, at least to me. Maybe it could be a result of growing frustration at being unnoticed? Maybe she felt oppressed by Victorian era etiquette in her prior life and is using her new-found ghostly abilities to relieve some stress?

The second portion of your CYOA is stronger than the first. The protag is emoting more, some plot significant details are unearthed, and it’s overall just generally more interesting to read.


Well that’s what I have so far. I’ll happily add more if and when you continue. I want to finish off by saying I do like your writing in the end. None of the above can detract from me enjoying the story, and I am indeed enjoying it so far.

2/2

>>29940128
>>29940144
Didn't even know I deleted the wrong comment until you pointed it out. Gotta love multiple tabs open on blue boards. Thanks again for the critique.

>>29938371
oh dear

>>29923808
Why sint there a site for greentext like fimfiction yet?

Is it just that no one has done it yet, or are people unwilling to use some other site to host it? I know most of the stories are in pastebins, but its hard to keep track of it all, plus the text isnt green.

I was thinking of making a small program for viewing pasebins in a 4chan like format for personal use, and wondered why a site for that doesnt exist yet.

>>29941384
Good question. All we do have is an archive, but it's sadly not what you think. It supposedly does hold all of the green texts, but unfortunately, I can't remember the name of it.

Page 10 is hot lava

>>29938371
>Starlight Glimmer walked into the room, and she did not understand at first what she was seeing. There was Twilight, her beautiful penis fully erect and dripping in a mixture of semen, liquid feces, and dragon blood.
Stopped right there. Judging by the title, you nailed your goal.

I was writing for an antifa glim glam thread but it died before I could post. Here is what is what I was writing, cause if I cant post it, it would be wasted.

>Your vision blurs as your eyes burn, the blood dripping into your eye from the injury right behind your hairline.
>You had just tanked a blow from one of the black clad, wanabe "activists."
>It felt like a sap of some sort, probably a bike lock in a sock.
>You feel hands pull you back and put you back on your feet, as a distant voice asks if you are okay.
>Nodding, you wave off the help.
>You have dealt with worse wounds in much dire straits and without a shred of hope or help.
>This is child's play compared to your previous tumultuous life.
>You are Anonymous, fighter for freedom, protector of liberty, and survivor of the Khmer Rouge.
>You were but a child when the the army rounded up your village, bringing hundreds of people out to fallow rice paddies surrounded by tropical rainforest.
>It was the hight of the dry season in Cambodia, and the whole village was starving and on their last legs.
>The military asked for anyone that was musically talented to step forward.
>Several children, including yourself, stepped forward and were asked what instrument they could play.
>The rest of the kids could only play the piano or simple things like drums.
>You, on the other hand, could play the flute

>>29944368
>You played the flute for three days, as hard and as loud as you could.
>On the first day, you drowned out the noise of the entire village digging shallow trenches with your flute.
>On the second day, your flute was not loud enough to cover the sounds of mass execution.
>The Khmer Rouge was not wealthy and did not waste ammunition on these cullings.
>The soldiers took their knifes to their own countrymen, the males first.
>You played the flute, trying to hold back tears, as you watched your grandfather's throat was brutally hacked open, his life ebbing from his wound, and falling lifeless into the darkness of the trench.
>Then your father, then your oldest brother, then your cousin, then your uncle, then your youngest brother, no older than 6 months.
>All died a slow and painful death at the bottom of a pit that they had dug out for themselves.
>On the third day, it was the women.
>Right before your eyes, your world was taken from you.
>Everyone you had ever known, ever loved and ever hated, were dead.
>On the fourth day, you ran.
>You knew that your only salvation would be to get to the border of Vietnam.
>Your only compass was the sun, you knew that the sun set in the west and rose in the east.
>You had to go east, following the rising sun.

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So, I wrote a bit of some green the other day and tried putting the link to a song to go with what I wrote. Do you think that would help make the story more enjoyable, or just get in the way?

>>29945887
I think it can be a nice touch but you should probably always put the song name and artist on the next line. Makes reading on PB and mobile a lot better.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FbSNmfLrr6U
[Dual Force - Temptation]

like that

>>29946435
Alright. I simply posted the link without the name or artist. I'll try putting the info so who ever reads it has an idea of what they'd be opening.

>>29945887
Link to the green? Whether or not a song is fitting is heavily dependent on context in my experience. I don't want to make any comments before seeing exactly what you're doing.

>>29946435
go on.

>>29946910
I only posted it in another thread, so I'd have to dump what I have here.

Grammar question:

"He spent his first day in serenity, eating, boiling water and sleeping like a carefree child."

So should there be a comma after serenity?