Equestrian Family general #3

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i dont know were to start
i am probaly horrable at it but here it goes
a short story about a serten doctor

>the sun shines in your eyes as you wake up
>a huge yawn escapes your lips when you step out of bed
>your bed room is small but cosy
>there is a bookcase in the corner and a single bed against the oposite wall
>next to the bookcase is a door that leeds into the halway
>there are no pictures but there is a mirror
>you look into it and see that your brown mane are ruffled
>your coat is a light brown colour and you bear the cuty mark of a hour glass
>after looking yourself over a few times you decide to to take a quick shower
>you walk trough the door into the hallway

beans/metsu i would love to hear if i am doeing alright

>the hallway is not big and there are 3 doors and a staircase (down ofcourse)
>the door you came outoff is at one end of the hallway
>in the middle is the door to the bathroom/shower
>and right across from it is the stairway down
>the door on the other end of the hallway is the room of a pony you took under your wing
>a grey pegasus with yellow mane and a crossed eye
>you found her outside town living under a pile of leaves
>you did not have the guts to ask her what happened to her parrents
>you hope that she will tell it herself one time
>after all she just moved in a week ago
>you are getting distracted
>back to the plan ahead

>you step into the bathroom
>its a decent sized toom
>there is a sink with a mirror
>a decent amount of touletries are spread around the sink
>next so the mirror and sink is a cabinet that holds the towels
>the wall on the other side holds the toilet
>and next to it is a bathtub that holds the shower
>you turn the water on and after is the temperature you want you step inside
>that watter feels nice on your old back
>you might not look like it but your almost as old as celestia is
>its your secret and nobody must and may know about it
>after wassing your mane and rinsing a few times you step outof the shower
>after drieing and combing your mane you look in the mirror and decide you look good
>exept for one thing
>you trot back to your room
>and after opening the drawer under your bed you decide that today is a good day for a red tie
>not that there is much else in the drawer
>a scarf that has autum colours, a green tie, a fes (becaus fesses are cool), a suit and a pair of 3d glasses

Good green so far.

>>29689353
don't encourage him

>>29689357
I don't see you writing anything, also keeps thread alive

>>29689353
yay
>>29689357
aaw
but please explain

>time to make breakfast
>when you walk trough the halway you see that the door to derpy's room is open (the pony under your wing is called derpy)
>well it was time to wakeup so you did not think about it
>as you walk downstairs you smell something burned
>there goes the orage juice again you sight
>the bottem floor of the house has a standard layout
>living room on the right kitchen on the left
>and a door to your lab in the back (story will not go there)
>the hallway also contains the frontdoor
>there is not much to see in the halway
>a old clock and a coatrack that holds one postbag

>as you walk into the kitchen
>a normal sized kitchen window on the left
>a table with a few chairs stands below it
>and on the backwall the counter a frige and a stove (witch is currently smoking)
>your worst fears become true
>derpy tried to make breakfast
>the whole kitchen is covered in a layer of batter
>and derpy is flying around triening to clean it (probaly in the hope that you wont be mad)
>well flying its more controlled crashing (you find it kind of funny)
>in the short time you lived with her you came to 2 conclusions
>1. she loved muffins
>2. she cant cook (searusly she can burn a glass of water)
>you look at her with a little smile
>she does not smile back as she tries to explain what happened
>"i just dont know what went wrong"
>"all i wanted was some muffins"
>you tell her "dont look sad we can just clean it together"

>"firsth thing firsth lets turn the oven off and open a window"
>you walk to the window and crack it open
>derpy who now has landed is still looking sad you wonder if it is about the muffins
>you wanlk towords her and place a hoove around her shoulder
>"derpy dont be sad, it will be okey at lunch we will get you a muffin but please dont be sad"
>"i hate to see you this way"
>derpy looks at you but sais nothing
>she just shakes her head
>seeing that she cheered up a bit you smile again
>you glance at the still smoking oven and decide that it is time to turn it off
>it took you and derpy a half hour to clean the kitchen
>derpy cried as you trew away the burned muffins
>you had to tell her multiple times that burned muffins arent tasty and kind of unhealthy
>finaly time for some breakfast
>2 boals of oats should do

guys i realized
i am stuck
and i need direction in my storry
who can give me a little hint